This is crazy. There is no way that Bella cannot have more control over herself. It is unrealistic. If a woman is afraid and in distress, there is NO WAY IN HELL that she could be able to get turned on and cum on top of it. I know that this fiction but come on. So not happening. I'm a little frustrated to tell you the truth.

Okay, so I finished the story. Boy did I cry. This story had so much detail that I was sooooo sucked into it that I read none stop. I really liked it. Some parts were kindof SICK, but all in all, it was a great story!

Author's Response:

Thank you for sticking with it to the end. I hope you'll try my other stories. Nothing else is like this I promise.

something is wrong with this. I can't get past chapter 34!

My favorite part in this chapter was when Edwards says "If that fucker takes her to Vegas, I swear to God,". Why was I laughing sooooo hard. Great ending. Great story.

I think her friends need to teach her how to have a man. Little things like that is not something to get overly angry about. I wasn't like he was be possessive, it's a man thing. The same way she put his arm around her when the waitress came around to show her who he belonged to, well, that is his way of showing someone who she belongs to. Get over yourself girly. She's lucky that he even cares because if he didn't that would be a whole set of different problems. Too angry too quickly. She needs to feel the love!

Holly shit! Why did I almost piss my pants laughing so hard when Bella went into labor and Edward was going nuts. I was dying. That was sooo funny and when he was crying because he thought her vag was ruined. Great chapter!

I really liked that chapter. Edward is really turning into a well rounded man. Him training Quil is a whole new role for him and it kindof makes me proud of him. Bella and Edwards relationship is really growing. I would like to see a show down between Alice and Bella infront of everyone so they all can see the kindof person Alice truely is. Can't wait for the update. Oh, I really like Dougie even though he's always getting Bella into trouble! ;)

So glad to see a new chapter. It was really great and informative. Things are starting to come together! Emmett is Brilliant!!!!!!!

She's annoying

I don't understand why she doesn't want Edward to have his family there but, Edward would move mountains for her to have her father there for her. This Bella thinks of herself first and foremost! I'm not very taken by her!!!!

That shit was funny. Sonny is a little perv. Damn, I can't believe that little shit, I just want to slap him!!!!

She is fucking annoying!!!!! Honestly, it's like she wants the man to just be in her ass 24/7 and it's really pissing me off. She is soooo fucking needy. DAMN!!!!!! How much more does the man half to do. She know's the life fuck give the man a break. She just nags, nags, nags, all the fucking time. Sorry for the language but she's annoying!

That was a great chapter. I remember when Bella was talking to her mother she told she was going to have one. Well maybe not directly, but I knew that was what she meant. I am soooooo happy that you didn't just rush through the ending like some people do. You took your time and wrote it out and didn't leave us hanging. Your a wonderful writer!

Ana is a bit too much sometimes. Yeah, I get that she would like to know more but with her she pushes too much. First off she went to John on the low in order to get information. If Christian had not given permission beforehand she would have tried to get his personal info out of John. Not to say she had to tell him she was going to see John but she deliberately kept it from Christian because she wanted to get information that she should have waited to get from him, when he was ready to give to her. It didn't happen to her, it happened him. Yeah she could try to get him to talk and be there for him when he does, but he has given her a lot but she wants every grain of information and she pushes too much. That's how I see it. Hopefully in the next chapter she tells him that she went to see John.

I love Damion!

Cute update. see you again soon!

Teddy is a really smart boy! Good job Christian.

Jason is a man of many talents," he coughs.

"Hmm. So Gail tells me." I giggle. I was giggling along right with her. Nice update!

Sometimes she annoys me. She just thinks off of the top of her head and just goes. After all those years of being together you would think that she would know better than to wander around for half and hour and think that Christian wouldn't have a melt down.

Cute chapter. Shouty Christian is back!!!!

GOOD!!!!! I am so glad that Christian caught on to that. She likes to condemn Christian all the time and here she is lying through her teeth and bringing Gail into it as well. She deserves a good ass bussing for that!!!!! So can't wait until the next chapter! Woo HOOO

Good to see you back and thank-you for a great chapter. I missed these guys.

Wow, that was a great chapter. It has been a while since we read one but this was good. Setting us up for the big moment!

And the plot thickens.....already enjoying the story line!

YEA, they finally did it. Hopefully, things will go forward for them from now on. Can't wait for more!

Well, Edward is getting his act together being there for his girl and he's smart with his game to. Good for you Eddie boy!

Bella had no right to go behind Edwards back and contact his mother. Regardless if she called first or not and then making all those arrangements behind his back. He is such a pussy because I would have been MAD AS HELL and he just took it! Man up son!!!!!

OOOOh, somebody's creepin', drama coming up next!

Good update, I know that Bella is young but she annoys me sometimes. I had my son at 21 and I did what I had to do! I know that she's coming from a bad place but she's really skittish and she's making me a bit nervous like she's going to run off and have an abortion the next time they get into an argument! Not Cool!!!!!!

Why are these chapters so short. By the time your really getting into the story it's finished. The 'Storm' series were so long. 

Hey what's taking so long. We're still here waiting impatiently for an update.......No pressure ;)

Hey, glad that your back we missed ya! Anywho, these last few chapters were really interesting. They really had me on the edge waiting to see what's really poppin'. Bella seems to have a little sense but I guess she has it hidden away for a rainny day ;). Anyway. The story is really coming together so don't keep us waiting too long ya heard meh! ;)

Yea, Edward is going to be a daddy! I'm so excited!!!!!

Wow, now that was an amazing chapter. Colleoni is on funny fucker "What'd I say?" Colleoni shouted. "You don't know, you say somethin'. Now you got me feelin' bad and shit...I didn't know we had a virgin on the boat." He pointed to the captain's chair. "I'll buy you breakfast...but don't be a pussy about it. It happened and that's it." He gave Jasper a sympathetic pat on the back. "You get an 'E' for effort." He rolled his eyes at me. "You hungry?". As if it was a regular conversation. The conversation really cleared up a lot of things that were missing for Edward and I'm glad that you wrote it the way you did. Again, great chapter!

Talented as always.

;-)

Who knew that Edward could be so funny!

Edward is a little kinky! Way to go Bro!!!!!! Sexy update.

I wanted to cry along with him!

If Ben didn't have a problem with what she did to Bella, Angela would not have been there to apologize to her. She really is just using her to get Ben back. ~Shenelle~

Edward is so right in how he's dealing with the whole thing. I feel for him but they'll get there!

Why would she say she doesn't love him. Regardless of the lie he has done everything he could to save her. He has been there while she was recovering. Yeah she's hurt but not that hurt. Come on, over react much!!!!!

Poor Edward, that girl is going to give him some serious blue balls! ;) I would really like to see how he's going to deal with the fact that his the po-po? What is the F.B.I going to do when they find out he's in-love with his mark? Draaaaaaaamma!

WOI

AWWWW, sooo fuckin' HOT is all that I can say. If I was a man I would love blowjobs to!

Whoa, full of confidence aren't you Edward. You're like a regular porn star now. I'm Loving it!!!!!!

Edward is one good lover let me tell you! Wow, the ASS Edward, damn your good!!!!! Great update.

Oh fuck, please don't tell me that Edward's cover is blown. I'm not ready for that yet.

Well, how did Edward get so bruised up they barely touched him but I liked the update!

OOOOOOh sookie, sookie now! It is starting to get clearer now!

I could have sworn he was going to tell him he knew he was an agent. That would have been craaaaaaaazy!!!!!

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