Date: 12 May 2010 4:24 AM Title: On the floor
The humilitation and BJ thing was done just right. It seems like that was the only option Edward would consider for someone unfamiliar to him. I think even as a sub he wants some sort of "control" and feels proud of his own self-control?
I'm looking foward to how you'll present Tanya pushing Edward's limits. At this point of the story I think Edward still has a lot of pride, and if Isabella is going to be present at the club, I think he'll want to "show-off" in front of her.
I love how you did Tanya's POV, it shows exactly how flaky and careless a person she is. I hope whatever scenario ends her relationship with Edward, that it'll reflect poorly on her reputation - hate to think she succeeds in anything else besides getting rid of Edward.
btw, loved how you put in little glimpses of Carlisle+Esme. I know it's a Bella/Edward story but gotta wonder about future play dates?
Author's Response:
I'm glad the BJ-thing wasn't over the top. I'm always debating whether to go more easy or harder on him, so it's nice to know when I do it right.
Yeah, Tanya is a real bitch, as she's supposed to be in this story :-)
Maybe we'll see Isabella and Carlisle arrange some scenes in the future, although that'll probably end up among the outtakes on my blog.
Thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: 12 May 2010 3:58 AM Title: On the floor
No, I didn't think the blow job was too much. ;)
Tanya's a real piece of work, isn't she? Yeesh.
I'm quite curious to find out what Tanya's going to do to make Edward use his safeword, and I wonder whether, if he knows his "Miss Chocolate" is there watching, he will feel more or less inclined to do it.
Looking forward to your next update. :)
Date: 12 May 2010 1:44 AM Title: On the floor
Another great chapter. I'll be eagerly awaiting the next one. I thought the whole chapter was good. I'm scared of what Tanya is going to do, but I'll have to wait :( Lol. Thanks.
Date: 12 May 2010 12:58 AM Title: Mistress Tanya
I love this story and I always anticipate to read the next chapter. I have to say I wanted to cry when I noticed it was no longer on FF. I'm glad I looked for it. Your writing is great and always nicely done. Thanks.
Date: 12 May 2010 12:23 AM Title: The meeting
OK..yes I admit I was reading without reviewing, call me a stalker BUT I couldn't stop reading!! This is so good and now back to the action (and what action it is).
Date: 11 May 2010 11:42 PM Title: On the floor
You have a very interesting story and I know you work very hard on it. Please don't quit. I don't think Edward will safeword with Tanya. Good riddance to Tanya anyway. Edward deserves so much more.
Date: 11 May 2010 11:03 PM Title: On the floor
I use my iphone for everything. For some strange reason, my phone will not let me leave a review. I dusted off the laptop and wanted to let you know how much I enjoy reading your story. I hope Tanya's plan does not embarrass Edward too much. You are appreciated!! Look forward to reading more.
Date: 11 May 2010 11:02 PM Title: On the floor
I like it! i know absolutley nothing about this stuf, but it feels like you know what you are talking about... big ups for that...
and please continue
Date: 11 May 2010 8:39 PM Title: On the floor
Have been waiting for this chapter and you haven´t disappointed. The guy on guy action was really tasteful. I liked it that edward came back from the Dom impression in the scene, so that´s what kept it real about his natural submission.
Without your a/n in the end I would have thought that Tanya just used the small letter because these people were submissives. It is a normal thing in BDSM that submissives don´t get big letters. I think it has nothing to do with being bitchy there. That´s what made me wonder why Carlisle didn´t used small letters, but your A/n clarified that.
About the pushing Edward to safe word. I don´t like the idea. That just showes that Tanya doesn´t care one bit about Edward. I would rather see Tanya explaining about seth, because BDSM is about faith and trust, so she should trust Edward that he understands her situationand is okay with this. She wouldn´t lose her good reputation far quitting with a sub, but making him safe word would be. So maybe you could fabricate a scene which doesn´t make Edward safe word but where he notice that something isn´t right and they could talk about it. Just if you don´t plan on something in the future where this bad experience (and I believe it would be a bad one for Edward) is of use, than I didn´t say anything.
And last but not least about the not reviewing:
that is really sad that people who read this story and who liked it (which would be the case if they read more that 2-3 chapters), don´t reply to your ideas. I understand that you are angry with them, but don´t let that get you down.
Spanks alot ;)
Author's Response:
I'm glad it didn't dissapoint you :-)
The usage of small letters in the beginning of sub's names is very common, but I felt it wouldn't fit Carlisle's persona to do so. Tanya is much more condesending towards her fellow humans, and I was almost surprised she didn't use a small "c" in Carlisle too.
Of course Tanya's idea about the safe word is a bad one, she's got it all wrong even if she is a natural Domme with a dominating nature. You'll have to wait for the next chapter to see if she'll push Edward enough ;-)
I'm really pleased that so many have reviewed this last chapter, and I do hope you'll all continue to do so in the future. Sometimes people just need to be disciplined, I guess ;-)
Date: 11 May 2010 8:36 PM Title: On the floor
So what is going on in that evil mind of yours...I love the story. No, it wasn't too much with the BJ thing. I agree that it is important. Isn't that what BDSM about someone dominating over the other? That is exactly what Edward did.
I don't think Edward is going to safe word it in the playroom.
I just love how your wicked mind works!
Author's Response:
*blushing and smirks* Yes, I am evil, right?
Date: 11 May 2010 8:00 PM Title: On the floor
Yeeeh, Tanya is a real bitch. And I'm so sorry that the E&B encounter wasn't a real one because Bella didn't see him. But I can't wait for the next chapter. Your writing is really good.
Date: 11 May 2010 7:40 PM Title: On the floor
ok really dont like Tanya. Too much pride to end the relationship properly. No respect for her whatsoever.
Date: 11 May 2010 7:21 PM Title: On the floor
I do like this story and its one of the few where Edward is the sub. Tanya's character is a b****. good ridance.
Date: 11 May 2010 6:41 PM Title: On the floor
I actually felt the guy/guy thing was handled quite tastefully. BDSM is so different from vanilla that it isn't even in the same galaxy, much less the same world. The sexual part may be integral but isn't the most important part of the whole scene. I'm not looking forward to what Tanya will do but more to Isabella's reaction to it.
Motherthing
Date: 11 May 2010 6:32 PM Title: On the floor
Finally.. =) I love this story... Yeh, Tanya seems to be a royal bitch.. A little dissapointing that Edward is in love with her.. ah well.. i dont want Tanya to break Edward.. but maybe hung from the seiling and whipped (doesnt need to be traumatic).. there are so many choices.. =) im looking forward to next update...
Author's Response:
I can say as much that the scene WILL involve a whip, that's all you're getting ;-)
Date: 11 May 2010 6:04 PM Title: On the floor
Great story! I'm really enjoying it.
Date: 11 May 2010 5:48 PM Title: On the floor
Oh I wonder what Tanya has in store for poor Edward since he has never used he safe word up to now, it is going to be something interesting no doubt.
Date: 11 May 2010 5:34 PM Title: On the floor
I really like your story. The slow build up to the first "real" meeting of Bella and Edward, is really keeping your story interesting.
And Edward as a submissive...sexy :)!!
So please keep going with this story.
Date: 11 May 2010 5:00 PM Title: On the floor
At least they have met now. I am enjoying this story
Date: 11 May 2010 4:36 PM Title: On the floor
Bad behavior Mistress T.......wondering why Carlisle would agree?
:)molly
and the guy on guy stuff........never a problem for me.
Date: 11 May 2010 4:25 PM Title: On the floor
Please don't quit this story!! I love it, who wouldn't want a pet Edward? I love the little dance you've led the characters on, can't wait to see their first proper interaction. Keep up the awesome work (please) x
Date: 10 May 2010 1:33 PM Title: Mistress Tanya
I love this story, can't wait for the next chapter
Date: 06 May 2010 5:03 PM Title: Mistress Tanya
sorry you havent been getting the reviews - i just started reading and couldn't stop - well except for some hot moments...
anyways, i'm really happy finally getting to read a more dominant bella and excited by all the anticipation you've built up...it's really the best part
also love all the other POV you've added - especially carlisle's - not sure if it was meant to be humorous but I enjoyed it.
Date: 30 Apr 2010 5:03 PM Title: Mistress Tanya
Just found your story last night and I'm already in love with it! It gives you a much more in depth look into the world of BDSM and I love it. You're doing great!!
Date: 28 Apr 2010 1:25 AM Title: Mistress Tanya
I have only just found this story and it is very good please keep writing i can't wait till the next chapter. thanks Blenda. xx
Date: 24 Apr 2010 4:43 AM Title: Mistress Tanya
I found this chapter very interesting. I really didn't read any interaction between aro and edward. yeah he held edwards cock but that was it. otherwise it seemed as if edward got off with the female subs. I guess I expected edward and aro to be together.
Tanya is a hoot. tough bitch. i have never heard of the wrestle now that was a new and different approach.
Finally Bella and edward meet up yeah. I can't wait to see what happens next
Date: 23 Apr 2010 10:30 PM Title: Mistress Tanya
That is very interesting his time with Tanya but his time is up I cant wait till he meets Bella
Date: 23 Apr 2010 7:19 PM Title: Mistress Tanya
oooh they meet again
Date: 23 Apr 2010 6:15 PM Title: Mistress Tanya
I really enjoyed the chapter. I had to smile a lot when I read about Jake wanting to be treated like a dog, what a fucking great idea!
I´m having a problem with the no condoms. What happened between Edward and Tanya was okay with me, because they didn´t do it in front of other people. But in a BDSM club that wouldn´t be the case. No serious BDSM club would permit that, even if the members would be tested for AIDS/HIV and other genital diseases and the other members would applause on this.
I would advise that you write a warning that this is just a story and not a "How-to-do-BDSM" instruction, so no one is tempted to think that this shows reality.
Keep on writing, reading your story is really fun. I like your style and your ideas! Looking forward for the next chapter.
Spanks a lot! ;)
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked my Jake-dog-sub, I thought it was rather brilliant myself ;-)
About them not wearing condoms, I just got so tired from reading about it all the time, so I just didnt' put much thought into it. But of course you are right, and I'll probably go back and make that guy in the club wear one.
I don't really think anyone would view my story as anything but fiction, but maybe I should put a warning on it anyway.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts, I really appriciate it!
Date: 21 Apr 2010 7:42 PM Title: Master Aro
I'm so sorry I haven't reviewed sooner. I'm just so impatient to get to the next vhapter that I skip right over the review box. I love this story. I'm glad you're not rushing E and B getting together. The anticipation worth it. I like how you're mixing present day with the past. It makes sense and is enjoyable to read. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
I'm so glad someone can keep up with the time switch! It makes a lot of sense in my head, but not everyone seems to get what I put down in words. Thanks for reading!
Date: 21 Apr 2010 8:56 AM Title: Master Aro
Great peek into Edward's story!
Date: 21 Apr 2010 4:51 AM Title: The meeting
lol I'm not stalking...I'm reviewing now. I love the reaction to Mr. Green eyes...
Date: 21 Apr 2010 12:36 AM Title: Master Aro
Just wanted to let you know that I'm still enjoying this story. :)
Date: 20 Apr 2010 9:39 PM Title: Master Aro
I´m glad that you decided to show how Edward was introduced into BDSM. I really loved the chapter and your style of writing.
I found a sentence that didn´t make sense. I think that you ment different words but wrote the same. Because I´m not a native speaker I don´t know which. But heres the sentence: "I felt both appealed and appealed by his advancement, and I decided to save the card for later considerations and just get wasted."
About one thing I´m unsure. I don´t know if a good Master would slap a submissive across the face while the sub still wears a gag, because the straps of the gag would be slapped as well and this could cause injuries.
Can´t wait for the my spanking even though I reviewed and looking forward for the next chapter ;)
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing!
I just corrected the sentence you pointed out, it had been caught by the spelling contron :-/
Maybe a real Dom wouldn't slap a gagged sub across the face, but it just fit the story. I do hope no one uses my story as a guideline in BDSM, I am certainly no expert at the topic.
Lots of spanks to you!
Date: 20 Apr 2010 9:23 PM Title: Master Aro
The background is extremely important, I agree. Write on.
Date: 20 Apr 2010 8:22 PM Title: Master Aro
Is this an E X B story? Your character list only has Bella. I like the story so far. I think I'd be more into it if I knew that Bella was going to end up with Edward.
Author's Response:
I must admit that only Bella is listed because I don't know how to put several characters on the list (hides under chair).
They WILL end up together, only two more chapters to go, then sparks will fly!
Date: 20 Apr 2010 8:17 PM Title: Master Aro
Very interesting time with Aro and now moving on to Tanya. When is he going to meet Bella. Bella does work in his building?????
Date: 20 Apr 2010 8:12 PM Title: Master Aro
I liked the background it does explain where he is going and what he doesn't want. It will be interesting to see what happens with Tanya.
Date: 16 Apr 2010 2:55 AM Title: Edward's morning
It was very interesting to get more background on edward. I can't wait to see him imerse himself intot he bdsm world
Date: 15 Apr 2010 10:36 PM Title: Edward's morning
hmmm Aro is his first huh.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 10:33 PM Title: Soap cleans all
lol poor eddie and his yummy dreams
Date: 15 Apr 2010 10:16 PM Title: Bella's daydream and Carlisle's "punishment"
yummy daydream
Date: 15 Apr 2010 9:43 PM Title: Flashbacks
hmmmm loving this story so far.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 8:44 PM Title: At the club
hmmmm hawt hawt
Date: 15 Apr 2010 5:54 PM Title: Edward's morning
Well hello again!
The chapter and the outtake were well written. At first I thought you would make Edward take drugs at the club and then get into a scene. So glad that this wasn´t the case...
I don´t know if it takes everyone in this lifestyle a long time to realize what they want and need, so I don´t think you should apologize for that.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Lots of spanks to you! ;)
Date: 15 Apr 2010 2:09 PM Title: Edward's morning
Great chapter!
Looking forward to more....would to read the outakes!
:)molly
Date: 15 Apr 2010 10:40 AM Title: Edward's morning
:) I can't wait for Edward to meet Aro that should be an interesting meeting.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 9:00 AM Title: Edward's morning
Love the story!
Date: 15 Apr 2010 8:58 AM Title: Edward's morning
Edward is learning about himself and he knows for sure he wants the girl with the big brown eyes poor boy.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 7:02 AM Title: Soap cleans all
love your story.
Date: 12 Apr 2010 9:49 AM Title: Soap cleans all
cant wait for next chapter I will not push for when they meet as long as I know that they will meet is good for me it will be explosive I am sure. Very hot and steamy love it
Date: 12 Apr 2010 9:37 AM Title: New games at the club
Fuck spank me wipe me but I do reveiw. I love how she turned it around on him good girl she made him so proud.
Date: 12 Apr 2010 9:07 AM Title: Chocolate coloured fantasy
Yes I liked I wondered if he took the thong nasty little boy. LOL
Date: 11 Apr 2010 10:20 AM Title: Bella's daydream and Carlisle's "punishment"
and everything changes just like that????
Author's Response:
Yep, it does. Of course there's more to it than that, but Bella's new desires are a big relief for Carlisle since he already has his eyes on a new sub, so he's more than willing to let her go.
Date: 11 Apr 2010 10:07 AM Title: The meeting
I like a little stocking is good
Date: 11 Apr 2010 10:00 AM Title: Young Bella moving to town
good background
Date: 11 Apr 2010 7:36 AM Title: Flashbacks
WOw what a punishment
Date: 11 Apr 2010 7:00 AM Title: At the club
Hell I could never stop an orgazin dont get that many lol at least she got relice in the end lol pun intended
Date: 10 Apr 2010 1:35 PM Title: Initiation
No, it's definitely not childish; please don't think that's what I meant.
I've simply noticed the occasional odd turn of phrase, or perhaps the wrong preposition used, like "on" instead of "in," or vice versa--that sort of thing. Not something that would stand out to the average reader as more than just a typo, because that's very easily what it could be. I simply pick up on these things more quickly than some people might because I've had a lot of exposure to non-native English speakers.
Again, I think you write really well, so you should be proud of what you've done here. :)
Date: 10 Apr 2010 11:56 AM Title: Initiation
I figured that's what the issue was, but believe me, I'm impressed with your writing skills. And to be doing it so well in a language that isn't your native tongue is just that more amazing. I certainly can't do that... ;)
Author's Response:
Thank you! I just hope it isn't too obvious? I'd hate for my story to come out all childish because it's in English.
Date: 10 Apr 2010 11:13 AM Title: Initiation
sounds interesting smut and lemons are good to LOL
Date: 10 Apr 2010 6:52 AM Title: Soap cleans all
I like the story but sometimes I get a little side track with the timeline. when i read it, it seems they have meet in then back to current time and it says they are gettig ready to be together.
Author's Response:
They have met, only it was five years ago and they only met briefly. The story is about Bella's BDSM life and how they eventually get together. I don't know if you've read the story all at once, but it'll probably make more sense if you do.
Date: 09 Apr 2010 11:59 PM Title: Soap cleans all
Hehe, just ignore anybody who tells you to write something you're not ready to. Tell the story *you* need to tell.
Btw, at least twice now I've noticed the use of the word "cleansing" when what you really mean is "clenching" (once in this chapter and once near the end of chapter 9. :)
Anyway, I'm really enjoying this. Looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response:
Thanks!
I just corrected the rather confusing mistakes you pointed out, thanks! It's just something that comes with not having English as your first language, I guess, sorry.
Date: 09 Apr 2010 6:08 PM Title: Soap cleans all
Well at first I thought 'No shit a Domme wouldn´t accept to be bossed aroud by her sub. how could she write that?' I´m relieved that this was just a dream.
I think the punishment was acceptable for the crime, why shouldn´t he clean up want he made dirty? But I think that a real Domme wouldn´t stop a sub from a real punisment after she had talked about it ("You will clean them and afterwards you will deal with my punishment... "), even if the sub would be very sorry, he would still have to deal with the consequences. But that could have been just Edwards idea of this lifestyle/ of a scene...
And to you don´t let you be pushed into something by reviews that isn´t your intention for this story, after all you are the Domme of this!
Happy spanking to you.
Author's Response:
You really get this story, I'm so happy! The point (oh, and I'm totally giving out spoilers for tender words here) is that Edward is (yet) almost totally oblivious to how things works in a D/s relationship, so his mind is making things up as he sleeps. I do intend Mistress Isabella to a lot harsher and more consistent once she really gets to play, don't worry about that ;-)
Lots of whiplashes (of the oldfashioned kinds) to you!
Date: 09 Apr 2010 4:38 PM Title: At the club
Loved the scene between Carlisle and Bella. HOT HOT HOT HOT!!!!
Date: 09 Apr 2010 4:37 PM Title: Initiation
Can't wait to read more.
Date: 09 Apr 2010 3:57 PM Title: Soap cleans all
Love the deram. Can't wait to learn about Edward's last 5 years. It will be so delisous when they meet.
Meg
Date: 09 Apr 2010 3:31 PM Title: Soap cleans all
OH, I like Ms. Chocolate..I think she was great with Edward and most defintely could dish out some with him. :)
Date: 08 Apr 2010 10:04 AM Title: New games at the club
I just started to read your story this morning and I have to say that I like it a lot. It shows that you have experience with BDSM, even if it should be from books or internet or something. I just read a story that was labeled with BDSM and then there wasn´t even the SSC clause (so totally shit).
I really like it that Edward will be the sub and Bella the Domme. There are so many stories where it is reversed and don´t get me wrong, I like those too, but to read yours is interesting and new.
So for leaving a review no spanks for me. But if you like feel free to spank me ;)
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I wouldn't claim to be an expert on the topic - I'm far from it-, but I try to keep things as real as I can. Nonconsensual sex is certainly not a turn-on for me (and hopefully not for very many people, I hope), so even though I haven't really made a big fuss about safewords in my story, I think it's important to state it in the credits.
I also enjoy the Domward/Subella-stories, but Miss Chocolate was always kicking me in the head to make her come out and play with Subward :-)
I'll spank positive reviewers any day, just say when ;-)
Date: 07 Apr 2010 9:38 PM Title: New games at the club
Damn! I think my brand ;new 20 inch computer screen has black smoke streaming out of it from the the heat of that scene..I don't know if it can't take much more. But I sure want to push it to try! Damn! That was good!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! Reviews like that makes it worth while to write this kind of thing <3 Hope the next chapter won't break your screen totally ;-)
Date: 07 Apr 2010 12:51 PM Title: New games at the club
What a great story. Please update soon, I can't wait for them to meet.
Date: 06 Apr 2010 6:36 PM Title: Initiation
Sounds very interesting. Can't wait to read more. I am off to read the next chapter.
Date: 06 Apr 2010 6:05 PM Title: New games at the club
I like the build-up. The relationship between Bella and Carlisle is intersting. keep it up!
Date: 05 Apr 2010 5:23 AM Title: Flashbacks
very hot
surprised not everyone in the room wasn't having sex besides just kissing each other
Date: 04 Apr 2010 9:54 PM Title: New games at the club
Since I have a fairly low tolerance for pain, I will simply give a review. Takes less time too. Awesome, but I was hoping for some B/E action, do we see it next chapter?
Author's Response:
Ok, you're forgiven and I won't spank you ;-) Edward is coming up in the next chapter, right now he's showering and rubbing off to the thought of the brown haired beauty ;-)
Date: 04 Apr 2010 6:54 PM Title: New games at the club
i'm sure once there is more edward you'll get more reviews. it seems like it's going to be a good story, i can't wait to see where you take it with edward as a sub, yum
Author's Response:
He's coming up in the next chapter, I hope you'll like it. Thanks for reading!
Date: 03 Apr 2010 10:37 PM Title: Chocolate coloured fantasy
Please ignore the delete word. I don't know how to get rid of it. I love your story. Your writing is intelligent and interesting. I love any stories about a dominant Edward. In your story Carlisle said Bella has the potential to be a sadistic dom. Yikes! Please go easy on poor Edward. I hope Edward doesn't end up losing all his dominant traits. Thanks for writing. I'm enjoying your story and looking forward to all your upcoming chapters.
Date: 03 Apr 2010 7:07 PM Title: Chocolate coloured fantasy
This is really good
Date: 02 Apr 2010 3:12 AM Title: Chocolate coloured fantasy
I like! Bella sure showed him
Date: 02 Apr 2010 12:56 AM Title: Chocolate coloured fantasy
Really good, its always Edward who is the dom, now it is Bella, really like it. Good, keep going, cant wait for the next chapter.
Date: 01 Apr 2010 7:45 PM Title: Chocolate coloured fantasy
This story has been one of the better written stories on this board - it flows well. While I am impatient for the principle characters to engage other, I am enjoying the flashback scenes since it allows the reader to understand the chararter better.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm really glad you took time to reply! We will see a lot more Bella/Edward-action, I promise :-) It will probably be a few more chapters, then they will meet.