Date: 31 Jan 2010 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
awesome..cant wait to read what happens next
Date: 31 Jan 2010 4:13 AM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
I love this story. I truly, truly do. It's the pervy, smutty jewel in the crown that is your writing. Hell, I love all your stories, but this one....... Beyond words kinda good!!!!!
Date: 31 Jan 2010 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
XD jacob yay omg can not wait for more awesome story =)
[Report This]Date: 31 Jan 2010 3:23 AM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
I'm so glad Jacob came straight away to help!
My only concern is - doesn't Victoria have a GPS style tag in her? So James will be able to find them no matter what anyway... but she seems to have forgotten about this (or does she even know? I can't remember)
Oh so stressful! But great non the less!
Date: 31 Jan 2010 2:41 AM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
i am dieing to find out how Jacob's gonna handle all the news...my guesses is he's gonna try n knock out Edward...I hope he doesn't hurt his pretty face! I love you Edward lol!!!!
[Report This]Date: 31 Jan 2010 2:17 AM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
WOW, if THAT's a quaint little cabin....
Great chapter, I have follow you gys everywhere because this story it's just to great not to
Date: 30 Jan 2010 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
I feel my anxiety creeping back as this story progresses. It went away for a little while, when James was locked in the dungeons and Bella was safely hidden away at Edwards, but i am back on high alert.
This chapter was great at building the urgency in the story, My god, i just wanted to jump into the text on screen and push them all out of Edward's door - they were acting like dawdling toddlers. I was screaming in my head "hello? mad man on the loose! get out of the house NOW!". But instead they decided to have a nice little chat in the foyer. It's okay though. They got out eventually. I hope they will be safe at the cabin. And Jacob is here...YAH!
I was a little bit suprised by Carlisle closing the school down, and will be interested to see what happens with his side of the story from now on.
Oh, and i love the pic of the cabin. It is beautiful. I want to stay there!
Once again, thankyou for the update. It is greatly appreciated, and i eagerly await your next installment...
Date: 30 Jan 2010 11:43 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Aww, Bella said she loves him :) So I've been reading this story all along, yet this is my first review. I'm sorry :( This story is really good. I loved how B & E got closer at the school and that he's protecting her from James now. So sweet. Anyway, sorry again for never reviewing. I promise I will review from now on!
Kristi
Date: 30 Jan 2010 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
yay JACOB TO THE RESCUE (:
nawww edward and bella finally expressed thier love to each other
that was sweet
I CANT BELIEVE THAT CARLISE IS CLOSING DOWN THE SCHOOL!!!?? thas soo sadd, what about all of is that want to enroll :P
awesome chapter
loved it
UPDATE SOOON!!!!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Just when I think they're about to get away safely I remember that chip in Victoria's shoulder. Hopefully James will show up while everyone is still at the cabin. Maybe Jacob can get him alone in an interrogation room. (Yeah, even after that extremely satisfying revenge treatment of James, I still entertain fantasies. He needs a bigger attitude adjustment.)
Date: 30 Jan 2010 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
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[Report This]Date: 30 Jan 2010 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 65: James DAY 22
I've read the story first on Fanfiction.net before I started to read it here and I just want to tell you that this is an amzing story, all pov is verry intresting too read and you are making an unforgettable story! Keep it up.
Date: 30 Jan 2010 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
oh wow!!
At first I`M SO SORRY; that i don`t have reviewt!!!
really, i`m very sorry, your story is so ... i don`t know,
how to describe!! second, I come from germany, so sorry
for my english *grin* in one day, i`ve read all of your chapters,
i was ill and so, i`ve got the chance to read and already love
your story!! i heard anja and tina, have the rights to translate-
thats great, they are both ver talented and will translate your
story wither their heart-blood, trust me *smile*
yeah, i want to say that, that`s a fantastic story, i must say,
i cried a little ... ^^
okay, yeah, that was me, i hope u understand my english a little
love u, maxi
your new fan
[Report This]Date: 30 Jan 2010 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Fabulous. I am so excited to see what happens next; this story is so good. I am worried about James following Jacob though. He knows Bella and Jacob are friends so he could have maybe kept tabs on him. I am not sure but I think this will come back to haunt them. Oh, I cannot wait for the next chapter and to see what happens next ;)
[Report This]Date: 30 Jan 2010 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Great chapter ladies!!! Loved it! I'm glad Bella finally said those words to Edward. I feel so bad for Victoria. Dumbass James has traumatized her so badly.
Can't wait to see what happens next!
Love yoU!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
great chapter! I love this story. Can't wait to see what Jacob is like.
Date: 30 Jan 2010 8:41 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Awesome! I hope Jacob kicks some James ass ;-)
Date: 30 Jan 2010 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
I knew Alice would get her way. Lol. I am glad that Bella told Edward that she loved him. They will get through this, they just have to. Thanks for writing such a wonderful story. Can't wait for the next update. GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
THe two things that I liked best about this chapter was how tender and kind was with Victoria when she was getting sick. The poor girl needs to know that there are still some good guys out there. Then how Carlisle decided to close the school down on his own since he felt that it just wasn't a safe place to be. He obviously has procedures that must be changed. However it did make me proud of him to make such a hard decision like this. He has screwed so much up!!
Date: 30 Jan 2010 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
man...i have a bad feeling about this...i really hope that Jake isnt in on all of this...
~Tiffany
Date: 30 Jan 2010 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Oh, this just keeps getting better and better. I see everything like a movie in my head. Great work ladies! I wonder what Edward thinks of Jacob?
Date: 30 Jan 2010 5:32 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Poor Vikki. she has got to be so scared and confused. Love the 3 stooges reference and the girls admitting they were down there.
That house is gorgeous!!!! wanna visit.
Date: 30 Jan 2010 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
It's great to have Jacob in the story. That would spur on Edward's jealousy, even if Bella's told him her love.
I've had the odd feeling reading some parts like it was writen by a different person than usualy.
Date: 30 Jan 2010 5:08 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Interesting to see Dom Jasper come out for a bit. Poor Victoria. She's so scarred from what James has done. How convenient for Edward to have a second house that no one knows about! :)
Date: 30 Jan 2010 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
love the chapter, can't wait to see James going down in flames....
[Report This]Date: 30 Jan 2010 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Love it as always :)
Date: 30 Jan 2010 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
Thank you so much for the update. Even though they are on the run, I love Bella feeling safe with edward. I can't wait for more.
Date: 30 Jan 2010 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 67: Bella DAY 23
WOoo, Jacob has arrived!!!! Jeej :)
James would do better to run and hide far far away in a cave now ;) It's good to see the girls being more trusting and learning that their bad experiences are not the norrmal world!
ttfn
Ardanwen
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2010 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 66: Edward DAY 22 & 23
Great chapter. I love sweet Edward and Jasper. I wonder when James will show up because we all know that he is searching for Bella and will also want to track down Victoria (by using her chip). ......Kat
[Report This]Date: 29 Jan 2010 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 66: Edward DAY 22 & 23
i may take up your challenge when my brain is running on more sleep. just wanted to tell you that i love your characters. yes, they may be stephanie's originally. but you have developed them into your own, and they are full and rich. there is nothing more sad, than reading a story that could be fabulous, but lacks complete characters. on top of that, you have pulled out a complex story line, that doesn't feel like you are wandering around in wonderland. thank you for your time and keep up the amazing work.
Date: 28 Jan 2010 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 51: Bella DAY 20 PART A
James is an ass.
WOW is this Jacob searching for Bella at James place.
[Report This]Date: 28 Jan 2010 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 64: Bella DAY 22
I am glad my Jakey is in the mix plus he is a good guy at least I am hoping. I would be so pissed if his ass was a crooked ass cop. Poor Victoria she is afraid to leave her room. James really did a number on her.
[Report This]Date: 28 Jan 2010 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 63: Edward DAY 21 & 22
I loved Alice & Jasper being back in the mix. I missed them.
[Report This]Date: 28 Jan 2010 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 62: James DAY 22
I love that James is now the fucking victim. I loved this chapter keep the torture up he deserves it!
Date: 28 Jan 2010 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 66: Edward DAY 22 & 23
I love this story a lot. I just startet to read last weekend and now I just managed to get the accound at the writers coffee shop. I´m very pleasant the way you write.
With best greatings from Frankfurt
Bussy
Date: 28 Jan 2010 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 66: Edward DAY 22 & 23
Great chapter as always! I love this story.:)
Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 66: Edward DAY 22 & 23
Fun challeng....hoppe you get a lot of good words
Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 65: James DAY 22
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 64: Bella DAY 22
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 63: Edward DAY 21 & 22
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 62: James DAY 22
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 61: Bella DAY 21
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 60: Rose's Retribution DAY 21
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:05 PM Title: Chapter 59: Carlisle DAY 20 & 21
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 58: Edward DAY 21
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 57: James DAY 20 PART C
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 55: Bella DAY 20 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 4:00 PM Title: Chapter 54: Carlisle DAY 20 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 41: James DAY 16 PART B
I think capter 40 and 41 is the samme....JPOV is missing. :(
Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 53: Edward DAY 20 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 52: James DAY 20 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 51: Bella DAY 20 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:29 PM Title: Chapter 50: Edward DAY 20 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 49: James DAY 20 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 48: Bella DAY 18
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:08 PM Title: Chapter 47: Edward DAY 17 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 46: Bella DAY 17 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 45: Edward DAY 17 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:49 PM Title: Chapter 44: James DAY 17
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:48 PM Title: Interview with the Master
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 43: Bella DAY 17 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:45 PM Title: Chapter 42: Edward DAY 16 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 42: Edward DAY 16 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 40: Bella DAY 16 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 39: Edward DAY 16 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:59 PM Title: Chapter 38: James DAY 16 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:55 PM Title: Chapter 37: Bella DAY 16 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 37: Bella DAY 16 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 36: Edward DAY 14
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 35: James DAY 14
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 34: Bella - Day 14
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:21 PM Title: Chapter 33: Edward - DAY 12 - PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 32: James - DAY 12 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:00 PM Title: Chapter 31: Bella - DAY 12 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:59 PM Title: Chapter 30: Edward - DAY 12 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:29 PM Title: Chapter 29: James - DAY 12 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:12 PM Title: Chapter 28: Bella - DAY 12 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 27: Edward - DAY 11
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 26: James - DAY 11
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 11:51 AM Title: Chapter 25: Bella - DAY 11
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 11:44 AM Title: Chapter 24: Edward - DAY8 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
Two things I noticed while reading: Chapter 19 should actually be Bella Day 8 - Part A, not day 9. Also, instead of having JPOV posted in chapter 41, chapter 40 has been posted again. I thought you might want to correct these things.
Date: 28 Jan 2010 11:20 AM Title: Chapter 23: James - DAY 8 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 1: Bella - DAY 1
Glad we've found a permanent home for the story. Love ya ladies.
Date: 28 Jan 2010 1:03 AM Title: Chapter 35: James DAY 14
Normally I read fan fiction on fanfiction.net. I know that over there you have the 4 stories seperated. I think having all 4 stories combined is a much better arrangement. Often when authors do multiple POV as seperate stories, it feels like you're rehashing the same story repeatedly. This way when reading the different POV you don't already know how it's going to end. Also, I don't think I could put up with James' POV for more then a chapter at a time. I like the contrast shown in how proper SM is done, and how it's done by someone who doesn't know what they are doing. I am so looking forward to James' plan unravaling.
Author's Response:
well I wouldn't have combined it at all except FanFiction pulled Bella's POV off......... but yes I do like it combined even if it was so hard to get it to this point.........
thanks for taking the time and coming over here to read it........ it won't be posted on FanFiction anymore.
Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 22: Bella - DAY 8 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:29 AM Title: Chapter 21: Edward - DAY 8 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 20: James - DAY 8 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 19: Bella - DAY 9 PART A
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:09 AM Title: Chapter 18: Edward - DAY 7 PART B
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Date: 28 Jan 2010 12:05 AM Title: Chapter 17: James - DAY 7
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 16: Carlisle - DAY 7
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 15: Edward - DAY 7 PART A
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 14: Bella - DAY 7
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 13: James - DAY 6
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 12: Bella - DAY 6
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 11: James - DAY 5
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 10: Bella - DAY 5
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Date: 27 Jan 2010 9:44 PM Title: Chapter 9: James - DAY 4
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