Date: 12 Jul 2010 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 9 I was Broken
Glad Bella is feeling more comfortable around Edward, that she is able to tell him about her past. Can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks for writing!
Date: 12 Jul 2010 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 9 I was Broken
I think this is a very sad story full of pain and suffering and I think they both need a little love to lighten up a little. I mean he hasn't even kissed her yet. So I think they need a little lovin to get through the pain together.
Author's Response:
Hang in there with me, it's coming :) Hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 12 Jul 2010 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 9 I was Broken
I really love this story but each time I read it it makes me cry. That is a good thing though because it means you are an excellent writer that touches your readers. PLease keep up the awesome work.
Marguerite
Date: 12 Jul 2010 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 9 I was Broken
AWESOME ... AWESOME
i AWESOME-issimo!!!!
i was literally refreshing the recently added tab on TCWSL... waiting for this update!
LOVE the italian lesson... LOVE IT... and i love that she's more comfortable with talking to him about her mom... and that she's comforatble with the physical proximity. :)
more. please. per favore???
oh and... possiamo avere i limoni? tee hee :)
Date: 11 Jul 2010 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
ok well i guess i had the mob thing kinda right... i mean you mentioned the mob there for like 1/2 a second. other than that and the obvious abuse that i am sure everyone guessed at i pretty much was totally off base.
poor bella, but don't worry sweety edward is gonna take care of you. now they just need to call the cullens (? not sure if that is their last name in this fic, but you know who i mean) and call daddy charlie. then go find this alec fucker and make him scream like a little bitch, torture him, than slowly nd painfully kill his sick pervy ass. then they can live happily ever after.... see it's not that hard. lol
Date: 10 Jul 2010 10:46 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
well obviously she was assulted at some point in her life. my guess is she is related to someone in the mob, you know stereotyped italian family. but it would answer the italian roots, the powerful people/person after her, the fear for her life and edward's.
Date: 07 Jul 2010 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
holy shit!!! poor bella!!!
Author's Response:
I know, she's had it rough! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 07 Jul 2010 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
I have to tell you that last bit with Edward declairing himself..was amazing. Such strong raw feelings.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the sweet review, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 06 Jul 2010 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
Oh damn you you made me cry. That story was horrifing. She endured it for 5 years. Way stronger than anyone I know. WOW!! That explains so much about how she is. I loved that Edward was so protective. She needs someone in her life that really loves her. I so hope Edward gets to do to Alec what he did to Bella only 10 times worse. Please tell me they end up happy together!!!!!!!!!!!! This is my absolute favorite story. It is real with things that actually happen to people. It would make an awesome movie. Please keep up the great work.
Marguerite
P.S. Sorry about the day late review but For some reason this web site has been down for 2 days.
Author's Response:
Aw, I'm sorry I made you cry! Thank you so much for the sweet review, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 06 Jul 2010 8:37 AM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
Poor Bella, that is horrible that she had to find her mother dead and then being sent to a father that she didn't even know.
What a rough first time and to always look over your shoulder, being sold, and then being beaten because you had sex with someone else. Thank goodness for Riley!
Eclipse was hot! I loved Edward, of course, Jacob's body was not too bad, and Jasper's character really came out this time. I agree I am definitely going for a second showing plus own the dvd when it comes out.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 06 Jul 2010 4:38 AM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
Great back story!! Get the tissues! It should be interesting if Edward catches up to alec.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 06 Jul 2010 4:09 AM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
Wow! I thought that it was something along those lines, but its much worse than I thought! Great chapter! Now we just need to get Edward's story! Loved it!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: 06 Jul 2010 3:57 AM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
Poor Bella Alec is a manipulative fucker! I loved this chapter even though Bella is coerced into leaving Colorado my home state to go to Phoenix. It is definitely time for Edward to spill his story for real. These two fucked kids are gonna make right? My heart is breaking for Bella right now. I saw Eclipse it was fucking awesome! I yelled at the screen did a fist pump during the fight damn near cried when Jacob screamed out in pain while Billy cried in front of their house with the pack. I was mad at Bella for disrespecting Edward through the whole movie but at least he got the girl. I loved it I wish there were more of Seth, Leah and my second favorite vampire Emmett! I loved Jasper's flashback and Alice & Jasper sparing it was so fucking cute plus Rose's little flashback it was too short for me but it was okay the fight scene was fucktastic. I can't wait for BD. This was the best out of the three and stuck closer to the books. I don't know how they made me feel sorry for Riley, Bree and Victoria but they did! Damn good move though. Until next time.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
And yes, Eclipse was so awesome! I loved that they had so many quotes from the book, total win!
Date: 06 Jul 2010 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
WOW. i'm speechless.... that story was... wow... can we get a lemon next week.. somethin??? a kiss??? :)
LOVE LOVE LOVE this as always... post more... like 5minutes ago. please.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it! The lemons will come but it will be a bit, I mean after hearing her history, it would be odd to have them get it on, no? LOL
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 06 Jul 2010 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
awww poor jake hope he gets better...
Date: 05 Jul 2010 11:23 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
Poor girl I knew she was a slave (pat myself on back) LOL. They need to find the Cullens or Charlie she thinks they hate her she needs to know that they have worried about her and miss her. I cant wait for next chapter.
Author's Response:
*Pats Troberts on the back* Good guess! hehehehe
Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 05 Jul 2010 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
:)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading!
Date: 05 Jul 2010 8:30 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
cant wait for the confrontation.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter :)
[Report This]Date: 05 Jul 2010 8:20 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
AMAZING!! god I hope bella reconnects with Charlie and the Cullens, and I hope Edward kicks Alec's ass!
Great Chap :)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter :)
Date: 05 Jul 2010 7:15 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
was expecting a little different story from her but it was cool
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter, it won't be so intense :)
[Report This]Date: 05 Jul 2010 7:11 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
you make my week!! :)
Author's Response:
Your so sweet! Glad I made your week, and reviews make mine, so thank you!
Date: 05 Jul 2010 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
Goodness gracious. She has had a god awful past. No wonder she acts the way she does. I'm just glad that she told Edward; she trusts him - only him and he really cares about her and will do everything he can to keep her safe.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, glad that you like Edward :)
Date: 05 Jul 2010 6:22 PM Title: Chapter 8 Secrets
:) :) :)
Please please please update soon..*
:) :) :)
Ii saw Eclipse... Ii loved it!!!
:) :) :)
Alice R..*
Author's Response:
So glad you liked the chapter! And I know, Eclipse was so awesome!
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 30 Jun 2010 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
I keep encouraging Bella to buy herself something or go do her nails or some other girly shit, but she just keeps saying that she's fine, that she has everything she needs.
It's a weird thing to come home to a woman that makes you dinner most nights, goes to bed and wakes up with you, has breakfast with you and then sends you off to work. This girl isn't my wife, hell, she isn't even my girlfriend. It scares me that I want her to be.
We are just two fucked up people trying to make it. While trying to make it, we've found each other, and there has to be a reason for that. I've been alone for so long and then this broken girl comes in and makes me want things I've never wanted before. She makes me want her to be there when I come home, to not want to have dinner alone, to cuddle. I have never wanted to fucking cuddle in my whole life until she came along.
"This," I say, waving my hand around the god-awful food, "is great!" I hope that I sound convincing.
"Liar!" She shouts, laughing and throwing a napkin at me. I break out laughing with her because really, the shit is awful. She tries a bit of her own, only to spit it out on the plate. We both start laughing so hard at the ridiculousness of the situation. She picks up a piece of lettuce from the salad and throws it at me. It hits me in right in the forehead and sticks there, causing her to laugh even louder.
Playfully, I spring across the table, she jumps up and runs from me. I freeze, scolding myself for how stupid it was to chase her like that. I should have known it would scare her badly. I turn to apologize and before I can open my mouth, I get another piece of lettuce right in the face. I pause, shocked; she has never been this playful before and I love this side of her. She stares at me, biting her lip, trying to hold back a laugh.
These were some of my favorite parts I had others but its hard to copy & paste well your reading a story. I wanted to let you know I'm feeling this story and I can't wait to hear what Bella is going to tell Edward. Sorry for the delay I have Eclipse fever. Until next time.
Author's Response:
So glad that you liked the chapter! Can't wait to hear what you think of Bella's story! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 30 Jun 2010 3:33 AM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
I love this story~ However, the cliffy....I'm still dealing with! Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
hehehehe, sorry for the cliffie, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 29 Jun 2010 3:44 AM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
**WTF** happened in Bella's past?? Can't wait to find out!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I can’t wait to hear what you think of Bella’s story!
Date: 29 Jun 2010 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
I really like that Bella and Edward are getting closer and Edward is finally admitting his feelings about Bella and that he wants to act on them.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked the chapter! I hope you like the next as well!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
damn, that was scary
Date: 28 Jun 2010 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
she is smarter than she thinks she is
Date: 28 Jun 2010 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 1 Ain't no Rest for the Wicked
what happened to the poor girl
Date: 28 Jun 2010 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
Oooohhh i can´t waith for the next chapter :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
I think this is one of the best stories I have ever read. Drama, love, sadness, anger everything that would make a wonderful novel. They are both damaged but want to protect each other. I can't wait for the next chapter. Please keep up the excellent work. And maybe when this is done with you could write a sequel.
Marguerite
Author's Response:
What a sweet review, thank you so much! I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
Can't wait to see what happens next and hear Bella's story. Great fic, I'm really enjoying it!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I can’t wait to hear what you think of Bella’s story!
[Report This]Date: 28 Jun 2010 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
brilliant!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing!!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
great chapter. cant wait to see what bella has to tell him
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
Well at least we got a good kiss til it all went to hell. Well I am thinking that she must have been raped. I think they could continue a physical relationship as long as she keeps her eyes open. This is slow torture, waiting for some physical contact for them. I know he loves her or he wouldnt be doing all he does for her.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Great theory, I can’t wait to hear what you think of Bella’s story!
Katie
[Report This]Date: 28 Jun 2010 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
Holy shit....u didn't...u did!!!! I can not wait until next week!
Author's Response:
Sorry for the cliffie, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
UGH. this once a week thing is KILLING me... this story gets more excellent by the post... :)
LOVE that Bella initiated some of the physical contact and can't wait to finally hear some of the back story that has her so broken. PLEASE. MORE. like um... yesterday. :)
Author's Response:
Hehehehe I'm trying! So glad that you love the story so much! I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
yea we get to hear her story now.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I can’t wait to hear what you think of Bella’s story!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 10:37 AM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
very curious....
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
They are just like a couple with missing peices. I think she is a slave.
Author's Response:
Great theory! I can't wait to hear what you think of Bella's story!
Date: 28 Jun 2010 7:19 AM Title: Chapter 7 Let It Be Me
I am glad that Bella is finally going to open up to Edward!
Best Part:
He's always been a good friend to me, and I don't want to turn my back on him just because whatever disorder he has has gotten worse. I really want to find a way to get him help.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Katie
Date: 26 Jun 2010 2:11 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
i really love your story :)
Author's Response:
So glad that you like it so far! Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 26 Jun 2010 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
wow I wish I knew how to get on the forum, I hear about it from a lot of stories but I haven't figured it out yet. lol. So I dont have many theries yet as to what it going on except that maybe Bella was maybe raped or a submisive and ranaway. As for Edward I dont know. Jake well he seems to have schizophrinia. I dont think I spelled that right. I sure hope he doesn't come back. YEAH they finally had a little kiss. I cant wait for more.
Author's Response:
So glad that you seem to like the story so far! Love to her your theories!
Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 26 Jun 2010 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I am glad that they finally got a roof over their head and he is at least street smart to know not to pay full price for the room. I am glad they are finally opening up to each other. I am hoping now they will bond more.
Date: 26 Jun 2010 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 3 Careful Where You Stand
Well she speeks a little. I tried to look up the italian word Aiutatemi but I found no translation.
Date: 26 Jun 2010 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 2 Boogie Man
THis looks good. I cant wait to get more into the story. I find it strange that both of them are on the street but it seems like Bella is not really poor maybe she is there by choice.
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2010 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
Aw poor Jake he's so sick damn it! I'm so glad that Edward and Bella are doing so well little by little but that Roy just won't give up. I know James is in the choir singing his ass off so he can get to Bella damn jerk. Until next time. Oh yeah I will be recommending your story on my fanfiction profile aka here http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2053450/ and on my blog http://luv4jake.blogspot.com/ on the first of July. I know its not one of the big sites but I just wanted to let you know. Don't be fooled by the counter on my blog I just added it yesterday!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the recs! That is so sweet of you! So glad that you like the story so far! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2010 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I loving it! Its getting deeper and I loved the reveals into their past plus the title of the story. If I was watching a movie I would have to take a shot of tea since the name was said lol! Until next time.
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2010 2:35 PM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
Omg thank God for Ben Edward was about to get the business! James that fucker he needs to get dealt with sometime I knew that fucker was up to something. Until next time really liked this chapter!
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2010 2:12 PM Title: Chapter 3 Careful Where You Stand
Damn it I wish I knew Italian lol! Wow Edward is being extremely patient but I'm glad he was wary of the new bum fucker I didn't trust him neither. Until next time I enjoyed this chapter very much!
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2010 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 2 Boogie Man
I enjoyed it! I forgot to mention I love Jake's mental illness where he thinks he's Sam that was unique and different but I loved it! This is a really good story so far keep it up! Until next time.
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2010 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 1 Ain't no Rest for the Wicked
I'm already in love with Edward's inner dialog. I love stories like this because when you have worked with this population you find their stories have little to nothing to do with drug use some kind of abuse, fucked up family or just plain wrong happened to them which lead to them being out there. When you have no address, license or phone how can you get off the streets it true and it sucks. until next time keep up the good work!
Date: 22 Jun 2010 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
Damn this story is addicting. Please tell me you are making it a long one. The feelings between them are so good. Like they need each other to be alive. Keep up the awesome work and please update soon.
Marguerite
Author's Response:
So glad that you like the story so far! As of now, I'm thinkin it will be about 25 chapters, but that could change as we go along. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: 22 Jun 2010 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
wow that got a little intense at the end there. i wonder if bella is gonna start to open up a little? and when? they need to find jake help, but unfortunately it is so hard when out on the street....
Author's Response:
She will open up very soon! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)
Date: 22 Jun 2010 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
Glad your're back from vay-cay! Another great chapter. Jake... I mean Sam, really freaked me out!!
Author's Response:
Yeah, I'm back and back to work too, sadly LOL Yes, the whole Sam/Jake thing is a little disturbing... sorry. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 22 Jun 2010 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
that kiss in the bathroom.... THUD... sweetest thing EVER.
love that they are sort of off the streets.... jake... um... yeah... (shudders)
so you were away for a week... that means you can post all the EXTRA material you wrote while you were away as a TREAT... right? sounds good to me.
MORE. PLEASE. LOVING THIS.
Author's Response:
So glad that you loved the chapter so much! Sorry for the wait! I want to make sure that every chapter is beta'd and as perfect as I can get it, so the next update will probably be next Monday... sorry :/ It makes me happy that you love it enough to want it more often though!
Thanks so much for reading and for your sweet reviews!
Date: 22 Jun 2010 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
As nice as it was that Jake got Bella back to the hotel, I think Edward and Bella both should steer clear of him for awhile. What is it? Multiple personality disorder or something?
Author's Response:
Yes, some space would be nice. At this point Jake doesn't even know what is wrong with Jake LOL I plan on having all of that in a little more detail later, but yes, he has split personalities.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 21 Jun 2010 7:35 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
great chapter!! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 21 Jun 2010 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
Awsome chapter I loved it. Had no idea about Jake. That was crazy. Are we going to learn more about Bellas past soon?
Author's Response:
Yes, Jake is a little... crazy lol. Yes, you will learn everything about Bella... and soon ;)
I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 21 Jun 2010 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
great chapter
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I hope you like the next chapter :)
Date: 21 Jun 2010 1:36 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
poor kids. glad mike is helping him help himself
Author's Response:
Yeah, for once I wanted to make Mike someone who wasn't a pathetic puppy chasing after Bella LOL. Mike just sounded like a good boss name :P
Thanks for the review, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 21 Jun 2010 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
Jake needs medication!!
Author's Response:
You're right, he does, but sadly help isn't an easy thing to get living on the streets. As the story goes on, we'll learn a little more about Jake and his disorder. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 21 Jun 2010 9:00 AM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
So cool that they are living off the streets he has a job. Jake that is some scarry shit going from cool to how the fuck are you. I have seen some people that are pretty scarry in that respect would not like to be in a room with them. I think Bella is a run a way slave and she is afraid to say anything because they will find her.
Author's Response:
Hmmm, good theory. Her story will come out very soon ;) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I hope you like the next chapter!
Date: 21 Jun 2010 7:57 AM Title: Chapter 6 Animal I've Become
great story! can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
So glad you like it! Thanks for the review!
Date: 14 Jun 2010 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
um.... it's monday.. where's chapter 6????? dying here.
Date: 09 Jun 2010 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Love the update...and have a great time away on vacation! Enjoy! We'll be waiting for you!!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 09 Jun 2010 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 3 Careful Where You Stand
I have to confess; I used a translator to see what Bella was saying. It was either that or my Italian brother-in-law! The chapter? Bellisima! I keep hoping that sshe will open up to Edward more, but hopefully time will tell.
Date: 09 Jun 2010 12:38 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Yeah...Edward stayed!!! I'm kinda hoping Bella was only mentally and physically abused caused that's enough. Enjoy ur vacation!!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 09 Jun 2010 11:57 AM Title: Chapter 2 Boogie Man
I'm addicted to this story now! You make me want to know the characters and their stories. That's saying something! You've also brought us to a world I'm sure most of us have never experienced. It's eye-opening. As my mother always said, "There but for the grace of God, go I." You just might be inspiring some new Miss Elizabeths! Stunningly touching!
Date: 08 Jun 2010 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
well it seems these two have started to break down the walls they each have up. nice to see eddie has accepted that he cares, now it is bella's turn.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 12:21 PM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
oh she is so not gonna let him leave that motel room!
Date: 08 Jun 2010 11:58 AM Title: Chapter 3 Careful Where You Stand
well what the hell happened to bella?!? boy oh boy edward is getting in deep...
Date: 08 Jun 2010 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 2 Boogie Man
well he is as much a gentleman as he can be given the situation. probably more than he should.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 6:06 AM Title: Chapter 1 Ain't no Rest for the Wicked
oh boy, what a way to meet! i could not even imagine having to live like that.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 6:02 AM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Love this chapter. Glad they managed to clean up a little. Hope Edward tells Bella how he feels soon! Enjoy your vacation! Please send me a teaser if you have time :)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 1:41 AM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I'm so glad that he is staying with her! I was a little worried there for a bit! Loved this chapter! It's great to see them out of the elements for a bit!
Sarah
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I'm so glad that Edward decided to stay with Bella. He's right though, she wouldn't do well on her own.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 08 Jun 2010 12:01 AM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I love this story and I am so glad he decided to stay with her. I can't wait for the next chapter. Have a great vacation and of course get plenty of writing done :)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Loved It!
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Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
:)
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Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I wonder what happened to Bella to make her so quiet and afraid great story always leaves me wanting more
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Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
[Report This]Date: 07 Jun 2010 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Another amazing chapter! I'm totally hooked on this now. I love the way their relationship is developing...eww to the dude in the lobby. Give me grimy Edward anyday!
Author's Response:
Heheheh Grimy Edward is pretty awesome lol Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I am wondering why Edward wound up in foster care to begin with. What happened to his parents? But I am more curious to find out what happened to Bella. Have a great vacation!
Author's Response:
Their full stories will come out... soon! Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Best Part:
There's no fighting it; I have become attached, and there's no way I will leave this broken girl. I don't want to anymore. There is a fire raging inside me now that my suspicions have been confirmed. She is running from some fucker that hurt her, badly, and I will kill whomever it is when I find out.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
[Report This]Date: 07 Jun 2010 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Gettin more intresting!! Have a great vacation!!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 7:02 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
ugh this story gets me every time!! It makes mondays so much better. I'm wondering who it is that hurt her..the obvious choices mom, dad, and jacob...
Have a great vacation!! <3
Author's Response:
Jake is Edwards friend in this story, so he can't be the one that hurt her ;)
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Thank god he did not leave her. They are both broken maybe they can help to heal each other. Where is Jacob at???? Have a great time at the coast relax and get some good writing done. I will be waiting
Author's Response:
Jacob will be back soon! Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
AT least she is starting to open up to him a little.
Author's Response:
Yes, she is and she will more in the upcoming chapters! Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
hey, i found this story toniht and i love it, it has so much feeling in it and the carachters are brilliantly represented! i cant wait to read more from you soon!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Hey I loved it
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
Oh man. I really want to know what happened to her and if anyone is looking fro her. I hope they both end up off of the streets in a safe home. I am hooked on this story because of the reality of their cituation. People don't see or ignore that this happens everyday. You make it seem so realistic that I can picture it like I am there. Excellent work. Please update soon.
Marguerite
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review, and what a sweet review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 5:22 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
hmmm running from renee and phil,,, or aro and creww. hmmm
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I can see your wheels spinning... good theories! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
I cannot begin to express how much I love this story! You have such a way of pulling the reader in and making them feel everything Edward and Bella are experiencing! Good for you for getting a vacation... bad for us for no update! :(
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 07 Jun 2010 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 5 Spies
good thing Edward stayed with her. I can't wait to read more.
Hugs
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review! I hope you like the next chapter, here’s a little teaser from it :)
“Thanks man,” I say as I brush past him, wanting to find Bella even more now that I know she’s alone. I’ve gone through the building three times and around the outside as well, but I can’t find Bella anywhere. I have a rock in the pit of my stomach, and I’m scared as fuck that whoever she has been hiding from has found her. I stand outside the Mission, cursing myself for being late.
I don’t know what to do. I feel sick. If something has happened... or some fucker has taken her - I don’t even fucking know her real last name to start to look for her. I’m pacing back and forth in front of the Mission, and the sun has set. I don’t fucking know what to do. I decide to go back to the motel room to get the money I have stashed and do whatever I can to find her.
Date: 03 Jun 2010 10:41 AM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
I absolutely love your story. I can't wait for the next chapter.
I'd really like to know what happend to Bella!
Date: 02 Jun 2010 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
I love this story! It makes my day whenever I see that you have updated. You truly have a gift in writing!!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the sweet review, I hope you like the next chapter!!
Katie
[Report This]Date: 01 Jun 2010 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
Damn...that was intense! Don't be dumb Edward...stay with Bella. Very good!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing! I like your advice to Edward lol
Katie
Date: 01 Jun 2010 5:55 AM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
Wow That was an intense chapter. Really good chapter as well. I hope she doesn't let him leave her. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Hey!
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, hope you like the next chapter!
Katie
Date: 01 Jun 2010 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 4 Voices of Violence
homeless edward and bella
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading!
Katie