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Saving Bella by Mynxi Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 330]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Jasper returns to Forks to apologize but was never prepared for what he found. Now he knows he needs to make it right. But how? Will Bella find love again?Lemons in the future! Non-canon AU New Moon.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: None
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, My favs past present and future , Ageise02 Bella/Jasper stories
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 281055 Read Count: 89650
[Report This] Published: 09 Feb 2010 Updated: 29 Nov 2010
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 18 Jan 2015 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I've read this before. Been quite a while.

And I guess it's just me and my poor attitude, but I can't help thinking Bella is just throwing a tantrum.

"My boyfriend dumped me and I'm going to hold my breath until I turn purple."

Because, of course, Bella is the ONLY one EVER who has been dumped by somebody. Bella is the ONLY one who EVER lost someone, and NO ONE feels the pain of loss like Bella. NO ONE has had a broken heart before. ONLY BELLA.

Everyone around her is begging her to react, talk, eat, etc and she refuses. She's got the power, she's got everyone by the balls and she's yanking on them.

Little Queen B (for bitch) getting all the attention, while other folks grovel at her feet.

I guess it kinda pisses me off. Guess I can't sympathize. I didn't get it when I read New Moon, and I guess I still don't get it. Then, I suppose I figured it was Edward was meant to be her one and only, he left, and she fell apart. But I still couldn't really sympathize.

Everybody has to deal with shit, but you still have to get up and do the laundry, feed the kids (if you have them), put the dog out.

Maybe that was Bella's problem—she didn't have anything else in her life at all so she knew she could collapse and it wouldn't make much difference. I mean, Charlie could actually feed himself and do his own laundry.

Knowing this, Bella went into her zombie tantrum. However, she did continue to go to school. Nobody could take care of that for her, so she did that.

I just want to slap her and say, "Get the fuck over yourself, you selfish little asshole. You ARE NOT the center of the universe."

It's what happens in life—you get left. Dogs die, parents die, friends get killed in car crashes.

And this is why I think Bella was so immature. She may have been responsible, until Edward dumped her, but she was still a sheltered kid and didn't have a clue about the crap that happens.

I'm glad Jasper is gettin' tired of her shit.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 18 Jan 2015 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

See? Bella's got the power. Has Jasper on his knees begging her to speak.

Yep. Pisses me off.

Next, it'll be Emmett begging for her attention.

I hope she's proud of herself.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 18 Jan 2015 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

So, what? Is everyone supposed to be able to read her fuckin' mind? It would be different if nobody asked her what she was thinking about, but Jasper outright asks her, and the selfish shit doesn't say anything.

Proving she has all the control again. 

Everyone jumping through hoops for the Queen B.



Author's Response:

Well you go girl. I know she can be whiny but that was what happened when I began writing. Thanks for all the reviews! Even if it is pissing you off. I hope you like the end at least.

xoxoxox

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Broken Baby by Mynxi Rated: NC-17 starstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 22]
Summary:

Rated NC-17!! Set in NM, Bella is catatonic but Charlie figures out a way to get a reaction from her, he grows angry, and takes things further. Who will show up to rescue her? Includes incestuous situations & rape. very AU & OOC!


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 21086 Read Count: 23163
[Report This] Published: 30 Mar 2011 Updated: 30 Mar 2011
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 15 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Her Only Reaction

Well that was pretty fucked up.

 

I can see why it was pulled off FF.

 

okay, ew, I'll attempt the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Hahaha, yeah I can understand why it was pulled too. Thanks for braving it and reviewing!

 

xoxoxoxoxoxo
M

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 15 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Hope

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I actually skipped over most of the previous chapters to get to here.

 

You did Rosie okay, I think.



Author's Response:

That works! I can understand skipping some of the yucky stuff. Thank you for the comment on Rose. I wasn't 100% sure of her, that was really my first attempt in her POV and a girl POV. So thanks!

xoxoxoxo
M

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 15 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Seeing it from the Inside

Peter's POV? No, didn't see that comin'.

 

I expect nobody will ever find Charlie.



Author's Response:

Nope, I don't think they will ever find him, unless they decide to excavate that are for some reason...a mall maybe? LOL.

 

Thanks for the reviews, darlin'! I know it wasn't the easiest thing in the world to try to get through I appreciate your attempt at reading it and your lack of flames.

xoxoxoxoo
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Gods and Wolves by bmitw Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 129]
Summary:

What if the Cullens made the treaty and then stayed? What if the wolves kept phasing? And what is Bella walking into?

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Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/OC
Genre: Drama, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Supernatural
Series: None
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 172013 Read Count: 23816
[Report This] Published: 09 Jun 2012 Updated: 04 Dec 2012
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

As for getting rid of the three nomads - I think that was Carlisle's fault. Due to Carlisle's influence. Did I mention that before?

 

I'd have to agree with ya there, about Quil and Molly. Even today, in small towns, such mixed-type marriages would be frowned upon.

Lived in West Virginia for five VERY long years and the whole state was like that.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Yeah Carlisle is a pacifist in canon - in this fic, not so much. Here his instincts to be nice sometimes have to take second place to his desire to stay put.

I had significant NA input into the chapter so I do think it is representative of the issues they would have had. What staggers me is that the pairing show up in canon without a word about how hard it would have been. Oh well.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21

Too bad for Mr. and Mrs. Anderson, but it worked out for Carlisle and Rosalie. Looks like Rosalie gets a baby.

Edward's or Jasper's?

When's the next one due?



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Rosalie does get to play mother of sorts. The paternity will soon become apparent...

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20

Edward and Jasper just left. Wow.

I'm kinda having a hard time with Edward going along with that idea. But should be interesting.

OH jeez. One of the little hum-vamps is about to be born! Oh crap! Or rip its way through its momma?

I wonder if it will have blonde or copper hair?



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Edward's more of a passenger than a particpant..I see him in this as a spoiled bored rich kid with too much time on his hands...his "rebellious period" does show that he's not lilywhite.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19

Oh crap! Didn't see THAT comin'!

So Jasper and Edward are going to try and breed a new group of hum-vamps!

 

Holy shit!



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Bwahaha...call it a does of vampiric MAD. They want to even the numbers up, but they don't know what they're letting themselves in for.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17

Busy day in Forks.

 

Yeah! they took care of James, Laurent AND Victoria!

and there's been an imprint. Oh my goodness. Yeah, back in 1955 the white folks probably wouldn't be too happy about a mixed marriage.

That should be interesting.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

I firmly believe that even in canon, getting rid of the three of them in one go was doable and also desirable. What sort of vampire finds a threat to his sweetheart in another vampire's mind and doesn't end him?

So they won't be back later to disrupt proceedings lol. And as for Quil & Molly, they are a canon couple but for the life of me I can't see how they could be unless an imprint was involved. The 1950s are not the 2000s.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18

I htink you did a good job handling the mixed marriage thing. There wasn't anything else they could do but wait until Molly was 21.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Yes, his personal qualities would have been irrelevant, they would have had to marry without parental approval imho.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

Oh boy! Five new wolves.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Yes basically a second generation of pack, as per the banners I have placed at the beginning of the story.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

Ephraim's idea seems like a good one. If it works. LOL

Jasper not tamed yet? LMAO



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Trying to get the job done, Jasper has his uses.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14

Jasper nearly had his ass handed to him.

I bet Levi wasn't happy about that!



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Jasper might want to be more circumspect in future. These wolves aren't puppies.

Levi would have liked to start a bonfire :P

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13

Ta-DAH! Here's Alice! Oh my goodness. Just moved herself right in.

I sure hope Jasper hs some sense. As long as thwe wolves don't tear him apart.

Oh NO!



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

The moving in was canon, it's mentioned in Eclipse after a training session for the fight against the newborn army I think. Typical Alice. I just decided though to make Edward a little less welcoming because tbh all of the canon sweetness & light was giving me tooth decay.

Jasper is the real Jasper, not the housetrained one.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1

Okay! Adding some love over here on TWCS!

I like how you've written the "history" here and have included how Emmett is still being affected by his newborn phase.

 

Edward seems a bit petulant and arrogant. Go figure.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review hun :)

Edward? Arrogant? Nooooooooo...

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

70's porn star? BWAH-ha-ha-ha-ha

Paul's already an asshole. Good to see some things never change. LOL

Whoa. Bella meets Ephraim and *BAM*

Oh! Looks like the Cullens noticed her right away. Oh my goodness.

Gosh! How did Paul manage to go to Forks High?



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Ephraim has imprinted on Bella, hence the BAM. 

Let's just say that Paul is there for a reason, which will become clear later on.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

Edward had an interesting first day of school.

Intrigued to see what sort of idea Carlisle is going to come up with in order to allow them to stay in Forks.

Good. This explains how Ephraim, Levi and Quil 1 are still around in 2005.

Bella's impressions of the beautiful men on the Rez were certainly interesting. (Back in that chapter.)



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

There is certainly more man candy on the Rez than in a normal fic lol. The mechanism for them to stay is I grant unusual, but no more unusual than in many AU type stories where large elements of the population are clueless about obvious things...

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

So, Edward plucks Carlisle's nerves a bit. LOL

So Ephraim has met his first lady love. :)



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

I am pitching Edward in this fic as a bit of a spolied rich kid. Because they don't move he needs to not just mooch around and go to school continually, they all rather need to find useful ways to occupy their time.

And yes, Ephraim has met his canon wife.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

My goodness! That was a pretty quick courtship and marriage! Makes things a lot simpler though.

I wonder ... would the Quileute Tribe have to approve of Ehpraim's new wife or is it up to the man? He's the Alpha. You'd think the tribe would be concerned with who he brought home.

After he phases, I hope she doesn't have a heart attack!



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

The courtship was quick, but as per the link to past Quileute practices mentions, their actual marriage customs were in some cases a lot more basic than that, including for example a form of kidnapping.

I wrote her as Makah because of the name (same surname as Emily) but I don't know if she was meant to be Makah or not. 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

"It was too wet, too green, and too lupine."

That was good.

 

Oh my gosh! Edward called Rosalie a social climbing tramp? Oh shit. LOL I hope she gets around to ripping his head off.

 

I can see how the Quileute wolves would be angry with Carlisle. Carlisle wasn't exactly forthcoming with his plans.

and leave it to Emmett to try and have fun! I thought his dazzling a Quileute lady was kinda funny.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Yeah in this fic Edward says what he always thought. He never dod think Rosalie was good enough for him. And Carlisle has been less than forthcoming; I think it rounds his character out more if he is not always Saint Carlisle of canon.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

That was so sad. Poor Martha - to have to suffer like that. And to lose the babies.

I can see that Ephraim will probably blame Carlisle for their deaths.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

*sniffs* The chapter was hard for me to write but I am proud of it, and Ephraim will never be the same afterwards.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

Ephraim sure went off the deep end. But I don't know how awful that would be to lose a child. Expecially two of them at the same time.

I expected him to be hateful toward Carlisle, but it seems he is only blaming himself.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

His first impulse might be to blame Carlisle, but he knows deep down that he wasn't called soon enough. Not that he's thinking straight atm.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

Luckily, Edward wasn't a prat this time. I'm glad he was helpful to the pack.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

There has to be light and shade with the characters. Edward's worst character traits came out when he was with Bella so there's no reason why he couldn't be a bit better in another situation.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10

"(Edward)you need to start living the life of a man at some point.” Yeah!

I was surprised that Ephraim went and got himself another wife!



Author's Response:

Thanks GW & LOL :)

Hope I'm not the only person who thinks that centuries of repeating high school isn't much of a way to spend eternity...

Ephraim's second marriage is something of an arrangement, to take care of her and have a mother for Bill. Which is not to say that he doesn't love her in his own way.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

Does Edward do something to disguise his youthful appearance? While he's teaching, I mean.

Sounds like the Council wasn't too happy with the Pack's idea about telling the tribe their secret.

Though, later, Charlie Swan sure seemsto know what's going on! I would guess the Council gave in.

 

Twilight Official Illustrated Guide is kinda inadequate. (Of course I bought one.) I like most of it, but for me, there just isn't enough detail.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

I agree about the Guide. I would much rather have something more detailed and encyclopaedic than sketchy entries and pages of boring interviews :P

The Pack are kind of bound because they are not going to age as long as they keep phasing, and to not keep phasing is not an option.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

"Being in his arms was the safest place in the world; being in his heart, the sweetest."

I really liked that line.

 

I think you did a good job relating the tribe's histories.

Certainly explains how folks know about them later!



Author's Response:

Aww Thanks GW :)

I prefer this way of doing things - there were consequences in canon to the Elders always being secretive which I think weren't helpful.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22

I laughed out loud at "Josie"! Jasper/Rosie Oh Jeez!

 

A dozen of them!?! OMG

"Date? DATE?" Jasper and Edward spoke in unison.

LMAO



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review GW :)

You should have seen the names my betas and I rejected...Edsper anyone??

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23

the children were docile, but their fierce loyalties meant that if they were ever threatened, they'd react swiftly and with purpose.

For me, that was enough.

Oh! Cue ominous music

 

Charlie Swan is born!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review GW :)

Charlie's born, and as cute as a button no doubt.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 24

So Billy and Charlie have met and become friends.

I can imagine it would be difficult for Ephraim to be around the twin girls.



Author's Response:

Thanks GW :)

Some sad reminders for Ephraim, but then again maybe it's just his family coming full circle? 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26

So this is how Charlie found out about the wolves! Bill phased right in front of him.

Oh boy.



Author's Response:

Well, that was how I decided he was going to find out. He's been a friend of Billy's and they are in this fic all becoming wolves, so the chances that could happen without him noticing are slim. The physical changes alone would tip him off that something was up.

Thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27

I can't imagine being able to feel the emotions of a roomful of young teenagers!

I drove school buses for a while and had enough of it just hearing them run their mouths!

I expected there to be trouble between Edward Jasper about their girls and boys!

LOL



Author's Response:

There will be issues, the moreso as Ed has the girls and we all know what he's like with his morals. Jasper, not so much.

Thanks for the review GW :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28

Oh damn! Shit could have really hit the fan there.

Billy's lucky Eprhaim isn't a hot head like Levi.

And now Charlie knows something is really up with the Cullen clan!



Author's Response:

Ephraim's not like Levi, which is why he's the Alpha and Levi isn't. 

Ephraim and Carlisle both are charged with keeping the show on the road, and that won't change until the treaty is broken and/or the Cullens leave.

Thanks for the review GW :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 29

Weddings!

Now I'm wondering if the hum/vamps can breed with each other. Perhaps we will find out!

Interesting that there's no mention of any of the wolves imprinting.



Author's Response:

I'm trying to follow canon, unless there's a good reason not to. In canon, imprinting was meant to be a rare thing, so although it made sense that Old Quil might have imprinted on Molly, I don't think there would have been imprints all over the place.

Thanks for the review GW :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 30

Hippie van. LOL

 

Looks like Charlie met Renee!



Author's Response:

Yes he did and Renee did not turn up in La Push wearing a power suit. LOL.

Thanks for the review GW :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 31

Oh gosh! The population explosion in Forks! LOL



Author's Response:

There's a few of them LOL.

Thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 32

Awwww. Poor Charlie.

But I can see how Renee would be freaked out by the baby with the weird eyes.



Author's Response:

Renee was freaked out by the child, but equally and more canonically by the responsibilities she found herself saddled with. Having said that I have always wondered why someone as flighty as her took the baby with her but it is what it is.

Thanks for the review GW :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 33

Oh! Here comes Embry!



Author's Response:

Yes, here comes Embry... 

Perhaps not with the father that might be expected though.

Thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 34

That was so sad. I expected it to be Amelia, but I didn't expect Molly, too.



Author's Response:

Sorry :(

Molly wasn't as old as Amelia, but a shipwreck that could kill a non-wolf Quil could do the same to a middle-aged woman. 

Thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 35

So sad for the whole tribe.

 



Author's Response:

A tragic time for the tribe and would have been in canon also, but it is only mentioned in passing and seemed worthy of a more in depth exploration.

Thanks for the review GW :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 36

Congrats on your Kudos in the Fandom Choice Awards!

 

Oh dear. Jasper's and Edward's grandchildren are little bastards! Only stands to reason. Jasper's kind of a bastard.

I can't hardly believe that Carlisle dazzled Charlie! Oh my goodness!

Seems like Carlisle's going to have to put his foot down with the kids. That was a shitty thing for them to do to that dog.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review GW :)

They're not very nice little vampires...but then vampires are not meant to be nice. Can't stand Renesmee...

 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 37

I've finally caught up!

Man! I keep thinking here that Jasper sure dicked over Carlisle!

Damn. That Tony = demon seed, I'd say. And the little dear thinks Jasper's been neutered? I'd suspect Jasper is biding his time. He's had to wait a long time for his soldiers to grow up.

He and Edward don't really seem all that attached to their progeny, so I can't see Jasper having a problem putting the whammy on them. Unless they can kick his ass.

I sure hope Edward and Jasper figure out what's up with the youngest hum/vamps.

Perhaps Alice will be useful and see something.

 

Oh crap! If the little demon spawn go to school, then that's how Edward and the rest meet Bella. Holy crap!

 

Eager for your next update.



Author's Response:

Bwahaha!

The threads are starting to come together and it won't be long now. Having the Cullens as students in this AU makes no sense, they've lived here for decades, but there's nothing stopping them from being teachers...

Thanks for the review GW, much appreciated :)

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2013 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 38

I almost feel bad for Carlisle. Trying to be a nice guy and what has it gotten him? Shit on.  (No good deed goes unpunished, as they say.)

Apparently, Jasper's and Edward's grandchildren have needed their butts whipped from day one, and they didn't get it! Me thinks they should have gone to Boot Camp instead of all that home schooling.

Carlisle's thinking they should all leave when the kids finish high school is too late, I think. They should have left when the little sneaky bitches killed the dog. By then (high school) they'll be physically mature and be able to run off to wherever they want. Even before that. How would anyone be able to force them to stay?

Even now they could leave, I suppose. They would have to hide because they're so young looking. They would need an adult-looking guardian or have to be constantly moving around.

Money - always a problem. They'd need money to mingle with the humans for any length of time.

Errant thought - do vampires have an age when they are considered "adults"? I would guess it could be as soon as they are turned, but after their crazy newborn year would make better sense.

But what about hybrids? The Cullen Clan seems to have followed the "recent" human tradition of 18 to 21 years of age being "adult."

Oh no! The car wreck! Holy crap! Poor Rachel was with her. Oh damn! She phased -the first female wolf. And so young, too.

How are all the men-folk going to handle that? Probably not real well since it's been drilled into their heads for years and years about the men being the big, bad wolves.

Let me guess here ... it's in response to all the vamps and hybrids infesting Forks. No matter how many wolves there are, all those vamps and hybrids make more and more Quileutes phase.

Jasper's plan is being shot to hell. He didn't figure in any females phasing to wolves.

Oh my goodness! She recognized what she was right away. And recognized Carlisle, too. He's lucky, the other wolves "found" her so quickly.

Oh Lord, the shit is going to hit the fan! So much untimely death in that family.



Author's Response:

Well wow, this is a James Joycean type review...

And thanks for it!

The hybrids have strong ties to their parents, who are themselves hybrids, and to the Cullen Clan. More pointedly, they can have fun in Forks with few repercussions (as yet) because their existence raises no questions. Blending in is always going to be an issue for them, and no news is good news where the Volturi is concerned.

As for Rachel, yeah maybe not going to go down well. I have some ideas about that, more to come. The Blacks have two wolf gene markers instead of one (Seth and Leah three) so perhaps all other things being equal a female might be more likely to phase. Nothing is ever certain though, things like temperament also matter. But yeah the reason for all of the wolves is the presence of the vampires, something Jasper acknowledged when he came up with his master plan.

Thank heavens for the pack mind...

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 14 Mar 2013 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 39

Oh boy! Carlisle's in the shits.

 

Interesting how Charlie said he didn't want Bella in Forks anymore because of the demon seeds. I mean, second generation hybrids. Friggin' monsters.

 

Oh man, I'm feeling really sorry for Ephraim, Billy - both of them losing wives to death. And I feel bad for Charlie, too. Renee isn't dead, but she's gone.

 

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Billy's reaction to the sad news of his wife Sarah's death and daughter Rachel phasing into a wolf was well done.

 

I liked that part where Billy was sitting on the beach and Quil went to sit with him.

 

***

Oh damn! Leah changed when she was 13! And imprinted on Sam? Oh jeez, now there's two female wolves. Ephraim's going to be a little surprised at this news, I think.

 

(So he doesn't meet Emily later?)

 

How is the pack going to handle that? (Very carefully.)

 

***

Congratulations on being nominated in the 2013 Energize WIP Awards in the category of Best Twilight Non-Canon, and nominated as Most Motivational Reviewer!



Author's Response:

Thanks GeezerWench :)

Yeah the current gen are not like their parents... although no vampire is or should be considered to be harmless. The younger ones do have a repellent quality to them which Bella has picked up on. 

Poor Billy, I did feel sorry for him as I wrote that and he needs to be comforted and helped to get through his trauma. The whole tribe will help but Quil has a special insight which will be of the most benefit to him I think.

I'm not a big fan of Emily, and having established that this fic is primarliy about the pack vs the vamps, and also Ephraim and Bella, there won't be a side track into the whole Sam/Leah/Emily thing. Not a fan of that storyline anyway. The fourth pack is going to have to get used to some women in it, and as a Black and the first to phase Rachel is the foremost.

Thanks for the congratulations, I'm honoured to have been chosen as a nominee. 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 14 Apr 2013 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 40

Ahhhh! Leah imprinted on Sam! I liked that in the last chapter and this one. Leah finally gets Sam.

 

(Go figure)

 

"Mom's coffin was to be nailed shut, and nobody was to be allowed to view her."

 

You know it's bad when that happens. It's better that Billy didn't see her. He doesn't need to carry that memory with him throughout his long life.

 

"To hell with the Treaty; next time a Cullen clashed with a Quileute, I wouldn't do a thing to stop the battle that would follow, a battle that seemed inevitable."

 

Yeah! I can sure see why Ephraim would be fed up. They didn't know what they were getting into when they signed the treaty with the Cullens. Hell, Carlisle didn't even really know either. Who would have ever thought, back when they signed the treaty, that there would have been artificial insemination and the vamps would be breeding like bunnies? Who could have foreseen that?

 

Man! The crap is just raining down on Carlisle, too. He's getting it from both sides. I'm feeling bad for him.

 

"Over more than sixty years Ephraim Black had steered a course that had kept us safe, even as the Cullens produced half breeds and infested Forks with their presence, and other Cold Ones had come here to attack us. That was some achievement, even if Daddy couldn't see it yet. Maybe one day he might."

 

It all seems so hopeless for them (the wolves.)

 

I wonder ... will Rebecca start to phase, too?

 

In the Twilight Saga, Leah had mentioned that her monthlies stopped and that upset her because she wouldn't be able to have children and/or she didn't feel like a "full woman." But I don't suppose she'd know for sure, since her boyfriend in the Saga went and imprinted on somebody else, she didn't get around to getting another boyfriend, and she hadn't imprinted on anyone.

 

So I wonder ... will Rachel and Leah not be able to have kids? Eventually. They're both really young right now. And if any more girls phase ... But that seems almost anti-wolf. Why would females that turned into wolves not be able to have kids? Seems to me that would be counterproductive.

 

Leah and Rachel phased unexpectedly, they didn't have the growth spurt that the boys have had. Will the girls start to get bigger, or reach their adult height and form really fast?

 

Crap. Leah will be "older" than Sam. He'll have to catch up. And imprinting is all about the breeding. She'll just have to be patient and wait for him.

 

We haven't heard anything from the demon-spawn. What are those evil imps up to? I shudder to think!



Author's Response:

I think you might have reviewed also on ffn, as I have a sense of deja vu about this comment lol. But thanks for the review :)

Emily's a distraction, and I see no need for muffins in my fic, so why not give her and Sam both what they really want lol.

Eph has had what my mother might refer to as an "elegant sufficiency" of the Cold Ones, something that they will learn in the not-too-distant future if they don't know it already.

I see the reproductive thing maybe as an interruption than an end to all hope. Women can have their periods stop for all kinds of reasons, like being underweight, and they can come back. So I'd like to think that if Leah stopped phasing and her body returned to normal that she could have kids the same as any other woman.

The demon spawn are being quiet(er) but you haven't heard the last of them.

 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 09 May 2013 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 41

"How the mighty Alpha had fallen."

Great line.

Oh, yay! Ephraim has finally met Bella! Or Bella has finally met him.

A bit of a hint there that Jacob has a little crush on the lovely Isabella?

"until I can make her mine"

Ol' Ephraim is assuming a lot there. But how could she resist him? He's lovely.

I feel bad for Billy. He's so angry at the loss of his wife. Who can really blame him? It was Carlisle's fault, though he certainly didn't set out that day to kill anyone. Then there's Ephraim. He's lost two wives and he just seems sad.

I'm glad he's finally met Bella.

I liked that Ephraim didn't take any crap off of Carlisle. The wolves know about the vamp tricks and they'll be watching to make sure the vamps don't do any of that crap to Bella. I can see that Carlisle would bring up the treaty line, but Ephraim certainly had a point how the vamps have broken the spirit of the treaty, if not the letter of it.

***

"What the hell happened?" LOL

Good girl, Bella! I like that she has a bit of fire in her.

Great idea to have Paul go to school with her. He'll make a great guard. (I {heart} Paul.) It would be too suspicious to have four or five of the Quileute boys or girls show up at Forks High.

Since Paul won't have a problem putting his arm around a pretty girl, he should have no problem following Bella around. Now, to get Bella to understand that it's just for show. With Paul's size, that'll keep the other boys away.

I'm glad the rest of the older pack members will step up so that Ephraim can be as close to Bella as he can.

I wonder if Edward will be enthralled with her? Or any of the other, uh, children? Some of them are Edward's. Ephraim won't stand for that. None of the wolves will.

Then there's the demon spawn hybrids. Egads. There's like a dozen of them, right?

Woo HOO! Ephraim's plan sounds like it's going to work. What else can he do besides kidnap her? That wouldn't be such a great idea.

After Bella got to school in the morning and was creeped out by the demon spawn looking at her in the parking lot, I'm sure she was relieved to have Paul show up and throw his arm around her. That'll get the kids talking though. She just showed up, and she's already got a boy hanging on her? Rumors will fly! But if he keeps the demon spawn away ...

So eager to see who her teachers are and who will be in her classes.

Very curious to see what Jasper and Edward think of the new girl. Jasper will know that Bella is repulsed by the vamp hybrids. Will Edward be able to read her mind? If he can't, he'll be able to read Paul's, I suppose. Then there's all the rest of the mind readers that will try to see into her head.

Good Lord! There's so many of the Cullens, they'll be everywhere. They'll be coming at her from all sides. I expect she'll have some choice words for them!

Too bad Charlie has been susceptible to the vampire dazzling. Bella would have been better off going to the Reservation school.

But, looks like the ka-ka is about to hit the fan.

Good job!

 

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, Geezer :)

Jake's reaction to Bella was covered in chap2, he's interested but in more of a hormonal-teenage-boy kind of way and she doesn't respond well to him. People forget this, but he is more than 2 years her junior, and until he's started phasing he looks it. No match for the Alpha even if he thought he could get away with it, and he can't. Imprints override all that.

Ephraim is not going to take any crap from anyone... that's an imprint, you do whatever you have to in order to keep them safe, and you do whatever they want you to do in their life. He is I guess confident in putting it out there that he wants her, but his arsenal is better stocked than either Jake's or Edward's so why not be?

Bella isn't going to fall for Paul. She's said that he's an ass, it's just that he's a welcome ass under the circumstances. The lesser of several evils. And he has a cheeky charm of his own. Don't forget he imprinted on Rachel so is very much taken.

The Cullens, being teachers, have to rein in their shit. They've been told by now by Carlisle that Bella is off limits. Lets see if they can or want to stick to that though, or what the spawn might do... the road to true love never did run smooth.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 14 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 45

Yeah! I want to know what Charlie found at the Cullen house. Helluva explosion.

Christian missionaries in Africa?

Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha

Well, our sweet little Bella has quite the mouth on her!

Ephraim naked would be awesome, I'd say.

Imprinting. It would be hard to explain that. Glad she feels it, too.

***

Yeah. Explain this imprinting stuff to Charlie!

"I won't hump your leg"

OMG

LOL

"Was it too much to ask for that Bella find a nice boy her own age to date?"

For-real. I hear ya, Charlie. Ha ha ha ha ha

"If she comes home again."

Oh? Ephraim seems pretty confident Bella won't want to go back home to Charlie's house.

Future son-in-law. Yup.

Good job, Hon!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review hon :)

Glad you liked it.

MY JOURNEY by petersgirl Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 310]
Summary:

 

 

When Edward and Bella get back from Italy things have changed. Edward is restricting more and more of what she can do. Bella loses herself. She becomes rebelious Bella. Partying with the wolves, having wild nights out and going to jail. With Peter Whitlock she begins to find herself again. Join them on their journey.

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THANK YOU TO EVERYONE THAT VOTED FOR ME AND PETER. I JUST FOUND OUT THAT WE WON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


THIS STORY HAS BEEN NOMINATED FOR THE BIG HUMOR/  BEST   OVERALL   STORY   LAUGH AWARD AT GIGGLES AND SNORT!!!!!

SO IF PETER HAS MADE YOU GIGGLE, SNORT, SPIT YOUR OUT OREOS, LAUGH SO HARD THAT YOU WANT TO PEE YOUR PANTS OR JUST CHEERED YOU UP; GO VOTE FOR HIM!   MY SISTERS ALSO CRACK ME, TELL ME FUNNY STORIES AND MAKE ME LAUGH TOOOOO!!!!

I WANT TO GIVE THE NAUGHTY GIRLS THAT I MENTIONED ABOVE A SPECIAL PETERS AWARD. I AM WORKING ON THAT! YOU KNOW WHO YOU ARE!

You can vote at the address below from June 25th 2012 to July 10 2012

http://awards.gigglesnort.net/viewpage.php?page_id=13            (THEN CLICK VOTE!)

 

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Thank you to everyone that voted for my Peter!!!!!! petersgirl loves ya!!!!!!



Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 81994 Read Count: 23167
[Report This] Published: 15 Jun 2012 Updated: 01 Jul 2012
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Curious to see how Bella rebels!

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Bella hasn't seen Charlie in a month?

Well, Charlie could go see her if he wanted to, I would think.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

"Northside big cocks"

 

LOL!

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Oh shit! Charlie!

Summary: Past Featured Story

really hot, shirtless guy, hot chick, snowy backdrop and the always awesome fire

                                                             Banner by: Ellie Wolf

"Don't you understand, he'll die if you dont't!" Iz just shrugged a light sholder at her, "I understand perfectly. What you fail to understand is how little I care. What happens to him is in no way my problem."

fs

 


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: Action, Adventure, Erotica, Fantasy, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 116973 Read Count: 94680
[Report This] Published: 23 Jun 2012 Updated: 29 Jul 2012
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2015 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I'm still amazed Alice didn't crawl up Jasper's as and explode for not *defending* her against the newborn Izzy-bella.

Been a while since I read the story. It's like brand new!

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 11 Aug 2015 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

What boggles the mind is that Carlisle did all this for a piece of boney ass. And Esme has nothing to say about that part?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2015 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Speklez, really like this story. Reading it again.

Ya know, we'd love it if you posted your stuff on BetterinTexasFiction.

I'll try and put a link here: http://betterintexasfiction.ning.com/

Don't know if it will work or not.

Jason (BetterinTexas) got a little fed up with a couple other sites and started his own. He wanted a bit more freedom than he could get at FF and other sites, and wanted to be able to post his original stuff.

Best part? He doesn't care what you post there. There are the general rules about no pedophilia, bestiality, etc.

Post any fandom you want or even your original stuff.

Another good thing? Flaming the authors doesn't fly. The general rule is if you don't like something, shut up and don't read it.

We've had a few folks who have never written before begin writing!

Folks who have written a few fanfics have even posted original stuff.

A very encouraging atmosphere.

Another thing I like about it is you can post pictures with your story and you don't have to go through a photo hosting site.

Think about it. We'd love to have you.

(I'm one of the admins there.)

Summary:

When Romeo(Edward) goes to make is ultimate sacrafice for love, his not so Juliet(Bella) rushes to save him. When all is said and done; she finds that she truly belongs to another.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Adventure, Angst, Drama, Humor, Romance, Young Adult
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 16945 Read Count: 2185
[Report This] Published: 06 Sep 2012 Updated: 10 Sep 2012
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 11 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I have to say that was entertaining!



Author's Response:

Glad u thought so...i was going for humor, and i guess i got it. Thanks for ur review.

Summary: Past Featured Story

change

 

Banner by Ellie Wolf

 

5 years after NM Jasper is back in the south. Due to his 2nd in command, things come about that will change the vampire world forever. Good or bad he doesn't care and only two things are certain; he won't be alone and she will be perfect... no matter the cost.

fs


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Action, Adventure, Angst, Drama, Erotica, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02 Bella/Jasper stories
Chapters: 39 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125512 Read Count: 75248
[Report This] Published: 20 Jun 2013 Updated: 20 Jun 2013
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Cheating pixie? Eager to see what the story is behind that.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Finally remembered who she was, huh?

Five years ago?

who bit her to change her? Peter?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

She's all pissed off at Peter, now she's all pissed off a Jasper. And gone.

I hope she doesn't hurt the goon squad too bad.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Jasper has to be curious about what's happened in the last five years.

 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Newborn 101.

Bella is learnin'.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

"hit and quits?"

Never mind. I looked it up.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

She's not doing real well with the Newborn 101.

It may take Jasper a little time to get her to his bed.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Charlotte was worried about Bella? I think she'll learn not to do that anymore.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

She finally got to feed.

All she wants is to be able to call him Jasper?

She's got to be up to something.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Jasper made an enemy of Maria. But she knows where she stands.

I wouldn't trust her.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Gee. Shouldn't he make sure her arm is back on before he fucks her?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

ALL the Cullens knew Edward and Alice were going at it?

Jesus Christ. How the hell did Jasper not catch them or feel deceit from them?

He should have done more than rip Edward's arm off.

Alice needed that pretty little face ripped.

And she blames Jasper, claiming he finally snapped.

Payback is due.

Ahhhh. An American Vampire in Paris. Maybe they'll bump into Alice and Edward.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Total sexist, chauvinistic pigs.

What does Bella see?

Two of her favorite people? Or some other vampire out there?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

What? She's his mate, but he isn't hers?

Duh fuck?

She's clinging hard to what she thought she learned from the Cullens.

Scent is part of it? Sure.

Aros' dear friends. Must be the Cullens.

Why the hell would they follow Jasper and Bella into the woods?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Ha!

Edward thinking he knows best again. And Alice gets to watch him burn.

They ficked over Jasper and Bella and I guess Bella fucked them right back.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

So, he was molding her rather like Edward was trying to.

I see.

Jasper wouldn't have been able to make her into the fighter she is if it wasn't there to be brought out.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Daddy Cullen's favorite fox. Oh my.

She is hatin' that shit.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

interesting outfit Jasper picked out for Bella.

Then he'll get all pissed off when other folks look at her.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

So how come Peter hasn't marked Char as his mate?

Damn! Victoria and James. Holy shit. It's a wonder Bella didn't tear them both apart.

 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Jacob the ass-wipe.

Shoulda killed him.

Reveal themselves to the humans? Doesn't seem like such a good idea.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

"Not at the cost of someone else's."

That's a lie right there, Bella. You'd let someone you love be killed just so you wouldn't have to kill somebody? You wouldn't protect your children or spouse? You'd let them be killed so a death wouldn't be on your hands?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Fucking Aro.

And what the hell is Peter up to?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Well, I guess Peter told Jasper how it is.



Author's Response:

Yeah, Jasper gets told a lot by Peter. 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 01 Aug 2014 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Bella told Jasper all about himself!

He was being just like Edward.

"Break it."

And Jasper just might break the entire place down.

***

I like your writing in third person these last couple of chapters.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 01 Aug 2014 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

A compromise?

Seems like Edward also tried to use that same soert of thing on her.

Wonder if she'll go for it.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 01 Aug 2014 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Sounds almost utopian.

Bu there's always going to be bad apples. Who takes care of them?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 01 Aug 2014 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

 

Jasper didn't even need to have his ass beat. He learned without violence or bodily harm.

Too bad my husband is an old dog that can't learn new tricks.

Enjoyed your story!

Summary:

Run, run little girl… Run; run, before the tracker comes… Isabella knew should have never gotten into the supernatural world in the first place. Nor would she know she would find her fate in the hands of the Volturi's Tracker.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Demetri/OC
Genre: Angst, Horror, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Historical Romance
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4576 Read Count: 581
[Report This] Published: 19 Oct 2013 Updated: 19 Oct 2013
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Apr 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Alice and Edward thought they could overtake the Volturi? they might have been able to if they hadn't screwed around and changed Bella right away.

Once they let her loose, Bella sure didn't last very long at all.

Tired of Being Sorry by speklez Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 18]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Banner by Ellie Wolf

Even death couldn't free her from the iron grip that was held over her life. Even vampirism wasn't enough to allow her freedom to live. After a century of being placed in glass on a shelf, she breaks free and runs. She put no thoughts to her actions and must now face the consequences.     


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Peter
Genre: Angst, Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, One-Shot, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6601 Read Count: 2858
[Report This] Published: 23 Oct 2013 Updated: 23 Oct 2013
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was brutal and hot and sexy. I would love to more more about how Edward ignored Bella. How did she put up with it for a hundred years?

And Peter just happened to be in town.

How lucky for Bella to finally have a real man.

And Jasper tried to call Peter? How interesting. what could he possibly say to him. "Alice saw ..."

Shut the hell up.

LOL

I can't imagine she put up with a century of that bullshit. And I can just see him doing that. But she didn't know any different. Until she met Peter.

Good story. Well done!

Summary: Past Featured Story

Born to loving parents then lost to them for 8 years, he is little more than feral and hostile when found. Fate steps in one day in the form of a Volturi King and a new life and destiny. Vampire AU Child Jasper, Mentor/Father Caius. Jasper will be paired with Bella. AU & OOC

fs

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Angst, Drama, Family, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed, Ageise02 Bella/Jasper stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 101477 Read Count: 31929
[Report This] Published: 20 Apr 2014 Updated: 11 Nov 2014
Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I can't believe Carlisle beat him!

I'm amazed.

Out in the wild - kill or be killed. Jasper had no one to hunt for him or help take care of him. He had to be vicious in order to survive.

Now Caius has him.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Well, now.

Seems as though Jasper is learning all the "manly" arts.

And Tanya's right on him.

I thouht he didn't want the Cullens to visit? What the hell are they doing there?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Enjoyed his teasing of Edward. Ha ha ha ha ha.

 

Jasper had his ass kicked.

Well, we have to assume that somehow Jasper decides to go to Forks. At least he won't have the red eyes.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I bet that guard was having fun directing Carlisle to the elite Guards common room.

And who the hell does Carlisle think he is trying to tell Jasper what to do?

Minor son? Really, Carlisle?

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Jasper is going to be so pissed. Carlisle is overstepping his bounds here.

Oh!

Jasper has a twin.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay, I gotta wonder why, when Caius first took Jasper back to Volterra, Jasper didn't tell him about his brother.

They had a deal to keep quiet, but Jasper had to see that he was being treated well and taken care of. Wouldn't he have wanted the same for his brother?

And the Cullens are known for descending in a horde. It wouldn't matter how old Jasper was.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Jasper had no problem schmoozing Esme, but Carlisle is going to be watching him very carefully.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Oh, my God! Jasper is going to drive Carlisle insane. And Edward right along with him.

Yes. It would be nice to have a King as a father.

Yep. I'd say that if Carlisle tried to raise a hand against Jasper now, he'd draw back a venomy stump.

Jasper won that round.

Esme may schmooz the boy right back.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Leah!?! And would the other girl be her cousin Emily?

LOL

Oh, my! I wonder how many little Jaspers there might be running around?

Lucky Esme gets to have The Talk.

Seems to me, Jasper's smart enough to cover his tracks, so to speak.

and Jasper and Bella have finally met. Hell of a meeting.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Now Jasper is going to have to remember that he's had a family all these years and his brother was all alone and missing him.

And Jasper and Bella meet again! HELL of a meeting!

How the hell did she just get up and walk away?

Should be interesting when Edward gets a whiff of Bella on Jasper.

ha ha ha ha ha ha ha

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 02 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Peter!

I'm so glad Esme didn't give up on Jasper. He made a promise and kept it. Carlisle was being a shit.

 

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 03 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

I still think Carlisle is being a douche. Where's all this compassion? He's got some for everyone except Jasper. Of course he likes Peter better. Peter hasn't given him any shit yet.

So Bella runs into Peter at the books store. I guess she would be confused.

Now Carlisle is preaching at Peter about what he eats. Fortunately, Peter and Jasper will be 18 in a while and can leave that dogmatic bullshit behind. Peter is old enough to make up his own mind, but Carlisle is pushing it. 

Jacob slapped Bella!?! Yeah, that'll make her want to be his girlfriend. Stupid dick.

Jacob's lucky Jasper didn't kill him.

Yeah! Right to the bedroom. We can only hope Carlisle doesn't walk in and stare at Bella's goodies.

Or any of them, for that matter. Christ. Have these people never heard of knocking?

Very nice. And no interruptions!

Yes, might be a good idea to know each other's names.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Well, now. They've gone and had a fight. He said he was sorry! Bet he doesn't do that very often

Jesus H. Christ. Carlisle is manipulating Peter. Jasper saw right through him.

Holy shit! Charlie's gone to Billy's. So Jacob knows Bella is alone. That fucker. What was he going to do? Rape her?

What a piece of shit.

Thank goodness the pizza boy showed up when he did!

I really hope Charlie isn't a total ass.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Welp. Charlie is as big a douche as Jacob.

GOD! What total fuck!

I can't wait to see what Jasper has in mind!

Hot damn! When Carlisle showed up, I figured he'd draw the blood, but then *lose* the results.

WHOOT! Jasper's lawyer is in town, taking names and kicking ass! YEE HAW!

It's be nice to have that kind of money, huh?

But, Jasper did behave himself!

Too many witnesses to that breathalyzer for Carlisle to screw with the blood test. Jasper won't be in jail much longer. He can step out while Charlie is stepping it!

Carlisle thinks he knows something. Asshole. He probably thinks Charlie caught Jasper in bed with Bella.

Bella's right. Charlie practically tried to throw her into Jacob's bed. Fucking pig.

Hate to say it, but there's going to be trouble with Bella being only 17 and at the guest cottage. I hope Caius shows up and buys a house or something.

He'll be shocked about Peter! I hope Jasper remembers to mention that little bit of info.

Reviewer: GeezerWench Signed
Date: 04 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Jacob! On Cullen territory and threatening Bella!

That crazy fucker deserved to die. 

And Carlisle is worried about him! 

(Okay, here, I don't think Bella would know about Carlisle being Jasper and Peter's biological father. Jasper had said his last name was Volturi. He never mentioned the Cullens.)

Carlisle is screaming at Jasper?

Usually, I can't stand Edward, but thank goodness he stood up and told the truth. Jacob was trespassing anyway.

Carlisle would have let him take Bella to keep the peace?

Holy shit! Caius is here!