I haven't laughed so loud or so much in a while. I love Dougie! Bella needs to lay that shovel down and quit digging her hole deeper. Loved it!

OMG...I've been reading for days and can't believe I've caught up! Its so incredible, love it!

absolutely adore this story!! ive been reading it everyday for the last few weeks. but now im so sad that im up to date as i cant read anymore so PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

edward and bella are so perfect and u have developed them so well. love the changing between POV's cos some stories with a dom edward are quite mean but u give us his perspective which turns out to be full of love, care and pride.

I NEED TO KNOW WHOS BEHIND ALL THIS MYSTERY! so many possibilities!

i hope there is a future show down between james and edward. they had a brief talk in forks but would love a scene with edward being all protective and getting some things off his chest. 

this story is beautifully written and its been a pleaure to read! keep going please.

I just finished reading the whole story. I sprained my ankle Christmas Eve, so I have been readig pretty much non-stop. I didn't leave a comment for each chapter because most to the time, the site would log me off before I fiished a chapter and I'd have to login again to post a comment or keep reading, soooo I just kept reading! Anyway, I have really enjoyed the story so far and am looking forward to the rest. I do have to say I was po'd for Bella when she didn't win the contest. Thanks for the great story.

I am sure Fiber One is the same as our fiber here in Australia, I used to eat it every morning and I had to add honey to it for me to be able to eat it. Like fucking cardboard. If it was tasty it would not be good for us, that is the way I looked at it.

I think call Bella a sore loser, is a bit harsh. If that had of been me, I would have left him there in the room by himself to gloat to himself.

I don't understand why he had to lie to her about control, and I dont care what you say Louise, he lied, it might me a white one, but he would have called Bella on it, you and I know that he would have.

Yes he had some control but he also had pure luck on his side as well, why not just admit that, why say it was all about his control. You are in the end creating a false sense of security... how did you put it... "The submissive woman in me took solace in the fact she could trust her Master to always come out victorious."

Once again to me it seem like Edward just needs to be in control and have the upper hand, while Bella becomes the doting "Yes Sir"... sometimes this lifestyle confuses the shit out of me. Seems that unless it is going Edwards way, it's no way. Then again as I have always said, unless you do live it, you don't fully understand it. There is only so much a person can explain in a story.

Thanks for a good chapter, but I am going nuts about the other side of this story, I am all happy about the baby shower but if I was telling the truth, I could give to fat rats what is going to happen, I want to know who is behind all of this, because it just cant be James, or it can be but he has help. You seem to be opening more cans of worms with the whole Cheyenne, but really what does it have to do with a the whole baby shower, apart from put a damper on their weekend.

Nothing seems to be getting solved... its going to chapter 150 by the time we find out who is behind this and by then I think I am going to be more frustrated then Bella on her Masters whipping bench being denied her release!

I had a feeling that you were not going to let Bella win this. It would have been nice to see the cocky ass go down, and then to lie and say control after... I guess there is double standards for Edwards!

I think Bella was right on the whole tampon thing, some things need to be kept to ones self... this is one of them, that, pee and poop was three thing I did not do in front of my ex-husband. Sometimes a little bit of mystery is okay.

As much as I bitch about not wanting playroom times, I have to read the chapter because you put so much in between. Little tidbits that remind us or inform us a little about them... but I would really like to know who is behind all of this.

As for Alice... I just hope one day no-one speaks about her that way, she might come from money and stature but it can go as fast as well.

Low score only because I want more of the original!

Here's hoping your Christmas was Merry and your New Year is filled with Happiness!

The pattern of challenge and counter from E&B is just like imagining a fencing competition. Where the highly skilled champion schools the young challenger at every thrust.
Edward's guidance may seen harsh but he is strengthening her ability to serve and giving her self-worth.

James.......Argh, such a low life. He seems to know where the money is in that town. Then manipulates the young girl convincing her to have his child, for the chance to extort money from her parents. Did be make Karen watch or was that Victoria watching from the wings?

Seth is going to be the death of his sister! What has him so drawn to the world of BDSM? I'm sure his girlfriend is not at all interested in this lifestyle.

Uh oh, Isabella. you may be getting more than you thought.

Thank you again, and a wonderful new year to you and yours when it comes. T

Loved the chapter. I don't blame Bella at all for trying to shorten her 'eating of sticks' one bit. I had to eat that crap for a while after I had surgery 'to help return my system to normal' and it was just for a month. I actually dreaded breakfast. 

I don't have words to describe how sick James is. He is disgusting and completely psycho. With that said, I have no idea what he is up to other than trying to get money out of Gerandy to give up visitation to his child. Sick. 

Lim looking forward to the fun at New Moon. See ya next chapter. 

tsm

Wow..love it. Can't believe James..

GReat chapter!

L - the whole james thing is freaky weird.  can edwards investigator get a statement from the child to help bring mr. creepo down?  As far as the club, yeah, I don't like this idea.  First I would like to see eDward and Bella in a date situation at places other than the club.  I think it would be good for htem, plus, the way bella will have to be - if I were bella I don't think I would want to share that - especially when her experiences at the club have been roughly 50/50 good and bad.  Welcome back.  Happy New years.

good chapter

happy new year!

Part of me wishes I had found this story when you were finished...I hate getting to the end of the chapter!

I'm really anxious to see how Edward presents Bella at New Moon with her friends there...and I think it is so funny (and true-to-life) how anxious to get in her brother is!

Wonderful chapter!  I loved it. Thanks for writing and sharing your talents with us. I'll keep y'all in my thoughts and prayers as you recover from the hurricane. Being on the gulf coast, I sympathize. 

Thanks again,

tsm

Amazing. And I'm glad Edward won. While Bella is amazing at what she does ;) it's good to see Edward in control. He is her Master and as such I think it may of shown just a little weakness if Bella had won. And while Edward said it was luck there is no way a 'normal' guy would of lasted past 2 minutes if Bella did that to them.

And was it me or did Dougie's call come right at the exact moment Bella needed him to call. Could Bella have asked him to call to help her win the bet?

I'm so glad I found your story here! Love it

good

These two are rather competitive; I'm sure another wager will allow Bella to receive her sugar cereal. Haha
The spanking in front of Bella's new play pal Douglas should be an interesting experience for her. Another boundary to push.

REALLY wanted her to get her Fruity Pebbles!  Darn, are you sure he set the timer at the beginning?  Ok, he won, but not happy about it!  lol, Cheri

Damn!  I wanted Bella to win that little contest.  He really does have a lot of control.

I look forward to the spanking that she gets... if for nothing else to see how she likes it.

Glad you are back and settled again.

No hurricanes in the forcast, but maybe some freezing temps.  Remeber the 3 P's:  Protest your Pets, Pipes and Plants.  Oh, and write the next chapter too.

Are we nearing the end of our story?  Things are starting to come together.

Awesome chapter.... Edward doesn't neet to be so smug about winning.... lol

Love it

:)

Sweet chapter.  Glad the house work is going well irregardless of the delays.   Dougie is too cute for works.

Aww for bella losing.   

I have truely been intriguied & captivated in reading this story!!! I have loved reading this story but impatiently waiting next update!!! It have been a month since last update PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE could u atleast try to update every 2 weeks If ur stuck please let us know ur readers would be will to to give u any suggestions or ideas any input u need. Please let me know if ur abandoning this story!!!

ive read this entire story ina bout a weeks time and ijust wanted you to know its amazing! :) I'm actually sad I'm caught up because now I have to wait like everyone else.. LOL

I love that you went into Dougies story. It's so beautiful and its the reason a lot of people go into age play. They were forced to grow up to soon and never had a childhood and/or lost a parent and needed it in thier lives. It has nothing to do with wanting to molest children or anything like that. So many people don't understand it. I think you've done a beautiful job in showing what Doubld D and Rileys relationship is about. I hope it will also open Bella up to the idea of a bit more role play in her time with Edward. I can see it benefiting her as well. Hell, she already slides into it a bit. Massive, massive kudos for this chapter. :)

I usually don't like characters that show up that weren't originally in the book, but you've done such a fantastic job with Dougie and fleshed him out so well I almost forgot he wasn't initially in the book. I think he might be my favorite author created character ever. :)

"How about the tampon thing??? What are your thoughts on his wanting to be in there and then his backing down when she said it was a Hard Limit. Now do you see who holds all the power?

It's not the Dom – if she says absolutely no way – then he has to abide."

I always really dislike hearing this because it's disingenuous and plainly not true.  It's rather disrespectful. It's a buzz term thrown around by people who don't really have experience and often said to try to make people, especially people on the outside, feel better.  The sub doesn't hold all the power anymore than the Dom does. It's an equal split. A Dom has hard limits and needs that need to be respected just as a sub does. There are plenty of things I love to do or would love to try that my Dom has as a hard limit. It's not all sexual actions, it certain trigger words as well. It's just as wrong for a sub to try to press this on the Dom as it is for a Dom to push something onto a sub. I've found that while bad Doms try to strong arm these situations, bad subs will do it through whining, guilt and manipulation. So the Dom holds just as much power in the situation as the sub. To say the sub holds all the power is wrong and ignores the very real and just as important needs of the Dom. While in play there is technical inequality in the relationship, unless there is communication and equality as a whole a relationship will not work. No one parties needs are more important that another.  I find nothing more irritating or disrespectful when I see a sub smugly tittering and saying this with her girlfriends. If she really believes this, I feel bad for her Dom.

I wasn't a fan of Bella calling a hard limit on him being in the bathroom with her. Personally, it took some getting used to but nothing makes me feel more loved than when my boyfriend takes care of me that way. He does it with reverence and makes me feel cared for because it shows that he'll love me and take care of me no matter what situation. Even the seemingly grosser ones. However if Bella doesn't feel the same, that doesn't bother me but the way she went about it did. She just shut down and called it a hard limit without even thinking about it or talking about it. She's going with a emotional reaction before having even thought it through or hearing Edwards side of it and Edward should have called her on that. The mature way it should have gone was for her to call 'yellow' or 'red' even and say that she's not comfortable with this right now and that being in the middle of the situation when they aren't on equal footing with heighten emotions wasn't the time to talk about it. Edward should have respected her choice, walked away and then during their after care/conversation talked about it then so they could both air their feelings on it. Edward can explain why he wants to do it and Bella can explain why it bothers her. If at the end of that she wants to hard limit it, no problem. Not wanting to do it isn't the problem. It could be a huge trigger for her due to what James did in her past and she's totally right to not do it, but the way she went about it cuts off communication and that's never a good thing. What if Edward has a need that doing this for her would fulfill. She needs to be attuned to his needs just as much as he is to hers. While she shouldn't do something she doesn't want to fulfill his need she still needs to find out what that need is and talk about other means of taking care if it. Granted, it's probably not that big of a deal to Edward but she'll have no way of knowing that by cutting off communication as she did.

I'm so disgusted with Alice, I don't know if I'll be able to forgive her. At least not without her getting totally knocked out of her ivory tower. The things she said, especially regarding Bella's old marriage, is unforgivable. I hope Esme gets to see it first hand so she understand how her hate, bigotry and snobbery toward Jane has affected her daughter. Alice being pregnant is NO excuse, Edward was 100% right. I also hope Edward puts Esme in her place and doesn't let her run rough shod over Bella and her wedding desires.

And wow...fuck James. Will we find out more about that? I don't want to know, but I also do. I'm sure Bella doesn't want to remember it but if there is someone else out there that's harmed her she should be aware of that. Even he used other means to violate her rather than another person I think it's important to know what's happened so she can work on healing it. Repressed memories have a tendency to come up at horrible times. It's good if you can prepare for them.

I loved the chapter, but I bet Bella felt a little weird being treated scolded like a child. She may be a submissive, but she is still an adult to Edward. Yes, she was rude to cuss in someones house. My teenage children know better as well as my husband. If one of them slipped up, I would treat the situation differently. Double D sees Bella as a child like he sees Douglas. It would feel weird as an adult being spoken to as a child all of a sudden. It has been years since this has occured for me. I would probably feel so ashamed because I haven't been scolded in so long. I feel so bad for Douglas. As a wife of a Marine, I would never picture him as one, It was a shock, but I am glad that he found someone to love him. He had a tough life and very little childhood until he was an adult. I guess that is why he doesn't want to be an adult, but at some point he will have to live in society as an adult again. I hope he will be ok.

I LOVE ME SOME DOUGIE!!!!  A sweet sweet man and I want a best friend like him!  He had a hard life but is happy now and that is all that matters is now!  He is like a breath of fresh air and his honesty and personality is wonderful.  I can see he and Bella becoming besties.  Will Edward find out about Bella's little outburst of fowl language?  I can't wait till the next update.

L - great chapter. I am still a bit squirmy when it comes to Doug and double d. I don't like the fact that she is in their house where someone else can punish her or she is in her submissive role not around Edward. Great chapter. 

Loved it as always can't wait for the next one.

I was touching to read about Dougie... with that said I believe it wil help Bella in a way too.  It is kinda similar to what she went through also.  I'm excited to read about Edwards birthday, especially to to see how he reacts to the pics.  can't wait for more chapters!  please hurry with more updates..

I loved it, i love dougie, can't wait to read more

I have truely loved reading this amazingly beautifully written story!!! when will u be udating???Please let me know!!!

Well I am on the ball tonight!!! I actually sat down, read and I'm reviewing now!! I was very pleased with their talk after the play time.  I am hoping Edward doesn't up the "pain" threshold too much more.  I only say that because it seems to be bringing out certain feelings in Bella, first in her dreams and then in her thinking afterwards. 

Something is hiding in her and she isn't doing it on purpose, but in due time I have a feeling it's going to come out and it's not going to be pleasant.  James is one sicko and he did/shared Bella without her consent.  Just something more for her to hate herself about.  Thank you for building that part of her up.  And I do feel that it is Dougie that will be spending time with her.  One bad thing though, is how she is avoiding Edward and sort of plotting a scheme against him and not giving in to him and his "urges"...lol...Thank you for this wonderful chapter!!

The old man is leaving.

Bye

je suis déçu de ne pouvoir être capable de lire la fin de votre chapitre, il est trop long. Je suis à la moitié.

I agree with Bella about the tampon and the bathroom situation. That is the last place of privacy for a woman. It is hard to get that with children, but it was one of the first things I taught my children. I did not want them to invade my privacy, but I also did not want them to think it was ok for other people to invade their privacy. It all goes back to you are incharge of your private parts. Between Edward and Bella, women just feel gross on our periods and we don't want to share that with anyone. We would stop that whole bleeding situation if we could. It is the biggest downfall of being a woman. It is the price we pay to have the privaledge to have children. I just with it would stop after we have the children we want. On Vinny and the van, I found that part somewhat funny in that my daughter calls them molester vans. She won't let me park, drive, or be anywhere near one. She is scared to death of them and she has never been molested or kidnaped. I don't know if it is from all of the stranger danger classed at school or the news, but she freaks out if she sees one. She is now 17 and she hasn't gotten any better. Her bestfriend since the 1st grade father is a plumber and his new vehicle was a van. He had always had a truck. She saw it and came back home and called her friend and said she could not come over to her house anymore because of that van. Her dad felt so bad and didn't like being thought of that way that he traded it in. Edward needs to listen to Vinny. Someone is hanging around in a white van watching the family. Little eyes notice more than we realize because they don't worry about so many things at one time. Alice needs someone to talk to about her life. She seems overwelmed with life. She doesn't seem happy with her life. She is attacking Bella because is happy and so is Edward. Alice needs to find her peace before this new baby gets here or she will only get worse. It will so sad if the family splits because of Alice's tantrum. She needs help and I hope Jasper sees it before it is too late.

1- anyone else wanna punch Alice in her snooty, turned up nose.

2- yummy middle and end

3- Omb what else did he do to her that she doesn't remember!?!?!?

Always thought there would be more to her story...great  chapter.

The playroom experience was a little over the top for me.  I still don't understand why many of the precursory activities seem to be so abusive (at least psychologically). 

The tampon thing is definitely a "yellow" or "red", although I don't believe Edward will respect her wishes.  He even said so internally that that issue was not over.  In a prior chapter he was plotting to put an end to her privacy in that aspect.

Bella has definitely been abused by James, most likely drugged, when she experience a 3 way (or more).  This will likely come out under hypnosis, which I'm certain Edward wants to learn the truth.  Then, what will he do with the knowledge?

Maybe I'm confused as to why Bella’s would allow Edward to abuse her body - after she experienced such abuse at the hands of a man who clearly did not love her.  How does she step into the Clinic for abused and battered women and look them in the face, knowing she is allowing a man to do the same for the sake of pleasure?  Sore nipples should be the least of her worries.

Edward continues to push Bella’s limits to what end?  Does this make her a better more secure person to be humiliated and embarrassed?  Is the plan to desensitize her through repetition of what make her uncomfortable? 

You’re right Bella could have said “yellow” or “red” at any time – but the thought of disappointing her Master (and lover) I believe are too great for her to risk the issue.  I think she sucks it up and take the abuse – because love of any kind (kink) is better than none at all.

Writing, when done well, should evoke emotion and opinion – honey, you have it in spades.

L - way to bring my high down.  Wow, what a way  to end this amazing chapter.  Frankly I liked this chpater - it shows how they are still working on thier Ds relationship. 

Now, Alice, I am proud of Edward.  He did a good thing and he offered Alice plenty of opportunities.  Honestly, in this story, I am not sure I want you to redeem Alice or not.  From the beginning she has been standoffish.  And I don't know if you can redeem her well enough to justify it in my mind to make it real.  I loved that you described Edwards feelings in this part too, great job.

Great job.  The wait was made up for due to the quality chapter you wrote.  See you again soon babe.  Take care.

Wow Louise!  I'm speechless! Humm.... Give me a second to find my voice....  Okay, Vinny, what a Precious curious little mind**giggles**

The Van, well I think I need to revisit the chapter at the Park, when they had the fund raiser for "The Center".... seems to me there was a Van..... So I will revisit those earlier chapters.... Yay! Sequel!!!!  Yippee!  Alice and Edward, well I am reeling from that conversation and Alice's TRUE feelings about Bella, but it really doesn't surprise me.  **I say that in all honesty**  Esme spent years of treating Jane poorly and Alice was front row and center for that example.... so it does stand to reason that Spoilt Rotten Alice doesn't have the maturity to see, as Esme now is seeing, that it was a narrow minded and Highly inappropriate view to take on her Sister-in-law... How judgmental can a person be Alice…. I am still in shock in awe mode over that portion of the chapter.

Master Edward has definitely been established as an Highly respected Firm and Strict as well as an insightful Dominate with his current submissive, I say current, and Not submissive’s of the past because I don’t think he had the connection with those women he does with Bella.  I had the feeling or the sense that he was in need of relieving some pent up frustration he was very much left with from his recent  conversation with his Sister, therefore I felt he was a little sterner than he generally is during there "Usual" time.. I'm not sure if I am expressing myself right here, what I mean is that Master seemed to be in a very Intense Dom Mode.  I was so very proud of Bella for using "Yellow" not once but twice ... first over the tampon/cup issue and then when she was on the brink of failing his instruction to not cum. 

Feminine Hygiene during that time of the month was something that Master shouldn’t have considered pushing her on, Especially given Bella's history, considering where and what James would cruelly do to Bella,  Master is just not consistently putting her history front and center when he is giving her directions such as he did in this chapter regarding the tampon.... Putting MYSELF in her place in this chapter, I fear I would have said "RED" and not yellow. Now that I think about it, she did essentially say RED when she told him that anything dealing with the Toilet was a Hard Limit now.  Well done Bella!  I slowly worked through the HIS STRONGER DOMINATE side through most of the time, until we came to the end and he doubted her being truthful with him about the double penetration and James.... Ummmm.. Master.... why would it matter what she did in her past? Dear Lord how many submissive’s have you had? .... and why on earth are you doubting what she said?  That hurt me that you doubted her....   Knowing what a sick individual that EX of hers was I could honestly see him drugging her and doing things to her that she has blocked out, but not that she would deceive or lie to you about.... Okay I'm through talking with Master.   

Now you my dear Louise and the wonderful M - You both rock, Louise you my dear one for writing this Huge chapter 20K+ words  killer.... and you M for the wonderful feedback and Mad Beta Skills you use..... You both Rock.... have a wonderful one!  Much FF Love, Kathy

Love their evening, and Edward was pretty awesome through it all, but the last few lines really change the lasting impression of the chapter. We're taken from their joint joy in what they done together back into the intrigue and wondering if Bella was drugged and raped by more than just James. I have to hope that's not the case and that James is just talking out of his ass, but I'm left wondering.

I'm really glad Edward confronted Alice, and that he's taking a stand to support Bella and not have her treated the same way Jane has been all these years by Esme. Even though it seems Esme is having a change of heart recently, it's good of Edward to protect Bella from what could turn into 3 decades of treatment as a sub-human by his sister. Truthfully, Alice seems like such a judgemental person in this fic, even as she profits off the people she judges. I have to wonder if she's just one of those people who's always done as she was told she should by society but it's not made her happy. She just seems to me a lot like the judgemental folks who constantly question my own decisions to live outside the constraints of marriage and kids, but are on their second or third marriage with multiple kids, but they aren't happy. Just my own impressions. (BTW, I bear no ill will for marriage or people having kids, I just think they should really want to take those steps with their partner, for a reason other than "this is what you do when you get to be this age...")

I loved the super long chapter!  

I'll be honest I was torn back an forth about the usual. I guess in my head I keep going back to the abuse she went through with James.   And some of the things he did just reminded me of the things James did to her. But then I go back to they are both doing this mutually, if not then she would safe word. Like she did in the bathroom!  And the only time she did was when she couldnt hold it any longer!  :). She is good by the way!  Then I remember how much be loves her and that showed too, during the usual which is not normal!  I did love that part!

Now how he handled Alice!  That I want to jump his bones for! Go Edward!  He loves her Soo much!  Alice is, like you have already said, a spoiled snobby brat!  And I do think she is preggo!  Drinking the OJ, huh:)

Ok, now the last part and how James said what he did to Edward about double penetration, I hope he really didn't do something like that and she doesn't remember:(

Only you will let us know:)

Amazing chapter!  Can't wait to the next one! 

And a sequel to top it off:) **jumping up And down**