Reviews by aly1390
Parachute by KitsuShel Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1971]
Summary: Past Featured Story

parachute

After finding a child abandoned on the streets of Seattle, Bella Swan raises him as her own. What happens to their lives when his biological family is finally found?

 

 

 

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 145849 Read Count: 211604
[Report This] Published: 21 Jun 2010 Updated: 04 Feb 2011
Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

Hi! This is my first post in this site ever, and I gotta say that you have me captivated with the way you're weaving this story. It has the right mix of angst and fluff it's light a hearted story that sucked me in since prologue. 

I waited 'til this chapter to review because I couldn't stop reading...:D

I have a sneaky feeling that jack's mom is Victoria (big sigh of relief) since I'm starting to get tired that Tanya's always the bad person (it's okay if I thought wrong)... No mother should abandon their child like that, even if she was forcefully taken or whatever... I cried a little when jack started to talk about his other family it looks like was loved a lot. Bella truly is a very good person for deciding to keep a child at so young an age I just hope that when they do meet Jack's other family they won't take him away from her...

Anyway I'm really exited to reading future chapters and I subscribed to your blog to get teasers and stuff, I loved the pics you posted and I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter!:D

aly



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review! I really appreciate you taking the time to read my story! I update every Friday and post teasers on Mondays. In fact, there is delicious little teaser, along with a Pic Tease, up on the Parachute Blog as we speak. 

I added a separate story called "Parachute Outtakes" as a place to keep everything together! There's an outtake of the new car purchase and Jack's 8th birthday up right now! Check it out! Feel free to leave any suggestions for future outtakes in your reviews over there! As you can tell from this message, I respond to every single review because you guys rock my socks!

Also, as another head's up, Parachute's 1000th reviewer will get to choose the subject of one of the outtakes and maybe a little something else. It's the best way that I can think to to thank you guys for all of your love and support!

<3

Shel


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Charlie cast his line out into the lake, watching Jack out of the corner of his eye. It was obvious that the boy had a lot on his mind. 

"Well, kid," Charlie started, "you look like you need someone to talk to. That's why we're out here. Nothing like the peace and tranquility of fishing to help clear your mind. I come out here a lot more now that you and your mom moved into your own place." 

Charlie noticed that Jack flinched a little when he mentioned Bella. Jack sighed and continued to gaze out over the water. 

"Will she?" he asked. Charlie raised an eyebrow.

"Will she what?"

"Will she still be my mom if we go to Chicago to meet my family?" 

When Jack turned towards him, Charlie's heart broke at how the boy's eyes were filled with sadness. He cleared the emotion out of his throat.

"Of course she will. Bella will love you and consider you her son until the day she dies. One thing you gotta learn about us Swan's, Jack, is that when we love, we love forever, just like the actual birds. You'll always be a part of our hearts." 

Charlie blinked back tears as Jack let his drip down his face.

"I don't want to leave you or mom, Pops. Please don't let them keep me!" he cried.


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Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

and the plot thickens... I so so so love Tanya in this one! I hat Victoria right now and this is so worth the wait... anticipating the next chapter...



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review! I hope you enjoy the double chapter this week! Look for Chapter 9 to post sometime tomorrow!

I just want to remind everyone that the 1000th reviewer on FFnet, as well as the 500th on Twilighted and TWCS, will get to choose the subject(s) for one of the Parachute Outtakes!

<3

Shel

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"Tanya suggested that we rent a hotel room for a week or so to see how things go. If they are good, then she knows a guy who can rent us a house to stay in for the summer." Bella rolled her eyes at the thought of Tanya and her "guys."

Charlie's eyes widened. 

"So, you could possibly be gone for the whole summer?" he asked as he swallowed back his anxiety. He hadn't gone more than two weeks without seeing Bella or Jack for the past five years. Even then, most of the time they were only about a two hour drive away. Two and a half months suddenly seemed like an eternity to him.

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Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 30 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

I'm really really exited to find out what happens next!!! I hope they won't accuse her of kidnapping...

 

Love the chapter... I'm nervous for both of them...



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review! I really appreciate you taking the time to read my story! I update every Friday and post teasers on Mondays. In fact, there is delicious little teaser, along with a Pic Tease, up on the Parachute Blog as we speak.

I have taken to calling you, my readers, "Verucas". A good number of you are so demanding and impatient, even though I update every week! It makes me feel so damned loved and I give you this moniker in adoration! You truly give me chills and warm my heart at the same time with every review you leave me! As you can tell from this message, I respond to every single review that is left for me because you guys rock my socks!

Parachute's 1000th reviewer On FFnet was given the option to choose the subject of one of the outtakes and she deferred the choice to my judgement, so I will continue to listen to ideas and then maybe post a poll to see what you guys as a whole would like to see. The 500th reviewers on Twilighted and here will also be extended the same deal, since I want no one to feel left out!

Oh, and one more thing! An awesome Veruca named Phoebe started Parachute a thread on the Twilighted Forum! The link is up on the blog if you need it! In addition, thanks to many of you, Parachute was named as FanFic Addicts Fic of the Month! Super-freaking-yay!

I love you guys something fierce and I hope this next chapter lives up to your expectations of the first Cullen meeting!

XoXo

Shel


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Esme's gaze went back and forth between Bella and Jack. She could clearly see the love that wound between the two of them and a million questions started to swirl around her.

"How?" she asked, as tears started to trickle from her verdant eyes. "What happened? How did you find him? How long have you known we were his family?"  Both she and Carlisle looked at Bella expectantly.

"It's very long story," Bella chuckled, humorlessly. "Let me start at the beginning."

Bella started to tell the Cullen her tale, starting with finding Jack in the alley and taking him to the police station. She didn't get very far. They were interrupted with the sound of the front door opening and a loud voice calling out of the foyer.

"Mom! We're here!"

Bella felt something tighten in her stomach as she prepared to come face to face with Jack's father. Her nerves were at an all-time high and she briefly wondered if Dr. Cullen could prescribe her something to help prevent an ulcer from forming.

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Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10

oh, boy... now I'm worried what E's reaction would be. B felt something there and so does E.

I have to say GO JACK! I got worried for a while there with Emmett...

The dram is just beginning to unfold... I can't wait for the next chapter..:D

Love this chppie Shel!

Aly



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review! For those of you who are new to the story, I update every Friday and post teasers on Mondays. The latest teases are up on the Blog (http://kitsushel.blogspot.com/) as we speak. I know everyone's excited about Edward finally showing up! I am too, lol! I love reading your reactions to the chapter and answering your questions!


<3  Shel

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"I could have left him at that police station and let the damn state take care of it, but I didn't. I stood up and chose to do it. I had to make difficult decisions on a daily basis. Things that I shouldn't have had to worry about, but I did. Because I loved him. For the past five goddamned years, I've loved him and I've made sure that he was fed and clothed and taken care of. I made sure that he had to best education that I could afford and that he knew that he was loved. I've bled, sweat and cried over this child. So screw you, Mr. Cullen, and the horse you rode in on," she seethed in fury.    

Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

W.O.W. aother great chapter. It's like Victoria never really cared about Jack in the first place, there is no post partum depression here just pure I-don't-give-a-damn-what-happens-to-this-baby. i think she was in it for the money or something.

Edward's story is just sad, to say the least I hope when he finally confronts Victoria about it he'll rip her a new one and then some. I liked their talk, atleast now Bella understands what happened between Victoria and Edward...

 



Author's Response:

 

Thank you so much for your review! Just in case you're unaware, the story updates every Friday and I post teasers on Mondays. The latest teases are up on the Parachute Blog as we speak! This past weekend was absolutely crazy and hectic for me, so I wouldn't be looking for Parachute to update early this week! Friday around 1:00 PM, EST will more than likely be when it posts! 

I love you guys and I'm always happy to hear your thoughts, whether it's on FB, Twitter, the Blog or the Twilighted thread. You guys rock my world!

<3 Shel


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As Bella yawned and stretched, her hand hit something soft and feathery. She opened her eyes and saw her fingers resting on auburn hair. Warm green eyes smiled happily at her. She sat up quickly and glanced around the room before turning back to the person in her bed.

"What are you doing?" she asked, slightly confused at his presence.     

 

Summary:

 

When try outs for "Romeo and Juliet" are announced HS Senior Edward decides to make a play for the girl who's been staring in his dreams…with Lemon-tastic results! Spur of the moment, jump-in creation for Eviekinz's birthday. Smut-take.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3102 Read Count: 2335
[Report This] Published: 28 Jun 2010 Updated: 28 Jun 2010
Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1 written by Winterstale

That was hilarious! I found your banner in twilighted and decided to give it a go and so far I like it...



Author's Response:

Thanks for giving it a try and reading!!! 

We had fun with it.  ;D

Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Part 2 written by Gasaway Alley

*chokes then starts coughing* That was... really... fast... But seriously so so HOT!!! 



Author's Response:

*huge grin*  Yeah that was part of the "gift" no waiting angst! lol

Thanks for reading and sharing your reaction! :D

Reviewer: aly1390 Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Part 3 written by RosaBella75

Oh. My. God. It's like Edward's peen is gonna fall off ( I hope not) if keep up like this... and... GO BELLA!!! You are a strong, independent woman... I love her!

 



Author's Response:

LOL  Thanks! :D

Good thing the young heal/recover fast, eh? *mwaha* 

Thanks for reading!  It's been great fun seeing your reactions to our little birthday offering for our friend.