Reviews by WriteOn70
Breathe Again by ysar Rated: M starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 149]
Summary: Past Featured Story

You know those fics where Edward doesn't come back and Bella forgets about him and five seconds later she's in bed with Jacob and none of it makes any damn sense?
Yeah, this isn't one of them.

A BELLIE AWARDS NOMINEE!

This story picks up from the moment in New Moon when Jacob has driven Bella home after the cliff diving incident, right before he catches the scent of Alice. Only in this telling, Alice wasn't looking, so there's no sudden appearance at Bella's house, no Rosalie calling Edward and sending him on a suicidal mission to Volterra, and no reason for Bella to do anything but believe that Edward didn't love her anymore. This is simply a story of what might have happened if everyone stayed mostly in character and Edward's return was delayed. Yes, delayed. Because we all know that he was "this close" to coming back on his own anyhow.
So what would have happened if Bella had tried to move on with her life?  Would she have found happiness with Jacob?  And would Edward be too late?

* First in a series of stories that tell of Bella and Jacob during Edward's absence, Bella's start at college, and the Cullens' eventual return.


~I thought of Jacob’s warm arms wrapped around me, his infectious laughter, and his ability to keep me from falling to pieces again… The pain choking my heart relaxed and I could breathe.~

 

~“More than anything,” I whispered, not caring what I'd just agreed to. When it came to Bella, it didn't matter what the question was. I just wanted.~

Winner of:

Best Author, Most Romantic, Favorite Jacob, Most Suspenseful, & Best WIP in the Wolfpack Awards | Best Non-Canon Pairing (Incomplete) and Best WIP in the Moonlight Awards | Best During the Series in the Razzle Dazzle Awards | The Storyteller Award in the Shimmer Awards | Best JacobxBella in the Silent Tear Awards | Best Jacob Point of View in the Twilight Twins Awards


Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: Romance, Young Adult
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: A Blazing Sun, 108.9, Jacob Black Wins the Girl
Chapters: 76 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 163880 Read Count: 35972
[Report This] Published: 28 Jan 2010 Updated: 12 Sep 2010
Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 28 May 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Redemption: Jacob's POV

Thank you so much for writing a real relationship for these two. I think your fans (that includes me) respect what you've done here.

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 31 May 2010 Title: Chapter 68: Closure: Jacob's POV

I think you are doing a great job on this story & people have to remember this is your version/POV. They just need to read on & save some of their comments. OR better still write their own story.

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 31 May 2010 Title: Chapter 70: Honesty: Jacob's POV

Just looking around at some of the series at The Writer's Coffee Shop when I stumbled across your name. It sounded familiar cause either Teambella 23 or Vampish Vixen had mentioned you on the notes of one of their stories. Thank goodness for word of mouth. It would probabably have been winter before I got to yours.  

Never Say Never by Wombat Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1025]
Summary:

Issued with a death sentence since birth Bella’s life was never her own; in an attempt to escape her abusive childhood she flees to Forks, Bella is destined to be with Edward for eternity but can he save her from the clutches of Aro and his army before its too late or will she be able to save herself.

This story contains Abuse, Violence, Love, War, Sex, Masturbation, Kidnapping, Rape, Death and a heap of other things.... Please don't read if you are not of age!!!!

Twilight Rocks But I Do Not Own It.... I do however own this story!!!!

This story is for Adults only. So Don't Read if you are not old enough......

I suck at summaries so please give my story a go.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 58299 Read Count: 55216
[Report This] Published: 25 Jun 2010 Updated: 03 Jan 2013
Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 30 Oct 2010 Title: Never Say Never

What a night! I am a little confused about Tania though . . . please, please post the next chapter before I pull my hair out LOL. Reading you soon!



Author's Response:

hehehehehe, I won't keeping you waiting too long, I'd post now but my internet is really slow today and it wont work so look out for the next ch tomorrow ish, I can't wait to read everyone's reviews when you get some Jasper Action hehehehehe MWAH

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 17 Oct 2010 Title: Never Say Never

I AM SO MOVING THIS STORY. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING IT. SINCE FRUIT ENTERED THE PICTURE IN THIS CHAPTER, I THINK THE USE OF A BANANA WOULD BE GREAT.



Author's Response:

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!! I luaghed so hard at your comment I very nearly wet my pants, thanks sooooo much for reviewing you have made my day, I am so happy you are loving my story and I am stoked by your review.... Next update will be very soon MWAH!!!!

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 24 Oct 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Way to go Bella! I am so glad Tania finally got what she had coming (and I'm sure its not over yet). Since vampires senses and emotions are hightened Tania must have been one STUPID HUMAN! To think she was the only one good enough for Edward. She is not even good enough to iron his clothes. LOL Good job! I can't wait to read more!



Author's Response:

LMAO!!!!! shit you're funny, I can't wait for you to read the next ch.... Thanks so much for reviewing you really brought a smile to my face... MWAH!!!

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 24 Oct 2010 Title: Never Say Never

I am going to call you the Queen of the Cliff Hangers! Okay queen, we will wait for you next chaper (very impatiently). In the mean time, I will try to be content with looking at the clothes of the Ms Stupid Vamp and the ever powerful Bella!



Author's Response:

YAY!!!!! You make me very happy, I won't keep you waiting too long hehehehehe, I am sending you the link now so check your email... MAWH!!!!

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 30 Oct 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Edward's point of view of Bella and the Stupid One was great. And the scene after it was HOT! I am so glad Marcus is "alive" again! He is the only member of the Volutri that I had any sympathy for in the books/movies. FYI, the 'taste' scene was better than almost anything you could have come up with for the banana. LOL!



Author's Response:

YAY!!! so glad you liked, and happy I could get you hot and bothered hehehehehe, I'm the same I like Marcus so I hope he gains his strength and can stand up to Aro, Thanks for you review MWAH.

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 02 Nov 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Wombat that is just mean! LOL. I wish that things had of held for just a few seconds so Ms Stupid Vamp could have met her demise. But of course with her remaining dead/undead the revenge will be that much sweeter. Loving the scene with Ali & Jaz. Yep Kittyisme0341 had it right: does anyone know who has a sale on panties? See you in a minute.



Author's Response:

LMAO!!!!! yup evil is my middle name, hehehehe.... I couldn't kill T off that would just take so much pleasure away from Emmett in the future hehehehehe, your right revenge will be sweet (and innocent)... OMG not you too, hehehehe do you have any idea how worked up I get writing these little chapts LMAO I think that's the only reason my hubby puts up with my obsession. HAHAHAHAHA!!!! If you do find that pany sale let me know. MWAH !!!!

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Well maybe Ms Stupid Vamp isn't so stupid. I will however say I which she had tried to touch her one more time. I mean yes Edward threw her through a wall and almost detached her head; but I would have liked to seen her get a little Bella Justice! Oh well, let's see how much longer Tania can walk among us . . . Oh BTW, I love Jake's part in this. Even though I bet he peed his pants while in the shield (hehehe *WriteOn eviley laughs*).



Author's Response:

hehehehehe, thanks so much for reviewing, I like your thinking hehehehe you are evil I can just see you sitting there reading daring Tania to touch her hahahahaha... I'm glad you like Jake's part, you will get a small POV from him very soon. MWAH!!!

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Boo-Yow! I think before this story is over Ms Stupid Vamp may just destroy herself. I mean who wants to suffer eternal embrassment; oh and believe you me, I think Emmett would just love to share this story at every family gathering. And to think for a moment there I was feeling a little compassion for her stupid butt! (Okay, maybe it was only 5 seconds, but it was compassion! LOL)



Author's Response:

HAHAHAHA!!! oh so I did almost get you to feel sorry for Tania, I have been trying so hard to get people to like her just a weeeee bit she isn't all bad hehehehehe... I can totally see Em teasing her constantly how funny.... MWAH again,

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Never Say Never

Thank you for sharing your favorites. I am always looking for new stuff involving the Twilight family. Okay, so now Ms Stupid Vamp is in the meadow whining with her little feelings hurt. O-M-G! Please get over yourself girlie! Wow: Storm (X-Men) has found her way to Ms Bella. She is crazy powerful and I am just rubbing my hands together in anticipation of Aro's punishment. I am also rubbing my legs together in anticipation of more Edward and Bella rewards! Love ya!

 

 



Author's Response:

HAHAHAHAHA!!! you crack me up!!! I am totally crying tears of laughter at how you went from rubbing your hand together waiting for Aro to rubbing your legs together waiting for B & E.... OMG my stomach hurts.... Crazy powerfull and there is more to come, this story is soooo far from finished its mad... Thanks a bunch for your review, I will be posting the next ch in a day or 2 so keep your eyes open. MWAH!!!

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Never Say Never

The strengthing of the connection between Momma and Poppa Bear with Bella as their daughter! Slam dunk. I also like the way that Bella protects her Edward. I love the way you portray Jake; he just wants to keep his friendship with Bella and stay true to his family and the tribe. He gets it! Yahoo Jake! I love E/B's connection, but let me graciously say that I would gladly accept his kiss LOL! However, if Marcus continues to be strong and develop in the same vein: I will be saving all my kisses for him. LOL! GREAT JOB! I love ALL of your characters! Or should I say LOVE MOST and LOVE TO HATE OTHERS (yes you know who you are *cackles sinister and loudly*)



Author's Response:

YAY!!!! you make me smile big time.... I'm thrilled you like the way I have portrayed everyone and the connections and yes your right Jake does get it, I soooo didn't want a love triangle in my story I am team Edward all the way.... ohhhhhh you like Marcus do you hehehehe SqUeAl wow that's awesome I will see if I can arrange something special just for you hahahahaha... AH you never cease to entertain and amuse me!!!!! MWAH big time!!!!

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 13 Dec 2010 Title: Never Say Never

A-MAZ-ING! You are making this story come to life for me (and my boyfriend's pants LOL). I would not have thought that Elneazer/Carmen pairing would be so hot. And I love it when Alice/Jazz cut loose. All I can say is I am content right now, but judging from my boyfriend's reaction, I will be very sweaty and tired shortly. Thanks for sharing this story with us . . . again . . . A-MAZ-ING!



Author's Response:

Squeal.... Thanks sooo much, you have no idea what your comments do to me hehehehehhe, I was a little disappointed with that chapt sp I'm happy you liked it, and sooooooo thrilled your about to get hot and sweaty thats awesome!!!! Mwah Check your email for the link....

Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 08 Mar 2011 Title: Never Say Never

I am pleased with the turn this story is taking. You handle your business and know that you fans will be with you ever step of the way. You don't have wimps for fans honey and any one that calls themselves a fan and gives up on you cause you aren't posting as fast as they would like . . . well let's just say that they are not fans, but I can think of a few things that start with an "f" to call them! Take care of your man . . . we will wait patiently!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Alice Cullen had it all; a great job, beauty and a smoking-hot boyfriend.  One December though, she threw him away.  This is the story of what happened after.  Originally a one-shot for the Musical Cues contest on Free Writers and Readers.  Link to the Taylor Swift song included.  **Now a full story.**

Above banner made by FrozenSoldier for thetwilightawards.com

 

Jalice

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Jasper/Alice
Genre: Angst, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Happily Ever After
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 21827 Read Count: 1273
[Report This] Published: 29 Dec 2010 Updated: 31 Dec 2012
Reviewer: WriteOn70 Signed
Date: 31 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was great; I would love to read more. Learm more about the things they went through. I have you in my favorites, so as soon as you post new chapters I will read! Type at you later!



Author's Response:

Hi WriteOn70!  I am SO sorry that it's taken me this long to respond; I JUST now saw your review.  Anyways, if you are still interested in this story, the next two chappies are posted. 

Again, my apologies!