[Report This]Date: 18 Oct 2012 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 7
Et bien l'histoire est triste mais j'aime ce qu'a fait Alice !
Par contre Carlisle n'a pas été à la hauteur, il va avoir du mal à se faire pardonner.
Edward a enfin pris sa décision, j'ai hâte de lire la suite.
Merci.:) !
Date: 18 Oct 2012 9:56 PM Title: Prologue
I don't think that Mac should forgive him that easily!! I think that she should make him work for it he missed 5 years of her life & he can't get that back!!
I also think that Bella forgave him to easily as well!! Honestly she should really hate him for what he did!! I mean he new that he slept with her & he didn't say anything he just left like nothing had happened!! I think that Bella should really make it hard for him to win her heart!!
I love Edward but this Edward was pissing me off how could he not tell Bella straight away when he saw her that he thinks that hes the father to her daughter ok I understand that he was scared & everything but he should of had the balls to tell her!! I mean he did a DNA test behind her back!!
Both Bella & Mac should make him work really hard to win them back & they shouldn't make it easy on him either!! 5 years is alot to make up for!!
Date: 18 Oct 2012 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 7
Wow that was interesting the whole brandon fam
Im guessin carlise went to rehab for the drinkin after alice left?
Date: 18 Oct 2012 8:03 PM Title: Chapter 7
ok I was confused in the beginning with the flash backs, but I got it when you said the accident was after the concert. But what I don't understand is if Bella and Alice were best friends then why doesn't she know that Alice and Edward are siblings????
Author's Response:
Simple - Alice left after the fight with Carlisle and she moved in with Jasper, but was helping Bella with her pregency. Remember that Emmett moved Bella's stuff to his place so she would be closer, she never got to see her all the time. Sure Alice stayed in contact with her brother but not for a few years. Mackynzie was born before Alice was talking to her siblings again! Hope that helps a little bit :)
Date: 18 Oct 2012 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 7
Hilarious *eye roll.* Alice gets called a slut and Edward's the one who practically rapes women. Seems fair.
Date: 18 Oct 2012 12:32 PM Title: Chapter 6
Dude, who followed him to the office? So wrong! Are bella and mac comin to thanks at esmes? Does emmett knoe eds the dad? I love this, and bellas the twins teacher, sneaky!
[Report This]Date: 18 Oct 2012 11:10 AM Title: Chapter 6
J'ai bien ce chapitre mais Edward est décevant, il n'a pas l'air heureux d'avoir Mac, ça donne vraiment l'impression qu'il ne sait pas quoi faire avec elle !
[Report This]Date: 18 Oct 2012 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 6
Ohhh so exciting, I cant wait.
[Report This]Date: 18 Oct 2012 5:12 AM Title: Chapter 6
There is so much going on. Man these people have some complicated lives.
Date: 18 Oct 2012 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 6
What's up with Edward still not dealing with the issue of his daughter. This Edward is a real douche! If I was Bella I would tell him to forget it.
Date: 18 Oct 2012 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 6
This was a good chapter and you have a good story line going for you but periodically during the story, expecially during the dialogue, it feels choppy. Sometimes overstating the obvious can lead to the choppy feeling. Other than that, it was a pretty good chapter.
Date: 17 Oct 2012 4:13 PM Title: Chapter 5
OK - I have to know what happens next - I'm not a patient person. LOL
Date: 17 Oct 2012 3:14 PM Title: Chapter 4
Wonderful, this chapter starded the flow that will lead us to beautiful story.
[Report This]Date: 17 Oct 2012 8:20 AM Title: Chapter 5
So do the crazy kids get to meet next chapter? I hope so.
Date: 17 Oct 2012 5:36 AM Title: Chapter 5
This was an OK chapter. There were some gramatical errors, but they mostly had to do with the tenses, eg. past tense or present tense. But overall not bad.
Author's Response:
Sorry, I have all my chapters beta'd but we tend to miss a few here and there. If you would let to help me with my chapters I'd love your help! Just contact me through email :)
[Report This]Date: 17 Oct 2012 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 5
OMG! That is hilarious the way the twins handled Tanya, scary but good.
Date: 17 Oct 2012 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 5
loved the flashback, kids can be devious
Date: 17 Oct 2012 1:13 AM Title: Chapter 5
I love this, more please!
[Report This]Date: 16 Oct 2012 11:01 PM Title: Chapter 5
Bravo les jumeaux !
Comme ils sont intéligents ces enfants ! Ils ont fait partir Tanya.
Le récit de la mort d'Elisabeth est très triste.
Merci pour ce bon chapitre.
Date: 16 Oct 2012 11:00 PM Title: Chapter 5
Wow. I REALLY hate Edward. He has some major character to develop.
Author's Response:
Lol, it gets better, promise :)
Date: 16 Oct 2012 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 5
loved it! can't wait for more!
Date: 16 Oct 2012 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 4
So he knew about her being pregnant the whole time??? What the hell!!!!
Author's Response:
He just put the pieces together! He's a smart man :P
[Report This]Date: 16 Oct 2012 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 4
J'ai aimé la discussion d'Edward et de Mac, elle est adorable.
La discussion entre Edward et Bella était aussi parfaite et Bella a donné sa chance à Edward. J'aime ce chapitre.
Merci.
Date: 16 Oct 2012 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 4
I really enjoy reading your story but I think you could work on the emotional development of your characters. You've started off really well and there's so much more you can do to make them seem like actual people instead of some characterization and a simple story line.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the advice :) Incase you miss this response, please contact me at fanfiction: 19-twilight-fan-93 (orginial, I know), or through email: maddisonreid9@gmail.com
I would love to work with you to make my stories better, if you're willing to help me that is :)
Date: 16 Oct 2012 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 4
well here is one review, really good chapter by the way.
Date: 16 Oct 2012 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 4
Love it and can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: 15 Oct 2012 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 3
again so very evil of you :) it's only been 2 minutes and I'm dieing for more
Date: 15 Oct 2012 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 3
This looks very promising!! Bella has been so fortunate in so many ways. I'm curious what Esdwards deal is -- not too encouraging, the way he reacted to Rose. And is his wife gone as I deceased, or gone as in she flew the coop.
Date: 15 Oct 2012 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 3
love this story, cant wait for the next chapter
[Report This]Date: 15 Oct 2012 6:01 AM Title: Chapter 3
Hmm, I love how the family have rallied around her, but I am a little disapointed in Edward for not telling her yet. He needs his big girl panties!
He need to let Bella know, he know or think he knows. No matter what the truth needs to come out. I am dying to know why he left in the morning so early... was it because of the groupie that turned to his wife or did he have an affair.
Date: 15 Oct 2012 3:21 AM Title: Chapter 3
Love it, more soon?
Author's Response:
Very soon! In approx. 17 hours ;) After my math midterm there will be another chapter! :D Thanks for the review!
Date: 14 Oct 2012 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 3
Oh shit daddy is there, I wonder if he will see the resemblance between Dr.Cullen and his graddaughter....great story keep up the good work..
Author's Response:
You'll have to wait and see. He might. Thank you, and thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2012 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 3
Yeah... So Edward had someone at the time and still went with Bella? Not the kind of guy I would want around.
Author's Response:
It seems like that now but it'll all be explained within the next few chapters! Thanks for the review :)
Date: 14 Oct 2012 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 3
As far as I can remember Rose's mother's name was Cathrine and her father was Theodore...I think
Author's Response:
I searched for it on the internet but couldn't find anything! I'm already on chapter 16 of this story, so it's too late to change it now. Thanks for the review though :) Those names do sound familiar though!
Date: 14 Oct 2012 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 3
Edward knows she is his daughter but he doesn't tell Rose that he knows the truth. Will he talk to Bella about it soon? What about his "wife" did she pass away for real for run away because she did not want kids? Please update soon! Also, YAY Daddy is here to see his girls!
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2012 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 3
J'aime beaucoup ce chapitre !
Je suis un peu triste que Bella et Edward soient si froid l'un envers l'autre.
Ah oui se serait bien une belle bannière !!!!
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2012 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 2
Ah je suis contente ! Je crois que Mac a trouvé son papa.
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2012 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 2
Wow, I like where this story is going, I just hope you do update soon.
Fiorella
Date: 14 Oct 2012 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 2
Love it!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!)
Date: 14 Oct 2012 3:30 PM Title: Chapter 2
I'm on the edge of my seat and can't wait till the next update!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!)
Date: 14 Oct 2012 1:31 PM Title: Chapter 2
Great story so far! Can't wait to see Edward's recation when he finds out he is a daddy.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!)
Date: 14 Oct 2012 12:41 PM Title: Chapter 2
:) Hee hee. We all know the result but still really really looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!)
Date: 14 Oct 2012 12:39 PM Title: Chapter 2
noo. why stop it there it's just evil :) you should update more often, lol
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!)
Date: 14 Oct 2012 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 2
So he became a doctor and he did and illegal act by running the DNA without her consent. great chapter, please don't give up for lack of reviews.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!) Don't worry, I'm not going anywhere :)
Date: 14 Oct 2012 10:08 AM Title: Chapter 2
Cannot wait for the next chapter
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!)
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2012 6:43 AM Title: Chapter 2
I knew it! The damn spaz hit it and quit it. Some one should hit that guy.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me smile :) The next chapter will be posted soon! (within the next hour!)
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2012 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
I can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review :) The next chapter will be posted soon!
[Report This]Date: 13 Oct 2012 9:52 PM Title: Prologue
Nice......sor far.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review :) The next chapter will be posted soon!
Date: 13 Oct 2012 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love it ! Can't wait till the next update!
Author's Response:
I'm not sure if other people can see my responses (not that familiar with this site) but if they can't then I'll start sending previews of the next chapter!
Thanks for your review :) The next chapter will be posted soon!
[Report This]Date: 13 Oct 2012 11:43 AM Title: Chapter 1
J'ai bien aimé ce chapitre.
J'attends des nouvelles !!!
Merci.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review :) Althought I had to use google translator :P The next chapter will be posted soon!
Date: 13 Oct 2012 9:31 AM Title: Prologue
Look forward to seeing where this story goes.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review :) The next chapter will be posted soon!
Date: 12 Oct 2012 12:46 PM Title: Prologue
Ok, got me hooked. Good story premise.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, the next chapter has been posted :) Looking foward to hearing your thoughts, and every reviewer from now on gets a look at the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: 12 Oct 2012 8:07 AM Title: Prologue
Ah oh! Bella, Bella, Bella. Keep them legs closed!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, it made me laugh, and brightened my day after writing a nasty midterm! The next chapter has been posted :) Looking foward to hearing your thoughts, and every reviewer from now on gets a look at the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: 12 Oct 2012 7:05 AM Title: Prologue
C'est un début très prometteur !
Author's Response:
I had to use google translator to understand this but thanks for the review :)
Date: 12 Oct 2012 6:45 AM Title: Prologue
Thanks for writing, looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review :)
Date: 12 Oct 2012 5:59 AM Title: Prologue
im so excited for you to post this story!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review :)