Date: 22 Jun 2010 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow - lots of surprises! Great chapter!
Date: 22 Jun 2010 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 8
That's just awesome! :)
Date: 22 Jun 2010 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 8
This story is awesome but it wasn't clear if this ghost in this chapter was the same one that was at the school that died long ago. Or was this something else all together? I would like to put my vote in now for longer chapters
Date: 21 Jun 2010 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 5
I am really enjoying your story. Kat
Date: 21 Jun 2010 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
Interesting start. Lots of potential with this storyline. I can't wait to see where you are going to take things.
Just a suggestion - but you could probably use a beta to help you polish the story.
Kat
Date: 19 Jun 2010 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 7
Brilliant update for a great story! :)
Date: 17 Jun 2010 5:50 AM Title: Chapter 5
Alright so she can see dead people but that still doesn't explain how she knows things. Like Angela said you can ask her anything personal and she'll know the right answer. So do dead people tell her the answer or does she just know by touching that specific person? The story is amazing so far, I can't wait to see where you go with it
Date: 16 Jun 2010 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 5
This story has the best plot
bunny ever! It is Brilliant! :)
Date: 16 Jun 2010 11:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
That is perfect! :)
Date: 14 Jun 2010 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 1
iappoligise for being a critick but i am a stickler for corect grammer, one of my pet peaves is when people type or say me and ( insert charicter name hear) ( insert what they they think or do hear),l just as you did in the last paragraph, line, or what ever you want to call it. Enstead it should be "Alice and I"
Sorry if i sound crule or mispelled any thing, i realy like your story.
Date: 14 Jun 2010 12:00 AM Title: Chapter 3
wow thats scary shit. Well I am anxious to see where this story goes.
Date: 13 Jun 2010 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 2
Wow that is scary shit. She is freaky. lol. But I like it.
Date: 13 Jun 2010 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
I think this story has potential. BUt I think you need a Beta, there were a lot of mistakes. I didn't realize that Bella was blind in this story but I am interested to find out what you do with it.
Date: 12 Jun 2010 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 3
this is so weird!!! how does she know all that?? but its still good!!
Date: 12 Jun 2010 4:24 AM Title: Chapter 2
WHAT THE HELL!!!! THIS IS REALLY GOOD!!! BUT WHAT IS GOING ON???
[Report This]Date: 11 Jun 2010 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 2
Hmm... so is she a medium. I look forward to the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: 10 Jun 2010 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 2
i like how its going longer chap will be nice thow keep up the good work ,,^.^,,
Date: 10 Jun 2010 5:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
okey maby stupid to say but she can put one make-up like a pri with out seeing thats great..and sounds good so far ^.^
Date: 10 Jun 2010 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a good start. I like your ideas. There were a couple of rough spots where I wasn't sure who was speaking. Also, a couple of times the characters start speaking with, "Em, . . ." like they're clearing their throat or slightly stammering. However, since sometimes Emmett is referred to as "Em" I found it momentarily confusing and thought they were addressing Emmett. Perhaps something like "Uh, . . ." or the like.
Again, it's an inventive story and I look forward to seeing how you develop it.
[Report This]Date: 10 Jun 2010 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
oh this is going to get good bella is going to wind up with two very protective brothers and two sisters that would do anything for her why do i see rose becoming the most protective of bella other then edward i cant wait to see what happens next so pleas update soon