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Fifty Shades...Full Circle
Book III
A continuation of the Fifty Shades Trilogy
*A Writer's Coffee Shop Featured Story May 2013*
Thank You.
This story continues where Fifty Shades...Clarity left off. Ana and Christian have endured a hard year, scandal, heartache and Christian finally recognizing and accepting his past have plagued them. Yet they remain strong with their love for each other and their family. Will new revelations tear them apart? Will the coming changes divide them or make them stronger? This is Book III. You will probably want to read 'Fifty Shades More', Book I and 'Fifty Shade Clarity', Book II first. They are both posted here.
Categories: Fifty Shades Trilogy
Characters: Anastasia Steele/Christian Grey
Genre: Erotica, Family, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Happily Ever After
Series: G8or Favor8s Read, Dumbeline's WIP to read list, Stories I've read, Fifty Shades ...More
Chapters: 162 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 660157 Read Count: 591625
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Pretty good stuff. A very nice read to any Christian+Ana -addict. I am glad the inner goddess and subconscious are retired. It's good to read about their life, with enough drama for anyone. I am a bit less thrilled with the sex, tends to get repetitive though not too bad.
My one problem is that there are several times with minor typoes where a word has been exchanged with another and it takes a while to figure out the word ment. Would take an editor to go through as those are all instances spell check wouldn't bother about, I think.
In chapter 29 (Full Circle) though, this was a bit more serious:
"Hi baby. I just wanted you to know I got here and I'm okay. Jason is here and checked in as well."
"I know. He reported in to Taylor. I miss you."
---- Jason Taylor. The person Ana is referring to as "Jason" is Sawyer, Luke Sawyer. These kinda minor things do make it confusing at times.
Anyway, Thanks for putting down all the time for writing this.
- sillie-
Author's Response:
The sex is in there because this site permists it and people ask for it. There is a tamer version on FanFiction.net. But it is FSoG and people expect it. There are typos and I understand that. I do check and recheck and run grammer and spell check before posting. But I am not a writer and doing this for fun and because I have been asked to. I haven't seen any fanfiction anywhere without errors. Sorry if they have decreased the enjoyment value for you.
Date: 23 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39
Lake Washington? I thought they lived overlooking the Puget Sound and not at the lake? I tried to ignore that, but now it's bothering me more and more. Bellevue seems to be at the lake, but that'd be Christian's parents.
"It's canon, Jim, but not as you know it." This is Kate and Elliot's love story as it unfolded alongside Christian and Ana's. Ever wondered what happened on their first night together? What about those conversations between Kate and Christian in Portland? What went down in Barbados and how did Elliot get invited in the first place? And the big reveal of how much Elliot might already know about Christian's lifestyle. This story follows the plot line from Fifty Shades of Grey, with some borrowed dialogue to add authenticity, however, you need to forget all of the assumptions that you may have made about them and their relationship. They won't exactly be OOC but they have a lot more going on than you ever knew. Their love story is a lot more powerful than EL James ever told us.
Categories: Fifty Shades Trilogy, Canon
Characters: Elliot Grey/Kate Kavanagh
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 45069 Read Count: 5197
Date: 20 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 Smart
Hi, I really like this story. Your text is lively, engaging and moves with just the right pace. I could do with less lemons as well, but you write them very well and I guess it goes with the territory. Please write/publish more of it!