I would like to say that this is one of the best BDSM stories i have read! I love that Bella is the strong and confidant sub and later on Domme, and that the encounter she has with Edward brings him in to the "lifestyle". You write Edward as a very commited sub and also a very strong personality in the ëvery-day-life". Most BDSM story's I come across on Fanfiction are nothing compared with this one. They either have a broken sub-Bella or a very dark Dom Edward...Blah!

There is a "red line" trough out this story, they influence each other whit out them knowing and they end up together.
I don't think the last chapter was to much, It was a breaking point for Edward, but the way you wrote this, you can feel that he is going to get thru this with Bella.
I think your story is very well written and deserves much more feedback and credit than it has been getting.
I think that is why I write this review now. I usualy don't review because English is not my native languague and I find it difficult to express myself. I really hope you will continue this great story, I am very much a fan!

Greetings from the Netherlands,

Linda

PS: I will copy-post this review on Fanfiction

Finally!!

Great chapter!! And I hope Tanya gets shit for this. It was irresponsible behaviour on her part for doing this to him instead of breaking the relationship the normal way. Not cool! Not cool at all.

I'm sorry to hear about the death in your family and my thoughts go out to you all. Take your time with updating, and I look forward to the new chapter when its ready :)

Good story and the D/s scenes are quite raw and hot. I can't wait to see where you take this now that B&E have finally met up.

Good chapter. I'm surprised that this story hasn't gotten as many reviews as other BDSM fics. Original plot. Good character development. Another thing is that it is gramaticly correct. Nothing ruins a good story like bad grammar. Keep it up! :)

Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm very sad about the few reviewers although I do appriciate those who DO review :-) I don't know if my story is too rough (people read it anyway) or because people don't want to admit to others that they read stuff like this. Anyway, thanks for reading!

EPOV- is really interesting. I find myself thinking it is completely possible for him to keep going based on his personal feelings towards Tanya and his "preceived" responsiblity as a sub. I guess people make similar decisions in their everyday lives; we constantly push ourselves to far to prove a point or some inner desire to please or prove worthiness to ourselves or others.

 I can't wait to see how he and Bella will pull through this event, and how or if there D/s relationship will proceed. 

Loving your story so far, the development of the universe and back story of B & E.

Thanks for not deleting it.  loving forward to the next posting.

I am so glad that Bella is giving Edward aftercare.  Too bad Bella didn't get a chance to say something to Tanya before Tanya left the room with Carlisle.  I'm also interested in what Carlisle has to say to that deadhearted Tanya. I hope she gets whats coming to her soon.  I also wonder how Edward feels about Tanya now.  I suspect things can only look up with Bella taking over as his domme.

I just discovered your story, and I'm all caught up. Curious to see if Tanya "gets hers" sometime...

Someone ought to whip tanya senseless.  great chapter really evoked the emotion that would have been playing out.

Excellent chapter. I hope they kick Tanya out.

Good thing Bella can take care of Edward, when Tanya doesn't. I would love to know what Carlilse says to Tanya.

Can't wait for the next chapter :-)

wow................looking forward to the next chappie!

:)molly

Oh thank God for Edward!!

Lovely nurturing moment!  Wonder what Edward will be thinking when he comes to.

Hmm, all I need is 10 minutes alone in a room with Tanya and a cat-o-nine, and we'll see who walks out smiling!!

ok  I don't care who, but someone needs to punch that bitch in the face..... a bunch of times.   ESP when she didnt even bother to think about aftercare.

Ur killing me with the waiting... they haven't even spoken since they saw each other again...ahhhh...lol Keep writing, loving it!

wow tanya bitch. i cna't believe she just didn't let him go. man to treat someone with such little respect is just cruel. i can't believe seth wants to be with someone so cruel. i am surprised edward did. if thye know what she is capable of and has little respect for their safety how can you play knowing your domme is suppose to have your intrest at heart. but I guess if it is all pain then of course she wouldn't care and he should of taken the dbl penteration knowing that is what he signed up for and that is what she is capable of. she knew his hard limits and still she pushed him. i always thought the domme where not suppose to go for the hard limits. but i am going with your judgement and this is your story and I am having fun with it. can't wait to see what happens next. love it

Poor Edward.

Good story so far.  My pesonal taste is not to continually rotate POVs but to stick with one (Bella woudl be my choice for this story) and communicate the others through it in 3rd person.  But I can see how, as a writing exercise, changing POVs can be useful .

Very intense story.  I have never been in a BDSM club, but you have certainly helped paint that picture.  Thanks and keep going.

I just started reading this and wow you sure can tell a story. Poor Edward, heh! Anyway keep up the good work and I can't wait to see what Bella has in store for him!

Okay- I was doing well until this chapter. The dialogue needs to be broken up. Each character needs a different paragraph.

Author's Response:

Just wait for it, it's being beta'ed and only the first four chapters are ready ;-)

Sorry you're not getting ebough reviews as the story certainly deserves them. Well written and believable.

wow...Even though is was necessary for him to leave Tanya, I literally had to take a deep breath reading Edward's torture. I'm so glad he finally safeworde, Edward can be so stubborn! Hopefully his time with Bella - he won't be so stubborn.

Again, I love all the different POV's - though I think we need Carlisle's POV too - because I hope he isn't that cruel and would have wanted to help/save Edward. Also love all the suspense - you gave just enough - Edward only gets a peek of Bella.

Looking foward to the next chapter!

I love the story, and I know that this is a work of fiction.  I know some about the community.  Tanya would have be reprimanded in someway for using the cat o nine on Edward.  It is a HARD limit for him, and she knew this and did it anyway.  I know her goal was to get him to "safeword", and he did.  He should have done it the moment he saw tha cat o nine, but he did not want to embarrass or let down his Mistress.  Tanya's behavior was reprehensable.  Can you please make her get what is comming to her?  She needs to be punished herself.  She broke a major rule of the BDSM lifestyle, and for Carlisle to go along with it almost make me want to vomit.  I lost much respect for him as a Domme with the scene.  I just wanted to vent some because I know how things work, but this is your story and I respect that.  Atlest Bella will be there to help put Edward back together again.  I know the good stuff is just around the curve.  I just think that Tanya is a Royal Bitch!!  Love reading and please keep it coming.

jesus i was saying red for him, i know he feels like a failure for having to use it but his permant healh both physical and mental are more important, carlisle could have come up with a better plan couldn't he? now bella recgonises him so of course she will want him as a sub but how will they fare romantically, and what will they think when they realise they havve been working in the same place for years, thanks tracy

great chapter, they finally meet yeahhhhhh, is it me or is something off with tanya she knows he dosen't like humiliation but does it anyway and edward does not seem into her apart from the good body she has it just seems real different to how bella speaks of carlisle,  nice jibe with the jake dog sub thing, thanks tracy

cool chapter, edward is seeking substitutes that will only get him so far, thanks tracy off to the blog to catch the outakes

great chapter, carlisle took her change well, i wonder who he has found who he has feelings for? is there an esme? nice scene i love it when the girls are in charge, thanks tracy

Love the story. Your writing style is wonderful. I could feel Edward's pain and his determination to not safe word. From personal experience I can tell you that the internal battle to not safe word even though you NEED to is intense. And when you do safe word, you feel like a failure as a sub. Poor Edward. Thanks for writing.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm glad if the reluctance and unwillingness to safe word and feeling of failure if doing so comes across even if Edward is enduring much more that he should.

wow, that was hard stuff, but i'm glad, they finally met ;)

curious about the next chapter! sam

Tanya really is evil!  I was wishing that Edward would use his safe word!  Looking forward to the  next chapter and hope that Bella can heal him!

great chapter. i am wondering with the stress of the punishment and then seeing miss chocolate what it  will do to his mental state? can't wait for the next chapter thanks for writing!

cool chapter, bellas got a bit of a gob hasen't she maybe the bloke who is edward thought she would be embarassed having a strange man handle her underwear, but the green eyes are there and they have caught bellas attention, thanks tracy

love the story! i can no longer be counted as one of those who reads but doesn't reviews. hehe

ooh thank god!!!! I was gonna have a melt down over that one!...cant wait for the next update :) xo~Auddie

Cat o'nine tails its one of the most feared weapons of punishment in history, there was another whip that was even worse, it had little hooks in the points and it would rip the flesh open, about you being deleted from fanfiction I believe it was because of the Anti-lemons patrol of Pussy Patrol like I like to call them, update soon

hey there, actually bellas  life sounds sad, she has no friends, no siblings, no family other than her very distant father, i'm not saying she is wrong but does she substitute the ds life for a family one?   she does have money which in itself brings its own power, i'm so intrigued, but i so need to sleep it's gone 10pm in england and i need to sleep for work in the morning, thanks tracy

Tanya definitely needs to suffer some consequences for her actions. That was definitely NOT ON. Thank god Edward finally safeworded.

You mention you need a beta. Contact me. Let's talk. ;)

ohhh cool start, i was looking in the most recent and this caught my eye, i look forward to reading more, thanks tracy

I really like this story and want it to continue.  If hope at some point Tanya is called out for hte shit she is doing.  Violating a hard limit like that and forcing him to leave her should get her thrown out of the community.

I know Carlisle made her change the scene - I shudder to think how bad it could have gotten and I find myself hoping he didn't know how bad it would get.

Wow. I am in favor of some double penetration, but this is sick...of Tanya. I hope she gets kicked out of the "community". What a bitch!

I thought that this was a great chapter - and it was very differenct - not what I expected. I like the fact that you keep us guessing about where this will go!

Love this story! Poor Edward, please continue... I want to see Miss Chocolate make it all better

I didn't think that the BJ was too much...seemed like a natural progression of the events that you described.  I'm curious to see how it will play out when they finally meet!

Thank you for finally posting a new chapter :-)

I think the guy/guy action was at an ok level.

Ohh and I am totally dreading what tanya will do to get Edward to safeword, that just sounds like a nasty way to end a relationship.

I can't wait for the next capter, and I hope you will get lots of reviews so you will keep writing :-)

I was following this story on fanfiction and wanted to see where it was going so followed you here.  I think it is really interesting to see the history behind how both Edward and Bella came to the scene, and I can't wait to see what Tanya has planned for Edward and what Bella and Edward's reactions will be.   

Great Chapter. Cool that Bella is superior to Tanya. So keep writing, it is very good -and the BJ thing, was necessary to understand Edward - so not to much.

Please dont stop just because so many people do not review alot of people read so that is a good thing.  I think a lot of it is that some do not like to admit that they find this very interesting and arousing there afraid.  I am loving it I think it is very interesting and stimulating .  I dont think the BJ thing was to much it is all about submiting and dominating and that is what it is all about.  Please dont stop.

OK, let me count the ways I hate Tanya!! I hope she doesn't take too much out of SUBward(I wish I had him on my floor right now, running my fingers through his hair...oops I digress). I love this story and can't wait for the next update (ok back to my fantasy) ;-)