Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:58 AM Title: Distance in Your Eyes
Ya gotta love Peter. ROFL Alcede and Leah??? that is gonna be an interesting match
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:58 AM Title: Paradise is Coming
Andrew sounds great. I LOVE Peter. Love how you are meshing the two.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:57 AM Title: Your Sweet Moonbeam
glad they both see the need to think and compromise. liking paul in this one
Love all these pics
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:57 AM Title: Eighteen and Beautiful
Loved shower time and the wonderful shopping experience
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:57 AM Title: I Was a Lonely Soul
Great job Wendy. Godric is being so sweet with her. Can’t wait for more.
LOVE that first pic.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:56 AM Title: Two People Meant to Be Together
Love seeing Alcede taking Paul under his wing. Ah the goddess appears again. Cant wait for more
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:56 AM Title: I Keep Trying
Like the twists with Paul and the pack. Cant wait for more.
Oh and Nora is going to regret messing with G I think
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:56 AM Title: Resignation to the End
ya killin me with the unanswered questions!!!! Love it though. Paul huh? hope he behaves. lol
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:55 AM Title: Harder to Find What’s Right
Oh wow. I was willing to give Charlie the benefit of the doubt until this chapter. So glad Eric put him in his place, and as much as it hurt, that Bella learned the truth.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:55 AM Title: The World is Rising
Great chapter. Glad they got the venom out of her. Oooohh B has some mad language skills now. Cant wait for next chapter
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:54 AM Title: I Won’t Let it Go Down
lol Of course Eric flirted with Freya. Great ideas for the blood oath Bella. Cool little ceremony
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:54 AM Title: When You Love Someone
LOVE the purples in the pic
Eric is just too cute with his teasing. Love seeing Bella’s thoughts. Really loving this Eric. Ludwig is funny. Eric is not happy with Daddy C. Love Eric’s money arguments.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:54 AM Title: Pick Yourself Up
Loving the care you are putting into developing the relationships. Would love to see more of Alcede’s backstory. Maybe when he trains the wolves?
Charlie I’m so-so about but leaning toward not liking him much. Ludwig is hilarious.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:53 AM Title: Glorious Sadness
Excellent chapter. Never thought about the van that way. great points.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:53 AM Title: But I’m Yours
excellent backstory
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:52 AM Title: Strength To Go
Excellent as always. Cant wait for Alcede and Eric to get there. Hope Pam behaves. Feel a little sorry for Charlie. He was never really given a chance to learn to be a parent, but he could have done better. Liking these twists you are putting on about the blood and the “drug” and such. Cant wait for more
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:52 AM Title: I Wanna Call You Mine
Wow poor Charlie. kinda feel for him. He wasn’t allowed to be a dad with her growing up. Of course he doesnt know how to handle a teen.
But loving this and cant wait for more.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:51 AM Title: Be My Baby
Cant wait for more. Cant wait for Pam and Alcede to get there. That ought to be funny. Dr Ludwig too. Wonder if she’ll have more to say about the pack.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:51 AM Title: Hush Now, Don’t You Cry
Poor Charlie. Dose of harsh reality. Loving story so far
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:51 AM Title: Gentle Implosions
oooh liking this. Cant wait for more.
Date: 17 Nov 2013 7:50 AM Title: Prologue: Set You Free
Another great start!!!
[Report This]Date: 16 Nov 2013 10:14 PM Title: Strength To Go
I am glad Charlie will be taken to task for his neglect of his child. Parents are meant to protect, guide and love their children -- never to ignore them because it is easier. I am glad Pam seems to be responding more positively to Bella being human. I really, really like the way you have writen Ludwig. I am curious, will your Pam be more like the show's Pam or the books' Pam?
[Report This]Date: 16 Nov 2013 8:24 PM Title: I Wanna Call You Mine
Charlie was a foolish man and he missed out on the best part of being a parent -- being a part of a child' life and watching them grow and change and just be. Even as a teenager she is still going through that stuff. I am eager to hear what Ludwig has to say so I will end this review by saying how very much I enjoyed this chapter.
[Report This]Date: 16 Nov 2013 8:53 AM Title: Be My Baby
I liked the conversation with Godric, Eric and Charlie. Charlie is awful cold to be thinking about an election when his child is so fragile but I have known people with parents like that (sadly). I like that Bella has a growing circle of people who will help protect her until she can protect herself. :)
[Report This]Date: 16 Nov 2013 8:34 AM Title: Hush Now, Don’t You Cry
I love the impression Godric makes at the end of this chapter. I really liked the whole chapter, the conversation was very well done. :)
[Report This]Date: 16 Nov 2013 7:57 AM Title: Gentle Implosions
This chapter was really great. I like how smart and caring your characters are - Sam, Godric and Eric were beautifully done.
[Report This]Date: 15 Nov 2013 10:32 PM Title: Prologue: Set You Free
I don't think I've reviewed this chapter yet because I hadn't fully read it but I am glad I have because it drew me in very well. If I were not already familiar with some of the later chapters of this story, this chapter would have hooked me. I really liked your Sam, btw, he thinks first and is smart. I always thought the canon wolves were a bit too quick and often foolish so I really liked this. Oh, in my last review (about the club opening) I forgot to mention how much I liked the addition of the pictures, they made the chapter even better.
[Report This]Date: 15 Nov 2013 9:15 PM Title: Your Love Lifts Me Out of Time
This chapter was enchanting! I love the playfulness and closeness of the three of them. I am glad Pam has decided to play it smart, I hope she will develop a friendship with Bella and Charlotte too, after all, they have enough enemies. Godric and Eric are human celebrities? That is neat. I admit, I never considered that aspect of the whole revelation thing. Anyway, I truly enjoyed this chapter. I really like your writing style. :)
Date: 15 Nov 2013 1:28 PM Title: Your Love Lifts Me Out of Time
aww great chapter love it cant wait to see what happens next
[Report This]Date: 10 Nov 2013 11:17 PM Title: But I’m Yours
Wow, that was an intense and passionate recital of Godric's personal history, not to mention his plea for Bella to accept him and his devotion for her.
OMFG, I didn't catch it the first time around, but it appears that Godric's maker is none other than the Ancient Pythoness; if I'm correct, then that is too fricken cool!
Well done - keep up the good work.
:-)
[Report This]Date: 10 Nov 2013 7:09 PM Title: Strength To Go
I'm wondering about the identity of the person or persons responsible for having gathered and posted the various info on Bella and the La Push pack.
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'Then her face hardens and she goes back down to Chief Sawn, “Your turn. ... Be afraid.” And she snaps the gloves on her hands.'
*::snickers::*
Be afraid, Charlie, Dr. Ludwig is geared up to give you a THOROUGH examination... so turn your head, cough, and cry for your mommy. I know, I took the above abbreviated quote somewhat out of context, but it seemed too funny to pass up, you know? LOL
;~D
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With the intensity of Eric's reaction to all things Bella, I'm wondering if he is also her mate. If so, then Bella is one lucky girl!
Well done - keep up the good work.
:-)
[Report This]Date: 10 Nov 2013 1:52 PM Title: I Wanna Call You Mine
Very exciting - love the drama and sense of anticipation.
Well done - keep up the good work.
:-)
.-.-. errors found needing correction:
1) 'Grimacing as he takes in the dismissal ... Charlie haltingly beings, ...' ["beings" ought to be "begins"];
2) '"... but she is your live in maid. ...."' ["live in" ought to be "live-in"];
3) '"Instead she has had to learn from a young age to bear the weight of an adults worries."' ["an adults worries" ought to be "an adult's worries"]
Date: 09 Nov 2013 9:32 PM Title: Have It All
Loved it update soon
[Report This]Date: 09 Nov 2013 3:40 PM Title: Be My Baby
Freaking awesome and exciting too - I love it.
Well done - keep up the good work.
:-)
.-.-. error found needing correction:
'"... a markedly compassionate nature to latent physic powers is enhanced ...."' ["physic" ought to be "psychic"]
[Report This]Date: 09 Nov 2013 2:53 PM Title: Hush Now, Don’t You Cry
All the things thrown his way, I'd say that Charlie is handling it rather well.
Well done - keep up the good work.
:-)
[Report This]Date: 09 Nov 2013 10:20 AM Title: Gentle Implosions
I'm stoked by the depth of feeling displayed by BOTH Eric and Godric for Bella; especially their outrage over the details of her childhood, or the lack thethereof.
Well done - keep up the good work.
:-)
[Report This]Date: 09 Nov 2013 2:59 AM Title: Prologue: Set You Free
Cool first chapter.
Well done - keep up the good work.
:-)
[Report This]Date: 08 Nov 2013 9:59 PM Title: Have It All
This chapter was delightful! I love the way Nora will be dealt with instead of simple death. I also liked Eric comforting Bella. This chapter was really great. :)
Date: 02 Nov 2013 8:15 PM Title: If I Had My Way
great story love it cant wait to see what happens next update soon