Date: 02 Feb 2010 11:34 PM Title: Ch3 - How could you ask me to do something like that?
I'm glad Edward came around and I like his conditions. There is definitely room for more in the story, so I'm glad you extended it.
Date: 02 Feb 2010 9:47 PM Title: Ch2 - This. Is. The. Best. Feeling. Ever.
Bella hearing Edward's conversation with Carlisle is genious. I'm glad she knows and can deal accordingly. I actually hope she doesn't have the conversation with him and he is convinced through actions and feelings that he can't let her go at all. Judging by how things are progressing, it shouldn't be too hard.
Side note, there are a lot of words that are used incorrectly: then/than, emmissions/admission, anyways/anyway (you never use 'anyways' always the singular).
Date: 02 Feb 2010 8:20 PM Title: Ch1 - And I plan on giving Bella plenty...
I like how Bella acknowledge that she wants him (both to his face and to herself), but stands up for herself when she understands his intentions are just a fling. She's going to be a little spitfire, even though she totally wants him. I have a feeling he's going to be feeling very differently about wanting someone else to take her virginity. I'm looking forward to that realization.
Date: 02 Feb 2010 8:06 PM Title: Ch1 - And I plan on giving Bella plenty...
Interesting start...hard to believe E could be that "mature" in looking towards the future and also not so possessive he wants someone else to "break" B in...
Date: 31 Jan 2010 3:41 PM Title: Ch15 - Look at what sleep got me last time.
Wow! You have thrown me down a path of sadness and hope with this chapter! I like that you threw a little something in to liven the plot!
Date: 31 Jan 2010 3:17 PM Title: Ch14 - That's why I need you.
Okay. . . not feeling sorry for Charlie anymore! The lemon was great! The end of this chapter has me reeling!
Date: 31 Jan 2010 2:54 PM Title: Ch13 - For the love of God!
Good chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next? I am starting to feel sorry for Charlie. Should I ?
Date: 31 Jan 2010 5:01 AM Title: Ch12 - I... blow your mind?
You are wonderful and amazing and so, good at writing drool worthy lemons!
Date: 31 Jan 2010 4:25 AM Title: Ch11 - Okay, that's not sexy.
Good Chapter!
Date: 31 Jan 2010 3:57 AM Title: Ch10 - Its the best invention yet.
Good chapter! You had me scared with The End!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 9:48 PM Title: Ch9 - Blood on the Highway: The Bella Swan Story
Man, almighty! Bella put Charlie in his place! Wow!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 9:32 PM Title: Ch8 - For the better or for worse?
Man, what a dad! I usually like Charlie, but this Charlie is a selfish, stalker, crazy dad!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 9:14 PM Title: Ch7 - Oh no... no, no, no... not good.
I really enjoyed Edward getting a little cocky with the Blacks and Charlie! The whole bath scene . . . wow, I really need a cold shower!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 8:45 PM Title: Ch6 - Lalalalalala
Shame on Charlie!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 7:34 PM Title: Ch5 - Remember your window, Juliet.
That was yummy!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 5:30 PM Title: Ch4 - He's got a knife in his hand!
Ha! Edward is going to get diced by daddy!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 3:15 PM Title: Ch3 - How could you ask me to do something like that?
Great chapter! I love the sheep in wolf's clothing aspect of edward. You know, the whole tattooed bad boy on the outside and creamy softy on the inside! ha!
Author's Response:
LMAO! You "creamy softy on the inside" comment reminded me of Dr. Horrible's Sing-A-Long Blog. It's an awesome little series, if you've never seen it. :D
Thanks for all the reviews! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story!!! :D :D :D
Date: 30 Jan 2010 5:34 AM Title: Ch2 - This. Is. The. Best. Feeling. Ever.
Good chapter! I find your writing delicious!
Date: 29 Jan 2010 11:14 PM Title: Ch1 - And I plan on giving Bella plenty...
I am in the mood the a good story! This is just what I ordered!
[Report This]Date: 28 Jan 2010 7:05 PM Title: Ch3 - How could you ask me to do something like that?
"Its either you take me now or you never get me" - that's it Bella! I really do like your Edward, but I can understand Bella, too and I'm glad that Edward took his chance and talked to Bella.
Tomorrow I will continue reading ...
[Report This]Date: 28 Jan 2010 5:36 PM Title: Ch16 - Wakey, wakey, Belly.
I enjoyed your story from start to finish.
Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:41 AM Title: Ch1 - And I plan on giving Bella plenty...
I may read this all tonight. I'm loving it!!!
Date: 27 Jan 2010 5:13 AM Title: Ch8 - For the better or for worse?
oh shit !!!!
Date: 26 Jan 2010 8:46 PM Title: Ch2 - This. Is. The. Best. Feeling. Ever.
I wonder what the winner gets ????
[Report This]Date: 26 Jan 2010 5:17 AM Title: Ch7 - Oh no... no, no, no... not good.
Jacob and Billie should mind their own business.
[Report This]Date: 25 Jan 2010 5:18 PM Title: Ch5 - Remember your window, Juliet.
Bella acted like a brat, but Edward handled Charlie perfectly.
[Report This]Date: 25 Jan 2010 6:15 AM Title: Ch2 - This. Is. The. Best. Feeling. Ever.
Waterfall, Picnic, Edward...what more could a girl ask for ?
[Report This]Date: 24 Jan 2010 6:40 PM Title: Ch1 - And I plan on giving Bella plenty...
I like a devious, older Edward...sounds like its gonna be a great summer!
Author's Response:
I think it turns out to be a pretty decent summer... but then again... I might be a little biased. hehe
Thanks for the review!! :D