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Reviewer: KaiaRose Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jun 2010 4:19 PM Title: Chapter 21 - A Day at the Cullen's

I am really enjoying this story.  It is so touching and I love how both Bella and Edward are so tentative about their relationship.  It is fun to watch them slowly grow together.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you are liking it!   They are tentative but I promise They'll get it going eventually!

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Jun 2010 2:46 AM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

Wonderful chapter and so touching!  I think it would be more than interesting to "be there" for Jasper and Bella's sessions.  Not only would it add light to Bella's situation and inner workings, but it would show us that inner and more cerebral Jasper that Alice knows so well.  She didn't fall for a warrior.  He's so much more, and exploring that via Bella would be fascinating! 



Author's Response:

This si the one area where EPOV falls HUGELY short.  Having a story from only one POV always leaves holes, as we don't know exactly what is going on or what others are thinking.  Since Edward stalks Bella we do get to see a lot of what she does when not with Edward but we don't know her thoughts.

BUT her therapy will be difficult.  i can't show it all, I can't even show most of it.  But will see progress and I will make a point of having her talk to Edward about things.   many people have expressed interest in seeing her therapy so I will try to show as much as I can!

Reviewer: carrangi Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jun 2010 3:07 AM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

Great chapter! I am glad they were able to just talk to eachother without extra drama or anything and I can't wait to read about the therapy sessions!



Author's Response:

after the last few chapters we needed some non-drama.  LOL  glad you liked it!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jun 2010 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

sweet chapter



Author's Response:

thank you!

Reviewer: missielynn Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

so is she going to moving in with the cullens or is edward going to be moving in with bella for "mate bonding"



Author's Response:

lol, you are a chapter ahead, that dicusssion will be next chapter.  Have no fear, though it may make you mad, I hav e aplan, I promise!

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 8:45 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

oh thank you a much lighter chapter, still  lots of important discussion going on but the whole atmosphere within the house has lightened considerably and that has to be good for everybody involved, i loved the conversation in the conservatory i thought edward was very eloquent the way he presented the whole we are mated discussion which bella accepted so readily,  her already feeling the conection had a lot to do with that i suspose, and then we get declarations of love from both edward and bella which were really sweet andso innocently honest, glad bella is giving therapy a try she deserves to put some demons well all her demons to rest and find some enjoyment in her life, i'm sorry you did noy get many bella questions i thought it would make a great outake in helping to understand some of bellas thought processes and why she does certain things, so i thank you for answering my questions even though you did not write the chapter, it's much appriciated thanks tracy    also doing my prayers



Author's Response:

LOL everyone was ready and neededa  light chapter.  Seriously, enough angst already!  The coming chapters should be pretty angst free.  I mean there is slight tension but really not much. Bella's healing now, well trying to. Glad you liked the convo.  Edward didn't pull any punches and got out what he needed to.  Hiding or tip toeing won't help Bella, she needs straightforward and open.

Declarations of love.  LMAO it only took 33 chapters huh?  I said it would come, I just never said when!  I could have dragged it out longer if you had wanted. 

Bella does need the therapy and it will be good for her.  I'm not saying there won't be huge bumps int he road or that it will all be sunshine and smiles, she's repressed and avoided to much for that to happen, but in the end it will be good.!

 

I'm glad you like the answers (HUGS) I, of course, will chat with one of my fav reviewers!!!

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

Awesome chapter!!



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:)

Reviewer: cecelouis Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

I like this chapter.  And I will pray for your beta father.  Are you going to update next Tuesday.

CeCe



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the chapter.  I am not updating weekly right now.  I will be updating everyother week.  i know i'm mean!  sorry!

Reviewer: Nette91 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

Nice chap



Author's Response:

thank you  :)

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

Such a great story.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're liking it.

Reviewer: TopazRuby Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2010 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 33 - Important Conversations

great chapter!



Author's Response:

thank you my dear

Reviewer: Coleen561 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jun 2010 3:23 AM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

You have done such an impressive job with this story.  It's so compelling and powerfully written.  You are clearly a very talented writer.  I just read through all the available chapters, so this review is not strictly for this chapter. 

I'd like to point out just a couple of things I noticed.  I'm only mentioning them because I saw multiple examples as I read through the story.  Sometimes you change verb tense in a paragraph.  Shifting the verb tense in a paragraph can be confusing to your readers.  For verb phrases, remember that the the helping verb determines the tense.

Also, there were a number of instances where you use the word "use" and you mean "used"  For example, " . . . her scent to maybe see if you could get use to it." The secondary meaning of the word "used" is "accustomed" or "habituated."  In this sentence and many others, you need "used" and not "use."  There were also examples where you needed "supposed" instead of "suppose."

I hope this is helpful.  I just hate to see things like this interfere with your readers' enjoyment of your incredible story.  Of course, grammar etc. is a skill anyone can learn.  Creating truly engaging stories is a talent that only a few (like you) have!



Author's Response:

thank you soooooo much that you care enough to tell me.  I am sooooo bad with grammar.  I actually have a new beta that is going though chapter by chapter doing a HUGE grammar overhall for me.  I just have been bad and havent' updated the proper updated chapters here or on FF.  I SUCK at tense I've learned and I am working on it.  Now the Use and Used I will make a conserted effort to look at.  Thank you!

Seriously thank you!

Reviewer: Dearlybeloved Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2010 8:50 AM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

i think bree would get more time, or at least more than what she got here. couldn't she be charged with "facilitating a rape"? idk, not a law student, but it does sound like something , right?



Author's Response:

shhh I'm not a law student either.  LOL

She would be charged with facilitating rape, kidnapping and drugging Bella.

the boys would get charged with rape and kidnapping,  I dont' know.  I think that rape would get more than accesory to rape, but I could be soooooo wrong.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 May 2010 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

i really enjoyed how you had bella's story come out it is so the way she would have done it. skim over what happened and then have the others find the actual facts of the case. i think jasper is really spot on in his thinking towards bella. he has her so pegged you'd think he could read minds! edward is learning that his up hill battle is on a much steeper slope, and he is really gonna need everything in him to make the climb. but he knows it is all gonna be worth it.

sucks you are gonna change to updating every 2 weeks but that is the junkie reader in me talking. as a person with a real life too i totally get it. thanks for the heads up. happy writting! :)



Author's Response:

your review made me smile and I did a real fist pump!!  I love it when my readers get where I am going and are soooo in touch with the characters, which you obviously are.  Thank you!!!!  I'm fan girl gush right now!

thank you!

Reviewer: cjngrls Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2010 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

I loved this chapter.. yay!!!!  I'm sure it was tough to write..to think that someone could ever go through that... great story.. I wish that Bella would let the family "have some fun" with the jerks that hurt Bella... I hope that Bella and Edward can work through everything and find true happiness..



Author's Response:

hhhmmmmm should I be scaredt hat you loved Bella's story that much.  LOL  Most people weren't that enthusiastis!!!  LOL I love it!!!!  

 

I promised a fully healed Bella and Edward and a fully healed Bella and Edward I will deliver!

Reviewer: carrangi Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

Please let the cullens kill them! I would really like to see that lol..also I love Jasper in this story (and everywhere else) I think its a good idea he does therapy with her.



Author's Response:

LMAO!  yeah most people are wanting a Vullen kiling spree!  Honestly I would LOVE to lay on a couch adn tell Jasper my darkest secrest!1  *SIGH*

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

jepers,  what a harsh chapter,  i read it a while ago but really did not know what to write in a review right away,  i'm really not sure how bella survived all that no wonder she wanted to die, the list of injuries was horrendous from the rape it self and then all that riley did on top making the first injuries worse as well,  nice to know he will never be released but prison is an easy option,   so paul's trial is the last one and as for his girlfriend i canno't begin to fathom what the hell she was thinking,   no bloke is worth what she did,  i'm sure after the night is done edward will have lots of reassuring things to say to bella after rose gave him lots to think about, and after listening to everything his family found out he will find it easier to ignore the lust knowing the horrors bella has faced and give her the space to heal in her time  , i'm sure edward can give bella a sense of life and give her things to want and hope for, he'll work tirelessly at this i'm sure, and  edwards other  job is now to convince bella therapy is a good idea with jasper i hope he suceeds!

questions for bella oh i need to have a think

now you have let edward into your life and told your personal story how do you think the dynamic will change?

do you believe that god has plans for the ones who wronged you and has you personal experiences changed your view of god?

you are very brave allowing your self to be with edward how does it affect you when you are apart?

if i think of any more i'll review again but wanted to get this sent tonight  ands no worries about your posting schedule i'm happy  to read as you post we all have lives,  we know that

best wishes thanks tracy



Author's Response:

lol, I will tell you, you aren't the only one that has seemed to have a hard time reviewing the last two chapters.  It's not like you can review and say, Great chapter I loved it.  LOL cause, yeah that just doesn't fit or work!  So thank you extra for reviewing at all!! (HUGS)

 

I got very few questions for Bella so I didn't do the intervieew, but I will answer your questions for you.

Bella, at this point isn't sure how the dynamic will change.  At this specific point she doesnt' know what Edward's thinking or feeling and is scared he'll reject her.  Once she learnst hat isnt' the case she will be much closer to him.

Yes, Bella does believe that god has plans for those that wronged her.  That's who she is.  she has incredible faith and belief in God. She actually hopes that they all become believers that may sound far fetched but it's who she is.

How did it affect Bella when they were apart.  Honestly that's difficult for her to answer.  The trial for Riley was understanably a VERY difficult one that even without being parted from Edward would have been horrible for her to deal with.  So it isn't easy for her to piece together what pain was from being parted from Edward adn what pain was the trial itself. going forward, it will be difficult to be parted, even for a little while. 

I hope that answered your questions!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Returning Home

LOL  Not a guard.   A fellow inmate and a plunger sounds good though.



Author's Response:

LMFAO!!!!!   I will pass teh suggestion on the Emmett and Rose!! I'll see what they can do!

Reviewer: vvply Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

This chapter was certainly more revealing than the last, I think it was harder to read because of the details I had to step away a couple of times.

I know that Bella doesn't want the rapist murdered by the Cullens, but would she mind terribly if they torchured them for extended period of time?

Anyways all in all I loved this chapter, I'm glad that the next chapter won't be so heavy. Edward and Bella need a break.

thanks for the update!!



Author's Response:

LMAO!!!!    Can they torturing them for an extended period of time!!!!  I'll ask her in the interview, how does that sound, let's see what she has to say herself???

 

Edward and Bella do need a break, that's very true.  I hope next chapter is a bit lighter than the last two!  Sorry you struggled so much (HUGS)

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

bree should have gotten more since she drugged her and led her there knowing what wass going 2 happen.ya know they could hqve an accident in jaqil



Author's Response:

true, she did ddrug ehr, but didnt' physically bind her or rape her.  lol I could be wrong as honeslty I haven't studied law. 

Most readers would like ot hear that Bree died from to much butt sex with a guard.  I might find a way to put that in!  We'll see!

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

Best story out there!!!!!



Author's Response:

ow, thanks!

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25 May 2010 1:02 PM Title: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

aw such a sad chapter, hope Bellas character gets the help she needs. love this story and looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

I promise, she will get the help she needs, I promised a fully healed Bella, and I will deliver!!!  Edward would kill me if I didn't!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2010 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

well shit! here i was thinking i still had another chapter to go before i was caught up! this sucks now i have to wait, i hate waiting! i am an instant gratification kind of girl.

just kidding, sorta. hope all is well and you creative juices are flowing, can't wait for you update!



Author's Response:

lol, uuummmmm sorry you got caught up???  lol.  I'm editing chapter 32 in a few minutes so it will be up tomorrow!!!  Does that help??  I don't know if tha't enough instant gratification.  lol

 

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2010 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

well you were right i was kinda on the right track. bella's mom and dad dieing durring part of the abuse and having her feel it was her fault. and having someone use the religion as an excuse to harm her. the motivation was just off. and the frat house gang rape well i just didn't even think that she had to go through 2 separate horrors. can't wait to read the next chapter and maybe answer a few questions like how did she end up in the hospital? what happened to riley?



Author's Response:

:)  dont' feel to badly, I purposly didn't leave enough clues for people to piece the story together.  There was enough to make guesses but not really enough to figure much out.

I have both of your questions answered and will post tomorrow!  Thanks1

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2010 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

poor bella! poor edward! she can't deal with everything and he can't do anything to help. once her story is out maybe there will be more chance to heal and help.



Author's Response:

Telling her story is the biggest step in her healing going forward.  I'm glad I wasn't Edward seeing and dealing with poor Bella coming back from that trial.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2010 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

wow i can not believe how well edward is dealing with everything. he has his moments but he is doing his best to make it easier on bella. glad to see that he was able to connect with bella's friends so they could all work together to help her. can't wait for the reunion!



Author's Response:

Honestly he is falling apart but is soooo focused on helping Bella that's what's keeping him going and sane. I sooo wish i had an Edward!  then again maybe I shouldn't wish for a blood drinking stalker . . . I need to think about this.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 May 2010 4:39 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

well it is about time! eddie handled the news a lot better than i thought he would. there was no major break down, no big temper tantrum. but him wanting to run to bella was a given, also very happy to see even he thought it was dumb that he didn't see the signs.

Reviewer: Dearlybeloved Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 May 2010 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

good lord, that was intense. you are the angst master:p

 



Author's Response:

Angst master???  Dang that's a pretty cool title!!!

 

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: DestanyRose Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2010 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

It is what or close to what I have been thinking she had been through.  She was truly showing all signs of rape and I figured someone close to her died and was lead to believe it was all her fault with all the quilt she was carring around all the time.  I can understand Bella on her not wanting to kill them as long as you believe they will not be able to harm another.  I have a feeling things might be a little different if they were still free to cause harm to others.  I know Bella still has more to tell since she didnt go into to great detail about all she has been through.  I know Edward will need to know to help her heal.  I am glad to see the bond they share is getting stronger they will both need it to get through all of these hard times and their future together.  Great job and looking forward to reading the next chapter soon.

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Author's Response:

(HUGS). Glad you pieced a lot of it together.  There were definent hints about the rape but the Rliey thing managed to blindside more than one person.   Bella is done telling her story for now. Next chapter will pick up with the Cullens learing more by going through records, that's how we will learn everything Bella wasn't able to talk about.

Glad you liked the chapter

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: carrangi Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2010 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

You wrote that really well. It was very sad, espiecally how her parents died in a way that is obvious why she blames herself (even though I don't agree I would blame myself too). I REALLY want the Cullens to kill them! Can't wait for the next update!



Author's Response:

thanks.  You're sooooo right that Bella is not to blame but how can she not at the same time.

LOL there is a LONG line forming right now of people wanting to kill!!!!   I'll be sure to give your name to Emmett!!!

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: Ezzy Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2010 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

wow poor bella, i know and understand her pain! I can't wait to read the next chapter.



Author's Response:

(HUGS)

 


Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2010 4:35 AM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

Wow!!! I am speechless.  How could one person suffer such emotional, mental and physical pain?

I'm proud of Edward to remain calm, even though this is killing him in the inside.



Author's Response:

how do people make it through something like that?  I have no clue but they do.  Bella is incredibly strong

 


Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: lovingit3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 19 May 2010 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

Very sad! Great chapter!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2010 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

hey there, i wont say great chapter it's well written and heartbreaking but not great if that makes sense, and  i understand bella point of view not to go for revenge she thinks it will bring her and the cullens down to their level and to be anything like those horrendous people would just taint the life they are building, bella would never be able to live with the fact that she had driven her new family to murder she dosent want any part of that time encroaching on her life now she dosent want edward being a murderer for her on her conscience, bellas story, so shocking,  as if the stuff at the frat party was not enough of a nightmare (did you make that up or is that been known in some collages) she then has a nutter torturing her and murdering her parents but honestly very, very few ppeople could stay silent through a whipping regardless of what was threatened, it was an impossible ask and the mad man knew that he just wanted an excuse to murder and to lay the blame elsewhere but i understand bellas guilt and i hope in time she will see that reasoning and believe she is not to blame, her parents woulden't blame her, thanks tracy

 

and yeah i suspose thinking about it i do like this type of story  but not for the harsh bits more for getting that feeling of triumph over adversity, the feeling that the human spirit can in the right circumstances can be healed from any trauma. That the soul/mind  can be repaired, the feeling that people should never be written off,  they might be real difficult to befriend  but once you do break down the defences the friendship can be a real good one. I like the idea that we dont let evil things keep us down for ever it might slow us up and pause us for a while but we get back to our lives and live them again.



Author's Response:

Shockingly no one has said to me, good chapter loved it.  LOL Not expecting warm fuzzies next week either, though I am hopefully for chapter 33 to get them back.

Do rooms like that exist?  Yeah they do.  They are rare, they are not the norm but they do exist. 

You are right on many levels with why Bella doessn't want them dead.  It really would be too much for her, she is a gentle soul, always has been, always will be, killing in her name would break her more than she is, and right now she is slowly on the road to healing.

T

hanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2010 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

Oh crap, that just makes me want to use stronger language and throw up. Storyis still great, looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

trust me I TOTALLY understand and from the reviews I've seen most readers understand as well!

 

hanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: mousekemom Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2010 3:39 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

Oh my lord!  I totally didn't see that coming....I mean, I figured there was some kind of rape story involved, but the religious zelot Riley...wow!  Can't wait until my hubby reads this tonight.  Okay, so what more can the family do by looking up the records?  Why is that so important to them, when she has asked that they not punish them?  I can see where she is coming from...she wants to let the courts and God deal with them, otherwise she will live with their blood on her hands, so to speak, and she just wants to move on.  How will she move on when she doesn't care to live anymore?  Has Edward finally changed her will to go on?  Looking forward to more.  Thanks for sharing your talent with us!!!



Author's Response:

the Cullens know that Bella shared what she could but that there were pieces left out.  They have questions, in many cases questions Bella can't answer.  their looking let's them get answers and help her. Especailly Jasper who will be acting as a psychologist for her.  He needs to know what happened, He of course would share with the others.

 

Bella has not been on the suicide mission for a while.  Edward doesn't know that because they haven't taked about it and Alice isn't looking in her future. She hasn't thought about it or made a specific decision but she no longer has that need.  Edward already has given her enough to want to keep living.

 

hanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: Nette91 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2010 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

Very nicely written.  You told her story with out it being overly dark!!



Author's Response:

thank you!!  That was what I was hoping to do!

 

hanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: missielynn Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2010 2:50 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

that was horrific. please don't let them betray her trust



Author's Response:

betray her how?  I don't plan on anyone betraying her. If you're talking about Emmett, Rose or Edward killing without her knowing?  no they won't.

 

hanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: lisamaree01 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2010 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

Wow, what a chapter. It must have been very hard to write.

Well written, another great chaper. I am really enjoying this story

:)

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 May 2010 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 31 - Bella's Story

ummmm yeah..... b needs a lot of therapy



Author's Response:

lol, just a little therapy! 

 

Thanks for reading, I know it was difficult.

Rose kissed Emmett and told him she would be right back. As she came up to my room she was already thinking to me. "I know that had to be hard for you to hear Edward, but you really blew it!"

Huh? What was she talking about?  I didn’t do anything?
Rose came in and saw the confusion on my face. "Don’t look confused. You did nothing for Bella. You gave her no comfort!"

“What do you mean?” I asked. “I was holding her the whole time! Giving her every comfort I could!” I was livid at the accusation that I hadn’t been there for Bella. Of course I had.
Don’t get pissed at me. Tell me oh supportive one.  In all the rounds of hugs and comforting what did you say to Bella?

I searched through my memory trying to figure out what I’d said that had Rose so mad. As I searched the reason for Rose’s anger became apparent. I hadn’t said anything to Bella the entire time. I was so focused on not blowing up I didn’t speak to her. I wasn’t a total failure, I had given her strength through my touch, but I couldn’t believe I hadn’t spoken one word to her. I cursed myself for the idiot I was.

"I see you got it.  Listen it isn’t the end of the world but tomorrow when she wakes up you had better start sucking up! Seriously, she needs to know you don’t hate her, blame her, or think less of her."

Reviewer: darkest-terror Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 May 2010 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

Could you recommend any more Jasper/Bella stories? That's my favorite pairing and I'm always on the look-out for a good one. And I've checked out a couple that you've recommended before and they were pretty good, so I thought I'd ask your opinion on others as well.



Author's Response:

hhhmmmmm,  Right now I have one I havent' started but I really want to over on FFN, it's called Bourbon and Tea by Zigster.

If I find others I will try to remember to pass them on to you!

Reviewer: darkest-terror Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 May 2010 6:07 AM Title: Chapter 20 - Abiding Friend or Soulless Monster

That's something I've wondered about. If their skin is already so hard, how does a hard-on not tear their undies or jeans?



Author's Response:

lol, well I admit, that is a good question,  I think it's rock like but still smooth so it wouldn't bust fabric I guess

Reviewer: Ezzy Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 May 2010 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Returning Home

Don't worry about me, I have to deal with what happened to me everyday i get out of bed, so i what is written in a story cant effect me too much.

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

Love it, looking forward to find out what happened to Bella's charactor and how the Cullens react and try to help her heal.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  i can't wait for the Cullens to help heal her!  I love them all soooo much!!!!

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

another superb chapter, i mean it's content is sad but as always so very well written, bella was feeling the seperation as much as edward i think her enthuastic greeting shows how much she was missing him,  edward might be struggling but his over riding concern and love for her will always battle out his inner demons,   bloody hell bella must have looked bad if edward who can only see how beautiful she is thought she looked horiffic, i mean she slept for nearly two days!    the cullens were so conscientious with bellas care removing anything that would scare her before she woke, i hate how much she has regressed initally scared of emmett but taking a deep breath and showing her inner courage walks forward to hug him and i love emmett sentiments who ever hurt bells had beter watch out but bells regressed due to the cullens knowing her secrets that she wasn't ready to share but as a guilty verdict is recorded it seems to bring her round,  i was  on board with jasper doing something your not happy with morally but knowing it's the only way to help someone you love is sometimes the only way you have to do what will help them the most, i know bella story will be horrific but i want to read the story how you planned it, that way the story will all fit together and make sense   and i trust you as an author to write a serious, graphic because of its nature but sensitive chapter, that way the story completes itself, any way this is getting long so ill go thanks tracy ps reading your friend story on ff newmoonaholic and it's going great



Author's Response:

Oh yeah, Bella was feeling the seperation worse in some ways than Edward.  hhmmmm I wonder, if you asked her what she would do when she finally saw Edward throwing herself at him would nto have been the answer, but she couldn't help herself, and aren't we all glad she couldn't!!!  I know I am!

Poor Edward, so many struggles.  Now he not only has blood but regualr lust, *sigh* what will we do with said vampire?

You're right, she had to look bad if Edward said she looked horrific, and for Carlisle to give her a feeding tube, yeah that isn't normal "I'm run down" that's something way more.  But how awesome that it could happen at the Cullen's house and they didn't have to send her to the hospital where I promsie when she woke she would ahve freaked out majorly.  But the wounds went deeper than just not eating and sleeping, hence the issue with Emmett whom she had been ok with.  Poor Emmett his heart broke to pieces when Bella flinched from him, but he was soooo proud when she sucked it up and hugged him.  I swear that was int he top 5 best things of his life!  He loves his sister so much.

Bella did zone for a long while there, she was battleing soooo much in her mind.  When she woke up a part of her had just been there.  She was in the moment of being back with the Cullens whom she had come to love soooooo much and she jsut reveled in it.  then the call where everything that had happened made it all rush back and then to learn her secrets weren't as secret as she wanted themt o be.  In her head she was working up courage to tell Eddie her story but she needed to get past the trial so when she learned that Riley was found guilty she sucked up her courage again.

aaaahhhh don't say that about it will be good.  I'm always worried I'm gonna disappoint, especially this coming chapter that people have been waiting for soooooo long.  I'm a bit nervous writing it, seriously.  What if Bella's past is too much?  Not enough.  gggaahhhhh

I'll let MNA know you are reading her story!  you like broekn Bella's huh??? that's cool!  I love Edward fixing Bella!!!!

Reviewer: DestanyRose Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

I am glad to see the contection with Edward and Bella is even stronger now.  They will need it to help Bella get though all of this.  I know it is going to kill Edward to hear everything Bella has been through but with his and his families help I have a feeling Bella will finally be able to start healing from her past.  I wondered if that is not what sent Bella into her head again waiting to hear the out come of the trial knowing Edward didnt care about her scars.  I am glad to see Alice coming because I have a feeling Edward is going to wait to slowly murder any one that has hurt Bella at all.  I cant say I am looking forward to reading the next two chapter expect for the fact I am glad to finally know what Bella has been through.  I know what it is like telling my story I can only imagine it is close to what Bella will be going through.  With me it was like living it all over again each time I had to remember what was done to me.  This story is one of the best I have read in a long time.  I hope you post soon.

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Author's Response:

I am sooo confused, I thought I'd responded to your review. Sorry that I didn't!

The connection is indeed stronger.  I had been talking to people telling them the connection would be more and they kept telling me they had no clue how that'd be possible.  Now you can see it.  Yes Edward was dedicated to her before this and loved her without knowing it but now it is sooooo much more since he's admited to it and embraced it.

Yeah kill Edward is an understantment.  It is going to be a very difficult trial.  I won't say he doesn't everything right in his responce and reactions, but he won't blow it that badly either.  Honestly for him he does really well.

(HUGS) I'm so sorry you have such a troubled past.  I can only imagine the horrible things that have happened to you and I hope that you've found peace and a way to deal with it all though I know that is incredibly hard.  Thank you for reading and i truly hope the next chapters don't cause you to have triggers of any kind.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 8:30 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

Wow.  Just the marking had me cringing.   Hate to think about the next chapter but it is necessary to see why B is the way she is.



Author's Response:

gggrrr isn't that marking gross!!!  yeah I put that in to kinda prepare people that this won't be a sunshine and happy past, not that anyone thought that I'n surem but yeah.

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

this is a brilliant story and I NEED to read the next two chapters...so onward and upward...



Author's Response:

you NEED to read them.  ok.  I will be sure to post them.  :) 

Reviewer: UnoriginalThoughts Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

Wow I knew Bella's past was going to be horrific but I don't think I ever imagined the level of violence that obviously occured.

I always await updates with bated breath but this time there is a hint of trepidation over what is in store.



Author's Response:

:( yeah there is more going on than the Cullens know.  :(  But she does have Edward and really it will be ok, I promise.

Reviewer: Roxy Whitlock Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

i need more



Author's Response:

I know.  Next Tues it will be here, I'm trying really hard, I promise!!!

Reviewer: Ezzy Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 12:28 PM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

I can't wait to find out what happened to Bella, so far it sounds like something that happened to me (sort of) so it will be interesting to finally know!! cant wait



Author's Response:

hhmmm wow!  I'm so sorry!  I hope this all didn't happen to you :(  If it is to difficult to read I will send a summary. really

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 7:17 AM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

Amazing chapter. So glad that Edward sees the mating before his eyes.  I think deep down Bella knows something is there between the two of them too, because she is letting him in her world more and more.



Author's Response:

yes, you're right.  Bella is not nearly as "blocked" to her emotions as Edward was.  She isn't facing the same denial. That doesn't mean she doesn't have struggles to face with him but denial isn't one of them.

Reviewer: carrangi Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

oh man im really excited for the next chapter and am curious what could be worse than anything the cullens have imagined...great update!



Author's Response:

hee hee, that bit about it being worse than they imagined was a bit mean wasn't it.  Sorry!

Reviewer: janefanatic Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

Thank you for the update! I have to admit, I'm a little nervous about the coming chapter...



Author's Response:

you aren't alone, trust me, pleanty of people are a little nervous about next chapter, none more than Edward!!!!

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

You rock!!!!

Reviewer: annagardner11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 2:46 AM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

Please update soon I love
this story I like that emmett wants
to kill them I love
me some Teddy bear emmmet

Author's Response:

aww thank you!!!  I love Emmett too!!! seriously he's soooo sweet and such a big bro to Bella!!!!  He is awesome!!!

I plan on updating Tues as normal next week. I was talked into an early update today!

Reviewer: lovingit3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11 May 2010 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

WOW breaks my heart! I can't believe how much pain Bella has lived through!



Author's Response:

yeah, she's been through a lot, but she will be healing now, that's a good thing.  Plus she has Eddie.  that would make me happy!!!   very happy!

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 May 2010 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

oh my lord another super chapter, it is so hard to hear poor bella practically break apart at the seams and edward become more frantic as time passes as they are seperated, her breakdown at the hotel,  i wanted to cry but she does have people who care about her and they came to help,  with her part in the trial done for now she is on her way back to the cullens for some desperatly needed t.l.c,   i think the last thing edward will worry about immediatly is what to tell bella she'll be in such a state with the no eating and no sleeping he'll just want her to get a little better before he begins to talk about things he discussed with his brothers, i wont ask for more i'll just patiently wait, as you got so much on my best wishes to your mum for her recovery and your part in that home schooling thats a big undertaking thanks tracy

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 May 2010 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

oh my lord another super chapter, it is so hard to hear poor bella practically break apart at the seams and edward become more frantic as time passes as they are seperated, her breakdown at the hotel,  i wanted to cry but she does have people who care about her and they came to help,  with her part in the trial done for now she is on her way back to the cullens for some desperatly needed t.l.c,   i think the last thing edward will worry about immediatly is what to tell bella she'll be in such a state with the no eating and no sleeping he'll just want her to get a little better before he begins to talk about things he discussed with his brothers, i wont ask for more i'll just patiently wait, as you got so much on my best wishes to your mum for her recovery and your part in that home schooling thats a big undertaking thanks tracy



Author's Response:

Can I say I love you!!! Seriously you see soooooo much in my story!! I have had sooooo many people ask me if next chapter Edward will tell Bella he's matedm but you pickedup that Bella won't mentally be in a place to have that conversation right out of the door!  It is coming but it will still be a little bit.  Not to long, he will tell her the first chance he relaly can, but a lot will happen beofre then!

If Bella hadn't had close friends that could be there for her on some level, Edward would ahve gone to her.  It was hard enough for him to stay back!

 

Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 May 2010 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

Wow what an amazing chapter.  Poor Bella and Edward did better than i would expect.

I can see we will be going through some bumpy times now.



Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm glad your are proud of Bella and Edward. It was a rough two weeks and they aren't through it yet, but things will slow down soon!  I hope!!

 

Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: vvply Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 May 2010 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

Absolutely great chapter!!!! Thanks! I love the story The Letter too! Anyways hope everything goes smoothly in RL this week!



Author's Response:

Thank you for the well wishes in my life!  :)

 

Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: EdwardCullensMate Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05 May 2010 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

very emotional chapter. I hope Bella tells Edward whats going on soon cause I really need to know. lol

Author's Response:

I promise Bella's past is 2 chapters away!!!  so hold on for one more chapter!! it's coming!!!

 

Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 May 2010 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

AGHHH   Poor bella.    Damn what has this girl been through.



Author's Response:

She has been through hell on Earth and the story is coming!  I promise!!!!

 

Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: Sellabella Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2010 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

Great chapter. Hope Edward does explain to Bella. I want to see her reaction. Will she be relieved? Are we getting closer to finding out what really happened to her? Waiting patiently for the next chapter.

I had a total knee replacement two years ago, so I know how hard the recovery is. Despite set backs with the recovery, once it's over, life does get much better than before the surgery. Just during recovery, it feels more trouble than worth. I wish you all the best to you, your mother and your family as you try to get through this.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you, Edward will explain the mating thing, not right away but he will.  Her reaction?? you'll have to see!!

Thank you for the kind words as well.  My mom had her other knee replaced last year and di much better.  This leg was worse and they needed to do more invasive things to fit the knee, and then she feel in the hospital which wretched everything.  She's doing much better now so hopfully she's past the worst!

 

Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2010 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Returning Home

Gah you're killing me here :-) 

Reviewer: Nette91 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2010 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

Really liking this story... keep it up!



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Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2010 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

great chapter



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Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2010 1:55 PM Title: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

Aw poor Bella and Edward, sounds like she may become a vampire soon (really Eddie loves her too much to let her die). Hope your mom is doing better. Love your story.

 



Author's Response:

lol, well I cant' answer if Bella will be a vamp, but she will be telling her story soon.  I promise!

 

Thanks for the review, here's a tease for next chapter.  Don't hurt me!

Emmett spoke up. “Will she be ok Carlisle?”

He nodded. “She should be fine. She’s dehydrated, and has lost a lot of weight.  From the look of it she hasn’t slept and it looks like her body just gave out. It happens to people that push themselves past the point . . . “

Carlisle cut off when Esme gasped and Rose called out, “What the fuck!”

I had been avoiding the thoughts of the women to give Bella as much privacy as I could, but immediately I saw what they had seen.  I shot off the couch yelling. “What kind of sick sadist did that? What happened to her?”

I started pacing and was growling. Jasper put a hand on my arm to calm me.  I wrenched away from him. “Leave me alone!”

He didn’t take offense but spoke in a calm voice. “Talk to me brother. What did you see? What happened to Bella?  Is she ok?”

I tugged at my hair. “Yes, no, I don’t know. She’s . . . marked.” I couldn’t bring myself to say more.

Emmett came up to me. “What’d you me marked?”

I swallowed and put my hands on my hips trying to get the vision out of my head, but it was burned there and would never leave.

“On her stomach . . . it looks like she was cut with a knife . . . multiple times . . .” I took a deep breath.  I couldn’t even say it.

Carlisle spoke. “What else son?”

I looked at him and whispered, “Someone branded the word ‘MINE’ over it.”

Reviewer: Jilli90 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04 May 2010 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

Aww, the Tin Man grows a heart and realizes he's in love... Now edward needs to stop being a jerk, tell Bella he loves which could probaly make her stop and think twice about killing herself, and then he can change her and live happly ever after.  Well, not realy angestward is still going to be in the picture and it will probaly take more then a majic wond to make a happy ending for these two characters. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

awwww  poor eddie



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Thanks for the review!  Here's a tease for next week:

I hadn’t been off the phone with Bella for long when I heard Emmett and Jasper coming up to get me for a hunting trip.  I groaned before they made it to my room calling out, “I went hunting with Carlisle yesterday! I don’t need to hunt again.”

“Get up brother! I don’t care if you went hunting. We need manly brother time together. Now that you’re admitting to being mated we need to make sure you’re not going to fuck with our little sister! So get up and get moving!” Emmett bellowed as he plowed into my room.

“Language” Esme called up the stairs.

Emmett smiled. “See, that’s why we need to have this conversation elsewhere.  Don’t need to upset the ‘rents.”

I rolled my eyes. “Seriously, Emmett, can’t you say parents, or better yet Esme and Carlisle? Or the best idea, ignore it all and leave me alone!”

Jasper interrupted before Emmett and I bickered and nothing got accomplished. “Just come with us Edward.  We want to talk to you about a few things. I promise to keep Emmett in line.” As much as I can. He finished.

Reviewer: mousekemom Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 27 Apr 2010 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

Congrats on the nomination!  Bout time he figures it out...now, how much longer before we find out where and what's up with B?  Hubby and I are excited to find out what's going on!!!  Thanks for sharing your talent with us!



Author's Response:

well Bella'  story is 3 or so chapters away, can you hold out???

 

Thanks for the review!  Here's a tease for next week:

I hadn’t been off the phone with Bella for long when I heard Emmett and Jasper coming up to get me for a hunting trip.  I groaned before they made it to my room calling out, “I went hunting with Carlisle yesterday! I don’t need to hunt again.”

“Get up brother! I don’t care if you went hunting. We need manly brother time together. Now that you’re admitting to being mated we need to make sure you’re not going to fuck with our little sister! So get up and get moving!” Emmett bellowed as he plowed into my room.

“Language” Esme called up the stairs.

Emmett smiled. “See, that’s why we need to have this conversation elsewhere.  Don’t need to upset the ‘rents.”

I rolled my eyes. “Seriously, Emmett, can’t you say parents, or better yet Esme and Carlisle? Or the best idea, ignore it all and leave me alone!”

Jasper interrupted before Emmett and I bickered and nothing got accomplished. “Just come with us Edward.  We want to talk to you about a few things. I promise to keep Emmett in line.” As much as I can. He finished.

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

hey there as always great chapter, dear edward even having the conversation with carlisle he cant quite accept it but he gets there in the end, it's a sad necessary that they are apart as they obviously  both feel a void despite the stilted phone conversations,

questions i wouold ask are

edward, you're  planing  on telling  bella you and her are mated, how  will you tell her and where?

what life/relationship do you plan on offering bella now you realise you cannot be parted?

how will you deal with bellas issues and her screwed take on relationships due to her history with the increasing intimacy you will face?

thanks tracy



Author's Response:

Tracey those are great questions. 

 

it is sad they're apart and I wish I could say all will be ok, but alas it isn't all ok, but I promise to make the pain quick!!  does that help??

 

Thanks for the review!  Here's a tease for next week:

I hadn’t been off the phone with Bella for long when I heard Emmett and Jasper coming up to get me for a hunting trip.  I groaned before they made it to my room calling out, “I went hunting with Carlisle yesterday! I don’t need to hunt again.”

“Get up brother! I don’t care if you went hunting. We need manly brother time together. Now that you’re admitting to being mated we need to make sure you’re not going to fuck with our little sister! So get up and get moving!” Emmett bellowed as he plowed into my room.

“Language” Esme called up the stairs.

Emmett smiled. “See, that’s why we need to have this conversation elsewhere.  Don’t need to upset the ‘rents.”

I rolled my eyes. “Seriously, Emmett, can’t you say parents, or better yet Esme and Carlisle? Or the best idea, ignore it all and leave me alone!”

Jasper interrupted before Emmett and I bickered and nothing got accomplished. “Just come with us Edward.  We want to talk to you about a few things. I promise to keep Emmett in line.” As much as I can. He finished.

Reviewer: cecelouis Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

Wow, this chapter is the best so for!  Thank you updating early

My question

Edward do you think that you can save Bella from whatever she going to thought?  If so how?



Author's Response:

wow, I'm glad you liked it so much.  I'll ask Edward your question

 

Thanks for the review!  Here's a tease for next week:

I hadn’t been off the phone with Bella for long when I heard Emmett and Jasper coming up to get me for a hunting trip.  I groaned before they made it to my room calling out, “I went hunting with Carlisle yesterday! I don’t need to hunt again.”

“Get up brother! I don’t care if you went hunting. We need manly brother time together. Now that you’re admitting to being mated we need to make sure you’re not going to fuck with our little sister! So get up and get moving!” Emmett bellowed as he plowed into my room.

“Language” Esme called up the stairs.

Emmett smiled. “See, that’s why we need to have this conversation elsewhere.  Don’t need to upset the ‘rents.”

I rolled my eyes. “Seriously, Emmett, can’t you say parents, or better yet Esme and Carlisle? Or the best idea, ignore it all and leave me alone!”

Jasper interrupted before Emmett and I bickered and nothing got accomplished. “Just come with us Edward.  We want to talk to you about a few things. I promise to keep Emmett in line.” As much as I can. He finished.

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

Finally, I can't wait for him to try to explain this to Bella, that is going to be a very interesting conversation.

Questions for Edward:

You work for the Volturi at times, isn't that going to become a problem with Bella staying human when you meet Aro, especially now that you and she are mated, its not like you can be seperated from her?

What are you going to door say to Bella if Bella tells you that she wants to be changed,with your feelings that you are a monster?

 



Author's Response:

I really like your questions.  should be interesting what he has to say!!!

 

Thanks for the review!  Here's a tease for next week:

I hadn’t been off the phone with Bella for long when I heard Emmett and Jasper coming up to get me for a hunting trip.  I groaned before they made it to my room calling out, “I went hunting with Carlisle yesterday! I don’t need to hunt again.”

“Get up brother! I don’t care if you went hunting. We need manly brother time together. Now that you’re admitting to being mated we need to make sure you’re not going to fuck with our little sister! So get up and get moving!” Emmett bellowed as he plowed into my room.

“Language” Esme called up the stairs.

Emmett smiled. “See, that’s why we need to have this conversation elsewhere.  Don’t need to upset the ‘rents.”

I rolled my eyes. “Seriously, Emmett, can’t you say parents, or better yet Esme and Carlisle? Or the best idea, ignore it all and leave me alone!”

Jasper interrupted before Emmett and I bickered and nothing got accomplished. “Just come with us Edward.  We want to talk to you about a few things. I promise to keep Emmett in line.” As much as I can. He finished.

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

As always an awesome chapter!!!!



Author's Response:

lol you mak me laugh!

Reviewer: TM Twilight Girl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26 Apr 2010 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 28 - Mated

Great!   I'm glad that you were nominated.  That is a wonderful honor, and you deserve it.

I'm glad that Carlisle was able to Edward's eyes that must have been welded shut.  He's been in love with her for so long and he didn't even realize it.  Hehehe.  I'm also glad that Carlisle talked him into staying, even though I see how much it hurts him to stay away from Bella.

How many more chapters is she going to be gone for?

This chapter also reminded me that I wanted to tell you that I like the way you portray Rosalie.  There are far too many stories out there that portray her as a heartless bitch.  You may have erred on the side of compassion with her, but I like a kinder, more empathetic Rosalie for this Bella.

My questions for Edward: 

It is obvious that Bella has endured some kind of sexual assault or rape of some kind in the past, how do you justify not even giving her a choice when it comes to whether or not to become a vampire?  

Don't you think that when you tell her that you won't change her, that deep, deep down she will feel that it is because she is damaged and unworthy to be with you forever?

I hope those were questions that Edward could possibly answer without giving away the plot.



Author's Response:

OUCH!!! Those are some hard quesstions you have for the boy!!! you obviously want him thinking huh.  I will pass them along.

 

Bella will be reuinited with Edward in chapter 30.  So one more chapter of them apart, but I warn you , next chapter, isn't pretty!

I'm glad you like Rose.  I gave her a reason to like Bella and treat her better.  Now she will be agaisnt turning Bella, as is canon but she doens't hate Bella as a person, which, i agree is nice!!!!

Carlisle did save the day by making Edwar think.  gggrrrr for a smart vamp, he's an idiot!!!

 

Thanks for the review!  Here's a tease for next week:

I hadn’t been off the phone with Bella for long when I heard Emmett and Jasper coming up to get me for a hunting trip.  I groaned before they made it to my room calling out, “I went hunting with Carlisle yesterday! I don’t need to hunt again.”

“Get up brother! I don’t care if you went hunting. We need manly brother time together. Now that you’re admitting to being mated we need to make sure you’re not going to fuck with our little sister! So get up and get moving!” Emmett bellowed as he plowed into my room.

“Language” Esme called up the stairs.

Emmett smiled. “See, that’s why we need to have this conversation elsewhere.  Don’t need to upset the ‘rents.”

I rolled my eyes. “Seriously, Emmett, can’t you say parents, or better yet Esme and Carlisle? Or the best idea, ignore it all and leave me alone!”

Jasper interrupted before Emmett and I bickered and nothing got accomplished. “Just come with us Edward.  We want to talk to you about a few things. I promise to keep Emmett in line.” As much as I can. He finished.

Reviewer: DestanyRose Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20 Apr 2010 2:55 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

I am glad to see Bella and Edward growing together.  I know it is hard for Edward to understand why Bella needs to do this alone.  My husband doesnt understand when I have to face my past on my own and then afterward come back to him for support.  I have a feeling Bella may go but some time while being away she is going to call Edward to come to her because she needs his support more then she knows.  It was cute reading about Bella and Edwards second and very hot kiss.  Baby steps are must when Bella has a past like she does.  It will mean the world to her that Edward was there for her how she needed him the whole way through.  Great job and I so cant wait to see what will happen next.

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Author's Response:

Thank you!  This time apart is going to be very huge for both of them to get a clue and realize how much they really mean to each other and how badly both need each other, because they do!  As for what will happen, you'll just have to wait to find out!! lol

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for next week:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: robsmom Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2010 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

I was browsing today and came across your story, I have no idea how I missed such a great story...Really it is well written, draws you into their life, I loved it. What more can I say. Thank you.  If you have it in your heart a Lemon would be great....



Author's Response:

Thank you for the wonderful compliment!  I'm glad you like the story and you're coming in at a great time when all the build is done and the fun begins!!!

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: DRROBERTS2 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Apr 2010 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

 

LEMON!!!



Author's Response:

lol, oh my word, I kinda missed that, did you want a lemon or not?  Too funny!

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: tracygoodey1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Apr 2010 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

oh my another fine chapter, bella asked edward for a kiss which sounded lovely untill his erection freaked her out, so kissing was ok the erection brought up the bad memories and she has some very incorrect ideas about that which i'm assuming is linked to her trauma?  my heart breaks for bella, she is so sad again leaving for the trial alone i kinda get why she wants to go alone does she want to be able to tell edward herself and not have him find out via the trial? she still has some negative thoughts about herself and how stuff is her fault, poor edward at the end just on his knees , about the lemon i think it would be nice to have it in showing bella healed enough to be that intimate and trusting with edward would be a nice ending for her, thanks tracy



Author's Response:

Yeah poor Bella.   She made a huge step asking for that kiss. To bad Edward is always sporting wood adn she was stratteled on his lap.  So yeah, ended badly but not horrid. It was important that Edward plant that seed that he can be with her and be excited sexually and still not harm her and that he could freak her out and still calm her. 

Her going to that trial alone.  *sigh*  It is horrible that she's there alone but she needs to be.  She wasn't ready to open up yet and the Cullen's shouldn't find out her history from the newspapers.  Plus this time away will make both of them realize what they mean to each other and will let them move forward.  That's also important.

I agree with you on the lemons but wanted to check with my readers.

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: Nette91 Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

So loving this story!!!  Can't wait to read more.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're likeing hte story.

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

poor belly bean! thinking she has to do this alone. poor eddie having to give in and let her go. heres to wishing the time passes quickly for them both.

as for the lemon i think it would fit to at least show their first time so we can come full circle for both of them. having them come together fully as one



Author's Response:

Bella is very worried and truthfully it's hard to say at this point if she would be more freaked telling Edward everything before the trial and dealing with his anger and everything or being on her own.  I do know this, their being apart is very important for them both, this will show them that they can't be apart and they need each other.

I agree with you on the lemons!

Reviewer: kneon Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Returning Home

Finally, but this is giong to be a long 2 weeks.

Reviewer: kneon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

Great chapter, I wish that she would let Edward go but understand why she can't.  The sad thing is he can't even go without her knowing because she would sense he was there because of the mating thing.

I see you left another clue that she wasn't raped. 

Thanks for the update.



Author's Response:

Thank you!  You are the voice of reason.  I've had a few people ask if he'll be foloowing her, and he can't cause she would know!  you got it!!!

 

Well I said THIS trial wasn't about rape, she was in 3 other trials previously and one more to come, they all dealt with rape.  This specific one doesn't, does that help or make it worse????

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

I loved the chapter.  It's moving and draws you in deeper.  Feelings are explored here that are full spectrum, and they're handled more than well.  The end was heartbreaking.  Why do I keep imagining aCullen or two following her in secret?  As for your question, Lemons would be nice.  Done with care, it could be the thing that helps Bella shift her belief system around.  Thanks for asking!



Author's Response:

Thank you soooooo much.  Seriously I love hearing that you can feel all the emotions that are going on, because there are a LOT of them!  The end was heart breaking but necessary, they both need to understand how badly they need each other and this separation will show them both that.  I agree that tasteful lemons int he right place are good, I just wanted to get reader's opinion to make sure we were on the same page.

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: mousekemom Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

Wow!  Finally, we are reaching the good stuff!  Okay, yea, we all love lemons, but I think some people just toss them in because it is convient and fills up a chapter.  If it is a truly moving part of the story...great, knock yourself out, but if it is just filler, don't.  Don't get me wrong, I'm all for Edward and Bella lovin, but don't do it because it's easy.  Hubby and I will have plenty to discuss tonight...we are still guessing about what the heck happened.  Did her parents put all those sexually negative thoughts in her head, or was that religious stuff?  She is so scared of any physical contact, something more has to be there.  Thanks for the update and, as always, looking forward to the rest of the story!  Thanks for sharing your talent with us!



Author's Response:

SERIRIOUSLY does your husbadn read this???  or do you tell him about it???  I gotta know!!!!

Thanks on the lemons.  I agree with you.  I would never put a lemon in so that there was a lemon, but in thsi case I think that Lemons are important to show the progress that they are both making in their relaionship.  I had planned some lemons but wanted to see what my readers thought before going ahead with them.

I will say this, Bella's parents were normal and loving and didn't place anything bad thoughts in her head. Everything that made her who she is today came from 2 horrible nights of her life a few days apart from each other. It is hard to make a normal loving girl be that afraid of touch, but a few horrid things can do it, she'll be sharing her story in about 4 chapters I think,

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: mjwpg Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 2:13 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

Great chapter, looking forward to the trial!

 



Author's Response:

thanks again for the review

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: theladykt Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

ugh.  wish she wouls let one of them go.  rose at least



Author's Response:

In some ways it would be better if someone went with in others worse.  They both need this time apart to get how much they need each other and to move to the next level.  It will be good, I promise!!!

 

Thank you for the review and here's a tease that should make you happy for in two weeks:

I smiled. I was mated, to Bella. I let the idea sit with me and I felt lighter and happier just thinking of it. I was mated to Bella.  The phrase played over and over in my head. The more I thought on it the more obvious it was and I felt like the biggest idiot for not seeing it sooner.  Bella was my mate and I loved her. How could I have not seen it?  I loved Bella. Now that I considered the idea I wanted to kick myself for not realizing sooner.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 6:19 AM Title: Chapter 26 - Aftermath

yay for alice outing edward in his infinet dumb-assedness. and letting the family know what he wanted to do and what would have happened. bella was kinda creepy while getting stiched up. sounds like there was some blame thrown at bella durring her ordeal 2 years ago. somone made it her fault for tempting them. maybe the whippings were punishment for being a temptation and 'forcing'her attaker(s) to rape her and sin? pretty messed up way to fuck with the good christian girls mind - you made me sin - you upset god - you must suffer for your misdeeds - i am not at fault, you are...

then again i may just be reading too much into this...



Author's Response:

you aren't reading too much into it, but not totally correctly either.  But you're right there was a religious freak in her past that was NOT Biblical in his thoughts or actions and took it out on Bella.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 25 - Just a Little Bite

oh boy here comes emo-eddie!



Author's Response:

yep, but I won't let emo Eddie stay to long!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 24 - Two Steps Forward, One Step Back

so glad that they have started to work though things. well not the important stuff but the getting to know deep down and the boundries with eachother. looks like bella is willing to open up a bit.



Author's Response:

yeah, it's  start, a slow one but a start nontheless and each step no matter how small is a good thing.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 23 - Homecoming

yay the first FOUR kisses! man edward is such a 13 yaer old girl!



Author's Response:

LOL he's a 13 year old girl?!?!?!?!  I'm  scared to ask why!  But yeah the kiss, *sigh*

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 22 - Where are we now?

edward really is an idiot, but it is cute how dumb he is and so freaking clueless. you would think after 100+ years and all of that time in people's heads he would know SOMTHING!!!! can't really get mad at bella, she is in a tough place she wants something with eddie but is scared of what she wants and probably doesn't think she deserves it in general let alone with eddie boy.



Author's Response:

You pretty much summed it all up.  lol, maybe you should write for me!!! just kidding.  Yeah Edward should get it, but is just not getting it and is busy tlaking himself out of everything, idiot man!!!!  And yes, Bella is totally confused about her feelings for Edward and what's going on and why and what to do.  Neither knows what the others is thinking and both are over analyzing!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Apr 2010 2:27 AM Title: Chapter 21 - A Day at the Cullen's

so sweet to see them all spending time together with bella one on one. funny how they all bring out a different aspect of what bella needs without even knowing it. i wonder if you will use rose's story as a way to help bella feels she is not alone like you did with esme? it would bring them together a bit more i think.

the almost kiss here at the end was so cute, like neither knew what was going on or what to do.



Author's Response:

you are soooo right.  All the Cullen's will be talking to and have a part in helping Bella.  Teh Rose thing is hard.  Edward won't be around when Rose talks to Bella so it won't be shown but, yes, she will be important to Bella's recovery and will be a major playing in helping her.

yeah, they were both soooooo clueless about the kissing.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2010 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 20 - Abiding Friend or Soulless Monster

well going comando and getting your first woodie would be bad for any guy let alone edward who is always so up tight!



Author's Response:

Edward is a bit up tight and you're right it's a bit much for him to take. 

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2010 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Deal

well that is not nearly as bad as i figured it would be. but i can see how that would suck and be hard for alice to do.



Author's Response:

Bella isn't purposly mean but she also doesn't want her secrect known, so that was all she could come up with.  Alice is freaken a bit, she's never had her visions taken from her like that and she worries over Bella.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2010 11:36 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Reactions

what will she do? how long till she feels the pull back to edward?



Author's Response:

She already feels it, but remember she is suffereing from PTSD and has every plan on killing herself, so it's hard for her to understand why suddenly she wants this boy, she doesn't get mating, she doesn't even know he's a vamp, well now she does, so she's fighting herself and the pull.  She is very confused and upset about the whole thing, Edward has knocked her world upside down and she has no clue why or how to set it right again, it's just hard to see that all from EPOV. 

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2010 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Not Her

dun dun duhhh! looks like the cat is gonna rip his way outta the bag. wonder how bella and edward are gonna deal with this little convo?!?

but it is way past my bedtime and work comes too early so looks like we will be reading in the office. hee hee i am so bad!



Author's Response:

The cat is out of its perverbial bag!  the convo isn't to bad, Hope you slept well and don't get in trouble at work!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2010 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Coming Back from the Dark

too funny the meat institute! heehee. glad to see that b is working on getting herself back at least a little. interesting to see how each cullen brings something different to her and her healing process.

eddie is on his way to seeing what is going on between him and bella but i think when it does hit him it will hit like a ton of bricks and he is gonna freak out!



Author's Response:

Bella has a sense of humor and is a lot of fun, or she was, she is slowly getting back to it! and you are sooooooo right!!!!  Each Cullen will have a part in healing her a little bit in their own way.  She needs them all as they need her and didn't even know it.

 

Eddie will be hating himself once he gets it and will freak, no worries there!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Apr 2010 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 15 - Meet the Cullen's

well looks like alice is trying to slowly ease edward into the idea of mating with bella. wonder how long until he believes it...



Author's Response:

unfortunatly it will take a while. He's hopelessly clueless

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