[Report This]Date: 10 May 2010 5:49 AM Title: Chapter 26
Wow, James is so sick but I do feel a itsy bitsy bit sorry for him. Nature vs nurture. James definitely had mental issues but his sicko stepfathers & his environment did not help. Glad there was no rape & Edward got there in time. Hope the leg is okay. Looking forward to more.
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Date: 10 May 2010 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 26
Yes they got to her in time. I'm so happy. :D that guy is a sick freak but I love the tattoo. lol I can't wait for more. thanks again bye
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Date: 10 May 2010 3:04 AM Title: Chapter 26
great chapter
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Date: 10 May 2010 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 26
well im glad they found her and killed him but is it really over?
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Are you sure he's dead????
Date: 09 May 2010 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 25
Lovely ending there, bella yelling NOOOOOO!!!. lol I can't wait for more. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Date: 09 May 2010 7:50 AM Title: Chapter 25
great chapter
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[Report This]Date: 09 May 2010 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 25
Charlie and Renee are so CLUELESS!! Cannot believe they "forgot" about the tunnel that just so happened to open up into Bella's room! Cannot believe Charlie didn't think it was important to tell everybody that James was his son; even after he told Bella that she's known him her entire life. Arghhh.....I want to take Charlie and Renee and crack their heads together!!! If anything happens to Bella, it IS their fault.
Bella and Edward falling in love so fast was fast but maybe in their line of work when they deal with the horrors of life, they have realized how short and fleeting life really is and once you know, you have to act on your feelings before they disappear. I think losing Lora was a wake up call to Edward so he knew saying ILY so early wasn't really too early at all.
Great chapter and I love how you update so quickly!!
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Thank you:) All of my stories except for Strange Awakings are complete:) And I have many more waiting to be put up ;)
Date: 09 May 2010 2:45 AM Title: Chapter 25
Can not even believe how incredibly stupid Charlie is. Renee's right there with him. I'd say dumber than rocks, however, rocks can be useful as paper weights.
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Date: 09 May 2010 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 25
oh shit!!!!
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Date: 08 May 2010 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 24
great chapter
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[Report This]Date: 08 May 2010 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 24
Never saw that comng! Half brother out for revenge with serious daddy issues!!
How did he breach the security? Oh my....so many twists & turns!!
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Date: 08 May 2010 8:48 AM Title: Chapter 24
oh shit!!! why did you stop it there!!!! that is going to drive me crazy!!!
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Date: 08 May 2010 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 24
Oh my gosh---sitting on PINS AND NEEDLES!! Great job, great twists.......keep up the good work!!!!!
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Date: 07 May 2010 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 24
How the hell did that happen they're in a house full of FBI agents.
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Date: 07 May 2010 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 24
oh shit you better update soooooonnnnnnn i need my fix
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Date: 07 May 2010 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 24
wow hot sex and they didn't even have time for after glow. lol I loved it. this is going great. I can't believe he got into the house and he probably watched them, that sicko. :) keep up the great work. thanks again bye
Date: 07 May 2010 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 24
OH HOLY SHIT!!!!!!!!!! Now that is one hell of a revelation. I think Charlie deserved to be punched. I can see why James is a bit "off". Now the really good stuff happens. I hope everyone lives through it. Keep up the great work and update soon.
Marguerite
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[Report This]Date: 07 May 2010 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 23
What the...??? Carlisle's father??? Carlisle witnessed his mother being gang raped when he was 10 and then she went home and killed herself, right? Did you write about his dad in a previous chapter that I forgot about? If so, can you tell me which one and I'll go reread.
I'm so glad you update frequently (like every other day if not more) so the story stays fresh! It's also nice to see canon couples as well as non canon couples along with similiar descriptions for some but not all (like a long haired Alice. Perfect!)
I love the twists and turns that you've woven. It's done in a very believable way and it's not always in every chapter which can get tedious. Good job and looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Right, I've mentioned his father once, when Bella was telling Charlie about what happened with Carlisle's mom. I explain more about Carlisle's father on the next chapter:)
Date: 07 May 2010 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 23
Oh well now this will be so very interesting to read. Somehow this story has me hooked. PLease update soon and keep up the great work.
Marguerite
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Date: 07 May 2010 2:52 PM Title: Chapter 23
damn the plot just gets thicker and thicker. I love it. keep up the amazing work. thanks again bye
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Date: 07 May 2010 10:55 AM Title: Chapter 23
Great idea - Tanya was Bella's partner in NYPD and called Em and J on their attitude.
Carlisle's father? What could his tie be to James? Totally didn't see that one coming. Hmmm...we still don't know who James' bio-father is....could James be a half-brother to Carlisle?
James never approached Bella after class at NYC, even though he knew her from childhood?
Timeline - something doesn't make sense: James was in the Marines from age 18 to 24. I thought he'd have to serve 4 years first before he could qualify for college benefits, but you have him attending graduate classes at age 23.
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Date: 07 May 2010 9:44 AM Title: Chapter 23
great chapter and the plot thickens
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[Report This]Date: 07 May 2010 6:35 AM Title: Chapter 23
wow didnt see that coming....as always cant wait for more
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Date: 07 May 2010 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 23
intresting cant wait till the next chapter !
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Date: 06 May 2010 1:59 PM Title: Chapter 22
About time those nasty assholes understand her. Now I want to know how Renee is connected to the Pentagon Chief. Keep up the great work and please update soon. Wonderful story.
Marguerite
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Thank you:)
[Report This]Date: 06 May 2010 6:39 AM Title: Chapter 22
Wow Another great chapter! I'm a bit confused on the Eleazar & Renee relationship. Renee & Charlie are married & still together, right? Bella calls him uncle so are Eleazar & Renee estranged siblings or do you have an upcoming twist & we will find out soon enough?
In any case, very suspenseful & can't wait for more! Ps. I'm amazed Bella & Carlisle aren't more messed up with everthing they've been through. Bella should cut Charlie some slack. Who in their right mind would even think that a 10 yo would have a lifelong obsession on a girl who was 6? Never would have crossed my mind. Good little twist to the story.
Author's Response:
Thank you:) Eleazar is Renee's brother. Yes, they are estranged. Yes, I have more twists coming;) Of course Charlie didn't think about telling Bella about James' obsession with her. It's only been twenty years.
Date: 06 May 2010 5:21 AM Title: Chapter 22
great chapter
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Date: 06 May 2010 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 22
well damn i would freak out if i found out someone had been obessed with me since i was six. especially a serial rapist that previously attacked me... gives me the chills just thinking about it.. i wish she didnt have to constantly explain and defend herself to the team..loved it cant wait for more
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Date: 06 May 2010 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 22
Yea they're all getting along or starting to at least. lol I love it. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Date: 05 May 2010 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 21
While the subject matter is not pleasing, your story is great. I honestly had a brain flutter when Bella talked about Charlie helping a friend and his mother get away from an abusive situation. Just not enough of a flutter.
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Thank you:)
Date: 05 May 2010 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 7
Angela sure must have changed a lot for Ben not to have recognized her in the photo. Some folks just have faces that undergo subtle changes as they age. As I am approaching my sixth decade I look just as good as I did in my second decade. Yeah, right! And I have this bridge for sale.
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lol:)
Date: 05 May 2010 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 2
I really do enjoy your writing. And am following a couple of your stories. Hope you don't mind--but instead of cloths it should be clothes. Please, take this in the spirit it is intended.
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Thank you:)
Date: 05 May 2010 1:57 PM Title: Chapter 21
I get it. I had to go combing back through all of the other chapters and make an age timeline for both Bella and James, but I see all of the hints you've been weaving through the story.
Bella was 6 and James was 10 when Charlie helped Victoria and James leave James' abusive father in Forks and move to Phoenix. Unfortunately, James lives through hell for the next 6 years with Laurent, his new step-dad, followed by 2 years in foster care (more hell?), then enlisting in the Marines at 18. Does James blame Charlie for everything that happened after they left Forks? Does James want to hurt Charlie through Bella?
When Bella was 19/20, she graduated from police academy, joined NYPD, and started *dating* Carlisle. James was probably newly released from the Marines at that time (after doing 4 years - but you haven't included his Marine records in the story, yet, which the FBI/Bella should have) and is 24 yrs old. For whatever reason (yet to be disclosed), he's obsessed with Bella and begins a raping spree of 10 NYU grad students - who are just like Bella. Was it because James was stalking Bella in NYC and hated that she was dating Carlisle, or dating anyone for that matter? Is it because Bella is a police officer? At 24 yrs old, James is arrested by Bella for the rapes, he does 5 years and gets out of jail at 29 on a technicallity. (What's the technicallity?) He then starts on a raping/murder spree on the west coast, starting in Seattle. James is now 30 and Bella is 26.
However, James has a lot of money - where did that come from? His biological father? Who is his biological father in Forks? Did James quietly kill his biological father and subsequently inherit his money?
I really look forward to your daily updates - thanks! So looking forward to tomorrow's chapter to see what Charlie has to share. Hopefully fill in what happened to James/Brandon when he lived in Forks until age 10, hopefully fill in about his bio-father, and fill in what ties James/Brandon still has in Forks.
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You have the timeline about right. Yes, James blames Charlie for somethings BUT(yes, it's a big but) there is more to this story than that. As far as his military record, they don't have it yet because right now, there isn't a lot of evidense against James but they will get it. I promise the twists are just now coming:)
Date: 05 May 2010 7:43 AM Title: Chapter 21
great chapter now i am curious to who he is to her
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[Report This]Date: 05 May 2010 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 21
Oh my! Dum Dee dum dum!! Love the cliffie but hope you update soon!
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Date: 05 May 2010 3:28 AM Title: Chapter 21
what? should that mean something to us? ooh now I'm on suspense. I can't wait to find out how she knows him. I'm so excited. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Go back to chapter 19. Brandon Philips was the boy that Bella helped Charlie save from an abusive father ;)
[Report This]Date: 04 May 2010 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 20
Absolutely hearing about what Carlisle went through as a child helps. Events in people's lives usually shape their outlook and path...sometimes positively and sometimes negatively. It's up to individual to chose what path to take.
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I agree 100%!! Thank you:)
Date: 04 May 2010 2:43 PM Title: Chapter 20
Oh my lord poor Carlisle. I would be a basket case if that happened to me. Strong man. Knowing more background on him helps a lot. One of my favorite stories. PLease update soon and keep up the great work.
Marguerite
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Thank you:)
Date: 04 May 2010 11:57 AM Title: Chapter 20
Poor Carlisle. :( I wonder how Edward feels about him and Bella being so close though? I mean there has to be SOME jealousy there. :) keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Date: 04 May 2010 6:38 AM Title: Chapter 20
great chapter
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Date: 04 May 2010 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 20
wow i knew carlisle's story had to be bad but that just blew me away i cant even imagine...so terrible ...cant wait for another update
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Date: 03 May 2010 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
i hope you didnt take offense to that i think its cute... i do really enjoy the story
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No, I didn't. It's something that I've been working on with my newwe stuff that hopefully will make its way over here. I appreciate you being honest with me.
Date: 03 May 2010 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 19
god James is a monster! I hope those guys get fired. I can't wait for more. keep up the greatness and bring on more edward/bella lemonness. :D thanks again bye
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Date: 03 May 2010 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 19
great chapter
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Date: 03 May 2010 7:37 AM Title: Chapter 16
i really like this...its a great story.. i've noticed they tend to whisper and chuckle alot..
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I know, something I am working on ;) thanks
[Report This]Date: 03 May 2010 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 19
You've got a way with words. Dumdedumdum dum!! Good writing!
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Date: 02 May 2010 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 18
great last couple of chapters
Date: 02 May 2010 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 18
so i have a confession I read ahead over at ff.net :) LOVED IT! :)
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*gasp* thanks:)
Date: 02 May 2010 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 18
I can't wait for next chapter
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Date: 02 May 2010 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 18
wow okay interesting. lol I love that they are now in hiding in the little town of Forks Washington. LOVE IT! lol keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Thank you:)
Date: 01 May 2010 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 17
I love this story.
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Date: 01 May 2010 3:38 AM Title: Chapter 17
uh oh the ex boyfriend! I love it and then the creepy pictures all over someone else's apartment? what a freaking weirdo. I love this story. Its like a fictional tale of Criminal Minds mixed with Law and Order: SVU. love it. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Date: 01 May 2010 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 17
oh crap!!! cant wait to see more
oh and i LOVE that you update so fast!! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you:0) I have all of these stories except for Strange Awakings completed over on Fan Fiction. I have many more to move:)
Date: 01 May 2010 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 16
ha yeah that warning came a bit too late LOL :)
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a little :)
Date: 30 Apr 2010 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 16
God I love how EVERYONE is concerning themselves with Bella and Edward's lives. How the heck is it any of their business? lol I love where this is going and the shower scene was very hot. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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I know, right?
Date: 30 Apr 2010 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 16
great chapter
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Date: 29 Apr 2010 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 15
awww Bella is tooo adorable! I love that whole relationship even if they did both have problems. I can't wait for more. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Thank you:)
Date: 29 Apr 2010 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 15
great chapter
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Date: 29 Apr 2010 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 15
yay! really good chapter! :)
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Date: 28 Apr 2010 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 14
YES YES YES!!! hot hot hot sex. I love it. I can't wait for more. The morning after? Please please PLEASE don't have it be awkward and her be a bitch. :) keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Thank you:) I promise no bitchyBella:)
Date: 28 Apr 2010 7:23 AM Title: Chapter 14
greatchapter
Date: 28 Apr 2010 7:05 AM Title: Chapter 14
greatchapter
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Date: 28 Apr 2010 3:53 AM Title: Chapter 14
wow! HOT! :)
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Date: 27 Apr 2010 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 13
really good chapter! Loved the little lunch break :) Cant wait to see what the heck em and jas are talking about
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Date: 27 Apr 2010 12:10 PM Title: Chapter 13
wow bella really put them in their place didn't she? lol but they are right, she is wrong. I hope she starts opening up to Edward as much as she opened up to Jasper and Emmett. :D keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Date: 27 Apr 2010 7:16 AM Title: Chapter 13
great last couple of chapters
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Date: 27 Apr 2010 4:15 AM Title: Chapter 13
that makes me tear up ! i would have kicked their asses !
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Thanks:) I would have too:)
Date: 26 Apr 2010 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 12
great chapter cant wait to see what happens next
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Thank you:)
Date: 26 Apr 2010 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 12
good chapter... can't wait to learn more :)
Date: 26 Apr 2010 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 12
good chapter... can't wait to learn more :)
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Thank you:)
Date: 26 Apr 2010 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 12
I was going to say because that part about him being an alcholic from the James's case was confusing as hell. lol keep up the great work. I love it. thanks again bye
Author's Response:
lol, I am all about the surprises with this story!
Date: 25 Apr 2010 10:48 AM Title: Chapter 11
great chapter
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Thank you!
Date: 25 Apr 2010 8:29 AM Title: Chapter 11
To fast to fell in love, I'm not buying the end of this chapter, sorry.
Author's Response:
No problem. The end was a dream so they havne't acted on their feelings yet:)
Date: 25 Apr 2010 6:33 AM Title: Chapter 11
so awesome! Keep writing..can't wait to see more :)
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Date: 25 Apr 2010 5:06 AM Title: Chapter 11
WOW!!! I was not expecting them to fall in love but the lemon was hotter than hell. :D keep up the great work. i can't wait till THAT'S real. lol thanks again bye
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Thanks:0) I think Bella was shocked by her feeling for Edward. The question is will she tell him??
Date: 25 Apr 2010 5:04 AM Title: Chapter 11
oh shit!! thats funny!!
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thanks:)
Date: 24 Apr 2010 2:50 PM Title: Chapter 10
awww that is good!! i have 5 sisters and no brothers....i am ther three oldest...we were close but im more closer to my cuz because we are the same age...
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ThankS:)
Date: 24 Apr 2010 1:43 PM Title: Chapter 10
Edward is definately right though, the boys have no say in what happens between Bella and her sisters and its so sad that they hated Bella for being smart. poor thing. keep up the great work. I can't wait for more. thanks again bye
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Thank you!
Date: 24 Apr 2010 1:36 PM Title: Chapter 10
great chapter
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Thank you
Date: 24 Apr 2010 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 9
i would hate if there was someone out there really to kill me....even worse if i know who it was....
Author's Response:
And knowing what he is really capable of:(
Date: 23 Apr 2010 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 9
ooh a little bit more "romance" between the two of them but more space between the girls. :( oh well keep up the awesome work. thanks again bye
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Date: 23 Apr 2010 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 8
God Bella is a whiny bitch and she really doesn't know what she wants. She told Edward he has to prove he doesn't mind working with her so he did what he thought best and instead of telling him that what he did was wrong in her eyes she snaps. God I hope she gets over herself soon. I love where this is going though. i can't wait till the real relationship between the two of them starts getting better. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
Author's Response:
Perhaps, but what she was really wanting was just for him to treat her like an equal not to make a fool of himself in front of the rest of the team. But I agree that she may have gone a little ape shit on him. Thanks for reading and leaving me a review:)
Date: 23 Apr 2010 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 9
really good chapter! I loved Edward and Bella's time together :)
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Thank you:)
Date: 22 Apr 2010 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 8
omg!!! i love this story!!!
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Thanks :)
Date: 22 Apr 2010 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 8
good chapter! I love Esme! LOL that was awesome! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you!! I love Esme so much here!
Date: 21 Apr 2010 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 7
So I am a little peeved at Rosalie and Alice. They need to keep their mouths shut to Bella's coworkers about her, whether they like Carlisle or not. And go Bella for standing up for herself to Edward. I like strong Bella who isn't just gonna go all "lala" over Edward pulling the sweet card out!! Can't wait for the next one!
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Me too!! Thanks:)
Date: 21 Apr 2010 12:05 PM Title: Chapter 7
aww that poor girl. :( I can't believe this, they all suck. :D I can't wait for more. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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thanks:)
Date: 21 Apr 2010 5:45 AM Title: Chapter 7
that was deep! cant wait till the next chapter !
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Thank you:)
Date: 21 Apr 2010 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 7
hmm i think .....i think that ......i think that i love it and that i NEEED MORE FAST :)
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Thank you!!
Date: 21 Apr 2010 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 7
really good chapter poor bella :(
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Thank you!
Date: 21 Apr 2010 12:22 AM Title: Chapter 5
really awesome story so far! Keep writing..can't wait to see more :)
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Date: 20 Apr 2010 12:01 PM Title: Chapter 6
YES punch Mike! lol I love it. I can't wait to see what happens next. I ABSOLUTELY LOVE the chemistry you have between Edward and Bella. He's so jealous its cute. and the eyes comment was too sweet. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Thanks:)
Date: 19 Apr 2010 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 5
I like where this is at. its nice having Esme and Bella tease Carlisle. lol I wish we could have some more tension between Edward and Bella particulary of the sexual kind but any sort of interest would be nice. :) I can't wait for more. thanks again bye
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There will be more E and B soon:)
Date: 19 Apr 2010 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 5
wow i wouldnt have figured they use to hump !!! great twist!
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Thank you:)
Date: 18 Apr 2010 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 4
well that story was both fact fullfilling and dissappointing. :( I liked it though, just more Carlisle/Bella than Bella/Edward is is kinda :p you know? lol thanks for the great work. keep it up thanks again bye
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Date: 18 Apr 2010 7:09 AM Title: Chapter 4
great chapter. i love this story
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Date: 17 Apr 2010 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 3
God Edward is a real dick right now. :( hopefully he gets better. Are we going to be getting any EPOV's anytime? :D because that would be great. I'd really like to know why he keeps looking at Bella with want but yet being rude to her as well? keep up the great work. I like it. thanks again bye
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EPOV will come later:)
Date: 17 Apr 2010 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 2
Wow bella kicked Emmett's ass and turned Edward on in the process. lol I love it. keep up the great work. thanks again bye
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Thanks:)
[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2010 11:49 AM Title: Chapter 3
wow i really like your story please update soon
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[Report This]Date: 17 Apr 2010 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 3
ok i love this story so far and i cant believe that you have edward and lauren together but hopfully that wont last long because you can already see that edward is intrested in bella this is going to get intresting fast so please update soon
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thanks:)