Date: 14 Oct 2010 7:33 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
The family is starting to, if not accept Edward's choices, to at least respect them, to some extent.
The punishments received by the guys were good, really good. Rosalie helping out was a very nice gesture, even if she said it was not for Edward.
Bella is a fragile creature, in need of reassurance. Her choice of reassurance isn't accepted or understood by many. However, it doesn't mean it's wrong, it's just different and should be respected. She is fortunate enough to have found someone who can provide what she needs.
The Denali's visiting wasn't a good idea, right from the start. Sadly it seems it might even end badly.
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2010 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
If you ask me those attackers got away lightly. I enjoyed this chapter but I think I am with Esme on this and that Edward is being selfish regarding Bella. I cannot wait to see how things work out.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
I am glad justice was given, but I wonder if Rose would have really stopped at scaring Mike. Dosen't matter, I suppose. What's done is done and all that. Now, what on earth are Esme and Carmen doing?!
Date: 14 Oct 2010 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
WTF????????
What the hell they think they're doing???
Oh come on!!
xx
M
PS: I enjoyed Rose's escapade waaaay to much!!
Date: 14 Oct 2010 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
Enjoyed this chapter. Interesting to see what happened to Charlie.
What in the heck are Esme and Carmen doing? They need to let Edward go to Bella. Maybe they want to talk about options for the future?
Sooner or later he's going to have to tell Bella what he is...
Please update soon.
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2010 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
oh crap what are they going to do to him ? i thought esme was comming around to edward .i do think her should change her but not for a while loved it
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2010 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
yes they did get what they deserved and more!!!AND WHAT THE HELL IS UP WITH ESME, CARMEN AND THAT SKANK TANYA???
If Edward doesn't arrive on time, Bella will think that he doesn't want her!!!
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
loved it i hope his family will come around more for him and her
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:41 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
I like the way you had the justice be handed out by the proper authorities rather than by the Cullens themselves. I continue to enjoy the e-mail correspondence between Bella and Edward and look forward to what Esme and Carmen have planned.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
Ugh- of course now I'm dying to know what happens! And I loved the way all the bad guys were dealt with. My only question though, is why does Edward think that if Bella becomes a vampire she wouldn't still be his submissive? With her personality, I wouldn't think it would matter. I'll be anxiously waiting for more! Thanks! :)
Date: 14 Oct 2010 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
wow. what a place to end the chapter! and how dare they all try to interfere without really understanding. And where are the guys? normally I really like Esme, but not so much in this story. I just keep thinking if they delay him, Bella will be hurt by his absence or even possibly in danger. love the chapter.
Date: 14 Oct 2010 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
I like what happened to the prickless assholes that attacted Bella. What is Esme and the other ladys going to do to Edward???
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2010 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 7 The punishment served
What are they doing to him, i though Esme was coming around????!!!! are they holding him for Tanya??? EWWWW!
Author's Response:
To answer your question yes they are holding hin down. but edward will be saved not to worry!
[Report This]Date: 12 Oct 2010 2:28 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Well, well, well...That's a nice story you have there!! Both sweet and titillating ;)
I've always pictured Edward as a Dominant and Bella as a Sub so it's no surprise there...however, I kind of like how you organised your plot....Disclosing clues little by little undoubtedly highten the interest of the story.
I also like the fact that they were both virgins....Even if it's kind of hard to believe considering that learning control is one of the most important part of the training! Anyway, I find that very sweet!!
I think Bella was trained by Leah (the Domme) and Jake...Perhaps I'm all wrong but She did mention it would have been like "sleeping with her brother", so I based my assumptions on that comment!
I hope Esme and Rosalie will soon come to their senses and realize that being in a D/s relationship requires complete trust and devotion on each part and that comparing it to some kind of domestic abuse is a real blasphemy!
Anyway, I hope you'll update soon because I want to know what She was dreaming about......;)
Author's Response:
sorry for my delay in responding. I am thrilled you like my story. Esme just needs one more thing to happen before she sees the differance. hope you like the new chapter! Thank you for reading and reviewing!
[Report This]Date: 11 Oct 2010 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Hot chapter! I really want to know what Bella dreamed at the end that shocked Edward so.
And I hope they (the Cullens) will teach the creepy guys from her weekend a lesson.
Date: 10 Oct 2010 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Can't wait for more. Great story!
Date: 10 Oct 2010 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 2 - The collaring
I just found your story. You are doing a great job! I can't wait to read more.
Date: 04 Oct 2010 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
love the story update soon
Author's Response:
Thank you! Next 2 chapters are done and are being beta'd, as soon as I get them back I promise to post! I hope you keep- reading!
Date: 02 Oct 2010 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
my guess is it was leah and jake. and i also think jake was the little boy from her dream
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing. it is so hard not to tell people whether they are right or not. but the answer is coming real soon.
Date: 02 Oct 2010 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
well i wonder what kind of trouble will await both bella and eddie durring his time away...?
Date: 02 Oct 2010 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
well the second go around was solely pleasure! even the pain was all about the good vibrations!
Date: 02 Oct 2010 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 3 The Claiming
well that kinda sucks ass that he had to spank her the first time but he needs to teach her... and himself
Date: 01 Oct 2010 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
awesome
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: 30 Sep 2010 6:19 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
It's cruel to leave off like that. Maybe Jake and Leah trained her? Who else would be like a brother to Bella? This chapter was great, as always. I so look forward to your updates!!
Author's Response:
Sorry it took so long to reply. I was working hard on the next 2 chapters. they are being beta'd but i promise to not make you wait. as soon as they are back i will post. Sorry about the cliffie too! it will be worth the wait. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Date: 29 Sep 2010 1:35 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
so in love with you as a writer and so in love with this story!
Author's Response:
Thank you! You really know how to make someone feel appreciated! thanks for readung my stories.!
Date: 29 Sep 2010 1:03 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
AWESOME!!!! can't wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing! Next two chapters are almost done. I hope you continue to enjoy the story!
Date: 28 Sep 2010 2:22 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I love the way their relationship is progressing & how much they both need each other. This was a great chapter! Thanks! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing! Next two chapters are almost done so once they are beta'd I will post immediately. Thank you again!
Date: 27 Sep 2010 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Interveiwing
nah... Don't be upset about my self wondering.... I'm just too curious for my own good really!
I usually like cliffies (there are moments that I really want to kill the author but that's why I use usually! lol)
I can't wait to see what happens!
xx
Marianne
Author's Response:
No worries about me being upset it takes alot for that to happen, LOL! Next rwo chapters are almost ready for the beta so I will post as soon as I can. Thank you so much for reviewing and keep the questions coming. If it wont ruin the story I will answer them.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I think it was Leah and her sub is Jake. I think in an earlier chapter she had thought about thanking Leah for telling her about the interview.
Author's Response:
She did in deed thank Leah for telling her about the interview. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: 27 Sep 2010 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
What??? what??? What did she do???
Anyway I believe that jacob was the sub but I don't know about the Domme... Leah maybe??
xoxo
Marianne
Author's Response:
Sorry about the cliffy but you know it happens sometimes. she didn't do anything its what she didn't see. but edward did. more to come soon, thanks for reading it!
Date: 27 Sep 2010 8:15 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I'm betting on Jacob/Leah as the ones that trained her. And I can't wait to see what you plan for the dream to be :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading it! the dreams are a big part of this story thats why they are mentioned so prominantly. Hope you keep reading and reviewing!
Date: 27 Sep 2010 6:24 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Does Bella have a big sign over her head that says take advantage of me poor girl. I am glad the family will see that what Bella and Edward have is good for them and that is what counts.
Author's Response:
That is truly what counts. you will see things changing now that they each get a chance to see her for themselves. Thabk you for reading and reviewing.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I've got my money on Leah and Jake. So hot .I can't wait till next time.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reveiwing! More to cime soon.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
NICE!!! I love it! I wonder if it was Leah and Jake that trained her! I can't wait to read about her dream and to see if I am right :)
Author's Response:
You definately want to pay attention to her dreams, they are a big part of unfolding the story. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story!
[Report This]Date: 27 Sep 2010 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Hot chappie....loving the time spent outside the playroom...and the interaction with Carlisle soon she will be with the whole clan... I think the Domme and Sub were Leah and Seth...hmmmmmm.... Just my educated guess!!!!!!
Krazi
xoxo
Author's Response:
Thank for for reading and reviewing! i can safely say it was not the pairing of leah and seth. But that doesn't mean one of them were not involved.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 2:45 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
love it.. love it...love it..
Great chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you! I am so glad you love it!
more to come soon.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Loved the new chapter! The story is great! Keep up the good work
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading it! I am so heppy that you are enjoying it! more to come soon.
[Report This]Date: 27 Sep 2010 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Sam/Emily, hum!!!!
Author's Response:
Unfortunately no, but it was great guess. the hints were very suttle. Thank you so much for reviewing me your guess. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I think Leah trained her and that Jake is her boyfriend
I so love that Edward can read her thoughts. Can't wait to see whats next
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing your guess. next chapter will hopefully bring the answer closer. Sorry to tease but i dont' want to ruin the story for you.
I love giving a small peek into her mind. it gives her more depth.
thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 27 Sep 2010 1:00 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I am really liking this story. It is very fresh and unique. Sorry I cant review as often as I read, I usually read from my iphone and it wont let me review from there from some reason. Oh Well - I can review today! This was a great chapter. I am glad the family is finally understanding - or begining to. I figure the Domme that trained her is either Jessica (but i cant imagine who she would be with since it cant be mike) Angela and Ben (though really I see Angela as more of a submissive) or Lea and Jake - or Lea with someone. (this is actually I think most probable - though it is probly someone I have not thought of)
Well those are my guesses. I cant wait to see if I am even close.
TTFN
Author's Response:
I totally understand! i read from my phone was well and reviewing is next to impossible!
i can safely say somewhere in all those names you did identify the two inquestion. but i cant tell you which two. soon!
Date: 27 Sep 2010 12:51 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Wow, that was amazing :) I loved it so much! I think her Domme was Leah and the sub was Jake. I really cannot wait for more to figure out what happens next :)
[Report This]Date: 27 Sep 2010 12:44 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
awesome story thanks keep updating
[Report This]Date: 27 Sep 2010 12:39 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
what happened, did the dream turn into a nightmare. yeah i think Rose will 'handle' Mike best. I wonder what Jazz and Em did to those guys????
Date: 27 Sep 2010 12:38 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
apologies for not reviewing before, but I have really enjoyed this story up til now. am looking forward to more.
Date: 27 Sep 2010 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Wow, that was amazing! I really cannot wait to see what happens while Edward is away ;)
Date: 27 Sep 2010 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I take it Leah and Jacob trained her. Interesting. Great chapter.
[Report This]Date: 26 Sep 2010 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
This poor girl, she is not even safe in her own home. He is gone, what four days, and she is almost attacked twice?!? Edward needs to make sure if he is not going to leave her with the Cullens that he gets her some sort of security. At least he took good care of her when he got home. ;)
Author's Response:
That he did! and yes security is on its way! He needed to see just how much of a danger magnet she is. Thank you for reviewing!
Date: 26 Sep 2010 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
Wow, that was incredible! I really love it :)
Author's Response:
Thank you for all your reviews!
[Report This]Date: 26 Sep 2010 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Hot and steamy and sexy! Love love love it! Not nice to leave us hanging about Bella's dream :)
Thanks so much for another awesome chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing! I am glad you enjoyed it! So but if i kept going the chapter would end up being 20 pages long.
Date: 26 Sep 2010 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I think that Leah and Jake did the training. Also at the end when he says oh no I think he discovers that he friends and trainers are the wolves. Something he's not going to like nor will he tolerate he to go there any longer. To bad I think that's the one thing she will disobey him about. She won't give up her friends/family on the res. Then come the trouble. Please tell me I'm right?
Author's Response:
I cant say too much but i can tell you the dreams will all be working up to figuring out the mystery of what changed in Bella's life and sent her on a differant path than the books. Some of you ideas are correct but i can't tell you which ones, Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: 26 Sep 2010 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Claiming
Wow, that was amazing! I loved it :)
Date: 26 Sep 2010 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
I liked how supportive the Cullens, particularly Carlisle were in the first part of this chapter. It's good to see edward get that approval, even if he doesn't need it.
Author's Response:
I agree he doesn't need it. Though everyone wants their family to accept them. But I always felt in the books and movies that he and Carlisle were sometimes distant, I didn't like that. Thank you for reading it!
Date: 26 Sep 2010 10:28 PM Title: Chapter 2 - The collaring
Wow, that was amazing! Only one little problem. Instead of Edward's email saying "Re: Instructions", it should have said "Subject: Instructions", the "Re:" implies that it is a reply to an email Isabella sent to him about his instructions, not his original email about the instructions he has for her. (I hope this made sense). Amazing job, once again, I loved it all so much :)
Author's Response:
I will fix that right away! Thank you!
Date: 26 Sep 2010 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Interveiwing
Wow, this story sounds absolutely amazing so far! I cannot wait for more :)
[Report This]Date: 26 Sep 2010 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
thanks good chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading it!
[Report This]Date: 26 Sep 2010 9:54 PM Title: Chapter 6 - I missed you!
Wonderful chapter. Its good that he does care for her so well.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 24 Sep 2010 1:33 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
im really loving this story...ive read alot of D/s stories but something about your story makes it unique and i love itl.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I am so glad you love it! I am trying to keep it fresh and new from every other Dom story so I hope you will continue to enjoy it!
[Report This]Date: 23 Sep 2010 7:31 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Nice.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 23 Sep 2010 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 3 The Claiming
I feel bad for Edward and Bella. Edward having to watch himself kill Bella over and over. Then poor Bella getting spanked. To make it worse it had to happen on their first time.
Author's Response:
I think Edward learn a thing or two about just how much he needs to be mind full of her humanity and Yeah it was tough but it was also sweet. So much more to come from our favorite couple!
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Date: 22 Sep 2010 12:38 AM Title: Chapter 2 - The collaring
I really liked the set rules and consequences. I wonder what Bella is hiding? I really like that Edward can read her mind. I wonder if Bella will ever be able to block him as they become closer?
So many ways this can go. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
Only time will tell what she will be able to do. I am so happy you are enjoying the story! thank you for reviewing!
Date: 21 Sep 2010 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Interveiwing
Very different. I have never read a story about vampire Edward being a dom. I love that he can hear her thoughts.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for giving this story a shot. I hope to keep it fresh and new throughout the whole story! I look forward to hearing your thoughts on it as it progresses.
Date: 19 Sep 2010 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Edward was at first upset, then worried about Bella. When Alice called, the relief was partial until he got to her. Both needed the reunion. They had been too anxious for what happened.
I was surprised how easily Bella complied to the new car. Perhaps it was because she was acting as his sub and couldn't speak up and say what she thought. It might have also had to do with how she had been living before meeting Edward.
Who is the boy in Bella's dream? How come Edward knows about La Push? It seems no one, on either side has said anything to Bella about it.
Author's Response:
Edward has know about La push since he was one of the cullens caught hunting on their reservation all those years ago. i wouldn't be so sure about how much bella knows about both sides. (okay that was a hint)
as for the boy well i9 cant say yet but it will come out soon.
She complied because when she sign her agreement she agreed edward would what he felt she needed. he felt she needed a new car.
I hope that cleared a few things up. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: 19 Sep 2010 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 19 Sep 2010 4:05 AM Title: Chapter 2 - The collaring
so good & great this here is
[Report This]Date: 18 Sep 2010 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
so good! and i must thank you for the long chapters!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for all your reviews! With this story I cant help but keep adding. I am having so fun writing this story! Next chapter will be up soon!
[Report This]Date: 18 Sep 2010 11:07 PM Title: Chapter 3 The Claiming
ung!! had to wipe the sweat off my brow!!! that was hot!
[Report This]Date: 18 Sep 2010 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 2 - The collaring
this was freaking HOT! claps hands!
[Report This]Date: 18 Sep 2010 11:03 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Interveiwing
just realized that i didn't leave reviews for the first few chapters - must clap my hands for you posting this fic!!! loved the bj action in it!
[Report This]Date: 18 Sep 2010 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Excellent
Author's Response:
Thenak you!
Date: 18 Sep 2010 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Oh- I love protective Edward! And the car sex! I have to admit that I don't really like Bella's nickname of 'Little Eddie'. It just seems so silly & adolescent considering the nature of their relationship. The playroom scene was great. I'm curious as to why Edward put her in a chastity belt though-doesn't he trust her w/others, or is it so she can't touch herself? I'm excited to see what happens when he's away! Thanks for the great writing! :)
Author's Response:
Dont worry she wont be calling it that all the time. As for her belt it plays heavily in the next chapter. You might find yourself being thankful she had it on. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: 18 Sep 2010 9:58 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
I foresee Bella getting in a whole lot of trouble while Edward is gone.
Author's Response:
I could not agree more. She is after all a danger magnet. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Date: 18 Sep 2010 7:49 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Wow i love my some Domward and subella but this is the first time i have read a vampdomward and subella and i think i like especially that he can read her thoughts although it does reduce the submissive angle a little because he tends to do things inresponse to her thoughts instead of just what he wants.
It is good none the less and i can't wait to where this goes.
Ps i am adding this to my series Domward's Dungeon
Author's Response:
I have added your series to my favorites. That would be great if you would like to put it in there. Thank you so much!
No wories on her submissive side of him reading her mind. He will still do what he wants but he will be able to redirect her when she is nervous about something new. They will be seeing many new things at the classes to experiment with so i hope you coninue to read it.
Thank you again!
[Report This]Date: 18 Sep 2010 5:30 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
A chastity belt? Seriously? It is not like he can't read her mind when he gets back and see if she has been honest about her activities. I wonder of she will make another trip to LaPush while he is away? Hmmm
Loved the scene in the playroom...incredibly hot!
And I love when he went all protective on her at the dealership.
Can't wait to read more!!!
Author's Response:
No she doesn't go to La Push but that doesn't mean she will not see anyone from La push. Trust me you will be happy about the chasity belt after his trip away.
I am so glad you liked the playroom, as he tests her endurance you will see he is going to relax and have more fun. I really liked writing the Dearship scene, so i am glad you loved it!
Nexr chapter is already written so as soon as its back from the beta you will have it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 18 Sep 2010 5:17 AM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Love this story.. and I am going to check out your others this weekend.. I love your writing style so I know I will like these. Thanks for the chapter..
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading so much of my work and for reviewing! More to come in all my stories real soon. Have a great weekend!
[Report This]Date: 17 Sep 2010 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
so hot - i'm loving this fic - oh i can't wait for their pleasure classes - i don't even know what one is but damn it sounds "pleasurable" - gawh i'm so lame!! thanks for the update!! love it
Author's Response:
Thank you! The classes are to teach people how to please a person sexually. A reader told me about them and I thought it would be a lot of fun to add them in. So I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! it should be a great adventure. Thank you again for reading and reviewing it!
Date: 17 Sep 2010 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
I love Vamp Domward.
Author's Response:
Me too! Vamp Doward is so much fun to write! Thank you for reading it. More to come soon.
[Report This]Date: 17 Sep 2010 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
I loved it... ok so from the hint of ode de Wet Dog smell.. I take it the woives will appear somewhere in this story.. and if Edward smells them on her.. don´t the smell him too... but hey those are just my inner ramblings.. I am nothing if not patient... so I´ll wait for things to be revealed.. I hope Bella doesn´t get into too much trouble...
Krazi
xoxo
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing it. Yes the wolves will make an apperance in this story, and so far they have not picked up his scent since she showered before going to see them and they haven't visited her yet. But you know you cant hide that forever.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
well I think miss Bella is going to get into a lot of trouble when he is goine. I am kind of glad he put that chasity belt on her. For some reason I am thinking the salesman that was looking at her is going to try something. I was still hoping for him to last longer in the playroom but I guess he is still working up to it to test her ability. Cant wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you for all your reviews! I am so glad to hear you like the story! In the next chapter you see how he is pushing her forward and becoming secure in his abilities to not hurt her. Next chapter is already being checked over and as soon as its ready I will post it. Believe me the chasity belt was a good thing! Just a little hint. Thank you again! :) Nails233
Date: 17 Sep 2010 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
what was the message that Edward left on her voice mail??? He put a chastity belt on her??? He is not afraid that she would mess around on him??? So he put it on her incase someone else tried to get to her???
Author's Response:
All very good questions! There is an explanation in chapter 6 to the why's. Sorry to tease you but I don't want to ruin the next chapter for you. Thank you for reading it and reviewing it.
[Report This]Date: 17 Sep 2010 3:16 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
she did very well, and he must be estatic that he was in control the whole time...no bloodlust......Trouble??? oh no.....i see punishment in the future.....
Author's Response:
They are both doing very well. he is controling his thrist and she is bahaving very well! Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
That was awesome! I am going to
check out the other stories! :)
Author's Response:
Thenk you so much!
Date: 17 Sep 2010 2:24 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
I loved this chapter. I really enjoy that Edward can hear her thoughts. It can help him know how to work with her in their d/s relationship, but it should also keep him from assuming all kind of wring things particularly about Jacob, whom I assume will make an appearance. I loved his possessiveness at the dealership, and i love his tenderness with Bella.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I am glad to hear you liked it.
Yes his hearing her will help with their relationship. The dealership was my favorite part to write in that chapter. Yes Jacob will make an appearence.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Excellent chapter.
Love the part about Bella appearing shy to most, but to a Dom watching she appears as the perfect sub. Excellent.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I really value your reveiws! I hope you continue to enjoy the story!
[Report This]Date: 17 Sep 2010 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Wonderful chapter! But I fear our poor Isabella is going to get into trouble while Edward is away - probably with the wolves :)
Thanks so much!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing! I think it's safe to say our favorite danger magnet will get into some trouble while he's away.
[Report This]Date: 17 Sep 2010 1:17 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
thanks awsome chapter
so i guess he doesn't trust her
Author's Response:
Thank you! I wouldn't be too sure on the trust thing, you just might be surprised. I hope you enjoy the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: 17 Sep 2010 12:21 PM Title: Chapter 5 The Panicking Dom
Wonderful chapter. He is proving to be a rather good and kind master so far. I hate BDSM stories where there is a lot of whipping and spanking.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! You dont have to worry there will be no excessive whipping or spanking in this story. I have been talking with people who live this lifestyle and I want to portray it acurately. The spanking done for pleasure is one thing, but too much of it makes the lifestyle look bad. That's not what the life is about. So you can count on me to keep it real and not abusive! Thank you again!
Date: 16 Sep 2010 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
so although there was a lemon in this chapter, I got to see another part of their growing relationship...liked it.
Date: 12 Sep 2010 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
So I just found this story and I have to say I love what I've read!
I think your story is the first I've read that has a dom/vamp Edward and a sub/human Bella and I think it's a great idea.
Great work and I can't wait to read more.
Date: 11 Sep 2010 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
ok I really love this story but I am hoping my honesty does not upset you. I am only trying to help you as an author. I think they are too fast in their climaxing. I mean its over almost as soon as it starts. He should be able to last longer and give her multiple orgasams without him cumming. Aslo he should be able to change positions during sex to give her the best pleasure. Ok as for when they are cumming, I think you need to give more description of them cumming because it just seems so fast when you describe it. Like they cum and poof its over when really it takes a little longer to finish cumming and all the panting and grunting was missed I think. Also they could talk dirty during the action that is nice too. But I hate it when they do name calling, I dont like that at all. lol.
Author's Response:
No offence taken. I will do my best to make it longer for you! I want you to be happy but keep in mind they are just getting started so they will be much more comfortable as they learn. I think you will like whan they take pleasure classes. they will learn how to turn up the heat and go wild. Thank you for taking the timen to tell me what you want i will do my best to make it happen. ;)
Date: 11 Sep 2010 7:48 AM Title: Chapter 3 The Claiming
That was a good chapter. Maybe there should have been a little more description of what they were both feeling but other than that it was good.
Date: 11 Sep 2010 6:15 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Interveiwing
For the first chapter I absolutely loved it. I am not sure that I like him reading her mind though. That is not really a good idea I think. I think its a good mystery for him if he doesn't know what she is thinking.
Date: 09 Sep 2010 10:08 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
Still loving this great story- thanks! :)
Author's Response:
Glad to hear it! Thanks for reading it!
Date: 09 Sep 2010 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
love where this is going!! Can't wait to read more!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading it! More to come soon!
Date: 09 Sep 2010 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
Edward is thrilled with how things with Bella are going. Even her dreams intrigue him and make him want more from her.
At home things are doing better. Carlisle has reached out and is starting to understand Edward. Both know Esme will need more time, but hope, eventually she will be okay with Edward again.
Bella pushes Edward to levels he didn't think he could have in him, or reach. Their time in the playroom was fullfilling for both.
Author's Response:
Thank you wso much for reading and reviewing! I hope you continue to enjoy it!
Date: 09 Sep 2010 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
Like the story, good to see it in a positive light and not so harsh.
Author's Response:
Thank you! And I hope to keep it in a good light. I always believe in life choices, Everyone deserves to be happy! especially lonely vampire Doms.
Date: 09 Sep 2010 12:16 PM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
Lovely! Just lovely! With your permission, I'd love to make a second banner for it :)
Author's Response:
If you would love to make it. I would love to have one! I am the first to admit banners are not my strong suit! Thank you for reading, reveiwing and for offering to make it!
[Report This]Date: 09 Sep 2010 9:15 AM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
This Bella is so sweet and precious. I hope he take care of her. She needs insurance and a car. LOL
Author's Response:
Definately! He'll learn soon enough that she will need to have a few things rectified in her life and he will be more than happy to take care of them. Thanks for reading it!
Date: 09 Sep 2010 7:35 AM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
That was HOT!! Oh, my goodness. I only recently realized that I have a thing for Domward. You're killing me here. I can't wait until the next chapter comes out. I have a lot of questions, but I'm sure you'll answer them all as the story unfolds. I know this is fiction, so I'm not expecting an answer to this, but I was wondering if a dom would train a sub without taking her. That had never occurred to me before reading this. And, of course, I want to know what part Jake played in Bella's past. I can't imagine them dating in your story.
Author's Response:
Thank you for giving it a chance! I too have a thing for domward stories but never found one where he was a vampire so I wrote my own. As for Jake, No they they didn't date in this story.
i think it would depend on the Dom. If you're not into girls and you were training a girl I would think there are enough other ways to train her without penetration. But of course that's just my opinion!
Date: 09 Sep 2010 6:41 AM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
I think you are doing wonderful very interesting. I am glad Carlisle understands better and I am sure Esme will soon but Rose she will be the tough one I think Bella will have to break her down.
Author's Response:
I agree it will be Bella who brings Rose around slowly. But Esme wants to understand if she sees them together then I think she will see its not what she envisions. As for Carlisle I always felt he was underused. Edward is his oldesst freind and first companion they should be close. Thank you so much for reading it and sharing how you see it!
[Report This]Date: 09 Sep 2010 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 4 First time in the playroom
Dayum but this story is soooooo HOT! Love it love it love it - thank you so much and looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response:
THANKYOU! Love your enthusiasm! it infectious makes me want to run out and write another chapter! oh - wait I already did! I will post as soon as I get it back!