Edward's back story was very well done.  It was original and interesting and "fit" the level of angst needed for the rest of the story.  The declarations of love seem a little fast, but it sounds like they're both a little overwhelmed with the intensity of their emotions after all the trauma they've survived.

I'm looking forward to hearing more about Bella's back story.  Thanks for the chapter!

Evil cliffy!  Thanks for all your hard work!

Great chapter.  Love the cliffy! 

Great chapter!  I loved the way you resolved Edward's decision to leave and I also like seeing Bella's attempt to create some space.  Considering that many of the developments in the story seemed to happen very fast, this "step back" (even though it's just a small step) is good for the story.

Great chapter.  The marriage talk seems "in character" for these two (IMHO), so it doesn't bother me.

Is the blog the only place to see EPOV?  I typically don't take the time to look at author blogs, but I can try to find it from your profile.  Thanks for the chapter!

Great job!  Very exciting!  Thanks for the quick update!

Great chapter!  Love the Tolkien bits, they're a nice touch.  Looking forward to finding out if this is the proposal!

This was a great chapter.  It is interesting how Bella is starting to relax and Edward seems to be getting more nervous and on edge!

I'm excited that VV and LRM are caught up.  It will be fun to alternate between the POVs in a more "real time" fashion.  I really appreciate all the hard work and effort you put into your stories.

Great chapter!  The possibility of James doing a show with Renee's killer sets the stage from some future drama and the scenes relating to the birthday celebration were a lot of fun.

This was really helpful.  Thanks for posting it.

I thought this was really well-done and I enjoyed reading it.  I don't know anything about this disorder, but I thought you wrote about it in a caring, sensitive way.

Great chapter.  I thought the confrontation with James was well done, but I bet that's not the last we'll see of him. 

Thanks for writing EPOV!

I loved the "trapped in the diner" scene.  The whole stalking episode is a riot. 

I still enjoyed the chapter, even if I wasn't "on the edge of my seat."  It's just nice to hear both sides of the story.

I enjoyed the chapter.  I don't think it's a problem to have two separate stories.  Are you getting complaints?  It will be fun wihen you're caught up and the chapters are more in sync (time-wise)

I enjoyed the EPOV for these chapters.  I'm really looking forward to Edward's upcoming chat with Charlie about his situation.

So exciting to see this from Edward's POV.  Thanks for the update!

Excellent chapter!  Edward did the right thing.  Thanks for the update.

I loved the much anticipated meeting between Holmes and Carlisle.  Carlisle is right to be a bit nervous about the famed detective's powers of observation. 

I look forward to reading the next chapter!  Not only for more Holmes/Carlisle interatction, but also to learn about the mysterious disappearance.

Great job!

I loved this story!  The dialog between Carlisle and Holmes on the bridge was very well done.  You did a wonderful job in both resolving the mystery of the missing widow and explaining how Holmes figured out that Carlisle was not human.

Edward's brief appearance at the end was fun to read too!

So glad to see an update!  Thanks for the chapter, and congrats on your finals. 

Definitely not pissed off here!  RL should always take precedence over FF!  (I know, a radical idea to some.)  Best of luck with your studies.  I'll still be here when the next update is posted.

Very nice birthday party and transition to Nevada.

Great!  I don't know how I missed this chapter when you first posted it!  Of all the chapters to miss, this is NOT the one to miss!  I loved their intimate moments and it was a wonderful idea to have their first time in Chicago.

It was interesting to have her learn about the wolves before she learns anything about the Cullens.

I also enjoyed the return of Stalkerward.  Thanks for posting this!

Your "sick obsession" with making the vampires eat human food makes for amusing scenes!

The "baby" discussion was good, too.

I'm wondering when Charlotte will make a move.  Love the suspense!  Thanks for the update.

Very nice scene with Charlie!  Thanks for the update!

Another well done chapter!  I think it's interesting to have Andria's thoughts somewhat accessible and I look forward to learning more about why sometimes Edward can't hear her thoughts.

I think you did an especially good job of portraying Edward as resolved to stay alone, only to have Carlisle's words of wisdom at the end begin to create just the hint in his mind of new possibilities.

Thanks for writing this!

You did a very good job of providing Andria with the Cullen back story without dragging it out unnecessarily (since most readers already know the back story). 

It was interesting to have her react so differently to the mind-reading abilities of Edward.  I really liked the part where he was answering her questions before she asked them.

I'm intrigued with why her thoughts are sometimes blocked.  It will be interesting to see you explain this (when the time is right, of course). 

Great job!

I really like the way you've written Andria.  She is quite different from Bella, which I think is important, but yet, the reader can still see how she could be attractive to Edward and how a relationship with her would NOT be "Bella:  the sequel" but a completely new experience for him.

I also like the way you write Edward coming to terms with the idea that he could have a relationship with someone without betraying what he had with Bella. "I was only making room in my heart for Alexandria."

Well Done!

It was good to learn more about Andria's back story and Travis's suspicious death.  Thanks for the new chapter!

I hope Edward won't be stubborn for too long!  I look forward to seeing how you resolve some of their issues regarding the future.

I can hardly wait to see what kind of trouble they get into in NYC!  Thanks for writing this story.

Very exciting!  Quite the close call.  Thanks for the update!

I like Andria's relationship with Jasper.  It will be interesting to see where you take this.  Her mistrust and discomfort around Peter was intriguing.  I'm guessing there might be more to this as the story progresses.

Thanks for the update!

Very nice!  I hope poor Edward gets some relief soon.  Thanks for the update!

I like the way you resolved the questions about "true mates."  I think you handled that issue very well and in a plausible manner.

I like the relationship between Jasper and Andria.  Thanks for the update!

I loved the cliffy at the end!  It's an interesting twist that Charlotte is out to get revenge by targeting Jasper.  I didn't expect it, but it makes perfect sense.

Great chapter!

This was a very powerful chapter with the confrontation between Andria and her mother.  I think you did a very good job of making it sound realistic and keeping the characters sympathetic.

The "lime" at the end was great and I'm looking forward to more Edward and Andria lemony goodness!

P.S.  Great job resolving some of the questions and comments I had about the draft of the chapter.

I'm sorry to be late in sending a review for this chapter.

I loved the wedding, it was lovely and very sweet.  Poor Andria!  Having to wear a wedding dress during a flight, even on a private plane, sounds uncomfortable to me. 

I really liked this chapter. The attempted attack and Edward's reaction made for a very exciting scene. I'm really excited that she's pregnant and can hardly wait to see what happens next. Thanks for the chapter!

Good job with this one-shot.  I enjoyed reading it.

I like that you're starting your story with them already in a relationship.  This is different from so many stories, which focus on them meeting and falling in love.  I think your use of flashbacks to tell their back story works well, but in this chapter I was initially confused by the flashback because it was them discussing something that happened even earlier (almost a flashback in a flashback).  However, my confusion didn't last so I still think this is a "five-cup" chapter!

I think Bella is very realistic to be hesitant to come out about her relationship with Edward.

As I said before, I love to hate Renee! 

The conversation between Bella and Jacob was very good and whatever you're setting up between these two, you're doing a great job building some type of relationship between them.

The ending conversation between Edward and Bella was also excellent.  I liked his admission to "not being as good a person" as Bella and her gracious forgiveness ("it will take more than that to break us up").  Edward is really digging a deep hole for himself! 

Your story is really well written with excellent pacing and consistent, interesting characterizations.  I'm looking forward to future chapters.

One last typo/spelling comment:  In several chapters (including this one) you use the word, "woah"  It is actually spelled "Whoa"  I don't know why I see this mistake so often, but I do.

The emotions and remorse and guilt are really well-written in this chapter.  Emmett's attempt at helping was well intentioned, but looks like poor advice to me!  I can see it back firing already.

I like that Edward is beginning to worry that he may actually BE the asshole he only thought he was pretending to be. 

Good cliffy at the end.

You did a fantastic job building up to this moment in the story.  It's a direction that the story had to take and even if readers hate to see it play out like this, it fits perfectly with the way you've written the characters.

The Edward you've written is spoiled and selfish and would definitely react to Bella missing his party with an adult version of a temper tantrum!

Great job!

I love your Edward with all his imperfections and insecurities.  I'm glad that you're not afraid to write him as someone that is not always lovable or even likable.  But, just as important, he isn't too unlikable; I still care about the character.   

I think Edward DID have a good point when he told Bella they were now a team and had to consider each other in their actions.  He probably didn't tell her in the best way, but he was right.

I imagine it must be difficult to write a business meeting and keep it interesting, but you did a great job.  The pacing for the meeting was well-done.

I loved the girlfriend time with Bella, Alice, and Rose.  Tanya's intrusion and the subsequent dialog was also great.