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Nauseous vs. Nauseated Do you know the difference? Most authors don’t.
The difference in meaning between nauseated and nauseous is similar to the difference between the words poisoned and poisonous. A person who feels sick to their stomach is nauseated. Whatever it is that is making them feel that way is nauseous. For example, sour milk is nauseous and makes you feel nauseated when you smell it. A person would never say, "I feel poisonous" (unless they have a mouthful of venom, ha ha), so I person would never say, "I feel nauseous." I hope this helps!
He was the lead singer of The Volturi. One of People's Sexiest Men. I was a new recording artist with an entire album riding on my shoulders. We were Hollywood's newest "it couple." Until he ruined everything - our relationship...my career...his life. Can our love be saved if he can't even save himself? AH/AU
A story about love, lemons, lies...and learning to forgive.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 257507 Read Count: 47585
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
I like your Rosalie and her interactions with Bella. It's a nice contrast to the relationship that is beginning between Bella and Alice.
Very nice lemon at the end. I'm not sure "dismembered" works for tearing off a bra, since it means to cut, tear, or pull off limbs or to divide into pieces, but that's just a minor note.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Another great EPOV chapter. I liked the tension between Rose and Bella. I'm glad Bella didn't back down, but she didn't go too far either. It definitely feels like they can build a friendship in the future.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
I love to hate Renee as much as I love to love Charlie!
The conversation between Edward and Bella was really well done and felt 'right' for a couple that had been together for a year.
It will be interesting to see what part Jacob plays in your story.
Date: 11 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
Wow! What a chapter! The way everything is spiraling out of control for Edward is so devastating. Yet, he clearly loves Isabella and his conscience is still alive and kicking him in the gut! All hope is NOT lost!
The interaction between Charlie and Bella was so poignant at the end. I can't blame Charlie for feeling like he's in over his head and walking away from his role as manager. I hope we still get to see him in future chapters.
Author's Response:
Thank you for seeing everything that I intended for this story to be - and for just being so awesome :) It's not going so well over on FF...not too many people are happy with me haha.
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
Another incredible chapter! Bravo!
I almost felt sorry for Edward - after all, no one should have to endure the ladies of The View. But he had it coming to him. Charlie throwing him against the wall was good too.
I really like the way you write both Edward and Isabella. They are both definitely flawed, but I still really care about them and what happens to them in the story. I'm glad you showed a less than perfect Isabella in this chapter.
The last scene with them arguing and racing away from the paparazi, while Isabella loses control of her emotions and then wrecks the car . . . Wow. I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next.
Author's Response:
I have to say, the one good thing about reading reviews is seeing what parts of my story I may need to alter. After seeing how many people are now upset with Bella, I think I'm going to have to tweak my initial ideas for the next chapter. I think Bella's going to need to willingly own up to her actions.
Date: 18 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
I'm so glad you gave us EPOV for the scene at the bar and the accident! I think it really helps, since Bella was a bit "out of it" during this time.
Now you have me curious about what words of wisdom Carlisle has for Edward! It's important that Edward realized how rare it was for him to not get what he wanted in life. It explains a lot about his immaturity. Also, it's good to see that he has a family who loves him.
I admired the way he took the fall for Isabella and how he was trying to get her to shut up in front of the police. He really wants to be her hero! And his almost confession to her . . . so close! You're killing me! I loved it!
I hope Isabella sets Charlie straight on what really happened in the accident; he hates Edward enough already!
GREAT chapter!
Author's Response:
Even if everyone else stopped reading this - I'd still continue writing it just for you ;) Thanks for being fabulous (as always)
Date: 01 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
Your chapters are always so jam-packed with action and important scenes! You keep moving the story forward at a breath-taking pace. Each conversation just communicates so much, while still feeling authentic and "real" for the characters involved.
Whether it's Tanya coming clean in the parking garage, or Charlie (and then Aro) helping Isabella understand the business of music, or Jasper and Emmett trying (and failing) to help Edward, or even Edward's heart-wrenching conversations with himself (full of self-loathing and guilt): it's all just so compelling.
I can't wait to see what you have planned for chapter 20!
Author's Response:
As always, you'll be the first to see it ;) Thanks for all the help and making sure my story is always realistic.
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
Although it seems like Isabella is running away from the situation, I can't hardly blame her for wanting distance at this point.
The confrontation with Edward was just HEART-WRENCHING!! I couldn't help but feel sorry for him, even though he brought this all on himself. He even tried to lie about the drugs (one-time thing, yeah, sure). He has a lot of growing up to do, but I still love the character you've created and I want to see him grow up and become a better person, and then I want him to find his way back to Bella!
But the clincher was Edward, the proud, cocky rock star, on his knees, crying and holding onto Bella's legs while begging incoherently for her to stay. That was one of the most emotional scenes I've ever read in fan fiction.
Bravo!
Author's Response:
We'll get a chance to see Edward's POV next chapter...so you know that will be completely depressing to write. I think I'm going to have to drink a lot of wine and play angst music to get in the mood haha. But I just figured out how I'm going to end the next chapter and I have to say I'm a little excited over it (some people may hate it though haha)
Date: 08 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Even though Edward did all this to himself, I can't help but feel sorry for him! Emmett's a good big brother, even if his advice after the birthday party was wrong. He's giving good advice now. I was also touched by Rosalie's sincere concern for Edward. He has family and friends that love him, but they just don't know how to help him!
This was an incredible chapter. I know it was hard to write, but you did a GREAT job!
Author's Response:
Thank you! And thank you for always being my sounding board when I'm trying to sort through all of the ideas flying through my head. Now that Edward's tough chapter is out of the way, I'm looking forward to knocking out these next couple chapters and getting these two ill-fated lovers back together again!
Date: 17 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
This was a fascinating chapter because of the way it showed Isabella's relationships with such a variety of people: Charlie, Aro, James, Jacob, and even Jessica. However, it's clear that her relationship with Edward is still the center of her universe; he's never far from her mind.
Her attempt to take the high road by not talking about the breakup to the media has backfired spectacularly! She is in a no-win situation.
I'm looking forward to seeing where you take these characters next! Great chapter!
Author's Response:
I definitely feel like Bella's slogan right now would be "nice guys finish last." haha Everything just keeps getting dumped on her. But I hope I continue to portray her as a fighter with a big heart. I know most people don't like the relationship she has with Jacob now...but she needs a good friend in her corner and Jacob's going to be that to her. And Edward...oh, poor Edward...well he's about to get a wake-up call next chapter :)
Date: 22 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24
Poor Isabella. I can understand how torn and confused she must feel.
I agree with Carlisle: Emmett is angry at himself and at Edward - Isabella was just a convenient target.
I love your Edward. I know he's made so many mistakes, but everytime I read his POV I see someone with a good heart who's trying to find his way and who wants to be a good person. I really think his feelings for Isabella are genuine.
At least Edward HAS feelings for other people. That's more than I can say for James!
Date: 23 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25
I loved the way this chapter took us through the thirty days in a way that really communicated so much about what was going on with the characters.
Edward's transformation from "I'm not sharing a room" to realizing so much about himself (Volturi Edward vs. Edward Cullen) was just wonderfully done.
Bella is also growing, but she doesn't have as far to go as Edward.
I'm so glad the story is moving forward!
Date: 07 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26
I loved your idea of having Edward introduce her and publically make a statement. This was a great chapter! Looking forward to the next one!
Edward Cullen has the plane ride of his life when a mysterious flight companion changes his life in the blink of an eye. Edward will need the help of his wife, Isabella, to right the wrongs of his past before it's too late.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance, Supernatural
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My All-Time Favorites, Finished, My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Completed Stories, Sparkledamnu's Must Reads, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 249172 Read Count: 36371
Date: 27 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
You did a great job writing the business meeting and making it understandable and interesting. Even though there were actually two conversations going on at once (Edward and Seth as well as the actual meeting) I found that I was able to follow both. As I said, great job!
Thanks for the chapter!
Author's Response:
I hope you all had a wonderful holiday and that Santa was good to you and your families if you celebrated, if not, I hope you had a great weekend!
How did you like seeing Edward at work? I really enjoyed writing the business part of things and it was fun showing Edward in a different light. And how about that welcome home, huh? Our favorite couple needs some time to reconnect, that is for sure. So, we have a dinner with Emmett, Rose, and the kids coming up. Any thoughts on how you think that is going to go? I'll tell you guys again, 10, 11, and 12 (which I just finished) are really HUGE in terms of turning points and information going forward. Things are definitely going to be picking up. I'm really excited to hear what you all think of them.
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Seth Bonus Scene #4~
"That human, I swear," Seth grumbled as he returned back to his kind.
"Problems, my friend?" Gideon questioned as he glided next to him. Gideon was quite pleased with the events of the day. Young Edward did exceptionally well for his first foray at Cullen Publishing as the new and improved Edward Anthony Cullen. He had also been happy to see that Jasper, Emmett and the others seemed to be willing to give him the benefit of the doubt...for the time being anyway.
He still had such a long way to go and so much to do.
Seth said, "Hmph. No, not problems per se. I suppose he did well today, but there is still so much for him to come to terms with. He's been so convinced he wasn't worth loving that finding out there are a whole slew of people just waiting for a chance to show him is going to be a lot for him to handle."
"Isn't that the truth? Just look at what happened with Jasper today, not to mention how excited Emmett was about the invitation to have dinner with Edward and Isabella," Gideon replied.
Seth let out a loud, booming laugh when he thought about the effervescent Emmett Cullen. He had to be one of the most happy-go-lucky humans he'd ever come across. That was not to say that Emmett wasn't serious when he needed to be, as evidenced by the meeting today. Beneath his happy, jovial demeanor lay a sharp mind. Emmett Cullen was loving, kind, and gentle, but Lord help anyone that hurt his family. Family was the most important thing to him and when they hurt, he hurt.
He'd hurt a lot when it came to his brother over the years.
Seth turned his ice blue, troubled eyes toward Gideon as his many thoughts raced through his mind. Sure Edward had a good day today, but what happened when he stumbled, as he was sure to do? His instinct to hide and protect himself was strong...deep, and it would only take the merest hint of trouble to send him into a tailspin. Isabella was his rock, his anchor, and it would take everything she had to reach him if his walls went back up again.
"Seth, what is it?" Gideon questioned softly...well, as soft as his kind was able to.
Seth floated to and fro for a bit, trying to come up with the right words to express what he was feeling. He was really angry today for some reason, and he didn't understand it...not at all. He'd been an angel for a long time now, he'd seen and done many things, helped numerous people, but for some reason, Edward Cullen and the rest of his family had touched him in a way he hadn't expected. They'd been watching for a long time, even before the events that took place when he was fourteen. It went against his nature to sit and watch, day after day, as Edward's spirit broke, as the light dimmed in his eyes until it was distinguished completely.
They had all hoped that Esme and Carlisle, along with Emmett, would be able to bring the light back, but they hadn't. Instead Edward retreated farther and farther until he was practically unreachable. It wasn't until Isabella entered his life that any of them had had any hope of bringing Edward back.
"He has so much to give, so much love. I just don't understand why he had to suffer the way he did, why we waited so long. We could have spared him so much pain," Seth said sorrowfully.
Gideon sighed mightily, for this was the one aspect of being an angel that Seth had the most trouble accepting. Being an angel was wonderful, but it had its difficult moments as well. Watching humans hurt each other was just one of them.
"My friend, you know the answer to that. Our job is to guide, it's not to interfere. Humans have free will, which means that yes, there are times they have the free will to hurt others, either intentionally or unintentionally. I know this is hard for you Seth, I know how much you have come to care about Edward and Isabella, and the rest of their family as well," Gideon responded, ever patient as always.
"He could be so happy if he'd just let himself," Seth said with a heavy heart.
"Well, maybe the dinner with Emmett and Rose will open the first of many doors for him," Gideon said hopefully and then the two beings looked in on the aforementioned couple.
"Babe!" Emmett called as he bounded through the front door. He couldn't wait to tell Rose about the invitation to dinner at Edward and Isabella's on Thursday night.
Rose smiled when she heard her husband's voice and bent down to pick their daughter, Emma, up from the floor and carried her to meet him.
"Daddy's home," she said and laughed when the little girl clapped and smiled. She sure loved her daddy.
"Ah, there are my two favorite girls," Emmett said happily and kissed them both. He plucked his daughter from his wife's arms and swung her up on his shoulders, just like he did everyday when he got home from work. "Jack is in his room I suppose?" Emmett asked, checking on his son.
Rose rolled her bright blue eyes but smiled and shook her head when she said, "Down in the game room. Something about challenging Noah to the baseball game of the century or something like that on the XBOX."
"Cool, I'll have to go see if he needs help," Emmett said as his eyes danced in excitement. He loved playing XBOX Live, especially with Jack.
He ran around the room for a few minutes, delighting in Emma's happy squeals before he lifted her from his shoulders and set her on the ground. "You're never going to believe what happened today, babe."
"Edward decided to take the stick out of his ass?" she quipped.
"Rose," Emmett huffed, even though he had to admit his uptight brother probably deserved the comment. "No, but, well, maybe you're right," Emmett continued as he thought about Edward's actions at the office.
"Em, just tell me what happened," Rose said as she walked toward the kitchen to finish making dinner.
"Edward invited the four of us to their house for dinner on Thursday...and I, um, well, I told him we'd be happy to go," Emmett answered his wife, bracing for the wrath he'd been expecting all day.
Instead of that he got a sad sigh. "Are you sure you want to do that, Emmett?" Rose questioned softly.
It wasn't that she didn't want to go, but she didn't want to see Emmett get his hopes up...again, only to have Edward crush them...again. It was a never ending cycle it seemed like, and she couldn't watch her husband reach out only to have Edward slam the metaphorical door in his face.
"Rose, you should have seen him today. He smiled, he joked around with me, he seemed...happy. I don't know what's going on, but something's changed," Emmett trailed off.
"I don't know, Em," Rose said slowly. She wanted to believe her brother-in-law was being honest and sincere, but she'd seen him act cold and distant too many times to take anything at face value when it came to Edward.
"I miss him, Rosie. I love him and I want my brother back. If he's going to reach out and try, I'm going to do whatever I can. I want my brother back," he said again.
Rose knew she couldn't tell him no, not that she really wanted to anyway. Her husband was one of the happiest people she'd ever met, in everything except when it came to Edward and the rest of his family. He was heartbroken over the distance between them all and he would do anything he could to fix it. If he was willing to give Edward another chance, she had to as well. Emmett deserved her support and she hoped against hope that Edward was really going to make an effort this time.
"I know you do, Em. Fine, let's have dinner with the Iceman and Isabella, but I'm warning you right now, Emmett, if he pulls that asshole shit again, I'm going to go off on his ass," she promised him.
"That's my girl. Now, I'm going to go help Jack kick some ass. We'll be up for dinner in a bit. Love you, Babe," he said and ran down to the game room.
"Edward, you'd better not blow it," Rose said quietly before she turned back to her dinner preparations.
"See, Seth," Gideon said with a smile. Rosalie Hale Cullen was tough as nails, but beneath that hard outer exterior was a soft, loving heart. "Even Rosalie wants to give him another chance. He'll get there, my friend. He has to."
Gideon floated away, leaving Seth to ponder his words.
Edward had no idea how much was riding on his shoulders. Seth only hoped he was able to help him carry it all.
So much to do...so little time.
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Soooo...what did you think? I know lots of you have been dying to see the others so there is your first peek at Em and Rose. The start of the dinner is coming up in the next chapter as well as a few other very important tid bits of information. We're getting there, I promise. Charlie, Renee, and Nonna will be the next Bonus Scene and I'm dying to get that one to you all.
If you've reviewed and haven't gotten any of the previous bonus scenes, send me an email, a PM, or a DM on Twitter and I'll send them. And...because it's that time of year...if you've only reviewed Chapter 9 and didn't review 6, 7, or 8 and want the Bonus Scenes, let me know, and you can have them! I'm feeling generous! Again, I hope you all are enjoying these extra peeks into the others, I'm really enjoying writing them.
If you haven't done it yet, be sure to check out Dr. Cullen's Love Shack and look at the write-up Andi did for The Greatest Gift. The site is really great so take a few minutes and go look! Thanks again, Andi, what an awesome surprise!
Be sure to follow me on Twitter...les_sh_16
Have a safe and Happy New Year and I'll see you all on Sunday!
Hugs and Love,
Erin~ (les16)
Date: 27 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
I'm looking forward to learning more about Edward's relationships with the people at work. It was amusing to have them all so shocked when Edward spoke to them or told them he'd be leaving early!
Poor Jasper! Assuming the worst, I'm sure.
I'm a little behind on my FF reading because of Christmas, so it's great to get caught up with this story. On to chapter 9!
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Interesting start.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen~
Well, I'm sorry for the delay in thanking you for reading...even though I already did that! Hope you enjoy the rest of the story. Be sure to keep letting me know what you think! I love hearing from you!
les16
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Another interesting chapter.
Author's Response:
Hi Again Coleen~
Well, I hope you enjoyed getting a bit more of the whole picture of things! Keep letting me know what you think as you go along. I really love hearing from you!
Thanks so much for reading!
les16~
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
The love-making was very sweet and well-written. It was also intriguing to get a hint of the back story for Edward. I look forward to learning more about why he is the way he is.
I can understand Bella's reaction at the end. She must be totally confused by Edward!
Great story!
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
So glad you are enjoying the story...and glad you liked the lemon! I actually enjoy writing them and my other story The Path We Choose was nominated for Best Lemon in the recent Sparkleteer Rare Gem Awards. I was kind of proud of that! I am happy you liked the brief peek into Edward's past. He is a complicated guy, that is for sure!
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to leave a review!
Erin~
Date: 04 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
I'm glad Isabella is so honest about the fact that, although she doesn't hate him, she doesn't like him most of the time either. Obviously, this is what he needs to hear.
I'm looking forward to the rest of their conversation! Thanks for writing this.
Author's Response:
I know it was kind of a hard chapter to read, but I hope you agree it is necessary for her to be as honest and up front with him as she can be. He won't like everything he hears, no doubt about it, but it's all necessary in order to go forward. Hang in there with him, he's learning. And keep telling yourself that I know what I'm doing...I promise if you have faith, it'll be worth it in the end!
Erin~
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
I really liked Isabella's outburst and show of temper. Fiesty! But she didn't just get angry; she also recovered nicely and went on to have an important discussion with Edward.
Author's Response:
Hi again Coleen~
Yep, Isabella is feisty and she will always be honest with Edward. He may not, and more than likely won't like everything she has to say to him...but he sure does need to hear it all. I hope you can see the progress he's making, it might not be huge steps, but they are steps just the same.
Thanks again for the awesome banner and for taking the time to read and leave a review! Keep letting me hear what you think, the feedback means so much!
Erin~
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
I'm really becoming intrigued by Edward's back story and wondering what happened to him! Thanks for posting this and I look forward to the next chapter, where I guess we'll see him at work.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen-
We'll get there, I promise. I know it's taken awhile to get here, but I hope you understand Edward better now! I'm not sure how review replies work here on TWCS (I'm so used to FFn...but I sent out a bonus scene from Seth with this chapters review reply) If you want it, send me an email, and I'll be happy to send it to you. It gives a few hints and we see where our favorite angel goes when he leaves Edward.
Hope you keep enjoying the story! Keep letting me know what you think as we go along!
Erin~
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
This was a very sweet chapter and Isabella really seems to have it together and she knows exactly how to handle Edward without pushing him too much.
Does Isabella have any issues to work through that will affect her relationship with Edward?
Author's Response:
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
I really enjoy how Edward and Isabella are reconnecting and rebuilding their relationship.
I loved the way you ended the chapter with Rose's challenging words. I'm looking forward to see how Edward responds!
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen...
So, here we are after another chapter. You have to admit our Edward is making progress! We're going to finish the dinner in Chp 11 and then, I am positive, is a moment we've all been waiting for. I absolutely CAN'T wait to get your reactions to what's coming in the next few chapters! It almost makes me want to post them right away!
Okay, an answer to a question quite a few of you have asked me. When Seth appears to Edward, no one can tell Edward is talking to Seth. Think of it this way, kind of like a movie that stops. When Edward and Seth talk, no matter for how long, time stops and then begins again when Seth leaves. No one knows any different and no one can tell any time has passed. I know it might be pushing the boundaries, but just go with me, okay? I mean we have an angel that curses and doesn't have wings...it's fiction!
Don't forget to sign up on the discussion board if you haven't already...and I know most of you haven't! We'll be posting lots of information on there and it's a place where you can ask me any questions you might have about TGG, TPWC...or anything else. Also, be sure to check out the story rec thread and leave your favorites there. I'm always looking for new things to read, and I'm sure lots of you are, too.
www(.)les16(.)proboards(.)com
Also, don't forget to check out the Author Spotlight interview I just did. I know you guys will LOVE one of my answers! So embarassing but true!
www(.)sparklingwand(.)com
Okay, with that out of the way....here is our first peek at the Swan's...and the angel's too!
Enjoy!
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Seth Bonus Scene #5~
"He's pushing for answers, isn't he?" Gideon questioned as he approached Seth.
Seth gave a mighty sigh, one that rumbled through the air and said, "Yes. I knew it was only a matter of time."
Gideon could not help but chuckle at his young friend's obvious discomfort at addressing those unpleasant topics.
An angel's work was often difficult, especially in circumstances like these where their presence was known while the human was still alive. Gideon was positive that Edward hadn't quite realized just how incredibly lucky he was to be granted the time he had been in order to make things right with Isabella and the rest of his loved ones and friends.
It was an opportunity very few were ever given.
Seth flitted around, huffing as he went. Edward Cullen was the most maddening human...more so than he ever was himself, he thought with a scowl. He had to be because Seth was sure he'd never been as worked up over another assignment as he was over this one.
"Damn human," Seth muttered though with his kinds extraordinary hearing it came as no shock when Gideon cleared his throat at him.
Seth turned and looked at his mentor and gave a sheepish smile. Gideon's ice blue eyes twinkled in response and then he said, "My friend, you must be patient with him. So far, Edward has done better than any of us could have anticipated. None of this has been easy for him and honestly, Seth, you have done wonders with him already. It's time for him to find out, as unpleasant as it's liable to be."
He knew it was, as unwelcome as the realization was. Edward was about to have face some startling revelations and Seth wasn't sure anything could prepare either one of them for what happened when the time came.
"I only hope I can make him understand," Seth said in an anguished voice.
Gideon smiled encouragingly at his prodigy. "I have no doubt you can and will, Seth. Now how about we check in on the magnificent Gianna and Charlie and Reneé?"
"Neé!" Charlie Swan hollered as he barreled through the kitchen door of their comfortably middle-class home in Wheaton.
"Honey, I'm right here. Stop that yelling," Reneé Swan admonished her husband, though it was done with a loving smile, as she entered the kitchen to greet her adored husband.
Charlie shrugged off his gun holster and set it on the table and then swept his wife up in his arms, kissing her soundly on the lips, complete with a loud smack. "How's my girl today?" he asked as he swatted her playfully on the bottom when she walked to check the food in the oven.
"Which one, dear? You have three, though we all know who your favorite is," Reneé teased him.
Charlie chuckled heartily at that, especially since he couldn't disagree. He took the beer his wife offered him and took a long, delicious drink. "Well, I meant you, fiore," he answered her, smiling so big the corners of his eyes crinkled.
"Charles Swan, I swear," Reneé giggled.
Lord, she loved her husband. More today than she did when she married him all those years ago, she was lucky to say.
Gianna Santoro walked into the kitchen, loving seeing her daughter and son-in-law so happy. It made her miss her Angelo, but she'd missed him every day since he'd passed away.
"Ah, and there's my other girl," Charlie said as he made a move toward his mother-in-law.
Charlie didn't differentiate between mother and mother-in-law because he loved Gianna as much as he'd ever loved his own mother. More in fact as the years had gone by. Gianna Santoro was unlike any woman he'd ever met. Feisty, strong, stubborn as hell, but with a heart of gold so pure the only one who could hold a candle to her was his Isabella.
Then again his baby girl was leaps and bounds above anyone else as far as he was concerned.
"Mama," Charlie said as he kissed her on the cheek, like he did every day.
"You had a good day?" she questioned in the thick Italian accent she still had even after being in America all this time.
"Yes, ma'am. I only had to arrest three bad guys today; I didn't even get to shoot any of them," Charlie said with a wink.
They'd played this game for as long as he could remember. Gianna loved to hear about his day, but worried for him until he came home.
Reneé pulled the roasted chicken and potatoes and vegetables from the oven and transferred the food to the large platter waiting on the counter. Charlie grabbed the bowl of salad and Gianna, the basket of bread and they all took their seats at the table.
As they did every night, Charlie said grace, and as he also did, he asked for God's blessings for Isabella and Edward. When Charlie finished, Reneé served everyone their food and they began to eat.
"So...how's my baby girl?" Charlie asked after he wiped his mouth on his napkin.
Reneé didn't answer right away, instead she took a few moments to think quickly back over her lunch with her daughter. There was something different about her, though she couldn't articulate what it was. Isabella's entire demeanor was different. She was relaxed, though she checked her phone almost obsessively throughout their lunch...something she never did. Her smile was as beautiful as ever, but there was more behind it. When she asked about Edward and his trip out of town, Reneé was sure she'd never seen her smile so bright or her eyes dance with excitement the way they did as she talked about him.
Not even after playing a soccer match had she ever seen Isabella exude such happiness.
She looked at her husband and smiled at him, loving the way he was so invested in their daughter's life. There wasn't a day that passed that Charlie didn't mention Isabella with pride...or a brilliant smile to go along with it.
"She's just fine, honey. I mentioned having her and Edward over for dinner for her birthday in the next week or so. She seemed more excited than usual...even though she'll be turning thirty. I have a feeling Edward has something to do with that, though," she said as she looked from Charlie to her mother.
Charlie let out a groan at the thought of his baby girl turning thirty. Not that he or Reneé were old, not in the least. Hell, he had just turned fifty-five and Reneé wouldn't be fifty-three until November. Though if you asked him, his wife could easily pass for someone at least ten years younger...as evidenced by the way his deputies acted whenever she stopped by the station.
He ate it up, honestly. He loved his wife, madly, and had no problem whatsoever when she was appreciated by others...as long as it was done respectfully of course.
Now, ogling of his beloved daughter was another matter altogether.
"Well, he'd better damn well keep a smile on her face or else he'll have to deal with me," Charlie said with a hmph.
"Charles Swan!" Gianna chided him, though she knew her son-in-law was blowing smoke...well, for the most part.
"Yes, I know, Mama. Isabella loves him," he said with a sigh.
"And you can be assured he loves her back. That man was lost until our girl found him, and don't you forget it," Gianna said sharply and then flashed him a quick wink to ease the sting of her words.
Gianna had always known how much Edward had needed her granddaughter. Knew it from the very beginning.
"Don't you worry, honey. Judging from the smile on her face today, I'd say Edward has done something right," Reneé said and then stood to help her mother clear the dishes.
"Well, if they're as happy as we are, fiore," Charlie said as he grabbed his wife and pulled her on his lap, "then I couldn't ask for more."
The two heavenly beings smiled at one another. It always brought both of them great joy to watch the Swans together. Love like theirs didn't come along everyday.
"Seth, my young friend. That should give you hope, if nothing else does. Isabella has learned from the best how to give and to love and be happy. Things will work out, you'll see," Gideon said before they parted ways.
"I sure hope so," Seth muttered quietly before preparing to return to his two humans.
Things were going to be changing...and soon.
*fiore-means flower in Italian
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I love me some Charlie! I hope you liked that. Her birthday dinner is coming in chp 14 so not much longer until we get more of the Swan's. Now, a bit more business. I am still willing to give any of you that haven't gotten the other bonus scenes a copy of them. Instead of trying to get a PM...which FFn doesn't like if you include whole email addresses, let's try this. Email me at:
les_sh_16(@)yahoo(.)com
and then I will reply to the emails. If you've sent me a PM and haven't gotten a reply back, it's because you've disabled your PM's and I don't have a way to get in touch with you.
Okay, I hope you liked the bonus scene. Let me know what you think, I'd love to know! Oh, there is an announcement on the TGG blog I haven't been able to tell you all yet, if you want to know what it is, take a look. I think you'll all be happy about it!
See you Sunday...Thanks as always for the amazing love and support you continue to give me. I'm blown away every week by it all!
Hugs and Love,
Erin~ (les16)
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Date: 11 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
I always look forward to the updates for this story! Another great chapter, Thanks!
Author's Response:
Hi Colleen!
Yay! We finally got the 'I Love You's!' I know that lots of you have been waiting on that to happen and I hope you all thought it was the right time. Our boy has done good, hasn't he? He's come such a long way already. Now, I know lots of you are worried about the upcoming talk with Carlisle, huh? I will tell you that Chapter 12...full of lots and lots of information and one part I've been assured will melt all of you! Chapter 13...it's gonna be a little rough, just warning you now. But then 14...my favorite...favorite one so far! So excited to get these next chapters to you guys. We're moving right along...but always keep in mind my promise...I am a HEA girl through and through. You've all shown so much faith in me, just keep hanging in there, okay?
Now, let's take a look at Marcus and Alec shall we...this one was loads of fun write!
Enjoy~
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TGG- Seth Bonus Scene #6~
"Alec, have you seen Edward?" Marcus asked without preamble...or knocking on the door to his office as he came barreling through.
Alec looked up from the report he was examining and shook his head. He had had his nose buried in reports all morning to begin preparing for the upcoming project Emmett and Isabella would be undertaking. He hadn't even realized Edward wasn't in the office yet.
Strange.
"Did you check with Isabella to see if she knew where he was?" Alec asked, figuring if anyone knew where he was, she would.
"She's not here either," Marcus said with a huff.
"What in the world is going on with him this week?" Alec asked his longtime friend.
Marcus shook his head. He had no clue, but damn if Edward hadn't turned into a completely different person in the span of just a few days.
He'd known Edward a long time, ever since they met when they were at Northwestern together. They were in the same business classes from almost the very beginning and though Edward always gave off a cold vibe and most people tried to give him a wide berth, Marcus found himself strangely drawn to him. Not in any weird kind of way, but there was something about Edward that he connected with from the very beginning.
Through study groups and group projects, Marcus and Edward became friends. Immediately it was obvious that having friends was not something Edward was used to. He was awkward and stilted, and more often than not, hours would pass and little would be said that didn't have to do with the subject they were studying. Edward hardly ever mentioned his family, though Marcus was well aware of who he was...everyone knew.
The Cullen name was well-known and respected in all of Chicago...hell probably all over the country. It would have been easy for Edward to use that notoriety to his advantage, but he didn't. Marcus had always admired his friend's natural instincts when it came to business matters and in his opinion, there wasn't a man...anywhere...that could hold a candle to him when it came to taking charge of a meeting.
Marcus knew better than anyone, besides Jasper, how much pressure William Cullen had placed on him. For anyone else, it would have been enough to bring them to their knees, but not Edward. The more William expected of him, the harder and longer Edward worked. By the time they had graduated from college and Edward was essentially William's second-in-command, Marcus had been offered a job at Cullen Publishing.
Over the years Marcus had seen a lot. He watched as Emmett and Edward passed each other in the hall or sat in the same meetings barely acknowledging the other. He watched Carlisle come and go, and more often than not, not bothering to even say hello to Edward. He watched Anna chip away at him, day after day. He watched Sophie try to put him back together again, only to fail.
He watched, with much hope, as Isabella entered the picture and knocked his staid and reserved friend...completely on his ass. He'd never seen Edward so...flustered as he was when he was around Isabella. Hell, Edward would only have to say her name, or hear her name from someone else before he turned into a tongue-tied adolescent. It would have been funny if Marcus didn't know how much his friend struggled, daily, with his feelings for her. He was totally outside of his element, Marcus knew, and at times it was almost painful to watch Edward try to accept the inevitable.
Over the years he watched as Edward continued to shut people out, even Isabella for the most part. There had been times when it seemed like he was going to turn a corner, only to pull back again. He'd seen it time and time again, but nothing like the past few days.
And for Edward to be late to the office...it was unheard of.
"Hell if I know," Marcus answered Alec.
"Do you know, on Wednesday, I actually saw him and Isabella getting off the elevator together, holding hands and he was laughing?" Alec asked, still totally stunned by that.
It wasn't that he begrudged Edward anything...it was just such a shock to see a different side of him.
"You don't think they...you know...stayed home...together?" Marcus asked. He had to admit the idea seemed totally preposterous...though for his friend's sake, he hoped that was exactly what it meant.
Alec chuckled and shook his head. "Man, how the hell do I know? He's been acting weirder than shit all week. Maybe Isabella has finally pulled the huge stick out of his ass."
Marcus couldn't help but laugh at the blunt assessment by Alec. Alec and Edward weren't as close as he and Edward were, but Marcus knew that Alec respected Edward immensely and he was just being...Alec.
Crass, blunt, and no filter whatsoever.
"Look, Marcus, you and I both know he's been a pretty miserable son of a bitch for a long time. If something has happened to change that, I'm all for it. I hope to hell it has, to be honest with you. I may act like a dick most of the time, but I adore Isabella and she's put up with way more of Edward's shit that anyone should be subjected to. If I was her, I would have kicked his ass to the curb a hell of a long time ago. But...Isabella isn't like that and any fool can see that she thinks he hung the moon and all that sappy shit. He's one lucky bastard she's stuck around this long and if he's finally woken the fuck up and realized that, then more power to the both of them, I say. About damn time."
Marcus sat on the opposite side of the desk, his jaw hanging open. He finally managed to close his mouth and got an evil grin on his face and said, "Dude, you have a crush on Isabella, admit it."
"What the fuck ever," Alec said dismissively with a wave of his hand. "And if I did, can you blame me? The woman is drop dead, out of this world beautiful; she's the smartest person I know, smarter than Edward even. She's kind and sweet, and she can be feisty as hell when she needs to be, too. She's..." Alec stumbled as he tried to think of a word.
"Perfect," Marcus added quietly. He felt all the same things Alec did toward his friend's amazing wife. He didn't harbor any unrequited feelings or anything like that for her, though it would be easy to do. No, he respected both Edward and Isabella too much to ever go down that path, but he wasn't an idiot. Isabella Cullen was an extraordinary woman; there was no doubt about it.
"Perfect," Alec agreed in the same tone. "Edward is one lucky man to be married to someone like her. It's about fucking time he opened his eyes and appreciated that fact."
"Seth, my young friend, looks like you have some competition in the Isabella Marie Cullen fan club," Gideon said with a wicked chuckle and a twinkle in his ice blue eyes as they watched the two men discuss Seth's favorite human.
"Hmph," the angel answered while he stewed in an annoyed silence.
It was bad enough that he had to share her with Edward...though he was her husband and, if you wanted to get technical about it, it was Edward that was sharing her with him...but he decided not to dwell on that fact at all.
"Come now, Seth, Isabella is a wonderful person. It only makes sense that she would have that affect on everyone she meets," Gideon said patiently.
"If he hurts her again," Seth said and his heart seized at the thought of that.
"My friend, you know as well as I that he has never done so on purpose. Yes, he's caused her great sorrow, but look at how far they've come...together...already in just this short amount of time. Edward's love for her has never been in question, it has just been his way for such a long time to behave as he has. Edward has endured so much, Seth; you understand that better than anyone. Anger and bitterness has a way of turning even the best of men into someone they don't wish to be," he reminded with a pointed look.
Seth sighed deeply, grateful for the reminder, no matter how painful it was, to remember his own time as human when he suffered through many of the same emotions Edward had struggled with for so long.
"He has done well, hasn't he?" Seth said proudly.
"Exceptionally," Gideon agreed.
"The true tests for him are coming, my friend. Remember it is your job to guide him through. There is much at stake, never forget that," Gideon said sternly, though with love.
When Seth was left alone, he said softly, "Please, don't let me fail."
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Oh, I'll be making this announcement soon but I'll tell you all now. I've signed up to take part in the Fandom Against Domestic Violence fundraiser that will begin on Feb. 1st. I'm going to be submitting an outtake from TGG in which we will Seth as a human and how exactly he died and became an angel. I'm working on it now and I am so pleased to take part in such a worthy cause. There is a link to the FADV website on my blog and profile if you'd like more information!
See you Sunday!
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
It was good to get a better idea of how Edward was related (through Esme) to the Cullen family and at least some insight into his relationship with Carlisle and Esme.
The scenes with Edward and the kids were cute too.
Author's Response:
Hi Again~
Well, what did you all think of seeing Edward and Emma together? Pretty cute wasn't he? And Jack, too. I know I've had A LOT of questions about Isabella and Edward having a baby. I won't answer that with a yes or no, but to clear one thing up...there is no medical reason why Edward can't have a baby. The rest, we'll just have to see how it plays out.
I am so looking forward to Sunday to see what you all have to say about the next chapter. I'll remind you again, be sure you have tissues handy and keep chanting, 'Must have faith' over and over again, okay. HEA...don't forget that.
Don't forget to sign up on the discussion board if you haven't already...and I know most of you haven't! We'll be posting lots of information on there and it's a place where you can ask me any questions you might have about TGG, TPWC...or anything else. Also, be sure to check out the story rec thread and leave your favorites there. I'm always looking for new things to read, and I'm sure lots of you are, too.
Voting has begun for the Walk of Fame Awards and runs through the 31st. I've been nominated for the Rising Starlet Awards and there are a TON of great stories nominated for all kinds of things. Please go check them all out and vote at:
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I am still willing to give any of you that haven't gotten the other bonus scenes a copy of them. Instead of trying to get a PM...which FFn doesn't like if you include whole email addresses, let's try this. Email me at:
Thanks as always for the amazing love and support you continue to give me. I'm blown away every week by it all!
See you Sunday!
Date: 23 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
The suspense over what happened to Edward when he was younger is killing me! His discussion with Carlisle felt like a great start to resolving their issues. Great Chapter.
Date: 01 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Dinner at the Swans was very nice! I'm guessing that Edward is moving her things back to his bedroom! I'm looking forward to reading about Charlie's thoughts in the bonus scene.
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
Very nice. I'm looking forward to learning about the mysterious Anna. Thanks for the update.
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
It was interesting to learn more about Edward's background and relationship with Anna. Thanks for the update! Also, I didn't receive the bonus scene for Chapter 15, even though I reviewed. Thanks!
Date: 27 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
Interesting chapter. Looking forward to hearing the rest of Edward's story!
Thanks for the update.
Date: 07 May 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27
Thanks for the great chapter!
Date: 15 May 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29
Great chapter! Loved it. I never doubted you for a second!
Life in Spoons Valley continues as a new generation deals with changes in their small western town. Dr. Edward Cullen, returning after years of absence while attending medical school, believes that life back in his hometown will be boring after life in the city. Little does he know that even though the way of things in the west are slow to change, some things remain exciting, wild, and untamed.
This story is a continuation of my other story Lonesome Hearts. Please read that story first.
Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Action, Drama, Historical, Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 12783 Read Count: 9739
Date: 01 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Great start! I loved the chart! It was so helpful. Thanks for including it.
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Thanks for the update! I'm enjoying your new story.
It's almost Christmas and Edward is alone for the first time since his transformation. How much trouble can a mind-reading, young vampire get into? What will he do when one act of kindness results in unexpected consequences? Pre-twilight, Canon story.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Edward/None
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 9208 Read Count: 208
Date: 21 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
What a wonderful holiday story! You've done such a great job of giving it a "canon" feel. I'm looking forward to finding out how what Edward will do with the thief!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Your banner is fantastic. I'm honored that you allowed me to attach it to the story. Chapter two will be up soon.
Date: 24 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
I just love what you did with this story. We had talked previously about Edward using mind reading skills to solve a mystery and you made it happen with this story. It was very inventive and original.
It was great that Edward got to see his "gift" and vampiric abilities in a more positive light, allowing him to be a force for good in the lives of two unsuspecting humans.
Great job!
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you liked it. Edward managed to make others' lives better using his gift, the same way you brighten this website with your amazing banners. Thanks for sharing your skills with us! And your beta-ing talent as well.
Bella wakes up the day after her fateful birthday party only to find Alice perched on her bed. Ever wonder if things might have turned out differently for Bella and Edward if Alice and Rosalie had interfered? "Seduce him, Bella!" Guided by Bella’s inner strength and determination, Edward must face both his human past and his vampiric future. Where will his decisions take their relationship? New Moon with a twist.
Thanks to coleen561 for the Awesome banner and editing advice!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 165429 Read Count: 41852
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Post Card from the Edge
Thanks again for the mention of the Edwardian/Victorian difference. I got a kick out of Edward being slightly jealous of the dolphin, and the ending (sixty-nine) made me laugh out loud. Let me tell you, not too many stories make me laugh out loud!
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26
As always, it was sweet, funny, and so sexy. It's really a talent to be able to combine all those things together in a story.
Edward: "Bella . . . MINE!. . ."
If that one was for me, thanks! - although I KNOW I'm not the only one that pants for possessive-ward.
Date: 12 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Forever Part Two
Great ending for the main part of the story! I'm looking forward to the epilogue and outtakes!
I always love a story that allows Charlie to be "in the know" and allows him to be more in Bella's life with Edward. Charlie is one of my favorite characters, and you've done a great job with him!
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 The Divine Miss Hale
You did a fabulous job providing Rosalie's back story without making it boring for people who are already familiar with it from SM's books. I think you write Rosalie and Alice really well. Every time I read Alice saying the word "amazing" I can actually hear her singing it in my mind: "ah MAY zing"
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your opinion. As I stated to another readerI tried to keep Rose's back story as brief as possible. In order for her to convince Bella that her motives for helping her are sincere, she needed to address her past and her subsequent jealousy towards Bella. I think she was rather succinct...at least we didn't have to suffer through the Royce King drama a second time around!
Thank you for your review! Happy New year!
Date: 27 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 In Which I am the Clairvoyant
I'm so glad that Alice is not abandoning her BFF at this critical time! Good for Alice!
And, that "goodbye" outside the Swan residence after the party . . . WOW. Very sexy!
This is a great start and I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take your "New Moon with a twist" !!
Date: 17 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Outtake: Anatomy of a Zipper
I loved the outtake! It was so sexy, yet still very sweet.
I don't think you should worry about using the "p-word." It seemed just fine in this outtake. IMHO.
Date: 11 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: An Understanding
The Laurent/Victoria back story was interesting and well done.
But the action in the cottage was so "HAWT!" From the dirty talk to the pervy pictures and then the BJ, it was all perfect. You always manage to keep these scenes equal parts sexy, playful, and humorous. It's a talent!
Finally, someone acknowledges that Edward was from the EDWARDIAN era and was not VICTORIAN ! LOVED IT!
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Bitch Slap
I love angry Bella! I agree with you that if she really spent all those years taking care of her mom that she would be a stronger person. Of course, she still has some normal teenage insecurities, thus the need for the "bitch slap" to snap her out of it. Alice is great, and I can hardly wait to see what Rosalie will do!
Date: 04 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Beer Blast
I loved Edward getting all jealous and upset with Mike, Kyle, and Tyler. It was so perfect! He is there to break up with her, but he's snarling into the phone, "This is Edward, her boyfriend" Priceless!!
I'm glad Bella is ready to put up a fight and march HIM into the woods!
Great Chapter!
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Into the Woods
I really enjoyed the way Bella took charge of the situation! No curling up in a pile of leaves for THIS Bella! You Go Girl!
Author's Response:
No indeed! Our Bella is more likely to sweep HIM up in a pile of leaves. Poor Edward...
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: EPOV In which I find my voice
I just love the mental voice of your Edward. It’s so unique, yet it doesn’t feel OOC. I love the little sayings and phrases that date back to the time of Edward's human years.
I like how this chapter had Edward reflecting on his history with Bella from the time he met her until the night before. I always prefer stories with multiple POVs. Thanks for doing this.
Author's Response:
Yes, Edwards speech is very old fashioned...he enjoys Robert Pattinsons interpretation of him but he complains all the time that he says Ummm... and Yeah...far too much. Sigh...he is such a complainer! You'll never, ever hear me complain about the great and glorious Robert Pattinson. Edward can squawk all he wants...like Bella..I just put a pillow over my head and drown him out!
Edward likes to have his POV be known. If you want to hear more from him, all you have to do is ask. He is very eloquent, and lately, very VERBOSE!
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Broken Hearts and Broken Thongs
I love the way Bella wakes up and doesn't even realize that Edward is there and then is startled by his voice. How could she possibly stay mad (or even say no) when he keeps telling her, "I NEED YOU!" Who could resist that?
A long weekend? . . . I hope they can spend it together . . .
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Pick-up truck pick me up
Wow! Frottage, round 2, and on the pick-up truck again! Makes you wonder if that old truck has ever seen this much action. I hope Edward knows how to do laundry. Hopefully, Alice left him an extra pair of pants (or maybe several extra pairs . . .??).
Thanks again for your kind words. Some people can create great fiction and some of us are just lucky enough to touch it with a few commas. I thoroughly enjoy doing it.
Author's Response:
I just LOVE frottage in fiction! So sweet, sexy, and..uh..yeah...sticky! LOL!
Thanks for all your support, girl...I coudn't do it without you! x0
Date: 07 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Snarling and Growling
I think Bella was right to react to the proposal the way she did. Yet, I also loved the way she was second-guessing herself at the end of the chapter and worrying about Edward's feelings. It all fit so well with the Bella you've written.
I loved the way Alice left photos for Edward and how that led him to acknowledge both the reality of his loneliness before Bella and the hope that she offers for his future: a future that is no longer lonely and empty.
Great chapter! Love the cliffy with Laurent!
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Love Letters
You did a wonderful job with the letters from Jasper and Esme. They both sound formal, as if they were from another time. The letters also sound like they are from two different people and each letter has a distinct, authentic-sounding voice.
Great job!
Date: 04 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Teddy
I love the way they are finally building a real relationship. They are really talking to each other, at last. Beautiful chapter: poignant, touching, a bit of humor, a dash of lemon . . . a great read.
Author's Response:
Couldn't have done it without you!!!!
Date: 04 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: A Simple Man
I'm so glad to get EPOV of the scene in her room and esp. in the back of the truck!
I loved Emmett's letter. I think you've definitely captured his "voice" and his spirit!
Great job!
Author's Response:
Oh yeah...Edward seemed to really enjoy La Frottage!
HUGS!
Date: 10 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Compromised
Oh my! That was such a great chapter: sweet and so sexy! I imagine that getting the right mix of sweetness and sexiness in a lemon like this must be quite a challenge, but you did a great job!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much Coleen!
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14:Tears for Lottie
What a powerfully written chapter!
It starts out so very sweet, with Edward making breakfast and Bella dreaming of Edward as her husband someday. To me, this is a more realistic reaction for a teenage girl who's in love. The reluctance of SM's Bella to accept Edward's proposal just never rang true IMHO!
And then the chapter takes such a serious turn. The back story you are creating for Edward's human years is fascinating and so creative, yet it "feels" right for Edward and (except for the tears) does not seem OOC. I'm looking forward to finding out about the tears. I know you'll make it interesting!
Date: 18 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Guilty as Charged
This chapter was so much fun! Playful AND sexy!! Loved the tub scene! Are you sure Edward doesn't taste like "cinnamon and vanilla?" 'Cause I'd like to think he did . . . Maybe he's a more citrusy flavor ?? Umm-mmm
Date: 23 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Bed Time Stories
The letter from Carlisle was wonderfully done. Each letter has been so unique and so well matched to the character who "wrote" it. You've done a great job of capturing all these unique "voices."
I really enjoy the way your Bella and Edward interact when they are feeling playful (and when they're feeling passionate)!
I also think the back story that you've created for your Edward is interesting and original.
Date: 18 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Promises
I loved that the "official" (with ring) proposal was in the meadow. And really, sore or not, I think they needed to "celebrate" the engagement. Another great chapter! I'll be sorry to see this story end!
Date: 04 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Dinner and a Movie
Great Chapter! The scene where they are parking and get caught was hilarious and the scene in front of the fire was incredibly hawt. I think my computer started to smoke and it didn't have anything to do with being near a fire . . .
I'm really looking forward to the return of the Cullens. I can imagine that there's going to be some great fun and relentless teasing!
Date: 27 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: The Honeymoon's Over!
Well, even though you already know all the parts that I loved about this chapter, I feel the need to repeat some of it here.
I love your Emmett. My favorite Emmett moment was when he started asking all those wildly inappropriate questions about having sex with a human. Too funny!
The talk with Carlisle was great too - especially when Carlisle was teasing him a little!
I'm looking forward to even more sex-crazed Edward. I know you have some fun things planned for the next few chapters and I'm excited that I get to see them first!
Date: 25 May 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Bursting the Bubble
I have three words for you: SUCTIONED and DRAINED! I am STILL LAUGHING everytime I think of that!
Oh, and Charlie cutting down the tree - priceless!
This was such a fun chapter. I loved poor Edward, stuck in the janitor's closet.
And, bravo to your Bella. It's nice it to see a Bella who takes Edward's feelings and sensitivities into consideration. I'm glad she decided to do the right thing for Edward's feelings and tell everyone (except Renee) about the engagement. Good for her!
BTW, I think it's "Sunflower" awards, not Sunshine.
Author's Response:
Grin! Thanks for your support, awesome editing skills, and your reviews! Good luck in the Sunshine Awards...you so deserve to win!
Date: 09 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: Count Down
Thanks for the dedication and kind words!
I really like the way the diary entries turned out. They were a lot of fun to read and made for great chapter!
I'm still recovering from the shock of the haircut, but I think Edward's explanation and reasoning made sense. Plus, you're right - it definitely looks shorter in what we've seen of BD.
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23:Forever part one
There were a lot of moments in this chapter that I really enjoyed. I have to confess that I particularly liked the midnight trip to the meadow. Edward's bold request in the meadow was unexpected and, quite frankly, fuckhot.
Date: 07 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30: Baby, I'm yours
This was a wonderful ending to your story. I've enjoyed this story so much and I love that you ended it this way. You created such wonderful characteristics and "voices" for your Edward and Bella. They were recognizable as Twilight's Edward and Bella, but they were also unique to your story in the nicest possible way. I especially loved your version of Edward. I liked the way both of them grew during the story. It was just a lovely story!
When faced with a betrayal that could tear them apart, Edward and Bella must put their faith in the healing power of love. WARNING: this story deals with rape and its aftermath. Post-Eclipse, AU.
MT came in at #5 on the top ten stories completed in March 2020 as voted by visitors of www.twifanfictionrecs.com. Thank you!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 41 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 186548 Read Count: 51176
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Difficult chapter, but well-done.
Author's Response:
Thank you. Means a lot. I'm posting chapter 5 now.
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
I'm so glad that you are doing both POVs. It always adds so much to the story (IMHO). Single POV stories usually feel . . . incomplete, like half a story (which is what they are, LOL)
Thanks for writing this.
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you like having both POVs. The only problem with having both POVs is that sometimes it can be repetitive. I realized this after I had written quite a few chapters, and some people may find my earlier chapters a bit repetitive with the POVs, but I improved on this later on. Anyway, thank you so much for your review and lovely rating! :-)
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Fortunately, I don't have any experience with this type of trauma, but I thought Bella's reactions and thoughts seemed "authentic" and made sense in her circumstances. Very well done!
One typo in the last paragraph:
I was defiantly positive now. (defiant means "openly refusing to obey")
Should be:
I was definitely positive now. (definite means "certain, without doubt")
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Got your message. Thanks for letting me know about that. I didn't know that. I will add a note when I post chapters in the same day.
AH! You're right! Stupid typos! Thanks for letting me know. I really appreciate it! I have fixed it now :-)
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Another intense chapter. Very well done. I thought having her break down at school and the reactions of the teacher were an excellent idea. Also, the way she has begun to doubt everyone (except Edward), even Charlie makes a lot of sense.
Author's Response:
Yes, it's very hard to be betrayed so brutally by someone who was suppose to love you. So nice of you to review chapters as you read. And thanks for the lovely ratings! :-)
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
I'm glad that Edward has finally realized what happened to Bella.
It's great to have the other Cullens in the story now; I've missed them!
You're doing a great job with your story!
Date: 18 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Whew, I'm so glad that Edward was able to save her from Jacob this time and that the Cullens won't have to face the pack!
I also enjoyed hearing from Charlie. Esme's defense of Edward was great too.
Thanks for posting this!
Date: 18 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
Well done. Very touching. I'm glad they're talking, although I'm sure there will be plenty of difficulties ahead.
Author's Response:
Thank you. Yes, unfortunately there's still lots of tough times ahead. But at least they have each other!
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
A bit repetitive, as you say. Yet, it still moved things forward, as Edward realized that Bella was trying to protect his family and she agreed to go to the hospital. I guess she doesn't realize that it doesn't matter if Edward is in the exam room or not, he will still "see" everything. She might as well have him there to hold her hand!
Author's Response:
Yeah, not one of my best chapters. It's true that Edward could watch everything that is happening even if he wasn't in the room, but he'd have to be focusing on the thoughts of the doctor in order to see everything, and Bella trusts that he wouldn't watch if she asked him not to. You bring up a very good point, though, and you will see in chapter 14 what actually ends up happening. Thanks again for reviewing! I'm posting chapter 12 right now.
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
I liked how she felt a bit hopeful at the end of the chapter, although I have no doubt that the road ahead will still be quite difficult.
Typo: I’d had to call Charlie at work. Although he had been relieved that Bella was now awake from her metal withdrawal
Should be mental withdrawal.
Hope this helps.
Author's Response:
GAH! You're right! Thank you! Much appreciated! I have fixed it.
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
I liked the way you ended this chapter with Edward realizing that he needs to consider how he is going to handle the exam. Good job.
Date: 23 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Very well done. I'm glad Esme was there to talk to Bella. The Cullens will provide an awesome support system, if Bella can just learn that she's worthy of their love. Great chapter!
Minor correction (I hope you don't mind): Twice in this chapter you mention Bella feeling nauseous. The correct term is nauseated. Here is the difference between the two words: Sour milk and rotting meat are both nauseous because they make you feel nauseated when you smell them. I have a full explanation on my FFn profile, if you're interested. It is my mission in life to help authors understand the difference. LOL!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
I don't mind at all! I'm a bit of perfectionist and I like it when people point out my errors. Believe it or not, I did know the difference between the two, but I was told that many new dictionaries are indicating that 'nauseous' can be used in place of 'nauseated,' but I'm thinking maybe my info source didn't know what they were talking about, lol. I used nauseous because it sounded better to me, but I think that to be safe I should probably use 'nauseated' because technically it IS the correct one to use in this case. Thanks again. I will go back and fix it.
Date: 24 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
Good chapter. The conversation with Rosalie was well done and it's great to have the rest of the Cullens start to appear in the story. Thanks for writing this!
Date: 26 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
The scene with Charlie was really well done and I especially liked the confrontation with Billy. Great job!
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Great chapter! The fact that Jacob called Bella at the Cullens' when Edward wasn't there - very intriguing!! I'm betting it wasn't a coincidence either. Great ending to the chapter too!
Author's Response:
Thank you! Nope--definitely not a coincidence...
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
I was wondering how Bella would handle going back to school. Good chapter. I especially liked the exciting cliffhanger at the end!
Date: 02 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
Very exciting cliffy!
Great job with Renee.
Author's Response:
He, he :-)
Thank you! She was tough to write because I wanted to keep her in character, but I also wanted her to be able to help Bella.
Date: 04 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
Epic! Excellent! Very exciting and well done!
Although I would have liked to have seen Edward fool Tanya into letting her guard down.
Great job!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Ha, ha, you're definitely not the first person that said they wanted to see that. I did think of including it but then I thought it better to leave it it the readers imagination! :-)
Date: 16 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24
Excellent chapter! I especially liked the scenes with Edward and his family as they confronted him about what had happened. Fantastic job!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I found the EPOV the most difficult to write so it means a lot! :-)
Date: 01 May 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25
Thanks for the update! Don't feel bad about the dellay; Real life happens!
Author's Response:
Thanks for understanding! And for not forgetting about this story! It truly means a lot!
It was just a bit of fun, a chance for an all-expenses paid vacation, and a favor for her bestie. Never in a billion years could Bella have imagined just how much meeting Edward Cullen would invert her world. This was an entry for the Pick a Pic challenge.
Thanks to Belindella for the beautiful banner.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 12563 Read Count: 1860
Date: 26 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Billionaire
This was one of my favorites from this contest. You managed to pack so much story into this one-shot and you did an incredible job. Loved it!!
Alice has had a vision that the new girl at Forks High will change the Cullens' lives. But Rosalie's sharp eyes catch evidence of abuse on Bella Swan, and she vows to find out just what's going on with the quiet girl. Eventually she and Edward hatch a plan to keep Bella safe, which might endanger the close-knit ties of the Cullen family. Possessive Edward and Big Sister Rosalie. Banner by the amazing JavaMasta!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: I Whitlock's read , Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 319577 Read Count: 124870
Date: 28 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Great chapter. Your story is off to a great start and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Great start. I hope you continue this.
The extra and deleted scenes from the story: The Greatest Gift. More Edward and Isabella...More Seth the Angel...More of everything you didn't get to see. Rated M for some sexy future outtakes and of course for language of our favorite angel.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance, Supernatural
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My All-Time Favorites, Finished, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Sparkledamnu's Must Reads, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 70781 Read Count: 10096
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Great Outtake! Thanks for posting this.
Date: 18 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
This was very interesting. Thanks for posting this outtake.
There was a small mistake:
but he was pretty sure the main reason none of them had ever brought it up was because no one liked to think about their own immortality.
I believe you mean to say that they didn't like to think about their own MORTALITY. (in other words, the fact that they are mortal and will die, as opposed to immortality which refers to living forever.)
I normally try not to point out every little typo, etc. unless it might be confusing to a reader. I hope this is helpful.
Bella transfers to the University of Washington her junior year. The incredibly beautiful guy with the coppery-bronze hair is such a jerk when their lives first collide, but they can't ignore the fact that they are drawn to each other. However...Bella has a boyfriend back home and Edward is adamantly unavailable; a horrible experience in his past has made him reluctant to form any attachments or new friendships. But sometimes, when you least expect it, you find something you didn't even know you were looking for; something that will change your life irrevocably and unconditionally.
Lots of humor, tons of romance and occasional angst, featuring a rather nosy and intrusive Emmett, Rose, Jasper and Alice. Add a potential stalker into the mix to stir things up. Top it all off with undeniable sexual tension and eventually some very hottt sexy-times.
A big round of applause for Z-21 and Twi-Holoic for the amazing banners! *clap, clap, clap, clap, clap*
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012
Chapters: 73 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 511972 Read Count: 89225
Date: 24 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: It's Not Always a Picnic
Great job explaining the back story for Edward. I think you did an excellent job creating a back story that has the appropriate amount of angst for the build-up you created in the first fifteen chapters. Poor Edward! Bella was great in her response and the way she was caring and sympathetic.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
Glad you liked the explanation of Edward's back story. He says it's in the past, but you know it still has a bearing on his life. There will be more specifics down the road, but at least Bella got to find out why he is the way he is. Poor Edward is right! And I think Bella was...IS...exactly what Edward needed/needs. :)
Thanks for taking the time to review and sharing your thoughts.
-bannerday
Date: 17 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Restless Night
I had heard great things about this story from janewithay. She was right! Thanks for posting it at TWCS. I look forward to reading it.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen561!
Thanks for taking a chance on The Transfer. I'm glad I posted where you can access it. Janewithay has always had such lovely things to say to me. I appreciate her giving you a heads up on this read and I'm glad to know you are enjoying it so far.
Keep in touch and let me know what you think.
-bannerday
Date: 18 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Cookies Anyone?
That was a fun chapter. Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
Glad you liked chapter 10. Poor Edward...now he has to have that little Freudian slip of Bella's invading his impure thoughts. ;)
Glad you liked the chapter. Hope you enjoy #11.
Thank you for the review.
-bannerday
Date: 20 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Just Let Go
I enjoyed the part with the underwear drawer. Very funny.
Your story is a lot of fun to read!
Author's Response:
Hi Colleen...oh the Fates are laughing at poor Edward...of course he would be the one who would get to carry the undie drawer. :) I'm glad you are enjoying.
Thanks for the review.
-bannerday
Date: 20 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Your Place Or Mine?
I'm glad they're talking. That was quite an astute observation on Edward's part (that Bella didn't say anything about loving Jake).
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
Yes, it's good that they're talking. They're going to be thrown together in situations, they have to be able to deal with each other. And yes...Edward's observation is an important one. And Bella has no clue.....yet. He'll point it out to her, but it will surprise you when he does...it's not going to be for a while. ;)
Thank you for the review once again.
-bannerday
Date: 21 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Partial to the Blush
I love the way you are writing the Twilight characters! They are recognizable, yet different enough to fit into the setting you've created and be unique to your story. I hope that makes sense! LOL
Your Edward and Bella are interesting, likable, sympathetic, and flawed just enough to still feel "real."
I know this is a long story, which was a little intimidating for me. Reading it one chapter at a time here at TWCS is a great way to finally get me hooked on this story! I hope others will give it a try too. You might want to look at "Just a Sip" as an option to encourage potential readers to check out your story.
I will check out your new story soon.
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
Thanks for the Characterlove! I tried to take what I thought were their core personalities and make them a little more human and youthful (since some of them are over 100 years old...LOL). And I guess I wound up exaggerating what I loved best about them. Your comments regarding their personalities make perfect sense.
I loved the Edward in Midnight Sun...when I got to see more of his tongue-in-cheek, broody humor. I love that aspect of him.
I'm glad you feel that they seem "real." I don't like contrived feeling characters. I want them to seem believable.
I will check out "Just a Sip"---I know this is a long story...I never imagined I would write this much. Didn't know my head held all these thoughts! I'm glad you took a chance on reading it and are enjoying.
I checked out your lovely banners. Fabulous work! I would like to find someone to create something for my other story since I am totally techtarded and dumbfounded by all things computer. Let me know if you are interested.
Thank you for reading and reviewing and sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated. Stay in touch.
-bannerday
Date: 22 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Dawn of the Dilemma
Great contrast between the painful conversation with Jake and the playful banter with Edward. I liked Bella's internal dialog during the phone call too. Great chapter!
Author's Response:
Hi again Coleen!
Glad to know you liked the contrasting ups and downs of Bella's conversations with Jerk...I mean Jake...and Banterward. I know who I'd rather spend time with. Jake's problem is that he's actually pushing her away and toward Edward all the while he is hoping nothing like that is happening.
Glad you liked the chapter. Thank you for the review and the positive comments.
-bannerday
Date: 25 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Stepping Off the High Dive
The texting conversation was great. I'm glad that Bella is willing to admit some of her feelings and be honest about where she is, relationship wise.
I'm wondering what kind of strategy Edward, Jasper, and Alice will devise for Jake's visit. I'm sure they won't be making any promises to "fight fair!"
Great job working in some things from the original Twilight. That's always fun to see.
I'm looking forward to the next installment!
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen
Replying to your review of chapter 17.
I like texting conversations. There are quite a few in this story. And yes, Bella is beginning to turn the corner and be honest with herself. It's not going to be easy for her though.
Jake's visit will be interesting, I guarantee it. And I don't think it will be quite what the reader expects.
I love working in snippets from the original Twilight. Sometimes I keep it canon---with the same character making the same sort of comment, other times it's a different character that gets the line or alludes to the line I like. I think it's a great way to pay homage to the original Twilight and to remind the reader what brought us all together in the first place.
I love your comments and appreciate any and all constructive comments/criticisms you can make. I've been my own beta, so if you spot something glitchy, feel free to let me know.
Thank you!
-bannerday
Date: 26 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Plunging Into the Deep End
I wanted to comment on the wonderful job that you do switching POVs. Many authors seem to struggle with this and end up either too repetitive or they leave the reader wanting more information from the alternate POV.
Even when you retell a scene from the other POV, it never feels repetitive. It just makes the story feel more complete. I love hearing from both characters. This chapter is a great example of how well you shift POV and how it adds to my understanding and enjoyment of the story. Excellent!
Author's Response:
Hi again Coleen!
Thank you for commenting on the changing POV's. I've done some re-editing as I've posted the story to keep the flow going. I love changing up the POV's...especially now at the beginning of their relationship because I think it shows what's going on in their heads and because they have to get to the same place before they can move on together.
I think when you are in a relationship you often only think only of yourself and your feelings about what is transpiring but the other half of the relationship is certainly having similar feelings and it's fun to think of what those thoughts might be. I do try to fill in the blanks when I look at an event from both sides.
I loved Midnight Sun because I liked the opportunity to see what was going on in Edward's head...and it wasn't as calm and controlled as Edward seemed in Twilight. He was an irritable, sexually and emotionally frustrated 17 year old boy. :) I really wish SM had pursued that story. It ws my favorite. I really liked broody Edward and his tongue in cheek sense of humor so that is what I like to write.
Thank you for your kind words and compliments. And thank you for the review. We're getting to the good stuff!
-bannerday
Date: 27 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: This Might Be Working Out
I just love your characters and the way they interact. I'm really looking forward to the visit from Jake. I like the fact that I'm not exactly sure what you've got planned for that! I was just sure that Bella would hold onto the relationship with Jake a little longer. I'm glad I seem to be wrong about that! Until next time...
Author's Response:
Hi again, Coleen!
Thank you for the Characterlove! I love them, each and every one of them! They're in my head, you know. I can really hear them saying the things they do. Maybe that sounds like I should be locked away in a home. ;)
The visit with Jake is upon us. I just posted chapter 20 and...well...there he is. Bella had already realized that they were having problems in the summer and when she left for school she didn't feel sad about them being apart. At all. That should have told her something right there. Plus, she has realized that she has been spending her time wondering what Edward is up to downstairs rather than wondering what Jake is up to out in Forks/La Push.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
-bannerday
Date: 28 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: The Movie Fades to Black
Movie night was great fun. I smiled through the whole scene.
Finally, the arrival of Jacob! Poor Edward, trying to avoid Jacob only to find himself in the wrong place at the wrong time.
The confrontation and fight was exciting. It's hard to write an action scene and you did a great job. I was able to follow the action and visualize the fight. You provided just the right amount of detail. Great job!
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
Glad you enjoyed movie night. It was a fun scene. It's lovely to let Edward have some fun finally. That boy needs more laughs and smiles.
And Jacob...he certainly doesn't bring a smile to anyone's face...well, to Bella's maybe, but it's kind of an uncomfortable little forced smile at this point. And Edward...doing his best to stay out of things and instead he lands right in the thick of it.
Glad to know you found the confrontatiion and fight exciting. It was a hard scene to write---how much is too much...how much is not enough. I'm happy it worked visually as you read it. That's hard to know sometimes as you write something. I see what's happening in my head, but to then put that into words so someone else can see the same thing in their minds is't easy.
Thanks for the coompliments and the review..
-bannerday
Date: 01 May 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36: Past Tense
Edward received good advice from Rosa and Alice. Thanks for the chapter! I'm so glad to finally be caught up with this story. Now on to "One Stupid Thing"
Author's Response:
Hi Coleen!
I somehow skipped over your review of chapter 36...well, I read it, I just skipped my reply somehow. I hate to do that. So Rose and Alice did buoy our boy up when Bella suddenly left for Forks and damaged Jake. Jasper and Emmett were not as level-headed, but thank goodness for the girls.
Hope you enjoy the recent chapters. Take care, bb! Sorry again about the reply-fail!
-bannerday