Date: 02 Feb 2015 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 20 The Man Within The Bat
you are a genius...
this journal was so powerful...
how you have such a great understanding of your characters...
of all of your wonderful characters, all of the players..
all that knowledge in minute details...
you can change some of the characters in your stories and make
them originals...All yours...and publish..
Perhaps even work for DC or Marvel, whoever..
TY for your awesome stories...
i look forward everyday for your updates and new ones too!
Date: 21 Dec 2014 11:12 AM Title: Chapter 19 Charismatic
I am certainly enjoying your stories. I've actually read through what you have of posted of your Thor/Bella (Thunder Gods and something or the other) [as you already know], and your Bruce Banner/Bella (Gamma something or the other) [sorry for not reviewing on that one, I kind of stayed up all night reading it and then promptly passed out once I finished reading every chapter you posted]. I have to say that all three that I've read so far are positively amazing.
I really enjoy your writing style, however I do have a slight problem with it as well. I don't say this to be mean or anything, just as constructive criticism: I've noticed that you leave little to no indicators as to when the 'scene' has changed. This often leads to me feeling extremely confused, I often have to look back over what I have read so that I can figure out why the time between sentences jumped so greatly, or why characters changed, and the like. This is, of course, an easy solution to fix as all you would need to do is add some sort of indicator in this parts. It doesn't even have to be complicated. An example, that I have seen many other online author's use, would be: [insert random symbols here][insert story initials here][insert repeated random symbols here]. Again, I'm not saying this to be rude or anything, I'm only saying this to help.
Anyway, like I stated above and in my first review on your Thor/Bella Thunder Gods and something or the other story, I really like the way that you write and how you bring everything together in such an interesting and amazing way. I truly cannot wait to read more of your stories, and I will definitely feel saddened when there are no more for me to read.
I wish you the best of luck in your writing and I hope to see you update your stories as soon as you possibly can. :-D
P.S. As I am unaware as to how this website operates, if you should like to reply to anything that I have said in any of my reviews (past, present and future) then I would like for you to know that my username on FanFiction (where I originally found you) is the same as it is on here. And if you do not wish to message me on there, then my email is: email@example.com and in case that doesn't go through (as once more, I don't know how this website operates) the email address is: moonlight(dot)isabella(dot)silverstein(at)gmail(dot)com