Date: 10 Feb 2010 11:03 PM Title: Chapter 10 - Situations
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Trav'lin' Light
This is an Alice I can get behind. I really like your characterization of both Alice and Jasper. I'm interested to see how Bella responds.
Date: 10 Feb 2010 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 9 Rock the Boat
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 14 - End Credits
Fantastic chapter
Date: 10 Feb 2010 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Kiss of Life
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Giving the Dog a Bone
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 9:10 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Sex and Candy
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 4- Something in Your Mouth
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 6:04 PM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
So super happy to see this here.... :)
You know I can't wait for more and more and more.... :)
Date: 10 Feb 2010 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Trav'lin' Light
Loved APOV, amazing chapter as always. Thanks for letting us know you were moving from FF.
Date: 10 Feb 2010 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 3 Freak Like Me
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 4:59 PM Title: Chapter 2 Son of a Gun
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Date: 10 Feb 2010 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Trav'lin' Light
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What the hell is edwards problem. I wanted to castrate him after he left. I mean, I know he is scarred of his emotions, but grow the fuck up. I know Bella is going to this date with Jacob, but please, for the love of Horny Edward, please dont let Bella sleep with Jacob, or anyone else anymore in this story. I love her as a little scandalous but I think she has pretty much fucked around enough. Also, now that I know she uses sex, drugs and alcohol and an escape route for her problems and seems to be coming to some awakening, maybe she can slow the fuck down with all the sex escapades and abuse of illegal substances. I have no probs with alcohol, but blacking out every weekend has got to be tiring.
I am glad that Jasper finally admitted his true feelings to Alice. At least they have their shit figured out.
[Report This]Date: 10 Feb 2010 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Trav'lin' Light
Ahh, I love Jasper and Alice - they're too sweet. And while Alice sure is a chatterbox, I didn't mind listening to her story; I've been curious about it all throughout the previous chapters, due to the little hints and moments Bella's been aware enough to see.
Favourite moment in this chapter?
He answered me the way that I wanted him to answer every question I’d ever asked him. His hand reached up to my face, tucking my hair behind my ear as a small smirk spread across his face and he chuckled lightly just before he put his lips to mine.
I always wanted one of those perfect kisses. The kind you see in old black and white movies when the music gets all loud and the woman looks divine and the guy looks dashing. I accepted stuff like that just didn’t exist because the real world wasn't like that. I was wrong. This was my perfect kiss; our perfect kiss. Alice Brandon’s moment.
When he pulled away I couldn’t open my eyes.
“You’re late,” I whispered, leaning in to kiss him again.
He kissed me back, this time a little faster so that we fell into the wall behind me.
“I’m sorry,” he breathed, cupping my face with his hands.
I was breathless, I was speechless. There was only one thing that had to happen next.
“We’re leaving,” I said, taking his hand and leading him to the exit.
So sweet! I love these two, I really do. I also really liked how Bella made Alice, and us readers, "land back in the present" when Alice started getting a bit too detailed for our Bella - awesome writing technique there.
And lastly: Bella, NOOO! Don't go on the date!!! Please??? Talk to Edward - it has to be some sort of misunderstanding! Don't go on the date!!!!!!!!
*sigh* It's not going to be that easy, is it? Oh well, that's what makes this story so great, isn't it? Still, I am not looking forward to the potential HF that this might result in. I hope they can work it out in the end.
Great work on this, really. I loved this chapter, and I love Alice and Jasper. Hopefully they'll be able to stay New York Alice and Jasper, and not revert to Forks Alice and Jasper.
Can't wait for the next chapter! (I'm greedy, I know, but I really can't help it! This story is just that good!)
[Report This]Date: 10 Feb 2010 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 14 - End Credits
I already left this review on FF.net, but I just love this chapter so much that I can't resist leaving it again.
If I could only use one word to describe this chapter, it would be "beautiful". This was truly beautiful, and all the more so due to how these characters have acted in the previous chapters. Seeing them act like this with each other had such a great impact because of how different it was from their normal behaviour.
You've done a really great job of slowly introducing these new feelings between these two, and as I've already said, it was beautiful how this first "new" interaction between them played out.
I especially liked this:
-“I’m not going home,” I whispered as our foreheads leant together.
“I know. You’re staying with me,” he said as he took my hand gently."
I honestly gasped just a little when I read that, because it was so unexpectedly sweet and lovely.
And the lemon that followed was really perfect; I loved how they didn't want to stop kissing each other, and the new feel of vulnerability that they both showed really shone a beautiful (really can't stop saying that, haha) light on the whole chapter.
I really, really loved it and I can't wait to see where it will lead. I'm not gonna lie, I am a bit nervous as to how this whole bet thing is going to play out, but at the same time I'm really looking forward to finding out.
Great job on this chapter, really. You should be really proud of what you've created here :)
Author's Response:
ilu <3 <3
And thanks! I think its my fav chapter now just because everyone else loved it! lol!
Date: 10 Feb 2010 3:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Trav'lin' Light
As always major applause for the update! Alas, you leave us hanging onto the question of "Where did Edward go?" and "What is going to happen between Bella and Edwrad on that score." BUT, I love the fact that you gave us a break from it all to focus on Alice and Jasper - I practically pressed my eyesballs against my computer screen reading this chapter!
Author's Response:
Lol I think I kind of cockblocked here but thats what i do! All will be revealed soooooon!
Date: 10 Feb 2010 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
Eek..love the A+J Back story! However need to know what the hell happened to Edward? Thanks so much for posting at TWCS as I really dislike twilighted! Yay, can't wait for the next update!
Date: 10 Feb 2010 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
YAH! I found you. Re reading just because I can.... still love it. Smut-tastic xx
Date: 10 Feb 2010 7:12 AM Title: Chapter 11 - Under The Sheets
The library and the ghost train...oh my goodness
Author's Response:
*snigger*
Date: 10 Feb 2010 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Situations
wow...and the a/n's are are great too!!!
Date: 10 Feb 2010 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Kiss of Life
That was amazing
Date: 10 Feb 2010 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Kiss of Life
That was just amazing
Date: 10 Feb 2010 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
hey this looks better than on FF! LOL... so here we go again! planning to slowly reread and review one by one chappie! :)
Author's Response:
IKR?? You rock, girl- seriously- I've gushed about you on my lj <3
Date: 10 Feb 2010 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
Wow...bella is some serious slut here...awesome. I was getting really sick of the powerless winy bella that is in 85% of the fics. can't wait to read on.
Author's Response:
Lol ty- hope you likey
Date: 09 Feb 2010 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
Really great opening chapter! I'm liking this completely different side to Bella - nice to see her not falling head over heels for Edward for a change. Look forward to reading more!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I like her with a little bite too! Hope you enjoy it x
Date: 09 Feb 2010 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
Oh yay! BDR is over here too :)
And ILY, but you know that.
Date: 09 Feb 2010 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 3 Freak Like Me
I'm really glad that "Beautiful, Dirty, Rick" is up in TWCS too, I was having some trouble with Twilighted ^^ Happy to keep following it here
Author's Response:
Thanks for the support hun! <3
Now I can go back to writing the new chapter instead of moving it about!
Date: 09 Feb 2010 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 1 Local God
One of the best Twi-fics I've ever read, truly! So glad you moved it here, KB! Best of luck in your new forum!
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