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Hi all, Thanks for taking the time to visit this page, and coming to find out a bit more about me. I live in Australia. I am over the age of 35, and a divorcee. I don't have any children but I do have three nieces, that I adore, and occasionally look after. I have two dogs Sunny and Ava. Sunny is a spoilt Pomeranian and Ava is a Siberian Husky, and you could say they are my children. I love to read and now giving writing a go. My favourite genre are Crime and Romance. Some of my favourite authors are Kathy Reichs, Janet Evanovich, Jane Austin, Matthew Reilly, James Patterson, Patricial Cormwell, John Grisham, Charlaine Harris, Ruth Rendell, Lynda La Plante, Harlan Coben, John Grisham, J. R. Ward, Michael Connelly, Dan Brown, Kyle Mills, Sara Gruen, and Ian Rakin. You can also find me on FFnet. http://www.fanfiction.net/~floramile Thanks
Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1255139
Date: 05 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 101: Chapter 101
I had a feeling that you were not going to let Bella win this. It would have been nice to see the cocky ass go down, and then to lie and say control after... I guess there is double standards for Edwards!
Date: 03 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56
I had to go back and read the last chapter, I was sure you said that they would finish their usual when they went to sleep, but then I read further and said till morning, I had confused myself.
I thought they had agreed till when they went to sleep, meaning that Bella could still sleep with Edward, I was going to ask then why he put her on the floor, but I have answered my own question, Edward clarified till morning... now I feel like the dummy for getting mad that he put her on the floor. I have a feeling that Edward knew he was going to treat her like a child for not keeping the calander up to date.
I swear that his memory is like an Elephant, he never forgets a thing. I bet he has been coming up with a punishment for that for a while or since he heard Bella talking to Jane. He had her punishment planned out.
I still hope he never uses the dog collar in public, yes I can handle the club, because it is part of their life, when I say public, I mean out at dinner, around family and friends that sort of thing. I feel Bella might become distressed in a situation like that.
I am glad we are getting to Forks, I really do hope they have a good time and Bella is really prepared mentally to go back there. I know she has her rock by her side, but facing that kind of past has to be confronting all the same and taking the one you love has to be hard as well. I cant remember she has or has not been back to Forks since she left James?
I know you will do us proud and I can not wait to see what lies ahead.
Author's Response:
I see you figured it out,, that;s good.. I have a feeling your right, Edward knew exactly what he was going to be doing, which is why he told her that for his purpose it would require her to stay in sub-mode until the morning....he's a slick dude...lol.....thanks for reading, I have this weeks teaser for you ...lml
Edward took the lid off his coffee while I took a bite of the danish moaning as the sweet gooey goodness melted in my mouth. The mixture of berries was a perfect balance between sweet and tangy with a thin layer of warm yummy cheese and sweet drizzle.
“MMMmmmmnnnn” I think my eyes rolled to the back of my head. When I opened my eyes Edward was looking at me licking his bottom lip. “What?”
He kind of shook his head as if trying to come out of a daze before taking a drink of coffee. “Last night was good?”
“Uh huh…” I nodded as I swallowed “…last night was great. I was a little worried when I saw the leash”
Edward cleared his throat “Well you shouldn’t have been looking, your eyes are to remain down not searching the room.”
I sighed “I know but when you put it down on the table all I could think about was when you were going to put it on me.” He looked…stunned, so I figured it would be a good idea to explain. “ Not that I wanted to walk around in public and I will admit it panicked me a little but it kind of excited me too.” taking a drink of coffee I asked the question I really wanted to know.
Date: 03 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51
I love the story you rec'ed, I read it about a week ago in one sitting and I have to say I did want to put a firecracker up Charlie's ass, from what Random Girl told me it get worse before it gets better and there is a show down between Bella and Charlie coming up.
Loved you chapter, it is good to see that Bella is a shining example of Edwards and her training, I have a feeling that there were a lot of jealous people in that club, not just for Bella being Edward sub but the other way around as well. Hmmm I am yet to understand Ciaus, is he just shit stirring or is he after Bella, the Club, or more??? I have not figured him out yet.
Author's Response:
Good I'm glad you liked it... I think Rebel Child and Preachers Daughter is a great, i always look forward to updates....I will give you a hint about Caius. His interest in Bella is not exactlly dangerous, it is more personal ....thanks for reading and leaving me a comment, here is this weeks teaser...
Excusing myself I went into the kitchen to check in dinner, everything was done so after pulling the chicken out of the oven - to allow it to rest - I started putting the other stuff into serving bowls. The sound of the kitchen door swinging open made me turn to see who was there, and I smiled as Aro joined me.
“Isabella I don’t wish to disturb you, but may I speak with you for a minute?”
Not wanting to be rude I stopped what I was doing. “Yes Sir, do you need something?”
“No..no, please continue, I can talk while you work.” I asked him to give me a second while I took the Corn Pie out of the oven because I didn’t want him talking to my back. Once it was out I gave him my attention.
Eyeing the pie I had just removed he smiled at me warmly “It’s nice to see you so carefree around everyone. You seem much more confident and I must admit it does me good to see that. You are young and need to laugh more.”
I giggled “Emmett is easy to laugh with”
Aro agreed with me with a slight nod of his head “And Edward?”
“Edward is easy to laugh with too.”
“Good, it truly brings me joy to see you happy and carefree.”
“Well I don’t know about carefree…”
Aro spoke before I could finish “Yes well that is wanted to talk to you about.
Date: 25 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55
See this is what I mean, Dog Collar, no way in hell would I let that every friggin happen. It better be for Seth and not Bella, otherwise I will be really disappointed.
See she put her trust in him, never to put one of those on her... first chance he gets, changes his mind. Ohhh well she signed up for this crazy!
Cant wait to see what happens, but if it was me RED would be said. No amount of submission or pleasure is worth being treated like a dog and having to ware a dog collar.
All I have to say is 'good luck Bella'
Date: 12 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53
I loved the last two chapter, I understood Aro's and Bella's relation from the start. I was not hard to pick up that he was like a father figure to her. Someone she could seek that fatherly advice from in her D/s world.
As for what happens in Forks, I would like to see them have a G/B relationship. For once I would like to see them be normal around family, no butt plugs in asses vibrating while she is trying to have a conversation with a family member... personally I find that disturbing. There is a time and a place and in front of her father is not one. Sorry if you feel that is prudish, but if I was in this sort of relationship that would be a NO GO!!
But this is your story and I am along for the ride.
Thank you for the update
Fiorella
Author's Response:
lol....you don't want your ass buzzing while you have dinner with your mother-in-law? ...lol....oddly enough sometimes that's the only way I get through dinners.well that and the wine...but hey! Maybe that's just my mother-in-law...lol......
yes I meant tete-a-tete...do I say it alot? Now come on you don't really think that I would have them go to Forks in full swing D/s.?...lol...that was a joke. Although here are several who would like to see it...lol...Bella is in no way ready for that and Charlie would be ...I can't even imagine what his reaction whould be. He is going to have enough of a problem with the tattoo...lol.....When was Jane around Alice? I think the only mention was when Alice said about coming to dinner at B&E's and Alice said about Jane's talk and that she calls Aro Master....did she say that happened in person? or did she say that she just doesn't like it ...((you know like it is common knowledge that Jane behaves that way ))...Because even in Bella's room, Jane talked in 1st person because she thought it would make Bella more comfortable I can't imagine that she wouldn't do that in front of Alice...or Esme....(just a thought)
I'm trying to tell this story as true to life as posssible. I know that I take some liberites and I did rush their relationship (( but that was due to time restraints and my day-by-day intent to tell my story))...Ok, I wouldn't say that it was a wasted chapter. There was more information about Aro and Bella's relationship then might have been needed, but thrown into the conversation was some tid-bits of information that was important. Such as people were mad that Edward didn't do something to Jess...well he doesn't have the power to do that. However Aro does and I think he will and I also think that Jess is not going to be happy about that...also Aro is taking care of the Mike situation. (why?) he said he didn't care about Jess but does he really? Jess is signing in under his name and then he has a few weeks where it was clear that someone erased a guest that signed in under him ((did that just make sense?)) that is what Aro wants to talk to Mike about....hmmm....and there were a few other pieces of information in the chapter... so no, I don't agree that it was a waste...besides as I said it was a requested conversation and they needed to have some dinner conversation anyway...lol.....Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. I have this weeks teaser for you...lml
Taking another drink of coffee I didn’t say anything, but that was twice now that something was not put on the calendar. The lunch with Jane yesterday- which I found out about accidentally - that was ultimately cancelled and now the waxing, I guess my submissive will have some explaining to do. But at the moment I thought of something else.
“If you are waxing have them remove the remaining patch of hair” Bella’s hand stopped mid-way to her mouth as she just stared at me and I wondered what had caused the reaction I was getting.
“W..Why? You said I could keep it”
Taking a drink of coffee I thought over my words to her on the subject “If I remember correctly I said you could keep it for the time-being but I would like it gone now”
“Can we talk about this?” her eyes stayed focused on the few pieces of bagel that were still on the paper towel. I didn’t understand what the problem was; we were talking about a tiny little patch of neatly trimmed hair.
“What’s the big deal?” I watched as she sat there quietly staring at the table chewing her bottom lip. “Bella?”
Devastation is the only word that came to my mind when she looked into my eyes “I know this is really stupid, but can I please keep it until next time?”
My eyes narrowed in confusion what did it matter if it was now or later? “Why?”
“Do you know why I kept a small patch?”
Date: 18 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54
Wonderful chapter, and you did answer a lot of question with this chapter, now more answers on part yet!
Thank you for the update.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review I sent you a seperate email for taking the time to do that ...lml
Date: 12 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 109: Chapter 109
I understand the need for Bella to keep her hands busy in this situation and cleaning is the only thing that keeps me in check. When ever I have a fight with someone, or need to calm down... I resort to cleaning. Sometimes people think its craziness, but you just need to do something useful. Edward should not be so harsh on Bella, let her friggin clean, if it make her happy.
My goodness, that man is a friggen control freak, some times it is what it is, a cleaning session to clean the soul. Let her be! Sometimes Edward has to loose!
Date: 11 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57
Well it really can only be Edward, I thought they were heading to Forks in this chapter!
Author's Response:
they are heading to forks in chapter 58 ... they still had that one day left in Victoria...but they are on their way to Forks now,,,
glad you liked the last chapter... sorry this is so late in getting out, but here is this weeks teaser...louise.
“You did your father’s wash?” that sounded like something a kid shouldn’t do.
“Yeah…since I was ten or eleven.” there must have been some kind of bewilderment on my face because she justified herself. “I told you this. Charlie worked all kinds of weird hours; mostly he would sleep during the day and …”
Breaking in to her train of thought I made the assumption “You did all the chores”
She shrugged “Someone had too”
I truly couldn’t imagine any ten year old taking it upon themselves to be responsible for keeping a house. I suppose that would be another reason why at the tender age of eighteen Bella thought herself ready for marriage. It seems so clear to me that she had hopes and dreams for a regular life, college, career and all the other things that eighteen year olds dream about. However in her advanced maturity she pushed her own happiness aside and took on the responsibility of trying to please someone else. I had thought Bella to be a natural submissive and it would seem like she was.
The mistake she made was in her choice of partners. I have no doubt that had he not been abusive she would have been a perfect wife. Bella did everything within her power to see to his happiness even to the point of losing her own.
Date: 17 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58
Wonderful chapter, I understand where both Bella and Leah are coming from, but I also feel that Leah is upset at losing her sister, she is so used to having Bella to herself that now she has to share, it is upsetting her and with the baby coming as well... that is just added stress.
But in saying all of that, Bella is entitled to live her life as she wants. Leah is just gong to have to understand. I feel it was just both of them being stubborn, not wanting to be the first one to say sorry, they are both in the wrong.
Loved the chapter.
Author's Response:
They are sisters and they love each other, but they are coming from two differant places and some how they have to meet in the middle...
Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave me a comment ....I have this weeks teaser for you...lml
Leah went into the bathroom while Bella came around the corner into the kitchen. Our eyes met immediately as a warm smile engulfed her face. It was clear she had been crying and it took everything I had in me to remain in the chair and not run to comfort her. Sue looked up as she started putting food on the table then went over to hug Bella just as I wanted to. Bella nodded at whatever Sue was saying then left her go so she could say hello to her father.
“Hi daddy” Bella said wrapping her arms around him from the back before leaning down to kiss his cheek.
Charlie’s hand gripped her forearm then patted it in a fatherly manner. “Hi’a Bells. How are you?”
“I’m good…” Bella gazed at me while adding “…I guess you got to met Edward?”
“Yes…no thanks to you. Paul introduced us” Bella glared at Jacob mouthing ‘Paul’, Jacob held his hands up in surrender “You don’t want to know”
Date: 26 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59
I am glad that Bella and Leah have had it out, it was needed and a little screaming match never hurt anyone, it releases all the tension.
I love how Edward is being with Bella, he is being the perfect Dom, I am still not sure that they should be having their usual, but the jury still has to weigh in. I wont be able to answer that until I have all the facts, it could turn out to be the best answer in the end.
I understand Edward wanting to know how no-one knew what was going on with the support system Bella has, I can understand how she did not want her family to suffer as much as she did, but I wonder if Bella realised that in the end seeing her broken body would have been more painful that them being able to get her out of that situation to begin with, but as Edward says hindsight is 20/20.
Wonderful chapter as always, keep up the excellent work, so looking forward to the next chapter, to you they may seem long but to us the reader they are never enough.
Date: 12 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 108: Chapter 108
Of course she will crack under interrogation, there is no way Edward will let her win, even if he has to use his Dom side to do it. It will be like the blow job... there is no way he will let her win... and do everything in his power to make sure she doesn't and in the end it will be something about some part of his body or about how good a Dom he is...
Date: 31 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60
Well I have to say that James lived up to his expectations.
Loving the story, I cant wait to see where it is going with that ass.
Date: 13 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61
Hmm I am thinking that the people that are asking the marrying question are not reading the story closly.
In this chapter and the last you can see why she did. To me Bella seemed to live in her own personal hell, she did not want to include any of her family or friends into the hell with her. She had low self-esteem and I am going to put it out there and say that she probably thought she could do not better and only thought herself worthy of someone like James.
What I don't get is how could James do this to her, he obversely had Vicky on the side right from the beginning, so why marry Bella and tear her world apart. I can think of a few but I am not sure if they would be right. Firstly, he like the power it gave him, secondly, the money, thirdly, if he could not have her now one could, and the last one I have is he did love her but could only show her by beating the crap out of her and jealously at the same time.
It would be interesting to see what James was and is thinking!
Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62
I love this chapter because it was and eye opener for us. Thought on Jared... I feel there is more to him than meets the eye. I feel he is hiding something? What I am not sure of.
Author's Response:
thanks and your right edward learned alot in this chapter
Date: 27 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 69: Chapter 69
I would like for you to clarify something for me.
At the beginning of this chapter when Edward and Bella were talking they were out of their play and usual time? If this is correct the question I have for you is:
Why did Edward turn into Dom mode when they were talking as Boyfriend and Girlfriend? This is what confuses me about this life style, I can never tell when they are b/g or D/s when the Dom can change his mind/stance on a topic at a drop of a hat to suit his needs and/or desire's. If they were still in their usual, I understand but the way I read it they were b/g.
Thanks
Author's Response:
you are not the only one to ask that and in epov he will explain it but i will tell you why too. e&b were dicussung their d/s relationship out of the bounds of their..usual...but still in the confines of their roles. bella's response of 'why' set him off not so much because of the question but because of her tone...she whined...had she asked in an adult way by saying 'can i ask why?' or 'is there a reason for me to do this?' he might have to her why. but because she acted like a child he treayed her like one. edward is a dom and his 1st instinct is to slip into that persona. bella slips into her submissive side also. you can't help what you are....he sort of told her why he took on his dom-ness when he said 'this is not a request from your bf. this is a demand from your master....he gave her the task as her master and expected the respect that she is suppose to give him...when she reponded without showing that respect ...he called her on it....and he told her that if she had done it during their d/s time she would have been punished...as it was she just got a lecture to be reminded of her place....yes it was out of their usual time frame but like i said, bella signed a contract saying that she would respect him at all times...that doesn't mean that they are not going to argue or disagree...because they will and you know yourself...we're women and we are the voice of reason, and there is a way to argue while still showing respect...hmmm...does that answer your question? you know another thing too...this is the 1st time that edward is dealing with awoman on a daily basis so he has to also learn that we're a little whinney sometimes...we pout, get moody and are overly emotional...he's just learning these things, so when push comes to shove and he feels like he has been backed into a corner (like bella whinning about something he had her so) he will revert to what he knows...which is taking control...he's getting there....ok...now that i wrote all that...lol..you see why my chapters are so long...lol...anyway i hope that helps...thanks for reading and thanks for the question. unlike edward i love to explain my motives...lol...louise
Date: 06 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 70: Chapter 70
Hmm, I feel Bella should have gone into the drink for her part in cheating... and yes they cheated!
Apart fromt that I loved this chapter it was wonderful and I like the floating fairy story as well.
Author's Response:
Really ??? You think that's cheating?? I agree with Emmett, it's using what ever equipment you have at your disposal...lol....the floating fairies are real ...here is a link you can look up ...thanks for reading ..louise
http://video.oregonbeachvacations.com/video/Float-Fairies-of-Lincoln-City
Date: 22 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 73: Chapter 73
Wow, I thought I had missed a chapter when you posted this, I was used to you poting weekly... you spoiled us!
I have to agree with you, Bella has come a long way, but I thought she would have confonted him before she wrote in her journal. But I am glad that she is. I dont think she should give up on her dreams.
As for Edward, he expects Bella to be forth coming when she has a problem, maybe he should do the same. He should tell her when something is bothering him instead of dwelling on the situation and making her feel like she has done something to wrong him. I understand he could not do it at dinner, but as soon as they walked in the door he could have told her,
I feel next chapter is gong to be intersting!
Author's Response:
No you didn't miss anything but I do thank you for being patient...ummm.. for the most part Edward addresses a problem immediatly.. in this instance well it's kind of like a screaming baby...sometimes it's better to walk away from them rather then get more frustrated and do something you will regret ....anyway thanks for reading ...louise
Date: 31 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 74: Chapter 74 (1st half)
I understand where you are coming from with Bella keeping something from Edward, but I also feel that he was not as forth coming with her.
Maybe if he explained himself better when giving Bella the task, she would not have needed to call Jane for conformation. But then again Bella should have gone to Edward first to clarify what she was thinking. It really is a catch 22 situation of who is right and who is wrong, it was good of Edward to realise he was to blame also, but who is going to punish him for his wrong doings?
It seems to me that the submissive is the one to get punished (and I am sure it hurts the Dom to have to punish his submissive) but really how much does it really hurt them. The way I look at it is their pride is all that is hurt and it is only because they did not do something correctly. So how is that really punishing them, when Edward is experienced and should not be making these mistakes? Where is Bella is in training and allowed to make these mistakes because it is the only way she s going to learn. So once again who is going to punish Edward for his bad training techniques? Does Emmett get to paddle Edwards Ass???
A good chapter and it open your mind more, but I just need clarificaton, I am not baging the story or saying it is wrong what Edward did, I just need to understand for me. As I have always said, there is no way I could live this life style and I have to say it must take a strong peron to live this life style. To always be polite, watch how you speak (even as a girlfriend, because you can still get repremanded for the way you talk), to have to watch every step you take incase you fuck up like Bella has done.
When I was married, I had no problem looking after my husband, he always had clean cloths, ironed, I cooked every meal and cleand up after as well. I did all of the house work. He never really wanted for nothing, but I tell you if he dirted an area after I had spent all day cleaning or did not thow his clothes down shut to the laundry. There is no way I would bit my tounge, I asked nicly but if it was not done, words were said.
Not to be able to have an argument and just yell and get it off your chest, never in a nasty vandictive way, just to get your point accross, I would have gone nuts. Just to be able to tell the person point blank, you are pissing me off at the moment and I need to be left alone to think. You are probably thinking this is why the marriage broke up, no it was not, he needed to go find himself. Yeah at 34 years of age after a 10 year relationship and 3 years of marriage, he needed to find himself, I felt like saying put your hand on your head and you will. But I just let him go, no point in fighting for someone that does not want to be there.
Maybe I am looking at a D/s relationship the wrong way. I dont know!
Author's Response:
If Bella needed more clearification it is her job to come and get it. If your boss gives you and assignment and you don't comepletely understand do you just do it half-ass or do you get all the details so you can do it correct?...That's what she should have done, besides there were other things going on in Bella's mind besides the task...which was why I didn't want to split up the chapter...but it's all good, you should understand better in the next chapter. Now to your husband...i would be upset about that too...and in the case where he made a mess for you to clean that was a lack of respect for you...Bella has yelled at Edward,,,she just did it on the beach, pointing her finger and yelling at him in front of his family...thiose things happen.there is justifable anger and then there is bitchy vindictivness...Edward corrects her for the later one, especially when it is direct relation to the D/s part of their life....He will accpet nothing less and to tell you the truth he would be a bad Dom if he did....hopefully the next chapter will clear some things up,,,thanks for reading..louise
Date: 15 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 75
Hi Louise,
I have been missing in action, well I have been taking a break from reading this story, not because I did not love it, I do. I wanted more to read then one chapter at a time. Now I have a flow going for a few chapters.
As always, I have a few questions and statements.
I understand that Edward is there to fulfill her needs, as you said "I will indulge your wants at my discretion, however, your needs will always be exceedingly met. " Wants are things we desire, and I am sure that most of Edward desire's are met, in and out of the playroom, so if Bella wants some of her wants and or desires met, why cant she. She has asked or is it that fact that she does not ask and just takes that gets to Edward?
Okay this is where I think I get confused with BDSM relationships, they intermingle into the relationship of boyfriend / girlfriend. In times when they are b/g she still have to follow his rules, then what is the point of having b/g time because when you really look at it they are still in that mind frame of thinking if I do this how is it going to affect someone else perceptions. You are his girlfriend you don’t have to answer to him fully, you have made a commitment of seeing if you can mesh your worlds together, the get you know you stage of the relationship, you are not married yet! You are still able to be individuals and figure out what you both want from the relationship.
I understand the ‘be respectful and follow the rules’ part, that is logical in all relationships, but when it is b/g time, no aspect of BDSM should come into it. Why should I be punished for wanting to go and see a movie, in my own time (when she is not around Edward) and get to bed at 9:00 p.m. as long as I get the recommended 8 hours, and when I think about, really how many people get 8 hours of sleep a night? Only the submissive and children in this world, because I know most of my family and friends don’t
Okay so I getting off the beaten track and I am probably going around in circle for you… One day it will all click in my head. The only other line that sort of got my goat up and would like to clarify, “Total…com..complete…surrender.” To me when I read this like complete surrender, is hand over your identity to someone else, become a ‘Stepford Wife’, Do as I say. I am really hoping that is not what you are meaning here, because I would open one a can of angry and it would not be nice, for I am not going to assume that is what you mean and just go from there. I am hoping you mean that she will allow Edward to know what is good for her, but at the same time taking into consideration what is best for her. As you said up above! But that she does not loose the real her, Edward helps her to grow with in, a partner that challenges her but allows her to make the mistake at the same time. Give and take from both sides of their relationships, BDSM and B/G time.
Okay I am just rambling and starting to get worked up and that is not what this email is about. I just need clarification.
Thanks for taking the time to read my ramblings.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
You are mistaken when you say that most of Edward's desires are met...All of his desires are met ...always. Bella on the other hand, her desires (wants) are optional. Edward will fulfill her desires on a 'as he sees fit' basis. I'm not say that he won't, I'm just saying that as her Dom he is under no obligation to give in to her every desire. That makes for a spoiled, demanding submissive...Yes she has to always follow the rules, but the rules are basic healthy life practises...eating, sleeping, exercise...those kinds of things...the rest are basic, no materbating - which is a moot point since they are always together and then to respect him at all times. If they weren't Bf/Gf and the only time she saw him was during there D/s time. He would examine her daily log very closely to make sure that she wasn't slidding on her responsibilties and if she did, she would be punished....
How can i explain this so it makes sense to you....hmmm...
i live in an area where the major hospital has gone smoke-free (a lot of hospitals and work places have done that lately) but the hospital has taken it a step further, in order to get a job there or to retain your job, you can not smoke at all. Ever...they test you for nicotine...if you have it in your system they will help you once to quit and if you are tested postive again, you;re immedatly fired....Now I ask you, when your at the hospital working - I can see them saying you are not allowed to smoke on the premises, but how can they tell a person that they can't smoke in their own homes? They say if you want a job, then you comply with their rules...
It's the same thing,Edward set rules, Bella agreed to abide by them and she does...
You along with many other seemed to be caught up on the fact that the D/s persona's come through during non-D/s times....but don't you see those personas are a part of them. There are 4 people involved in thier relationship Edward & the Dom / Bella & the sub ...during any given time those people are always present and it truely depends upon the circumstances. when they are not in their D/s modes if something happens, a crisis or a situation arises when the Dom veiws that his submissive needs him, He will make an appearence. It would be a breach of thier relationship and the trust Isabella has in her Master for him not too. She needs to know without a doubt that when He is needed her Master will be there...He can not ever hang up His 'gone fishing' sign...and His presence might only be needed for a second, a look, a quick retort, to remind her that she is not alone nor is she not held accountable for her actions.
The girlfriend doesn't have to answer to Him...the submissive does and since they are the same person the Gf would do well to obey....They are always individuals and their relationship will change as their needs and expectations change, they will evolve and grow deeper into their roles, wheather they are married or not has no bearing on the facts. Isabella is Edward's submissive, he owns her, she willingly said, I will obey you, in all things....So your little senero of going to the movies..."Go, have fun, laugh, cry, joke, enjoy it,,,if you have and 8 hour sleep time and you sleep from 1am - 9am that's fine ....but if your bedtime is 9pm,,,i would suggest you go to an early movie...or be willing to pay the consequences... and if you consistantly - willingly disobey your Dom is going to question your commitment to the relationship...and will probably release you to do your own thing....becasue you are just not submissive...now if all you want from a Dom, is for him to be your Dom during play time, then that is something you need to get straight in the contract, in the negotications...that is all set up back in the begining...and if you don't agree with something, that is your time to tell him....and there are subs who are only under their Dom's rules during play time... In DitR...Rose is like that, Bella is not ...Bella wants the rules, she likes the sudden appearence of her Master.
Total surrender is just that, she will surrender to his will, she won't fight him anymore by trying to figure things out, second guess his instructions or seek someone else's idea's ...she will come to him 1st, she surrender her will to him....she's not going to fight him anymore...No one loses who they are and Edward loves Bella for who she is, quirks, temper, reflectivness, he loves everything about her, but in order for him to take her deeper into her submission he needs her to surrender to him and not second guess what he says or does....that all comes with trust...She trust Him to lead her in the right direction knowing that He only has the best intentions for her will being ....not His...and the enjoyment He gets out of it, is watching her grow, blossom and become strong...and she is.....
Date: 17 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78
OMG....
I think you have stunned me with the last three chapters, after I got your email from 75, I think it was... I stayed open reading the next chapter, what I should have done was just kept reading and you explained it all in the next chapter... stupid me!
Then I got to this chapter and as I was reading I thought Bella would start to regress with ever thing Mr Wiess was telling her, and I thought here we go again, Bella builds up her confidence and it is going to come tumbling down, but you did a good job with both Edward and Charlie comforting her and i have to say I especially love the fact that she agree to both of their demands to stay away from Heather. I really do hope she does, otherwise I have a feeling she will not be sitting on her ass for a month. I think for disobeying that Edward would tan her hide.
I would really like for Victoria to find out where the money is really going and what James did to her sister, if in fact he did rape her, and then I would like to see him go to jail. I would also like to see him be charged for what he did to Bella, it is about time she put that part of her life behind her once and for all, and stops allowing him to get away with this. She can berate herself as much as she wants but at the end of the day, James has to stand up and be accountable and he is not.
Thank you for a wonderful story and to tell you the truth I would forego playtime just to know what is going to happen. But then again, who am I kidding, bring on the play room!
Thanks Louise, have a good weekend.
Fiorella
Date: 16 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 79: Chapter 79
1. No i dont think that Jess is that stupid as you are making out. There could have been many reasons for her to contact Edward and Bella now. Some being getting information, seeing what their next moves are, seeing what her next move should be, giving them information on Mike and Karen as they could have betrayed her, finding out how much they know what is really going on, there are mulitipul things that it could be.
2. It could go two ways for Edward, firstly it could turn into a shit fight and Bella could lock herself down or fight like hell or she could do what she said she would do and give herself completly to Edward, this one would be the better, but hey this is Bella we are talking about, she is unpredictable.
3. a few things once agian, she could want money, she could have wanted the marraige Bella had with James or her image of their marriage, she could blame Bella for what happened to her, she could resent the fact that James never acknowledged the baby and this could be due to Bella in Karen's eyes, or she might just wanted a family or the imagel of a family with James.
4. The only thing that really comes to mind is revenge against Bella, have her feel the apin that she went though, not know what Bella really when though herself or maybe blackmail.
5. Yes I think she could be very dangerious, she could even be working with James for all we know. But I have a feeling I could be wrong here as well.
Date: 16 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 83: Chapter 83
Actually Louise, I am going to be a bit of an Edward hater, what else would you expect from me. I understand there are lessons, and then there are lessons!
Yes Bella should have safeworded, but really did he have to go to the extent that he did. He seems to like using words, really could he not have explained this to her first and then if it continued he could have gone to this extent.
He is quick to make sure that Bella talks but I never seem to see him sit down and talk to Bella when something is on his mind, he tends to be a drama queen and do shit like this. Really it is like the youth of today with technology. A simple converstation is not so over rated, but everyone seems to think it is.
He could of pulled her up when she said what she did, it is like getting blood out of stone with him. Nothing can be simple, some times simple is just as effective, less people would get frustrated with him, and I am sure that Bella would as well. I now you will have some profound wisdom for explaining this to me, and I cant wait, beause it always opens my eyes. But really sometimes life is complacated enough that you dont have to resort to lengths like this, when he could of opend his mouths and explained what a cum slut was to her when they were driving back from their holiday and I am sure it would have had the same affect.
Regards
Fiorella
Date: 25 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 88: Chapter 88
Hey Louise,
I have once again let the story go to give me more to read.
I know what I am about to say might upset some other readers and it in no ways means I still dont love your story, because I do love these two crazy people.
I know BDSM has a lot to do with this stroy but to me it seems that at the moment it is all it seems to be. I want to press the fast forward button and find out what the hell is going to happen, the momentum of the story seems to have stopped and veered into a complete different direction, it seems to be about sex, sex, and more sex, and there is nothing wrong with that, but to me, it is draging this story out and not in a good way.
I am more upset that this is happening, because I do love this story, but I want to get into the meety again, I know she is learning, we get it. We get that she has lessons that have not been covered, so get on with it. I this stroy had good suspence going and now that seems to have died in the ass and it all about the playroom / club / BDSM, not even their vanilla life gets a look it.
There is more to your characters... well there was, that all seems to have gone by the way side. Its turned into another "The Training" and that has been done so many times. Yes it is different or should say was, but now it is like every other BDSM story.
I know this is not what you want to here, but for me it has got to the point of where I skim you chatper and only read the non sex parts... and that is a whole lot of skimming.
Sorry if this hurts your feeling, it is not ment to, as I said, I love these guys and I want to know what happens... even if it takes another 84 chatpers, but I really hope it does not.
Regards
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Hi Fiorella
You're not hurting my feelings, i know the past 5 chapters or so have been nothing but the playroom, demonstartions and lessons, but it is their weekend - and during that time their ...usual...takes over every aspect of their life...but the week is coming and Bella has decided to end their D/s time early....anyway, i hope you hang in there, they only have about 9 or 10 more days to their story, and i know i get a bit wordy.... there is just so much i want to say and express that it comes out in the form of either long chapters or lots of them...lol...Anyway, thanks for reading and the comments and i don't mind criticism at all, it makes me want to write a better story and it keeps me on the right track ...just as long as it pertains to the story and is not a personal attack or a means to try and get me to change the direction or personalities of my charaters...so again for that i thank you ...louise
Date: 30 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 89: Chapter 89
Crap I forgot she was on house arrest by Edward... Thank you for not taking my review the wrong way. I think that day I had hit a point with a few different stories and then I read yours and it was heading the same way as a lot of my stories I was reading... I love the fact that yours was always moving, and then all of a sudden it had stoped in this rut of just playroom and sex and as much as I love reading smut, your story was not just about that, but all of a sudden had become that. I think I got a little upset, for that I am sorry.
I kept seeing it being updated and I had to leave it for a while, but I am glad that I have not giving up on it. It is going to be interesting to see what Bella think now!
Regards
Fiorella
Date: 01 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 90: Chapter 90
Ohhh I feel for both of them, Edward needing to still show his dominace when things threaten Bella, and Bella needing to reach for a bowl of Fruity Pebbles for comfort. If I was her that is what I would be telling Edward. The hormones made me do it.
I am glad to see that they are able to talk to each other but I am not sure how Bella is going to talk her way out of this.
I was exited about her talk with Demetri, he seems to have a lot of soul and depth to him, like most artsy people.
I hope you had a good weekend.
Regards
Fiorella
Date: 01 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 91: Chapter 91
I love the last three lines... from being forced to have a buddy system one day and then being grounded the next day, has to be mind blowing. But i do understand their concern.
What shocks me until these pictures turned up Bella was a little blase with it all, I am sorry but this is your life someone is fucking with and she is sitting there thinking that it could be an accident. She needs her head read sometimes.
I am glad now this has shocked her into believing someone is after her. I was actually wondering if it was going to take someone shooting her, for her to actually pull her head out and realise what was going on was serious.
The Fruity Pebbles... I would have eaten them but I understand why she did not, to me that was a bit of blackmailing on Edwards part, really one bowl would not have harmed her, but it was the principal of the fact that she bought them and did not tell him. Really its a bowl of suggary goodness when it that time of the month, I did notice to how he told her that dinner was nearly ready when she had a little bit of chocolate, when will the men understand, leave it alone and let us indulge when we are hormonal, it chocolate!
Thank for the chapter
Regards
Fiorella
Date: 01 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 92: Chapter 92
I understand Edwards frustration in Bella when it comes to her safety, I feel it when you write from his point of view, and I could never understand why she felt the need to always make light of it. Now I do, I understand why she does. I cant imagine the fear she must have felt after everything that has happened. Until she explained it to Edward with “…I don’t want to be afraid anymore... you make me feel safe …I was just starting to feel normal…and I don’t want to go back…to living in fear…you don’t know what it’s like…you have no idea what it feels like…to be afraid…all the time…” it then clicked in my head, what fear she has been going through and I could not imagine looking over my should 24/7. To live your life like that would be mind numbing.
I also love how everyone understands what she is going through, but in their own way also need the reasurrance that she will look after herself, even if they need to demand it. I think I love the ending of this more than anything, firstly Bella actually saying the words she had bottled up for so long, that she had been raped by James and that she was understand that she need to acknowledge it.
Secondly the way Edward actually realised that she thought he was using her when in actual fact he was trying to gain his inner peace and then he realised he was going about it the wrong way, he just wanted to love her and in the end he got that right as well.
Love the chapter. Love IT! This is what I was talking about with your writing, you know how to move the story along, even if it take 3 chapter to get though a day, you keep it moving and there is always something more to learn, I know in those chapters in the playroom were important in both Edward and Bella growing, bonding and trusting in each other implicity, but to me the main substance of the story had been lost and in less than 3 chapter you have turned it around and you have told me more than I could have ever expected to happen.
THANK YOU.
Regards
Fiorella
Date: 01 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 93: Chapter 93
Hey Louise, I disagree with you saying that this chapter does not move the story forward, to me it did. It gave me answers to some of my questions for Bella and Edward. How could he still get angry of her with Jake as much as I agree with him being upset, having him explain why show how as much as they grow together inside and out of the playroom, neither of them are complete in trusting their relationship?
They still need to grow, not only trusting in one and other by showing it, but also in telling each other what they really mean. I feel sometimes they take each other for granted and in this chapter they both showed that they were still venerable, and needing of each other to understand different facets of their anger or sadness.
We watched them grow a lot in this chapter, we understood how they ticked, just that little bit more. I say you were successful in moving this story forward. Lets just hope that the characters learnt what we did.
Regards
Fiorella
Date: 01 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 94: Chapter 94
Louise, Question for you, I thought Bella made a promise to Charlie, that she would tell Officer Stick up his Bum that James what the person that raped her or if not promised they talked about her telling him and she said she would. I could be wrong but somewhere in the deep black hole that is my mind it is sending off warning bells.
If she did make this promise or did tell Charlie she would, why in this chapter did she not? I think I would be feeling like shit if I ever broke a promise to my father. (it was either a phone call or he asked her before she lefted Forks.
I was going to annoy me till I found it and I did.
End of chapter 78... “You don’t ask for much Bells, you never have and I like to see you happy. Hell I just want to see you”
My father’s words brought tears to my eyes as I saw how much he loved me. I didn’t get a chance to say anything before dad spoke “Would you do your old man a favor?”
“Anything”
Leaning forward he placed his index finger on the business card laying on the table, propelling it in my direction across the smooth surface. Once it was within my immediate reach he straightened up, stared into my eyes and spoke with a unwavering voice “You call Officer Hawk, tell him what happened in your kitchen and you put that son of a bitch behind bars where he belongs”
To me when I read this, she does promise her father, so why did she not???Regards Fiorella
Author's Response:
Sorry i didn't get to reply earlier, i was at work and for some reason my phone will not let reply to TWCS site .. anyway, Bella didn't promise Charlie, she gave an abrupt answer without knowing what he wanted,,,Charlie knew she wasn't going to do it, in the OT Charlie's Surprise Visit - the conversation is elaberated on and you get a better understanding of the rest of the conversation... so check that out - especially towards the end of it. I hope that helps you if you still have more questions let me know ... thanks for reading ...louise
Date: 06 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 95: Chapter 95
Hmm the bet, I was thinking both of them can win, I am sure there is some way that Edward explodes right on 10 minutes... but if I really had to choose I think I would like Bella to win this one.
I understand why Edward did not say much to the detective but I wish he would have told the idiot 'what for'. It can't be easy for him to have to keep Bella's secrete about who raped her, really I would like for the detective to put himself in her shoes. As Edward said she has to hit rock bottom first, I really hope she gets there soon, the poor love.
Thanks for the update, have a good weekend and thanks of explaining my question from last week.
Kind regards
Fiorella
Date: 09 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 96: Chapter 96
Is Alice preggers again... she is acting like it.
Date: 02 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 97: Chapter 97
I know this sounds bad, but the reason I left the story go for so long is I am tired of the playroom, I am tired of the centre, I want to know more about how is behind the attacks. I want to out a bomb under this story and move it along.
I know what horrid words to say, "tired of the playroom" its like the focus of this story has shifted from a good suspense to nothing but sex, sex and more sex. it is ruining your story, the one I loved so much.
Please for the love of God, can we focus on the who is after Bella a bit more.
Fiorella
Date: 03 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 98: Chapter 98
I think Bella was right on the whole tampon thing, some things need to be kept to ones self... this is one of them, that, pee and poop was three thing I did not do in front of my ex-husband. Sometimes a little bit of mystery is okay.
As much as I bitch about not wanting playroom times, I have to read the chapter because you put so much in between. Little tidbits that remind us or inform us a little about them... but I would really like to know who is behind all of this.
As for Alice... I just hope one day no-one speaks about her that way, she might come from money and stature but it can go as fast as well.
Low score only because I want more of the original!
Date: 13 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 110: Chapter 110
loved the last couple of chapters
New banner by Julie C.
Eighteen year old Bella Swan has moved to the small Western town of Spoons Valley to meet up with her older brother, Emmet, after their parents' deaths. She always figured that the Wild West that she read about would be like the descriptions in Harper's Weekly, but she didn't realize just how wild and dangerous things would get once she arrived.
AH. Canon Couples.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Historical, Humor, Mystery, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Ageise02 Current Reads, Finished, Kuu Faves, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 90 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 131753 Read Count: 282984
Date: 11 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 90: Chapter 90: Epilogue
I perposly left this until it was finished and I have to say...LOVED IT!!!!
Wonderful story and I am sure you could have kept going, but I understand it has to end somewhere.
Thank you for this story.
***NOW COMPLETE***
Bella Swan had led a very ordinary life. She'd married her college boyfriend only to be betrayed when he left her for another girl. After the death of her father, she pulled out a map and threw a dart. The implications of that one simple act would surprise her beyond her belief. She found a home...she found a job...could she find love again after surviving a cheating husband? Only time will tell. What secrets will the beautiful stranger she meets have and how will she deal with them?
AH/OOC. Canon pairings, with twists. NC-17 for dirty language, a smattering of BDSM, and the usual lemony goodness. If you wouldn't read it with your mother standing over your shoulder, you shouldn't be reading it at all!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, My All-Time Favorites, Ageise02 Current Reads, Single parents , I Whitlock's read , My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories Read by CNYBella, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 258357 Read Count: 183820
Date: 22 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20-Here He Goes Agroveling...
What a wonderful story, I really can't wait to see what is going to happen. It has taken me a week to read it, because real life kept getting in the way.
Please update soon.
Fiorella
Date: 01 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - Pain
Seriously you let Bella be run off by some bitch after money, come on! Fuck I am over this sort of fuckery in stories, for fuck sakes buck up and make them fight for what they believe in. It is not that hard to fucking write, but you all take the easy way out and have them run away from each other which really pisses your readers off.
I feel sorry for Carlie. You have not made me feel sorry for Bella or Edward, they knew the ramifications of having a semi life style like that. They could have fought it because they never did it in front of Carlie, their pride got in the way the gutless wonders. Now all they have done is given the bitch more leverage in the end to come back for more money when it runs out instead of instead of building a solid front.
What is going to happen if and when they get together again, Carlie is not going to believe a thing Bella has to say because she already broke her heart once... trust me kids never forget. I see it in my nieces every day they say good bye to their father. If he does not follow through on something they remind him constantly.
Let not forget about the adoption, this is really going to look good in front of a Judge, the first sign of trouble and they split... hmmm that is going to give Bella brownie points. NOT!
I could keep gong but I wont, actually I don't understand you going into hiding you knew what you wrote was going to cause this sort of drama, so put your big girl panties on and face it head on.
Date: 06 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - Heartache
I am going to hit you with this and it is probably not going to be nice.
I understand that Bella went through a shit load but so did Edward and if his family (espically Emmett) does not stop giving him shit, then I have to say that he will be even more fuck up than Bella. He will be the one that is not eating and drinking himself into a stupor soon.
She decided to leave, yes Edward did nothing to stop her but SHE MADE HER MIND UP TO GO not the other way around. When someone wants to leave they leave, she chose to go, so the blame can not fall on Edwards shoulders alone, like everyone seems to think. Some of the blame has to fall on Bella as well, she seems to be getting off scott-free and this is not fair on Edward. Come on there were two people in this relationship not just Edward, well actually there was three, but Carlie had was a bystander.
I like your idea of them getting couciling, I feel they all need it. As a family, as a couple and as individuals. As for when Bella was in hospital, I feel you got it close to what would have happened. My sister had a really bad motorcycle accident and you had it close to spot on. The only thing different with my sister she was in a drug induced coma for nearly 2 months but that was becuase they had her stomach open that long and she could not move around at all in bed.
I was really angry last week when I read that chapter and I have to say you have sort of redeemed yourself apart from everyone blaming Edward. I understand that stories should have their ups and downs and I cant beleive that Edward ended up paying out Jessica... who is to say she wont do it again, really if all she is after money what is stopping her coming back for more, him telling her that he will ruin her life means nothing when she could pull the same card again. It happens is all I am saying.
Thank you for the update, you will not loose me as a reader as I like to see where you are going to take this, but I will have my opinion when I dont like something. You are doing a good job at your story even if I dont like what is being written sometimes, it is your story and you can write it anyway you want. So thank you for sticking to your guns.
Fiorella
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Beginning to Heal
I am glad that they are moving forward, but I have one question for you that I would like answered if you have the time. I understand why everyone is pissed off at them for the way it ended, but why did they blame Edward solely? If Bella had not suggested it, it would not have happened, I understand Edwards should have grown a pair and said no, but he was doing what Bella had asked. Now she seems to place it on his head as well. I am just a little confused is all. She is to blame as much as him if not more for suggesting they break up, if she had not planted the seed it would never have happened and they would probably be married by now.
I just cant seem to get around this fact. I love how you have made her stronger and I am glad that she is doing what she wants, but if she cant be honest with him about not wanting the BDSM life style she should be honest and tell him. From what I can gather they are still yet to talk about it. I can just imagine how hard it is for Edward to walk away from something that is ingrained in someone. It is like telling an OCD person not to clean up a mess, it is the same with BDSM.
I am worried that she is not going to be able to give him what he wants and what he needs in his life and then they are back at square one. They have grown so much in this chapter but there are some thing that they have not even touched on yet and that is worrying, before they start a sexual relationship again. I know this is only fiction and not everything has to be perfect just like life is not perfect. But I really would like them to have that talk before they even go any where with their sexual relationship.
I have to say that I am glad that they are moving forward and I know that my review have not been nice or stellar the last two chapters but you really threw me for a loop and all of this crap could have been avoided if they did not have their heads up their asses. But I would really like to see someone place the blame on Bella for once. She is the integrator of this colossal fuck up as I said. It would be nice for someone to be on Edwards side, everyone always placed the blame on him.
Esme started but then she also included Edward, I would just like someone to call it as it is seen, why put someone in a position for fight for you when you were the person trying to get the easy out and then in the end still wish to be their. We all know she did not want to go anywhere so why not stay and fight to begin with? Then she and everyone places the blame on Edward. Yes he fuck up I get it, I really do... but for once I would just like the blame to be placed where it belongs... On BELLA!
Thank you for a wonderful chapter and some insight into their minds.
Fiorella
Date: 13 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - The Next Phase
I am glad that they had their date, not so happy about Edward but I am sure that seeing him sing Miley would have made up for it.
Good chapter it is nice to see them move on. I really like how you made Bella step up and let Edward know that he was not the only one to blame and I like how she talked to the rest of the family.
You did a wonderful job with this chapter and I cant wait to see what is going to happen next and how Edward is going to get himself out of this one.
Thank you
Fiorella
Date: 17 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - Moving...Up and On
You push these chapter out like crazy, Love it.
Thanks for the update.
Fiorella
Date: 20 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 - A Real Family
Good chapter, I am not sure about the switch because it just seem to confuse her then actually help her.
I understand shy Bella did not want to go see her mum, but I have a feeling she might regret it in the long run. Even if it is just to find out what the problem is and nothing more. At least than she can have peace that she is the bigger person at the end of the day. Unlike her mother.
Apart from that excellent chapter.
Fiorella
Date: 06 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37 - A Promise Broken isn't Easily Fixed
I actually like what you did, it does happen in real life so it is good to see it in a story.
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Party In The USA! (Come on, I had to!)
I love the story and the chapter, I only have one gripe with this chapter and it was right after the wedding.
I like how they talked about the dom and sub thing, it was the best outcome for them and I loved how you handled it.
The gripe I have is how Bella acted when they went to the room and she went way overboard with what Edward said, really did she need to be a bitch about it. I understand hormones and all that but really, when ever these two fight it is always Edwards fault! It was the same when she walked out, he was expected to go after her... SHE WALKED OUT AND LEFT not the other way around.
Now she goes nuts over something he said, how about asking question the question, why are you frighted to have sex with me. She had the information he needed and it could have been settled in seconds but no lets take it to the empt degree once again. Sorry I feel Bella is a drama queen here. Hello he just found out she was carrying his baby and most men think they will hurt the baby...
Apart from that a wonderful and excellent job once again... good to see they talked!
Date: 04 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 - The Great Car Caper
Loved where you took the story in this chapter, but I have to say it was the quickest pregnancy in history.
Thank you for the update.
Fiorella
Date: 10 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 - Crack the Whip
I think Emmett got off a little bit easy but apart from that it was an excellent chapter.
Date: 13 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 - Too Young To Die
Of corse there is a reason Edward took the money. He is going to do some good with it.
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"Boop! Bella's preggers!" Emmett said. "And guess whose the father?" Rosalie continued. "Edward Cullen!" Alice yelled. How could this day get any worse? Edward Cullen stalked toward us a harsh glare on his face.
Edward Cullen and Isabella Swan absolutely hate eachother. What will happen in this comedy? Can love find a way? What happens when the worst tears everything apart? Love is stronger than hate my friends but can it pull through the worst of life?
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 52328 Read Count: 15446
Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Remember Me
I have to say that I have enjoyed reading your story up until this chapter.
Bella is rude, selfish and down right a pain in the ass in this chapter. If I was Edward and her friends I would have told her to stop acting like a child and grow the hell up.
Memory does not come back because she want him to remember, patients and comfort help, not yelling and accusing him that he does not want to remember.
If I was Edward I would have told her to fly a kite, it all seems to be Poor Bella, but I am sorry, she was not the only one effect by the accident and at least she has her memories to look back on, Edward only has confusion.
Bella is conceited, disrespectful and deserves to be alone for what she pulled in this chapter.
Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Drastic Measures
He let Bella off to easy. He is a sucker, and you cant even call him a sucker in love because he does not remember.
Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Friends
Yeah way to man up and help out Bella, break the poor guys heat that little bit more..
I have an idea while you are at it, why dont you grab a knife and stab him in the back as well.
Bella Swan runs a public relations firm. She reconnects with her college room mate Alice who has also through the years tried, without success, to push her two favorite people into a dating relationship. Little does Bella know that soon fate will intervene. Bella is soon to find out that "relative humidity" has a whole new meaning.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 165318 Read Count: 19378
Date: 30 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16-Explanations and Expos
Short but sweet chapter, straight to the point, I like it.
You have done wonderful.
Date: 08 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14- Meet the Parents
Wonderful chapter, cant wait for the next one.
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15- Elation and the Aftermath
Ohhh I think Jacob is going to get into to trouble!!!
Acutally seeing as he is not a busines partner int he legal sence, what business is it to Jacob if Bella go married. I dont understand why he is so angry.
Love the chapter
Fiorella
Just when Bella is ready to give up on her dream, she gets accepted to the Cullen Ballet Academy. Will Edward be able to help her deal with her loss? Can she save him from his? E/B, Em/R, A/J, C/E
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Fics to Read, I Whitlock's read , Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, luv2write finished reads, to read
Chapters: 48 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 78309 Read Count: 129805
Date: 01 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20
I have loving this cute little story on Edward and Bella.
All of your charachters are vibrent and fun.
Thank you for the quick updates as well, Loving that the most.
Author's Response:
Thank you:)
FBI psychologist Bella Swan is being stalked by one of criminals she helped put behind bars. When she is forced to leave her home town to lay low for a while, she meets the most gorgeous man she has ever seen. Is he really who he says he is, or is he working for the stalker?
Thank you NoelleSeven for the banner!!!!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Mystery, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 277257 Read Count: 40875
Date: 22 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 So Far Away
Wonderful story, I really like how these two are getting to know each other, I really do hope when she find out what is really happening that she will not be to angry with Edward.
I also hope that they realise that what they have is true.
Love the story, I am going to pimp you out his week on People Like Us if that is okay with you.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Hi, Thanks so much for reading. I am so glad that you are enjoying the story. I am really having a great time writing it. I don't mind the pimping at all and thank you so much for thinking enough of this little fic to want to do that.
Thanks again and I can't wait to see what you think as you read on.
EA~Mary
Summary: This is an AH story with an older Edward who is a single father of 7 year old twins. Bella is a 24 year old model with a heartbreaking past. She’s given up everything to help those she loves and when she and Edward cross paths in Central Park; will they each have found exactly what they both have been longing for?
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites, Single parents , My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Completed Stories, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, Sparkledamnu's Must Reads, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , TBR
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 627008 Read Count: 148711
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
Wow, what a wonderful feel good story, I am dying to know about the prologue and see what happenes with these two beautiful people and the kids.
Thank you for a wonderful story. Oh and by the way I am piming you out to everyone here on People Like Us.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Hi there! Thanks so much for reading! If you'd like to continue reading the story, there are 50 chapters posted over on FFN under the same title: The Path We Choose by les16. I just haven't had time to get the story updated over here again. If you'd also like to take a look, I've just started a new story called The Greatest Gift on FFN, too. It's very different from anything you've read before and I'd love to hear what you think of it!
Thanks so much for reading and for taking the time to review. I love hearing from you and hope you'll read both stories over on FanFiction . net
les16~
Edward Masen, Hollywood heartthrob, meets Bella Swan, shy college student, and the romantic sparks fly. Can they both overcome traumatic pasts and trust issues to be together? All-Human
Thank you to Coleen561 for the beautiful banner!
Virgins & Villains came in first in 3 categories at the Summer 2011 Avant Garde Awards. See banners below.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Humor, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, I Whitlock's read , Ageise02 To Read 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 86 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 448890 Read Count: 311998
Date: 31 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Ringtones & The Prodigal Son
Excellent CHAPTER... Cant wait to see what is going to happen to make rose so upset.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it. I finished it while dealing with a migraine, I'm still afraid to go back and look at it...i was afraid it was absolute crap..lol. BUT I also needed to get it posted because i'm obsessive compulsive like that! Thanks so much!
Date: 03 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Bubble Baths & Hell's Kitchen
please update soon!
Author's Response:
The next chap is about 75 percent complete. Another day or so. Thanks!
Date: 05 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 49: Chip Shops & Fairy Lights
I am sure Bella would not have it any other way. What a wonderful chapter.
Cant wait to hear how he is going to actually propose.
Author's Response:
proposal? what proposal? lol. When he does, it will be perfect for them... Thanks!
Date: 08 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 50: Champagne & Diamonds
You achieved what you wanted with the sweet loving and romantic.
Wonderful chapter but she still did not see his ass naked!!!
Loved it.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
without giving too much away...just be patient. Trust me. THe next V&V is half-finished. Thanks!
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 51: Bite Marks & Sweet Revenge
Hmmm, well then I am going to ignore the last two sentences of this chapter if it is not gong to be resolved soon.
Thank you
Fiorella
Author's Response:
good idea! especially if it will drive you crazy...just forget about it for a while. THanks!
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 53: Cake Tasting & Mama Bears
Yeah... how many more weeks till Edward is back from England???
Author's Response:
he is finished filming in late may. Mother's day is may 9.
Date: 31 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 54: Waterworks & Heartfelt Sentiments
Great Chapter
Author's Response:
Thanks very much!
Date: 03 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Quiet Comfort & Perfect Words
I have just caught up on the last two chapters, and I have to say I am glad that Edward returned to her when she needed him the most. I would of actually like to see her introduce him to her, but hey them's the breaks.
As far as this chapter the only problem I have is her giving in to how many people turn up, speaking from experience, when I got married I had 125 people at my wedding, and I have to say that most of them were mine and his parents friends. I did not want more than 50 people if I could help. But that did not come to fruition. I just hopes that she has the dream wedding she wants and does not do what everyone else wants.
Please after everything she has been though please make that one thing come true for her.
Also can you please tell me what chapter she explains what happens to her mum again. I cant remember what happened and I would like to read it again.
Thank you wonderful as always.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the great review. It remains to be seen if that enormous guest list will stand. The name of the chapter you wanted is 'Fried Ice Cream & A Cup of Tea' it's chapter number eleven. Thanks again! more to come soon!
Date: 08 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 55: Skypeward & Karmic Rewards
I really hope Edward returns home soon. I know you told us already but month is he due back... or how long has he still got over there, I thought he was only there for a month... seems I am wrong?
Thank you for the update, yes I agree that karma will bit you in the ass if you do something wrong.
Fiorella
Author's Response:
I just write very slowly. Edward arrived in london on 6 april. He proposed to Bella on 1st of May. The last chapter 'Skypeward & Karmic Rewards' ended on 13may...so not much longer...He's due to finish filming in late may. glad you like the story! more to come soon.
Date: 09 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Joy Rides & Clown Masks
OMG how wonderful... THEY GO TO THE PROM!!!!!!!!
Author's Response:
i would like to go to prom NOW ...i would be so much cooler knowing everything that I do today. lol. Thanks!
Date: 28 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 60: Making Plans & False Allegations
I have to say that I would hate to be an A list Hollywood actor... this would be the reason.
People tying to get noticed just for the sake of money and fame, who cares who they hurt along the way.
Loved the chapter apart from the end, but hey the story needs a little bit of tension every now and then to keep us on our toes.
Author's Response:
i never believe these people that 'come forward' with information about actors. I always assume they're lying first. Unless the actor admits to it...or they've done something illegal which can be proven...i give the famous person the benefit of the doubt. it would be horrible to have your life constantly under a microscope. Glad you liked the chap...eh, we need a little drama now and then. Thanks!
France 1830
After the betrayal and death of his wife, Englishman Edward Cullen is bitter by love. But when he meets a tradesmen's daughter who was everything his late wife wasn't, Edward finds himself giving his heart to a woman who he, in the past, would deem improper. With duties of society and burdens of the past pushing them in all directions, will the two lovers be able to give themselves everything their hearts desire?
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories Read by CNYBella, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69979 Read Count: 47190
Date: 05 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16
I was holding off on this story because I was not sure of it... I have to say that I need to jump in the stupid lake.
I have found it to be light, fun and a really enjoyable read. I cant not wait for the update.
Author's Response:
Don't jump in a stupid lake, if you do, I might as well join you because I almost didn't write this. Yes, shocker but I wasn't exactly sure of it at first. I normally write darker and sadder things. As you said, it's light.
Date: 10 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17
Hmmm, it actually feel a little sorry for Alice, it is like she does not have all her marbles, by this conversation.
I really do hope that Alice does have a baby soon and on top of that I really do hope that Jasper is faithful. They seem like and put together type of couple, but then again just because you are from high society does not mean you are faithful.
It is going to be interesting, what is everyone going to say about kate's arrival and I have a feeling that the baby father could be someone close to Edward and it is going to turn his world upside down. If he ever finds out how it is.
Cant wait for the next update wonderful as always.
Fiorella
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19
Such a short chapter... it was a tease!
Date: 03 Feb 2011 Title: The Vineyard
After the hours of labour, Edward did not even give Bella a kiss, yes he was distracted about the little boy, but really!!!!
Loved the chapter otherwise, you did an excellent job.
Date: 05 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21
Wow, did not see that one coming at all.
Thanks for letting us know how it is now, I wonder what Edward will say???
I dont think that is going to go down to well.
Thank you for the update.
Fiorella
Date: 01 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter Epilogue
Wonderful ending to a wonderful story. Loved it.
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22
I dont understand why Edward does not go to court and tell them what he said???
I feel it is James that needs to disappear I am sure between all of them they can feed him to the fishes or what ever lives in the London river.
Please, please, please make him disappear. You have Emmett and Jasper i am sure that they could come up with something.
I really do hope Edward take the family on a holiday or he can escort Kate to Bella's parents and then return for Bella and Phillip when he is a little older.
Loving the story, cant wait for the update.
Fiorella
Bella and James Swan move out west after their parents death. Moving to Wyoming, they both come to work on the ranch of Edward Cullen. See what happens when your life and love are as wild as the west.
Banner by:Ange de l'aube
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 41 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 132021 Read Count: 48540
Date: 04 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35
Wow, they are knocking down like flies with the proposals and I have to say it was another beautiful one. I wonder where Emmett is going to live, actuall where does he live? I know it is not the main house and I cant rmrmber if it is the bunkhouse?
Wonderful chapter as always.
Fiorella
Date: 02 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34
Wow, I have been putting off reading this story, so it would flow, and I have to say I loved it from beginning to where you are at now.
Keep up the beautiful writing.
Firella
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. I am very happy that you have enjoyed the story so far. Im in process of writing next chapter..hope to have it out by weekend
Date: 16 Dec 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36
Ohhh crap... thanks for the cliffy!
Bella and Edward have been best friends forever and they've shared a lot of firsts. Now Bella wants to share one last one together. AU/slightly OOC Cannon pairings B/E And rated M for language and lemons!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, To Read (Geddy), My Favorite Stories, Stories I've read
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 331144 Read Count: 104700
Date: 23 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33
It has taken me 3 days to read this story and I have enjoyed it till the last 3 or 4 chapter. I have to say that I am more than pissed, upset, irate and probably about 1 million more words that would take forever to write down, how these two are acting, really how many fucking times are they going to have to go though this she of not airing their problems.
I am so fucking over it, it is not funny. How hard is it really for Bella to grow some balls and ask Edward why he smells like cigarette smoke. It is getting to the point of ridiculous. It was like when she never told him about missing the pill and then proceeded to blame him for everything that happened... is it going to get to that point again where Bella cant and wont stand up for herself. Fuck she is good at screaming at him when she chooses to, but something as monumental as this she is as quite as a church mouse. Well she deserves all the shit she brings on herself.
As for Edward locate you balls mate, you feel angry with yourself for betraying Bella because you are smoking again, well guess what, grab a hold of your conscience with both hands and own up, she thinks your cheating on her...
These two need more than therapy, they need their own intervention! Someone to bash some common sense into their thick skulls. They were doing so well with their talking, it about time someone locked them into a room until the talk and not let them out until they do. Every time they avoid the topic they get a fucking electric shock. A friggin big one as well! I am sure when they have been shocked about 20 times they wont forget the meaning of communication.
Please for the love of GOD, make these two idiots talk soon!
Fiorella
Date: 23 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34
"And that's when it finally occurred to me that we had spent so much time trying to fix everyone else's problems that we had completely ignored our own."
Really this is the line Bella is going to use to make sure that her little world, it was okay to accuse Edward of cheating. Really Bella pull your head out of your ass and smell the roses! My God this girl is either dense or stupid and Edward just sitting there and taking it like some happy schmuck, he deserves everything he is handed.
There is no way I would be so calm if I was accused of something I was never and would never do. She would have coped a mouthful.
Date: 23 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35
Way better chapter, go glad they cleared the air, I really hope that it wont happen again. I do't think they will make it through.
Date: 24 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40
Loving their road trip, but I really want them to be home so I can see what the surprise is and how Emmett is really doing!
Tragedy led her there. Commitment forced him there. Can a place of beauty and solitude hold the fate they were both seeking…
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 53492 Read Count: 16893
Date: 11 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10
I have been wanting to read this story for a while but I kept putting it off... Silly me.
You have done a wonderful job and I cant wait for the next up-date.
If it is okay with you I would like to pimp you ass on People like Us?
Fiorella
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you gave it a shot.
I apologize for the delay in responding - RL has been crazy with the holidays!
Pimp out as you like!! : ) I adore new readers!
Update should be coming very soon!!
xo
Jaime
Date: 09 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14
It is a pity that he did not get to her first.
Date: 09 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15
Well he made his bed and he is defently living in it.
I really hope Bella does not make him wait to long... he just might move on.
Date: 09 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16
I love Edwards cheeky review, it is wonderful.
Cant wait for the update.
Bella moves back to Forks after an unexpected event with her daughter Leah, Leah has not spoken word since the event. When Leah befriends a green eyed little boy next door, Bella so realises that his father may be the key to Leah's illness.
This story is about how the strength that family love can create and how two families joining can overcome anything life throughs at them.
check out my blog for pictures and stuff;http://babylou23-speak.blogspot.com
Disclaimer; All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plots are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creaters, or producers media franchise. No copyright infringement intended.
I do not own twilight but I do own Speak copyrightbabylou23@2010.
Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 79551 Read Count: 27210
Date: 11 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5
Crap, I am sure that would send any parent mental. Loved this chapter it opens your eyes to Bella's situation.
Author's Response:
Thank you
Date: 07 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3
Wow, I have to say this is an interesting story, I just keep asking myself what really happened to Jacob and Leah.
I am sure we will find out all in good time.
Keep up the good work. I am going to pimp you out as well.
Author's Response:
thank you, I am glad your enjoy and thank you for telling others, I am very grateful. I am also on Fanfiction and have another story if you wish to give it try. thank you again.
Date: 08 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4
Ohh, Leah is beautiful and I cant wait to read more of this wonderful story.
Author's Response:
thank you, i've growen quite attached to her.
Date: 21 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7
Wonderful chatper, I really love this story.
You are doing a fantastic job at it.
Author's Response:
thank you
Date: 13 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8
Ohh, these two are so screwed... I am guess that Leah will start talking at some stage, but my guess is that she is already talking to only Anthony.
Author's Response:
I hope Leah will talk soon, maybe somelse might get her to talk ;-)
Bella thought her life was going to be different by the time she was close to thirty. She thought she'd be living the American dream with a husband the two kids and a dog. Instead at twenty eight sh
e breaks up with her long term boyfriend and is the only single person among her friends and family. With a reconnection of an old crush thanks to Facebook and an unexpected meeting with a new man, Bella does the only thing she can, follow her heart.
I have a banner!! I want to give a shout out to Mehek18 for creating it. I think it's pretty nice. You should really check out her site at http://mehek18.tumblr.com and take a look around. She is amazing and I want to thank her for taking the time to create my banner! Thank you!!
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read, Stories Read by CNYBella
Chapters: 62 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 296726 Read Count: 118582
Date: 10 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter Twenty Eight
I think that he did, I am sure that Edward sent them. I think Bella was to kind to Jacob personally, he is trying to run her life and he cant do that, and I personally think he still in love with her and just cant admit it.
I would have call Jacob out on the text messages also, but that is just me!
I am actually glad to see the ass end of him for now, he was giving me the shits with his high almight crap. Charlotte is not his daughter and yes he has been there for Bella but if Edwards wants to step up to the plate and be a father than dickwad Jacob need to back the fuck off. Secondly it is not his house to tell Bella who she can or cant have staying.
If he does not like it then piss off like he has... I have to say that is the best part aobut this chapter the ass end of Jacob. Yes I have a lot of haterid against your Jacob, he whinny piss ant that he is. Thinks he knows best and is always right... good riddens to him for now.
Edward might have a chance to prove himself now!
Author's Response:
Joacb is a little possive but as I stated before he loves her and wants what is best for her, or at least his version of what is right. He thought by deleating the messages he was saving her from stress from Edward. he's not in love with her but he loves her a lot. As you know he leaves in the next chapter, but he's going to be back in the future.
Alice wanted to, but she didn't want to add to the tention.
Edward is going to do his hardest in future chapters, but that's all any parent can do right? Try their hardest?
Thanks for reading!
-Lisa
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter Thirty
Crap you really needed to leave it there.... GRRRRRR
Please update soon, I want to know what the hell happend with Edward and Emmett and I want to know about the talk...
Type you little demon, type... hhehehe
Thank you
Fiorella
Author's Response:
I'm glad that you liked the chapter. I'm working on the next chapter and it should be posted in a day or so (it will of course include the convo between Edward and Emmett). Thanks for reading and commenting!
-Lisa
Date: 11 Mar 2011 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter Forty Three
Wonderful Chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm almost done with my outline of the rest of the story, so the next chapter should be posted in a day or two. Thanks for reading!
-Lisa