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15 yr old Bella has a fairly normal life. That was until her mum's new boyfriend came on the scene. Will Bella survive her new life? Dark Themes, Cannon Pairings. GRAPHIC
Thanks mkystich for the amazing new banner... AGAIN!!! :)
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89516 Read Count: 311087
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - In My Hands
What creeps me out more than this chapter is the fact there are crazy religious sects that actually exists in this country that run like this place. Life can truly be much scarier than fiction sometimes.
Also, I didn't know you kids were the ones that created this website. THANK YOU!!! I found while searching for The Perfect Wife after it was deleted from FF. I understand their terms and conditions, no NC-17 blah blah blah, but what pisses me off is there is no review system before something is yanked and certain things are pulled while others remain. They don't even check something before they delete it, they err on the side of the offended. I read a fic that's been on there for years that has Bella being gang raped by wolves while still in their wolf forms, other acts of extreme non-sexual violence and yet any story with even the hint of BDSM (consensual or non) get pulled. It gets frustrating, especially if you've been following a story for a year and then it's suddenly gone while some other violent crap remains. It reminds me of the news, they'll show bombings and other violence but any hint of sex (or god forbid non-mainstream sexuality) is shown then everyone has to freak out!!!!
Oh well, it's their site, I just wish more people knew of places like this so they can post their stories in all their goodness (better if it's kink goodness!) without fear of reprisal. Thanks again for not only this story, but for creating this site as a whole. It's like the island of misfit fanfics! ;)
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for you wonderful reviews. We have both loved them. We are excited to here that you love the site. There are some wonderful stories on here, that would not have made it on FF.. do to the nature of the story..
We really appreciate you taking the time to give us some feedback, and we look forward to more..
:)
Footroza and The Spoiltone
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Atonement
Yay Edward! It seems he hasn't completely drank the Kool-Aid! There is hope for him yet! Esme too it seems. I love the tension you have set to build between Aro and Edward over Bella. Your writing is so amazing I can already feel the glimmer of it brewing in the air!
I want a mom like Esme, regardless of if it's the books or a fic you can always feel the maternalness (yeah, it's not a word, what of it!?) spilling out of her. I never had a good relationship with my mother and I hope if I ever have children one day to be a mom like Esme is.
...hopefully not on the crazy compound ranch though. ;)
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - Admonishment
Gah, the sick fuck is pumping her full of hormones like she's a frickin' cow isn't he? I hope she and Edward sneek off for a roll in the proverbial (or not, since it is a "ranch" after all) hay before the wedding night!
Also, I totally would have picked the cane too!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Do Unto Others
It's weird to see Carlisle and Esme so loving toward each other, it makes them almost seem normal. It's weird because they go from acting like two loving, caring human beings to being a-okay with what is happening to Bella and that there is nothing wrong with the lifestyle they lead. Well, i guess "a-okay" seems to be a bit of an over statement however the fact remains they are going along with it and have done so for many years. They must know how new girls are taken from their lives and brain washed in a horrible fashion. Religious fervor can make you do crazy things I guess.
I wonder what Renee is up to...
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Confession
I can't help but hear that cheesy Celine Dion song "It's all coming back to me now!" in my head everytime Bella remembers something.
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - Discloser
Oh snap!!! It's like the Village only instead of monsters in the woods it's Michael Sheen! I would think that Carlisle is one of the people who has seen the outside world given that he's a doctor, unless he got his degree out of a Crazy Compound Ranch Cracker Jack box. I just picture everything labled with generic white labels like the DARMA brand everything on Lost. It's crazy to think these people have never seen the outside world. in order for most of them to have been born there, it has to have been going on longer than Aro has been around. It would be interesting to see some back story on the place as a whole and how Aro came into power. I'm also curious why they think he screwing and 'planting the first seed' helps the family so much. How do they know it's his if he turns the girl over to her husband right away?
Also,
"2. You girls are demented and crazy to think up all this shit?"
You are no more crazy or demented than the real world is considering this happens all the time unfortunately. Regardless, i like you crazy and demented! You are two of my favorite authors and you've combined your crazy, demented awesome talents for the sake of good and my kinky entertainment! Keep on keeping on! :)
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - The Family
The "family members" have to know that new members come from the outside, right? I mean, it's not like father can magic up new people. It's odd no one questions their lack of memory. I'm sure they are forbidden to speak of their time before coming to camp crazy but I would think it would stir memories of those that have gone through the brain washing. It's also obvious he seeks out women specifically for their dauthers/breeding purposes, I'm guessing there are more women than men there? Perhaps they go out to look for women and then hope to breed sons. It'd be interesting to see the statistics and census break down of the compound and find out more about their 'recruiting' practices. Maybe they obtain men through more standard cult recruitment? I'm sure they get women that way to but they just make more of an effort to find women?
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - Desperation
Ooooh come on Felix, have a little bit of guilt! And come on Charlie, follow that spidey sense and follow Felix! At least get his license plate!
Poor Charlie. :( I had a sneaking suspicious that Felix would meet up with Charlie. I hope it's more than just them passing each other in the bar or Felix making an anon phone call and Felix helps Charlie do a two man raiding mission to save Bells. I'd totally read a story just of the two of them teaming up Rambo style!
I hope my constant comments after every chapter aren't annoying. I can try to keep it all in and just make one comment at the end of the story so I don't blow up your email boxes. I'm still kind of new to this fanfic thing and honestly never replied much to stories before (what can I say, you guys are the best authors I've come across!) so I'm not sure what's kosher or not. >_>
Author's Response:
Girl.. we are in love with your reviews.. you review however you want. We are both having a wonderful time reading them... You put a lot of thought into each one, and it is very refreshing. Thank you so much for all you have to say, and for reading our stories. We are both so glad you are enjoying them.
I haven't answered some of your questions on purpose... because you will get the answers soon. Keep enjoying and reviewing. We are loving it.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - Fear Not, For I Am With You
So, Aro may be a creeptastic perv but apparently he's a jolly good match maker! And I was right, Carlisle did come from The OUTSIDE *dun dun dun!*, it would be interesting to hear his origin story and how he came to be the resident doctor at Camp Krazy.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 –Eyes Upon Us
EW ew and some more EWWW! The whole thing is just ew. I mean, no matter what your age is, a gal never likes going to the gynecologist, but imagine if that was your frickin' DAD and he (and the rest of the family at that) was all up in your shit preparing your body to be a "vessel" after some ritualistic public sex that the whole town watches. Oh, any for my next appointment can I invite my new BFF so she can see what it's like? GAH! And they all talk about it like it ain't no thang! Carlisle asked them both if they had 'read the material and prepared' like they were studying for a math quiz the next day. So creepy this is all the norm for them.
I'm 30 and have been living with my boyfriend for 8 years and I know my dad and brother like to still pretend that I don't have sex and we are all fine with that arraingment (god forbid if they actually found out I'm kinky). Hell, I like to pretend my mom and dad picked me out of a cabbage patch. WE WILL ALL DIE VIRGINS TO EACH OTHER!
And it's okay that you aren't answering my questions, I know I'm jumping the gun early with these comments since there is so much story left. I'm a stream of consciousness kinda gal. :)
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: The Temple
"We were their prized heifers being prepared for fertilization."
DING DING DING! WE HAVE A WINNER!!! *tosses confetti* What does Bellabeth win? A one night trip with a creepy old dude and a pointy dildo! Woo hoo!
Okay, so I'm not quite clear on what that instrument does, does it stab her or is it only meant to break the hymen? I always get confused because often times fanfics make the hymen seem like this complete flavor seal that totally goes over the opening of the hoo-ha when it's not quite like that (nor is it actually up IN the vagina) so i get confused. Everyone has apparently been up in her vag and knows she's a virgin so did it stab her to make more blood just for symbolism sake? If there was no need for any stabbing, why does it have to be all sharp and shit? That's just mean! So now they are going to go do some invitro in the next room with Doctor Dad? Aro seemed like he had some plans for the ole in and out with Elizabeth, don't know how he'll explain that change in plans. Well, I guess he is 'father' and can quite literally DO whatever the hell he pleases.
Also, gotta love Carlisle and Esme with the bath time cock block. I wonder if father dearest will ever figure it out. It's odd that Carlisle isn't questioning fathers ways more after what Esme has told him and what he's seen of Aro and Bella. But then again, everything is "odd" at Camp Krazy so I guess it's going to take a bit more to purge him of the Kool Aid.
Also, as far as your a/n (yes, I'm one of the folks that reads those, same with author forwards in books) I would totally buy a published copy of the Training School regardless of what characters or changes you make. (I still want to bribe you two to write a sequel based off those appointments in Heidi's planner to find other non-con slaves Laurant sent to the school and sold! What'll it take? Money? Sex? Cookies?) Don't feel bad about writing a fic and then changing the characters. Something I've noticed about the really good fics (like yours) out there is that they all have enough talent behind them to stand on their own two legs anyway. They aren't just cliches and 'Twilightisms' that are copied from the books/movies but their own stories with a little bit of twilight flavor mixed in. It's subtle so it doesn't look like it's trying to hard and doesn't ruin your immersion with the story, that's part of what makes them enjoyable. Hell, people who didn't know Twilight would probably not even notice them and those of us who had will find those little bits as fun Easter eggs. So no, I don't think there is anything wrong if all you did was just copy in different names and changed nothing else. The story is already amazing and your own piece of work side from character names and a bit of subtle Twilight flavor. Give yourselves more credit, you write amazing stories and I'd read them no matter who they featured!
Author's Response:
Yeah Aro is just sick... and a bit on the dramatic side. Pure sadist vibes in the pointy end of the device. He thrives on the terror of others. Bad man.. very bad man...
Thanks for the confidence in our writing. We really appreciate it. love the reviews.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - Trust and Obey
You know what annoyed me about chapter, after the obvious 'EW' of course? Jasper and all his "We've been through a lot today" Um...I didn't see any large, pointy shafts being shoved into you to make you bleed today as you were spread eagle in front of the whole town buddy. You just kinda laid there. I hope your two weeks in the cellar will help you rest from your trying ordeal. Men. *rolls eyes*
Also, I tried to check out the Not so Average --- by Thaigher Lillie that you rec'd but I get this message when I click on your link: "Access denied. This story has not been validated by the adminstrators of this site."
Wouldn't that be you? Get to validating! *cracks whip!*
Author's Response:
HA HA HA.. you are a crack up... No we don't validate here. The author was wanting to make the story better, and she removed it to rewrite it. It is going back up in chapters as.. The Cut. (Same author) She has two chapters up so far, and it really gives a deeper characterization of her characters already. (I can't wait to see where she takes it.)
So check that out if you have time.
But thanks for the whip crack anyway. TSO and I love a good spanking.. lol
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Free Will
Oooooh I bet Edward sees a flyer for something or runs into a certain teary eyed cop! At least I hope so! :)
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 - Transgressions
Jesus Aro is one sick fuck. I mean, I already know that, but just the idea of all those pictures and the one of his peen tucked between his legs...yeah, you ladies really know how to fucked with my mind.
Also, for some odd reason I pictured this mash up of Aro from the movie and Monty Burns from the Simpsons in those pictures. Maybe that was my mind trying to shield myself from some of the horror. I think you lot will officially give me nightmares now! How dare you make me scared of a playroom! I'll never forgive yo...oh look another chapter...
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31
Gah, you horrible women and yoru cliffies! I have go make diner now for my boyfriend and I, after your story I'm not feeling much like doing my "womanly' duties. I feel like burning my bra in protest for all the poor women stuck in Camp Krazies around the world! But this shit is from Victorias Secret and expensive as hell so I'm just going to settle by making something cheap like Hamburger Helper instead of something really nummy. That'll show him.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 - Darkness Surrounds Us
Ooooh please let it be Felix! He can dupe Aro into getting back into the camp! You can't go all tragic on us and let either one of them die after what those crazy kids have been through. I mean, they spent most of the story apart and...and...*lip quivers*
Okay, onto the next chapter to find out what happ...what the fuck? Why is there no *next* button. This is a joke, right? NOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!! You got me all hopped up on your fanfic crack and then the story isn't finished and I have to be left jonesing for more? You are evil, evil women! >=(
Date: 15 Mar 2011 Title: Volturi Order
"*********See, we could have stopped right here, but this is your reward for waiting so long for this chapter... *******"
Oh thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you! *gets down on knees* Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you!
I'm soooo glad you guys are back! :) I loved this story and I was actually thinking about it the last week or so when I was going over my favorites. I thought that Edwards injuries were more severe, like, life threatening and he was basically bleeding out in Bella's arms. Not that he's not fucked up but I'm so glad that's not the case! I'm surprised Charlie didn't punch Carlisle. He's going to sooo enjoy taking them own. Hell, so am I. I wish Carlisle could have gone with them but he's got to get the rest of his family. I can't imagine what would happen to Esme, Alice and Jasper if he left them behind. If there is any mercy poor Alice will miscarry. I can't imagine having to give birth to Aros spawn. :(
Also, something I'm curious about with all the stupid stuff Carlisle ignored. He said that Aro had told him that Bella had been taking drugs and was promiscuous. When he examined her when she first got there, wasn't he able to tell she was a virgin? Wouldn't that automatically tell him Aro was lying? Not to mention she was healthy and not going through withdrawls so that would say there was no drug use. How did Aro tell him he was 'helping' these girls to ever justify being filthy, emaciated and bruised? Did he know that brian washing was going on? I don't get how he though these miraculous transformations in people were happening. As a doctor he should know that healing the mind of a troubled team as well as getting off of drugs takes lots therapy and time, years in fact. Did Bella not mention anything about her mother Carlisle and/or did Carlisle not examine Renee? How could he not know they came together and that Renee was her mother?
I hope at some point Renee comes back to her senses and realizes what she's done and the horror that she's subjected her daughter to. I want to see Bella and Charlie tell her off then cut her out of their lives. Selfish, stupid bitch. >:(
Bella gets sent to a school by her boyfriend to help her become the wife he wants. It isn't what Bella expects, at all.
BDSM, Dark story.
Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward, Bella/Alice, Bella/Carlisle, Bella/Emmett, Bella/James, Bella/Jasper, Bella/Jasper/Alice, Bella/Rose, Carlisle/Esme, Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Edward/Bella/OC, Edward/Carlisle (Slash), Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, To Read
Chapters: 78 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 297603 Read Count: 1514751
Date: 26 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 67: Chapter 66: Edward DAY 22 & 23
I know this is an old story so this authors note is probably irrelevant now, however I would like to say I'm a fan of the word "pussy." I think it's hot and I don't find it dirty. I think it can be used in a loving scene without it taking away from the scene. I dont have a problem with the word "cunt" either but I know others dislike it. I don't know, words are words and it's the intent behind them to me more over the actual words. I don't find them over used because, well, that's what they are. Saying 'vagina' is to technical and other slang terms just seem juvenile to me. I don't think it would sound less romantic for Edward to breathlessly tell Bella "God, I love your pussy" and I don't think there is any other magical name for it that would sound better. And yeah, it would have sounded weird for Edward to say, "Thank you for sucking my COCK" but not because he said "cock". It would have sounded weird just because you just don't thank someone in that sort of scenario. They are having a real moment in bed together. I prefer "cock" to "dick" but "dick" isn't as bad either. It's much preferable than the weird, corny language that is used in cheesy romance novels. I think Sookie refers to Erics cock as his "gracious plenty" in True Blood and I cringe everytime I hear it. I dunno, just call it like it is. An arm is an arm and a pussy is a pussy. Damn, I'm eloquent. ;P
Honestly, as long as you don't use the word "cootchie" or "hootchie" I'm fine. Those words are just trashy to me.
Date: 26 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 58: Edward DAY 21
Bella pisses me off in this chapter. If she doesn't want to go to the police for herself, fine. However, it's incredibly selfish of her to make that decision for Victoria. Sure, James ahs friends everywhere but Bella isn't devoid of police contacts either. I'm sure her dad can find away to help Victoria if Victoria wanted to go through the cops. This could have easily been done without Bella having to tell her story if she stopped thinking of herself for 5 minutes and came up with a clever plan. This would have then perhaps gotten James put in jail without her havin to get involved. Also, they'd have avoided taking a walking trackign device back to Edwards house.
Date: 28 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78
This story was just fantastic from start to finish. You had me rivited from the first chapter. The way everything came together with the plot and characters was superb. It was the perfect blending of lemons, mystery, romance and character development. I just finished and I already want to read it again! I usually dislike multiple point of views, one or two is usually enough but the way you did it really worked for this story. I really WANTED to hear from all the different characters you wrote from. I'm guessing you each took on a particular character(s) and stuck with it through out the story but I would never have known there was more than one writer to this had you not told me. You fused your styles together so perfectly.
Any plans on a sequel? I think an interesting sequel would be hunting down those 'appointments' in Heidis address book. It sounds like Laurant was running a white slavery ring and was using Carlisle school to train them then sell them to different 'masters'. I think it would be interesting if Bella, Edward and Jacob took up the task of seeking out and rescuing those girls. Perhaps sending the 'masters' to be Aros pets with James. Those appointments in Heidis address book are the one mystery that wasn't solved in this saga and I would be here with bells on if you made it into a sequel!
What if Edward finally found his mate, but she had a troubled past and wanted to kill herself? Could he help her? This story has DARK Themes and Rape discussion.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 248279 Read Count: 76225
Date: 08 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 42 - Getaway
Alice is bugging me in this story, she's pretty selfish. It's pretty messed up that she'd even hint that she wanted to go on this vacation with them, let alone make a deal with Edward. She really needs to learn some respect for peoples personal space. And Bella needs to not just get back at Edward, she needs to tell him that it's not okay. Enough choices have been taken from her in life, she's the one who says where she'll go and who with, not a selfish sister and her boyfriend.
Same thing with her being changed, that's Bella's choice and no one elses. And Rose can take her baggage and leave it on someone elses porch. Just because she doesn't like her life doesn't mean everyone else will hate it too.
Date: 08 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46 - What have I done
That bit of the book/movie always bothered me, it's impossible to suck venom from a snakebite!!! Not your fault, like I said, they did it in the books and movie, it's just something that always urked me.
Date: 08 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50 - How Eternity came to be
Before Edward bit her he really needed to sit her ass down on that moldy matress and tell her that she needs to stop pulling this 'somethings wrong so I'm not going to talk to you' thing. She's done it more than once and let a problem fester between them that could have been solved with a simple conversation. I understand she has issues but this is one she really needs to work on.
Date: 08 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 51: Epilogue
Yeah, I can't get behind their little vigilante spree. It was wrong. Bella didn't want that to happen and just because they found a loophole doesn't make it right. It would kill her to find out otherwise and shatter her trust in them. It would serve them right. Justice had been done, and done fairly. They didn't need to mess with it. It also takes away from the courage and strength Bella had in going through with the trials for them to just go behind her back and kill them anyway. Life in prison was her justice to them and they took that away from her.
Not to mention death is infinitely easier than life in prison.
Date: 06 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - A Haunting Past
Man...I've read tons of stories where Edward and Bella are mated and are obvlivious to it yet the whole family knows and keeps it from them while teases them about it and every time I wish I could reach into the story and shake them senseless!
Date: 06 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - A Day at the Cullen's
"So I have to ask, who here likes and who hates the Spider Monkey comment in the movie?"
I don't mind the spider monkey comment in the movie or the book (don't remember if it was in the book to be honest) but I'm not a fan when lines from the book or movie end up in fanfiction. People are always putting quotable lines from the movie/books into their stories and we've all read them a hundred and one times now and it's gotten old and unclever. Sometimes I wonder if authors read other peoples fanfiction because so many things are repeated across fics that they must not. So yeah, I'm glad you skipped it. You are borrowing characters but the story is your own, good call.
Date: 06 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Lunchtime Observations
"She also had very little support for women who went back into abusive relationships."
Edward is 100% right and if Rose really feels this way she needs to stop volunteering. This is the time when these women need support the most and withholding it is doing more damage than anything. It can ensures a women wont leave and seek help again due to being judged.
Summary - Bella is kidnapped by a beautiful stranger that cannot kill her, but hates that a human can have power over him. Which road will he choose? When Jacob wants her, will that make his decision? Both men want to own Bella, however her heart only belongs to one. Which will have her in the end? Can Edward protect her from Jacob and his past, or will she eventually be consumed?
Banner Created by the wonderful MsAmbrosia
Vampires and Werewolves. OOC. Darkward. And every so often there shall be a sprinkle of the fluffy stuff. But mostly dark.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 122877 Read Count: 76213
Date: 31 May 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Saving Grace
I'm glad to see the story finished but it all just seemed really rushed. They went through so much and then suddenly BAM, it's just done in one chapter. Their master plan to get away seemed really poorly planned as well. I don't know what exactly they thought would happen to a human in the middle of an all out supernatural brawl. Of course the china doll is going to get smashed to bits. I dunno, all that torture, manipulation, trickery and then in one paragraph Bella just makes them all explode and it's over. It was all very deus ex machina. Not to mention didn't Rosalie betray them and help Jacob/Aro? Didn't she hate Bella? Then suddenly she and Emmett just show up and Rose is all smiley at Bella and no one says anything about her betrayal and no one finds out? That's pretty fucked up.
After all Jacob did to Edward, both in regards to Bella and the women he took before Bella, Edward didn't even get to have his vengeance? I mean, Jacob was the main bad guys and he didn't even say anything in the last few chapters. Not only did the hero and the villain not get to have their face off, they didn't even interact. He pretty much disappeared after Aro showed up as it was. With this ending, all the time they spend wandering around the castle seems pointless. As does the torture because Aro just decided 'okay, no more Jacob we are going to be nice now'. I mean, it was pretty obvious that the vamps didn't need the wolves and there was no reason for them to be there. Tanya just flitted away and didn't even have to answer for the torture/shit she did? Who was the guy on the wall? What exactly was Bella's power again? What happened to the really powerful vamp that was messing with their powers? What was up with her exactly? How did Emmett and Rose know that Edward had a plan? They jumped right into the fight like they knew what was going on. What made Rose have a change of heart after betraying them? So many unanswered questions. :(
Sorry, but it all just seemed rather unsatisfying and anticlimactic. Like I said, I'm glad their was an ending but it feels like you were trying to just hurry and get it over with and magicked all their problems away with Bella's unnamed, undefined, overly super strong power in one wave of her wand. 30+ chapters of torture, manipulating, fear and fighting for all their problems to go away in 3 paragraphs or less.
Side from the ending, I really did like the rest of the story. I really enjoyed what you did with Edward and the Monster. I like how they were almost two separate entities that are so tied together they are the same person, and both love Bella. Even if in their different ways. They'd both give their lives to love and protect her. I really enjoyed it when the Monster came out. I always love a dark, possessive, dominant Edward.
But yeah, those are my suggestions for when you write your next story. The main one being that the end is just as important as the beginning and middle of a story. It should have a flow to it and shouldn't just drop off. That can happen when you take a character and make them too powerful. No one can beat them so there is no struggle or worry so there is no fun in the victory.
I'm glad your back is feeling better and I look forward to your next story.
A collab between Kitschisme and Rosette-cullen Isabella Swan has lived as a servant her entire life. She has come to expect cruelty from her masters, but will her luck change when she is purchased by the mysterious, brooding millionaire Edward Cullen?
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Themslovebug90's read stories
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 58565 Read Count: 33362
Date: 23 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
I don't understand why Bella didn't ask why Edward would want to be dancing with his servant. She has to find that waaay weird.
**WARNING - THIS STORY CONTAINS VIOLENCE, SEXUAL MATERIAL, OFFENSIVE LANGUAGE AND OTHER CONTENT THAT MAY DISTURB SOME PEOPLE. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED.**
Edward Cullen is the leader of The Clan, a fierce and deadly group of assassins for hire and he knows nothing besides violence and blood. When he meets Bella, he begins to imagine that there might be more for him out there.
A dark journey of love, power and death.
All Human, Cannon Pairings and TEAM EDWARD
Please be warned, this story gets pretty graphic later on.
A special thank you to evilangel813 for the awesome banner.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read (Geddy)
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 234131 Read Count: 195557
Date: 30 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 13: I Trusted You
I don't understand Carlisle. He seems inconsistent. He tried to stamp out love and emotion from Edward and told him he can't love. He's so emphatic about this that it's part of the reason he wants Edward to kill Bella, yet he has a wife and children he loves very much. It's confusing. Not to mention the fact he's a disgusting, unredeamable bastard for what he did to Edward as a kid. God I hope he dies a painful death. I can't believe anyone in the family fosters any sort of love for him. Honestly, the scene with Alice was rather disgusting knowing what he's done to his son. He is no man, let a decent father.
Date: 30 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Same In The End
Wait...this whole 'demon' thing is confusing me. It's really distracting from the story because it seems so out of place. I figured in the beginning it was just what he called his darker side, a way to help him cope even though it was still weird. But the demon is actually real? That's would be even weirder because this is a story with no supernatural element. I'm confused. I love the story side from the demon, it's just rather distracting and jaring from the characters and story.
Date: 30 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Silent Night
I can't wait until Edward gets his hands on them. I'm glad you don't sugar coat things and pull any punches. I like some gore and vivid imagery. Clears out all the sugar in the brain from all the other fluffy fics out there.
Date: 30 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 16: We Gonna Run This Town
Is it very wrong of me to find killward sexy as hell?
Date: 30 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 15: All My Daughters For a Son
Wow, I really want to strangle Bella. How stupid can she be? Does she really not realize that the lives of not only her, but the rest of the family could be at stake with one wrong move? If someone who knows of the dangers tells you to do something, you do it no questions asked because you might not have time to finished getting your stupid question out of your mouth. He's not arbitrarily ordering her around to order her around. I really hope she learns her lesson.
Oh also, BEST LEMON EVAR!!! I forgot to say that when I read that chapter :)
Date: 31 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 34: Happier Times
I wish we'd have gotten at least one more chapter of Edward and Bella working things out before we jumped to one year later. I still think he was a bit hard on her and didn't take enough blame for how she ended up after he left her but all in all, not a bad wrap up to that part of the story. On a side note, maybe add in at the top of the chapter that there was a time jump, it took me a minute to figure out.
I'm really loving the progressive crazy of Demetri. It's fascinating and hilarious. I kinda wish Edward got to make due on his promise to kill Tanya though. Honestly, I think I just wanted to her him tell her off again. I don't think I'll ever get tired of that in fics.
Why does Carlisle hate Bella so much? I mean, side from anything to do with Edward he just seems to hate her as a person. Is there something really about her he doesn't like or does he just hate her on principle? You'd think with all his recent revelations and the fact she birthed his grandson and brought life back to Edward he'd be able to see how silly he's being if the latter is the case.
I'm also sorry, I've meant to review more than the sporadic times I have as I've been reading. Really, it's your fault though. I've been very addicted to this story and have read it all in one day with my eyes glued so hard to the screen I couldn't stop myself from instantly clicking to the next chapter. Try not to write such an addicting story next time. ;)
Can't wait for the next update. I understand life gets busy so I'll be patient. I'm also really excited you are going to do a sequel! I'm so totally there! :)
Date: 31 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Finding Purpose
I understand what Bella did was incredibly stupid and Edward should be mad, but I think he's making it bigger and into something it isn't. She didn't just up and leave him because she was unsure of their relationship or commitment. She was cornered and manipulated by his own mother with pictures of her father in pain and being tortured and told if she didn't decide right this very minute she was going to make a phone call that would have him killed. While yes, she made the wrong choice it was a very specific situation. He really doesn't need to have all these trust issues about her possibly bolting out the door and he's being unfair toward her and shoving unnecessary guilt onto her imo.
Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way. He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 995726
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
lol, why can't sexy movie stars fling themselves at my car? Lucky bitch. I like that they are both sassy. I imagine Edwards and Robs life are much the same, having to constantly duck screaming mobs.
Author's Response:
MY THOUGHTS EXACTLY - (seriously that's what got me writing this story) I really had a dream that I knocked Rob Pattinson over (creepy, I know) but by accident...
so sad xoxo
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Lord I'm glad I don't talk in my sleep, that would be so unbelievably embarrassing.
Author's Response:
thank you for your review - I sometimes wake myself up with my talking - but I talk complete crap or I laugh - go figure!
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
"A/n: This chapter was really difficult for me to write, because it covered several days and locations and it was a really transitional part of the story"
I think you handled it beautifully. There was enough information for us to know what was going on without a bunch of fluff and filler to try to shoehorn in your transitions. It was just the right amount of information to keep us paying attention without it seeming like it was dragging. So many people get caught up in having to made detailed back stories for every character or for every move a character makes with another chapter for the other characters POVs etc etc etc that eventually you don't care anymore. I think you handled this chap perfectly my dear! :)
Author's Response:
thank you so much for your review and your really great comments.
Date: 18 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
I had a hard time reading this chapter, I was feeling embarrassed by proxy for Bella. I didn't have much growing up and I remember never wanting to invite friends over because I didn't want them to see my house. I sooo know what she was going through. I'm glad she got through it, the Cullens are really wonderful people.
Aren't her clothes and toiletries in Edwards closet/bathroom? Didn't he tell her to move all that stuff over there? And even if it was all gone wouldn't he have figured "she just moved into her new place she probably took it all over there"? Grrr...boys are so stupid sometimes!
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34
Oh god...I'm so embarrassed for her. She made it even worse by running out. I'm hiding behind my couch for her.
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36
I'm a sub and I completely feel for Bella. I've had many, MANY talks with my Dom about not letting himself be fawned over. Guys don't fucking realize what bitches do sometimes. They will at times purposely fawn over a guy with a girl just to get a rise out of them or the girlfriend. In my experience in some circles, single women are just heinous. Having another women kneeling at his feet with no warning to her? Fuck that, I'd have either safe worded out or gone ballistic when we got home. To me, that is blatant disrespect. How would he feel if she was kneeling at another Doms feet? Yes, he is in control however there still needs to be a level of respect and protocol. There are many women who would find another women kneeling there and watching hot, however, that is not something I think he should have sprung on her. He is a Dom and should let other women, especially other SUBMISSIVE women know it is not okay to fucking touch him. Yes, knowing he's not going to cheat is one thing but come on, can anyone really not expect hurt feelings and jealousy over someone else touching and fawning over your partner? That's just human nature. Edward is an ass.
Author's Response:
thank you so much for your comments and your review. I appreciate it and I hope that you will continue to read and enjoy this story.
Michele
Date: 19 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40
Wow, I have been absolutely GLUED to the last few chapters. I should have been in bed ages ago but I couldn't stop reading! I didn't even stop to review I was so anxious to click the 'next' button. BRAVO!!! I'm soooo glad that I found your story late so I didn't have to wait for updates. I'd have been harassing you DAILY! LOL It was the perfect amount of tenseness and fear. You wrote all the different angles between the girls, the boys and Carlisle PERFECTLY. You gave us a little of each but didn't over do it. It was enough to make me really feel the desperation and helplessness of the boys and Carlisle as they were trying to get there in time but could do nothing but wait and I could feel Bella's strength and determination. This is what part of why BDSM is so beautiful to me, being submissive doesn't mean weak, so often when you submit yourself you become stronger and more confident than you ever realized. Bella has truly become a strong, brave and confident young woman, even if she doesn't realize it yet. I don't think she would have found that without her submission and Edwards unwavering love. I can't wait to see what else you have in store for us!
Author's Response:
Hey there - I love your reviews! Thank you so much for your comments.
Michele
Date: 12 May 2011 Title: Chapter 66: Chapter 66
I was curious where you are from? You keep referring to a doctors office as a 'surgery'. In the US the only thing we really refer to as a 'surgery' is the as a verb, like a doctor performs a surgery or a tonsillectomy is a type of surgery to remove the tonsils. Obviously it doesn't matter and I know what you are saying in the story I'm just always fascinated by how other places refer to things.
I'm so glad we are finally getting to the letter. That has been hanging over our heads forever! And it was a really mean tease to bring it back out and have Carlisle read it and then say 'oops, not yet!'. Naughty PLU! 10 spanks for you! *points to whipping bench*
I'm sure Bella is happy that Renee is not her mom, however that doesn't change the fact that she always looked to Renee as a mother and Renee fucked her up and scared her for life. Not being related by blood isn't going to change that. I'm so curious to how it all happened though. How could Charlie not know? So he got someone else pregnant and didn't know it, and thought his actual wife was pregnant but she wasn't? Huh? So confused. Hurry with the next chapter! I really hope the story isn't close to being over yet. I love it so much I never want it to end. :(
Also...damn do I want that bus. I'd move in and never leave. I'd just roam the country for the rest of my life. It's the perfect amount of freedom and luxury!
Author's Response:
hey there fs - I am from South Africa - former colony you know and all that - thanks for the lesson! look out for the next installment tomorrow or sunday (my time!)
thanks for the review xoxo
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43
"You are so beautiful, Isabella Swan. I never get tired of looking at you."
Where the hell are the real men like this? Is it only in sexy fanfics that they exist? I think I shall stay in my fantasy world then!
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 45
I'm continually amazed at how well you are able to write emotions. I went through a similar thing as Bella with my dad and I understand that anger. My heart ached for her as they had their confrontation. The hurt from a parent runs deep and often times there is still that scared, frightened child still inside you that needs to heal. That kid needs you to let that anger out so you can move on. I'm glad Bella got her opportunity, my dad lost is battle with alcoholism this last July and I never got to have a moment of angry catharsis and reconciliation with him. I know it was hard to write, but I think you did it beautifully. Thank you.
Author's Response:
thanks again, fs, for your comments and for sharing this with me.
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45
"it is so much harder to move on when there is a hole in your heart."
How true this is. :(
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47
I don't want to burn you at the stake for THE EVIL CHAPTER, lol. Bella and Alice deserve to be punished for sure, however, I think them leaving in that fashion is WAY fucked up. Bella has mucho abandonment issues, her mother and father both walked out on her exactly like that or similar to that. Bella used to sit on her front porch waiting for someone to come home. Regardless of if it fit the crime or not, I don't know why Edward thought it would ever be an acceptable punishment to re-enact, in any way, what happened to her as a child.
Author's Response:
thanks for the review - yeah Edward and Jasper really show their 'dick' side for the next little while!
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48
"I don't just put words to paper, I really sit and think about what they are doing, and why they would say something."
That is very, very evident. I love this story so much, it is so complex and textured in characters, interaction, plot and emotion. I think this is probably one of the best stories I've ever read. You masterfully handle he emotional elements and character interactions. I love how you are fearless to piss us off, make us GRRRR at you in the comments and then fix it a chapter or two later. I just picture you there giggling at our comments knowing that all will be well. Are you sure you're not a sadist? ;) I think I've felt almost every emotion there is to feel as I've read this story, and I've been very angry the last couple chapters and I cheered Bella on as she made her confrontations and I very nearly literally did a fist pump when Garrett laid into Edward the following night at his house. I also loved the little peek into Alice and Jaspers sex life. She's a pain slut? Interesting, I can certainly see that Edward will NEVER want to know that. LOL I don't want this story to end!!!
Also, thanks for the recs. I suck at searching for good stories or stories with D/s themes so it's always nice to see what others have liked, especially from an author I have great admiration for.
Author's Response:
thank you for reviewing so faithfully fs, Alice is a bit of a pain slut... it's always the little ones :) But then again, I think that jasper makes it hurt so good
Michele
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50
Here is the problem that I have with Alice and Bella not being able to see each other...one persons sexual or lifestyle preference should not affect or be thrown in the face of other people. If you are into BDSM, it's very rude to flaunt that in front of those not in the lifestyle. My "grounding" them from each other for a month, they've now taken their lifestyle and forced it on the rest of the family. Rose now has to choose between which sister she wants to hang out with. She can't have the two women closest to her be there for her during her pregnancy. Edward and Jasper have removed ROSE'S support system by grounding Bella and Alice. It also puts her into an awkward position in having to choose which sister to do which activity with and will make her worry about hurt feelings if she chooses one over the other. Rose now has to work even harder to make sure she spends equal time with each so there are no hurt feelings. Even if Alice and Bella's feelings weren't hurt by Rose choosing one or the other, the fact is that any decent human being would worry about the feelings of others anyway.
It's the same with the rest of the family. Carlisle and Esme want to have a BBQ but now one of the girls has to stay home and she is denied seeing her father, mother and other siblings and they are denied seeing her because Jasper and Edward decided to "punish" them in a ridiculous fashion. How can they expect them to open up and talk in therapy when they know there are restrictions on their friendship, awkward feelings of "...I can't look at or talk to Bella to long" etc etc.
Even if Jazz and Edward lighten the punishment to "supervised" visits the problem remains the same. Rose should always have to have one of the boys around if she needs female support or time away. Same with Esme and Carlisle.
If I were Rose, Esme and Carlisle I would furious with Edward and Jasper for this.
I'm also exceptionally disgusted with Jasper for treating Alice like she's so horrible for not telling him. SHE IS THE VICTIM! SHE WAS SEXUALLY ASSAULTED! With that come deep feelings of shame, guilt and disgust. Many women are sexually assaulted/raped and never tell because of this. Often times you go into a state of shock, you can have PTSD and crippling anxiety. A lot of women feel guilty and that they are somehow at fault. It doesn't matter if it's rational or not, mental trauma doesn't always result in making sense. Just because you don't tell your spouse, that doesn't mean you don't trust them IT MEANS YOU ARE VICTIMIZED AND TRAUMATIZED. Neither Jasper or Edward have even considered this. Instead of punishing her for not telling, Jasper should be on HIS knees asking what she was feeling and telling her it's not her fault. Emmett should have been all over them about this after what he went through with Rose and James.
I'm highly, HIGHLY disappointed in both Jasper and Edward. Jasper is getting off FAR to easily.
Author's Response:
wow - that's a strong reaction to this chapter fs! Jazz and Edward are showing their very human side. They are after all, 'people like us' and they make mistakes and they screw up and they are not perfect and this chapter (and a few others) proves it over and over again. We love people INSPITE of their faults sometimes ... I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story.
Michele
xoxo
Date: 22 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51
I'm so proud of Bella! I can't imagine the catharsis of telling her bitch of a mother off. I hope she doesn't do anything to make Edward fuck up his homework, that's pretty selfish. Paul is doing this to help them and he had a very good point about wanting the women uncollared for the session.
And I'm sorry I got all wound up in my last review! I hope you don't think I was really mad at you. Your story is just that good that it draws out real emotions from the people reading it! <3
Date: 22 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52
Aw...while I'm glad Bella wised up I'm sad we didn't get a medical role play scene. I love those!
....can I have an appointment with Doctor E then? ;)
Date: 23 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54
"Oh Isabella, how the victorious fall so quickly!
I found this unnecessarily cruel. No need to tear her down Edward. :( She's going to make mistakes, no one is perfect. She was doing great! No need to make it out like it's the end of the world and she's just a fuck up. Talk like this isn't constructive. :(
Date: 23 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56
I think the punishment was fitting. She fucked up this week and she knew the consequences. I'd like to see them get through one weekend without her fucking up though. I also wish he'd quit telling her 'one step forward, three steps back' because she's not. She's just human and it's natural to screw up and forget even things that are ingrained or told to you recently. She's got a crazy busy hectic life and a shit ton of new stuff is being thrown at her. Her mind is bound to get overloaded. Don't get me wrong, she deserved the punishment totally (spanking without warm ups hurts like a motherfucker) I just wish he'd watch what he says or how he says a bit more. I think that's part of why she feels a bit inadequate. Even breaking all those rules, she still learned and accomplished many new things. That's certainly not 3 steps back.
Also, I'm getting confused...are there THREE Heidis in this story?
#1 Heidi the doctor
#2 Heidi the PR person
#3 Heidi the Oscar dress lady?
Date: 23 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57
Yaaaay! Good for Edward, finally! :) I actually MAYBE got a little teary. Good for Bella standing up to Heidi! I'm so glad she is in a place that she can do that now.
I'm also sorry you caught so much flack from the last chapter and had to add in all those explainations to the story. I find it odd people waited until chapter 56 to realize this is a story about BDSM and there are going to be punishments! It was harsher but not really any different from other chapters. Whatevers!
And my heart and prayers go out to all of you in the flood zone! <3
....oh fuck. I'm at the end...I have to wait for updates now after the last 4 blissful days of non-stop, uninterupted reading? NOOOOOOOOO!!!! It's not fair! :(
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58
Poor Bella. I wish Edward had at least had the forsight to purchase those two pictures she loved so much. He's so cute, his first reaction to go buy the whole frickin' collection. God damn, why aren't men like him real?
And I can tell your right now, I'm voting sequel!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your comments and review xoxo
Date: 27 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60
I always love how long your chapters are! I feel so bad for Bella, I wish she'd confronted her father about the weekends at Sues while she was left all alone thing. God that's horrible and fucked up. I understand the wedding wasn't the time, but I hope she can unburden herself with that and confront him.
Author's Response:
hey there fs, thanks so much for your comments and review. Yes, it's pretty fucked up, and at some stage they will have that conversation. Charlie knows what he did, and he feels imense guilt over that and so many other mistakes that he made, but you can't go back, you know.
talk soon, okay?
xoxo
Date: 13 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59
LOVED the chapter. The morning after when Edward was talking to her brought a tear to my eye with how much he loves her and wants to understand her. I also loved their scene. He's such an amazing Dom and your write this lifestyle so well. As someone who is a sub in the lifestyle it makes me happy to see it written with such respect and accuracy. I cringe when I read a lot of stuff out there. I don't expect things to be completely accurate but some people don't seem to take the time to research, learn or understand what it's all about. It's not just dirty, kinky sex. You said so much with this part of your story:
"With that end in mind, Edward had plan each moment of what they would do this day. He was going to help to unburden her mind, body, and heart."
It's beautiful what can be done in submission. How much strength and confidence can be found in the simple act. Yes there are punishments and sometimes you are denied release but there is so much more to it than that. There is freedom in bondage. I wish Fee could see that the missed orgasms are worth it! ;)
I so don't want this story to end, it's at the top of my favorites and your Edward and Bella (even in moments they are being idiots) are by far my favorites. Hell, I love what you've done with all the Cullens. You've managed to make them all likable. Often times authors make Alice to annoying or Rosalie to bitchy but you've managed to find a balance with all of them.
And a big thank you to both you and Fee for the recommendations! I've been slowly making my way through a lot of them. I like reading things authors I respect like, it's so much easier to find good stories that way rather than hunting and searching long lists yourself. My other favorite story you recommended is Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8. You and that author do well in the portrayal of BDSM relationships. Her Bella comes from an abusive past so all her punishments are more mental/privilege removal and the author is wicked creative in them. A few I've thanked my lucky stars my Dom hasn't thought of himself yet. LOL I'm so glad you guys recommended that story. Oh..also if you haven't read it yet, Heart Break Remedy by dariachenowith is another great one.
Author's Response:
Hey there FS,
Thanks so much for your comments and encouragement - it really means a lot to me to know that I'm getting it half right. I hope that you will tell me when I miss the mark completely!!
Heartbreak Remedy and it's sequel A beautiful Disaster are two of the most amazing stories and I have so much respect for Daria! Well we'll see what happens as wedding season approaches!
Thanks again,
Michele
Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 64: Chapter 64
I'm guessing Victoria didn't make it? I almost wish she did so she could know she FAILED in her mission. I also think Brian should punch Felix as hard as he possibly can. If he hadn't stopped Brian, Brian might have been able to get to Victoria in time. Was the publicity fucking worth it, Felix?
I could kiss you for how long your updates are. They sate me until you update again. Thank you for all the time you put into these chapters and the story as a whole. I never want it to end.
Author's Response:
Oh no babe, she got a bullet through the brain from our wonderful Brian, but Felix has NOT heard the last from him or Bella or Anderson! I'm glad that you liked it! Thanks so much for the review and comments.
Date: 22 May 2011 Title: Chapter 67: Chapter 67
Is she going to ask Edward about having a baby. Or something crazy about becoming a switch. I hope not. :(
And when he gave her the crest necklace did they decide to go for more of a 24/7 relationship? I was really confused by that part.
Date: 31 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 72
Who are the actresses you have with the picture that is supposed to be Angela, Lauren and Suzi? How would Angela and Lauren even know Suzi, let alone end up at that Spa?
Date: 11 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77
I've been in a relationship for the last 10 years and something I've come to realize is that just because you are in a relationship, it does not mean every other woman in the world dies because your man chose you. We are all still human and therefore sexual creatures by nature. The body is going to have certain natural reactions whether our MIND is engaged or not.
I would not be mad at Edward for getting hard during a love scene or for physically being attracted to her but if his MIND starts to wonder of if he actually DID anything with her I'd castrate him. :)
Bella has been through enough, if he puts her through more I hope every male Cullen, along with Brian and Andy, beat the crap out of him. I also hope he feels guilty as shit for a long, long time.
Author's Response:
Aaagh - the voice of reason! Thank you FS that is exactly what I was trying to say!! And don't worry, he is not going to 'go there' - I will personally cut his dick off if he does!!!! I think that we are our own worst enemies sometimes and we act stupid by pretending that 'nothing's wrong' but we feel guitly in any case!
Silly, silly humans..
Thanks for the review and your great comments xoxo
I have consolidated the out takes of People like us into one place! These are the sub stories born out of the pages of PLU.
Categories: Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Finished, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 54321 Read Count: 226542
Date: 24 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Alice and Jasper #1
LOVE the outtake. Jasper is a hot, harsh Dom. I would love to hear the rest of what happened after they left the play room at Garrett and Kates party that first time. PULEEESE! :)
Author's Response:
Hmmm now that's a new request - let me see what I can do, okay? What would you like to see happen????
Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1254882
Date: 07 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 87: Chapter 87
Did she start her period? I forgot if she still had one or not after what happened with James. I hope it has nothing to do with her being pregnant. Not a fan of Bella being pregnant, it seems to take the focus from everything else in a story. I would be nice if it were her period so she has the possibility of being pregnant, that would be better than a surprise pregnancy they didn't think was possible. I've read a lot of stories where Bella thought she couldn't get pregnant and surprise, surprise she ends up knocked up. A surprise surprise period would be better than being pregnant. Maybe pregnant Bella can come later on like, chapter 150 of the story. :) Because this awesome, favorite of mine story is never ever going to end...right? =D
I also don't think we've seen the last of Tanya. Maybe I'm just a bitch, but I don't feel like she's been put in her place enough. She certainly hasn't learned her lesson! You cold tell from her half assed, non-apology. And why doesn't Dougie tell his Daddy he doesn't want to play with her? It's obvious he can't stand her. I also really really REALLY want Bella to buy the poor boy new marbles! It's obvious Tanya stole them because she's so clearly lost hers.
I hope Bella lets Edward spank her now. I mean christ, a hand spanking is a cake walk next to a caning. After some erotic spankings maybe they can move up to punishment spankings. They really are preferable to the punishments she currently gets imo. They are over and done with. Not to mention there is a huge cathartic release that goes with them. I think she'd enjoy it. And he has spanked her before. When they were in Forks and she had her break down in the car, he took her to the hotel room and paddled her. It helped her release all those emotions and cry (again, cathartic release). So he's taken her across his knee before.
Author's Response:
No she did not start her period -- and yes she does get one, but she is on Depo and it messes with your system so you have smaller periods, and less often ,,, so no she is not pregnant ... and Edward wasn't as surprised at what he saw and waht he DIDN'T see....You'll see a little but more (or hear a little bit more) about Dougie playing with tanya .... but mostly Dougie wants to play with Eleazar and in order to do that --- he has to put up with Tanya...so he does ... and like he says, sometimes she's ok ...but other times ...lol....ohhh the way my mind works ...LOL...
Edward has spanked her, for play purposes, arrousal and of course the one Maintence Spanking ,,,,but punishments spankings ...NO,,,there is no way she is ready for that, the psychological damage would be to much, maybe later, but not yet ....
Date: 25 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59
Yeah, I still don't see Leah's side. She could have asked Bella a million and one questions to clarify but instead she just went into bitch mode and assumed a lot. I can understand people not comprehending why someone would ever want to be a sub or get the mindframe behind it, but to just make assumptions and judgements about a friend is inexcusable. They've been together a month and if Leah was really worried about it she should have asked Bella to lunch and really pressed the point it was important to see her so she could talk to her, but she didn't.
Date: 25 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58
I'm finally catching up! I got busy and missed a couple updates, I'm a horrible person! Oh well, that just means more for me to read now. I love being able to move on to the next chapter right away! I feel spoiled! :)
As of right now, I don't see Leah's point. It seems to me that she's just jealous and angry that Bella isn't at her beck and call anymore. Outside of the shelter work, she did nothing but hang out with them. Now she has a life of her own and Leah doesn't like it.
Date: 09 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
That's right! I totally forgot that she shaved her patch off. So much awesomeness in the last couple chapters that I completely forgot! That was a big step for her. I hope Edward isn't mad that she did it without asking him first. I think he'll recognize it was a big step though. I'm excited we are going to get to see more of the party and that they aren't going home yet! The last two chapters have been some of my favorites in the story. And I love watching Edward throwing the cold shoulder and putting bitches like Lauren, Tanya and Samantha in their places. Yeah, Samantha hasn't been a bitch like Tanya and Lauren, but the audacity to proposition a man in front of his partner, sub-only or more, is ridiculously rude and offensive. But like I said, I'll never get tired of seeing Edward put them in their place. It's delicious! :)
Two other people I enjoy getting told off are Alice and Jasper, I would love to see an outtake of the conversation Bella had with Alice at the kids birthday party. I'd like to see a conversation with Bella and Jasper too. I would have hoped hearing it from Bella's mouth would make Alice understand better but from what we saw of her conversation with Edward I still don't think she gets it. I mean, you don't have to want to be apart of the lifestyle yourself to understand it. At the very least to understand that it's not negative. It's still pisses me off to no end that they equate what Edward does to what James did. They really need to be sat down and told not only how offensive that is, but how wrong it is.
And I wouldn't mind hearing more about Dougie and his play sessions. I enjoy age play. :)
Author's Response:
me too ... age play is one of my fav activies ...and i think tere will be an OT of the epic Rock-em Sock-em Robet Battle ....lol ... and all that just might happen ...thanks for reading ....
Date: 28 May 2012 Title: Chapter 91: Chapter 91
"A quick thank you to my mechanic Teddy for taking an hour out of his time to explain to me the workings of the coolant system of a car. Drawing it out and showing me the best possible way to disable a vehicle with the least effort…He’s the best …"
lol, did you tell him why you wanted to know? I'm not sure what is funnier in my head, you explaining it's for a Twilight fanfic you are writing or just letting him wonder if you are out to play ninja and actually disable someones car.
Date: 10 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 95: Chapter 95
I know Esme means well, but I hope that she gets put into her place a little. I just got married not that long about and was about ready to string my mother in law up by the time the big day came.
As far as the bet, at first I really wanted Bella to win until she brought up the Fruity Pebbles. She irritates the fuck out of me with those things. Especially how she tried to manipulate the situation last time they were brought up. Now I just don't want her to have them so I hope she loses.
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
"He shook his head, “Doesn’t anyone ever treat you?”
“No,” I said looking down at the table.
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Edward cupped my chin lifting it, “What the fuck did he do to you Isabella?”
I could feel the tears forming in my eyes. “He made me doubt everything.”
Is there something missing where I put the stars? It just seems like an odd jump and shift in emotions. Like there should be more conversation between the "no" and "what did he do to you"/*emotional outburst*.
I'm really enjoying the story so far. I like your Edward and I'm glad Jake is in the picture as a friend. While I guess I'm 'team Edward' I never hated Jacob and he so often gets the short end of the stick in fics.
Author's Response:
Do you think so? I thought it went together,,,maybe it all depended what was going on in Edward's head at the time...
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
When she was going to get into the hot tub and called Edward 'Sir' was that a concious thing or did it just slip out?
Also, I think we've slept with the same guy. At least that's what I hope because it's just to sad to think there is more than one guy out there with a dick that small.
Author's Response:
She was fucking with him,,,,teasing him...something he is not use to....there was one reader who yold me that she slept with thumb boys brother --- pinky boy ...lol....
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Yeah, my man would have sgtood there like an idiot for twenty minutes before going back inside to watch the game.
I don't understand why Edward hasn't slept with her yet. You don't need a limits list, contracts or rules for plain vanilla sex. He wants to be her boyfriend too so he's going to be having sex with her outside the play room. He totally made it seem like that's the only time they could have sex and he must have her paperwork first! Idiot male.
Author's Response:
Hmmmm.... he was trying to be a gentleman but he also didn't want their 1st encounter to be in the playroom,,, he also wanted to know her limits and physcial limitations ( if any) ....yeah he's a man
Date: 27 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
"With those things said, I told you all before. I write the way I talk. I use words that probably- are the wrong ones. Such as I would say.” He let me go.” I know that the proper way would be “He left me go.” I know that. My English professors, called that - style of writing."
Um...I'm sorry, what? Your English professor is on crack if he told you that. "He let me go" is correct, you had it right.
Honestly, typoes here and there don't bug me, my brain is pretty good at reading over them. The only suggestion I would make to you is be mindful of your quotation marks. Sometimes you forget to use them so it's really confusing and takes a minute to realize a character is talking and the text I'm reading isn't narrative.
Author's Response:
See...lol... I even messed up my authors note ...lol ....the words should have been switched to say "With those things said, I told you all before. I write the way I talk. I use words that probably- are the wrong ones. Such as I would say.” He left me go.” I know that the proper way would be “He let me go.” I know that. My English professors, called that - style of writing."
See I am human and my professors did call that "writing style".....I really was still learning to post in a way that is easier to read...and for some reason when I post on this site ((which I love)) it condences... and I have to go back and fix it... I'm not stuoid but I am probably doing something wrong with my upload ....this is all been a learning process for me and I must say I am enjoying it....
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
I've been curious, what kind of dog is Seth?
Author's Response:
he is a Beagel ...
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27
You can spank, flog and cane for a punishment and have it not leave a mark. With proper warm up spanking, stroke placement and proper impliment useage there doesn't have to be any bruising or strips or whatever and still have it hurt like hell.
Author's Response:
Yeah ... you made me go back and see what I wrote....Ok ... your right it can be done so that it leaves no marks,,, but I will not agree that it doesn't hurt like hell or the that the sting doesn't last longer....i wanted to get it across that there is a differance between pleasure and punishment apankings...which she will experince later..not the spanking becasue he will never strike her as a punishment..i meant the same sernerio under two differant circumstances)...
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28
Hahahaha, I don't know why but this sentence cracks me up:
"Are you all happy now? Edward let her swallow"
Did you ever think, when you decided to write fanfic, that you would have to type that sentence to your irritable readers?
Author's Response:
OMG ... you would think that he was killing her not letting her swallow... I didn't know that there were so many women out there at enjoy swallowing so much ...lol.... and to answer your question ...no, I didn't
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29
"hot wax on the pussy is not very pleasant"
Sure it is. =D
Author's Response:
That is a matter of opinion ...lol.....and since Bella is me.... i say it's not ...lol....
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30
I can't believe people want her to frickin' safeword over having to get persmission to use the bathroom. I think people are forgetting that part of D/s is humiliation. Sometimes minor, sometimes major and needing permission to use the bathroom is very MINOR. Yes, people get off on it, there is nothing wrong with that. His request is so small and it's for her benefit anyway, it's helping her stay in the sub mindset during their weekend which is something she worried about.
Author's Response:
OMG ... you should see what they want her to safe word over... going to the bathroom,,,eating something she don't like...They seem to think that a safe word is a get out of jail free card, that can be used simply becasue you are asked to do something you would rather not do...not what it is a "safe" word ... for your safety....I just laugh at them ....
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31
What exactly are the things he put on her nipples...and where can I get some?
Author's Response:
Nipple bands...ummm I give you the link but personally I perfer small rubber bands....you know the real tiny ones that are used for braiding your hair,,,they work the best... again for the purpose of the story .. it was better for Edward to use an applicator ,,,,but here is the link ,,,,
http://www.edenfantasys.com/sex-toy-reviews/sensual-love/nipple-bulb
Date: 28 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32
I think we have different interpretations of Love the Way You Lie. The abuse certainly isn't one sided.
Author's Response:
You are absolutly right it is not all one sided, she hits and scratches however it is he who threatens to kill her....and it is he who escalates the violence with fist ...and besides I needed to swing the song into that light for the purpose of my story ....yeah i can do that...lol...
Date: 29 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34
I'm really getting irritated by some of the comments you seem to be getting. I don't expect everyone to be knowledgeable about BDSM and it's many intracasies but people like what they like, as you said there is more than one way to take it. Bitching about it and calling it wrong or degrading makes them as bad as Leah, Alice or anyone else that gives Bella and Edward shit for how they live their lives. Not to mention, getting off on being called a slut is pretty common even OUTSIDE BDSM relationships. No dirty talk gets me hotter than when my man calls me his dirty little whore/slut while we are having sex however I hate the term bitch so he doesn't use it. I have a friend that is opposite, she loves being called a bitch but hates the term 'whore'. A word is only degrading if you have a personal issue with it, but you shouldn't put that on everyone else or assume it means the same thing to everyone.
Author's Response:
My word is 'cunt' don't call me that, or use it to discribe my vag either...... I hate it...however...during my 9am daily phone call when the question of the day is "and how is my slut doing?" yeah ... even at work when I am knee deep in giving meds i find myself dripping wet ...everytime....differant strokes for differant folks ...
Date: 29 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35
"One more thing …are your panties wet???"
They've been wet since chapter 2.
Author's Response:
Then I have done my job ...lol....
Date: 29 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37
"Alfred Hitchcock always said that he never showed the actual carnage because a person’s imagination was far more reaching then anything he could have shown on the screen. So you are going to have to use your own imagination to fill in those ten minutes …"
Oh you are an evil woman...
Author's Response:
This one has been known to be that way ....lol.....
Date: 29 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40
Is Leah being a stark raving bitch because she's jealous of the attention Bella gets? I mean, I'm sure she doesn't begrudge Bella what happened to her but her husband is always worrying about her or running of to take care of her, I'm sure Charlie and Sue constantly talked about Bella and now she's got a sexy fine man that is all about her (also causing Jake to again, worry about Bella). Is she having a Jan Brady 'Marsha Marsha Marsha' moment?
Author's Response:
Leah has some issues...part of what you say is true...but come on now, your a smart girl, i'm sure you can figure out what her problem is.....
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43
Ahhh...yummy subspace and the come down. I love that feeling.
Author's Response:
YEAH!!!....nothing else needs to be said ...
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44
Yeah, sub-drop is different and really sucks. Luckily it's not something that happens everytime or often really.
Author's Response:
I've been staring at your words for five minutes, not sure how to respond. Because although sub-drop occurs, it isn't often in fact it's rare. But I can feel the anxiety well up inside me as I think about it.....(((yeah ..not fun at all))
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46
Wow...that pinky mouse story is vile and disgusting. I would have my kid volunteering at an animal shelter cleaning up shit for a month if they ever did that, not to mention the amount of lost respect they'd have to earn back from me.
“Did she have a relationship with Aro?”
There must have been something in my demeanor that finally gave him the hint that he had stepped over the boundaries because he held up his hands in defeat. “Sorry, not my business.”
“That’s right, it’s not!” I ba carerked moving to the panel on the wall to punch in the code so I could get rid of him and take of Bella."
Why didn't he just answer the question? It makes it sounds worse by not answering, it's a simple question. Most people would take the answer as 'yes' because it sounds like he's trying to dodge it. I can understand not taking out a press release to deal with the gossip, but in a one on one situation like that just say, "Not that it's any of your business but no, Isabella was nothing more than a friend to both Aro and Jane due to a thesis paper she was writing on the topic and he gave her a gold card to come see for herself. They also donate to a charity she participates in. Nothing more." Pretty simple and concise.
Author's Response:
I suppose he didn't answer the question, because it is none of Mike's business...besides if he wants to know Aro's involvement with Bella, then he should ask Aro....
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47
I think it was Victoria. James sent her to do some recon of some sort.
Author's Response:
Good guess...let's see if your right/....
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50
"I know it’s not fair that he has free rein over her body, whenever he wants and she has to ask permission, but hey such is the nature of their relationship."
Can you really say it's unfair? It's what she wants, what she's asked for. I think it would only be unfair if she had never wanted to be his submissive or if he had punished her arbitrarily without her first knowing what the rule about things touching her lips was. However that's not the case, she's willingly offering her submission to him and is well aware of the rules. If anything it would have been unfair to NOT punish her as he'd be going back on their agreement to be D/s and helping to guide her.
Author's Response:
Perhaps unfair is not the right word...I was trying to explain to people who didn't undestand why he was upset about her kissing his dick. That it wasn't just that she put her lips on him, but also that she needs his permission to touch him, but that he can and do touch her when and where he wants ,,,,
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51
Did Edward get to hear Bellas side of the bathroom altercation? He should have asked her about it while Jess was standing there. I would have liked that better. Fucking bitch.
I'm new and just got to the end here, I was curious on if you have an update schedule. Like, every week or two weeks or just when you can get things done. I know you are a mom and that's a pretty full time job. Thanks for taking the time to write for us.
Author's Response:
Hey you are all caught up ,,,, that was quick ... yes, was updating Mon & Thurs, buty since the holiday I was sick, so I'm only doing Thursdays now, I hope to get back to twice a week ...soon?...EPOV is next so he will tell why he did what he did ....thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have your teaser for you....lml
“Are we going to talk about it?”
“About what?” she truly didn’t know what I meant, so I held up her arm. Bella’s face fell “Oh”
I kept staring at her while she sat back down in her seat, waiting for her to start talking. Whatever happened she didn’t want to tell me, but I wasn’t giving her a choice I wanted, no I needed to know. Finally she sighed and started talking.
“I don’t know what you want me to say Edward I handled it, ingeniously I thought, I let her know that I wasn’t going to take any of her shit while still obeying you. Did I do wrong? Were you mad at me?”
Was I mad at her?
I figured I would let her answer her own question “Did you get punished?”
Bella shook her head at my question so I asked another one “Were you rewarded?”
The sweetest smile and blush broke out over her face “Several times” she admitted, making me chuckle, but I needed her to know something.
My fingers laced with hers on top of the table while I explained “The fact of the matter is…” I looked in her eyes “…Bella you shouldn’t have to handle shit.”
Date: 04 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56
As a sub I do like having my own space for when my boyfriend and I play. Somewhere to write and just be me, however it's always a bit of a bummer at the end of a session to have to sleep apart from him whether it be in the other room or on the floor. You sooo crave closeness after an intense scene. She took it like a good girl though and luckily you are usually so exhausted you aren't awake long enough to be to terribly put out by it.
What I was expecting with the collar and leash was something my Dom does. We have two leashes, a shorter training leash that goes to about mid back and a longer one that stops a bit above my waist. I have really, really long, thick curly hair so he'll have me wear them out but concealed under my hair. The shorter one he usually has me wear above my shirt and he can reach under my hair to pull/direct me with it and the longer one under my shirt so he can have his hand resting on my back and can sneak his head subtly under my shirt slightly to tug/direct. No one has ever notice either of them because of how much hair I have, but the possibility is enough for the intended effect.
Author's Response:
She was exhausted and that helped her to sleep well.. but the morning light always brings a full awakening...personally I perfer to sleep with him but there are times when i sleep on the mat somply because he wishes it...I only habe on leash, a short one like Bella's and there are times when I've warn it in public under my clothes. He never directs my movements with it while around other people...but he will take it out when we are alone (in the car, bathroom, or in a dark movie theather) it's life and we like it like that....
Thanks for reading... I have this weeks teaser for you..
Edward took the lid off his coffee while I took a bite of the danish moaning as the sweet gooey goodness melted in my mouth. The mixture of berries was a perfect balance between sweet and tangy with a thin layer of warm yummy cheese and sweet drizzle.
“MMMmmmmnnnn” I think my eyes rolled to the back of my head. When I opened my eyes Edward was looking at me licking his bottom lip. “What?”
He kind of shook his head as if trying to come out of a daze before taking a drink of coffee. “Last night was good?”
“Uh huh…” I nodded as I swallowed “…last night was great. I was a little worried when I saw the leash”
Edward cleared his throat “Well you shouldn’t have been looking, your eyes are to remain down not searching the room.”
I sighed “I know but when you put it down on the table all I could think about was when you were going to put it on me.” He looked…stunned, so I figured it would be a good idea to explain. “ Not that I wanted to walk around in public and I will admit it panicked me a little but it kind of excited me too.” taking a drink of coffee I asked the question I really wanted to know.
Date: 03 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52
Gaaahh...I hate that I found this story so soon, I don't want to wait for updates. It's my favorite story and I'm a greedy whore!
Author's Response:
Hi GW....look at the bright side - at least now you get teasers...thanks for reading and leaving me a comment, here is this weeks teaser...
Excusing myself I went into the kitchen to check in dinner, everything was done so after pulling the chicken out of the oven - to allow it to rest - I started putting the other stuff into serving bowls. The sound of the kitchen door swinging open made me turn to see who was there, and I smiled as Aro joined me.
“Isabella I don’t wish to disturb you, but may I speak with you for a minute?”
Not wanting to be rude I stopped what I was doing. “Yes Sir, do you need something?”
“No..no, please continue, I can talk while you work.” I asked him to give me a second while I took the Corn Pie out of the oven because I didn’t want him talking to my back. Once it was out I gave him my attention.
Eyeing the pie I had just removed he smiled at me warmly “It’s nice to see you so carefree around everyone. You seem much more confident and I must admit it does me good to see that. You are young and need to laugh more.”
I giggled “Emmett is easy to laugh with”
Aro agreed with me with a slight nod of his head “And Edward?”
“Edward is easy to laugh with too.”
“Good, it truly brings me joy to see you happy and carefree.”
“Well I don’t know about carefree…”
Aro spoke before I could finish “Yes well that is wanted to talk to you about.
Date: 11 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53
When you say 'tae-ta-tae', are you sure you aren't meaning to say 'tete-a-tete'? The french term for 'head to head', meaning two people having a private, familiar conversation? I get confused everytime you say 'tae-ta-tae', I've never heard that term before and I can't find it when I google.
"and what do you think they should do about the weekend in Forks…drop the D/s play all together or go modified… or shock the shit out of Charlie and Leah with the full monty? …lol…"
Um...no to the full monty as that would be exceptionally disrespectful to Charlie and Leah. It's also exceptionally rude and disrepectful for Jane to not drop her third party method of speech around Jasper and Alice knowing they are uncomfortable with it. A huge part of this life style is being safe, sane and consentual and by putting it out ther in other peoples faces by going full monty or doing what Jane does is not being consensual. It's forcing your sexual habits and lifestyle on people who don't want any part of it. In real life, people in this lifestyle are highly discouraged from doing anything of the sort. I think some modified D/s play though might help Bella feel more secure and help to distract her from her nerves while in town. I think it's one of the rare moments he really needs to ask her opinion on whether she wants to do it or not though. She knows what she will be facing in Forks better than he does.
I don't understand how people could still be confused about Aro and Bella's relationship. I think you've made it abundantly clear that they have nothing more than a Mentor/Student, Father/Daughter type relationship. I'm sad a chapter had to be wasted on explaining that. You've gone over it several times in the story and in outtakes. I find Edwards jealousy in this chapter really, really weird and out of character for him. He understands their relationship better than anyone and knows the two parties involved exceptionally well. It's also not the first time the two of them have had conversations and laughed together so for him to suddenly get all bend out of shape is odd. It kind of lowers the character to the level of all the gossiping members of the club.
God I can't wait for Jessica to get hers. I don't understand why they are going to Mike though. He has already shown he doesn't care (when he never confronted Edward at the club) and has verbally dis-claimed any associate with Jessica to both Edward and Aro's faces. Going to him with the issue isn't going to do any good. Aro needs to go to Jessica directly.
Author's Response:
yes I meant tete-a-tete...do I say it alot? Now come on you don't really think that I would have them go to Forks in full swing D/s.?...lol...that was a joke. Although here are several who would like to see it...lol...Bella is in no way ready for that and Charlie would be ...I can't even imagine what his reaction whould be. He is going to have enough of a problem with the tattoo...lol.....When was Jane around Alice? I think the only mention was when Alice said about coming to dinner at B&E's and Alice said about Jane's talk and that she calls Aro Master....did she say that happened in person? or did she say that she just doesn't like it ...((you know like it is common knowledge that Jane behaves that way ))...Because even in Bella's room, Jane talked in 1st person because she thought it would make Bella more comfortable I can't imagine that she wouldn't do that in front of Alice...or Esme....(just a thought)
I'm trying to tell this story as true to life as posssible. I know that I take some liberites and I did rush their relationship (( but that was due to time restraints and my day-by-day intent to tell my story))...Ok, I wouldn't say that it was a wasted chapter. There was more information about Aro and Bella's relationship then might have been needed, but thrown into the conversation was some tid-bits of information that was important. Such as people were mad that Edward didn't do something to Jess...well he doesn't have the power to do that. However Aro does and I think he will and I also think that Jess is not going to be happy about that...also Aro is taking care of the Mike situation. (why?) he said he didn't care about Jess but does he really? Jess is signing in under his name and then he has a few weeks where it was clear that someone erased a guest that signed in under him ((did that just make sense?)) that is what Aro wants to talk to Mike about....hmmm....and there were a few other pieces of information in the chapter... so no, I don't agree that it was a waste...besides as I said it was a requested conversation and they needed to have some dinner conversation anyway...lol.....Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. I have this weeks teaser for you...lml
Taking another drink of coffee I didn’t say anything, but that was twice now that something was not put on the calendar. The lunch with Jane yesterday- which I found out about accidentally - that was ultimately cancelled and now the waxing, I guess my submissive will have some explaining to do. But at the moment I thought of something else.
“If you are waxing have them remove the remaining patch of hair” Bella’s hand stopped mid-way to her mouth as she just stared at me and I wondered what had caused the reaction I was getting.
“W..Why? You said I could keep it”
Taking a drink of coffee I thought over my words to her on the subject “If I remember correctly I said you could keep it for the time-being but I would like it gone now”
“Can we talk about this?” her eyes stayed focused on the few pieces of bagel that were still on the paper towel. I didn’t understand what the problem was; we were talking about a tiny little patch of neatly trimmed hair.
“What’s the big deal?” I watched as she sat there quietly staring at the table chewing her bottom lip. “Bella?”
Devastation is the only word that came to my mind when she looked into my eyes “I know this is really stupid, but can I please keep it until next time?”
My eyes narrowed in confusion what did it matter if it was now or later? “Why?”
“Do you know why I kept a small patch?”
Author's Response:
yes I meant tete-a-tete...do I say it alot? Now come on you don't really think that I would have them go to Forks in full swing D/s.?...lol...that was a joke. Although here are several who would like to see it...lol...Bella is in no way ready for that and Charlie would be ...I can't even imagine what his reaction whould be. He is going to have enough of a problem with the tattoo...lol.....When was Jane around Alice? I think the only mention was when Alice said about coming to dinner at B&E's and Alice said about Jane's talk and that she calls Aro Master....did she say that happened in person? or did she say that she just doesn't like it ...((you know like it is common knowledge that Jane behaves that way ))...Because even in Bella's room, Jane talked in 1st person because she thought it would make Bella more comfortable I can't imagine that she wouldn't do that in front of Alice...or Esme....(just a thought)
I'm trying to tell this story as true to life as posssible. I know that I take some liberites and I did rush their relationship (( but that was due to time restraints and my day-by-day intent to tell my story))...Ok, I wouldn't say that it was a wasted chapter. There was more information about Aro and Bella's relationship then might have been needed, but thrown into the conversation was some tid-bits of information that was important. Such as people were mad that Edward didn't do something to Jess...well he doesn't have the power to do that. However Aro does and I think he will and I also think that Jess is not going to be happy about that...also Aro is taking care of the Mike situation. (why?) he said he didn't care about Jess but does he really? Jess is signing in under his name and then he has a few weeks where it was clear that someone erased a guest that signed in under him ((did that just make sense?)) that is what Aro wants to talk to Mike about....hmmm....and there were a few other pieces of information in the chapter... so no, I don't agree that it was a waste...besides as I said it was a requested conversation and they needed to have some dinner conversation anyway...lol.....Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. I have this weeks teaser for you...lml
Taking another drink of coffee I didn’t say anything, but that was twice now that something was not put on the calendar. The lunch with Jane yesterday- which I found out about accidentally - that was ultimately cancelled and now the waxing, I guess my submissive will have some explaining to do. But at the moment I thought of something else.
“If you are waxing have them remove the remaining patch of hair” Bella’s hand stopped mid-way to her mouth as she just stared at me and I wondered what had caused the reaction I was getting.
“W..Why? You said I could keep it”
Taking a drink of coffee I thought over my words to her on the subject “If I remember correctly I said you could keep it for the time-being but I would like it gone now”
“Can we talk about this?” her eyes stayed focused on the few pieces of bagel that were still on the paper towel. I didn’t understand what the problem was; we were talking about a tiny little patch of neatly trimmed hair.
“What’s the big deal?” I watched as she sat there quietly staring at the table chewing her bottom lip. “Bella?”
Devastation is the only word that came to my mind when she looked into my eyes “I know this is really stupid, but can I please keep it until next time?”
My eyes narrowed in confusion what did it matter if it was now or later? “Why?”
“Do you know why I kept a small patch?”
Date: 24 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55
Oh my goodness! Edward is really pushing her, isn't he? So hot. I hope she doesn't safeword out. I have an idea on how it's going to go with the leash given the dress she's wearing and the idea of it is going to be so much bigger than the actual act. However that is the point, the mental aspect of BDSM is so much more important and intense than the physical.
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Thanks for reading ..I have this weeks teaser for you...
“Come back here” Her steps were less hesitant on the way back over and I figured by the time we actually have to walk by other people she would have adjusted to the feeling of the rope.
Holding the bag on my lap Bella stood in front of me biting her lip while eyeing the bag when I moved it closer to my body her neck strained in an attempt to see what was inside. This time I chuckled at her interest. “Well, you are nosey tonight”
At my words Bella dropped her eyes looking almost sad “Your girl is sorry Master”
Cupping her chin I wanted her to look at me to show me the excitement she just had “No...No Isabella. I told you, this is your gift. You should want to see what it is.”
Her eyes lit up as she once again craned her neck to see what was in the bag “Why did Master buy his girl a gift?”
Why?
“Because I can. Because I thought she would like it. Because I want to see it on her.”
“What is it?”
Date: 17 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54
Hot sex is always great but this chapter was good too! I love all the little revelations and I'm glad that Edward opened up a little to Demitri about Aro and Bella. I think he's right, a few people knowing the truth will help the rumors whereas always keeping silent will be taken as ascent to some idiots.
So Caius wasn't the one snooping around her back ground...hmmm, doesn't seem like it would be James as he already knows about her inheritance. Jessica/Mike? That crazy chick from the shelter, maybe? Could that crazy chick be a ex-sub of Edwards? Maybe someone James had an affair with? I'm soo curious. You've done a fantastic job of weaving mystery to the story and I'm just as interested in all of that as I am in E&B's relationship and the sexy smutty stuff!
Also, something you said in your reply to my review about Alice and Jane. I recall Alice saying something about Jane being difficult to understand, and Bella mused that she was able to understand Jane fine. That's where I got the idea that Jane used her third party speech while around other members of the family.
Author's Response:
It doesn't look like it was Caius...as far as jane and Alice...that was at Alice's house when she found out that they were coming to Edward's house for dinner and she said that it's hard to undetsnad her but she never said that she heard it herself....have you ever heard something over and over again? Or maybe I should use discrimination.... people have ideas about people of differant races, sexual orinatation, religion ...not becasue something was ever done to them personally, but because the ideas have been planted in to their head that there is something wrong with being differant ... ((maybe in a few chapters you'll see what alice was talking about)) anyway I just rambled on and on...lol...I sent you a seperate email as this weeks thank you for leaving a review...louise
Date: 08 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61
"To know that something is very wrong but be unable to help because she refuses to tell you what’s happening, and still to this day won’t trust you with the details?”
I could feel the tears in my own eyes begin to form, “It’s better this way…”
I wish Charlie had called her out more on this. It's her life to choose what people know or not, however it's rather selfish of her to look at it/say it like that. Who is she to be the grand arbiter of what's better for anyone else? The images Charlie has conjured up in his brain could be way worse. And she should know by now that the best way to help people protect her is for them to have the full story. All these people are going out of their way and going their best to help her and she's trying to hold all the cards because SHE doesn't want to talk about it and then insult them by saying 'it's better this way.' Sounds like she needs to take some of the advice that she doles out to her patients.
Great chapter, as always. I like the stuff we are learning in Forks. I still think Leah is a bitch though. Are we going to get more interaction with James? I want to see Edward stomp him! Also, that Brenda girl is a total fucking bitch. Did she hear their conversation after she made her snide comment to Bella about their friend being pregnant again? I hope so. I also hope that Bella and Edward run into her again so Bella can get one up on her. What a bitch.
Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62
"I know that a bunch of you wanted Edward to do the honors, but it was so much sweeter coming from Bella…don’t ya think?"
I think Edward still needs to get his shot in at him. Make him feel good about protecting her since he wasn't around when James hurt her the first time.
Jared sounds like a jealous ass.
Also, I can't wait for that big play party they are going to be attending once they get back home! I want to see Tanya and Jessica eat more humble pie! :)
Author's Response:
ohhhh... man ...the party, is going to test Bella's limits...but it should be fun ...lol....
Date: 30 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 64: Chapter 64
"The two of them agreed that it would be sad that he would never get laid."
No...no it wouldn't be. I wouldn't be talking to Jake for a good long time. I'd be beyond raged on both a personal and ethical level. Both my parents are vets and my family raises and breeds hunting Beagles going back 5 generations in my family. So much time, money and energy is put into proper breeding practices, genetic testing, health testing, trialing and mate selection it's staggering. It's beyond irresponsible for Jake and Sam to just toss two sibling dogs together to get it on under some stupid idea that one of them needs to get laid and the other is in heat. It's harmful, exceptionally irresponsible and unethical without proper genetic testing. Not to mention dogs are not humans. They don't have thoughts like, "boy it will be sad if I get fixed and never got some tail." Not to mention Bella should have had him fixed by the time he was 6 months old to stave off a number of health conditions. I could go on a tangent on the topic forever but this obviously isn't the place. It's just a topic I'm too passionate about and I had a really hard time reading the last part of last chapter and the first half of this one.
I think Edward should have also mentioned to Leah that while he could order Bella to talk to Jake, he never would because that would be interfering in her personal relationship with a family member. Her trusting him with control also means he wont abuse it. I can't wait until he has that talk with Leah. It sounds like Jake needs to be there as well. It's so frustrating hearing those comments. It doesn't help Leah is irritating to begin with. I really wish Bella would have called her on the 'if Victoria wants to stay that's her fault' (or however it was worded) comment. That was wrong on so many levels. Are we going to have any more interaction with James and Victoria before we leave Forks? I really want Edward to have his chance to get his shot in too!
Date: 01 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 67: Chapter 67
I want an OhMiBod so frickin' bad. Problem is I'd never leave the house. This was a nice chapter. Hot lemons and fun interaction with the family. I love Vinny. Kids are always the first to notice and point things out without knowing what they are doing. And poor Emmett...wait a minute, he's not the one dripping, getting huge, getting hair in ugly places and growing an alien inside him! lol
So what changes happened at the club? I'm so curious about all that drama. I hope we see more of it side from just the party and Bellas hot as hell outfit. (Can't wait for that though too). Also, I thought the family knew Bella couldn't have kids? How much to they know exactly about what happened?
Author's Response:
I know I want one too....I think my I-pod would comstantly be charging...lol..hmmm... Bela told Alice and Rose while they were at the cabin...Edward isn't aware of her sharing that information and they (A & R) did not share that with their husbands ... so that means that Em and Jaz are unaware of her potential probelems having children... Remember it's not the getting pregnant that is the problem ... it's the carring the baby...anyway that whole delemia will be addressed soon...as will alot of other things as we are on the down ward swing of the story...It still has a lot to go, but information is going to be given and lose ends tied up and then ... everything should be made clear...alright enough rambling ... have a great week and thanks for reading and leaving a comment ...louise
Date: 10 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 76: Chapter 76
I really really REALLY want a scene with Bella and Jasper where he confronts her on their lifestyle so she can explain it to him so he can stop giving Edward those dirty looks. Yes Jasper, she wants and NEEDS those punishments and lessons. She's THANKFUL Edward loves her enough and has the patience to help her become a better person.
Author's Response:
All I can say to your request is that Bella will be spending Saturday (at the kids party) with Jasper...