i love this story iv been reading fanfiction for years and this is by far my favirote story ever and the only one iv re read over 5 times i think it would be really interesting if you wrote jazz and alices story especially with their diffrent kinkiness

forgive me for only stopping now after reading this for 2 days to say just what a wonderful story I think this is i have been so wrapped up i never took time to review ....

I know Edward is very mad but he has to be happy as well that they have a break in the case. They are closer to getting some normalcy. They would hate to have to look over their shoulder forever.

good

omg the mystery just keeps getting deeper and deeper lol. Still gotta say your Edward is the strongest Master I have ever read...he takes no shit at all!!

That answered lots of questions. Great chapter...but they all have been. It was great to see Bella tease Edward with the bowl. And, who wouldn't love "pussy worship."

it's also nice to see the "punishment fit the crime," so to speak.

Thanks for another incredible chapter. Already for more. 

Wonderful to see this update!  You put so many different things in your chapters. Hot, loving, scary most of all anxious for the next!  XOXO, Cheri

LOVED the fruity pebble joke.  OMG  Surely hope Skankya gets more punishment than simply taking her computer away.  Sounds to me like prison for conspiracy to start with.

So happy to have this update!!! I loved that Bella was able to punk Edward on her bowl of cereal. That was hysterical! Eleazar's info was so juicy. You're right I never saw that angle coming. Is Caius related to Phil? (Yeah, I know, you're not going to answer that one) Hmmm....did James see the emails from Tanya even though he didn't respond? Would Caius get in touch with James directly? So many questions...so many days until your next update to get more pieces to the puzzle. :)

By the way, I still want to see Alice get what's coming to her for her ugly attitude toward Bella. Hormones or not, there's no excuse for rude! Sock it to her!

I have the same reaction to fruity people's as Edward does. It leaves a yucky film in the mouth. I'm glad things are progressing.

Wow...I am craving Fruity Pebbles! You just put a whole new twist to the story so I can't wait to see how it plays out.

:)

What in the world is going on with Caius????? Can not wait to find out. What was meant by his father's dirty little secrect. I hope James gets his hands on Tanya. I know that is wrong but she needs to be put in her place. 

Love that Bella got her Fruity Pebbles!!!! Loved the trick that she played on Edward!!!! lol

oh its lovely ....anything that gets a twitch out of our boy on the first chapter is ok with me

There is no way to tie all of this together in 3 chapters... going by your words the story ends on the 23rd, that is three chapters or three days... that is a shit ton to happen in three days of finding out who is behind all of this and why, wow the chapter are going to be epic long to get the build up you need for all of that to happen and then an abrupt ending, that is interesting.

I have absolutly & truely fallen love with this amazingly beautifully captivating story!! U truely are an amazingly talented writer. I Definatly rate this story as a #10 out of #10. BUT COULD U PLEASSSSSEEEE UPDATE REAL SOOOOOOOOON! Please update more regularly. Thanks for all ur hard work I really do appreciate it & know how much time & effort it takes.

TOO TRUE!

Oh I adore this story. Truthfully it is one of the most well rounded smut stories I have ever read. With the exception of 2 or 3 other stories all the others I have read are all smut/sex/porn. There are no real story lines. I love that not everything is about sex. Sure there are a lot of great sex/kink secenes, but there is something deeper going on. I'm glad you didn't rush it and allowed us to really see the journey Edward and Bella have been through. It truly is a remarkably beautiful meeting of two lost souls. 

Okay about this chapter. I love Dougie. I knew he wasn't going to tattle, but I never in visioned that he would challenge her. That was beyond fabulous. And Bella's reaction to winning was hysterical. I wonder what Riley is thinking? I would love to be in Dougies head right about now. 

With everything going on with Calius and Karen. I can't wait to see where it all leads. I can feel the drama building. It seems Dougie maybe a key to unlocking g at least half that door. I wonder how I twined Tanya is with Caius! I always thought she was behind some of it. Trying to discredit Bella anyway she could so she could have another go at Edward. 

Cant wait to see where you are taking us next. 

'Just enjoyed these last two chapters.  This is one of my favorites, for sure.  I've looked forward to every chapter since the first.  This story is not too long----you're only doing justice to E & B.

Thanks!!!

I love this story, I'm not ready for it to be over.

I am very aprehensive about what the climax will be - but bring it on.

wow... just wow. this is one of the best days in Bella's life i guess. the whole chapter is amazing.. as much as i appreciate lemons it's perfect as is. your writing always makes me wishing more:)

omg louise please don't listen to the "story is too long" dipsticks! I love this story and it has one of the most true to life D/s couples around. I really learn things and see new toys and think its just wonderful. I know it has to end but don't think everyone is ready for it too, 'cause I am not!

Author's Response:

Ahhhh...your a sweetly. And actually I only put in the comment about the length because the people or person who complained said it in anonymous reviews, so I had no other way to reply to them. They or the person (because I think it's only one person who just likes to make her point known so she sends out several unsigned reviews so that I think lots of people are saying the same thing...lol...sneaky right?....LOL....) anyway she says she doesn't care about all the stuff that is happening with E&B in their life, she doesn't care about their love story or their playtime or anything else,,,, she's just tired of waiting for the story to get finished so she knows who, what, and why people are after Bella...lol...in other words, she's becoming impatient and wants me to get to the point and skip around...that's not going to happen....soooo, I had no other way to say it, then to put it in an A/N....anyway...thanks for your kind words, and really I can't just skip around....the voices in my head wouldn't let me....lol...thanks again, until next time, be well...louise

It sounds as though Quill and Claire will eventually find themselves in a deeper Dom/submissive relationship ad the learning curve increases and their desires ate
revealed.
Haha, Bella holds on to her title and in the process toutes the amazing stamina of her master.
She finally gets her fruit pebbles. Yea!

Loved it!!! 

Some of us love this story and look forward to every update. I will be very sad when it is finished. It will be like an old friend moved away.

i am not sure either if i want to know anymore about James. can we have him killed by some animal in a forest or being at least kept at Aro's dungeon? because i don't want Edward to be imprisoned for what he is going to do to that creature..

it's nice to know he is determind to learn as much as he can about Bella:)

Edward is supposed to be perfect, this is the way he lives, but here he is dealing with something he is not familiar with. be very careful, dear;)!

Excelent Chapter. Of those who think is a little long well, I can get that but still is so wonderfull to read and imagine  how the relationship between Edward and Bella develop I haven enjoyed every one of the chapters and I wait impetiently for the next update. So thank you so much for updating! See you next update

What awl derail chapter. And she get her sugar coated cardboard!  I had to laugh last week when my husband and youngest son started eating giant bowls of Fruity Pebble!  They looked at me like I had lost my mind. :)

Thanks for writing and I love this story, length and all!  See ya next time. 

I loved this chapter!

dougie!  LMAO!  Challenged her to a bj competition an I think she proved her point!  LOL!  Master does have more stamina!!! Woo hoo!  How funny was that! I'm glad she admitted it to the OCB! I knew she would, but it was still a feel good to see her do it when she did. 

I'm liking the way quil and Claire are seeing things, like you said not sugar coated.  

Demetri is such a good friend and Dom, I never once though he wanted Bella for himself, he was just doing the most important thing, keepin Bella safe. ;)

now the pissy worship was fucking hot! A little jealous here! LOL

i can't believe there are only 4 chapters/days left :(. Will you be continuing like you have mentioned?? I hope so!

happy V day!  Thanks for the little gift! :)

:) loved this

Another brilliant chapter and I love this story it is not to long, each chapter is well written and emerges you in the life of Isabella and her master. Can't wait for the next chapter, thank you for all you hard work and effort that goes into the story. I have been reading it from he beginning and well stay with lib till the end. THanks again see you next time

i wonder when does Alice start to use her supernatural abilities? ;)

what a lovely chapter!

Edward knows how to treat a woman for sure... then again, he is Edward

this is only the first chapter and i already love it:)

Happy v day. Thanks for the update. I am still kinda pusses at routine for his underhandedness as well as Edward for his disappointment with the Caius situation. Great chapter. I am sad this will be ending soon. I am curious about a potential proposal and wedding in the future and esme's as well as Alice's reactions. Also Royce's trial. 

I cant beleive Edward hasn't made her tell him what she was lying about with the whole cock blocking thing. lol. 

And as for Bella well I htink she is in a whole bunch of trouble for not following what Demetri said.  Poor Bella but I think she needs her spanking.

Thank you Thank you Thank you.  I am soooooooooooo Glad that you let Edward win.  I mean his is the Master in CONTROL  It made no sense for him to lose. lol  SOOOOO HAPPY.  GREAT CHAPTER.

Thanks good chapter

I dont know that cop still gives me the heebee jeebees. lol  I dont know how to spell that. 

Another great chapter.  I kind of figured that Edward would break at some point. 

I have been such a bad fan I have forgotten about this story again.  But.... here I am again and I hope you forgive me for not reading sooner. 

Now as for the car, I am thinking someone tampered with it, I guess we will find out soon enough.  As for Demitri, I cant figure him out.

This chapter had me giggling left and right!

so, quil and Claire wil fit in just right I think. It will take some getting used to , but they will enjoy it!

dougie!!!!!! What is he up to?? That boy, smh!  LOL 

I think Bella is going to be punished for sure, she may not get the fruity pebbles for 3 months!

rem is Soo freaking sweet and good.  Was Isabella freaked because of cauis and that's why she didnt respond??

Hmmmm...I can't wait for th rest!

this chapter was so stressful!  and wow, I still dont like the club.  great job L

I love Dougie! I want one to. I sort of had a Dougie at Temple U. His name was Max, but it was no where near as great as Dougie. 

At least Bella now knows that Clair will accept her no matter what. That should at least be a little positive.

Poor Bella. Should be an interesting night. Wonder what Dougie is up to??? Can't wait for the next chapter.

I know a lot of people think Dougie is funny, and that's great, but I have never really liked him all that much, and this chapter just put him right over the edge with me.  She was trying to avoid trouble by going over to the table where Eleazer and Tanya were sitting, but he doesn't seem to care, and things just go downhill from there.  And then egging her on with the stamina argument.  I'm sorry, but to me he seems like a bully sometimes.

omg the poor girl, its never quite her fault when the bad chit goes down and she is just in the way, yet the way she reacts is what really gets her in trouble. Poor Bella I think Claire and Quil might like this lifestyle and may need some mentors...hmmmm?

:) loved this

OMG  Daugie is a trip.   Other than pausing to grab claire, how did B not respond right away to D??    Ugh Caius and Skankya in the same chapter. ewwww