[Report This]Date: 17 Oct 2010 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 10
loved it thanks for sharing....
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 9
Thanks for the update.
[Report This]Date: 13 Oct 2010 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 9
I cant believe Edward doesnt want to take care of Johnny bcause of what he did to the girls and what he wants from Bella.
Date: 13 Oct 2010 1:40 PM Title: Chapter 9
Bella needs to stop playing games and tell Edward what is going on and be loyal. She needs to stop being wishy washy. She also needs to know how to contact him fast.
Date: 13 Oct 2010 11:13 AM Title: Chapter 9
I hope he shows up and helps Bella out. Is he going to push her away now that everyone thinks he is going "soft"? He needs to know what Johnny did. Love the update...
[Report This]Date: 13 Oct 2010 7:49 AM Title: Chapter 9
I hope he saves her update when you can thanks.....
Date: 13 Oct 2010 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 9
Renee is a bitch and should just leave Bella alone. Where is Edward????
Date: 13 Oct 2010 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 9
oh poor bella, looks like edward is a no show. great chapter
Date: 13 Oct 2010 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 9
i wonder if edward will be able to protect her
Date: 12 Oct 2010 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 9
amazing chapter
Date: 12 Oct 2010 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 9
WHERE THE FUCK IS HE???? Hell!
Loved it even though it's ansty!
xx
M
[Report This]Date: 07 Oct 2010 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 8
Her mother?? I didnt see that coming. Michel is a little bit of a scrapper, that good.
Date: 02 Oct 2010 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 8
After what happened in the dressing room he would not freak out quit so much. Who ever came in better not hurt her.
Date: 02 Oct 2010 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 8
ahh now mom show up. prob thinks money is available from dad dying.
Date: 02 Oct 2010 3:48 PM Title: Chapter 8
I loved it. Edward gives her pleasure in her dressing room. Cute. lol. I was surprised when Edward went ape shit on Michel though. lol But hey it was funny, he was kissing her way too much. I was really shocked that he left Bella unprotected though especially after he knew that she was in danger. Ok also I seen two words that you didn't write the definition for so I dont know what they mean, one is Child Joker and the other is Roundheels. So can you please explain those for me?
Author's Response:
he could be the child the joker if he wanted to be This is bella reffering to Edward
Roundheel - prositute
Sorry about that i thought i got all the words i used
Next chapter will be next Saturday
Thanks for reviewing
SatansDarkAngel
Date: 02 Oct 2010 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 8
WOW!! I didn't see that comming!! Great!
xx
MArianne
[Report This]Date: 02 Oct 2010 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 8
Loved it very much but way to short need more please update when you can thanks....
[Report This]Date: 27 Sep 2010 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 7
Bella sure is teasing Edward.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 7:22 AM Title: Chapter 7
Oh I am so glad you are back, I was worried that you stopped writing this. I am thrilled that you are though. I loved this chapter. I hate that I have to go to the bottom and look for the definitions though all through the chapter. lol. Maybe you could put the definition in parenthesis beside the word in the chapter so we dont have to keep scrolling back and fourth to figure out this old gangster language. lol. That would be cool if you did that. Anyway I love that he kissed her and that even though he is a gangster he didn't force her to have sex with him and didn't even have sex with her at all. At least not that night. lol.
[Report This]Date: 27 Sep 2010 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 7
This chapter was again, really good, especially the atmosphere you create with the characters and setting. The songs of Christina Aguilera that Bella sings fit the story perfectly. It is so much fun to read it and to imagine the show.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 7
Johnny wants to kill Edward I thnk this means war. Poor Emmett wants revenge for Rose.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 1:13 AM Title: Chapter 7
love the story keep updating thanks
Date: 26 Sep 2010 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 7
this is a great chapter its going to be interesting to c what happens
Date: 26 Sep 2010 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 7
cant wait till the next chapter
Date: 26 Sep 2010 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 7
great chapter. can't wait for the next one
Date: 26 Sep 2010 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 7
Good one!! I didn't mind the wait! The songs from CA were hot!! I can just imagine it... Poor Edward! or should I say lucky?! ***winks***
[Report This]Date: 26 Sep 2010 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 7
loved it very much and glad there finally together....update when you can
Date: 26 Aug 2010 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 6
aww i feel so sorry for rose.
[Report This]Date: 24 Aug 2010 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 6
I hope Em gives them what they have coming.
Date: 22 Aug 2010 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 6
Thanks for the update.
Date: 22 Aug 2010 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 6
Yuck I kind of dont like this E sexin it up with everyone buy B
Date: 21 Aug 2010 4:15 PM Title: Chapter 6
Someone is going to die when Emmett gets ahold of them???? I hope Emmett gets to Rose so she knows he loves her and it was not her fault. Bella is going to ask for Edwards help???
Date: 21 Aug 2010 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 6
wow well we knew that they were going to be pissed when they knew what happened to the girls. And now its Edwards turn to get pissed when he sees Bellas neck. I hope you can update sooner. I was worried that you were not going to continue this story.
Date: 21 Aug 2010 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 6
things are getting interesting and uh oh emmett's gonna kill somebody. great chaoter.
Date: 15 Aug 2010 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 5
wonderful story i love it, not many people to period peices and i can't tell that you have done your reserch for this story hope you keep it up
Date: 04 Aug 2010 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 5
This is amazing!!
Date: 28 Jul 2010 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 5
OOOO THIS IS GETTING GOOD!
Date: 23 Jul 2010 6:13 AM Title: Chapter 5
OMG the girls are raped well maybe only Rosalie and now Bella is cornered in her apartment again. Who is going to save her now? wow this is getting good.
Date: 23 Jul 2010 5:55 AM Title: Chapter 4
ok this is not what I expected. You didn't even show that Edward seen what that guy did to her neck. Like there was no reaction from him at all. I know you dont want it to be sappy but he didn't have any reaction. If he didn't have feelings for her then why would he have run to her when his men said something was wrong. I just think you should have written something about him seeing what the guy did to her neck.
Date: 23 Jul 2010 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
This story is extremely interesting to me. I did find a lot of errors maybe you could find a beta. Just a recommendation. So any way, I think your story is really great so far. I cant wait to read the rest. Bella is sure fiesty and Edward thinks he can have anything. But I guess he will in the end. lol.
Date: 21 Jul 2010 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 4
I am a bit confused here ***scratches her head***
Emmett said in chapie one (or two) that he wants Royce's king girl... And now he is mairried to her?? WTF?
Anyway... I like it!!
xx
Marianne
Date: 21 Jul 2010 1:43 PM Title: Chapter 3
Loved it!!
xx
Marianne
Date: 21 Jul 2010 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 2
I like it even more!! Is charlie sick??
xx
M
Date: 21 Jul 2010 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Bloody hell... I am from Greece ok? WHen I red this the first time all I wanted to do was stop and go fetch the bloody dictionary.... But then If I stoped I thought that I would miss what happened next so I didn't even bat an eyelash...
Anyway... I loved it!!
xoxo
Marianne
[Report This]Date: 20 Jul 2010 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 5
Poor Rose, heads are going to roll.
Date: 20 Jul 2010 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 5
Things were going good and now omg poor Rose poor Emmett
Date: 20 Jul 2010 2:29 PM Title: Chapter 5
Oh no........Emmett is gonna flip out!! Can't wait for more.
Date: 16 Jul 2010 8:34 AM Title: Chapter 4
Edward needs to take Jonny out and take care of Bella and forget the round heel
[Report This]Date: 15 Jul 2010 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 4
Bella needs to pick herself up, I know her Dad died but she has some serious trouble going on around her.
Date: 13 Jul 2010 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 4
aww poor bella. she should be nicer to edward
[Report This]Date: 12 Jul 2010 10:01 PM Title: Chapter 4
I really like this story. I love the time period. I love how Bella stands up for herself. I also like that she has softened a bit when it comes to being around Edward. It's terrible though that Chalie died - he protected her from Johnny who is such a slime. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: 12 Jul 2010 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 4
Poor Bella, she is alone and with people wanting to get to her. She will need to be careful, very careful.
Date: 12 Jul 2010 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 3
It seems Bella isn't that uninterested in Edward. Her father said she should choose him.
But I don't think Johnny will be too happy.
Date: 12 Jul 2010 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 2
Bella is in the middle of two dangerous guys... not a good place to be at.
Date: 12 Jul 2010 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
She is doing what she likes, and enjoys it. She is well taken care of, that gives her part of her confidence.
He is used to getting his way, almost always does, and now, he has been challenged. It will be an interesting duel.
Date: 12 Jul 2010 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 4
Well im hooked so im excited to read more! How often do you update?
Date: 12 Jul 2010 8:05 PM Title: Chapter 3
Johnny is a creep! I soooo love Edward though!!!
Date: 12 Jul 2010 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 4
Thanks for updating again.
Date: 12 Jul 2010 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 2
Oh no is Charlie sick? so lovin Edward I love me a Mafia Edward!!!
Date: 12 Jul 2010 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
I LOVE it! Its so different!!!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 3
really loved this story!! cant wait for the next chapter :)
Date: 31 May 2010 4:12 PM Title: Chapter 3
Gotta love Charlie!! I really enjoy reading this with the "old time" feel!! It's so different but absolutely awesome!!
[Report This]Date: 31 May 2010 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 3
Good chapter. Loved how charlie wasnt afraid to shoot if he had to.
Date: 30 May 2010 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 3
OH Jonny is not going to be happy so lets kill him I like that idea LOL. Poor Bella her dad is sick and then that sick fuck has to come and start demanding her to do things for him. I like that her dad even said that Edward would be a good choies. Cant wait for more.
Date: 30 May 2010 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 3
oooo i do hope you update again soon pls
Date: 30 May 2010 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 3
Ok just found this story and I love it. Can't wait for more.
[Report This]Date: 30 May 2010 5:21 PM Title: Chapter 3
Love this story so far!
[Report This]Date: 20 May 2010 4:12 AM Title: Chapter 2
I actually reviewed the last chapter but might have deleted it when trying to add this story to my favorites list (I'm new to the site and computer stupid and can't seem to get adding story to favorites rght) so in case you didn't get my last review I'll say again you really know your stuff and know how to express it. The time era you chose really makes the story uniue and interesting.
[Report This]Date: 04 May 2010 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 2
Looks like trouble is getting ready to start.
[Report This]Date: 04 May 2010 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like this Bella.
Date: 03 May 2010 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 2
So happy to see you updated I am enjoying this story very interesting with the Molls and Dolls all the old talk very fun.
Date: 03 May 2010 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 1
hmm feisty Bella.
Date: 03 May 2010 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 2
i love your story and i can't wait until you update again
Date: 19 Mar 2010 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
love the idea and can't wait for more
Date: 18 Mar 2010 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
oh wow this is great, chapter 1 and already edward gets slapped, poor baby maybe he can get a piece of ass to make it better.
Date: 15 Mar 2010 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
wow i love this story its sooo interesting i hope you update again soon
[Report This]Date: 15 Mar 2010 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
Cute story. Looking forward to more updates
Date: 11 Mar 2010 4:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Interesting I think it is going to be great. What year is it. Love her fistness and so does he.
Date: 11 Mar 2010 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
sounds really good so far
Date: 11 Mar 2010 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
There were a few times where the writing didn't quite flow but I'll choke that up to nerves;-). I am assuming this takes place in the 40's or early 50's due to the lingo which I actually enjoyed.
'Your' Edward is cocky and arrogant as all hell which is fitting for a man in his postition. Bella maybe a 'Canary' but she has some serious bite and isn't about to just rollover for him. Both have strong personalities which can turn into some seriously hot chemistry...ahhh potential for 'CaveWard' to make an appearance;-)
Any story where Bella isn't all that crazy about Jacob gets my vote!! Your story has some serious potential!! I can be pretty finicky but as long as you keep Edward from getting all mushy and Bella from being a doormat I'll stick with ya;-)