Date: 29 Oct 2017 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 3
I really like this story. I’ll be honest, I was hesitant to read it after trying “Trafficked Love” where I found a ton of implausibility that turned me off.
But I gave this a try and so far, except for some minor grammatical errors and misused words, this story is pitch perfect.
The characters are well developed and their motivations are very believable. And their actions are in-line with their personalities that you are fleshing out nicely. The pacing is good, and the tension is real. The descriptors are executed beautifully. The details are interesting and realistic. As are the characters. They are engaging and I find myself intrigued by them. I genuinely want to know what happens to them. I’m only on chapter 3, but was impressed already with the strong opening and subsequent development. I hope it stays strong throughout. If it ever gets finished.
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I was especially happy with Roselie and her response. I had a feeling she would be the one to knock sense into Bella. But I was very impressed with how she does it. When she says, “Last night you enjoyed all of Edward’s kinkiness, but now you’re judging him because he gave it a name that is taboo in our society. You were fine with him dominating you until he called himself a Dom; now, you’re acting like he’s a freak.”, I thought that was incredibly smart insight.
Hope you continue this.
Date: 09 Mar 2015 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 9
I hope your exams went well. I really enjoy this story so please update when you get a moment!
Date: 06 Mar 2015 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 9
I found another chapter on ff. I'm heading there to get it!
Date: 05 Mar 2015 9:54 PM Title: Chapter 8
Well once you popped your first lemon you really went for it with your second one and knocked it out of the park!
Date: 05 Mar 2015 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 7
Your writing is so captivating!
Date: 05 Mar 2015 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 6
Nothing like throwing her a curve ball! I'm very happy he did!
Date: 05 Mar 2015 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 5
Fantastic first lemon!
Date: 05 Feb 2015 3:07 PM Title: Chapter 8
Holy sweet pete, Ican't wait to go out to eat with Daddy now :)
Date: 18 Dec 2014 6:42 AM Title: Chapter 9
I loved it! please update soon!!!
Date: 18 Dec 2014 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 9
This continues to be a lovely story. Can't wait for more.
Date: 17 Dec 2014 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 9
This story just keeps getting better, this is the best chapter yet. I loved the bit about her keeping her hair down, this is the first story that I have read where they don't insist on the hair being tied up whilst in the playroom, it was a nice touch while making it seem like their time in the playroom will be more than what it usually is.
Date: 16 Dec 2014 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 9
This seems so overwhelming for her... He has never trained anyone? That is going to make for a interesting story!
Looking forward to more :)
Date: 16 Dec 2014 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 9
really great chapter i like that your showing the relationship isnt all sex and edward is making sure she understands this before moving forward
looking forward to more
well done
Date: 29 Nov 2014 9:56 AM Title: Chapter 8
Mercy!! Now that's a date!! :D
Looking forward to more :D
Date: 29 Nov 2014 5:01 AM Title: Chapter 8
Loved it!
Date: 29 Nov 2014 3:02 AM Title: Chapter 8
What a HOT lemon. Hope you update again soon!
Date: 28 Nov 2014 12:15 PM Title: Chapter 8
Love it, love the passion. Will very much enjoy following this story.
Date: 27 Nov 2014 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 8
I love it, please update soon!!!!!!!
Date: 27 Nov 2014 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 8
good
happy thanksgiving
Date: 27 Nov 2014 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 8
wow
very hot and definatley worth waiting for
well done
Date: 09 Nov 2014 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 7
I loved it!!!!!!! Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 29 Sep 2014 5:47 AM Title: Chapter 7
Love the story and hope to read more
Date: 27 Jul 2014 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 7
Well no Edward this time, but at least she's talking to her friends again and made the right decision. I look forward to their date.
Date: 27 Jul 2014 11:43 AM Title: Chapter 7
wow
great chapter i am really likeing your edward he seems like a good guy who loves a bit of kink glad bella is going in feeling better about herself thats a plus
well done
Date: 27 Jul 2014 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 7
Loving this and looking forward to more :)
Date: 26 Jul 2014 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 7
I am glad that Bella has Rose to talk to. Can't wait for more. Please hurry and update again. Great story.
Date: 23 Jul 2014 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 4
Glad Bella opened her mind up. Can't wait for more. PLEASE update soon.
Date: 23 Jul 2014 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 3
Glad Rose got Bella to think rational.
Date: 23 Jul 2014 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 2
Can't wait to read more.
Date: 23 Jul 2014 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 1
This sounds very interesting. Can't wait to read more. I love BDSM stories.
Date: 13 Jul 2014 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 6
Can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: 08 Jul 2014 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 6
Edward is so intense and wants Bella in all senses. I'm excited to see how they will work dating and BDSM relationship.
Date: 07 Jul 2014 9:52 PM Title: Chapter 6
So he is explaining everything to her. I wonder if he will remember that this is her first time being a sub, pet, princess. Has to be overwhelming for her.
Rose, damn that was shitty!! I get why she did what she did, but still doesnt make it right.
[Report This]Date: 07 Jul 2014 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 5
WOW! That was really hot!
[Report This]Date: 07 Jul 2014 12:28 PM Title: Chapter 4
You are totally on the right track! She really needed to see how it worked
before accepting the proposal of Edward. I'm excited to see them together.
[Report This]Date: 07 Jul 2014 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 3
I'm glad Bella has the support of Rose, I understand her being scared of something
thus BDSM is very different from your league and even though it is a natural sub is necessary that she accepted his nature.
[Report This]Date: 07 Jul 2014 7:26 AM Title: Chapter 2
Bella never see clearly! I'm loving your writing.
[Report This]Date: 07 Jul 2014 7:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow! I love it! Edward is so hot ... I hope Bella accepted his proposal.
Date: 05 Jul 2014 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 6
I loved it! We find out a lot about Bella's reasoning here. We also find out just how much Edward wants her in his life. I look forward to reading more!
Date: 05 Jul 2014 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 6
Ok, I really love it but... I'm confused at how Edward can know he wants that from her? Will we get his POV to understand? Is this what he expects from all of his subs? I'm guessing there is much more to the back story we don't know yet? Looking forward to finding out.
Date: 05 Jul 2014 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 5
Wow, that was fuck hot. Congratulations, can't wait to read what you have next.
Date: 05 Jul 2014 3:04 PM Title: Chapter 4
Getting better and better.
Date: 05 Jul 2014 2:49 PM Title: Chapter 3
Really nice! Can't wait to see where it goes.
Date: 05 Jul 2014 2:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
Liking it so far. :)
Date: 03 Jul 2014 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 6
Hate when the chapter is over its getting so good please post soon can't wait
Date: 03 Jul 2014 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 6
god i really am loving this edward
this story is really great and so far plenty kinky
i am totally hooked so bad
well done
Date: 30 Jun 2014 6:50 AM Title: Chapter 5
That was great! Can't wait to read more!
Date: 29 Jun 2014 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 5
I loved it! Still breathing hard....and loved it!! Your Edward brought not only Bella fulfillment, but me as well! Thank you so very much for a marvelous experience and read!
Date: 28 Jun 2014 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 5
loved it was fantastic first scene
looking forward to more
very hot with a capital H
Date: 28 Jun 2014 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 5
Great chapter want need more
Date: 28 Jun 2014 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 5
Yowza! Super Hot Stuff!!
[Report This]Date: 28 Jun 2014 10:34 AM Title: Chapter 5
Congrats, your lemon was great.
[Report This]Date: 28 Jun 2014 10:10 AM Title: Chapter 4
I thought she might bump into Edward.
[Report This]Date: 28 Jun 2014 9:33 AM Title: Chapter 1
It seems interesting.
Date: 27 Jun 2014 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 4
Love it! A whole new world has opened for Bella, one she didn't even know existed but now yearns for. You bring it home naturally and yet almost all at once in a thunderclap! I look forward to more!
[Report This]Date: 27 Jun 2014 4:44 PM Title: Chapter 4
I stumbled on your story, and was interested. I make banners and needed a challenge and every once and awhile, I need to go out of my comfort zone..lol.. I made this for your story.. Looks great so far!! If you don't like, you can delete..
Date: 26 Jun 2014 1:21 PM Title: Chapter 4
You are definitely on the right track, can't wait for more!
Date: 26 Jun 2014 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 4
great chapter
god im really hooked
well done
Date: 25 Jun 2014 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 3
Let's hear it for Rosaliethe Rational! So embody has to be....rational, that is. I look forward to more. This chapter really wet my appetite! Wonderful!
Date: 24 Jun 2014 4:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
please update soon
great story
Date: 24 Jun 2014 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 3
Like what your doing with the story can't wait for more hope it's soon
Date: 23 Jun 2014 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 3
this is really good
dont normally read till more chapters in but iv caught the bug im doomed to waiting ...........
loving it please write fast lol
Date: 23 Jun 2014 3:57 AM Title: Chapter 2
Hmmmm... Sounds intriguing! This could be more than interesting! I look forward to reading more!
[Report This]Date: 22 Jun 2014 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 2
yes you are bella
Date: 22 Jun 2014 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 2
That was amazing! I really cannot wait to see what they do next! There are some little mistakes, but nothing major that distracts me from reading. Love this!
Date: 22 Jun 2014 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
I LIKE!!!MOST DEFINATELY!
[Report This]Date: 22 Jun 2014 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed this quite a bit! Come back with more soon?
Date: 21 Jun 2014 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
I just read your first chapter, and I am totally hooked on this one! I even rec'd it in one of my groups. I hope you continue to post on this site, because I enjoy reading here much more than on FFn. But for now, I'm going over there to read the rest of the chapters you have posted. Thanks for sharing this with us. There aren't enough authors writing Domward these days, and I really hope you continue with this one. Great job!
Date: 21 Jun 2014 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Sounds great so far! Cannot wait for more!
Date: 21 Jun 2014 1:33 PM Title: Chapter 1
Like it hope you post soon