Date: 21 Nov 2022 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 31
Overall, this was a lovely story. However, the writing needs a great deal of work. It lacks descriptors and details, so I had no idea what the characters were thinking or feeling, how we got from one point to another, or what the location(s) were like. Descriptive Words: Adjectives, Adverbs, & Participles.... https://grammar.yourdictionary.com/word-lists/list-of-descriptive-words.html
Date: 20 Sep 2022 6:11 PM Title: Chapter 29
Good riddance to the Kings, but something tells me we've not heard the last of them, or at least James. The incident with Mary Smithers made me think about how back in those days something like what happened to her ruined a good woman's reputation and standing.
Date: 25 Jun 2022 7:04 AM Title: Chapter 13
I love this fic. The pains they go to make sure they keep appropiate decorum for the time setting of the story. A lot can happy in four days though.
After thinking about Edward getting shot. I'm wondering if the bankers' son is behind it. The banker was pretty insistent she meet his son.
Date: 24 May 2022 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 8
Thank you for the update..what came over Edward? The cups will do it to you..lol..Bella handle it well. Rosalie is my girl . Edward did remember what happen but when Rosalie got back he knew. lol..Alice reassurred her they would be married in the spring. I hope that happens for Bella since her first marriage ended so soon after marriage. loving this story until you post again
Date: 15 May 2022 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 7
Rosalie and Bella seem like they'll be fast friends. I've wondered if Edward is intimated by Bella's wealth. They could surely buy the land they saw and build their own house big enough for a big family on it. Looking forward to their traveling to the wedding and the Whitlock wedding.