Date: 27 Nov 2010 1:01 AM Title: Chapter 47
OMG!!!!! Great chapter!!! Oh noes! Poor Bella. Demetri, Marcus and Carlisle are monsters!
Date: 24 Nov 2010 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 46
Awesome chapter! =D
Date: 24 Nov 2010 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 45
I absolutely loved this chapter! I enjoyed the flashback scene. I thought it was so sweet of Edward to stand up for Bella, and how he took care of her.
Loved this-->"Can I tell you a secret?” she asked. She cupped her hand to my ear and whispered, “I know what I’m gonna wish for when I blow out my candles. I’m gonna marry you when I grow up.” She then quickly hugged me and kissed my cheek before running away from me toward the house.
Who would have thought she would have gotten her wish. But man, Bella went through a lot to get there. I'm happy that Edward is changing. He really sees the difference between love and lust now.
Date: 24 Nov 2010 9:47 AM Title: Chapter 44
OMG!!! I didn't expect that....so awesome! That was hot and sweet all wrapped up in one! Loved it!!! =D
Date: 22 Nov 2010 10:43 AM Title: Chapter 43
I'm baaaaack! RL was kicking my behind!
Loved the chapter!
Author's Response:
I know the feeling very well. I've been buried under deadlines for my novel that was released Oct 28. And just finalized everything for my next novel coming out next spring. Exciting, but very time consuming.
Happy Thanksgiving!
Date: 22 Nov 2010 12:09 AM Title: Epilogue
Bella's Edward is definitely a perfect Edward. That family went through so much and I'm glad that Edward and Bella were willing to make the effort after Carlisle was gone.
Congrats to Esme too. I'm glad she found someone to love her and that she was able to move on from Carlisle without continuing to live in fear.
A huge thanks to Renee and Phil for raising Bella the way they did and instilling in her that courage and knowledge of how love should be. :)
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked it! Please check out my other stories as well as my novel Blind Faith available thru twcs ph.
Date: 20 Nov 2010 6:40 AM Title: Epilogue
Okay, so let me start by saying....WOW! I am floored my the plot and the impecible writing. So funny story:
Like many female fans of fanfiction, my Husband just doesn't get it. So of course the once time he sees what I am reading it is the part where Charlie is fingering Bella and saying Cum for Daddy. So he shoots up and yells "what kind of sick shit are you reading? Is this what you are into?" So I calmly explain that although it is quite demented, it is a little like a train wreck. You shouldn't look but you cannot pull you eyes away either. So needless to say, I am so glad that I stuck with it. Very much like The Training School Saga. Although full of demeaning sex, it would not have been complete without it and to fully appreciate it you need to ride it out to the end. I am one who has a hard time giving up on a story no matter how bad, but I really ended up liking yours a lot.
Author's Response:
Ha! I had to do a lot of hiding from my husband while I wrote this story. I often hide what I'm reading on ff from him also. He just wouldn't understand. I'm glad you stuck with the story and liked it. Please check out my other stories as well as my new novel available from TWCS Publishing House, Blind Faith.
Happy Thanksgiving!
Date: 19 Nov 2010 12:28 AM Title: Chapter 53
how come esme didnt get counseling/therapy?
Author's Response:
She did get help at the same time she had her sons go to therapy. I just didn't go into it.
Date: 18 Nov 2010 8:39 PM Title: Epilogue
Just an amazing story, good luck with your book
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked the story.
Date: 18 Nov 2010 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 36
These two are finally getting on the right track, now who's gonna kill Carliese, I hope its Esme and all the family helps cover it up
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're still with me. Soon!
Date: 17 Nov 2010 4:49 AM Title: Chapter 21
I'm glad to see that Jacob and Sam are good guys... sort of...
Author's Response:
Bad guys who serve a good cause.
Date: 17 Nov 2010 3:11 AM Title: Chapter 10
what bhappened to Renee's wills and the money for Bella
Author's Response:
This is explaned later in the story. Someone played a hand in bringing Bella back to Forks.
Date: 17 Nov 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 8
I don't know this is pretty disturbing, I enjoy and good Dom/sub story with consensual kinkery but this is incest, rape and pedophaelia. I am sincerely hoping Edward turns out to be a good guy and going to save her.
I also hope your daughters din't read this they might get the wrong ideas.
Author's Response:
No, my youngest daughter isn't allowed to read this story. My older daughter skipped the beginning, but read the rest of the story. She's an adult and chooses what to read.
This is not supposed to be seen as a bdsm story. BDSM is consensual between willing partners. This is about the horrors of abuse/incest and white slavery and being a survivor. Just because I wrote it doesn't mean I condone it any more than SM condones necrophilia or beastiality (Edward is dead and Jacob is a dog).
Date: 17 Nov 2010 12:52 AM Title: A Mother's Love
wow what a start
Author's Response:
Be aware chapters 3-10 are going to deal with the abuse and can be hard to read. If you decide you want to skip that part let me know and I'll summarize. Just remember I promise a happy ending for Bella and I know how to do it. See you on the other side.
Date: 16 Nov 2010 4:00 PM Title: Epilogue
What a beautiful way to end this story loved it!
Date: 15 Nov 2010 8:20 AM Title: Contest Nomination
I found your story from a rec on TwilightDarkness82's story at ff.net. Wow, it was one of the hardest but most rewarding stories I've read in a long time. You're a very gifted writer with an eye for detail and an exceptional way of expressing your story. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Author's Response:
I know the story is hard to get thru the beginning. I appreciate that you stuck with me to the end and liked it. Please check out my other stories. I've also written a book that is available to purchase on twcs publishing house - Blind Faith. I hope you'll give it a shot and let me know what you think.
Take care!
Date: 10 Nov 2010 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 42
Absolutely loved this chapter!
Date: 07 Nov 2010 2:07 PM Title: Contest Nomination
YOU ARE FREAKING AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
=D
THIS STORY IS LIKE, WOWOWOWOWOOWWWWW
Author's Response:
thanks. I'm glad you like it. Please check out my other stories as well, if you haven't already.
Date: 06 Nov 2010 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 39
Awww so happy about Edward and Esme
Date: 06 Nov 2010 5:57 AM Title: Chapter 33
Yes! She finally told Edward what she really feels, and didn't hold back! Great chapter!
Date: 04 Nov 2010 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 52
hey i noticed you said you were workig on an outtake for this chapter and i was wondering if you know when that will be up?
Author's Response:
I'm hoping to have it up soon.
Date: 03 Nov 2010 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 31
Really lovin' this
Date: 03 Nov 2010 8:09 PM Title: Contest Nomination
This was an amazing story. Once i finished the first page i was addicted. a very hard read seeing my fav dad's in such a negative light. But in reality that it humanity at its worse. Im so glad that the Cullen made good on the demise of such a horrible legacy. Go Bella, your my hero Girl. Great reat, to say your talented in an inderstatement.
Date: 03 Nov 2010 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 41
I HATE this Carlyisle. he is evil. poor edward, esme, bella, they dont deserve this kind of evil.
Date: 03 Nov 2010 7:08 AM Title: Chapter 27
Loved this chapter!!!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 9:04 AM Title: Chapter 23
Jasper is awesome!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 19
Stepford wives indeed.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 18
Glad to see that Edward realised what he did was wrong.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 17
Wow...I didn't expect that. Great chapter!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 6:38 AM Title: Chapter 16
Oh crap...punishment!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 6:09 AM Title: Chapter 13
Awesome chapter! It's amazing how many conflicting emotions I have concerning Edward. LOL It was sweet of him to take her to the bookstore though. Oh my and Carlisle....hmmm...I don't trust him. Does he want Bella?
Date: 02 Nov 2010 2:28 AM Title: Chapter 11
Wow so much happening! Poor Bella.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 5
Wow your Daddy C is twisted. And here I thought that he was going to be a good guy. lol I guess that's how it usually is in most fics, Carlisle is always the good guy. I like to see Carlisle portrayed differently for once, and you did that really well. OOC's are interesting to read. I think he's probably worse than James and Charlie. Just a feeling...he's creepy.
Author's Response:
I like taking a character and seeing how far I can twist him. I took the loving head of the coven father figure and turned him into a tyranical monster.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:44 AM Title: Chapter 3
No worries rmcrms5, I read lots of dark fics so I can stomach it. I'm definitely interested in Bella's happy ending. *Okay zips mouth and reads* lol
Author's Response:
See you on the other side!
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:09 AM Title: Epilogue
thanks for the story and for your comments back it as nice to know that you read them.... it was a long ride. thanks again!
Author's Response:
Thank you for sticking with me all the way through. I'm glad you liked it. I certainly enjoyed your comments. I hope you'll check out my other stories as well. None are as bad as the beginning of this one.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
Damn. Charlie and James are twisted. But very interesting story. I have a feeling that it will get much worse for Bella. I'm going to continue reading.
Author's Response:
It's going to get a whole lot worse before it gets better. If you decide you want to skip ch 3-10 shoot me an email and I'll summarize. Just keep in mind I promise a happy ending for Bella.
Date: 02 Nov 2010 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 53
interesting..... i am glad he let her go so she could find herself and her feelings. i always thougth he stayed because she had no where to go.... thanks for the story. i can't believe that i stayed with it. thanks for killing carlislie it made me very very happy!!!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 11:42 PM Title: Chapter 50
i knew it you promised me no carlislie but not anyone else.... agh!!!
Author's Response:
Trust me...
Date: 01 Nov 2010 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 49
ok we can only hope my faith is fading too bella poor esme sick sick sick people. can something bad happen to carlislie PLEASE!!!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 48
ok give a person a heart attack!! i am holding you to your promise.... but you didn't say anyone else was going hurt her.... you have my hair going gray.
Author's Response:
LMAO! While you're going gray, I'm being filled with laughter at your reviews. You're almost done!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 47
knew it i feel like crying my stomach hurts and edward is falling for carlislie trap she is going to hate him!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 46
knew it! bad bad bad bad is going to happen
Date: 01 Nov 2010 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 23
WOW!!! That was a great chapter. I LOVE Jasper, just love him. Im so glad Alice got a good man, who got it. Im sure Edward will get it soon, but wow....
Date: 01 Nov 2010 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 45
watch out watch out he is coming sick sick bastard
Date: 01 Nov 2010 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 44
again i am touched and i thought he would wait... something bad is going to happen i can feel it in my bones.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 43
ok like i said all in good but i hope carlislie get his due..... he deserves to have something bad happen to him..... it's Karma!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 42
ok but bella is forshadowing the trouble that is brewing please please don't let anything happen to her again....
Date: 01 Nov 2010 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 41
sick sick sick you promised he wouldn't get bella he better not... i am soooo worried my stomach hurts. please make edward smart enough. they will run to phoenix won't they. please tell me they get away..
Date: 01 Nov 2010 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 40
go edward go edward... i can almost take back the head slam into the wall i gave you awhile back but not yet....
Date: 01 Nov 2010 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 19
This is such a hard story. Such evil in the darkness of men. I hate to see Charlie as this weak, cowrdly man who could do such a horrid thing to his daughter. I love the Cullen men, Carlisle has always been a favorite for his honor- this one is dark and beyond evil. I cant turn away though because I want to see how the girls evolve and if Edward gets his head out of ass. Great plot, even though I will admit a big part of me was really disgusted at the beginning; to see what comes around go around for these dirty men, will be something I will look forward to.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 39
ok that is a start but you haven't faced carlislie yet...
Date: 01 Nov 2010 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 38
ok again it's all good but they are not back yet.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 37
oh man i would have run run run run...... that part is alittle unrealistic.... just saying one good day wouldn't have changed my mind.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 36
better but it is going to be bad when they get back....
Date: 01 Nov 2010 3:48 PM Title: Chapter 34
intresting... i still have doubts. again she is stuck... it's hard not to make that choice
Date: 01 Nov 2010 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 33
go bella it's about time you let him have it.... i just worry that she has no other place to go and if she had the choice she wouldn't stay with him. so she has to make lemonade from the lemons... still don't like it..
Date: 01 Nov 2010 5:22 AM Title: Chapter 31
good luck won't happen he is as dumb as a box of rocks.....no wait dumber!!!!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 30
please come here edward so i can bash you head in.... just a little closer,,,, no closer BAM!!! god that felt good!!!
Author's Response:
LMAO! I love your reviews!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 29
seems all is going better but i don't trust it.... you are going to make something bad happen aren't you?
Date: 01 Nov 2010 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 28
ok still don't trust him..... he is still brainwashed... please tell me that carlisle is not going to hurt her. i can't hangel it.
Author's Response:
I promise Carlisle never gets his hands on Bella. Edward is just about to his turning point.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 3:42 AM Title: Chapter 27
bella he still is a butthole don't worry i am sure it will come out soon
Date: 01 Nov 2010 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 26
again duh! your a smart boy edward again get your head out out out of your ass!!! what's it going to take to have carlislie rape bella and you walk in to see what a sadastic f-er he is? hellooooooooo is there anyone home?
Date: 01 Nov 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 25
you are still dumb..... sorry i keep repeating it......i am hanging on by a thread.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 2:42 AM Title: Chapter 24
dumb dumb dumb ass!! sorry i am swearing i can't help it it just rubs me the wrong way i truly don't know if i can hang on much longer....
Author's Response:
I know. Sometimes you just want to smack his head against a wall to see if anything rattles inside. I swear he's going to get there soon. :)
Date: 01 Nov 2010 2:27 AM Title: Chapter 23
hello edward you dumb butt..... stupid stupid even a blind man can see!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 2:09 AM Title: Chapter 22
ok i see some light but not much... i hope edward again gets his head out of his ass!!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 21
ok i think em sees the light but why don't they just break away from carlislie is edward gong to find out what carlislie has planned for bella... please please how much more can she take?
Date: 01 Nov 2010 1:47 AM Title: Chapter 20
oh crap what else can happen to her.... it makes me sooo sad and upset.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 19
carlislie is a sick sick SOB.... edward better find out some how. thought she would be semi safe but wrong.... SICK SICK SICK!!!!! and edward you are still a really really dumbass!!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 18
you are still a huge ass wipe edward!! duh. you can't make someone love you!!!
Date: 01 Nov 2010 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 16
yuk i think i am going to throw up again..... this is really really sick and i am sick because i want to see what is going to happen. i hate to see bella crushed so much i hope something good will happen to her... doesn't look good.
Date: 01 Nov 2010 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 14
i still don't like him.... i hope you get him to get his head out of his ass!!!
Date: 31 Oct 2010 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 13
you still suck edward you maybe hot but i would tell you where to stick it no matter how scared i would be
Date: 31 Oct 2010 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 12
i know you want us to like him but he is a sick F*ck@r like th rest of them.... sick sick sick!!!
Author's Response:
No you don't have to like him. There really isn't anything likeable about him at this point. Right now he's just the lesser of evils.
Date: 31 Oct 2010 11:00 PM Title: Chapter 11
yeah right edward you think you are the white night you are a bastard just like the rest of them
Date: 31 Oct 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 8
excuse me while i go throw up!!!
Date: 31 Oct 2010 10:26 PM Title: Chapter 6
SICK SICK people!!!!
Author's Response:
Yes they are
Date: 31 Oct 2010 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 5
sick and carlisle is in on it tooo...... not cool i can't hope edward is good there is no nope for that. renee was wrong when she hoped that esme raised her boys right.... DEAD WRONG
Author's Response:
Remember there will be a happy ending for Bella
Date: 31 Oct 2010 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 4
yuk!!! tell me this part is over soon!
Date: 31 Oct 2010 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 2
sick sick sick sick i can't say anymore prison would be a good place for both of them i though renee set something up so she wouldn't have to go back there... what happened to that?
Author's Response:
You'll find out later in the story how Bella ended up back in Forks despite Renee's precautions
Date: 31 Oct 2010 8:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
really really sick!! gross that is his own daughter and sicko that is her brother GROSSS.... not sure i can hang on or not
Date: 31 Oct 2010 7:18 PM Title: A Mother's Love
not good this is going to be a long long ride!
Author's Response:
Be prepared things are going to get really bad before they get better. If the subject of abuse bothers you let me know. I have a summary for ch 3-10 if you decide you want to skip over them.
Date: 30 Oct 2010 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 47
Nooooo Edward! :(
Date: 30 Oct 2010 3:50 PM Title: Epilogue
First of all, I was a bit sceptic at the beginning as to where you were leading your characters. I didn't like your Edward and I couldn't have seen it possible to like him, but somehow, he became more and more likeable by each chapter, and now he's one of my favourite Edwards from this fandom.
Second of all, I've just realized how strong your Bella is. Even though I considered her too coward to stand for herself or run away, I can see now that what she did was actually fighting hard to change her life, not to accept it. She changed Edward, she changed the Cullens, yet she remained the same and eventually won the battle and obtained the love and care she wanted.
As for the other characters, I love Rose and Alice as well as their husbands. They weren't very OOC, which suited me just fine. I felt pitty and sympathy for Esme and you've changed my whole impression on Carlisle's character. Ever since I've started reading twific, I couldn't watch the twilight movies like before. Now, I sure won't look at Carlisle the same again:))
Thanks for writing such a good story and reposting it.
If there is one thing I've learned from reading it, must be the fact that people can change in better no matter what their past was. And as a woman, never let a man submiss you. We're all equals. And it's not all about fighting in life; believing it's as important, if not crucial. Now, those are more things, but they're good lessons:p
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading. I always worry when someone begins this story because of how hard it is to get thru the beginning. I felt it was necessary to show just how horrible things were with Charlie & James so that when you met Edward readers would accept him as the lesser of evils. In abuse people forget the abuser was probably a victim of abuse as well at some point. It takes just as much courage to break the cycle as it does to escape your abuser. I wanted to show both sides of abuse so that you could fully appreciate their happy ending.
Please check out my other stories as well. BTP is Alice/Jasper's story. I haven't gotten very far into it yet and probably won't start updating again until after the first of the year, but you can see their beginning. Right now I'm focused on CAM and FTLOMO.
I also just wrote a novel which was released Thurs. thru twcs Blind Faith.
Take care,
Mic
Date: 30 Oct 2010 2:04 PM Title: Chapter 49
The things got worse for I feel Bella gave up; from what she told Esme, Edward starts to be more like Carlisle's Edward again and this was never a good sign. My only consolation is that there are only a few chapters left -of course I wouldn't want it to finish so soon - so this situation can't last longer
Date: 30 Oct 2010 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 48
Phew, it wasn't as bad as I imagined, though this chapter was pretty scarry. Hope Edward is going to carry it off well and Bella will stay safe until then.
Date: 30 Oct 2010 1:31 PM Title: Chapter 47
Oh. My. God. This is not happening.
Date: 30 Oct 2010 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 46
The ending scares me. I know Demetri and the other bad guys have to appear, but I can't imagine what bad they can do to Bella. I hope Edward will be there for her to save her from the bad monsters
Date: 30 Oct 2010 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 45
If only Edward knew that his father's behavior towards Bella meant so much more.
Date: 30 Oct 2010 8:15 AM Title: Chapter 42
Awww, that was just wonderful!
Date: 29 Oct 2010 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 38
The other me jumps and squeals and is sooo happy:d Seriously, where is Edward and what have you done to him?
Date: 29 Oct 2010 8:59 PM Title: Chapter 37
The most emotional chapter so far. Emotional as in a good way.
Date: 29 Oct 2010 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 36
It's somehow amusing how in the begining I was using terms like "frustrating" or "disgusting" and now I use "funny" or "lovely" when thinking of what suggest me the chapters.
So now would be funniest chapter so far:d And lovely, too
And, yes, your Edward can be really nice guy if he wants. With each chapter I read, he becomes more likeable to me
Date: 29 Oct 2010 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 35
I realize that this new beginning of their relationship is the same for both. While Edward has to stop thinking Bella is just a possesion, she has to learn not to feel and act like one.
Date: 29 Oct 2010 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 34
Second best chapter, best chapter ending until now:d
Curious where she's taking him.
Date: 29 Oct 2010 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 33
Best chapter so far, at least in my opinion. I guess this is the Edward you told me I'd discover later.
It's an enormous turning point in their relationship, a big change that Edward accepted every single accusation without being mad at Bella, that she had the courage to tell him all that she felt about him.
"That seemed to snap him out of whatever trance he was in. He stood in front of me and took the belt from my hand. He stared at it a moment before making a fist around it. He turned and threw the belt against the far wall with a growl. Then he turned back to me, his sad eyes back. Then he scratched his head, closed his eyes, and swiveled around, away from me. He let a cry of outrage or whatever he was feeling out. He was breathing heavily. He turned back to me searching my eyes." - this is the passage that impressed me the most. It show so much of Edward'd feelings. His rage, his defeat, his shame, his fight with Carlisle's Edward and his victory. By throwing the belt, he had chosen his love for Bella. Earlier he would have considered this gesture as a sign of unauthority, but now is just a prove that he gives up his dominance, he realizes they're equal.
Date: 29 Oct 2010 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 31
It's a good thing to know that Bella feels something more for Edward in spite of his behaviour towards her. I still don't like him and I know I'm just subjective, but it's refreshing to see that Bella's thought toward Edward are as fair as possible. She can judge him right without letting what he did to her influecing her
Date: 29 Oct 2010 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 30
I love how your Edwrard changes gradually.
There is a great difference between the Edward from the beginning and this Edward. The fact that he can call Esme "mom" and wants her attention, the fact that he wants to hear Bella say she loves him, not as a proof of him possesing her, but more as a proof that someone cares for him, says a lot.
I'd tell him "I'm proud of you,Edward":p
Date: 29 Oct 2010 3:04 PM Title: Chapter 26
I love this Jasper.
Date: 27 Oct 2010 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 26
I'm as impatient with Edward now as he is with Bella. His mind was so altered by Carlisle that his ideas about women are too wrong. And like Alice, I' m not sure he's going to change very soon