You are GOOD! But I am lost, why is Bella so upset about Forks...did I forget something or is it coming. Gosh this story is awesome, I am totally sucked in!

Sounds as if Esme is behind all of this.

Rose is a twister with gale force winds. Glad she is on Bella and Edwards team.

Feel sorry for Angel, mixed up in this mess. Funny how a sudden change in circumstances can renew a broken bond of friendship.  How long will it last though.

Esme and Angel have a past that involves keeping Edward bound to Angela. Now that Carlisle has left everything to Edward does Esme think she can manipulate him for her benefit?

Now thats what i'm talking about.. Rose is the shit. Shit, I was panting watching her work. She must have been wearing boots. You know she's badass in some boots. lmao. So good. I dont see Eric as evil, stupid yes but not evil. Laurent is a whole other animal though. So scary. I have to admit and you both know I have been torn of Ang from the beginning but now I am rootin for her to be a hero out of this, if nothing else for herself. Let her take Laurent out, Yeah, Yeah. OMG in Forks, You got me there, I didnt see Forks in the equation but it's perfect!! I'm screaming at my computer so you know it was beyond fantastic. Great action guys.. I voted and cant wait to see you both win, in my heart you won on the first chapter. Can't wait for the next chapter and i'm willing to beg...***batting my eyes purdy please....... 

ho my god, I can not wait that Bella is separated from her husband
of very good chapter, Angela injury landed her now was very very hot

wonderful chapter just the statement
a real bitch angela
'm sorry I hardly read the last chapter or knows who Laurent

oh crap another pair of evil twins !!!!!!!   i will call you girls the evil pixies.  maybe Laurent and Eric get it on........    ok i wouldn't touch that with his dick. yea thats what he said.      update soon

Then I just finished this chapter, the world is really small
Bella who is Angela's husband and the husband of Bella with the wife of Edward I really laugh

sorry, I can not remember if I posted already but it's okay I start. I had already read the first 2 chapters and I already love what is funny is to see Angela in the role is a real bitch lol
Will go and read other chapters, to show the evolution of B / E
I appreciate very much your story
Sorry again, my writing in English, some difficulties because unfortunately am French and I appreciate fiction in English

Wow.  Don't leave us hanging too long please.

I am gonna say thank you for the quick update – I hated leaving on that last note –

I so cannot see Er being the mastermind here but it’s very interesting how the two would hook up but me thinks me figured it out – I’m not saying anything b/c I hate when folks give things away but with E’s last shocker when visiting the homestead, that call he made to the only other person he cared about for help, the upset that Ang was with them…it all adds up to the evil SM (and that ain’t Stephanie Meyer)…think Disney!

Anyway, I hope L DOES NOT have his way and “finish” what he started in the hotel – I am glad to see the way the girls are working together. It’s interesting how Ang/Er were together/connected at the “party” but he “is not there” it seems.  Maybe Ben is the man for her after all!

And while I am not a huge R fan – your R kicks ass – seriously! I wouldn’t want to be JB in the interrogation room and Frodo was a perfect “nickname”! LOVE HER!

Keep it up Ladies! Thanks! BTW - I always love your smutty eye candy but just thinking of Eric being the wimpy little guy in the pics - cannot imagine him with B! Your "cover shot" gets me everytime!

Loved it very much thanks for sharing this with us and update when you can thanks.....

Bet Edwards mum is the 'She' organising the kidnapping to get the money she felt she deserved.

Author's Response:

Huh Iwe would love to tell you yes or no. But if we do then you wont want to read the next chapter. And we just can't have that :)

Great chapter... HATE the picture of Eric... ROFLMAO... he's just not scary looking... hahahaha... was a fucjktard!  OH!  Wait... can I say that here?  Hehehehehe...

Poor Edward... Poor Bella...

I bet that bitch Esme is behind this...what do you think?  Oh yeah, you already know... duh!

Hehehe!  Can't wait for the next update! 

Muah!  Xoxoxo ~ Fangs (tracylk)

I haven't seen him, but I would really like too.....

I love that Bella sees the need to straighten out her life first.....go Bella

OK, I think you guys are on to something good here as far as the plot and storyline go.  But I have to be honest and say that your grammar is horrible.   I can put up with a lot when it comes to fanfiction because I know that authors put so much time and effort into their stories.  You do it because you love it, and you willingly share it with us because you're generous.   I just want this to be as good as it can be.  

Use spell-check, it will help.  If you write in MS Word, your syntax errors should be highlighted and that should help you fix some of the major issues.   Word usage is is a bit harder to correct because spell-check won't catch a lot of those problems.

There is no "s" on the end of ANYWAY.   When you say "I seen her" instead of "I saw her" it makes me cringe because that is just bad grammar.   It's hard to believe Edward is a well-educated laywer when he speaks like this.   A few well-placed commas can do wonders for a run-on sentence, or for a sentence that begins with a conjuntion.

I am not trying to be overly picky here, I just want to point out some constructive criticicsms that could help make your writing that much better.    I know there are two of you writing this, and I assume that you are proof reading each other's chapters?    You might also want to enlist the help of a Beta reader to catch some of the more obvious mistakes.   I think this story could be so much better with just a little bit of effort.    I hope you know I mean this to be helpful, not to be mean or rude.    I really do look forward to reading more because I think your plot is interesting and has so many interesting possibilities.     I just want to see you writing to your full potential.

Wow, hot!   I can't wait to see how this plays out.  Sounds like Edward is married to Angela, right?   But she has Ben on the side, so obviously not a happy marriage - which is good for Bella.   Bella and Eric are not meant to be, so this would be a perfect scenario if we can get Eric to find someone too.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Holy shit!!

It seems Angela was really willing to do what ever to hurt Edward and Bella. How did she manage to orchestrate it all or was it just a lucky brake? What ever it is, she has Bella and things aren't looking good for her. 

:)

Ok....here's your Oh Holy hot damn and can I get a jumpin’ Jesus on a mother fuckin pogo stick!!! Best not keep the masses waiting very long for an update. All hell may break loose...j/s

XOXOXO

Author's Response:

LOL We're almost done with the next chapter! So y'all wont be waitin to long. But we promise as soon as we get it back it will be posted :) Thank you for givin us our,  jumpin’ Jesus on a mother fuckin pogo stick LOL

It was probably time that some of their stalkers started coming out of the woodwork! I was hoping they could get a good couple of days in, but I guess not. Maybe Bella can accidentally push her down the steps and they can check one psycho off the list!

Yeah, that's quite a cliffy, hope you'll be posting soon! They were having such fun;D(

Wow, just discovered this site...and really love it.  This story has me hooked at chapter 1

Now listen up here. Give us our Bella back. Keep Ang..send her up to Esme they can shop together.

Aaaargh!!! Poor Edward. Sick psycho bitch has done something with his Bella!!! Could she have somehow orchestrated the ice/elevator mess???

omg can't wait to see what happens to bella i hope u update soon i'll be waiting.

You made that super hot!  The way you described so precisley what Bella was doing made me afraid that at any minute, Eric would leap out and get her!  THANKS for not going there!

I do think that Eric bought the tickets and sent them there.  I hate to think what he has in mind.   But what do I know?  Maybe I am 100% off base, and he will never be a problem again!  *crosses fingers*

I knew you were teasing us with all that f _ _ k hot sex,   then they go and grab Bella !!!!!!!!!   Evil twins/.....    please update soon !!!!!!

PS a+ on the lemons

oh fuck me.....did ang plan the power outage so she could get to bella? she would have been at the ball too, did she see them.....fuck....dont keep us h00rs hangin tooo long......pretty please with spartan on top....on my knees beggin ;)

Oh I knew that it was just tooooo good to be true. I had a bad bad feeling about that hotel room and where it came from and I guess it turned out that I was right. Poor Bella and lets just do away with that not-for-any good Ang. Can't wait for more.

You guys just got jokes all over the place, lmao. I swear I dont know who likes this chapter more me or my wabbit. My wabbit. Poor Edward and that elevator. I swear I felt those fireworks. Oh GOd she said  sasquatch to rose oh shit. Edward is gonna have an attack. Looks like the war is about to begin. Who took her?  Shall we play a game of whodunit. I want to place a bet cuz I gotta a good idea okay not my idea but this will have all of us screamin like banshee's. So good I wanna console Spartan until his kitten comes back ;)~

OMG you girlz are badddddddd time for a spanking for leaving me hanging grrrrrr Please with sugar on top POST SOON! Great chapter ladies can't wait for more you girlz rawk! :)

Esme needs to go DIE!! For real though, HOW on earth can Carlisle stand her. I would have divorced her ass a LOOOOOOng time ago..

Awsome story by the way.Great Job!!!!

i am really hooked on this story can't wait to see what happens with angela and ben and who is the mystery caller i can't wait for an update hope u can post soon

Ari, do you baby, ain't nothing like it. I just realized though I read it days ago I never acually reviewed. shame on me. I deserve a spanking, Spartannnnnn. HAWT, HAWT, HAWT. Though I did read like 3x and all 3x I combusted into heat. muah to all my girls.

Oh I certainly cannot believe how naive both of them are. Here she leaves a key for Edward with a total stranger. They need to be more careful. There could be a camera setup in their hotel room and probably there is one. Hmmmm

Author's Response:

*Taps chin* Oh cameras oh now that sounds kinda fun. What do ya think DLIR? Should we have a scandalous sex tape out there floatin around of them? Wow that sounds like louds of fun! But yes they are both naive. They just do things without thinkin. Which could cause lots and lots of trouble for them.

I hope that Esme and Angela get stuck on an island together!

what?  Mommy Esme? Go Edward!

Finally they are together!!!! And have plenty of time to enjoy it. He got to see her in that amazing dress, but he didn't enjoy it for long. Yes I know, the other choice was much better. ;)

It wasn't easy going back to a hotel, but it was something they needed to do. Conquer the fear the attack left behind. I think they both managed wonderfully. Still they need to be careful and not lower the guard. 

What will Bella say when Edward tells her all he found out in his trip home? It will be a long and interesting conversation....

Holy hell!  I've been totally engrossed in this story the past two days.  I can't tell you how many times I wanted to be the shit out of Angela.  You ladies have truly made her into quite the bitch.  Same thing with Esme.  Great job with that!

I've got a very bad feeling about Angela and Esme teaming up and making Edward's life even more hellish than it has been.  I also don't have good feelings about this masquerade ball.  If it's an event sponsored by that swingers club then they need to stay the hell away from it.  B&E don't need that shit anymore.  They have each other :)

Carlisle is awesome.  I want him to be happy and a part of Edward's life more.

LOL, I can't help but think of Buckchery's Crazy Bitch when I start reading a part of a chapter with Angela in it.  Although I think we need different lyrics for it.  This goes through my mind to the tune...

Hey, she’s a crazy bitch
and she fucks so bad
she’ll never get Ed’s dick.

Great job with this story ladies.  Can't wait to see what you've got in store next.

*deep sigh of contentment* That was INCREDIBLE :)  I really loved it so much!  Go Spartan and Kitten ;)  I cannot wait to see what else happens next :)

Wow!!! SOOOO HAAAWWWWWWTTTTTTT!!!! I can't wait to read what happens next! ;)

Author's Response:

We're so glad you think so BB! We're working on the next chapter now!

Um, ya, that was, whew! ;)

yummy

wonderful chapter, no complaints here.

I knew the party is some kind of set up isnt it?????  So the cunt is not his mother it is weird calling Esme that LOL.  To bad it took Carlisle this long to pull his man card out and use it.  Edward needs to get back to Bella NOW

Hi

That was awesome!

Ari - I should say you are back with a Wonderful Fierce Full Throttle!!  Mercy heaven's sakes alive, Kitten was HOT, and Spartan was Hotter, he was... Well look at this picture for this chapter, shit that tells it all. 

Guys this was a fantastic chapter and love seeing our Little couple get all kinds of kinky fuckery going on. 

Loved the tips on what not to say to a Police Officer,  No, YOU assume the position. then shall we not leave out DLIR: How long is this going to take? Your wife is expecting me.

So funny all -  Hey have a good one and glad your back ARI....

Till next time - Laters BB  Kathy xoxo  

You both are my hero's   You rock!!!!

Wow Ari need to take a colddddddd shower after that one...........LOL whooo keep up the writing girlz awesome thanks :)