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Bio:
Hi all, Thanks for taking the time to visit this page, and coming to find out a bit more about me. I live in Australia. I am over the age of 35, and a divorcee. I don't have any children but I do have three nieces, that I adore, and occasionally look after. I have two dogs Sunny and Ava. Sunny is a spoilt Pomeranian and Ava is a Siberian Husky, and you could say they are my children. I love to read and now giving writing a go. My favourite genre are Crime and Romance. Some of my favourite authors are Kathy Reichs, Janet Evanovich, Jane Austin, Matthew Reilly, James Patterson, Patricial Cormwell, John Grisham, Charlaine Harris, Ruth Rendell, Lynda La Plante, Harlan Coben, John Grisham, J. R. Ward, Michael Connelly, Dan Brown, Kyle Mills, Sara Gruen, and Ian Rakin. You can also find me on FFnet. http://www.fanfiction.net/~floramile Thanks
Bella Swan is an aspiring sports writer and her first big assignment is to interview the league's biggest, not to mention hottest, quarterback. Will Edward Cullen school her in the rules of the game or will she teach him a thing or two? Rated NC-17 for language, lemons. An entry in The Sport of Love contest.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, Bella's Must Reads!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 351776 Read Count: 189019
Date: 09 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 Calling An Audible
ohh good to see Bella is okay. I do have to say that the football commentary is a little boring, but I have a reason, it is only because I don't understand it and I am Australian. It would be the same for you is I spoke about Rugby Union or AFL. But I just skim it and move on.
But wonderful chapter apart form that.
Author's Response:
Bella's just fine, always!
Sorry you don't care for the football, but for me, it's a huge part of the story since it's what they both love and work with.
Thanks for the review, glad you liked everything but that.
Date: 22 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 Changing Fields
Wonderful chapter... loved it
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! Love writing this story :)
Date: 06 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 Gaining Ground
Yeah they got their first date.
What a beautiful one at that!
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you liked it! They did it up in style. My Edward's a good planner :)
Date: 12 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 Celebration Flag
Beautiful chapter, Esme and Carlisle are so funny, I love them like honey teenagers.
Loved crazy food Eating Emmett as well. Wonderful chapter and I cant wait to see what is going to happen on Christmas... I think you will have us on the ground rolling with laughter.
thanks you for the update.
Author's Response:
Haha so glad you liked it! They are horny teenagers, enjoying that empty nest!
Em and his food...his second love after his Rosie. Well, maybe third, cause QB is probably #2.
Christmas should be fun! We'll get there pretty soon :)
Thanks so much for the review! See you with more soon!
Date: 26 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36 Timeout
ohh so happy Esme is a-okay!
poor eddie boy acting like a child!
update soon!
Author's Response:
Yes she is! Edward is acting like a kid, but he's had a hard weekend as well. More soon, I promise!
Date: 04 May 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37 Fumble Recovery
Wonderful chapter, all in all, it is sorted out.. A little action on the field as well. I really hope no one was watching.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Things are good now. Field sex is always a good thing. I promise they weren't compromised!
Date: 07 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40 Roughing the Passer & His GF
Like you did not see that one comeing when he went to get wine. I am amazed that they did not pick up on it sooner.
Author's Response:
They were a little more concerned with what their parents might be doing at the moment.
Date: 08 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 45: Epilogue
Wonderful ending to an exciting story, I am glad that I let it go a while, I got to reading right to the end.
Loved every minute of it.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm very happy you've enjoyed it, Fiorella! I'll be posting a few more outtakes but yeah, main story is done!
Thanks for your kind words!
Amy
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Bella Swan is a 28 year old woman who is a narcotics detective for the Seattle Police Department. Bella is assigned to go undercover as a high school student to bring down a massive drug ring fronted by the elusive Drug Lord Aro Volturi. Bella soon finds herself falling for her English teacher Edward Masen...
Edward Masen is instantly attracted to this new student, but can't pursue a relationship with a young girl.
Will these two keep things in perspective or will their ethics be damned?
Based loosely on 21 Jumpstreet and Never Been Kissed
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, G8or Favor8s Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 191208 Read Count: 71569
Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I think I am going to enjoy this story. I think there is going to be some really funny parts.
Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
Ohhh they are both so fucked. I new it was going ot be a hoot of a story, I hope it stays that way.
Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Well it looks like everyone is in a large amount of trouble... I just hope Alice and Bella can hold it together.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Ah Oh, they have just crossed the invisable line that should not ever be crossed by a teacher or student.
Hmmm, someone better watch out.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Litter bug Edward.
Well I was wondering how it was going to come out and how pissed iw Alice going to be that Edward found out before Jasper. I hope Edward eases Jaspers mind as well.
Hmm actually that could be bad for Jasper, he might go nuts at his sister for not telling.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Ohh, James is getting interesting, I am more excited about reading that date than I am about Edward and Bella. I know this is a love stroy but I like crime as well.
I just hope you dont carry on to long with Edwards and Bella's date because I know that there is going to be more of them.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
Well they were bound to be found out. it is not like they were in private they were sitting on a terrace for everyone to see.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
Well I love a good cat fight and the one between these two was good, maybe add a little hair pulling and it would be excellent. he he kidding.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
Excellent Emmett to the rescue. But Edward is going to be pissed with Bella for getting beat up.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Wow, I did not see this one coming with Edward going on stake out with Emmett, they actually make a good team all that was missing was Jasper and then it would have been a party.
Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter12
Ohhh fuck bloody James always a spoil sport. Now he is definitely going to get himself killed.
Date: 21 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Ohh, it is good to see that they are on the same page.
I really hope they have some happiness soon. Will Bella not have to tell Rose on the update of the party and what James is black mailing her for.
I hope that Edward is not to pissed with her not going to the Gala. It is all getting interesting.
Dr Edward Cullen is a twenty-six year old single dad who is sexually frustrated until he meets his sister Alice's college roommate Bella Swan. Sparks fly over Thanksgiving weekend. Lemons. Collab with Robinated Cont of 1 shot for Ninapolitins DILF contest
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, Brooklyn - to read, luv2write finished reads, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 113225 Read Count: 106344
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
How Beautiful, what a wonderful story, I love them all. Even Bella's crazy parents.
Please update soon.
Date: 03 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
Yeah, I am glad she was a happy little girl in the end.
I was feeling sorry for these guys for all the hard work Edward had put into his daughter for her to just throw it all away (not being her fualt at all) it must be hard at that age to understand.
Kate really did do a number on her poor little heart and brain.
I really hope Edward get a few hours with Kate to really tell her what he feels and what he is going to do to her if she ever don's his door step again.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
Really, now Preeclampsia, cant this couple catch a break.
How the hell is Bella going to keep her stress levels down with a child that hates her and think she is taking her daddy away? I am going to bet on this one that in a few chapters Bella is going to have to deliver the baby early because of Emma and the stress from that.
Then she is going to feel even worse, to the point that she is not a good mother because she could not even carry her child safely to full term. Hmm I think I would rather a Mac truck run me over instead of having to deal with that.
But then again you could surprise me and go a totally different way all together, I can't wait to see where you take this now. You have me guessing all over the place.
Date: 06 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16
"I mean it wasn't that big of a deal. It's not like anything horrible would happen because of it." These are going to be Bella's famous last words... you wait and see you are going to have something up your sleve where Edward finds out she lied to him, to have a day interrupted.
I can see the writing on the wall. Big black letters. I really do hope that her stress levels come down a little, she has had to deal with so much, it is like every day is another heap added to the sh*t pile.
Wonderful chapter as always.
Date: 28 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
Ohh, I really do hope that Bella gets out of this funk, she really needs to be strong for Masen, and I think that Emma needs a bit of an attitude adjustment, this anger she is holding in is getting annoying. If this councillor is not working then get a friggen better one, because Bella and Masen is going to start taking a lot of Edwards time up as well.
A bit of friggen happiness would be nice for these two, even if it is for a chapter, I think the world has shitted on them enough, don't you!
Date: 18 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Okay, I have a feeling that this story is not going to get better anytime soon, there really does not seem to be any happiness for this family in the near future.
I dont see how a family can have so much bad luck? Get the girl into some sort of therapy, Edward is a doctor and I truly do not believe he would let it go a few weeks with out getting Bella some help of some sort.
As for Emma, maybe a good slap on the backside might fix her up now as well, the therapist does not seem to be working. Or at least give the girl some sort of discipline, she should not be talking to Bella like that, I understand she is young, but really I don't even let my niece get away with talk like that.
I know I am being a whiner this week, but I would just like to see one week go their way, they kind of deserve it. Life cant always be shitty like they have been having the last 5 -6 months.
Sequel to Lustful Awakings. When Bella wakes up from her coma with no memory of her life with Edward, Jasper, and Alice, will they be able to help her remember? Will she still want them if she does remember? Same pairings as in LA. NC-17
Banner by rpattz1990
Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Alice/Jasper/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, The Awakenings Saga
Chapters: 63 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 153264 Read Count: 159109
Date: 21 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
You probably think what I am about to say is a bit nasty but please don’t take it that way at all, I am just expressing how I feel about them but sometimes it comes out wrong so please forgive me if it does.
I have read both of your stories Lustful Awakenings and this one and I have to say it really does fall into fiction with a humungous capital F. I have enjoyed reading them so far even if it is mainly just sex, sex and more sex with a hint of overcoming ones sexuality and what someone in this sort of relationship would face. (Everyone to their own even if I do not agree. I am in no way shape or form to judge anyone’s beliefs or sexuality at all, I say if it make you happy and you are not harming / abusing anyone go for it, life is to short not to be happy.)
Yeah so the story is so farfetched when it comes to everyone being in this sort of relationship (The whole family). There are actually some really good messages behind it and I have left my comments till now so I was not telling you that “come on really like this would happen” because I know how hard it is to actually put yourself out there like you have. So I take my hat off to you for that.
Well I really can’t wait for the next chapter to see where you take this story especially with Bella now coming out of a coma and having to face the fact she is going to have to learn about the last 5 years of her life.
Not that I know what you are going to write and I would never tell you but I wonder how everyone would feel if Bella turned around and said she only wanted to be married to Edward and no one else, or how they would feel if she said she only wanted Alice not Edward or Jasper? Sorry the thought crossed my mind. I was just wondering.
Author's Response:
Thank you for letting me know how you feel. That's the great thing about Fiction is that it deosn't have to be real, and I will be the frist to admit that my two stories are farfetched and unbelievable but that the great thing about books. They can take you to a world of make believe and wishful thinking, like sparkling vampires :) anyway, thank you for reading my stories and taking the time to tell me what you think. I appreciate it because you didn't have to. Have a wonderful night:)
Date: 21 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Well I have to agree with Jasper at least she still has her humour, I think she would be screwed if she did not have that.
Author's Response:
Thanks:)
Date: 23 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
It brought a smile to my face all I could about was "screw the memories back into her" I was killing myself laughing.
Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
lol, thanks:) Glad I could help !
Bella is a student at UW who lives a routine, struggled life, but that changes when she meets Edward Cullen,CEO of his Company. How exactly do they meet? What happens when their lifes collide? Does Bella uncover Edwards darkest secrets or does Edward learn Bellas hidden truths first. D/S Material
Thanks to bjelaja for taking the time to make this awesome banner! (:
Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My All-Time Favorites
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 38146 Read Count: 76150
Date: 22 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
I noticed that on FF you are up to chapter 9. when will this one be updated to the same?
“We found her Chief Swan, she’s ALIVE! We found Isabella!" Alive? She had really survived the last tens years?
They said I was going home but where was home now?
OOC AU Dark themed you've been warned. No rape! But there is talk about slaves and abuse Bella x Edward
Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Suspense/Thriller
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 77399 Read Count: 33003
Date: 25 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
WOW, I think I like your way better!
Thank you for the update!
After a terrible shipwreck in the Mediterranean Sea, Isabella Swan, marquise de Courville, her two best friends and her loyal servants are rescued, but only to become slaves and serve the Volturi brothers, three men with very dark desires. All human. Domward.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Historical
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Finished, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 45 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 201090 Read Count: 184002
Date: 10 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Bella's punishment
I dont know if this story is for me, but I am going to do it in parts. I think I have read as I can at the moment and I really hope that the Cullen's help the girls out of this. I am not sure if they could not I could read it any longer.
The Volturi sound like assess and I think I would like to punish them on behalf of the ladies. I shall be back to read some more soon.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
I write happy endings and I don't like angst or drama, and yes, the girls will have their revenge fair and square.
After a night of celebration in Vegas, Bella finds herself married to the man who made her life a living hell for seven years. Follow her as she finds true love where she least expected it!
AU/AU OCC. Canon pairing. Rated M for future lemons.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Misstoria's Stories to Read, My favs past present and future , Kit's Must Reads!
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 315953 Read Count: 297714
Date: 20 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 45: Epilogue nr 1
Hmmm, you have in wondering what you could put in the next couple of chapter, it just seems so complete, that these two have made it through the hard times and come out on top.
I cant wait to read.
Love this chapter like all the rest.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
It is complete, but I just wanted a few more things in there. The reunion being one of them. I think that's a big important thing..
xx
Gelix
Date: 07 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 10: The Past
When you started talking about ALS I was wondering if it was a Motor Neuron Disease and then you classified this in the bottom. I have to say that I started crying in this chapter a good family friend has just been told she has it and only has 3 - 5 years to live.
It has hit us all hard as she is such a lively person and does so much good in her community with fundraising for different charities. It make me wonder sometimes why is it always the good people and then I take that back because in the end he has a purpose.
Thank you for this wonderful story
Author's Response:
I'm so sorry about your friend.. It's never easy to deal with things like that.
xx
Gelix
Date: 20 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Surprise
Quote: "Because I don't want you to see any of my wobbly bits."
Excellent chapter, love it again. I am a bit confused over the dream but I am sure it will be revealed in no time.
Date: 18 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Best birthday ever
"I never fully understood that expression, but no, I'm not 'shitting' you," I answered
loved the chapter as always
Date: 15 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 40: Coming Home
Excellent chatper, it is good to see that they have settled.
My guess with Alice is that she either cant get preggers or really does not want to.
Date: 21 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 41: On our own
Got to love a little smut.
I like how these two are coping. I was worried that Bella would freak.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you! :)
xx
Gelix
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 43: Therapy
I love how these two have grown over this story, I know they still have a long way to go. I am glad that Bella is not angry with him anymore about the past.
It is good to see that they can leave it there, not a lot of people can.
I hope your first day at work went smoothly and you have settled in.
Cant wait for the next chapter.
Fiorella
Date: 13 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Alone Time
Wonderful chapter as always, loved the lemon.
Fiorella
Edroar the Angry Lion frightens all the girls and boys at Cullen Publishing with his loud roar. Will his new massage therapist Bella Swan run away like all the rest, or can she tame this savage beast? AH/AU OOC
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 134649 Read Count: 25372
Date: 11 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 Hips Don't Lie
ohhh, i was enjoying your story so much that I got to the end of this chapter and there is no 'next' to click on to. sooo upset, I have run out of chapters.
Love this story and I really can't wait for more to come. I just hope you don't take months in between chapters.
Regards
Fiorella
Bella Swan is in for the shock of her life when Edward Cullen comes back into her life 7 years after graduation. Can the scars from her past be healed by the reclusive musician or will she shut him out like she has everyone else since the fateful accident four years ago.
Thanks to evilangel813 for my beautiful banner!!
TRIBE won The Emerging Swan Award!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 124446 Read Count: 34252
Date: 18 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 20: At Last
Wow, beautiful story.
I loved every moment of it. I am pimping this story out on People Like Us this week, so I hope that is okay.
I know I go to the story late but I love the fact that I dont have to wait for updates. Thank you for a wonderful story.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Aw - thanks. Your review made my day. Yes, you can pimp the story out. It's also on FF and Twilighted - just in case someone has an account on either of those sites & not this one.
Thanks again!!
After finding a child abandoned on the streets of Seattle, Bella Swan raises him as her own. What happens to their lives when his biological family is finally found?
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 145849 Read Count: 211602
Date: 07 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18
I started reading this story last night and I have to say you had me up until 4am and I had to be at work at 7am.
This story has torn my heart in two and I am going to rec it this week when my beta publishes her story.
I am going to warn all the readers to have a box of tissues on hand as I did not and I have to say my pillow will have tear stains on it. You have one amazing story on your hands and I am loving every minute of reading it.
I am just sorry it is not aready finished so I can just read it to the end... now I have to sit and wait like everyone else. he he he.
Thank you once again for writing such an amazing story.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your awesome review! We have teases up on the Parachute Blog every Monday, so check them out if you'd like! The next chapter should be up at midnight tonight! (I'm EST, btw!)
XoXo Shel
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Esme's eyes turned hard and her lips formed a frown.
"Well, then, I guess there's nothing left to say, is there?" She said in a cold voice.
"Esme, please. I'm not trying to hurt you," Bella replied softly. She had expected this reaction, but it still stung.
"It's a little too late for that now, Bella." Esme stood from her spot behind her desk and silently left the room.
Date: 20 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21
A wonderful chapter as always, I am glad that Tanya is there to help Bella through the meeting. I also wonder where Alice and Jasper are... I thought they were still with them?
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review! The next chapter should be up sometime this afternoon! I completely forgot how busy this week was in RL when I decided to do the double update, lol! But, no worries because it's off with Stratan the amazing now! Oh, and have you checked out the Blog teasers yet? Chapter 22's is up if you want that to tide you over! http://kitsushel.blogspot.com
You'll have to forgive me because Saturday is my birthday, lol. Isn't that a rule somewhere? ;-) Love you guys and I hope to get the chapter out to you soon! I haven't missed a Friday yet and I don't plan too!
<3
Shel
{PS ~ Alice and Jasper went back home in Chapter 19, but she'll be back soon!)
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"So, wait a minute," the younger woman interjected. "Jack's my nephew, but I have to go through you to talk to him? That's bullshit."
"Irina," Diane said in a warning tone.
"No, don't 'Irina' me, Mom! How can you be fine with her keeping Jack from us? You're just as bad as Victoria," she snarled at Bella.
Date: 23 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22
What a wonderful chapter.
You did well once again, cant wait to see what is going to happen next.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog! (kitsushel.blogspot.com)
A huge thank you to everyone who sent their birthday wishes and/or nominated Jack & Parachute in the Twilight Original Character Awards! If you'd like to jump up and nom an OC that you love, do eeet!
XoXo
Shel
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She watched her son carefully as he made his way downstairs, with Alice by his side. Something wasn't right. Sure, he was smiling and acting jovial, but there was something that was just off. Their gazes met and her worry increased exponentially. Jack's eyes were dull and missing his usual spark.
She pulled him quietly to the side and whispered in his ear.
"What's wrong, baby?"
He smiled genuinely at her and shook his head.
"Nothing, Mom. I'm just a little nervous."
She narrowed her eyes and nodded, although she wasn't convinced that he was telling the truth, but starting an argument right now wasn't really an option at the moment.
Date: 29 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23
Oh I wonder what is up with Jack, and I am interested to know how Edward and Bella are going to make this work??
I know all in good time.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review! The Monday teasers are up on the Parachute Blog! http://kitsushel.blogspot.com
Don't forget to nominate your favorite OC character and their story in the Twilight Original Character Awards! If you'd like to jump and nom an OC that you love, the link is up on the blog and on my profile! Keep Jack and Parachute in mind if you decide to head over there, but if not, we'll still love you anyway! =)
♥ Shel ♥
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"Are you bored, too, Mom?"
Bella huffed and sat back. "Yeah, so sue me."
Jack looked around the room and then back at his Mom. "How about we make a quick escape."
She cocked her head to the side. "Go on, you've intrigued Mother."
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 25
Ohhh the chapter are never long enough... I know I am impatient.
Love this chapter, I really do hope they put all the pieces together, especially Edward.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog now. (kitsushel.blogspot.com) One word for you: Charlie!
I know a lot of you get excited for updates and I want you to know that I get just as excited to post it for you, seriously! Your reviews make me smile, laugh and occasionally shed a tear. You guys mean so much to me and I thank you from the bottom of my heart for giving this story a chance in the first place!
Also of note, the Fandom for Preemies total has jumped to over $3,ooo raised for the March of Dimes! Freaking phenomenal! To those of who you won't be able to contribute, but still want to read the Jack Outtake, I'll be posting it on FFnet after Christmas sometime.
♥ Shel ♥
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Tanya sighed. "What happened after we left last night?"
Emmett's lips quirked, trying to fight a smile. "Mom sucker punched Victoria when she started running her mouth again."
"Esme!" Bella gasped and glanced at Esme, who looked proud of herself.
"What? She deserved it. I only regret not doing it sooner."
Bella shook her head and tried to hide her giddy smile at the thought of Victoria spread out on the ballroom floor.
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27
Okay, I understand why Bella did not tell him about taping the phone conversations, but how pissed would she be if Edward had that information and did not share it. I understand that she is keeping her cards close to her chest but I still find it unfair, disrespectful and untrustworthy.
It is time she grew up in that respect, if she wants her facts about Edward to come out she needs to ask the questions and stop pussy footing around. She expects honesty from Edward how about realising it is a two way street.
Apart from that I thought it was a perfect chapter, insight into everyone.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are already up on the Blog now. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)
I just posted a O/S to my FFnet account called "I'm not that Girl." I'm proud to announce that it won one of the two First Place spots in the Public Vote for the FanFicAddicts Anon 100 Pictures contest!
Also peaking of oneshots, I have another one in the OSS Contest called "Misery Business." It's my second time writing a lemon, so consider it preparing for your Parachute one. ;-) Check it out - vote and leave some love for the authors, even it's not for me!
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"What has you smiling so beautifully?" Esme asked curiously, just before the flight attendants announced that they were free to exit the plane.
Bella wasn't sure exactly how to respond. Edward wanted to be the one to sit down and explain his desire to relocate to his parents. Plus, nothing was set in stone, like he himself has said. She decided to go with the partial truth.
"I was just thinking about Jack and Edward. I thought my life was complete with Jack, but Edward adds a whole other dimension. I can't picture our lives without him."
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28
It was a surprise to see Renee turn up in this chapter.
Loved how Edward turned up in the end with Jack.
Wonderful chapter
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are already up on the Blog now. It's pretty, umm, hot? (kitsushel.blogspot.com)
Just a couple of things before I leave you with your teaser! Parachute is up for two Avant Garde Awards, Best Bella and Best Kid. Voting ends on the 4th so please vote if you can! We have some tough competition!
Also, we've been nom'med for three Original Character Awards! Mostst Original Plot as well as Jack for Best Offspring and Best Male! It's going to be super tough against A Rough Start's Anthony, who is one of my fave kiddos! But, alas, I do love Jack more! Voting for those open up on 12/1!
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"Jack?" Bella called anxiously. Her head whipped from side to side frantically. "Jack!"
Edward's hand squeezed her tightly as he pulled her towards the customer service department. The crowd was heavy with people and her heart pounded in her chest painfully. She pulled her hand away and started to push through the crowd, heading back towards where she last saw her son.
"Bella, wait!" Edward called, but she was too far gone in panic to listen.
She stopped for a minute and tried to think clearly. What would Jack most want to see in this store?
Immediately thinking of the answer, Bella tore off towards the escalators.
Date: 10 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 30
That was a fun chapter, I am wondering what James has to say for himself.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com) It ties in with this one nicely.
Voting for the Original Character Awards ends today! We're up for Most Original Plot as well as Jack for Best Offspring and Best Male! It's going to be super tough!
Make sure you leave your pitchforks at the door before reading the teaser! This chapter's drama skyrockets, but I think it's necessary to complete our journey and it's the way that I've always pictured it heading.
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"Call Tanya and give her this info. She'll know what to do."
"Yes, ma'am. I'll keep my ear to the ground. If I find anything else out, I'll let you know."
Bella pocketed her iPhone and her hands curled into fists. The anger that she had experienced minutes earlier paled in comparison to the rage that coursed through her. The proof that James was a part of Jack's abandonment was black and white in front of her face. She fully planned on marching back into that office and tearing a new asshole into anyone who dared to get in her way. When the elevator reached the final floor, she was alone.
The doors opened and before she could step out, she found herself once again face to face with James Brooks. His eye widened in shock and her fist flew without thought. He swiftly caught her hand and pushed her back into the elevator with his body weight. "
What the hell are you doing?" he hissed angrily.
"You- you-" she stuttered. "You piece of shit! I'm not leaving here until I talk to Edward. I know who you are and what you did to Jack. You're a miserable excuse for a human being!" she shouted in her fury.
Quicker than she could blink, one of his forearms was pressed against her throat menacingly while the other hand gripped her by the hair.
"You couldn't just leave, could you?" he ground out. "No, you had to be Miss High-And-Mighty. From the first moment I laid eyes on you, I knew you'd be a challenge."
Date: 24 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 32
Wow!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)
I'm sorry that I didn't get around to finishing up the EPOV, but between the holidays and an annoying family, it got pushed to the side. Never fear, it'll still go up!
♥ Shel ♥
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Jack rolled his eyes and shook his head. "I know you, Mom. There's something that you're not telling me."
She bit her lip slightly. "Victoria was there as well. James shot her and she died."
The boy's jaw dropped in shock. "She- She's dead? Like, she can never hurt me again or take me away?"
Bella blinked in surprise. She wasn't sure of what his reaction would be, but that certainly wasn't it.
"Yes, baby. She can't ever hurt you again," she responded quietly.
Jack bit his bottom lip and nodded resolutely. "I mean, I guess it sucks that she's dead, but does it make me a bad person being kinda happy about it?"
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 34
Wonderful and sad all at once!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)
I'm saddened each week that brings us closer to the end, but I'm happy for E, B and Jack to get their HEA.
The promised EPOV from Chapters 31/32 is up now! Go check it out!
♥ Shel ♥
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"Garrett was just telling us about the Flag Football team sign ups. I really want to play this year. Please?"
She placed her hands on her hips, eyeing her son carefully. "Let me talk to your dad and we'll see."
Garrett's eyes widened and he looked at Jack, grinning. "Is that weird?"
Jack's brow scrunched in confusion. "Is what weird?"
"That you have a dad now."
"I always did have a dad," Jack responded. "I just couldn't remember where he was."
"But still," Garrett continued, "after all of this time apart, is it weird now?"
Jack thought for a moment before shaking his head. "No, not really. It feels right."
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 35
Wow, I actually did not see that one coming... Edward turning up on her birthday... the proposal I did.
Wonderful chapter as always.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! Over 1000 for this chapter alone between here and FFnet! You guys amaze me! The Monday teasers are up on the Blog. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)
Parachute is up for three Walk of Fame Awards: Angst Goddess, Queen of Hearts and Story of the Year. It's up against some major big ones like University of Edward Masen, Master of the Universe and Emancipation Proclamation, so I don't hold any expectation other than getting squashed like a bug. I am also up for three writing awards as well: Rising Starlet, Hopelessly Devoted and Musical Maestro.
I would adore winning the Hopelessly Devoted award. It's for the one writer that you know you can always count on. I think I've proven to you guys over and over that I'm "hopelessly devoted" to you, with the weekly updates and review replies to each and every reviewer. If you head over there and end up feeling that another author up for the award deserves it more, please follow your heart and vote for them. I just ask you to please keep me in consideration. ^_^
That being said, here are your promised teasers! The first from the next chapter of Parachute and the second from Victoria POV that I've written for the Fandom Against Domestic Violence fundraiser. =)
♥ Shel ♥
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Parachute ~ Chapter 36 Teaser:
Bella stood, drenched head to toe, in the middle of her front lawn. Hot tears streamed down her face as the chilly rain pelted her skin. Her mouth was open slightly in shock, as she gazed down with wide eyes at the man she loved more than life itself. Edward's hopeful, joyous face grinned up at her from his stance on one knee. The ring held in his hand was a single brilliant diamond that was simple, yet elegant.
"Isabella Swan, I have been captivated by you since the moment I first laid eyes on you. That love only grew and expanded as I got to know you and saw first hand what a wonderful mother you are to our son. Forever could never be long enough for me, to feel like I've had long enough with you. Marry me?"
She covered her mouth and let out a sob, before throwing her arms around him and shouting, "Yes!"
They fell together, a mass a limbs and lips, their hearts beating both beating wildly. He pulled away slightly and pushed a lock of rain-saturated hair from her face.
"Let's go inside, please. I don't want you to catch a cold."
When they stood, his eyes were drawn to her white shirt, now completely plastered against her bare breasts, her nipples hard and straining against the fabric. His hand reached out to brush against her breast, causing her to become self conscious and cross her arms across her chest. She laughed lightly and nodded her head towards the house.
"Come on, let's get dry."
Edward let out a loud guffaw. "I'd rather keep you wet, love."
His hands wrapped around her waist and he pulled her back to his chest as they tumbled into the house. Sopping wet clothes soon littered the foyer floor and hands roamed greedily.
"Where is our bedroom?" he asked huskily, sweeping her into his arms.
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Victoria POV Outtake ~ "In the End" teaser:
I won't ever be remembered for my common sense. I know most of you hate me and I'm fine with that. I deserve it. I was a bad, bad girl. For those of you who don't know my story, I'll start at the beginning.
My mother married my father for his money and power. When she'd finally had enough, she left and took half of his net worth, including me. He never seemed to mind. He sent an obscenely large support check once a month, but it always felt like a buy-off. Once he re-married and began a family with his new wife, our interactions were even fewer. Who knows how I would have turned out if he had made more of an effort? He's just as much to blame for my upbringing as my mother is. He knew how she was, yet he still didn't lift a finger to keep me.
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 36
Wonderful as always!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm so sad that this will be the last chapter of Parachute, but I'm happy with where we're leaving them! The Monday teasers will go up on the up on the Blog Sunday night. (kitsushel.blogspot.com)
There are also only a couple of days left to vote in the Walk of Fame Awards. Parachute is up for 3: Angst Goddess, Queen of Hearts and Story of the Year and I am also up for 3 writing awards as well: Rising Starlet, Hopelessly Devoted and Musical Maestro.
My next fic, Rabbit Heart will start posting on February 18th and will follow the same update/posting schedule as Parachute. =)
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"You're grounded until you're thirty," she murmured against his hair.
"Understood," he chuckled softly.
"I'm serious," she yawned. "Wait until your father gets home."
Jack gulped audibly and nodded. "I know."
Soon, Bella's breathing evened out and soft snores filled the air. Jack's heart clenched and he truly felt horrible for lashing out at his mother. He had no idea what made him say the things he had. She had never been anything but good to him and proved her love over and over again. The phone chirped next to him and he answered it quickly, not wanting to wake her up just yet.
"Hello?" he asked softly.
"JACKSON CHARLES CULLEN! What is wrong with you, boy? Why would say something like that to your mother?" his father's voice boomed from the phone's speaker.
"Shh, Dad, please quiet down," he replied in a hushed voice.
"Quiet down?" Edward yelled. "Are you seriously telling me to be quiet? Boy, have you lost your mind?"
"No, Dad, please," Jack whispered, "Mom is sleeping next to me."
Rebel Bella has been shipped around the U.S. for years to different foster homes after being placed in Child Protective Services. What will happen when she is placed with uptight Edward and his family? Adult language/Violence/Lemons
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Misstoria's Stories to Read
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 134043 Read Count: 42793
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Broken
I am going to guess it is one of James's merry fucked up men!!!
Cant wait for the next update.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
your guess would be right on track! next update should be within the next couple of weeks. thanks so much for reading and reviewing!! ;)
Date: 02 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Waiting
I started reading your story on Sunday night and usually it does not take me long but because I have done some damage to my back I am been sleeping more than normal.
I have to say this is up there with some of the best stories I have ever read. I just hope that James, Riley and Felix meet the same fate as Royce. I would really love to see Emmett beat the crap out of him in a major way, to the point where they need dentals to identify him or them all. I think the only thing that could better this is they all get caught and they get sent to jail and become bitches to a guy named bubba, but the icing on the cake is that he does not use his appendage to do the damage but the rough end of a pineapple. That I would love to see.
I am also going to tell you that I am pimping out your story this week on People Like Us, I beta for Michele and I am able to put my rec's for the week on their. Your story is going on their this week with BIG CAPITAL LETTERS, your writing is phenomenal and the story is original and I love it and you deserve more readers.
Please let me know if you are not happy with this, Michele post on friday night South African time.
Love it.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
aww, well thank you so much for taking the time to read my story! i hope that your back is feeling better soon. i am extremely humbled that you like my story so much! thank you for your kind words. i would LOVE to be rec'd on PLU! that is a huge honor! that has just absolutely made my day! i'm smiling so big right now. thank you so much for giving this story a chance and for the major pimpage!! ;)
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Information
OMG I am dying to know what Edward's story is... when will we find out... I cant wait to know... I will be sitting on the edge of my seat till then.
Loved the chapter, soooooo good and very informative, I really hope that Aro and James goes down in a big way. You deserved the rec, this story rocks and I am glad I started reading it.
Loved it.
Thank you
Fiorella
Author's Response:
we will find out very, very soon all about our dear edward. believe me... aro and james deserve to die long, torturing, fiery deaths. thanks again for the rec, and also for the review!!! ;)
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Incidents
The only thing I am concerned about is if Edward is going to die??????
I think that would actually be cruel to Bella if he did. She just found him and now he will leave her. It is kind of sad.
I have a feeling he has either a tumor, something along those lines, the only other thing I can think of is that when he was younger something happened to him and his brain does not function proplerly anymore.
Please have him tell Bella his story soon, the suspence is killing me, he should have done it by now, otherwise he will lose her trust, and you know they have been though enough crap already.
Thanks for the wonderful update.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
i will tell you i'm all for the HEA, so take that as you will. and we will find out more about edward next chapter. thanks so much for the review, babe!! ;)
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Confession
I like how you started telling us what was the problem with Edward, but what I dont like is how you cut the story off. I would have prefered to hear it all at once.
Ohh well.
Thank you for a wonderful chapter apart from that.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
i would have liked to write it all, too, but it would have taken twice as long to update and i'm not sure bella would have been able to handle it all at once. thanks for reading and reviewing, and for being honest!! ;)
Date: 08 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Regret
Actually with the A/N, I really could care less if James never made an appearance again, heheh.
I am glad that you finished this chapter off, I actully like how you flipped it and gave ua Edwards POV.
Author's Response:
i think some readers are thinking he's lurking somewhere... but he'll get what he deserves, don't worry. i'm glad you liked the EPOV. i think it brings some of his feelings and emotions to the forefront about all of this craziness. thanks for the review, sweets!! ;)
Date: 30 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Emotions
As always more questions not enough answers.
It would be nice to see James behind bars before Edward goes though surgery, the Cullens have enough on their plate with Edwards tumour returning.
I seriously have had enough of James, I would like to see someone chainsaw him and leave little bits and pieces of him around Seattle. Then that would be the end of him. As for his partners, strung up by the balls and left never to produce again.
That is what I would like to see in the next chapter.
Author's Response:
yeah, i seem to be good about leaving you hanging with more questions than answers. i completely agree with you about james. he deserves the absolute worst. not sure if we'll see an end to james any time soon, but more on him next chapter. thank you so much for reading and reviewing!! ;)
Date: 18 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Complications
Grrr, why cant you just keep going, why the need to end it there.
Really, we could of at least found out what was going on with Edward first and then something happen.
Grrrr
Author's Response:
well, edward was meant not to be involved from the very beginning. he needs time to heal, anyway, from his surgery, and he would be a casualty if he was there to intervene. sorry about the suspense, but please hang in there. ;)
Date: 18 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Fallout
Yeah, we might want to but do you really want to hear what we have to say about the suspense. I know I would not!
But me being a nice person I will be as nice as I can be.
STOP with the cliff hangers aready. I really just want to know what the hell is going on or update faster!
Good chatper really enjoyed what Bella did to James I really do hope he dies on that floor. As for the rest I hope they all get shot as well.
I am scoring low because I am tired of the cliffies.
Author's Response:
i love hearing what the readers think, even when it may not be my opinion. please don't hold back. unfortunately, the story is coming to a close, and if you picked this up in acutal book form (completed), the chapters would end the same way. there's always a point in books where you just can't put it down b/c one chapter leads into another with suspense. that's what is happening here, but since i can't complete everything at once without making you all wait for months between updates, you just happen to get cliffies. also, we're coming to a close in this story, so cliffies are part of the process. i hope you can forgive the suspense for a little while longer and hang in there. i am trying very hard to get the next chapter up shortly. thanks for reading and reviewing!! and i always love reading any opinions you have. it only helps me improve! ;)
Edward gets talked into meeting Bella, a Dominatrix who is looking for a new submissive. Will Edward hand over control to a woman who he barely knows? Will Bella lose some of the control she fights so hard to keep? ALL EPOV. Cannon Pairs, lots-O-lemons and funnies.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Wonderful World of Dommella, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 81629 Read Count: 45276
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Ch 15 Eager Beaver
OH, poor Edward, I really do hope Bella says yes, but I can understand why she would not. She might think he is only proposing because she is preggers.
On another note, I am pimping your story out this week in People Like Us, I hope you do not mind. I think it is a wonderful story and more people need to read it.
Author's Response:
I'm flattered that you think it's good enough to pimp, so please... pimp your little heart out!! thanks so much for reading <3
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Ch 16 Sea Monkey
Ohhh, will they get back to the playroom soon, I am loving the fact that Bella keeps saying no.
Loved the chapter, it was fantastic.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
you're one of the few who likes that she keeps saying no, it's a little play on Bella's constant no's in the Twilight series :)
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Ch 18 Party at the Mansion
I love the baby shower and I love the fact that Edward is so put out by his parents becoming nudist... fucking funny.
Cant wait for the next update.
Fiorella
Date: 01 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 21: The Epilogue
A wonderful ending to the story.
Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1255139
Date: 13 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
“The girl can’t speak?” I looked to Caius, his accusatory voice startling me, he snorted, “she doesn’t know her place either, so perhaps she needs a reminder Edward.”
Can you please explain what Bella did wrong here... I dont get why Caius said this... I get everything else... am I missing something.
I love this story and I am going to pimp you ass off to my friends. I know that there are spelling mistakes and incorrect words used a lot, but I dont care, actually it gives your story a little something, something. if you know what I mean. It shitted me to begin with but I said to myself, just let it go and I focused on what you were actually saying instead.
Loved it, loved it, loved it. If you ever want anyone to proof read for you or help with editing, I am more than happy to help. Unofficially of corse. I help out justginger or on here she is know as peoplelikeus. She is also doing a BDSM story.
Thank you again for a wonderful story.
Author's Response:
I can tell you a little bit...He was saying she didn't know her place, becasue she looked him in the eye....Remmeber Edward warned her about that? Just wait for the next chapter other things will be explained...sort of...lol...lml
I try to make sure my spelling is correct. Sometimes I miss a word or two ..ook or ten...lol I actually have a person who proofs for me, she is just as new to working on a story as I am and we are learning together. I write as I talk so sometimes I will say 'He let me go' instead of 'He left me go' and the what-not. Hopefully we will get it together, I think we are getting better...but thanks for reading and leaving a comment...lml
Date: 30 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 84: Chapter 84
Hmm, I am not sure what to think of this chapter and of Edward. I understand why he did it, I understand she deserved the lesson, but really, I am sure there were other ways. Like I said in my last review.
I feel I am dissapointed in both of them!
Just once I would like Bella to remember the word 'Red', a lot of what had happened to her could have been saved by saying that word. I would not take that crap from a man not matter what training I am in or what lesson I should be learing. What Bella allowed her self to go thought is a form of abuse, yes I say mental more than physical. I am just wondering if this would set her back.
Yes she did not understand Edwards version of cumslut, but really, what she went though in her mind could have set her back. Could have reminded her of something that James could have done to her. He did abuse her for years! I wondered if Edward thought of that before he did what he did???
Anyway, lets see what the next chatper brings, will Edward get up on his soap box and tell us he needed to do this like this chapter, will Bella open her eyes and really learn that her stubborness needs to stop, because it is getting old.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
It is interesting to see what Caius and Irena have against Bella, I personally feel that Irena is jealous and Caius just wants Bella for himself, but I am sure all will be revealed in time.
I have a feeling James in going to make an appearance soon and I wonder if he has something to do with Caius or Irena or if they are two completely different circumstances. I have a strong feeling that James is behind the collar missing and the white van at the front of the house. I really hope that James does not damage Bella to much as she has really been through too much already and would probably suffer a nervous break down if anything happened to her again. Because I know if this was me I would, no matter how strong a person you are both physically or mentally. There is only so much a person can take.
I am really looking forward to seeing where you take this story; I only hope you keep it as close to real life as you have been. When you read some stories when it comes to this line of physical and mental abuse they tend to make it all sunshine and rainbow after the attack and it is nowhere near real life as it should be. I totally understand that everyone want happy ever after and this can happen in a story like yours but it would takes a lot of effort such as counselling and support from family and friends. I know this being a rape victim (drugged while out with girlfriends and woke up in a strangers house) it is not an overnight fix and it took me over 3 years to get back out there again, I was lucky to have a supportive family and boyfriend (who became my husband, we have since divorced as we found out we did not have much in common after 14 years.)
I am lucky I can talk about it freely now, I would never wish what I went through to happen to anyone and people that write stories with sunshine and rainbows after a few weeks of something as distressing as rape and abuse, is living in fantasy land. So I implore you to keep as close to truth as possible and you will have a hit on your hands, well you already do, but I assure you that it will be 100 times better.
Once again thank you for a wonderful story and I hope to keep enjoying it.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you for your comments. I have been told that my story is too brutal when Bella tells of all that she's been through. My response has been that Domestic Violence is brutal and the effects are far reaching and continue through the rest of your life. I personall have not lived through it, however I have friends and family members that have and I myself have survived other trauma's that has taken years to overcome. My story is still a work of fiction, and I have read so many stories where as you have said everything is moon light and roses almost immediatly and that just does not depict any truth. So thanks for reading and again for the comment. I wish you well...lml
The quick shower I took felt amazing, and if I had time I would have stayed in there longer and let the water wash away all the stress from the day along with the grunge. Edward was sitting on the bed when I came out of the bathroom wrapped in a towel.
“Where are we going?” I wanted to know what to wear. I was hoping for casual, I just didn’t feel like dressing up.
“No where fancy, just a quick bite to eat and then we have somewhere else I want to stop at.”
I pulled my bra and panties out of the drawer along with a pair of dark blue skinny jeans. When I came out of the closet holding a red fitted t-shirt Edward had my hair brush in his hand.
“Come here” he motioned to the bed,
I got a tight feeling in my stomach and my girly parts practically begged me to hurry to him. He sat back spreading his legs pulling me onto the bed so I sat between his thighs. Edward unraveled the towel on my head and began running the brush through my hair.
Date: 20 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
A wonderful chapter as always.
Author's Response:
Thanks,,,glad you like it ...lml
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21
It would be interesting to see what Bella is reading, and how she is really going to cope with it.
Loved the chapter, cant wait for the update.
Author's Response:
some of it you know, because Jane already told Edward, the rest or at least some of it Bella will tell you about on Monday ...Thanks for reading...Because it's thursday i do have a teaser for you...thanks for the comment...lmlx8
I listened to what he said and then a thought occured to me. “You know what I think?”
He raised his eyebrows, “No I don’t, but I would love to hear it.”
“I think you are wrong…” Edward raised his eyebrows in disbelief, but I went on to explain before he could interrupt my train of thought. “ …about us needing to go to the club more often just to let people see us. I think we should go as you have already planned, but not any extra times just to appease your adoring public.”
Edward got that perplexed look on his face again.
“Think about it. All anyone really knows is that I showed up one night with Aro’s card. You yourself were kind of intrigued about how I knew him.”
Edward nodded, “You’re right I was. Aro doesn’t give them out.”
I went on with my theory while Edward’s hands moved down to rub my bottom. “Then the next thing anyone knows is that sometime within the next week you and I got together, and then when they see us I’m sporting your collar around my neck. Now, in order to justify why that happened they come up with all sorts of circumstances that would explain it. Which is alright, but then like an arrogant child who is looking for attention from their daddy, they start spouting it to others, knowing it’s going to get back to you.”
“Is that the psychologist talking? Because let me get this straight. They…” he pointed to my computer “… are the arrogant child and I am the daddy, and they are doing this to get a rise out of me?”
I nodded.
“And it’s working.”
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
Wow, what a chapter, firstly the way Edward gets information out of Bella, even if she is upset.
Then the horrific recount of what she went through and then their declaration of love, a perfect ending.
I am glad that you are not angry about the Rec on People Like Us. That was my doing and I am glad now other people have found your wonderful story, it was a shame it was not found sooner. Keep up the wonderful work and I really look forward to the next chapter.
I hope Bella trusts Edward enough soon to start disclosing more about what happened to her. I know it is still a while off, but I know that she will get there soon. I also have a feeling that James is lurking in the shadows, I have a feeling he is behind the dog collar and realised that he could not get into the house with it.
I shall wait with anticipation and see if I am correct as your story goes along.
Author's Response:
OMG!! Why would I be angry,, I was honored to be rec'd there...I must admit though, I have not started reading People Like Us. I have it saved and I heard it is fantastic, but I find I spend all my time writing... but eventually I will get to it...It was my beta who told me about the rec...So I hope you don't mind that little confession, I just don't see how peoplelikeus can write and read at the same time...guess I am just not that talented...
Now to your comment --- Bella is getting there, she trust him, but still feels unworthy,,, as far as your other comments only time will tell...lml
Thanks again for the rec...
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23
It was nice to see that these two can be playful and not so serious all the time. But when it matters they both know how to step up to the plate and support one another, like Edward did towards the end of the chapter.
I really hope Edward does not go overboard on what Bella considers her job when she went to get Sally and the kids. I am sure he will not be able to stop her from doing that again, even if he wanted to. You have to one brave woman to go into someone house after they have been beaten and get them out. You never know where the abuser is.
Wonderful chapter as always.
Thank you for the update.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
They have a happy little banter, I'm sure Bella is thinking that he will be understanding too...Thanks for reading, and the comments. I have a teaser for you..lml
“The phone Bella” I could see him trying to rein in his anger and I knew that had we been anywhere else but this room, I would have been Isabella at that moment.
“I turned it off”
“You…” Edward didn’t get to finish his statement because I continued to explain.
“On the way back, Sally was upset and we were talking and the phone kept ringing and interrupting us, so I turned it off.” He sat there with his head down running his hand through his hair for what seemed like forever before his eyes finally met mine again and he released a long sigh.
“Bella..” Edward sighed again “I’m going to give you one more chance to just stay in this room and relax tonight. I’ll bring your dinner up here; we’ll take a long bath and watch TV.”
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24
Even though I Beta for peoplelikeus (justginger) and her story is all about BDSM, I have to say if I was ever in this position I would go nuts. While I was reading this all I could think about was if I was in her position I would just get up off the floor and run out of the room, be dam what punishment Edward would want to give me.
I would lock myself in a room and cry for days, for making him feel this upset with me. I would probably not speak to him for a few day either for feeling ashamed that I made someone feel this way and then in return for him making me feel like this. I hate it when people make me feel bad for something I have done.
I feel sorry for Bella because she was just doing her job, I am sure that if Edward was in her position of going after her friend he would have done exactly the same thing. Then again Edward has never been in Bella position so I feel he should have at least taken that into consideration.
I know that if I was Bella I would not have done anything different and for Edward to make Bella feel like doing her job that she is passionate about is wrong. I understand that she turned her phone off but when you look at it she did it to protect the person she was saving from an abusive husband. Really what she did was no less the heroic because I do not think that there is many people in this world that would walk into a situation like that, Edward included.
So this being said, what I would like you to ask Edward is:
I understand him for punishing Bella for what she did with the phone and making people worry but where were his kind words for doing her job and getting someone out of a bad situation. What was his thought process of her dong her job, in making sure that people that suffer from abuse are safe. Sally was not going to leave that house and catch a cab feeling unsafe, threatened and insecure, so how would Edward like Bella to handle this situation, seeing that he was angry over it?
That is my Question to Edward.
Thank you again for a wonderful update and even though I will never understand this sort of a relationship I take my hat off to the people that are able to submit. Because I have to say, if I had to stick to an eating and sleeping plan I would be up shit creek without a paddle. I only eat when I am hungry (which is maybe twice a day) and I am lucky to get 4 – 5 hours a sleep a night. Hmmm my ass would be red for a long time.
Author's Response:
I'm going to ask Edward your question in the OT, so I hope you can hang on until then. As for your other comments. I will let Edward's answer take care of them too...thanks for reading and leaving a comment one thing remember what she did was against the center's policy too....ok that's all I'm going to say about it ...see ya thursday ..lml
Date: 07 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25
Reading Edwards side, I knew it would be hard for him, and I am actually a little upset that he would not sit with Bella until she feel asleep. But then again I am sure he was only thinking of the pain he had been caused by Bella's disobedience. I am glad when he heard her crying again he went in to make sure she was okay.
I understand he needed to punish her but he still did not explain why he was upset when she was doing her job. I know she broke the rules by going alone, but as he said she is selfless and I know if it was me I would have done the same thing.
I am looking forward to them going to New Moon and seeing what is going to happen. I cant wait for the next chapter.
Loved this one and it does open your eyes to Edwards side. Hopefully the next chapter will be a little more joyful for these two,.
Author's Response:
his problem wasn't that she went (which is not her job, in fact it is against the center's rules) it was the phone...That is his rules that shge agreed to -- the phone is to be on at all times, she turned it off, that was what she was punished for ...thanks for reading and leaving a comment. I have a teaser for you..lml
Bella it sounds to this one like you are depending upon your Master.”
“I am and that scares me.” I admitted in defeat. I could see the question raging in her eyes I didn’t give her a chance to pose it.
“Jane I never depended on anyone in my life. Anytime I did it was a complete disappointment. So I just learned to do everything on my own. I hate the fact that I am so weak to need Edward so much.”
“Bella there is no such things as needing your Master too much. Let’s make that clear right now.” Jane’s voice turned demanding “He wants to be needed, it brings him satisfaction to meet your needs and see that you are properly taken care of. There is also no such thing as a weak submissive. It takes a lot of strength, courage and confidence to give yourself over so completely to someone else. It is not an easy thing to do and those that try because they think it is an effortless life find out very soon that it is not. That usually happens with the first punishment.”
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26
Ohhh poor Bella, I really do hope to God that Edward does not break this trust or the faith that she is putting in. Because I do not see that ending very well for Bella at all, I say send her to the ward now because there will be not turning back for her if he ever left her. She would turn mental and loose herself completely.
One question for you, that I have, Bella is not collard 24/7 correct? So what Edward did with the end of that BJ was not very becoming of a boyfriend. I understand him doing that when they are having their usual or playtime but taking that over to their boy/girlfriend time is just demeaning to that side of their relationship. This is what I do not understand about D/s some times. When it is boy/girlfriend time, anything that happened in the playroom stays there, it should not be taken into the other side.
I understand the respect but if she has an opinion or does something she wants to she should not have to ask Edwards permission because at that time she is his girlfriend not submissive. She is only his submissive when they play. I understand the lines blur sometimes but she should be able to express this with out him pulling the Dom card and visa versa.
That is what I get with all the research that I have done on these relationship, but if you can explain it to me where I can understand how and why the Dom is able to rule over someones entire life when they are not in a 24/7 relationship, I would really appreciate it... then again I might never get it.
Author's Response:
Punishments always carry over into real time other wise they loose their effectiveness and cause confussion. She doesn't need his permission for everything, but Bella has rules to follow that she always has to follow. (the 10 rules from chapter 7) And he will pull the Dom card just as a husband pulls the husband card...(lol) Thanks for reading, I hope I answered your question..lml
Date: 19 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28
Hmm not sure about they had signals, but I can see how they can be of importance when they are out at the club, if Edward was talking to someone and he wanted Bella's attention. I just think sometimes it comes off like he is training her to be a dog, (sorry but it is similar and some are exactly the same as the commands I use on my dogs to get them to come, sit, lie, and stay) but hey what every floats Edwards boat works for me.
I really hope you get to James soon it is starting to drive me crazy that these two have not figured it out. Man a blind person can see for heaven’s sake and it is just so frustrating that they have not put it together yet. I would really like to see that part of the story move a long a bit, it is sort of hanging in the air like a bad smell that does not seem to be moving anywhere and keeps changing with the wind direction, just to waft back into your face again. It need to start moving along a bit.
I know that you are trying to establish Bella and Edward but sometimes it is good to just to give us a little bit more and keep that hook dangling in our face. At the moment we all know it is there but not moving, just annoying us (actually annoying is not the right word), distracting would be the better one actually. You need to tie it in a bit more and get us excited. I am at the stage where I want it to disappear altogether because it is not going anywhere and taking away from Edward and Bella.
But then again someone might see it a different way. I don’t mean to offend you in any way, shape or form. I still love this story I just wish that the James thing would make an appearance even if Bella and Edward still do not realise it, keep it moving and us hanging on our seat, because as I said at the moment it is not doing that for me.
Love this chapter and I really like how Edward rewarded Bella for her eating, it was beautiful to see. Thank you for answering my questions last week as well. I also like how Edward told Bella that she had to ask Jane the question he could not answer, it was very big of him not just to give her something he knew nothing about or just to placate her question. I hope that the marking from her foot will disappear soon, I think I would like to see these to be a little more romantic outside of the playroom as boyfriend and girlfriend, without him having to play the Dom card at all, loosen him up a little bit make him fun and playful even if he does not like something she does. I am sure he does have a playful side where he can let go of some of his inhabitations.
Okay, I think that is enough of my ramblings and I am sure you have heaps of other people to answer and not just my dribbling. So sorry about it sometimes it just gets away from me.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
I suppose that the angst in the story is slow in unfolding, I sort of planned it that way, becasue I really wanted to show the relationship building and then coming together while strange things go on around them. Things that seem isolated but begin to formulate as the pieces come together. I had said that my story is a slow boil and it is. We are at the point her the pot is just starting to bubble and i'm not going to rush it before it's ready...So bare with me if you can and eventually the pot will blow...lol ...thanks for reading, your comments are great ,,,lml
Date: 26 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30
ohhh.
loved the chapter. poor bella.
Author's Response:
Thank you and thanks for reading and leaving a comment ...lml
Date: 01 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32
Wow you packed so much into this chatper, not only sexually but also with the converstaions they were having about abuse. I am glad that you did this, I feel sometimes people are like emu's and burry their heads in the sand mantality.
It was good to see that you bring it to the fore front and make them confront what they dont know.
Author's Response:
It's hard to understand something that seems so horrible but Domestic Violence is a very real and nasty part of life ...Thanks for reading ...lml
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Diamond in the Rough
I dont think Edward was abrupt he is her dom and from what I gather that is what they are like, what I did not like was the fact that he cheated with getting her to say his name and I am wondering if this was her punishment for saying it. Actually the way he got her to say his name while they were having fun was nasty and if he did that to be able to torture her the way he did, well I would tell him to shove his dominating up his behind.
If it was a lesson to be learnt from using the C-grip well then, it is part of her training and she did really well I am not sure if I would have been able to hold out as long as she did.
Cant wait to see what is going to happen next.
Date: 04 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33
wonderful chatper
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have a teaser for you...lml
When I got back to Bella she was half awake thanks to Seth’s persistence, I sat on the edge of the couch looking down at her.
“Hey” my fingers ran along the line of her jaw.
“Hi. Do I smell food” I smiled at her
“You do. Are you hungry?”
“Starving” she admitted while she sat up “It’s weird because I ate lunch”
“Yeah well that was four hours ago and your body worked really hard on the way home” her lip went between her teeth while her face flushed pink. I chuckled at her response “What are you thinking?”
“I’m thinking about my reward. I get a reward.” Bella’s whole face lit up and her eyes sparkled.
“That you do, what would you like?” I asked tucking a lock of hair behind her ear
“You” I looked into her eyes “You have me love.”
“Nooo…I want you” Bella flung herself at me straddling my lap with a force so hard she knocked me backwards on the couch.
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34
I actually did not mind anything in the chapter until the punishment scene, I would have thought Bella would have already made this a hard limit for her, if it distresses her this much, she would have known.
I actually feel sorry for Edward if he did not know. I really do hope he gets her out of there quick smart and takes that silly contrapsion off her in the process. I dont think that I would want that going, in the state of mind Bella would be in right now. I also feel it is about time she really opened up to Edward and told him a lot more. How is he going to know what is or is not going to set her off like this.
I am guessing he feels like a prized fool right about now, like any of them would if they did not know what her triggers were. I am sorry they should not be playing if this is what can set her off, actually that I don't think I worded that right...
They can play and I understand that Edward is being creative with her punishment but there is going to be a time when he is going to have to punish her with a whip, paddle or cane and can you imagine what that will do to her. I can, I feel it is time they talk and honestly. Bella need to open up.
Sorry these are just my thoughts, I just feel it has gone long enough, Edward has been patient and I am sure he has showed enough trust. He needs to know what he is facing not only in the Playroom, but their relationship as well as how dangerous James really is.
Wonderful chapter I loved every word of it and no complaints from me about any of it. You only got my thoughts of what I feel they should be doing, but as you are writing this story and not I, I will leave this master piece to you.
Author's Response:
No problems but have you checked out Bella's limits on my extra's page??? Look them over and then maybe you will see why he didn't see a problem with the caning...Thanks for all your thoughs and for reading ...lml
Date: 12 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35
I am glad that she is remembering what has caused and upset her. I am sure this will not be the first time something like this will happen. Considering what James did to her. I really do hope that she is able to work through it with Edward.
I am also a little shocked that Edward made her ware the BFF again, after what she went though in the car, I also understand that it was not as strong at the first time but with the sensory overload already and her body already going though it once, might have been a bit much for her. But Edward is her Dom so I am sure he knows what she can and can’t handle.
Ohhh when is James going to show his face these two are getting a bit complacent with their surroundings and I know when this evil man shows up all hell is going to break loose.
Thank you for a wonderful chapter, loved it.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Do you remember he said that the BFF could be used for Training or PLeasure ....she got the training in the car ,,,it was intense and building ,,,at the club it was soft and sweet.....Besides he needed it and you will know why in the next posting ,,,,,((faith ,,,have some faith in Edward, he knows what he;s doing ...lol )) Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I have a teaser for you....lml
After taking a quick shower I started to dress in the little cubical but it’s hard to move in there and the floor was wet. Once my underwear was on, I moved out into the main part of the locker room to dry the ends of my hair and finish dressing. Sitting on the bench was the reason for my uneasiness. I had only seen her once before but there was no mistaking the tall strawberry blond, Tanya.
Fucking great…
She eyed me as I moved to plug in the hair dryer; her intent gaze on me making my anger flare.
“Do you want something?” I asked catching her gaze in the mirror.
“No. There is nothing you have that I want.” I didn’t miss the double meaning in her statement and frankly I didn’t believe her anyway. I knew damn well what I had that she wanted.
“I am surprised though, Edward doesn’t normally collar his flavor of the month.” I turned off the dryer yanking the plug out of the wall while she went on. “You do know that’s what you are right? Just something to pass his time with, I wouldn’t get too comfortable if I was you.”
Date: 15 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36
A wonderful chapter again, it is good to see that Bella is just human, and cant think she will get through this.
But I am sure that Edward will make her realise or she will realise that she cane and will get through this with him.
Thanks for the update
Fiorella
Author's Response:
I think it is going to get worse before it gets better...lml
Date: 18 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37
Great chapter, it is good to see that Edward is thinking what could be happening.
I have so many theories and I am not sure if any of them are correct. I am actually there is more than one person involved here and I think I know who they are, but I have a feeling I could be making more than I should.
I am worried about Bella not only when it comes to what is going on around her but also the way she is going to explode like volcano when she does.
Thanks you for the update
Fiorella
Author's Response:
That id Edward's fear too, that she blows...and theories are good, pieces are starting to come together, but I think there are some still missing ...have a great weekend ...usual ...Here is a teaser for you...lml
We sat a little longer talking about some of the things she would like to do there. I had not been to Victoria in a long time and there were some new attractions that were possibilities for us to see. I thought it was a good time to bring up the extended stay at the beach. Bella seemed very opened to that possibility, made all the more attractive because both hotels allowed pets.
“When you talk to Alice would you get the name of the hotel so I can sort of figure out what the cost is going to be” The statement was harmless enough but my answer must not have been.
“I got it Bella you don’t have to worry about paying” her eyes narrowed
“Edward I’m not going to let you pay for the whole thing. We’re both going we’ll both pay”
“I’m the one that suggested the long trip, I got it” I watched as the resentfulness rolled across her face.
“This is not up for discussion, I’m paying my half”
What does she mean half are we going to split the cost of meals?
“Isabella be…” I didn’t get to finish, Bella’s eyes turned to pure fury
Date: 11 Mar 2013 Title: Chapter 104: Chapter 104
There is no way to tie all of this together in 3 chapters... going by your words the story ends on the 23rd, that is three chapters or three days... that is a shit ton to happen in three days of finding out who is behind all of this and why, wow the chapter are going to be epic long to get the build up you need for all of that to happen and then an abrupt ending, that is interesting.
Date: 22 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38
Holly hell, poor Bella and Edward. I know that this needed to happen the dam needed to break.
I just hope that they make it through with out anymore hassle but I doubt that.
It is killing me to know how James is messed up in all of this?????
Thank you for the update.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading andhave no fear, all will be revealed eventually ...lml
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39
Wow, maybe this is what these two need to move the fuck forward, and leave the past behind them. I still feel Bella should tell him everything but I am sure that will come with time and more trust.
Love this chapter.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
sometimes a good fucking is just what the doctor ordered ....lol ....
Thanks for reading ... I have a teaser for you....lml
Bella pulled back after placing one more soft kiss against my lips to look in my eyes while her hips wiggled against my dick. She smiled as the hiss left my mouth. “Little Eddie wants to play hide and seek”
“Oh he’s not hiding…” my hips thrust forward “…and he defiantly knows where to look”
“Well then…let him come find it” Her legs loss their grip as she slide down my body but I held her back firmly keeping her against my chest.
“Are you teasing me again?” the last time she tried this I ended up giving her a spanking over the kitchen counter, the memory alone made me throb.
“I wouldn’t think of it” stepping away the hint of a smile formed on her face, my girl was up to something. I eyed her speculatively but she gave nothing away as she moved towards the house telling me she was chilly and going in to get ready for bed.
While Bella opened the door to go back in the house she stopped “Edward…” the somber look on her face was a direct contrast to the playful one she held just a minute before. “…do you trust me?”
Date: 29 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40
I am glad that they made it, let hope they are able to talk freely now.
I love how she tried to get out of punishment for the 2 big 'O' she had.
Thank you for the update. Loved it.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
She tried ,,,and I'm sure Edward has something in mind....
Date: 03 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41
I like the punishment that Edward gave Bella, it was good to read something different.
I cant wait to see what happens, I have a little nagging feeling over the lock combination to Bella's house, I have a feeling you snuck it in for a reason. What it is I have no idea.
Thank you for the update.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Bella likes it too....Thanks for reading and here is your teaser....
A piece of tomato fell to the floor but instead of squatting down Bella bent from the waist, causing the back of her nighty to rise up over her thighs showing me the ruffled yellow thong she had on. The groan left my mouth without consent while my dick pressed painfully against my pants.
The giggle that came from Bella gave away her intentions, my girl was fucking teasing me – again.
A hand landed on her ass before it registered in my mind what I was doing, Bella gasped standing to give me a shy smile. “What did you do that for?”
I raised my eyebrows in disbelief “If you stick that in my face you know damn well what’s going to happen.”
“Oh yeah? “ Bella looked up at me through her lashes taking a few steps back out of my reach dropping the tomato she had just picked up “Oops”
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42
Wonderful chapter, good to see that these two re having a little fun.
Author's Response:
They need some fun ...
Date: 24 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46
Poor Bella, if it was me I would have RED on the Pate, if I did not like it, screw eating it. Two things in this world I could and never will eat, Salmon and Mango, the smell of them makes me want to puke, I dry reach enough when I walk into a supermaket and you can smell them.
Ohhh no what is going to happen.
Author's Response:
lol...she can't red on the pate', she can try and talk her way out of it, or bargin her way out of it, but I can;t see her saying red on that...it's within her limits and it will not cause her harm, other than a nasty taste...besides it was only two crackers...lol... BTW i'm with you,,, I hate mango, even the smell makes me sick,,,,thanks for reading. I have your teaser ..lml.....
“Hey” my thoughts had taken over my attention so much that Edward’s voice startled me causing me to flinch.
“I’m sorry babe…” he chuckled “…I didn’t mean to scare you” My eyes moved towards his they were warm and bright making me smile.
“It’s ok. Where have you been?” Edward sighed
“Ahhh…well while some of us get to lay around in the tub others leave the dog out, hang up their clothes and talk to irate fathers from Forks” the auditable gasp left my throat and I couldn’t mask the horror in my voice.
“You talked to Charlie?”
“Hmm...Yes I did” Edward sat down on the floor with his back against the wall of the tub pulling the cork out of a bottle of wine that I didn’t see he had.
“What did he want?”
As I sat up straight turning with my arm lying on the wall by his head, Edward handed me a glass before he started talking. “He was just concerned about you Bella and he wanted to make sure that after what happened you were safe.”
“And?” I knew there had to be more
Date: 09 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48
Grrrr I want them to get the stalker, I have a feeling it is both James and his lady friend Heather, that is not going to be her real name. When will Bella talk to Shelly???
I understand you are building and I am an impatient person I am sorry for that, but I want more information and this story to move on, I just hope you don't have all this build and then one chapter of the actual suspense... okay I am a suspense junkie, that is why I love crime and thriller so much... it al go, go, go and this have seemed to stall. Maybe if I left for a bit and then come back when it is not stop, start, stop, start with it chapter it my give me the suspense I need.
This is not your fault, but maybe I need to read the all at once when it is finished that way it flows better for me... hmmm I am not sure what to do. I love this story so much...
Thank you for the update.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
I;ll try not to disappoint ...thanks for reading, I have this weeks teaser for you....lml
Walking into the house all the cares that had been forgotten came crashing back as he told me that the locksmith would be there in about a half-hour. I used that time to tell him what I had learned about Heather.
“Do you think that could have been her on the video?” He asked me as we sat outback playing fetch with Seth and a tennis ball.
“It could have been. But how would she know where you lived. I mean really Edward if she knew where I was why go to the center?” He thought about that for a few seconds as he once again threw the ball into the grass.
“I’m going to call Mr. Weiss and let him check on it, I’m also going to see if he can check on your Officer Hawk.”
“My Officer Hawk?”
He smirked “Well he’s not mine besides he didn’t really care until he found out who you were, and I’m not taking any chances. I don’t know how it will work with him being a cop and all but…” I cut him off because I had gotten an ingenious idea.
“I could have Charlie do it.
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49
I dont understand why Bella would break down like that, she should know by now that Edward is protective over her... blind man Freddy can see it.
Anyway a wonderful chapter as always.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
When you are in a mind set of full submission, you take on the qualities of being very dependant on the presence of your Dom. First he didn't tell her he was leaving, which would have been ok, had he only been gone a minute as he had planned. But when the time lingered and she was not allowed to move, and she knew that other people ((men where in the house)) she allowed her fears and insecurities to get the better of her. yes she is getting stronger, I hate to keep comparing a submissive to a child ((because she is not)) but think of the mind frame of a five year old who's getting a bed time story read to them and half way through something happens to take the mommy/daddy away. They feel lost, neglected....it's the dependence on him that she feels, and he accepted the responsabilty of fullfilling that for her...logically she knows, emotionally she felt lost...does that make sense???....Thanks for reading I have this weeks teaser for you ...lml...
“It’s just the food” I told him as he followed me to the door barking the whole time “Seth!” I admonished while shutting down the alarm and opening the door to a very stunned Irena.
“Since when do you have a dog Edward?”
I didn’t respond to her question instead sighing heavily “What can I do for you Irena?”
“You can invite me in” She said as if it should be obvious.
Hesitantly I moved to the side to allow her entrance locking the door but leaving the alarm off, I wasn’t taking any chances. She stood in my living room watching Seth as he sat by my feet.
“I never thought you to be a dog lover” The sweetness in her voice confused me because the last time we spoke it was anything but friendly. That was the day she and Caius attacked Bella for which I found their actions deplorable.
“Cut the crap Irena why are you here?” My tone was rude but she deserved it and I didn’t trust her.
Date: 21 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50
I am up for the smut and dominance, but I would really like to see more them. For one chapter I would like Edward to let go of his dominant nature and have fun, if she wants to tell him no and do what she wants as boyfriend and girlfriend.
I understand that it is part of their life and they seem to be growing in their life style, but that is all I see. I dont see them as b/g at all, and it is a shame considering that you had it in the beginning of this story and it seem to have turned into a full BDSm story. They never seem to have b/g time. I would like to see a little but more of that.
I love the slap and tickle like everyone else but not chapter after chapter after chapter. Change it up a bit. It is always about the usual, time with the family where she can be Bella and not have to do what he want all the time, if she wants a beer let her make the decision.
Anyway that is my thoughts, to me it seems like this story is about the playroom and their BDSM lifestyle and little of anything else of them. That is not the way the story started and I thought it would be even on both sides. Maybe I am wrong and this story is nothing but BDSM. But there is two sides to your characters and I would like a little Edward and Bella time with out the Master coming out!
Author's Response:
Well the last several chapters were from the weekend when they are in the usual mode...and they will be going on vacation soon, so they will relax more,,,,it's hard for the Master to not come out, because that is who he is, so when push comes to shove and a decision needs to be made, he will revert back to that mind frame because that's what he knows and where he feels comfortable .....
Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave a comment...I have a teaser for you...lml
Edward was pulling into the parking lot that was across the street from the main entrance. He didn’t say anything else until he held my door open for me taking my hand and pulling me closer to him. “I am sorry about my behavior”
I smiled at him “You girl forgives you”
His face moved closer to mine as he spoke “My girl is more tolerant then I deserve”
“Never” as I said the word his lips brushed against mine, it was a sweet chaste kiss. When he pulled back his eyes held a tenderness in them as he palmed the side of my face.
“Remember your task and speak to no one other then family members”
“Yes Sir”
“Come let’s get this over with so we can get home” I nodded in agreement following behind him with my eyes down. As we approached the entrance Edward spoke with the guy at the door.
“Tyler, how is the night going?”
“Edward, actually it’s been busy, it’s game night”
Edward groaned “damn I forget about that”
Tyler chuckled as we moved into the club telling us to have fun, I wasn’t sure what game night was but it appeared I was about to find out.
Date: 05 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 102: Chapter 102
I am sure Fiber One is the same as our fiber here in Australia, I used to eat it every morning and I had to add honey to it for me to be able to eat it. Like fucking cardboard. If it was tasty it would not be good for us, that is the way I looked at it.
I think call Bella a sore loser, is a bit harsh. If that had of been me, I would have left him there in the room by himself to gloat to himself.
I don't understand why he had to lie to her about control, and I dont care what you say Louise, he lied, it might me a white one, but he would have called Bella on it, you and I know that he would have.
Yes he had some control but he also had pure luck on his side as well, why not just admit that, why say it was all about his control. You are in the end creating a false sense of security... how did you put it... "The submissive woman in me took solace in the fact she could trust her Master to always come out victorious."
Once again to me it seem like Edward just needs to be in control and have the upper hand, while Bella becomes the doting "Yes Sir"... sometimes this lifestyle confuses the shit out of me. Seems that unless it is going Edwards way, it's no way. Then again as I have always said, unless you do live it, you don't fully understand it. There is only so much a person can explain in a story.
Thanks for a good chapter, but I am going nuts about the other side of this story, I am all happy about the baby shower but if I was telling the truth, I could give to fat rats what is going to happen, I want to know who is behind all of this, because it just cant be James, or it can be but he has help. You seem to be opening more cans of worms with the whole Cheyenne, but really what does it have to do with a the whole baby shower, apart from put a damper on their weekend.
Nothing seems to be getting solved... its going to chapter 150 by the time we find out who is behind this and by then I think I am going to be more frustrated then Bella on her Masters whipping bench being denied her release!
Date: 02 May 2011 Title: Chapter 64: Chapter 64
I cant wait for the movie to start here in australia, I read the book when it first came out over 2 years ago, for the book club I joined. It was on the best 50 books in some mag. I loved it then and I cant wait to see how the movie is adapted to it. I have always been disappointed when they make moves out of books and leave the most important parts out or cut them down so they dont really mean what they should.
So here is hoping they dont.
The chapter was good, I am glad that Leah talked to Edward. I am really looking forward to some action taking place soon and figuring out who is behind everything, it feels it has gone a bit stale in that area. I get we have to understand Bella and Edward better, but it seems that the whole 'get Bella' has disappeared from the story until this chapter. I hope that comes into it again soon.
Thanks for the update.