Date: 28 Sep 2011 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 14 "The Playroom"
Now thats what I am talking about! Go Bella! I am loving Misstress Bella big time. I am glad she put him in his place and her demands are prefect! She gave him herself 100% and he took advantage of it and he needed to be punished. I loved the last whipping right on his peter! Excellent! Well done and I can not wait to read who Zen met up with. I hope Edward keeps his promise to Bella!
Author's Response:
Thanks alot
I would bet his "peter "
will remember not to go
into any holes that are
not on Bella don't you agree !!!
Date: 27 Sep 2011 4:26 PM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
OH Edward...what will we do with you?
Date: 27 Sep 2011 4:25 PM Title: Chapter 12 " The Talk "
Wow, that was great! So glad they talked :D
Date: 27 Sep 2011 4:25 PM Title: Chapter 14 "The Playroom"
Loved this :) I cannot wait to see what happens next ;)
Author's Response:
Thanks
Date: 25 Sep 2011 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 14 "The Playroom"
The ten is for all the chapters. Interesting and instense writing. I hope to read more soon. You are doing exceptionally well for a first effort. Thanks for writing.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much that means alot to me reviews like this keep me going !
*** Looks down to the ground shaking head and blushing ***
Date: 24 Sep 2011 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 12 " The Talk "
Okay you are redeemed. That is more like it. No normal relationship where you are marrying someone is sharing sex with another. How about she has sex with Jesse, will Edward be okay with that? You know it is just sex and jesse does love her and they can be so good together................BULL SHIT.
Author's Response:
Thank you ...Thank you see if ya stick with it
things all turn out good ;)
Date: 24 Sep 2011 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
I am pretty sure what you are setting up here, I won't read on. BDSM is one thing this sharing 3 some part not for me. One more chapter and I think I will know.
Author's Response:
I never said it would be a poly story but I did state HEA
your choice but things will clear if you choose to continue
I feel you will be happy with it in the end but it is your choice !
Thanks for the review ! hope you give it a chance
Date: 24 Sep 2011 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 10 Reclaimed
This makes no sense. He marries Bella is in love with zed, wants him desperately. Bella buys a house she was out of money and wants to meet zed??
makes no sense lady.
Author's Response:
He has not married Bella...never said bella was in love with Zed
never said she wanted him desperatley either...
if you recall she bought the house befo...r right after she left the Isle
and yes she wants to meet Zed he held a place in Edwards past
Sorry if you don't like it !! a lot of people do ! I do however think you missed
a few things while reading maybe you should re-read it !
Date: 24 Sep 2011 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 8 Master I need you
Having sex with a man is still cheating. BDSM or not. Cheating is cheating.
Not very happy with Edward now.
Author's Response:
yes It is cheating and I don't aprove of it either but she did leave him so.....
still is it right no.... but it is a a HEA and bella will get everything fixed
I hope you do like where it leads thanks for reading !!
Date: 24 Sep 2011 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 14 "The Playroom"
ooo wonder who was watching zed not that i blame them hes hot!fab chapter go bella that was hot!update soon
Author's Response:
hmmm..... who was watching I wish I knew to
see ya next update
thanks for reading !
Date: 24 Sep 2011 2:43 PM Title: Chapter 13 "The Table's Have Turned"
wow that was hot!hope it brings edward out his self.can't wait tiill he goes bck to dominant edward but mistress bella is hot too.fab chapter.still think zed should hook up with jesse their both hot!
Author's Response:
All in time dear all in time
glad you like it Thanks
Date: 24 Sep 2011 1:22 PM Title: Chapter 14 "The Playroom"
HOT! HOT! HOT! Mistress......you go girl.
Author's Response:
***blushing as I look up from under my lashes ***
Thank you !
Date: 24 Sep 2011 9:36 AM Title: Chapter 14 "The Playroom"
Awww wanted one threesome..... ah well. go bella yum.
Author's Response:
hey now you never know what will happen she does want some training from are Master Zed !!!
Wink wink ;)
Date: 19 Sep 2011 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
Edward had sex with Zed? He broke her heart!
Please don't let Assward share her. I love the
plot bunny. :)
Author's Response:
yes Edward was a bad bad boy
Date: 18 Sep 2011 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 13 "The Table's Have Turned"
ok her switching.... cool. No ZED?!?!?! nooooo he is hawt.
Author's Response:
never fear dear the sexy beast is still here !!
Date: 18 Sep 2011 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 12 " The Talk "
oohh Jesse....so not a good idea to take advantage of the confused girl
Author's Response:
Yes Jesse was a bad boy here !!
Date: 18 Sep 2011 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
oooh Ian Somerhalder is so f'ing hawt. I love him.
Hmm so Zed can read her mind where eddie cant?
Author's Response:
My Edward can't read minds.....
however he does have a gift and
we will get to that later !!
Date: 18 Sep 2011 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 10 Reclaimed
yummy..... who is your Zed BTW? do you know or is it some random hottie's pic you found?
Author's Response:
Zed is just a Hottie that I found pretty sexy beasy huh!!
Date: 18 Sep 2011 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 9 Watched
hmmm that car is fuck hawt. Blue is my fav color too. Glad she called him. Wow lots of wolves still in forks although no vamps around anymore.
Author's Response:
vamps... wolves.....Forks never know !!!!
Date: 18 Sep 2011 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 8 Master I need you
glad charlie is ok. Guess they hid Jake's body too. Wow too months sitting on the beach.
Date: 18 Sep 2011 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 7 Dreams & Lies
checklists were interesting. Zed is hawt. cnat blame bella for wanting a little time to herself to think.
Date: 18 Sep 2011 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
yummy again
Date: 18 Sep 2011 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Master awakens
yumminess.
Date: 18 Sep 2011 8:59 PM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
Wow Sam killed Jake, Bella kills Sam, and the family splits up. Wow lots going on along with the lemony stuff
Date: 18 Sep 2011 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 3 Biggest mistake of my life
ah that explains my questions from the last chapter. guess he decided not to wait for the wedding after all huh. So why throw her into a tree?
Author's Response:
she was a bad newborn !!
thanks for eading
Date: 18 Sep 2011 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 2 Prologue Edward's POV
yummy. hmmm So Vicky turned her huh? So Eclipse didnt happen and we went straight to Breaking Dawn? no Nessie either??
Author's Response:
no nessie at all sorry
glad your enjoying it
Date: 18 Sep 2011 8:45 PM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
interesting start. Its a BDSM fic. not too ruff. If people dont understand what it is, there is a red X in the corner.
Author's Response:
Glad u like it
Date: 18 Sep 2011 8:45 PM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
Great googly moogly! That was hot! Love the Pics!!
Author's Response:
thanks alot
Date: 18 Sep 2011 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 13 "The Table's Have Turned"
loved it !!!!!
Author's Response:
You are the best thanks alot
Check out my new story
"Graduation Gifts"
Date: 18 Sep 2011 3:35 AM Title: Chapter 13 "The Table's Have Turned"
Loved this :) Pictures were hot, as always ;)
Author's Response:
thank ya ma'am
Date: 18 Sep 2011 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 13 "The Table's Have Turned"
That was definetly HOT!!! So glad the Zed will not be joining them, can't wait to see who tell him the great news!!!
Author's Response:
Well I'm glad you enjoyed that !
Thank you very much
Date: 17 Sep 2011 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 13 "The Table's Have Turned"
thank you! I am so glad she took control. i still think he needs to pay for what he did. Great chp. Cannot wait for the next one
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it !
enjoy !
Date: 17 Sep 2011 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 13 "The Table's Have Turned"
I wish I could give you a higher rating than this 10 'cause just the pics (thanks by the way for the fantasy material) are worth a 50 OMG!
And the story I gurry home everyday in hopes of a new hothothot!! chapter I"m gonna go for that shower and a siff HaHa ! drink now keep it up ooops ha!Ha!
Author's Response:
Thanks alot I am glad you enjoy all the pictures
I know I do !
Date: 17 Sep 2011 10:06 PM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
OMG that was a great chapter! I hope that Zed will take on Jesse as a submissive!! Ha that would be funny. Hoping that Bella as a dom will be enough for Edward. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much
Date: 16 Sep 2011 11:43 AM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
Love it.
Author's Response:
thanks
Date: 16 Sep 2011 11:42 AM Title: Chapter 3 Biggest mistake of my life
That was great.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much
Date: 16 Sep 2011 11:41 AM Title: Chapter 2 Prologue Edward's POV
Good chapter, wish it was longer.
Author's Response:
Thanks and they will get alot longer I promise
Date: 16 Sep 2011 11:40 AM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
Love it, great piccys.
Author's Response:
Thanks alot
Date: 16 Sep 2011 1:18 AM Title: Chapter 9 Watched
I just found this story and it is great, what an orginal idea!!! How very very naughty!!! I can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
THANK YOU SO MUCH !
Date: 15 Sep 2011 8:45 AM Title: Chapter 12 " The Talk "
ooo edwards gonna be mad.maybe zed and jesses can get together.fab chapter.hope edward listens to bella.update soon.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much!
Date: 14 Sep 2011 10:19 PM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
After talking to my Twilight partner in crime she suggested something that i hope could be where you are going with this. Does Zed have some hinding power like binding where he can make Edward do things that he should not have. Please tell me if I can hope for this since I really do not want to believe he would do this to Bella. drop a hint if you can. I will keep reading if you say there is a HEA for Edward and Bella together. I do love the pictures they are great.
Author's Response:
I can't share my secrets that would ruin it
but I do swear there is a HEA
they are ment to be and it will happen
thats all the hint you get love !!
thanks for reading !
Date: 14 Sep 2011 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 12 " The Talk "
Wow is all I can say you are a amazing writer!
I can't wait for you to update again what is
going to happen will Edward kill Jesse?
Will bella sleep with Zed ?
I can't wait hurry please !
Author's Response:
Geez Make me blush !!!
I will update soon I promise !!
thank you so much !
Date: 14 Sep 2011 3:53 AM Title: Chapter 12 " The Talk "
Thank youave for given her a backbone. I think she should send him away. So it is okay that he is fucking some guy but she can't. I would really like if you have Jesse and Zed leave and have Bella do some switch on Edward. I really love your writing but I still can not stand him hurting her so. Does he think it is okay that she is hurting because he was off getting his happy time.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much !!
If it wasn't for my Beta
I doubt you would say that
Thumbs up to her "RAH07890"
Date: 14 Sep 2011 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 3 Biggest mistake of my life
Well This is different. Have to be more into the story for development. I mean the lemon was good, but we need more story line.
Author's Response:
It gets there I promise I hope you enjoy it !
thanks for the review let me know as you
read along how you feel about it
Date: 13 Sep 2011 1:21 PM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
Ok let me start with the picture! AWESOME!
Edward is a selfish, cheating piece of shit. Not only did he keep very important information about his life and life style from Bella, he also cheated on her! They are engaged to be married! Does the commentment he made to her and the ring she wears mean nothing to him? Now Zed want part of the fun, Hell no! Please make our Bella stronge and tell these fuckers Fuck you and get out! It would be cool to see Bella get it on with Jessie and have Edwrad endure the pain Bella is going though. Or better yet Zed and Bella can both punish Edward by having sex with each other and not allowing Edward be a part of it and make him watch. Edward does not deserve Bella and he has to earn her trust and love back. How could he think that Bella would allow him to be her Dom and then allow another man be her Dom aswell. She would be a slave to them both and she would get to pleasure them both and maybe she would get something out of it. Please give our Bella a backbone and make her their Mistress! Oh yes!!!
Author's Response:
yes Edward was wrong he knows it I hope you like it just a bit
and remember it is a Hea thanks for reading
Date: 13 Sep 2011 9:00 AM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
wow that was hot!master zed is well hot!hope edward and bella make up.fab chapter.update soon
Author's Response:
glad you like the story and yes Zed is one
hot beast !
Date: 13 Sep 2011 2:53 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Master awakens
another really good chapter. your writing has improved with every chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you very much but I can't take
all the credit I have a great BETA !
Date: 13 Sep 2011 2:45 AM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
wow...that was hot!!!!
just out of curiosity, where r u from and how old r u?
this was your best writing yet. yay for u..:)
Author's Response:
Well thank you I am In Oregon
and I am 40 !
Date: 12 Sep 2011 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
No, please, I sure hope Bella is not that dumb!!! RUN! Go to Jesse! It will never work for the 3 of them, Bellas love for Edward is for him, fine to be attracted to another,but not act on it. Come on, I feared this!
Author's Response:
Remeber I did promise a HEA.... Everyone makes mistakes even Edward and Bella or we wouldn't be human......hmmm I guess that would be vampire
Enjoy and please stick with it I know you will enjoy it maybe not all parts but you will enjoy ;oP
Date: 12 Sep 2011 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 11 I just don't understand
I am sorry but I do not like the way the story is going. I can see Edward doing things before Bella but to have him be screwed by someone else and wanting him to stay hurts. I hope you make Bella strong enough to refuse the boys. I was soo mad this morning when I read the last chapter that I almost did not read on but you have promise a HEA for Edward and Bella that I had to read this chapter. If you are taking suggestion please make Zed go away and have Edward beg for forgiveness. They are mates and mates do not hurt eachother the way Edward is hurting Bella right now. Or give Bella her day and let her F**k Jesse because he wants to protect Bella which is more than i see Edward doing. Please give our girl some balls to kick him in his. He spent months not missing her but being F**ked some guy. How can you do that when you are in love. maybe you should think about it and help edward learn that you can't have it all. Let me know if this summary is wrong.
Author's Response:
Yes I did promise a happy every after, I will keep my word but every one has a past no matter how bad. Some even do keep it from there mates even in real life if they think it will hurt them to no the truth. Edward were going to start a d/s relationship were total honesty is important. I do not agree that he handled it right but again everyone makes mistakes. Now don't get me wrong I love Stephanie's, Edward and Bella but that is not real life even if they were human. I choose to make my Edward and bella a bit more real life I hope I have not affended you at all. I really hope you follow my story you may not like how it goes right now but as I said it is a HEA .....
Vamp_luvor
Date: 11 Sep 2011 8:06 AM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
Well, I think this story is HOT!!! Yes, Edward should have been honest first, but remember over 100 years, a lot of confessing here. But, sex with Master Zeb....if Edward wanted to be Bella Master doesn't this "cancel" Master Zebs contract with Edward?? Or since she didn't sign yet it still on?? Bella should not let Edward "off the hook" so easy for having sex with him, calling for advice ok but sex, no. If it were me I would always wonder, am I enough, is he really wanting a man...Bella missing for 2 months is dramatic, as well as Edward on a beach and not knowing 2 months has past,. Great story, can't wait to see what happens when all truth comes out. I just hope its not a 3 person orgy.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it you never no what
will happen please stay with us I'm
sure you will like it in the end !
Date: 11 Sep 2011 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
YES! Loved this ;)
Author's Response:
your the best thanks so much for all your work
***Smiles to you***
Date: 11 Sep 2011 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Master awakens
AMAZING :D
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it thanks alot
Date: 11 Sep 2011 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
Really loved this :)
Author's Response:
THANKS SO MUCH
Date: 11 Sep 2011 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 3 Biggest mistake of my life
This is great, but what is hard to read is the big paragraphs, break them up. Also, the grammar/spelling issues are hard to ignore. I am copy/pasting into a Word document and making corrections so it is easier for me to read. I really love this, don't get me wrong, it's just I am so anal about grammar/spelling. Cannot wait to read more :)
Author's Response:
Great I understand I will work on this and talk with my beta
I will split tha paragraphs up some thanks alot !
Date: 11 Sep 2011 2:28 AM Title: Chapter 2 Prologue Edward's POV
WOW, that was great :)
Author's Response:
I'm thinking its easer to read this time
chapter # 1 was not beta'd the rest are
thanks alot I am glad you like it
;)
Date: 11 Sep 2011 2:25 AM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
This sounds great so far, but it is very hard to read.
Author's Response:
hard to read ??? tell me what the problem is maybe I can fix it !
I am new to this my first story . I can't get better if you don't
tell me what's wrong thanks for the review.
Date: 11 Sep 2011 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 9 Watched
Can't wait for next chapter. Hard to believe that Edward is cheating on Bella one day after she left to sort out her feelings. With the same man no less. Not sure how to feel about that.
Author's Response:
Yes it is hard to read that ! but what you got to remeber is
Edward is also Zed's sub he called him for advise and
well we saw what happened keep with it I think you
will like where this is gonna go thanks for reading !
;)
Date: 10 Sep 2011 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 9 Watched
i hope master zed can help them.fantastic chapter.
Author's Response:
Well I hope so too, but you can never tell ! ;)
Date: 10 Sep 2011 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 8 Master I need you
wow master zeds hot!!!
Author's Response:
That he is dear that he is !!
Date: 05 Sep 2011 1:37 AM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
Hello! Fisrt off great story! I really like dom/sub Edward and Bella stories just as mush as Bella/Edward dom sub stories. I was going to review tomorrow but I couldn't wait to get this out of my chest. I have real issues with Edward.
He asked for honesty in his agreement with Bella and he was not honest with her at all. He never told her he was with many other women, that at one point in his life he was a sub and most importantly that he was bi sexual. That is something he should have disclosed to Bella at least when he got engaged to Bella. How can he keep nsuch a thing from her. Not only does she have to be aware of women going after her man but men too or Edward leaving her for one or the other.
I am glad Bella left because she really needs to figure out if this is the life she wants to lead. Will Edward marry her or is he just going to keep her as a sub forever? He does not even tell Bella to her face about his past! How fucked up is that? I promise you I will review everything to put up a chapter because I want to see how Edwrad is going to react wothout Bella for a while.
Author's Response:
Master Edward in my story well he's a bit messed up ya know !
things will get going and you will see were this is going I hope you
like it in the end I have put alot of thought into this!
Thanks for reading
Date: 04 Sep 2011 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 7 Dreams & Lies
wow bella left poor edward although i dont blame her i think telling someone your bi sexual is a pretty serious thing to overlook i am looking forward to seeing what happnes next
Author's Response:
yes it is and the way he told her was wrong too
there will be some explaining to do !!
Date: 04 Sep 2011 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
great chapter im sorry i was one of those readers not reviewing i will do better
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review !!
Date: 04 Sep 2011 11:01 PM Title: Chapter 7 Dreams & Lies
Ya know I am in that waterfall picture ya know just in front of him do you see me lol great job hun keep it up
Author's Response:
You and me both honey !!
thank you
Date: 04 Sep 2011 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
I think I want my own Dark Angel to submit to ... yep yep yep....I need a cold shower
Date: 04 Sep 2011 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Master awakens
such a good read is this your first story I wonder why not so many reviews it has alot of reads !! great job
Date: 04 Sep 2011 10:57 PM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
some hot shit going on can't wait tell next chapter
Date: 04 Sep 2011 10:56 PM Title: Chapter 3 Biggest mistake of my life
You didn't just leave me at a cliff dang you woman .... love you story it is can we say fucking hot
Date: 04 Sep 2011 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 2 Prologue Edward's POV
Oh my my look at that pic Nice I am really looking foward to where these two are going
Date: 04 Sep 2011 10:54 PM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
Wow is all I have to say looking good
Date: 03 Sep 2011 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
I'm so sorry but I was kinda busy reacting a few of the picture with my personal boytoy/2 legged sex toy!!!!!! whoops I drooled a little don't ask where hahahaha!!! You are the best!!! More More puleaseee!!
Author's Response:
It's all good just make sure to keep the keys clean LOL
thanxs for reading next chapter up in within a few days !!
Muuaahh
Date: 02 Sep 2011 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 3 Biggest mistake of my life
What happen to Jake?
Author's Response:
I hate cliffies too swore I never would
write them but they are so fun
thanks for reading more good stuff to come
muuaahh
Date: 02 Sep 2011 12:10 PM Title: Chapter 2 Prologue Edward's POV
OMG!!!!!!! The picture is amazing!!!!!! Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response:
oh yes trust me they get better
thanks
Date: 02 Sep 2011 11:59 AM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
Just found your story. Sounds very very interesting and very very HOT!!!!!
Author's Response:
thank you very much
Date: 02 Sep 2011 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
I can't wait!!
Author's Response:
my beta should have my next chapter back to me soon
thanks for reading muuaah ;)
Date: 02 Sep 2011 1:35 AM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
I hope you continue this story, I really like this dominate Edward......
Keep him commmmmmmmming......
Thanks
PAT
Author's Response:
Thank you very much I like this Edward too.
** smiles to you **
Date: 02 Sep 2011 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
I'm surprised you got so many reads and so little reviews. Those two are some very naughty dirty vampires, I'm very curious to see where you take the story
Author's Response:
I am very shocked to there all good reviews
I'm told they all like it but no reviews !
So Master Edward said he will bring
out his FLOGGER and set every one straight !
Muuaah to you Thanks ;)
Date: 01 Sep 2011 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
Well, all I can say is HOT!!! Wow, who would haved thought Edward is a Dom?? Can't wait for more!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks alot I like it hot!!
Edward A dom yes but keep
with the story there is alot
of things that are going to be
going on and as always it will be
hot !
Date: 01 Sep 2011 9:15 PM Title: Chapter 6 Collared
I am sorry not to have reviewed before now. I enjoy your story so far, the glimpse into Edwards mind today was great. It is nice to see him as worried about being rejected as Bella is. Great work.
Author's Response:
Well thank you very much I try to go back and forth
between there minds cause I like Edwards thoughts
he may be a dom but there is alot more to him you
will soon see thanks again **smiles to you**
Date: 30 Aug 2011 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Master awakens
omg i love it
Author's Response:
Thanks alot I should be adding
at least 4 more chapters in the
next few days Glad you like !
Date: 25 Aug 2011 1:45 AM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
:-)
Author's Response:
I take it that you are liking it ;)
Thank you
Date: 24 Aug 2011 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
These two are insatiable! Love it!
Author's Response:
that they are i have to say if I was with a man that looked that fine
I would be insatiable as well LOL
thanks alot
muuaah !
Date: 24 Aug 2011 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 3 Biggest mistake of my life
So hot!
Author's Response:
why thank you ma'am
Date: 24 Aug 2011 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 2 Prologue Edward's POV
Bella is so naughty! I love seeing this side of Edward!
Author's Response:
I love this side too
Thank You
Date: 24 Aug 2011 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 4 Where's Jake, Edward"
Hi, the story is good...the wording seems to be rushing, skipping over details so that the emotion and the feeling of being right there with your characters cannot quite develop. I like the story and will keep reading, but it would be great if you spend some words describing the scene and the feelings the characters were having.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much , this is what I need . that way I can keep this going strong
I am new at this first story ever I will take all the advice I can get
so thank you again and I will work on that !!
Date: 21 Aug 2011 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 2 Prologue Edward's POV
I like master Edward!
Author's Response:
I do to very much he will be in the later chapters
alot but Isabella is rembering back so it will
take a bit for him to fully show up
Thanks so much
Date: 20 Aug 2011 12:19 PM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
keep going
Author's Response:
Thank you very much I will
Date: 20 Aug 2011 12:08 PM Title: Chapter1 Prologue Bella's POV
great job look forward to more
Author's Response:
Thank you so much