[Report This]Date: 09 Jun 2010 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
OMG! OMG! Okay first things first - that was insanely hot! But the best part was the plot. The whole time I was thinking that Bella was moving a bit fast, and I was willing her to wait, drag it out, make Edward really burn for her. When they were done I couldn't fathom how those two might possibly turn this into something longer or even launch a relationship. Then you dipped the cartoon anvil on me. I NEVER saw that coming that they were already together. Normally when other authors attempt one of these types of deception I can always see it coming but nit this time which speaks boldly of your talent. I see you've already been persuaded to continue with this story and I'm ecstatic! Can't wait to read the rest!
Author's Response:
:) I'm glad I could fool you! It was pretty well hidden but clues were there. Few people caught it and I love that! Thank you so much for the compliment. The response to the one/shot was amazing so I had to keep going, plus I get to write about football which makes me extremely happy! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far and I hope you like the rest!
Date: 03 Jun 2010 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 2
I was so excited that you decided to continue the story! I can't wait to read the next chapter, I'm positively hooked :)
Author's Response:
Thank you! The response has been amazing and I can't wait to get you guys more. Within the week, I promise ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 02 Jun 2010 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 2
I am so happy I get to read more of this!
Author's Response:
:) Thank you! I'm glad you're wanting more! Working on the next chapter now :)
Date: 02 Jun 2010 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 2
i loooove this storry, and i think it will be wonderful.please update soon :)
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! Working on the next chapter now! :)
Date: 01 Jun 2010 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh, I love it. Just the right amount of cheesy to good writing.
Author's Response:
Um..cheesy? Okay...I'll just focus on the I love it and good writing portion I think! So thank you! :)
Date: 01 Jun 2010 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
oh my god. best first chapter ever! the twist as unexpected but exactly what it needed to be for the story to be different.
Author's Response:
:) I'm glad I was able to fool you! I had a blast writing it and thus had to continue once the contest was over. Working on chapter 3 now, hopefully I'll have it for you soon! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Date: 01 Jun 2010 7:26 AM Title: Chapter 2
i love that you are continuing with this story because i loved the first chapter and this one was just as good. i can't wait for the next chapter xx
Author's Response:
:) Thank you! The response was amazing and I had such a good time writing the first chapter I had to continue. I'm so glad you're still enjoying it!
Date: 01 Jun 2010 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 2
ooh fantastic start to a fantastic story. i think i am speaking for all the readers when i say I CANT WAIT FOR MORE :)
Author's Response:
:) I'm so happy you liked it! I hope to have a new chapter for you within the week. Love finding so many football or at least QBward loving girls!
Date: 01 Jun 2010 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 2
love it!! need more asap
Author's Response:
:) I'm glad you love it! I'll update as soon as I can. I woke up with him in my head, so hopefully I'll have something quickly!
[Report This]Date: 01 Jun 2010 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 2
Wonderful! So glad you are continuing the story!
Author's Response:
I'm glad everyone is so excited! Thank you! I look forward to exploring these guys with you!
Date: 01 Jun 2010 2:46 AM Title: Chapter 2
*jumps up and down excitedly* I am SUPER glad you decided to continue with this story. I LOVE the beginning and cannot wait to see how we end up in the locker room!
Author's Response:
I love your excitement! I'm thrilled at the response the first two chapters have gotten and like you, I can't wait to see how they get to the locker room and beyond! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing :)
[Report This]Date: 01 Jun 2010 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loved the twist at the end of her knowing him already! Loved it!!!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm glad I was able to surprise you with that :) I didn't want to make them too slutty! Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Date: 13 May 2010 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 1
Dr. Cullen must have heard the drool falling at my feet because he looked up and smiled when he saw me
Argg his eyes that pin her are KILLING me...literally & I swear if his towel falls open a bit more I'm gonna bloody jump through the screen, push Bella in a locker & pull the towel right off... oh dear, I seem to have lost control of my fingers at the moment. but they are directly linked to my thoughts so...
I'm really lost with all the football talk...Rugby makes WAY more sense :P *grin* (although I have to say I'm never the biggest sports fan)
"He’d take out his own mother before he’d let anyone hit me." - wow nice thing to be proud of ...meh.. testosterone driven males *rolls eyes*
"Another two inches and he’d be showing me the most coveted cock in the country. I willed the towel to continue moving." .. *squeak* cover him, cover him *body starts twitching spasmodically*
Lol. I couldn't break away from that lemon if you paid me. I swear my stomach was in knots & my body was all tensed up.
It did cross my mind that they didn't use protection or even ask if the other was clean & then I got to the end & nearly laughed my ass off. What a unexpected twist. You're brilliant bb :)
R u going to expand this after the contest?
Author's Response:
Hey, a lineman's job is to protect his QB at all costs. If Mama McCarty was bearing down on Edward with intent to harm, Em would have to step in!
Rugby makes no sense to me but I haven't tried to figure it out either. I don't want my men all bloody tho. hehe
Glad you enjoyed the lemon! It was fun to let loose on that one.
I got you with the twist! Woot! So happy! I had little hints but few people figured it out. Yeah, it would have been bad had they not known one another.
I am going to expand, need to start writing it since it's almost time! Thanks for another awesome review my dear!
Date: 02 May 2010 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
That was really good
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I've had a lot of requests to continue it after the contest is over and I plan on doing just that. Glad you liked it! ;)
Date: 13 Apr 2010 2:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
You really had me going. All I kept thinking was how female sports writers would be set back years after Bella's behavior. "How could Bella do this?" I thought to myself. Then you pulled a fast one and I LOVED it! Fabulous! Really a great story. Best of luck!
Author's Response:
:) I couldn't let her be a complete slut, not after she sneered at the insipid sideline reporters! I'm glad I fooled you though! The story is very likely to continue, go back in time to how they got together and follow them through the issues of a public high profile romance. Good luck to you as well, I enjoyed your story!
Date: 10 Apr 2010 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
First off, WOW!!! This was very well written and flowed nicely. I hate to read stories with many typos and grammar issues. Also, so far this is plausible. You developed the story between the two well, and it wasn't just an automatic jump into Bella walking into the locker room and pouncing on Edward. I like to have a little background, and you provided that. I have to say that you totally surprised me, and that was extremely refreshing. There aren't many stories or books that I read that I don't see the writing on the wall. I am pleasantly surprised at the twist ending. I LOVE IT!!! Please give us more!!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I try to make sure I don't have any errors, I'm sure a couple slip through but I have two great betas and a pre-reader who let me know when I'm not making sense!
I definitely wanted them to have more of a history than just be two people who screwed in a locker room minutes after meeting :) That works in porn but not in one of my stories! I'm glad I was able to surprise you and I definitely plan on continuing it once the challenge is over, go back to when they met and then them dealing with the attention when their romance becomes public. It'll be mostly fun, just like this chapter I hope!
Thank you so much for reviewing, I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
Date: 10 Apr 2010 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 1
Damn, that was one hell of an interview. Great job capturing the spirit of the contest. Good luck :)
Author's Response:
:) Hee, yeah I don't think they get any better than that! Glad you liked it. Thank you for reviewing!
Date: 08 Apr 2010 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 1
NICE!! I love these sorts of stories... you initially assume something a bit different and then in the end you find they are already together, dating, married, etc.
thanks for a nice story!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it and my little twist! Though I imagine I would probably be okay with a romp with Edward in the locker room at any time, I really wanted to let them have more. I'm probably going to expand it down the road. Thank you for reviewing!
Date: 07 Apr 2010 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
I loved that story!!!!
its cute and sexy and i wish you would continue it.
Author's Response:
Thank you, I'm definitely planning on it, sometime in May after the competition is over :) So glad you liked it!
Date: 07 Apr 2010 8:51 AM Title: Chapter 1
fucking hell
so far this one is definitely my favourite :D
Author's Response:
Why thank you! I haven't read any other entries but I'll check em out at some point I imagine! So glad you liked it and thank you for reviewing :) It'll likely continue once the story is over!
[Report This]Date: 07 Apr 2010 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 1
loved it please write more
Author's Response:
I will after the competition, it has to stay a one shot until then :) But I love the feedback and will continue! Thanks for reviewing.
Date: 07 Apr 2010 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
NICE!!!!!!! Like REALLY NICE!!!!!!!!!!! Kinda want to see how they met now. That end made me all tingly... a prequel? LOL
Author's Response:
Hee, I'm already leaning toward expanding it down the road after the challenge is over. I definitely want to write how they got together and then trace them after their relationship is public. Should be fun! Glad you like it, thanks!
Date: 06 Apr 2010 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
you're welcome girly! x
Author's Response:
I saw you mark it :) Thank you!
Date: 06 Apr 2010 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
i loved it, so i will def read whatever you put up- are you on fanfiction by any chance? i'll fav u there too.
Author's Response:
I am on fanfiction, under author nolebucgrl. Here's a link and thank you so much :) http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1901714/Nolebucgrl
Date: 06 Apr 2010 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 1
Dude
i highly encourage you to extend this- some backstory of how they met, and then the future? its SO GOOD! x
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm definitely thinking about going back to their first meeting, first date, first sex, some football/bonding with the boys, then after stuff like her meeting the family and them dealing with the scrutiny of the press and the playoff pressure. I think I'd have a lot of fun writing it so I'm definitely keeping the idea open. Hehe Like I don't have enough going on, but I have the bug on this one. Thanks for leaving me a review!
Date: 06 Apr 2010 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
cute!
Author's Response:
Thanks, it was fun to write something different like that and bring in my love of football :) Thanks for reviewing!