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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1255163
Date: 16 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77
Man, this vacation took forever. I'd swear they were gone months. It'll be nice to get back to the other things and plot threads they left behind. Honestly, I've forgotten a lot of what was going on. I still am super excited for the big party at the club. I always love it when I get to see Jessica/Tanya and compay green with envy. I want that bathroom they had. It makes me sad everytime I go into my dinky little bathroom with the dinky little tub I can barely fit in. :(
Also, I totally disagree that Edward is being to hard on her. I think he's being perfect. The perfect blend of strength and patience. The path they are on is not easy, especially with the history Bella has, that's what makes it worth it. She needs him to be tough on her, it raises her trust in him that he's willing to put in the time and cares so much for her that he wont turn away or give in just because it's hard. I doubt Bella would want him to go easier on him or change anything about how they are together.
Date: 27 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 98: Chapter 98
"How about the tampon thing??? What are your thoughts on his wanting to be in there and then his backing down when she said it was a Hard Limit. Now do you see who holds all the power?
It's not the Dom – if she says absolutely no way – then he has to abide."
I always really dislike hearing this because it's disingenuous and plainly not true. It's rather disrespectful. It's a buzz term thrown around by people who don't really have experience and often said to try to make people, especially people on the outside, feel better. The sub doesn't hold all the power anymore than the Dom does. It's an equal split. A Dom has hard limits and needs that need to be respected just as a sub does. There are plenty of things I love to do or would love to try that my Dom has as a hard limit. It's not all sexual actions, it certain trigger words as well. It's just as wrong for a sub to try to press this on the Dom as it is for a Dom to push something onto a sub. I've found that while bad Doms try to strong arm these situations, bad subs will do it through whining, guilt and manipulation. So the Dom holds just as much power in the situation as the sub. To say the sub holds all the power is wrong and ignores the very real and just as important needs of the Dom. While in play there is technical inequality in the relationship, unless there is communication and equality as a whole a relationship will not work. No one parties needs are more important that another. I find nothing more irritating or disrespectful when I see a sub smugly tittering and saying this with her girlfriends. If she really believes this, I feel bad for her Dom.
I wasn't a fan of Bella calling a hard limit on him being in the bathroom with her. Personally, it took some getting used to but nothing makes me feel more loved than when my boyfriend takes care of me that way. He does it with reverence and makes me feel cared for because it shows that he'll love me and take care of me no matter what situation. Even the seemingly grosser ones. However if Bella doesn't feel the same, that doesn't bother me but the way she went about it did. She just shut down and called it a hard limit without even thinking about it or talking about it. She's going with a emotional reaction before having even thought it through or hearing Edwards side of it and Edward should have called her on that. The mature way it should have gone was for her to call 'yellow' or 'red' even and say that she's not comfortable with this right now and that being in the middle of the situation when they aren't on equal footing with heighten emotions wasn't the time to talk about it. Edward should have respected her choice, walked away and then during their after care/conversation talked about it then so they could both air their feelings on it. Edward can explain why he wants to do it and Bella can explain why it bothers her. If at the end of that she wants to hard limit it, no problem. Not wanting to do it isn't the problem. It could be a huge trigger for her due to what James did in her past and she's totally right to not do it, but the way she went about it cuts off communication and that's never a good thing. What if Edward has a need that doing this for her would fulfill. She needs to be attuned to his needs just as much as he is to hers. While she shouldn't do something she doesn't want to fulfill his need she still needs to find out what that need is and talk about other means of taking care if it. Granted, it's probably not that big of a deal to Edward but she'll have no way of knowing that by cutting off communication as she did.
I'm so disgusted with Alice, I don't know if I'll be able to forgive her. At least not without her getting totally knocked out of her ivory tower. The things she said, especially regarding Bella's old marriage, is unforgivable. I hope Esme gets to see it first hand so she understand how her hate, bigotry and snobbery toward Jane has affected her daughter. Alice being pregnant is NO excuse, Edward was 100% right. I also hope Edward puts Esme in her place and doesn't let her run rough shod over Bella and her wedding desires.
And wow...fuck James. Will we find out more about that? I don't want to know, but I also do. I'm sure Bella doesn't want to remember it but if there is someone else out there that's harmed her she should be aware of that. Even he used other means to violate her rather than another person I think it's important to know what's happened so she can work on healing it. Repressed memories have a tendency to come up at horrible times. It's good if you can prepare for them.
Date: 27 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 99: Chapter 99
I'm not a fan of Operation Cock Block. Mainly because I don't like sex ever being used as a weapon, especially for a bet. But more importantly I just don't want her to have those stupid fucking fruity pebbles. She's acted like such an a child when it comes to them. Purposely trying to sneak them and manipulate her way into getting them. And Edward was right the night before, she wasn't taking him into consideration at all when making the bet. It was a completely selfish motivation about a fucking childrens cereal.
If she never did any of that and just sat down like an adult and talked to Edward about how big of a guilty pleasure Fruity Pebbles are to her and could they come to some sort of an agreement or compromise could she please have some every blue moon for a treat? Once a month? Something? I highly doubt he'd tell her no. But instead she's acted like a fucking brat and I hope she loses the hell out of that bet.
Date: 27 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 100: Chapter 100
I love that you went into Dougies story. It's so beautiful and its the reason a lot of people go into age play. They were forced to grow up to soon and never had a childhood and/or lost a parent and needed it in thier lives. It has nothing to do with wanting to molest children or anything like that. So many people don't understand it. I think you've done a beautiful job in showing what Doubld D and Rileys relationship is about. I hope it will also open Bella up to the idea of a bit more role play in her time with Edward. I can see it benefiting her as well. Hell, she already slides into it a bit. Massive, massive kudos for this chapter. :)
I usually don't like characters that show up that weren't originally in the book, but you've done such a fantastic job with Dougie and fleshed him out so well I almost forgot he wasn't initially in the book. I think he might be my favorite author created character ever. :)
Date: 15 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 101: Chapter 101
I am SOOOOOO happy Bella didn't win that bet. I would have been mad if she did. She doesn't deserve those stupid Fruity Pebbles. If she hadn't been such a humungous, manipulative brat about them so many times before I might feel different but as it stands, she deserved to lose that bet.
Is there ever going to be some sort of comeuppance with Alice? I'm so beyond angry at her. I would like to see a scene (or an outtake) of her expressing her sentiments to Esme, Carlisle and Rosalie. I really think they need to hear what she believes and then set her straight. I'm sure Esme and Carlisle would be rightly horrified to see what a terrible, shallow bitch their daughter turned out to be. I just really want to see some sort of resolution happen with her where she is put in her place.
I'm glad all seems to be going better for you. My thoughts and prayers are with all of you on the East coast during this time. I'm glad to have you and this story back, but I'm even more glad you are safe.
These are extra's from my story. It just provides more information and will also provide a place for other POV's
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 99277 Read Count: 40320
Date: 27 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Jasper's OT
Loved it! :) I always find it funny when you find out that those that protest Fetishes, kink, bondage and D/s relationships often do similar kinks and activities in the bedroom without realizing they are doing things that would fall under those categories. Daddy/baby girl play, enemas certainly fall under roleplay kinks. Daddy/baby girl would also fall under a sort of D/s kink. Oh how shocked they would be! I love hearing the beginning of their story though.
So was this all you meant to post? Not another chapter to the main story?
Author's Response:
Noo..the posting got messed up...Esme's OT should be up Friday and the chapter I'm shootiing for Sunday, it will all depend on how busy M is ... and your very right about the kink...besides i'm a firm believer in 'everyone has a little kink in them' ... some just choose to accept it...some choose to show it off...and others chosse to live in denial ...lol...see you in a few days... thanks ...louise
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: photos
Dear god...I want a C-Grip. I might never leave my house...
Date: 06 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Ladies Luncheon
I wish Bella had told Esme that her and Janes lifestyle wasn't belittling. She seems to pass up a lot of opportunities to give insight to people with incorrect assumptions. I mean, it's not her job to educate the world but I think it's important with those that are close to you or close to the person you love and are going to be in your life.
Date: 27 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Alice in her own Wonderland
"From the very beginning of DitR it was set up for this to happen...and in my opinion fits the personality of Stephanie Meyer's Alice. I know there are some of you who just gasped and fell off your chair but if you'd like email me and I’ll give you my examples of how I come to that conclusion...."
For the record, I totally agree with you. I am curious what lead you to those conclusions. I've always found it odd how everyone says they want a friend like Alice as all I could ever think was that I'd want nothing to do with her. She'd annoy me to the point I couldn't fake being nice anymore.
Date: 15 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Daddy's boy
Loved it loved it LOVED IT!!!!
I love age play, not a fan of slash though so I wouldn't mind seeing Edward and Bella have a roleplay night. That would be hot as hell and you write it very well.
"Riley found the most astonishing piece of information to come from Edward's own sister. She seemed to be of the mind that Isabella was not everything she portrayed herself to be."
Edward really, REALLY needs to know about this. It's one thing for his sister to have and express her stupid beliefs to him but quite another for her to be talking to others about it. He really needs to know this information. Especially with all of the people out to hurt Bella his sister opening her mouth to the wrong person could potentially bring harm to her. I also would really love to see Riley and his next encounter with Alice where he can tell her that she seems to be totally off the mark.
It was also a bit frustrating for Riley to seem to brush off Dougies desire to not play with Tanya anymore. He wasn't just throwing a temper tantrum, he really don't want to play with the woman and Riley should not only listen but respect that.
Is there any particular reason you don't always write in 3rd person? You do very well at it. I've never totally understood why authors don't write in 3rd person as a default. It's much easier to follow and get everyones point of view and voice in whereas you often times have to back track when switching POV's and/or missing stuff because you don't want to rehash to much. It can be frustrating when a story is making good progress in the plot but you have to wait because the next chapter has to go over someone elses pov instead of getting on with the story. Not that you've done that to any great degree, but lots of authors do. There was one story I plain stopped reading because as good as the plot was, we had to go through 4 or 5 chapters of everyones different point of views before any forward movement was made. 3rd person gets it all done at once and it makes more sense when everyone is reacting as it's happening.
In a world dominated by vampires, humans are forced to donate blood and abide by the strict rules of the vampire government. Bella has never experienced life in an all-human world and one day the only life she knows shatters to pieces when her parents are killed by a vampire. She is adopted by her parents' friends, who happen to be vampires. Her life turns upside down as she moves to an all-vampire town. Will she have the strength to go on after all that she has endured? Will one special vampire heal her wounds as she struggles to live a life amongst vampires? Edward and Bella pairing, AU, OOC
Warning: This story contains explicit adult content, language, violence, vampire marking and bloodplay.
I want to thank Dazzled~by~Jake for this awesome banner! And my awesome Beta Lindz! xo
Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read
Chapters: 27 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 384211 Read Count: 238938
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
It's nice Charlie and Renee are good vampires and all that, but I really don't get how they thought it would be comforting to adopt her after her parents were viciously killed and eaten by a vampire with nary a slap on the wrist and take her away from the only hope she had and re-locate her to a town with nothing BUT vampires and send her to an all-vampire high school where she could be made an afternoon snack with no real consequences given. Even with proprietary marks and all that, would a vamp really get into all that much trouble. That would be like throwing a steak into a lions den then getting mad at the lion for eating it.
I mean, again with the lion analogy, that's like watching your parents getting ripped up and eaten by lions and then going to have to live with them and be all 'a-okay' because one particular one purrs when you pet him.
Loving the hell out of this story and can't wait to see where it goes. i like that the vamps are tall, tall is sexy damnit! Lord i bet Emmett is just gigantic!
Author's Response:
I totally get what you're saying. Charlie and Renee aren't allowed to raise Bella in an all human town. They know that it will be extremely difficult for her, but Bella doesn't have anyone she could move in with. It's not so much that vamps are forbidden to go to an all human town, but to keep humans from going crazy with fright, vamps and humans live in sepearte towns. I guess you could say that it helps keep some peace among the two species, even though vampires do attack a human occassionally by snatching them from their towns.
Thank you. Glad you are enjoying the story so far. Yes, lol, Emmett is huge! =)
Thanks for giving this story a chance! =)
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Poor Bella! And my lord is Tanya even a bigger bitch than I remember. I hope she gets what's coming to her! She's just going to shit when Edward goes for Bella, I can't wait! :) And did James just mark Bella or just scrape her for some blood? He is creepy as all get out. I still have absolutely NO CLUE why Charlie and Renee thought this was even remotely a good idea.
One side note though, the "OHMYGAWD"s are really distracting and kinda annoying. They just seem really out of place and odd both for her character as well as compared to the higher quality of the rest of the writing. Not to mention it's used 4 or 5 times in this one chapter alone.Not that I don't expect her to have a reaction or anything but, yeah, the 'OHMYGAWD's seem much more likely to come out of a hysterical and dumb Jessica Stanley than Bella. Oooh I hope she shows up in this fic as a dingy vampire, that would be hilarious!
I wonder how Bella is going to get away from James! I can't wait for her to meet Edward, will she still be his singer? I'm sooo glad I don't have to wait for updates (yet)!
Author's Response:
LOL. Yeah, they were there for emphasis. But you'll see that the OHMYGAWDS in future chapters aren't even there. Bella was just a fightened, dramatic girl at the very beginning. My characters are definitely OOC.
James only scraped her wrist for blood, no marking yet. But I won't say that James won't try...even in future chapters. He really wants Bella...and there's a bigger reason behind it. That I will reveal in later chapters...probably by ch 18 or so. IDK yet.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
*sigh* I hate how quickly people give in blindly to threats without even checking them out or looking for support first. Good going Bella, I hope you are smart enough to stand your ground!*sigh* I hate how quickly people give in blindly to threats without even checking them out or looking for support first. Good going Bella, I hope you stand your ground and use your brain!
Author's Response:
Yes, I agree. Sometimes ppl do give in blindly to threats. And I don't like to drag things out.
Thanks for your comments!
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
You're not twisted at all with the vampire marking thing. I think it's hot as hell! I love the primal, dominating, possessive side of male vampires. It's as they should be!
I'm really glad that whole 'Tanya threat' thing got sorted out quickly as it would have gotten contrived and old really fast. It made Bella look dumb to not say anything, especially given her dad is a police chief and her boyfriend is the Ultimate Vampire and feared by young and old alike.
I love that Bella and Edward are so accepting of their relationship right away, I hope we get to see Edward 'mark' and 'claim' Bella in every way possible. ;) Her having to donate blood will be interesting, I can't see that going over well with him.
Author's Response:
LOL. Thanks.
Yes, I don't like to drag things out...if I can help it. lol But Tanya will be back...unfortunately in future chapters.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
"Don’t worry, love. I’m just carving your name into my chest,” he soothed, finishing the letter ‘E’ in Bella."
Oh....is that all. Damn, your vaps are hardcore. And sexy as all hell! That marking in the middle of the cafeteria? Can I get me some of that? It would totally be worth a little James manhandling. Also, am I just dirty and wrong for thinking the public sex marking is hot, too?
Author's Response:
LOL. Nah, you're not dirty or wrong for thinking that public marking is hot. Glad you liked it.
Thank you =)
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
Yeah, it's sexin' time. You keep changing the rules and cock blocking them! First Edward needs to ask permission to mark, then they have to wait until the magical third time, they Charlie wants to talk to Carlisle first about safe sex even though Edward already knows what the conversation is going to be. Jesus, just let the two kids get their freak on!
Author's Response:
LMAO@cockblocking!!! Yes, I didn't want to make it easy for them to have sex. But hey, they do get it on in ch 10. lol
Thanks for your comments =)
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Okay, back to reading and reviewing. Your story literally had me glued to my screen until my eyes forced themselves closed this morning. I really wanted to finish the story last night but my brain stopped functioning. Perhaps my reviews will be more coherent now that I've had sleep!
I know you said it's coming in chapter 10, but I think I have blue balls along with Edward. ;) And I love how possessive he is! So sexy marking her in front of the forest like that. I loved him saying, "I don't want to hurt you" like, "I don't wantto hurt you but we are doing this regardless" And I love that they talk dirty to each other. SM's vamps were far to chaste for my dirty mind!
And my money is on James being in the woods and killing the human girls, the sick fuck. I bet he killed Victoria too for hurting Bella. Maybe Mike, but I see James. I wouldn't mind seeing an outtake of him killing her and her expression when she realizes he wants Bella instead of her. God I hate Victoria. I can tell if I hate her or Tanya more though. It will be AWESOME when we finally get to see Tanya's expression when she see's Bella marked in every way possible by Edward. Take that bitch! Hmm..it could also be someone spying for Aro in the woods, trying to recon what is going on before he actually meets them himself. But I don't see why they'd feel the need to cover up the scent then, especially if it's someone the Cullen's don't know. That's why I'm still banking on it being someone from school like James or Mike.
It's really sad that Bella can't even go out on the front porch alone. You do really well portraying how dangerous the world is for her and how isolated she is, even if she's got her favorite people around her. Yes, they view her as an equal but unfortunately the rest of the world makes them treat her like a pet in many ways due to how fucked up the rest of society is. The way people just watched in the grocery store parking lot like someone would just watch a cow being sent to slaughter, no big deal. She essentially can't go out without a leash (escort) and a collar with tags (mark and a necklace), not because that's how the Cullens see her or intended those items to be, but because someone else would harm or kill her otherwise. So sad. I wish someone had been there to tell that bitchy lady and her son off in the super market, too. >:( Carlisle and Edward going and seeing first hand what a donation center is like will be interesting as well. Has Edward even seen Bella's tattoo? He's never mentioned it, seems like something that would bother him. The fact she's not even a name or a person to them, just an ID number. A cow with a tag in it's ear to them. It reminds me of how people were tattooed in Nazi internment camps. Nice touch.
I'm DREADING the eventual meeting with Aro. He's such a creepy bastard and I do not see it going well for our sexy couple. :(
Author's Response:
Love your comments! Thank you!
LMAO@ blue balls. xD
I'm glad you like the marking. And yeah, Tanya will be making an appearance real soon...along with her sisters. I like the way you think. I wonder what you will say once the killer is be revealed. Hmmm... Sure, i'll do an outtake of the killer scene if you want. I was planning on doing some outtakes. I'm working on one now- Edward before he met Bella- and during the cafeteria scene when he sees her for the first time. I want to describe how he feels when he sees his mate....which is somewhat difficult for me, I'm not that good describing emotions. lol idk if any one is interested, but i'll post soon anyway.
The vamp lady and her son will be coming up soon again. Hopefully, she will be put in her place. Another blood donation scene will be coming up soon too, I'm thinking ch 12 or 13. Yeah, Edward has seen Bella's ID tattoo, but I haven't mentioned anything aboout it yet. When the blood donation scene comes up, I'll have a little part on it. That's exactly where the idea came from, WWII when the Nazi's ID'ed the prisoners. Very creepy!
Aro will be coming up very soon too. =/
Thank you for taking the time to give me your thoughts. I appreciate that.
~Jells
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
Hooray! It finally happened! It was totally worth the wait to. Vampire sex is the best sex! ;) Did she just get lucky that it didn't hurt? Alice and Rose told her it would hurt the entire time, even if the marking venom is used, yet she didn't seem to have much more pain the the average girl who is losing her virginity.
“Mine!” he snarled, his fangs stretching longer. “Only mine…forever. Do you understand, Bella?” He locked his hungry black eyes on me.
I've always loved it when he says, "Mine!" or when he asks her who she belongs to. Even sexier when he made her say it in front of/to Garrett while he was making her come. I am curious of something though, Alice said it's very, very rare for a vampire to want to mark/take a female that was not interested in return yet Bella seems to come across a lot of them (James, Garrett and Mike), why is that?
“What are you doing?” Edward growled, narrowing his eyes and licking his lips. “I wasn’t finished rubbing my scent on you, bad girl.”
“Never,” he vowed, his voice strained. “But I should punish you for running away from me. I wasn’t finished with you back there.” His voice grew darker, his primal instincts taking over.
So, did he reeaallly mean it when he said "bad girl", like was it a real chastisment or was he just kidding around? Same question for when he says "I should punish you". I hope he wasn't playing around because him taking her over his knee for a serious spanking would be twelve different kinds of awesome! And Edward can rub his scent on me any time he feels like it! God I have issues...
'“Male vampies have barbs that extend or pop out right under the head of the penis"
Oh....okay, Edward. I think we should file this under SHIT YOU SHOULD HAVE TOLD ME BEFORE YOU STUCK INSIDE ME! Jesus, that doesn't sound like a happy surprise. Masturbating must suck for make vampires. lol
I know you said that you weren't good at describing emotions and that's why you haven't tackled the outtakes you were thinking of yet, but I think you should give yourself more credit. You've done excellent so far. I'd love to see an outtake of the murder scene, Edward when he first sees her and then their first time in the woods (and if bed if you are feeling sassy). Just remember that Edward isn't always flowery, he's primal and passionate. I think those emotions would be easier to portray than the flowery stuff SM writes.Honestly, I wish she had written a lot more like you.
Soooo when is the next update coming? I get to bug you about that now because I'm all caught up and you have me addicted to your vampire venom and I'm jonesing for another hit! Pretty please? :(
Author's Response:
Yay! I'm glad you liked it. I was worried that you may have not liked the sex scenes. I love to read lemons, but writing them are a whole different story for me. lol I better get more comfortable with it since there will be lots more. Great question---> Did she just get lucky that it didn't hurt? I guess you could say she's lucky that she was human when she had sex with Edward. The marking venom's effect on a human body are much more powerful than on a female vamp's body...the sensation of pleasure is higher for a human because the marking venom mixes with blood. When venom mixes with blood, the warm pleasurable tingling sensations are much more potent compared to marking venom mixing with just venom of a female vamp. So Bella was quite lucky, the marking venom replaced the pain with pleasure times 10. <----I hope that makes sense. lol
Another great question---> I am curious of something though, Alice said it's very, very rare for a vampire to want to mark/take a female that was not interested in return yet Bella seems to come across a lot of them (James, Garrett and Mike), why is that? Okay, I'll tell you as much as I can without giving everything away.lol Unless you want to know exactly everything...like all the details, then you can just contact me. lol J/S Bella ...possesses something that attracts male vampires to her. When she becomes a hybrid eventually (and yes, lol, she will. I don't think I would have the heart to kill her off or keep her human...there's a way around this whole hybrid law) Anyways, once she's turned you'll understand why these males are so attracted to her. And believe me, there will be lots more. Poor Edward, he better be prepared to let her know who she belongs to, as well as telling the other males to F*** off. And eventually, I will have a scene on why hybrids are so forbidden.
Oh yes, Edward wants to punish Bella. He's got this real dominant side to him, like all male vamps. And I think he'll show that side of him real soon...or more of it. Hopefully, Bella will enjoy it. Oooo spanking!!! =D LMAO@ And Edward can rub his scent on me any time he feels like it! God I have issues . Okay, I'll send Edward over to you stat!!!Who cares about Bella right? The bitch needs to get lost. lmao SSorry Edward, I didn't mean the B**** part. lol I agree, I would love to have a dom/possessive vamp rubbing his scent on me...and more. ;)
As the days go on, the bond grows stronger between them, making him wild for her and vice versa...and Edward will be a little more possessive. The more he feeds from her, he'll be able to 'feel' her emotions. I actually reveal that in ch 11. So if Bella were to feel scared, he'll know without being right next to her. That will be helpful in certain situations.
LMAO@SHIT YOU SHOULD HAVE TOLD ME BEFORE YOU STUCK INSIDE ME! *giggles* Yeah, silly vamp- he left out very important info. He wasn't thinking with his head...err...not with the kind he was supposed to anyways. Yeah, masterbating for male vamps is quite different. lol
Wow thank you for the compliment! That means a lot especially since I haven't been writing for long. Writing for me is fun, but it's not exactly easy- it's def a learning process for me. Some writers just have talent, I have to work at it. But I just have fun telling this story, and hopefully readers will keep enjoying it. And yes, I will most definitely do the killer scene for you. And other scenes including EPOV's during sex. lol You are right about portraying the possessive, primal, passionate emotions of this Edward would be easier. I honestly think I couldn't write him like in SM's books.
LOL---> The update question. I know it's been over a month since my last update O.O BUT I'll try to post asap. I'm almost finished with ch 11, which isn't a very long chapter, it's just that I am stuck... forever....which means I'll post more in 2022 XD *giggles* j/k But srsly, I have a story outline- key points and my ending is solid...the middle is where I can take two different directions...so I'm at the fork in the road. =/ Do I take this direction, or the other? But I'll have it sorted out real soon. Hopefully, in a few days. I'm actually working on it this very instant, but decided to take a break and answer your review. Just keep your fingers crossed, I wanna post this pain in the ass chapter asap so i can start with ch 12- which will not be such a pain like this one.
Thanks again for your questions and comments. I love 'em! And keeps me motivated!
~Jells
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Oooooh, so Bella is kind of like catnip for vampires? Maybe like, a universal singer? Poor Edward! Well, not so bad for me if you continue to do scenes like the one before, during and after Garrett. :D
And I think Edward needs to totally go all Dom on Bella, I think she'd love the hell out of it if previous chapters are any indication. Sure, a punishment spanking may hurt while he gives it to her but I'm sure he'll make up for it right away. I'd happily suffer through one and if Bella isn't appreciative then I'll take her place. =D I mean, he has to do something to help her learn to keep herself safe and take better care of herself, right? Nothing an over the knee spanking and being tied to the bed and teased while he talks dirty wont help with. I'm sure a few bruises on her butt or wrists will help remind her who she belongs to. Hell, you rated this story NC-17, don't be afraid to get graphic and use it! Mwahahaa!
So if Bella is like, vampire crack, how come the other Cullens seem to be immune? I guess that can be explained away by them being family and 100% respecting each others territory, I mean vaginas, I mean women...whatever!
I'm sooo glad you are going to let Bella be changed! I was confused at first when you started talking about Hybrids because I thought you meant humans and vampires having babies, like Reneesme (god I hated her, no babies for Edward and Bella!). I was like, "why doesn't he just change her, that would solve so many of their problems" but I understand now. Well, not really since you haven't explained it, but now I know there is a reason. When I figured out you meant humans being turned to vampires it sort of reminded me of Harry Potter where the Slytherine called everyone who wasn't born a witch mudbloods. I assume there is a little bit of that prejudice going on as well as other reasons.
I like that Edward will be able to start feeling her emotions when he takes more of her blood. Will she start to be able to feel his, maybe as a result of the marking venom? They do something similar in The Southern Vampire Mysteries/True Blood and I've always liked that. It makes you more careful on who you go around biting, well, at least biting and allowing to live. So does Edward know this will happen or is this going to be a new thing due to her being human? I know he hasn't talked about it yet, but that doesn't mean anything as he's proven to not exactly be Mr. Full Disclosure. *cough*barbedcock*cough*
I know that Phil, Renee and the Cullens are all for human rights and are disgusted with how the government treats humans and handles donations but do they ever think about the fact they are supporting that industry every time they eat? I mean, they'll sit there and say how horrible it is while swirling a crystal wine glass filled with the blood of some poor person like Bella. Do they believe that humans should have equal rights and get to decide IF they want to donate at all? Even if that means their food supply might run out or get really expensive? I know they don't have a choice in the matter because they have to eat, but if I were Bella I'd be a little offended to sit at dinner with them while they praise each others blood pudding and blood bread like I'm not even there and it's a wonderful dinner party. It could very well could be Bella's blood, out of her horribly scared arm that they freaked about, that was purchased to make their dessert! I was just wondering if that ever crossed their minds. It seems like someone should start an underground 'free range' blood type movement with secret donation centers that are non-profit and only use blood that was freely donated and humanly collected. Have they even tried alternatives, like drinking animal blood?
I think you have more talent than you give yourself credit for, Ms. Self-Doubt. And I'd rather be one of the ones that has to work for it than to just be able to do it. There is no appreciation or feeling of accomplishment that way. The harder you toil, the more life you will have in your stories. I think with anything, playing a musical instrument, a sport or whatever the hardest part is just sitting down and doing it/making time for it. Once you do sit yourself down and make yourself take out your pen, your guitar, baseball bat or in your case a lap top and just make yourself get through those first awkward paragraphs the rest is easy. Set up an appointment with yourself for writing time and mak yourself sit down and start. You can always go back and change the beginning fo a chapter if you hit the grove half way through. At least, that's my humble opinion. Just give yourself more credit, Jells! I'm loving your story and I know I'm not the only one! It's your world, we are just here to play in it!
As far as the 'fork in the road' that you are at right now, I say take which ever path leads to more Dom Edward and lemons! But, I might be a little biased! LOL! Seriously though, I don't want you to think I don't love all of your story because I'm a pervert that keeps talking about lemons and Domward because that's not the case. I love the world you've created and you've done such a remarkable job portraying how frightening, desolate and different the world is for humans right now. I can picture it in my head, driving down the street and everything SEEMING okay and normal but there is something wrong, you just can't put your finger on it...until you see all the signs for "Bottle Blood" and vampires sucking on blood snow cones. We aren't in Kansas anymore Dorothy! Your writing is great, both with the lemons and otherwise so just stop worrying and keep doing what you are doing!
Author's Response:
Oh wow! I sooo didn't expect another comment. Sweeeet! Thank you, you're awesome!!! =)
And yes, Bella is kind of like catnip for vamps. =) lol Yeah, you could say universal singer...for male vamps. ;) There is a little bit more to it, and this....certain quality... she possesses, she will be able to control in a way- and will be amplified when she's changed into a hybrid. Yeah, I haven't really explained the hybrid thing, have I? Ooops, Sorry. Okay so in this fic, since my vamps are actually from another planet, it's a little different when a vamp wants to turn a human. Here, a human who is turned will change into a hybrid- half blood. All my vamps don't possess the ability to turn humans into what they are themselves- full- bloods. Hybrids will keep some human qualities, have shorter fangs, will need to consume both human food and blood to survive, eye color will stay the same, except will become brighter.Basically, you could tell the difference between a vampire and a half-blood just be looking at them. There's other things about hybrids, but I can't reveal that yet...not until I do the 'why hybrids are forbidden' scene. lol Ohhh, I forgot to mention that once I write that scene, it will hint to to what Bella has that makes her special- well, one of the things she has. lol Glad you liked the Garrett scene and there will be lots more. I plan to kick it up a notch or two.
I'll give you a tiny spoiler except i'll leave out the details. Okay, James is one sick twisted vamp, right? He's into some illegal activity. I don't know if you seen Hostel? Well....it's something similar. I twisted it to make it fit my story. I will reveal that very soon.
I think she would love Domward too. ;) LMAO@ I'd happily suffer through one and if Bella isn't appreciative then I'll take her place. =D I mean, he has to do something to help her learn to keep herself safe and take better care of herself, right? *giggles* I totally agree!!! =D I just realized something funny, this story is rated NC-17 while the other LAH, much darker-graphic version is rated M 16 yrs and up. LMAO! I will kick this up a notch, I could totally make this more graphic. =D
LOL@vampire crack! hehe love that! Great question---> how come the other Cullens seem to be immune? A lot has to deal with what you said yourself, but the Cullen males are also mated to their true mates. That bond is very difficult to break. And since Bella is still human, that quality she possesses isn't potent enough to have an effect on mated males. Yeah, I'm not fond of Reneesme either. I'm not planning on writing Nessie in this fic. I'm just not feeling it here. lol And yes, there's definitely prejuidce concerning hybrids...and jealousy...and some other things. =)
Another good question--> Will she start to be able to feel his, maybe as a result of the marking venom? The answer is yes, she will. It will take her a little longer to feel his emotions but eventually she will. Now this is all new to the both of them. And Edward didn't know what to expect when he started feeding from Bella since he actually never fed from a human. The bottled blood doesn't have that affect- vampires won't be able to feel emotions from the people who donated their blood. The reason being is that the vamp has to actually feed from the human- it's the fresh blood that connects vampire and human- kinda like forming a bond, allowing the vamp to feel that human's emotions.
LOL. Very good point! It's ironic, don't you think? Here are the Cullen's, the Swan's and others who feel stronlgy about human rights, yet like you've said, they all sit around the table and sip human blood like it's tea time or some dinner party. I had to giggle at that for a minute. But okay *serious face* lol, they don't have much choice unfortunately. =( They've tried everything, even animal blood...mixing certain kinds of animal blood with others, mixing synthetic blood...etc etc. Unfortunately, Dr. Cullen hasn't perfected the synthetic blood yet...the taste is all wrong, and it doesn't keep them strong. Sooooo back to the ol drawing board for Daddy C. Remember The Thirst? Well...what Edward went through I will explain soon. A lot what you mentioned about human rights and yet still drinking human blood has something to do with Edward falling victim to The Thirst. I just realized I have a lot of shit to cover. lol Wow, that's a great idea about he secret blood donation. I think that would be great, use blood that was given freely. =) I like the way you think. It's funny that you mentioned drinking Bella's donated blood. There will be a scene when one of the Cullen's consumes bottled blood...but not just any blood...Bella's. Not that they know what she tastes like, but it's her unique scent that will give it away. It's an accident, and it was bound to happen, and this will cause Edward to become extremely angry.
Aww thank you! Your words are so encouraging! Yes, lol, I am Ms. Self-Doubt. Maybe I should change my penname? lol I'll work on that. And I agree, you're so right about feeling accomplishment. I enjoy working on this story, it''s fun because there are many possibilities, and when I finish a chapter I do feel like I've accomplished something. Very true. And thank you, I'm happy that you are enjoying this story.
LOL! No I don't see you as perverted at all. For real! I sooo want to kick up the sexual scenes too- add some more Domward...vamp sex...etc!!! And I think I'll do that. I stayed up til 6 am....but guess whatty? I did get past the fork in the road. Phew! That sucked majorly, it's been over a month!!! O.O And you wanna know something stupid? Well, either direction I would have taken, it all would lead up to the same ending. O_o lol But I picked a more daring path. And hopefully, I didn't jump the gun too soon. This is such a slow paced story- i've been taking this day by day.
Okay anyways, thank you a million times for your comments!!! I appreciate everything you have to say!
~Jells
PS: A mini teaser: an I mean mini. lol I just started to work on this scene. Sorry for any mistakes. I may add or change a few details. But here it is anyways...
Bella’s POV Ch. 11
“Edward? What’s in your hand?” I asked perplexed, my brow furrowing.
His grin grew wicked, a mischievous gleam in his eyes. I was mesmerized; his penetrating stare was holding me, paralyzing my body as his eyes began to darken with lust. My heart began to slam against my rib cage when his fangs lengthened, the marking venom dripping from the tips.
“Edward?” I asked again, my palms becoming clammy as I scooted myself further back.
His growls shook the windows of his room as he stalked closer to me. He lifted his hand and tossed the dvd onto his bed right next to me. I picked it up, studying it. “I thought you said you didn’t watch this?” I locked my narrowed eyes on his black ones.
“It’s Emmett’s,” he chuckled, his voice husky.
“Oh?” I raised my eyebrow at him.
“I think it’s about time I show you some vamp –on- vamp style sex, kitten.” He grabbed the porn dvd, and slid it into the dvd player.
I rubbed my thighs together as moisture leaked from between my folds. My breaths quickened when he grabbed my waist and placed me on his lap. I could feel his cock throb against my ass. I smiled, rubbing myself against him as the screen lit up and the movie began to play. My eyes widened at the scene before my eyes.
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
"So yeah, definitely not one of the better chapters. "
YOU are on crack if you think that. It was a great chapter! A lot of fun and we got to meet Angela! Not everything has to be plot progression, just seeing the characters grow together and have fun is entertaining too. You your writing is always creative and compelling. While I love the lemons (seriously, you are my favorite lemon writer) you still keep me captivated and enjoying all the other parts too. I can't wait until Angela meets Ben! They are my favorite sub characters in Twilight. They are just good people who deserve each other. Simple, innocent love. I have a feeling Angela is going to become much more acquainted with the idea of a mating nip and "personalized" blood donations. ;) I still can't wait for Tanya to come back from suspension and see Bella and Edward together. I wonder if vampires can turn green? Mwahahaha!
Woo hoo for the naughty Bella spanking scene! I agree, she needs to get herself punished more often! I love possessive, dominating Edward. The two things that made me squeal were, “This is the only dick that will ever fuck your pussy, do you hear me?” he snarled" and "Kitten, did I fucking tell you that you could leave?”. Edwards possessive dirty talk makes it those moments that much steamier. I hope he stops apologizing constantly for being that way. It's not like he can help it and it's obvious that Bella loves it. I love it when they have rough and tumble vampire sex. And thank god he pulled out! I can't even imagine that barb impaling into the tongue. However it would be funny as hell for them to have to sit there waiting for it to retract. Especially if Carlisle or Emmet came to the door in the mean time. LOL Also, he keeps threatening her with public sex or discipline of some kind, he really should follow through on that sometime. ;) I was curious, when Edward marked her in front of the whole school for the first time, what were their thoughts? Since they are all vampires are they used to that sort of thing happening and it was only weird since she was human or are violent, graphic displays like that par for course and not really thought about? What if he had gone farther and had sex with her right there? Obviously if we ever saw a display like that in our high school we'd freak out, but since they are vampires and its in their nature and instincts to do this, was it not that weird?
I noticed something, when Ben went to tell Bella that it was okay for her to invite Angela, why didn't he do it in math class? And then when he approached them in the hall he spoke to Edward about it instead of Bella directly, is that sort of a manners thing? You don't talk to a mated female directly like that? If they had a project they had to work on together outside of class, would he have to ask Edwards permission first even though it's a school assignment? I guess I'm as fascinated as Angela with the mated vampire etiquette and Do's and Don'ts. :)
When they ran into the vampire with "The Thirst" did he try to claim Bella too? It was difficult as he spoke in L.O.T.V. I was just wondering if he got all hopped up on the Bella catnip too. He was scary! I'm also deathly curious why Edward got The Thirst and how he overcame it.
I LOVE how long your chapters are, it totally made up for having to wait a bit. I know you said if you shorten the next chapter you can get it out faster but I'm torn. I love to sink into a nice long chapter but I also hate to wait long for updates. This is totally my favorite story of all the fics I'm reading right now so I'll leave it up to you to do what you feel comfortable with without tossing my two cents in. I'll be here with bells on reading either way! <3
Oooh, one other thing...if you have vamps speaking in L.O.T.V can you put a translation maybe at the end in an a/n of what hey say?
Thanks again for another amazing chapter, I can't wait until the next! :)
Author's Response:
LMAOOO@ on crack! That was hilarious!!!
Yeah, I guess if my chapters don’t have a lot of plot progression I feel like they are lacking…a lot. Lol But I guess can’t have something exciting happen in every chapter like I want. It would be really unrealistic, not that this story is realistic, but ya know? Wow! Really? Thanks for the compliment. Lemons are a pain to write for me. =) I agree, Ben and Angela are my fave sub characters as well. And oh yes, Angela will become really acquainted with vamps and everything that goes along with it. And Angela will need support when times turn tough as well :( LOL@ vamps turning green. Tanya will be coming up real soon, along with her sisters.
I’m glad you enjoyed the punishment scene. Thank you=D I hope to have more of those. Bella would love for Edward to let loose a little more, it is in his nature after all. LMAO@barb in mouth. Yeah, I was actually going to write it like that, but I decided against it. It would have been funny. Could you imagine if the insides of Bella’s mouth became scratched, or worse. She would have to go to Carlisle-that would have been really awkward b/c Carlisle would have known exactly what happened between his son and Bella. Lol Yes, omg…Emmett or Carlisle walking in while the barb is stuck in her mouth would have been something else. LOL And I think Edward will follow through with having public sex…Bella likes to taunt him, esp now since she knows that he can feel her emotions. I have a scene in mind already that happens in a public place when she teases him. Lol Edward may not be able to resist for much longer. Great question. When Edward first marked Bella in the school some vamps were in awe, shock, disgust….some even became really aroused. Just lots of different emotions. Now for the vamps who felt any negative emotion towards the marking only had to do with the fact that a vampire was marking a human as his mate….same goes for mating in public with a human. They don’t understand why a vampire would claim a human. Most vampires don’t frown upon public mating or marking. They don’t think it’s weird at all, it was encouraged many years ago esp on their planet. It’s who they are as a species. They love to dominate their mates in front of everyone, it shows the others who belongs to whom…in a more explicit way. Lol I could show a scene during a public setting where a male claims his mate sexually and by marking venom. I bet Bella’s eyes would go wide, or any human for that matter when that occurs while the vampires would act like it’s just a normal day occurrence. Lol
Yes, exactly! I’m sooo glad you picked up on that. Great question. It is most definitely a manners/respect thing. Ben has to ask permission from Edward- most times when it concerns more private matters-the male has to address the mated male. And he must approach Edward at all times concerning certain situations first. Now, Edward is Ben’s best friend, he knows that he wouldn’t try to steal his Bella away, but it’s all out of respect still. So yes, when there’s a school assignment that has to be done out of class and a male vampire has to work with a mated female, the male still needs to ask permission from the mated male. It’s very important, or things will get …deadly between the two males. =(
Oh yeah…The Thirst vamp…he only wanted Bella for her blood. I should have mentioned this in the chapter…oops lol. But when a male vampire wants a female whether she is human or not, he’ll secrete the red marking venom even though she may not be his true mate. So let’s say…what can I call the Thirst vamp?...hmmm…okay Snarly, lol, if he wanted Bella as a mate or sexually, his fangs would have been dripping with red venom instead of green. Great question btw. Yeah, the Thirst is something that turns these vamps into scary monsters…very feral, blood thirsty….and can be very sexual as well too. I will definitely explain what happened to Edward…Bella wants to find out too. Lol
Awww thank you. I’m flattered that you like this story so much. =) I’m torn about the long chapters too. I like to write long chapters, but I had some, not here on this site, complain about the length…but I don’t see how I can shorten them anymore. It’s very detailed, and one scene can take up at least 10 to 15 pages easily. I will start writing ch 12, and it may be as long as this chapter. But the update won’t take so long this time. =)...I think....j/k lol
I’m planning on writing a…um… “period scene” when Bella gets her period. LOL I know it’s dead blood, but hey they are vamps….at least my vamps will get…affected…maybe a little turned-on. A very nice reviewer said she would like to read that scene…so I will give it a shot and try my best. LOL I may also do a donation scene too in ch 12. And then there’s the party of course where Ben meets Angela<-- that will definitely be in ch 12. I hope you’ll like.
Oh shizzle! I knew I forgot something in my authors note. LOL Thank you for reminding me. I will post the translations still. I’ll post them now here for you.
*Okay, here’s the Bree scene translations:
Bree: “I won’t hurt them.” = “Iroes wilnos huretus katem.”
Bree: “I have never seen a human before.” = “ Iroes sensus nevet salemez allem blootus gerte.”
Edward: “I will keep an eye on you. If you hurt them, I won’t hesitate to tear your throat out.” = “Iroes vente keeptus arus augem otus daros. Ochekt daros huretus katem, Iroes wilnos hestus tek darose halzem otkez!!!”
Bree: “No, I promise.” = “ Neit, Iroes preske.”
Now this is for the Thirst scene…and what Edward said to Bella when he was about to punish her.
“Minetke” = “Mine.”
“All mine!” = “Alsu minetke!”
“are” = “suntus”
Anyhoo,
Thank you soo much for your awesome comments and questions. They make me laugh and smile. I appreciate it!!!
~Jells
Thank you Emma Verberg for this new banner! She is wonderful!
After searching for a century, I have found what I have been looking for, a human submissive. The fact that I am a vampire and she is my singer, will not deter me from having the only thing I have ever wanted more than human blood, her body. D/S BDSM EPOV AU
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Fantasy
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Bdsm stories only, I Whitlock's read , Drive's Stories to read that are Completed, Ageise02 WIP Reads, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 66673 Read Count: 105150
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 The fixer
"Now Edward, you can't fight the logic here. Tanya has explained since you have never tried it in a vanilla way, you don't know if it's something you would like. We are positive once you have, you will see that your lifestyle is wrong," Esme smiled like she was doing me favor.
Yeaaah, no one has ever peed on me but I'm pretty sure I know it's not something I would like. That logic is so stupid, I'm disappointed Esme hate his choices so much she couldn't see through it. I really wanted him to tell them how he was aroused all day because he was talking, texting and E-Mailing Bella so they knew it had nothing to do with Tanya. It really would take me a long time to ever forgive Esme. I mean, that's his own damned mother and she was going to hold him down while he was raped? Horrible. I hope she suffers for a bit over that one. >:( And something tells me that we haven't seen the last of Tanya evil ass.
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 The punishment served
God I hate Tanya. I think every girl has known a Tanya or Rosalie in their lives and it makes it that much easier to hate them. Something tells me she has something to do with Carmen and Esme attacking Edward! Bitch.
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 The Claiming
I don't like how remoreseful they both are over the spaning. Yeah, they hurt, a punishment isn't supposed to be fun but usually there is enjoyment in it for both parties. I find when I cry, the release is extremely cathartic as I don't usually express a lot of emotions. A Dom gets off on the control of punishing someone and the sub gets off on being controlled and turning the pain into pleasure. What hurts most of all when you are being punished is knowing you've disappointed your master, not the actual physical part of punishments. There is also pride in enduring it for your master as well as pride in return from him. It's not something either are usually remorseful or stressed over.
Author's Response:
Thats sort of what i was convaying. Bella endured it but her tears were from the pain of knowing she had dissapointed him not the pain itself. she felt like a failure have to be punished on her first night with him. He couldn't enjoy it or take pride in it because he was seeing from her inside her mind. it was also the first time they both had been through it. i'm not sure if i am making sense on explain it correctly. one thing i am trying to convy with this story is too many people look at the relationship as barbaric when its rarely that. its a relationship about trust and feeling safe with the Dom you choose. in my eyes its about a sexual choice between two or more partners. people need to understand that. i have a few subs and even an x Dom who keep me in check for accuracy. I hope if you are in this lifestyle and it sounds like you are or were you take no offence to my story. its not meant that way. like i said i started this to open peoples minds to the close emotional bond between Dom and sub with a little vampire drama thrown in. please feel free to let me know if anything is incorrect but keep in mind i am trying to give this lifestyle the repect it deserves. Nails233
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
"Granted it was a hugely watered down, fluffy version, but nonetheless, it was still things that Dom's and sub's do."
Hahahaha, I had a similar conversation with a friend once who disliked my preferences. When I asked her what she thought she was doing when she dressed up like a school girl and her boyfriend pretended to be the angry teacher she was like "THAT'S DIFFERENT!" Ooooookay, if that helps you sleep at night, princess!
Hmmmm...who was her Domme? I'm going to guess it's Leah and Jacob. I could go Sam and Leah/whatever his new gf name was but I think Sam was way older than her. Not to mention Jacob is like her brother in her eyes, she really never knew Sam.
And I'd call you a bitch for that cliff hanger but luckily I'm playing catch up so I can go on to the next chaper right away so you get nothing but love! :)
Author's Response:
You so understand what i was saying! so many people don french maid outfits, nurses and students and they think it not the same. well it is. and dont get me started on the number of people who silently get off when their spouse smacks them on the ass! i so do not buy their crappy excuses! they just need to embrace the love!
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 The apology
""I looked into it. I even contacted a vampire couple who live the same way of life. They were very nice and even showed me around their playroom. It also helped that I have been sitting here listening to you both all day. You did not hurt her once, in fact, quite the opposite."
What about when he does hurt her? Punishment spankings can be painful and sometimes pain is pleasure. Mixing the right amount of pain with the right amount of pleasure is an extremely amazing feeling. I hope Esme isn't expecting it to be all kisses and being tied down with no pain or punishments ever. I hope she comes to understand that Submissives enjoy walking that line of pain and pleasure and that a good Dom knows how much of each to give and which a sub needs more of depending on the circumstances. Sometimes just plain pain all on it's own is desired. I'm just still really mad at her I think. *crosses arms*
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
"Seeing her shiver anxiously waiting for what I was going to do to her, as exhilarating as that is, it is not fair to the submissive. She needs to know what to expect so she can react accordingly."
Anticipation can be half the fun! =D The mind is truly a wicked thing when left to roam. And I foresee Bella getting into a heap of trouble! She's a trouble magnet. If there is trouble within a 100 miles radius it will find its way to her. Not that I'm complaining! :) And the chastity belt is hot. He totally should have gotten one with a dildo attachment so she could be teased the whole time he's gone. I love when got all possessive and protective at the car dealership. Possessive Edward is one of my favorite Edwards. I love it when he talks dirty too. Since he's numerous medical degrees and all, he should give her a full physical. There is something hot to me about being spread open and having someone look inside you. It's very intimate to me when done with the right person. Not many people write medical role play scenes. I guess I don't see it as being much different than any other role play, just different toys. There is certainly a difference between a sexy Dom wielding a speculum versus my 55 year old lady doctor.
And I totally agree with you about people bitching about the story. Just don't read it. I don't understand why people force themselves to read a story they don't like or understand. That's a lot of effort and irritation just to leave a bitchy review. Just click the red X at the top right corner of your web browser and all will be well with your world again! We kinky people don't want anything to do with you either! =P
Author's Response:
i really love your reviews. i think you are so right! i hope you keep them up they are making my night.
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 The faux pas
Something else I was just thinking about, didn't Tanya train Edward? How could she make Esme and Carmen believe that what Edward was doing was a bad thing and needed an intervention if she's off doing the same thing?
"With my free hand, I retrieved a small bottle of lube and coated two fingers with it generously.
She could not hide her tensing when I caressed her rosebud on her backside. I've never been an ass man, but you never know until you try it."
Hot! I was hoping they'd get into some anal play. It's very sexy, possessive and primal to me.
It sounds like the vampires that killed Charlie might have been Volturi since they were wearing black robes and all that. I wonder what Charlie could have done for them to have been tracking him all those years. You'd think if he just knew about vampires they'd have killed him quick and been done with it instead of stalking him for years. And it's heart breaking to hear what happened to Bella, getting tossed out into the rain naked. People are assholes!
Okay, now that you've got me all addicted to your story you need to start updating every few hours. Ok? ;)
(I'm still mad at Esme! *crosses arms again*)
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
I feel bad for Edward. I know what it's like to have people be unaccepting of your lifestyle and thing you are sick and wrong. Abuse couldn't be farther from the truth when it comes to a healthy, D/s relationship. :( So much love, trust and respect goes into them and they probably have more communication due to it's necessity than any vanilla relationship. I really hope Esme comes around. I'm not holding out hope for Rose though. She seems like the sort of person that would continue to hate it just to spite Edward, even if she understood it.
Date: 17 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 The merging of Bella's
I'm glad Edward is finally realizing his feelings for her. She is so devoted to him. I hope he explains why she can't go to La Push anymore, it will have to be included in his conversation with her about what he is. How come Alice can be around her during her period but Edward can't? Is it because she's his singer? I wish your chapters were longer, I love your story so much. Also, I went to the link you posted for the 'Fuck Me Friday' thing to see the outake but I'm not sure where to look. Maybe I'm blind, what is it called?
Author's Response:
Edward can't be around her during her period becuase she is his singer so her blood screams to him, I am working on making the chapters longer. in the begining there is less to tell and not to mention it would torture the readers if i explained everything in every chapter. but i will continue to work on making them longer.The outtake is not up yet so far all they have told me was it would be up around march. well i guess vague works. i will let you know once i see the link, i will post it for you all! Thank you for readin and reviewing! nails233
Date: 26 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 The new playroom
Hello my lovely! For some reason I haven't been getting updates like normal from TWCS! I missed the last update! Oh well, I can't complain to much when I get to read TWO...well THREE with your update, chapters at once.
So Bella can read thoughts to can she. So she's a shield AND a mind reader? Or does it only work with Edward? That would be kind of cool, just something that they share together.
He was my forbidden fruit. A man so close, almost too close, yet so far out of reach. He loved me, took care of me, but did not crave me the same way I did him. I wanted everything, yet had nothing. But things were going to change. I could feel it. Mature
Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 19236 Read Count: 15418
Date: 24 May 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Worth It?
Again, another story that is unique and different from the normal story and plot. I'm so glad I found you from the Tsunami compilation. I'm really interested to see how Edward and Bella eventually bridge the gap and get together. Something tells me he probably has noticed her but isn't sure how to go about it or is in denial of his feelings. It's nice that Bella has a good friend to confide in who is in the same predicament she's in. Can't wait for more! :)
Bella is found six years after she was kidnapped. Can her friends and family save her from the pain? DEALS WITH DARK SUBJUCT MATTER AND GRAPHIC ABUSE. NC-17 for language, violence, and just about everything esle you can imagine. Read with caution.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, butterflybetty stories to read , I Whitlock's read , G8or Favor8s Read, My Favorite Stories, Brooklyn - to read, to read
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 114196 Read Count: 135063
Date: 29 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32
Yeah, he would have gotten Bella eventually but they knew who had her. They could have helped her be rescued. Bella let it go way to easily and jumped to help them. She would have been 100% justified to her anger and Garrett would have been an asshole for trying to push her to forgive them or try to point out their cutting issues to make her feel guilty.
Feeling unsure about her wedding night, Bella Swan seeks out world reknowned sex therapist and hands on instructor Dr. Edward Cullen. Things start to change during the course of their sessions, leaving them both unsettled. OOC/AH/LANGUAGE/LEMONS
Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 18511 Read Count: 10089
Date: 07 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Ooooh Jake sounds like a bastard! I can't wait until Bella finds out! And damn, I need a session with Dr. Cullen! Can't wait for more updates! :)
Facing certain death for defending Bella’s honor, Jasper finds himself depending on Bella making the ultimate sacrifice; her complete surrender to the dark and dangerous Edward. But is the price too high? Will she succumb to Edward's persuasive calling?
Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica, Historical, Romance, Supernatural
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Bdsm stories only, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 9579 Read Count: 8935
Date: 07 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Love the story! And really, Edward couldn't wait 7 more days? I mean, he's waited years already and he's gonna go fuck it up with only a week to go? I'm not understanding, is the whole 'wait until she gives herself to you' a supernatural law? Like their mating wont work out if he doesn't wait or is this a made up law of Carlisles? Either way, wait a week dude!
I see you haven't updated since November, I really hope you come back to this story. I love the Darkward you've come up with. This story is fresh and different. I really like it! :)
This is the sequel to my story Intimate Ties
Dom Edward finally has his submissive, Bella, right where he wants her. But when Rose decides she wants to enter their world, they start to feel their ties come undone. Can their relationship survive Rose's attempt to sabotage? OOC/AH LEMONS, BDSM
Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My All-Time Favorites, Bdsm stories only, Ageise02 not updated in 6mo reads, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 11580 Read Count: 8777
Date: 08 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
It's not really Edwards fault, I mean, it was Emmett that made the deal, right? He should have known better or at least made sure to speak with Edward/Bella first. Can't wait for more updates! :)
Dr. Edward Anthony Masen Cullen is a world renowned pediatric neurologist, he´s also a very sought after Dominant living in the Seattle area. What happens when the thrill of the playroom is no longer enough? What happens when he wants more than just a Friday through Sunday arrangement... Bella Swan a very young and very successful Corporate Attorney, who happens to be secretly crushing on her best friends older brother. It all starts with a dream, but after a very short, but failed marriage, Bella decides it´s time to give in to her submissive nature. With the help of her best friend and a blind date, can Bella finally find all the things her live is missing. ExB Rated for BDSM themes and lemony goodness.
A very big thank you to the wonderful Kris Mkystich for my new banner! Isn´t it sexy!!! Check her out in the December Drabble Wars!! http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8769101/3/School-Of-Mischief
Winner of a Tomato Soup Award!
Nomimated for two Wordsmith Awards!
Voted Must Read Monday by Twi Girls Next Door
Winner of two Wordsmith Awards!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Bdsm stories only, Twilight - Read, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 312058 Read Count: 389629
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6: Propositions, Female Dommes, & Cell Phones...
Mojo POV"
Um...no. Maybe when the story gets going.
I really hope the next chapter is them meeting. I'm really not interested in her training with Rose or her going home to Forks to tell her family about Jacob. It's not important to the story. It's easily solved by doing an outtake for scenes with Rose or having Bella think throw away comments about "I did x,y or z like Rose taught me". An outtake might be fun but I have no interest in reading it as a chapter in the story since it doesn't really matter. She's just going to learn basics, nothing plot or character defining. She can do the same with off hand remarks about her parents reactions to the Jacob situation. Unless Jacob is going to come back to cause problems with them, we really don't need to know how they react period. Hell, even if he does come back all we'd really need to know is if they react poorly or not. Not really interesting in having a whole chapter of them just talking on the phone either, it might have been fun without all the other stuff that's gone on. I can see that being a good outtake too, or a small flashback during their first scene. None of the above need their own chapters at the very least. If you are taking two weeks to update and those are each given their own chapters that's a month and a half until we get to the actual story.
I also really hope it doesn't take forever for them to figure out each others identities. That just is going to take up more time to getting to the good stuff of them being together and whatever antagonist is going to come along (I assume Tanya and maybe Jacob). That's where the fun and interesting stuff is.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Krazi
xoxo
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2: PAGING DR. CULLEN
Kick the bitch to the curb!!! God I hate Tanya. I have a feeling she's going to resurface though and cause problems for our favorite couple at some point. >:(
"It would devastate him when he lost a child, but he never blamed himself. He would always say, ¨Son, somethings are out of our control, but it´s better to loose one and save twenty... than to loose them all.¨"
Totally grammar pet peeve. The word you are looking for is "lose". The way you've spelled it is like "I have loose change in my pocket" whereas you mean "I left my purse at home because I don't want to lose it at the club." Other than that I don't care about grammer or spelling, I have no clue why that one gets to me though.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review!
Krazi
xoxo
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5: Revelations... What´s Done In the Dark...
"What do you think of Alice´s big reveal and her sub time with Jazz? Bathtime with Mama Esme? And Mojo mania?"
Honestly? I think it was all completely unnecessary. I don't think we need this information to have an understanding on the current time line of the story. If anything it could have been done in a paragraph or two of a flash back in the main time line. There is a lot of unimportant fluff and superfluous stuff. I actually believe that about the last 5 chapters as well. And all the "I'm gonna tell her...no I'm not going to tell her...I'm going to tell her" got old last chapter. Alices point of view is not necessary to the story at all.
"As much as I want to get to the first scene, we can´t rush it; to make the story build properly we just can´t take it any faster."
Don't take people saying "hurry up" as being mean, take more as constructive criticism. The story could have been written so 6 pages of back story weren't necessary. People click on a link that says:
"Dr. Edward Anthony Masen Cullen is a world renowned pediatric neurologist, he´s also a very sought after Dominant living in the Seattle area. What happens when the thrill of the playroom is no longer enough? What happens when he wants more than just a Friday through Sunday arrangement... Bella Swan a very young and very successful Corporate Attorney, who happens to be secretly crushing on her best friends older brother. It all starts with a dream, but after a very short, but failed marriage, Bella decides it´s time to give in to her submissive nature. With the help of her best friend and a blind date, can Bella finally find all the things her live is missing."
People click to read about Edward and Bellas fledgling relationship and it's hard to want to stick around through 6 chapters of back story and point of views from Tanya, Alice and anyone else that's not Edward and Bella. Alice really didn't need a whole chapter to herself. What makes it so hard to want to try to stick around through all this is it takes time to update. A week or two (sometimes more depending on the author) goes by and suddenly it's a month or more before you get to the parts of the story you actually are interested in reading ie: Bella and Edward trying to be together.
I think part of what makes it more frustrating with this story is the fact that you are a great writer. People don't want to give up on the story because it's difficult to find great authors like yourself but it gotten boring. Thankfully I just came upon your story and haven't had to wait for updates but once I finish next chapter, if it doesn't get down to brass tacks I don't know if I want to wait around for weeks for another update that doesn't get into the heart of the story. I think in an effort to give your story depth and texture you've given us way to much set up to the point we no longer care about what happened in the past. The only two relevant things from the past I can see are Edward breaking up with Tanya and Bella and the Jacob wedding debacle. That could have been told in one chapter, both stories together. Everything else that fluffs all that out is unimportant filler. If there are other small tid bits, slide them in as a short flashback during the current story line, they didn't need whole chapters in other peoples POVs describing them.
I'm not trying to be mean or bitchy by any means, just trying to give an honest opinion. The subject matter is near and dear to my heart and I think you are doing a wonderful job portraying it. I just want to get it going! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Krazi
xoxo
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: DREAMS... WHAT DO THEY MEAN?
"WITHOUT ADULT EXPERIENCED SUPERVISION."
Okay, this had me cracking up because all I could picture was my mom having to watch me have sex. I know what you mean, it's just the way you worded it. LOL
"Sometimes I feel like Mr. fucking Rogers. You remember the perv, who wanted to be his neighbor. He´d come home and change his fucking sneakers and that damn stupid cardigan. Like that was gonna stop the world from thinking he was a child molester."
HEY NOW! Don't go hating on Mister Rogers! He was awesome! >:(
"Hence, my craving and desire to submit. Make no mistake about it, when Isabella is on the scene ; I will have your ass and serve it on a platter. I take no unnecessary bullshit, but I still feel like something is missing. I know that it is possible to explore my submissive side without compromising the stubborn hard ass that´s within me."
Your Bella is a lot like me. I'm very indepenant, outspoken and opinionated yet very, very much a natural submissive. People think to be a true sub you have to be meek and mild all the time, that couldn't be farther from the case. I take on a lot during my day to day routine and it's nice to come home and not have to think. My burdens ease off my shoulders as I know I just have to do what I'm told.
"You can´t change how you feel. You can sell yourself short and live a life based on the standards of ¨normal people¨, but in the end all your living is a lie. Who the fuck determines whose normal anyway. Worst case scenario you find yourself living in your own personal hell and three kids later your wife catches you wearing her favorite dress."
Oh god..this had me laughing hysterically!
"Operation get Jacob Black.....
Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned... Especially one that doesn´t go around looking for trouble.....
If I were Jacob Black I would be very afraid right about now.
Be afraid Mr. Black.... Be very afraid... "
OOoooh this gave me tingles! I can't wait!
I love your writing style, especially how you've made Bella. So glad she's not a door mat.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and the great review!
Krazi & Mojo
xoxo
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: REVENGE IS A DISH... BEST SERVED COLD...
The truth? I have to agree with everyone else, the story is dragging. I just want it to hurry up already to get to the point of them meeting. I mean, back story is nice but you've made the backstory the main story by dragging it on for so many chapters. I think it would have been much better told if it was done in short increments during flashbacks during the current time line. No one really wants chapter after chapter of backstory and nothing else. But I've still got a few more chapters to go! Hopefully things pick up more in the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing.
Krazi
xoxo
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: PROLOGUE: BLIND DATING
"My body was still humming, when the flood gate opened and the sensations became to much.
I shook with sobs that I could neither control nor explain.
I just need another release.
This time emotional."
God I love this feeling, it's the best feeling in the world. And don't you go hiding your head in the sand! The story is great so far and I can't wait to read more! :)
Author's Response:
Welcome to the party! Thanks for reading and reviewing! For update information, pictease, and chapter teasers, check out the blog! www.fortheloveofdomination.blogspot.com
Krazi & Mojo
xoxo
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter: 4 BREAKING UP IS HARD TO DO...
"I leaned in so only Em could hear, ¨looks like somebody´s being a bad pet.¨ I couldn´t the help all out laughter that escaped my lips. From the light sheen of sweat on Em´s forehead, I´d say he was wearing some kind of remote control cock ring or a butt plug. It´s moments like this I lived for. I was even tempted to borrow the remote, just for shits and giggles."
Oh.My.God. I about peed my pants this is so hilarious.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
Krazi
xoxo
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7: How the Douche Stole Christmas...
'I really want to know what you thought of the chapter and meeting the Clearwaters?'
Pretty much the same thing I thought of all the other chapters, it wasn't needed or could have been handled with an outtake. I'm really not interested in a chapter of their phone conversations either after the last 7 chapters of nothing. I've been trying to stick with this story because I think you are a really amazing writer, but after 8 chapters the story really hasn't even gotten started. I mean, is the last chapter going to be them meeting for the first time while masked during their test? I really don't understand why there would be all these chapters of unnecessary back story if the main story is them getting together, having to overcome crazy exes and finding their groove together. Is this story supposed to just be about the path that led them together and it finishes when they finally meet?
If you trimmed the fat off of the last 7-8 chapters you could have said what was needed to be said in a chapter or two. I'm not saying we haven't learned important things but those things could have easily been handled without making them into their own chapters and without all the filler around them. So I guess I'm really just confused on what the plot of this story is supposed to be because so far, it's not matching up with the summery at all. I just don't feel it should take 8 chapters to get there. I'm guessing that the next chapter is going to be all phone convos and then maybe the chapter after that they meet? I guess I'll put this story on alert and maybe check back in in a month. I'm going to stop reviewing now since I've already said this a few times. I already feel bad, I don't want to harp on things.
Author's Response:
Well... what can I say to alllllll of reviews? I guess nothing but the truth, which is... I´m sorry you feel that way. I never really knew how much pressure it was to be the actual writer; it´s so easy to read a story and give my opinion whether it be good or bad. I´m seeing now that it is not so easy to please everyone. To my amazement and utter gratitude this story has recieved over 400 reviews, thanks to people like you who take the time to let me know what they think. That being said, I would be stir crazy, not to mention canceling my real life, if I had to conform the story to suit the preferences if all 400 reviewers; I´m not even going to factor in those who choose to read and not review.
I don´t want to lose ~thank you for pointing out my typo in the previous chapter, but I´m human and I make mistakes just like everyone else; even published authors;)~ any readers, but if you feel the story is not for you, then I will have to live with that loss. While I have some complaints, I have more support in my vision for where I want the story to actually go, because you can please some of the people some of the time, but you can´t please all the people all the time. I also decided not to try.
I so appreciate of your positive and not so positive reviews. As a whole that just fuels my attempt to strive to be a better writer, but also reminds me why author´s publish finished books and not chapter by chapter. Lol! I don´t feel the summary is misleading in anyway and the story is moving exactly where I always intended for it to go. For example, I´m reading one story and it´s in chapter 17 and has yet to get to the prologue. I stick with it because I´m enjoying the ride. I´m not a wham bam... thank you ma´am kind of writer. I love the slow build, because in the end it´s much more explosive, but that´s just me
I hope I´ve covered everything and if you wish to stick around, we´ll be more than happy to have you, but if not... I understand completely and would never hold it against you. I will go as far as to say, I will be sticking with my original plan for the story, afterall, I can only write what´s in my head and not what´s in someone elses. Lol! I mean no disrespect or care to belittle your criticism, on the contrary I value your opinion. Thank you for taking the time to read as much as you did and being kind enough to review.
Laterzzz:)
~Krazi~
xoxo
In a world dominated by vampires, humans are forced to abide by the strict rules of the vampire government. Bella has never experienced life in an all-human world and one day the only life she knows shatters to pieces when she is kidnapped and sold to a vampire. She is unfortunately the object of the most ruthless, out of control, vampire‘s affection. Her life turns upside down as she moves to an all-vampire town. Will she have the strength to go on after all that she has endured her personal hell? Will the one special vampire heal her wounds as she struggles to live a life amongst vampires or will she become the victim of their most sinister instincts? Edward and Bella pairing, AU, OOC
Warning: This story contains explicit adult content, language, violence, vampire marking and blood play, Extreme Dark-ward, and murder.
Alternate version of the original story, Living Amongst Vampires. By IBELONGTOAVAMPIRE.
L.A.H, is co-written by Thaigher Lillie
Tkegl...Thank you!
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Horror, Sci-Fi
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Love to drive's Stories to read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89094 Read Count: 129742
Date: 29 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 20: A bit of a tease
So are we going to get back to the main plot with Edward and Bella now?
Author's Response:
No the next five chapters are completely Emmet. *laughs* This is the main plot. Sorry to dissapoint you with the story telling. Some people including writers like to read and write stories with a little creative sustenace from time to time.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Hate
I'm enjoying it. I like the mixture of the sci-fi and old myth creature into one. When you describe the ships and a bunch of the "ejaculating" out of a larger ship it made me think of the Wraith from Stargate: Atlantis.
Author's Response:
Thank you =) I'm glad that you're enjoying our story so far.
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 3: A New Beginning
Such a fanastic beginning! I love how they are bonded before Edward is even out of the womb! I can't wait to see their reaction to each other when they are finally reunited. Will they ever know of their connection?
Also, I was sent here by Foot, TSO and Father Aro! Fantastic authors recommending fantastic stories! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you =)
You'll see about Edward's and Bella's connection.
Oh wow, I'm honored that they sent you here to read our fic.
And thanks for giving this story a chance.
~Jells
Date: 02 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: The set-up
Ooooooh, what an evil bastard! I can't wait to see where this syncs up with the present and how Edward and Bella come back together again. It seems like such a bleak, stark outlook for those that have been forced into concentration camps, I can't imagine how a human and a vampire prince become acquainted with each other. I'm on pins and needles!
Update soon! OH! Update Living Amongst Vampires soon too, pretty please! :)
Author's Response:
Hey!
Yeah, Caius is one vicious mofo. He had this all planned out. Conniving bastard! I've got the outline for the next chapter. It's just waiting to be written. Hope you'll like.
And LAV ch 11 will be updated this week. I'm re-writing a scene, and that's all folks-I'm posting it as is. lol
Thanks for reading and your comments =)
~Jells
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Taken
"With a possessive growl, he slammed his body against the stone wall. His fingers dug into the wall, tearing away chunks savagely."
Umm....I think there is probably a door if you look a little more dude. No need to go all incredible Hulk on the wall.
"Before Edward had a chance to lock his black eyes upon the being that made him go insane with the need to claim, his other guardsman named Demetri, jumped in front of him to block his view. Felix growled, and wrapped his massive arms around his body, restraining his master from entering the Phoenix Compound."
Holy cock block, Batman! How could you do this to us! :( How will they meet now? I hope it doesn't take to much longer. Like the next chapter would be good. Like the next chapter you are going to post in the next 24 hours *wink wink nudge nudge* =D
So I'm guessing the vampire pair are Peter and Charolette. Are they good vampires? It sounds like they want to keep her as a daughter. Well, I guess there are worse vampires to get kidnapped by.
Why did Felix and Demetri try to keep Edward away from the compound? I understand after Demetri realized his True Mate was a human, but why before? Was it just to save the wall? Seems silly as he's the prince and can do as he pleases. But, I guess you can't just leave a gaping hole in the fence of the 'cattle' will wander out.
"When she noticed his awfully long fangs scraping against the flesh of his lower lip, drawing green venom in the process, she wanted to go to him and lick his lips, tasting his life force on the tip of her tongue. She shook her head to dispel the crazy thought."
Should that be red venom there? Isn't he trying to mark her?
Sooooo, is Liveing Amonst Vampires going to be updated soon? PUULEEEAAAASE Jells? Pretty pretty please? O=)
Author's Response:
LOL! Yup, Edward went all Hulk on the wall. That would have been funny if he didn't see the entrance a few feet away and smashed the hell out of the wall anyway.
LMAO@ cockblocking again! Yeeeeaaah, sorry about that. But hey, I enjoy it *grins* LOLOL. Yeah, we could post a chapter in the next 24 hrs. Are you against reading a page? Cuz that's how much i'll have next. lol j/k I will work on LAV, while Tygs gets to do the honors and write the next chapter for LAH.
I won't say that Peter and Char are good, but they aren't that bad either. Let's just say that Bella was lucky not to end up with Renee and Charlie. <--- They're crazy vamps *shivers*
Good question. Demetri realized that King Caius wouldn't approve of Edward having a human as a mate. But before, Demetri and Felix wanted to keep Edward away because he was going crazy. They weren't sure if it was blood lust or a mate. Although Edward is Prince, and could do whatever he pleases, but they protect him from certain situations. Edward isn't allowed to take a human as a mate or feed openly on humans. Unless, they face a death sentence. He still has to abide by the strict vamp rules. And breaking any rule would show weakness.
Great question about the venom. I forgot to mention that vampires' blood is green venom which runs through their veins. It's their blood. And It's the same venom they secrete from their fangs when they feel threatened, or fight to incapaciate another. So Edward made himself "bleed" when his fangs sliced through his tough skin. But yup, marking venom is still red.
LMAO! Yes, I should have ch 12 posted soon. I'm still working on it. =/ lol But it's not a pain like last chapter. I still get over that. I had nightmares from the chapter of hell.
Thank you for reading and your awesome comments and q's!! They make me smile. =)
~Jells
Date: 22 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Pull
Tyggy,
"The chapter probably sucks anyway."
Say this crap again and I'm going to come find you and smack you upside the back of the head! You will always be your own worst critic but don't let that get the better of you. It was a great chapter! I really enjoyed seeing a bit of 'A day in the life' of the relationship between Edward and Jasper. It really helped to deepen the characters and give us a better grasp on who they are both in character and emotionally. My heart breaks for Jasper, but I understand what you are saying about learned behavior. I hope now that he is away from Caius and found Bella he'll start to learn a different way. Are the Cullens..um...humanist? Whatever you want to call it, prejudiced against humans? I hope not, but Esme's 'blood bag' comment doesn't make me hopeful!
Also, screw you and Jells for your cockblocking ways!!! Both of you in both stories seem to leave us right at the moment we are getting what we want and hook us in for more! I've been soo exciting for him to find Bella and you are gonna leave me hangin'? Hmm...maybe you need that smack upside the head after all. ;)
Author's Response:
Lmao, you know when I was writing it, i was into it at one point and then i lost intrest, i'm fickle like that. So i didn't think it would good, but i guess it was lmao. Edward, won't change over night, matter of fact he won't change like talking about. It's easier to go from good to evil than from evil to good. So Edward is pretty much going to stay in his ways with small but needed changes. If I changed him completely it'd be unrealistic and a story fail. They'll be visible changes but nothing big. He was brought up to think a certain way. He can't be re-preogramed. oh Esme.....no humanist in her. Dark Cullens baby. But i won't go over board like some people do. They won't be the center of the story. we have a plot lmao.
LMMFAO! i don't know you gotta ask jells. lmao!
Thank you for reading and reviewing!
~Tyggy~
Date: 14 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Prepare to be Pissed
It's okay, you and Jelly Jells do your thing. I told her I'd be happy to come by the school and beat up her teachers for working her to hard and explain to them exactly how important giving her time for fanfic writing is otherwise her legion of fans will show up at the school with pitch forks and torches looking for blood. If you like, I'd happily make the round to your teachers too. :)
Author's Response:
II would love if you can come down here and do that lmao!! I would much rather write for you guys than explain the nerve workings of the forebrain *headddesk* matter of fact, kidnap em while you're at so i can get a could extra days rest lmao!!!
~*TYGS~*
Author's Response:
II would love if you can come down here and do that lmao!! I would much rather write for you guys than explain the nerve workings of the forebrain *headddesk* matter of fact, kidnap em while you're at so i can get a could extra days rest lmao!!!
~*TYGS~*
Date: 10 May 2011 Title: Chapter 9: The Gauntlet part 1
Yay! I live for when you and Jells update your stories. They are by far my favorite. I know Edward can't help what he's going through but I hope Bella has a chance to give her a piece of her mind. Tell him how bad he makes her feel. I mean, he blamed her for what happened in that room yet she was the one who was tied down? And doesn't it concern him in the least that she's being sold as a slave? He could never see her again. She could be sold to some sick fuck who wants a sex slave. I think it will be interesting to see his reaction if she doesn't show up on the next school day because she's been taken away by her new owner. Honestly, it would kind of serve him right. While his internal struggle is understandable, him acting like a cruel, heartless bastard is all him though. Like, he can't help how he feels but he could react a little less cruel, right? She didn't ask for any of this either. I hope one day he has extreme remorse over what he's done and said to her. While he may not be able to help the feelings inside himself she still deserves to get her say and let him know how he hurts her.
While him being a prince doesn't supersede ownership, he has to know that ownership is hazy. Much like Peter and Charlotte knew that they could kidnap Bella without much danger once they got her away. Edward also knows they want to sell her, can't he buy her? Maybe under the guise of making her his own personal blood whore?
Something else I'm curious about, when they had their first encounter in the locker room he refused to finish inside her. Something about it completing the bond? Is that still true? Did that happen this time? What exactly was that all about?
Congratulations on the finals! Woo Hoo! You are a free woman for a bit! Does that mean more time writing? *wink wink* Since this was originally a longer chapter and you posted early so we didn't have to wait until next week does that mean we get another update soon? *crosses fingers and jumps up and down*
As far as rec'ing A Slave Who Wouldn't Obey, thank you so much! Sorry TWCS is being stupid. A lot of people seem to be initially turned off by the fact it's a period type piece but it really isn't hard to follow or affect the story that much. Even if you just did the title, author and let people know it's available both here and on FF.net that would be great. Milk and I really appreciate it!
Okay, I'm off to read Baby Doll now! *HUGS FOR YOU AND JELLY JELLS!*
Author's Response:
OMG! Hi *waves*
Aww thanks. *blushes* We're totally happy you liked the update. =)
IKR? Edward's emotions are all over the place. He's hot and then he's cold. Bipolar vamp. And Bella...she must be extremely confused herself. She also feels that pull, and humans don't mate with vamps (true mates). There's only so much Bella can take from Edward. Will she snap? Will she keep it inside? Will she confront him? Hmm... Will Edward come to terms with his destiny or will he hide from the truth? Will he deny his true mate? Would Bella even want him after all he did to her? Will she ever forgive him? Will he even care enough to show her that he can love her like every mated male vamp?Can they have that love? Or is Edward's heart too icy? Did his rough upbringing damn him forever? And what if Jasper does something unthinkable? Would Edward be able to stop it in time? And what about Caius? Would the Vampire King kill Edward if he bonded to a human? Most likey...or maybe not. What if Caius was taken out before that? Would Edward ever kill Caius to protect Bella? But Edward would break the law by taking a human as a mate. What would all the vampires say? Would they respect him as their Prince or King? Sure vamps can have sex, but not take them as mates. Hmmm ...lol There's so much to cover. But we loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooove mindfuckery. You'll never know what will happen next. lol Damn, I asked to many questions for you to think about lmao
Great questions about the bond. It's kinda like LAV. To completely bond, the male has to mark or rather inject the red marking venom into the female and cum inside of her, leaving his scent behind to complete the bond. Now let's say Edward just came inside, she isn't completely bonded to him. Both need to happen for that to occur.
Sure, Edward could buy Bella as his personal bloodwhore. But he's so conflicted right now.
Thanks for reading!!! And your awesome review. We totally appreciate it =)
Thanks again,
Hugs*
Jelly Jells
Date: 10 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Urge
Yay! I love these two stories so much. Tyggy and Jelly Jells are the bestest!
So does Edward know that Carlisle gave Bella to Emmett for a blood whore whenever her mission is over? I'd like to see/hear what he thinks of that. *sniggers* Honestly, it would serve him right.
I'm glad Tanya and Victoria aren't evil in this one. I think Tanya finding out about them will help a lot. Edward will finally have someone to talk to AND that person is sympathetic to humans, Bella especially. :)
Why doesn't Bella talk about her vampire parents? The nice ones she was kidnapped from. I know it's hard to prove 'ownership' of a human but surely with their position they might be able to do something to get her back. If she told Tanya and Tanya was able to contact them, maybe it would help? I hope Bella finds them again. :(
thanks to christagbanners.blogspot.com
Renee is cutting Bella off. Bella needs money and Edward has a lot of it, but Bella gets more than she expected. Can she handle it or will it be too much? lots of fluff and lemons consentual spankings. R&R
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Completed Stories, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 139157 Read Count: 223966
Date: 28 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
I'm surprised that she went along with them being the only people she's allowed to hang out with, especially give the fact she doesn't like hanging out with them all that much. I mean, I can see her logic of being okay with it because she doesn't have friends for it to interrupt her friendships with but that's going above and beyond the call of duty controlling. What if she meets someone at school she really enjoys being with? It's stifling and harmful to say she can't have contact with other people. Honestly, it would be a huge red flag to me to get out of the relationship. One of the first things abusive men do is try to isolate their victims from thief former life, especially family and friends. It's one of the first thing Domestic Violence counselors tell you to watch out for. I'm not saying I think Edward is abusive by any means, but it's something that screams danger to me and I'd be out the door asap. I wouldn't wait around to see what his intentions were or not.
As someone who is in a D/s relationship and has lived the BDSM lifestyle for 10+ years, I think it's exceptionally fucked for Edward to not put all his rules into the contract. It's highly manipulative. She has every right to know up front what she's getting into. Instead he's giving it to her slowly after her emotions grow, turning up the heat on the pot a little at a time. That's another huge red flag. I would tell anyone in a BDSM relationship to walk asap if a Dom did this to them. I know Edward isn't a BDSM practitioner per se and instead views his lifestyle as just having elements of it, but that really doesn't change anything. It's still highly manipulative and screams danger and a possible abusive situation.
Date: 28 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
Oh god....men are such fucking children when they are sick. I only miss work if I'm damn near dying, I still manage to get up and do the dishes or laundry and I certainly fetch my own drinks and meds. The moment my boyfriend sneezes it's whine central and he burrows into bed.
Date: 05 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
Good for Bella! *stands and cheers!* Just because the way Carlisle treated Edward was enough to scare him straight does NOT mean it was the right way or that it was the only way. Bella needs to tell Edward that she is dating him NOT his father. His father doesn't get to say what does or does not happen in their relataionship. If Edward is so worried about losing control yet the minute Carlisle blinks Edward hands over all that control in a second to Carlisle. And yes Edward, you are a man child. If you are 35 years old and still let your father control your life and live your life to his specifications in fear of disappointing him or him punishing you/your girlfriends that's pretty much the definition of a man child. The fact he'd let another man lay his hands on your woman, regardless of if he's your father or not, pretty much revokes your man card. Bella needs to remind him that she's given him her submission, an amazing treasure of a gift, her love and her trust and if Edward even contemplates letting his father lay a hand on her that is the blackest of betrayals and breaking of trust. He needs to pull his head out of his ass and stop being a scared little boy.
Ooooooh update soon, I love this story so much. Do you have a particular day/schedule you update on or just as you finish the chapters?
Author's Response:
i update on sundays or mondays. my beta has the next chapter and i plan on updating as soon as i get it back. thanks for the review
Date: 30 May 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30
Um...yes he can cut his dad out of his life. The rest of the family too. Unless they come to him on bended knee profusely appologizing neither of them should be talking to the family any time soon. Especially Carlisle and Jasper. They have broken so many bounds of trust and respect it's ridiculous. I've cut my family out for similar reasons and I've never thought of going back. My life got infinitely better because of it. Carlisle is poison and even if the rest of the family apologizes and he lets them back in, he needs to still keep away from Carlisle. He has never done anything BUT play head games and he never will stop. He's not worthy of the title 'father'.
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31
Oh no...she's pregnant. It's to early for that. :( Much more dirtiness needs to come before that! I LOVE dirty Edward. He's so fucking hot.
I really don't think he should be going to dinner. Jasper and Emmett need to be coming to Edward and making an apology, not the other way around. Show a little remorse assholes. As far as Bella feeling bad about cutting the girls out, they were just as complicit as the men.
Date: 15 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32
I LOVED LOVED LOVED the chapter! Love the angst and Edward getting knocked down a peg or two. Honestly, Bella should tell Edward to fuck off about the job too. She shouldn't have to go in and see him everyday. He can easily call in a temp. He just wants and excuse to see her. I'm glad Carlisle punched him in the face, it was most satisfying. Bella is right, she really needs to learn to live on her own and who she is before she should get married. Edward also has some issues of his own to work over. Like his jealousy and only allowing her to see family. He can have a Dominant relationship and still control things, just in a way that is healthy and not driven out of insecurity. I love that this is going this direction, it's so different than most fics when Bella gets pregnant. Can't wait for the next chapter. :)
Date: 21 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34
Oh it would take a whole hell of a lot more than one dinner and an apology to get me back. She's right, he all but called her a whore. It's great she's working on herself but he needs to be working on himself too. If she goes back now she'd be entering into the exact same situation. Edward needs to work on his insecurity and trust issues that stem from his father/family. Unless I saw serious work going on in that aspect I would never get back with him. Bella owes it not only to herself, but to her child as well. Especially if that child is a girl. She can't teach that girl to respect herself if she doesn't lead by example. Not to mention little girls have a tendency to date men that are like their fathers so Edward needs to be the best man he can be.
Also, I think she should have insisted on a hyphenated last name. They aren't married so he doesn't get the honor of having that sole heir feeling. Not to mention it's practical. When my mom got remarried she had a bitch of a time while I was in school and she'd call or write me notes because we had different last names. I always had to explain that yes, she's my real mom.
As far as updates go...I think you should update again this week AND in two weeks. =D What can I say, I love your stories and I'm greedy for them. <3
Date: 28 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35
I must be a sadist but I'm enjoying Edwards suffering. He so deserves it. I'm glad she hasn't been making it easy on him. So how long has it been since she left him until now? I'm not quite clear on how long it's been. Somewhere between 1-3 months, right? She hasn't really had 'Bella' time to learn now to be on her own yet. She's also going to be pretty pissed when she finds out Emmett owns the building. Edward really shown own up to that eventually, because that's pretty messed up too. Not to mention, while Edward might be sorry, he still has some of his own issues to work on. Like his jealousy and insecurity.
So how long will you be gone for my sweet? I shall miss you! Your story is my favorite and it breaks my heart to think of going without iti!
Author's Response:
thanks for the review! i will be gone for over a week. i will post some time after the 10th!
Date: 15 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36
She let them all off to easy with the apartment and bills thing. Way to easy. They all conspired and went behind her back. That shows deception, a lack of trust and respect. She needed to feel secure that she could survive on her own and they stole that away from her. They obviously didn't listen to her when she told them all that.
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37
Should she go to Sunday dinner? Hell no. I think I'm going to have to take the exit ramp from this story. I find Bella disappointing and offensive. I hope Charliegh grows up to be a stronger woman than her mother.
Edward is an Incubus, Obsessed with an impending war with the Volturi Coven. Although he is powerful, he isn't powerful enough to take over their reign by himself. He cultivates a plan secretly using women around the world a to carry his seed, breeding hybrid warriors, that will train and aid him in his quest to over-throw Volterra. The time is comming near to take the vampire community by storm, yet the one thing he can not continue with-out, is a male heir. He will stop at nothing to find a vessel strong enough to bear his son, Unfortunately for Bella.....she just may be the one....
Warning! Contains: Very graffic content. Sex, Violence, Murder, Blood and Guts,Somnophilia,Biastophilia,Extreme Darkward and other characters, Morbidness.
If you have some sort of hero complex and can't deal with the above issues, don't read this, keep it moving, find another fic.
Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Horror
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 23561 Read Count: 15645
Date: 15 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Systematic Manipulation of De Population
Wow Mania is scary as fuck! And Edward is cold...breaking his daughters arm to each a lesson? Damn. I understand those girls probably need a really heavy hand to teach them given their strength and lack of morals but that seems pretty severe. What's the healing rate on hybrids? How many girls does he have? Ten? Do we get to know their names? Edward made a comment about being more protective of them than his own life as well as this, "Her quick thinking only made my love for her soar". Does he say/do this out of a paternal feeling? Does he really love Mania is it all driven by his purpose to kill the Volturi and turn humans into domesticated cattle? Just wondering if he's actually feeling this and is capable of these emotions or if it's all about accomplishing his goal.
I forget how evil you are with the slow burn! You did the same thing in LAH with it taking forever for him to get to Bella. Not that it matters, you always seem to get me addicted to your story before the end of the first paragraph anyway. =P
Author's Response:
Yeah she is. I did a bit of foreshadowing about her though. She would be the most powerful, but because her power is so strong she really can't seem to control the effect it has on her. So keres is technically the strongest.
Keres is the rebel of the group. she knows she strong, Had Edward hust spoke words it would've happened again. Plus his daughters are technically strong that him gift wise, so he can't be seen as weak, or they'd run all over him.
Naw look at it from a view point of Edward. He scratched her heart in the first chapter I think for licking blood off the floor if i'm correct. She disobeyed him once more. Desperate times lmao. he had a point to prove.
The healing rate...you'll see lol
Yeah all together. but you'll only meant about 7 to be honest.
I always post names in either the authors note at the beggining or end.
Yes. He is a father. They are his flesh and blood, so he does love them in his own way. But he was mainly refering to the Mania's growth and devotion to him in her first battle. she didn't hesitate to protect her father. Not only was she strong, but she followed his training to the T. That's like if a parent is a musician and the child enters a contest and walks out on stage and kicks ass. "Proud parent moment" the kid followed instructions and training. No it's not driving by his drive to fuck up the volturi. Their main purpose of being concieved was to fuck up the volturi but he does have paternal love for them. he's capable of love but it's in his own way.
Oh yeah. it's going to be a minute befor eyou hear from bella lmao! abotu two more chapters. awww how sweet thanks for reviewing babes. by the way what is ur twitter name? do owe talk? lmao
Date: 15 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Of Blood And Ice
LOVING IT!!! I love how you are always unafraid to go to the darker places and don't hold back. I can't believed I missed this story. I found it when I was looking for your profile so I could contact you about that rec earlier tonight and I'm sooo fucking glad I did. Edward sounds like an evil bastard. Will we be seeing any of the other Cullens? Can't wait until he meets up with Bella.
Author's Response:
lmao, yeah i just have this thing abotu fandom being realy pansied sometimes when it comes to darker fics. We call em darkfics for those who enjoy horror so why not go the distance and make a true horror graphic? Yes you will see the cullens. but.. it won't really be how you think it will. thanks for reviewing babes
Bella Swan's life changed the day she found her husband in bed with another woman. A chance meeting at the gym changes her life forever. This is the journey of how Bella ugly duckling became a Swan. AH
First few chapters need beta'd but later chapters are beta'd, still working on the beginning.
image from gossipteen.com no infringement intended.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, To Read, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 120408 Read Count: 138749
Date: 25 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
I'm sorry, but I have to bail on this story. Bella is just...I don't know how to put it nicely, she's just to stupid for my tastes and to much of a door mat push over. I'm sorry, but:
"This is were the problem would lie. I didn't want to press charges on him. Sure, I was upset by what he did, but in some messed up way I understood. He thought he was protecting me from Edward. He knew what Tanya did to him and assumed Edward was the same with me. But most importantly he led me to my father and for that I would always be grateful. I was quiet too long to suit Edward so he pinched my thigh."
I mean, really? He had nothing to do with bring her her father. Yes, his actions may have lead to that but it's nothing he should be lauded over. It was a side effect of his actions, nothing more. He deserves no credit, accolade or mercy for it. And she understands why he did it? I mean come on. He was staling her WELL before he kidnapped her, he obviously has mental issues. This wasn't just about protecting her or he wouldn't have been STALKING her before hand. Not to mention there are a MILLION ways he could have handled the situation if he was worried for her that don't amount to a fucking FELONY kidnapping. I mean, come on...
Edward isn't that bright either. He's all, "I'm still a Dom and if it doesn't effect our marriage my descision goes" and then he fucking buckles on the Jacob thing without even a discussion on it? Without even pointing out the horrific flaws in her logic? Same thing with Carmen. He should have ordered Claire in the house immediately. She's a kid. Yes, listen to her opinion but it doesn't mean you go with it. She's not equipped to make fair judgements when it comes to her mother. Edward should have told Carmen no if for no other reason than it's OBVIOUS she hasn't learned her lesson. Instead of calling Edward to talk abou things she MANIPULATED the situation to where she showed up when Edward wasn't home and Claire was just getting off the bus. People who have learned their lesson and want to work on things don't manipulate their child, exhusband and his current ex-wife into seeing the abused child. But again, Edward just goes with it and Bella just stood there being horny. She should have told Claire to go inside immediately for them to wait for her father to get home before they talked to her mother.
I'm to frustrated and appalled at them to go on with the story, I'm sorry.
Author's Response:
Well, I don't really know what to say. I apperciate you honesty. The Jacob issue is resolved next chapter. Edward and Bella are both very immature in someways, but they will get better as time goes on. Hope you change your mind, but honestly it's no sweat off my back if you don't. Life goes on, not everyone will like my story and I'm cool with that. Thanks for trying it out.
Date: 15 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 1: From rock bottom to beautiful horizon
I love BDSM stories! I'm reading your Mr. Cullen story as well and I love how in both of them there isn't a lot of pissy farting around between the two of them before they get together. We get to jump to the meat and potatoes of the story! :)
Date: 07 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
“Level with me, Edward, is what Jacob said true, are you a Dominate?” Charlie asked. I couldn't lie to him. I just hoped he'd let me explain."
I believe the word you are looking for is "Dominant". That is the correct term in the lifestyle. The word you are using is a verb, as in "we are going to dominate the competition."
Author's Response:
I guess, it slipped by both my beta and myself. I do know which would it should be. Thanks for pointing it out my typo.
Alice has had a vision that the new girl at Forks High will change the Cullens' lives. But Rosalie's sharp eyes catch evidence of abuse on Bella Swan, and she vows to find out just what's going on with the quiet girl. Eventually she and Edward hatch a plan to keep Bella safe, which might endanger the close-knit ties of the Cullen family. Possessive Edward and Big Sister Rosalie. Banner by the amazing JavaMasta!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: I Whitlock's read , Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 319577 Read Count: 124870
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
I disagree that they let her go. No, they can't keep her against her will but they should have made her wait until everyone got back. And called the others as soon as they knew Bella was planning on running. They also should have taken her old cell phone so she didn't have to have Charlie harrass her.
Also, I have a sneaking suspicion that the 'little one' Charlie threatened to hurt is Bellas son. I'd say maybe a brother but with how possessive Charlie is I can't imagine him having a kid he had no control of.
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
Hah! I knew eveyone would cheat and get her gifts! :) I love the necklace, so pretty. I really hope she doesn't listen to Charlies message and go back to him out of fear. Or that she tries to marry Jacob to save the Cullens or something stupid. Listen to them Bella!
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
ZOMG!!! Sooo fucking sweet! This was probably the longest, drawn out lemon I've ever read and it was absolutely perfect! And they didn't even do that much! You paced it perfectly for what she needed in this situation. I loved hearing Edwards thoughts as it happened as well. :)
I'll try to be better about reviewing as I read. I realized I only seem to review if I have a question. It seems I'm to addicted to the story and want to fly to the next chapter as fast as possible and that's not fair to you. I'll try to be more mindful of that. <3
Date: 23 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Wait...I'm confused. Why didn't Emmett and Rose tell Carlisle that they knew Charlie was the one hurting her? That they had it confirmed by Jacob? That they even talked to him about it at all?
And why isn't Alice shocked by the fact Bella is being hurt? She didn't have any knowledge about it before this.
Date: 23 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Why don't they just tell her that Charlie can't physically harm them? They're all cool with sharing their powers, strength and speed with her yet everytime she's expressed her fear of them being hurt they all just chuckle and keep their mouths shut. That is something that would actually be helpful to share with her and would probably make it more likely that she'll feel comfortable staying as she wont thing she's putting them in danger.
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
He might not be a large part of this story but I really hope by the end of this his stupid fucking face realizes what he's let Bella go through all these years! >:( Ignoring abuse is just about as bad as causing the abuse in my eyes.
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28
Glad Bella is finally bouncing back. And it sucks how often court cases can be pushed back. So annoying.
Ugh...yeah, not a fan of the baby. Didn't like it in the original Twilight books or other fanfics either. :(
Date: 24 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29
I absolutely LOVE the Last Unicorn! It was one of my favorite books/movies as a kid! Awesome that you included it here. :)
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37
i can't wait for the trail! And I totally 100% agree with the lack of Holidayness. I'm not a fan of Holiday scenes. They are kinda boring and just seem to be time wasters that take away from the regular story/plot that you are itching to get to so I totally support your choice!
I can't believe I'm done already! I've done nothing but binge on your story the last two days! Sorry I haven't been better at reviewing but I'm loving the story! Can't wait for the next update. :)
Author's Response:
You've been an AMAZING reviewer! I can't believe the thought you put into your responses, even when you were questioning things (lol!) Thank you so much!
Date: 27 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38
"One last note: the family court hearing ended up being waaaay too long for one chapter, so it's broken up into two."
Gaaah, you just shouldn't have told me. Now I'm all jonesing and contemplating coming over to break into your house to steal your computer. You better post it before I find out where you life! ;) Also, there is no such things as a 'too long of a chapter' I say!
I can't believe that bitch Renee showed up! And that's she's still defending Charlie! I'm surprised she didn't experience abuse by him given his nature. How does she explain having a pregnant daughter and NOT NOTICING IT! How is Charlie going to explain who the father is and then not doing anything about it? Even if Bella had actually walzted into the room in her birthday suit and propositioned him she was still a frickin' minor and that's statutory rape!
Author's Response:
Too funny! (I live in NE btw ;-) ) No, Renee didn't get abused by Charlie, physically anyway, though I can't imagine he was very nice to her. Edward will be able to explain what was going on in their heads in the next chapter. Thanks so much, sweets!
Date: 30 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Ah, I live on 157th and Division in SE but I work on NE 20th and Everett. I might have to put on my ninja gear and come find that computer! It would be your own fault really for writing such an addictive damn story!
I'm waaay interested to hear what was going on in their heads. Especially when Edward had his outburst. Something tells me Charlie doesn't want to play the 'MINE' game with Edward when it comes to Bella. lol
Sooo happy things went their way. Are you going to continue the story through the criminal trial? I'd really love to see how that all plays out. Sooo many people deserve their comeuppance. Charlie, Renee, Frank Zwhatever. Hell, I even want to see Jacob get a bit of backlash for ignoring it and downplaying what was happening. He and Billy both. Ignoring abuse is the same as condoning it to me. I also hope the other guys that came with Frank on the second night and raped Bella get thrown in jail too. How can she be sure that Frank was the father when she was raped by more than one person that weekend? Is it because Mason looks like him?
Author's Response:
Lol, you'd be horrified if you saw the state of my computer! I'm hard on my electronics.
*snicker* I'd like to see Charlie *try* to best Edward in that sort of situation. Methinks he'd get a rude awakening.
Yes, I'm going to continue this story for a while yet. Unlike with Wisp, I *do* know what I want the end to look like. At least one more trial, Bella's transformation, the baby... I know what happens to Frank and Jacob, but not Charlie quite yet. I keep changing my mind, lol! Thanks again for the great review!
On a far distant planet, Bella and Edward find love. A true love in a modern society that steps back into the recesses of time,
where dominant males seek out submissive females to complete their households.
No vampires, but plenty of aliens. This story includes:
Edward/Bella, Carlisle/Esme, Jasper/Alice, Emmett/Rosalie, Marcus/Didyme and the majority of characters that are involved in the original series.
AU, in-cannon, lemons, E/B, A/J, R/E, C/E
Story Blog: http://planet-twilight.blogspot.com/
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance, Sci-Fi, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, My Favorite Stories, Brooklyn - to read
Chapters: 65 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 174480 Read Count: 187900
Date: 09 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Binding Ceremony
I'm confused as to how they can consider their mates slaves, yet still claim to love an honor them. You can't honor someone while keeping them prisoner. If the girls had willingly gave up their lives to live as their mates slaves, that would be one thing, but this was all done against their will.
"“Do you understand and agree to everything that Edward has said today?” Carlisle asked."
Does this question really matter? They don't seem to honestly get a choice. What if the girls said no? Do they then move on to the nonconsensual rape ceremony?
Date: 09 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 10: Edward's Rape
So the rape of a man is a big deal, but the rape of a human woman to force her to bond when she doesn't want to is a-okay? They don't see how she'll feel violated as well? And if she doesn't due to whatever is in their expulsions, that the only reason she's not mentally broken is because they've essentially drugged/brainwashed her?
Date: 09 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 9: Intro to the Denali's, Tanya's Seduction
"So Rosalie was slowly starting to realize that life on Earth would not have been peaches and cream if she had remained there, instead of being extracted."
Except the fact she'd still have her family that loved her and that she loved in return. She'd also still have her freedom and ability to follow her dreams. You make her seem shallow and vain, that economic hardship was all it took to give all that up.
I don't mind Dominant men and submissive women, I enjoy it a great deal. However I do not like the non-consensuality of all this. These women have been kidnapped and sold like cattle plain and simple. To the point the men see no problem with raping a women to try to force a bond with them. I can't get behind that and it bothers me Bella and Alice just take it in stride. Even if their lives on Earth were poor, that doesn't mean they should be condoning what is happening. I'm sure there were other girls taken that had perfectly wonderful lives.
Date: 19 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Movie, Music, Emmett's and Rosalie's House, Claiming Bella
"“Come on, let's go have a good soak in the tub; and dinner is on me tonight. Tell me what you are hungry for, and I will order in for us. I am still not ready to get you out in public just yet; it is still too soon,” he said."
Is this because he thinks she might run still or because he's just not ready to share her yet?
Date: 21 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 57: Family Meeting, Talks, Lil' Lovin'
Can you explain a bit about a mans relationship with his breeder? Does he love her as his mate? Does he scent her as well? Does he have sexual relations with her even if not trying to get pregnant? Does she have to play second fiddle to the mans first mate? Is the breeder even considered a mate at all? Just wanting more information.
Date: 21 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 58: Change of Plans and Tour of Homes
""I don't know, I just wanted her to stay with the family. I see Jasper and I both becoming attached to her and not wanting her to leave. But if she finds a mate, she will want to live with him and she will leave us. The kids will be attached to her too and I didn't want to see them unhappy," she sniffled out."
This is pretty selfish of her. She deserves to have a mate of her own. Who is she to bar a woman from her own happiness to be a mans second choice in life.
'The liberties he assumes with my body should enrage me, anger me beyond my own sanity. But it's just not that simple.' Encounters born of need. Consequences neither saw coming. Guard your hearts. Not the ExB you're used to.
Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites, Fics to Read, I Whitlock's read , Ageise02 WIP Reads, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 104224 Read Count: 143214
Date: 10 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14
*sigh* I'm torn. He so deserves every bit of her cold shoulder however as a greedy reader I sooo want them to hurry it up!
Date: 06 May 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12
Oh you naughty, naughty bitch. 5 years later AND an evil cliffhanger? I hope you have another update coming out soon or I might have to come find you and....buy you coffee and beg, I don't know but I'll think of something!
If Roughie isn't so much of a dick anymore and wants to apologize or whatever, please tell me he's still Roughie and Dom in the bedroom? It might break my heart if he's not. He can be nicer and still be a naughty Dom God in the bedroom! Don't break my heart Jada!
Date: 23 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11
Hi. I reviewed this chapter over on FF.net but am leaving this here to let you know I followed you over here! <3
*clicks favorite button*
Update soon before I spank you! Wait...that wont make you work any faster will it? ;)
Date: 07 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18
Gaaaah progress is so slow. Just fuck already! Okay, I understand they have to go slow because they are both completely damaged people but man.
"I'm relieved when he doesn't try to pull my chair out for me. Opening doors, pulling out chairs, removing & putting on your coat for you? I've never really understood those particular chivalries. My hands aren't painted on. I can do it myself."
It's called being polite Bella!
Edward's life is changed when he and his family move to the small town of Forks, Washington. Being a teacher as a vampire proves to be a bit more difficult than he'd once imagined. Join Edward and the gang as they move to this new town and meet the chief of police's lovely daughter that will forever affect their lives.
Disclaimer: I Do not own Twilight or it's Characters.
Beta'ed by RAH70890
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance, Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 107008 Read Count: 67314
Date: 14 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
You know, the age of consent in Washington is 16, not 18. It wouldn't be illegal for Bella and Edward to have sex. Just saying!
Date: 13 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
"I would never condone my seventeen year old dating a 20 or 23 year old, but this is supernatural and Edward and the Cullen's live a little above the law. "
I don't see a problem with it. If he's 20 and she's 17 that's only 3 years AND they'd have been in high school together. She's have been a sophomore when he was a senior. Would you have had a problem with them dating then? If they had, should they have broken up just because he hit the government mandated 18 years old legal adult age? Not to mention in several states the legal age to date someone is 17, some places as young as 15. Every state is different. They are all just made up numbers and if two people meet and are mature then I don't see the problem.
Him being her teacher on the other hand can pose some issues though due to the position of authority. But I'm a total submissive and find that hot so don't listen to me. ;)
Loving the story, can't wait to read the rest of it! :)
Date: 07 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
"but with Rebekah, who is also a seer, she had the ability to block other seers."
When did that happen? Was it mentioned before she was a seer? It's weird it seems to just come up now and odd that she can block other seers.
Author's Response:
I'm not one hundered percent, since it's been a long time since I wrote this story, but I'm almost positive I said she had visions at some point around her first meeting the family. I may not have, but this may have been the chapter that her gifts were discussed with everyone. THis is an ExB story so I may not have brought it up until it actually possed a problem. I'll have to go back and reread and find out. I'm always trying to make my stories better.
THanks for reading.
Edward wins more than he bargained for at what was supposed to be a friendly poker game. AH.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 63 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 304154 Read Count: 221078
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
AAaaand I'm officially addicted to another one of your stories. :) I'm a student at Portland State too, perhaps we've even passed each other at school. I really enjoyed Finding Bella and was sad it was abandoned. This is filling in that hole. Please don't abandon this one like that other author! ;)
How in the world did James forget he had a girl in the back of the truck? Sooo lucky for Bella!
Author's Response:
Jeez, you and your reviews! That's dedication, I have to say. :) If you read the backstory, I think it answers the question as to how James forgot her. I have no plans to abandon it, but I'm sure plenty of authors have said that about plenty of stories. :-/
Sweet, another Portlander! I got my master's from PSU and I work there now. I enjoy it. :)
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
"It's unethical to experiment on children," Edward said, holding Wisp carefully against him and trying not to feel irritation at Rosalie for being Rosalie. "No one would put a newborn in a room for years with no human contact, just to see what would happen."
Unfortuantely crap like this did happen back in the day. :( Look up the Baby Albert experiements. So fucked up. What makes me sad is that there are actually people out there who do this to others. There are women and girls enslaved all over the workd. If there is a god, there is a special place in hell for the people who do this to othes. :(
And I love that he calls her Wisp. It makes me think of Rainbow Bright. :)
Author's Response:
*squeals* You got the Rainbow Brite reference! I didn't purposely do it, it was only after I had written about...five chapters, I guess?...that I made the connection in my head. Now RB is the background on my twitter feed, it kinda feels like an inside joke ;-)
thanks for the review!
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
That was a beautiful and sad scene in the bathroom with Alice. It's beautiful Alice is comfortable enough in her womanhood and self to allow her to do that. I wonder if she really has never seen a woman before or if it's something she's repressed as well. I hope Edward gets to keep her!
Author's Response:
Thanks, sweets! I've been an absolute fail at review replies, but I'm working on it!
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
I really hope that Dr. Lawson gets some comeuppance. >:(
Author's Response:
Hmm...idhk. But I don't think we're gonna see her again, either.
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
I'm not worried about romance or lemons. I think you are doing wonderfully with the story so far and I agree that if it comes, it needs to not be for awhile. I know anything can happen in a fictional world, and that's the justification a lot of authors use, but things still need to be rooted a bit in real life to be believable or it takes your head out of the story. I can't tell you how many 'crazy Edward is in love with Bella stories so he abducts her' stories I've read where within a day she's all sympathetic to him and wanting to heal and love him. I mean, I could see getting to that point eventually if it's written well but to do it so fast is beyond unrealistic and makes me unable to read. So I totally agree with how slow you are going. It would be nice for her to get to that point though, if for no other reason than it means she's better and healed/healing!
Author's Response:
Glad you're not worried about the romance aspect! There's been lots of debate about it, lol! Definitely it won't be for a while, if it happens. I need that dose of realism, especially in a story that isn't just fluff. Thanks for the insight, and the review!
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
I think Edward is already falling a little in love with her. I don't think that's bad or pervy. She's obviously a woman and he can see intellegence behind her eyes. Love can be pure and honest without getting gross. While I'd be find either way I wouldn't mind a slow burn or them eventually finding each other. Her discovering her womanhood and what that means. Seeing how it can be a powerful strength instead of it being used against her. I can't think of a better partner for her than Edward once she realizes what that all is. He is Wisperward afterall! :)
Okay, so now that I'm addicted to two of your stories I'm going to have to go digging into your other stories. I've never read any Glee fanfic but I do like the pairing of Rachel and Jesse so maybe I'll try one of those. Or maybe the Wisp back story. I'm totally a back of the book peeker! ;)
Author's Response:
Interesting comment. Idk if Edward's falling in love yet, though I'll def. agree that there's emotion there. My goal is to keep it as non-pervy as possible! Like I said, I'm happy to play around the edges of squickiness, but I really can't write noncon as romance, even though I know others are fine with it.
So happy you're enjoying this! Just beware if you try the Wisp backstory!
Date: 03 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
""Glad I caught you." Emmett sounded breathless. "James has agreed to deal.""
Damn you and your cliffhangers!!! *shakes fist*
I'm sooo interested in what that bastard has to say. Thursday can't get here fast enough! May the editing gods smile on you and you finish fast! :) And I love the kitten. Oh please oh please name it Twink!
And do you participate in Roller Derby? My boyfriend and I try to catch a few bouts a year when we have time and money.
Author's Response:
I don't mean to hang people from cliffs! It just sorta happens? Lol, i thought about naming the kitten Twink, but that word has a different connotation in some groups... No, I don't play roller derby (I am clumsier than poor canon Bella), but a lot of my friends do, and I'm usually there to support them. :)
Date: 05 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
"The cat really needed a name. It was sweet that Alice thought they should name it, but realistically Wisp was far from being capable of something like that."
You know what that kittens name must be! ;) Come on, Alice seems like a Rainbow Brite gal!
I really really hope Emmett and the cops are able to go all the way down the line. From James to Felix to the Doctor to the Priest and back to her father. All those assholes deserve a special, dark hole in jail. I really hope they all are made someones bitch in prison. I also hope James gets a wake up call about just how wrong what he did was. It would have been awesome if the prosecutor was a woman. But he might not have talked to her. But it would be cool if another DA could work on the case that was a woman.
Really love Wisp and the kitten. Art and animal therapy have been used for years to help people. I think they can really help her grow and come out of her shell. I know Edward doesn't want to push her and right this very moment that might be right, but eventually he'll have to. She can't stay like that forever if there is the potential for her to reclaim what she's lost. And Edward has so fallen in love with her. It's such a beautiful, pure love. Based on humanity and basic human goodness. Whether it grow into something more than that remains to be seen, but Wisp is very lucky. Like I said before, I hope that it can grow and evolve into something more so that Wisp has the chance to claim and own her womanhood and her sexuality. How those are all strengths and can be used at her own will and not taken and used against her. Whether she ends up with Edward in that capacity or not, I hope she finds it. Although obviously we all want it to be Edward due to the fact it's Edward and Bella, but I can't imagine anyone else coming close to understanding what she's been through and how she'll grow like Edward will. It kind of reminds me a bit of how SM writes the werewolf imprinting. You fall completely in love with your imprint but you are exactly what they need at that moment in their live. Be it a friend, a brother or a lover. Edward would be willing to be exactly what she needs in whatever form that need takes.Author's Response:
Jeez, you wrote me an essay!
Twink would be an excellent name, but IDK...the term is also a derogatory one in gay male culture, and I don't want people to go there.
I have to confess that I don't outline my stories before I write...with this one in particular the plot bunny was totally just 'Edward finds scared girl in truck' and I'm kind of discovering things right along with you guys. I usually have an ending in mind, but for this one I don't even have that. There's just too much we don't know about her yet, you know? I don't know if there will be romance for them, or how it might happen, just that she deserves a happy ending of some sort. So while I, too, hope that they're able to trace her past all the way back to the beginning (especially since I think she might like to know something about her mother at some point), I don't know when/if/how it's going to happen yet.
It's funny that you mention a female prosecutor. I actually thought about doing that, but I too was afraid James wouldn't talk to her, wouldn't take her seriously.
Lol, now you sound like Carlisle, saying that they'll eventually have to push her! I can envision that there will be some friction between him and Edward about that. I so want her to be able to become a functioning, independent person again...we'll just have to see. Thanks for the review!
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
Poor Wisp. :( It seems like Edward is getting through a teeny tiny bit. I think it will help more now that he understands more about what she's been through.
I think a kitten is better than a puppy anyway as a cat can look after itself more whereas a dog needs much more attention and supervision so I think the initial choice was good and would be better in the long run.
And I understand the term twink can be a derogetory reference but I think if you pair it with the Rainbow Brite fact no one will take it that way. I believe most people who read fanfics are from that era anyway, in my experience. We're old pervs! ;)