Hello, Alicia. I read Chapter 1 and just finished Chapter 2. I speculate you are using British English. I don't know if you follow American English or dialogue rules. This is constructive criticism. In dialogue, there is always a comma in front of the character's name and after the name when talking to another character. However, if the dialogue begins with the other character's name, there is no comma in front of the name (obviously). If you are talking about a character to another character, there are no commas to separate the name.

Example: (Emmett is talking to Edward). I'm right here, Boss. Boss is a nickname or other name for who Edward is and there is always a comma in front of the nickname; if Emmett said Edward instead of Boss.

I noticed that you separated words such as courthouse to court house, and didn't hyphenate brother-in-law, or when one talks about age, it should be written as, twenty-eight-years-old.

You have a good storyline and I will continue reading. Do you have a beta that helps you or could help you? Again, I am not very familiar with British English other than knowing one doesn't put periods after Mr, Mrs, and other titles such as this. I usually don't use reviews as I rather use PMs. I don't know if Stars has those available or not. I don't remember seeing it.

Hope some of what I recommended you find useful.