Date: 16 Dec 2011 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 31
beautiful ending. great job.
Date: 15 Dec 2011 4:34 PM Title: Chapter 31
Great story.....just know, that if you did decide to write a sequel I will definetly be reading!!!!!
Date: 15 Dec 2011 3:42 PM Title: Chapter 31
Good story, looking forward to more works from you.
Date: 15 Dec 2011 11:00 AM Title: Chapter 31
Thanks for writing, your story was great. I hope you write something new soon.
Date: 15 Dec 2011 9:40 AM Title: Chapter 31
So good to see her finally find herself. Beautiful. :)
Date: 15 Dec 2011 5:06 AM Title: Chapter 31
What a perfect ending to an amazng story. I loved every minute of it.
Date: 14 Dec 2011 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 31
I loved this story from begining to end. I llpk forward to ouur next one. Outstanding writing and plot. It was awesome.
Date: 12 Nov 2011 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 30
thanks good chapter
Date: 12 Nov 2011 1:03 AM Title: Chapter 30
Haha...Tanya got what she deserved!
Date: 11 Nov 2011 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 30
brief scene
Date: 07 Nov 2011 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 29
thanks good chapter as always
Date: 06 Nov 2011 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 29
Catching the kids in the playroom? Well I guess it was bound to happen at some point! LOL!
Can't wait to read what happens next!
Keye
Date: 03 Nov 2011 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 29
I liked the chapter.
Date: 03 Nov 2011 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 29
I would have killed Tanya. She had no right showing Clair such things. She is a minor. Clair and Seth got off easy. I would have killed by children. First for stealing the key, trespassing in my space, breaking rules, sneaking around, being untrustworthy. The list goes on and on. She should loose all forms of money and phone. Edward should insist that if they want to learn about the lifestyle Esme has to teach her when she is 18. Esme is a Dom. This way Edward knows it is being taught by a person of character.
Date: 02 Nov 2011 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 29
Wow-zer.... so did not see that one cumming... pun intended!
Date: 02 Nov 2011 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 13
I am sorry to say I must stop your story. I love reading Dom/Sub stories but ONLY with Edward as the Dom. It was great until I seen that you were switching them.
Date: 02 Nov 2011 4:14 AM Title: Chapter 29
E&B should have made Claire train as a sub in all the non sexual ways. That just sounded wrong. It seems like the kids were just enjoying the sexual part. They need to be taught all aspects.
Date: 01 Nov 2011 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 29
the kids seem a little young to be into this stuff but I enjoyed it anyways, it is fiction after all
Date: 01 Nov 2011 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 29
Clair & Seth wow knew they would get together, but in Master E's playroom her smacking him with E's crop wow. Tanya needs to be punished at the club for breaking some kind of trust I mean clair is what 15 almost 16 so yea I think Tanya needs to have her ass beat by both E & B ! As for the mixed reviews you are getting I understand your feelings I get them to on my story "Master to you." But as I tell every one This is how my Edward and Bella are we all love Staphenie's E & B but these are our E & B if you don't like it then don't read it it may sound harsh but really its the truth and they will still read it you don't need to coddle them. YOU MY DEAR ARE DOING ONE HELL OF A JOB ON THIS AND AS SOON AS I GET THE E-MAIL SAYING ITS UPDATED I READ IT RIGHT AWAY ! So Bekki keep up the great great work I love it . Can't wait for the next update dear hat's off to you !!!
Author's Response:
Well, you totaly made my day! Thank you for your encourageement and support. I'm working on the next chapter right now. Tanya will make an apperance. So we'll see what happens. I've not gotten that far yet, but I will say Ed is pissed. lol
Later, thanks for reading. If you have FB and haven't added B.a.Swan yet, I'd love to have you. :)
Date: 01 Nov 2011 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 29
I don`t think that Edward is confusing or milktoast.What he is now is a father of twins.I think it is absolutely natural to change a little his way of thinking about fis relationship with Bella, his lover, the mother of his children, his submissive, and so on.I would aspect a change in the dinamic of their life.About Claire,I believe that she is too young for begining a BDSM life,but I also believe that it is your story and I apreciate truly the way you write,you are the author.
Date: 01 Nov 2011 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 29
Good Chapter.....
Date: 01 Nov 2011 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 29
loved the update !!!
Date: 30 Oct 2011 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 28
thanks good chapter
Date: 17 Oct 2011 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 28
I'm glad that the babies were ok,and I'm glad Bella got her release in more ways than one. It can be tough being a new mom and being pulled in all different directions it's pretty overwhelming with just one baby I can't imagine two at the same time
Date: 17 Oct 2011 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 24
I really don't understand Bella right now, from a personal stand point if my husband cheated on me and then later kidnapped me whether he thought he was protecting me or not his ass would be in jail with charges pressed no ifs ands or buts. Then for her to untie Jacob and sit in his lap like that nope just not happening, Bella is being a little too forgiving and until the end of this chapter I really don't even think she was thinking about how she was acting was affecting Edward
Date: 14 Oct 2011 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 28
the last few chapters were very well done. I liked how real you made B's experiences being a mother. I also loved the sexy sexy times you ended with.
Date: 11 Oct 2011 2:08 AM Title: Chapter 28
Great chapter...love Carlisle's script for Edward...lol.
Date: 11 Oct 2011 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 28
I think that was incredibly selfish of Edward to have playtime with her knowing how shes feeling. She had all rights to be pissed when he left the babies with Esme. Did he not read the prescription? geesh...poor Bella
Great chapter tho..
Date: 10 Oct 2011 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 28
I kinda feel like he was an ass, leaving the babies without discussing it with her, then she is exhausted and he has not been around to even fix a toilet and instead of following Carlisles Rx he just wants to play, granted she enjoyed it but I think it was exceptionally selfish none the less and I enjoy playtime as much as he does
Date: 10 Oct 2011 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 28
I love Carlisle's prescription for Bella and Edward....especially the one for Edward!!!!
And nothing like the family taking care of the kiddos so that you can have some quality smexy time!!!! LOL!
Nice update!
Keye
Date: 10 Oct 2011 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 28
oh yes, a good fuck does come in handy.. Great update !!1 Loved Carlise precription for edward. lol
Date: 10 Oct 2011 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 28
Good Chapter....
Date: 10 Oct 2011 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 28
Those first few weeks are so hard. Then you get into a rhythem and the babies sleep through the night. Life is good.
Date: 09 Oct 2011 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 27
thanks good chapters
Date: 07 Oct 2011 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 27
Ohhh the fun of feeding, changing nappies, and being up at odd hours is what is yet to come.
Good luck Edward and Bella.
Date: 07 Oct 2011 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 27
Okay.. so ive seen your story for a while.. and just read it.. like all of it!! Way to cute for words...
Date: 07 Oct 2011 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 27
Good Chapter....
Date: 06 Oct 2011 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 27
Sometime, I just don't understand B's way of thinking.
Date: 06 Oct 2011 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 27
So sweet! Great chapter. I love this happy family.
Date: 05 Oct 2011 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 26
Hope that the babies will be ok. Congrats and happiness to be parents.
Great chapter...
Date: 05 Oct 2011 1:47 AM Title: Daughters, Mothers, and a Playroom
Just started this story. I have to ask: Why is there no punishment, none whatsoever, for Edward for not divulging the existence of his daughter to Bella? He demands the relationship be honest. He's been saying how it won't work unless they are honest and open. And then he pulls this crap. He definitely is NOT the best Dom. He gets away with this and he would punish her ass for it. See, if they have kids, how can he not see the hypocrisy. Oh, Susie, you have to be punished for breaking the rules, but...I can get away with it 'cause I need to control things even though I'm not logical or fair to any of you. Bleh.
I guess that's why I have a hard time here. There is no logic for his behavior versus hers. Just hypocrisy. And Esme glaring at him is not punishing him. Bella's a pushover. Bleh again. Your writing style is great. It's the lifestyle here and the subliminal message it sends to young gals out there. Sorry to ramble.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review. Edward does have some major issues that he wil be working out, as will Bella. He isn't the best Dom or I should say the most perfect Dom. He's never been in this situation before; all of his past relationships have only been subs and there was no real reason to divulge the existence of his daughter. He messed up not telling Bella once he knew that their relationship would be more than Dom/sub. He's human, not that it's a great excuse, but he will do a lot of maturing throughout the story. My Bella and the book Bella are similar in some area's, being a push over is one. She had no self esteem for a long time, but she will over come that.
I hope that you'll continue reading and seeing them through. There will be some craziness that goes on, but in the end everyone will get their HEA.
Date: 04 Oct 2011 9:40 PM Title: Chapter 26
I love your stories.... i cant believe they dont have more reveiws.
Author's Response:
Thank you. I wish I knew how to get more reviews and readers. I did start a Facebook page. If your on there check it out, the link is on my profile.
Thanks again.
Date: 04 Oct 2011 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 25
oh you are evil........ so next update we get the sex of the babies !!!!!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you! lol Yes, next chapter we find out sex and names.
Date: 04 Oct 2011 1:33 PM Title: Chapter 25
Good Chapter....
Author's Response:
:)
Date: 03 Oct 2011 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 24
I don't think she needs to press charges but Edward should get to punish him
Author's Response:
:)
Date: 03 Oct 2011 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 24
I am still reading and even though I didn`t like it when Bella stood in Jacob embrace I respect your vision.I think your story is amazing.
Author's Response:
Thank you:)
Date: 03 Oct 2011 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 24
OK first I want to say I feel for your little boy , my son was bit on the upper inside thigh by a male goose he was very bruised for a long time he was like 4 years old he swore that the goose was trying to bite his pete off ! now he is 20 and still won't go around geese, things like that stay with them that is for sure. ;)
Now onto the story review I love this story I can understand Bella's feelings and thinking that Jake has paid enough for his actions he was abusive to her mentally . and because she is a natural submissive it makes it worse . she Truely loves Edward I feel he should punish Jake with whatever means he chooses but he needs to take in Bellas thoughts and maybe not whip him alot like he would like because it could be dangerous to the twins if she gets to upset or maybe have her stay for the first part of the punishment then have her leave for the last part I don't know just thinking.
You are a doing a amazing job on this I can't wait tell you update again please update soon !!!
Author's Response:
My husband was trampled by chickens when he was 3, like our son, he still won't go around them and he's almost 33. lol.
Thank you for reading and your review. I'm considering updating the next chapter in a few minutes. :)
Date: 03 Oct 2011 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 24
Finally, I think Bella is finally getting it. Edward is her future, no matter what she shared with Jacob, thats over, time to move forward!! Yea!!!
Author's Response:
:)
Date: 03 Oct 2011 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 24
Still here with you. Hope everything goes well with the adoption of your children.
Author's Response:
Thank you. I actually had a visit with our worker this evening. She said everything is moving along smoothly :)
Date: 30 Sep 2011 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 22
Loving the visual I got when you wrote about Edward's strip tease!!! ROTF!!! Yum!!!
Keye
Date: 25 Sep 2011 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 23
thanks good chapter
Date: 25 Sep 2011 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 23
I'm sorry, but I have to bail on this story. Bella is just...I don't know how to put it nicely, she's just to stupid for my tastes and to much of a door mat push over. I'm sorry, but:
"This is were the problem would lie. I didn't want to press charges on him. Sure, I was upset by what he did, but in some messed up way I understood. He thought he was protecting me from Edward. He knew what Tanya did to him and assumed Edward was the same with me. But most importantly he led me to my father and for that I would always be grateful. I was quiet too long to suit Edward so he pinched my thigh."
I mean, really? He had nothing to do with bring her her father. Yes, his actions may have lead to that but it's nothing he should be lauded over. It was a side effect of his actions, nothing more. He deserves no credit, accolade or mercy for it. And she understands why he did it? I mean come on. He was staling her WELL before he kidnapped her, he obviously has mental issues. This wasn't just about protecting her or he wouldn't have been STALKING her before hand. Not to mention there are a MILLION ways he could have handled the situation if he was worried for her that don't amount to a fucking FELONY kidnapping. I mean, come on...
Edward isn't that bright either. He's all, "I'm still a Dom and if it doesn't effect our marriage my descision goes" and then he fucking buckles on the Jacob thing without even a discussion on it? Without even pointing out the horrific flaws in her logic? Same thing with Carmen. He should have ordered Claire in the house immediately. She's a kid. Yes, listen to her opinion but it doesn't mean you go with it. She's not equipped to make fair judgements when it comes to her mother. Edward should have told Carmen no if for no other reason than it's OBVIOUS she hasn't learned her lesson. Instead of calling Edward to talk abou things she MANIPULATED the situation to where she showed up when Edward wasn't home and Claire was just getting off the bus. People who have learned their lesson and want to work on things don't manipulate their child, exhusband and his current ex-wife into seeing the abused child. But again, Edward just goes with it and Bella just stood there being horny. She should have told Claire to go inside immediately for them to wait for her father to get home before they talked to her mother.
I'm to frustrated and appalled at them to go on with the story, I'm sorry.
Author's Response:
Well, I don't really know what to say. I apperciate you honesty. The Jacob issue is resolved next chapter. Edward and Bella are both very immature in someways, but they will get better as time goes on. Hope you change your mind, but honestly it's no sweat off my back if you don't. Life goes on, not everyone will like my story and I'm cool with that. Thanks for trying it out.
Date: 24 Sep 2011 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 23
high five to you my dear I luv this story update soon please !!
Date: 24 Sep 2011 2:59 PM Title: Chapter 23
oh dear poor bella.fab chapter edward playing doctor thats hot!update soon
Date: 18 Sep 2011 11:43 AM Title: Chapter 22
You made what could have been an awkward and unsatisfying moment into a sexy and sated wedding night.
I liked it because it was realistic. Pregnancies, high-risk or not, throw a wrench in most couples sex lives. It's not all hormonal horniness. You made it realistically sexy.
Date: 16 Sep 2011 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 22
thanks good chapter
Date: 15 Sep 2011 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 22
I can't wait until Edward talks to Tanya. I wish that Bella would press charges on Jacob.
Date: 15 Sep 2011 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 22
awesome I would love to see him dance for me
Date: 14 Sep 2011 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 22
HAppy Wedding Day! @>--'---
Date: 14 Sep 2011 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 22
tough talk with Charlie, can't believe Carlise telling Edward he was ashitty dom, and Aro gave Edward the club huh?? Wish the wedding night had been a llittle hotter
Date: 14 Sep 2011 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 10
what is angry brids?
Date: 14 Sep 2011 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 8
btw it is choker not chocker
and who the hell is Tanya is that an ex sub?
Date: 14 Sep 2011 5:58 PM Title: I Want My Daughter Back!
Carmen is one sick bitch
Date: 14 Sep 2011 3:54 PM Title: Chapter 22
great chapter...i am glad they are married and that bella told edward before the wedding not after.
Date: 14 Sep 2011 1:29 PM Title: Old friends and a sexy dance.
no contract and he has really pushed
Date: 14 Sep 2011 3:14 AM Title: From rock bottom to beautiful horizon
awesome start
Date: 13 Sep 2011 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 21
I am so happy that Edward and Charlie were able to talk things out. I wish Bella would press charges. Jacob should not be walking the streets.
Date: 10 Sep 2011 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 21
thanks good chapter
Date: 07 Sep 2011 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 21
i already voted for you
Date: 07 Sep 2011 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 21
Laughs at this:
It's a little amusing that he is not only a member of the illustrious, snooty Ridge View Country Club, but also a member one of the biggest S&M clubs in the region. The irony is not lost on me.
Cracked up at the boys razzing Edward, telling him that he was the shittiest Dom ever and that Bella ran roughshod over him!!!!!
Funny line:
“It will teach you to always wrap that multiple-baby missile next time,” he laughed.
Out of the blue, totally unexpected and I love it:
“So, Seth, what are you intensions with my daughter?” I asked, giving him a stern look. He spit out the water he was drinking. Charlie turned around and asked him if he was ok.
All I can say, even though it would be fun to jack with boys interested in your daughter....I am sooooo glad that I have a boy:
Don't even think about having sex, because I will dismember you.” I glared. Then, smiled eerily. I never realized how much fun messing with boys interested in my daughter would be. Not, that I wanted to experience this a lot, but this instance had been fun.
Good way to put it:
“Bella chose to submit her body to me. Basically, I get pleasure out of bossing her around, and she gets pleasure from taking orders.” I hoped the super simple answer would suffice.
OMG...I cannot believe that he has to have this conversation with Bella's DAD:
I'm a kinky son of a bitch, but if Bella didn't want to do anything but the missionary position, then that's what we'd do.
Perfect end to this chapter:
Charlie laughed, “I think you're right. You're one shitty Dom.” It was then I noticed my brothers were in the kitchen as well. They all burst out laughing. I couldn't catch a break.
Congrats on your nom!
Keye
Date: 07 Sep 2011 10:26 AM Title: Chapter 21
Wonderful chapter, I am all caught up now and have to say that Jacob should not get off scott free. I really do hope that Edward pul the Dom card on her and makes her press charges.
Date: 07 Sep 2011 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 21
your stories are great and i voted good luck!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!!!
Date: 07 Sep 2011 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 21
Wow, he is going to be mad at Bella for Tanya's insistence that B make a decision. Great chpater. Congrats on the nomination.
Author's Response:
Thank you!!
Date: 07 Sep 2011 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 21
I voted for you. Just keep those chapters coming.
Author's Response:
Yeah!!! Thank you.
Date: 07 Sep 2011 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 21
“Level with me, Edward, is what Jacob said true, are you a Dominate?” Charlie asked. I couldn't lie to him. I just hoped he'd let me explain."
I believe the word you are looking for is "Dominant". That is the correct term in the lifestyle. The word you are using is a verb, as in "we are going to dominate the competition."
Author's Response:
I guess, it slipped by both my beta and myself. I do know which would it should be. Thanks for pointing it out my typo.
Date: 05 Sep 2011 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 20
I ate a worm when I was 2, and my mother has the picture of it hanging out of my mouth. So gross. I still don't know why I did it. My brother blames all of my character flaws on that worm, as the main reason... I so relate! great chapter.
Date: 05 Sep 2011 2:06 PM Title: Chapter 20
OMG...you ATE SLUGS!!! Ewwwwwww...........that has got to be a family story that gets repeated often I would think!!! LOL!!
Oh....photo and story for the rehearsal dinner!!! LOL!:
I think I could have lived the rest of my life happily not knowing that when I was eighteen months old I ate a slug.
Men are gross and COMPLETE flippin' babies!!!
Yes, Edward it was planned...don't ever underestimate 'girlpower'!:
“Oh, so this was planned,” Edward laughed, shaking his head.
Bella....press charges!!!!!!!
Seth and Claire? I'm thinking Edward is not going to like that. At. All.
Hmm...was surprised by Edward's reaction to Seth and Claire.
Here's to "relaxing" with Edward!!! *sigh* Damn lucky Bella!
Keye
Date: 05 Sep 2011 12:45 PM Title: Chapter 20
omg, i can not believe Tanya, and Edward will explode when he finds out but i bet by that time Tanya and jacob will be long gone. great update
Date: 05 Sep 2011 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 20
I hate that everyone has to put so much pressure on B. Tanya (really couldn't she take the hint - not to mention she should have talked with Edward around since she is supposedly his friend). Then the kids and the disrespectful way they reacted to her and hen Edward not letting it go, and then of course Alice with the surprises. HHmm.. maybe I am in a bad mood - I will have to reread later ;-)
Date: 05 Sep 2011 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 20
thanks good chapters