Date: 14 Jan 2011 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 17
Ohhhhh shit! Okay, I'm not liking Bella very much right now. She had a hand in all this as well. I know she's hurting but she obviously has time to hang out with everyone but Edward, even before the whole video thing was out. She is blaming everything on him but he's not making her prove the video correct by acting like a slut. (I'm not saying girls can't go out and have fun but instead of dealing with this video and Edward she's hiding in plain sight and acting like a fool)
Now that I said all that. Great chapter, can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Yup, Bella's definitely going to have to face the repercussions to her actions in the next chapter. The good thing about Bella is she'll own up to her mistakes and learn from *most* of them a lot faster than Edward will.
Date: 14 Jan 2011 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 17
Trainwreck...
Relationship.... trouble trouble.
Edwards is immature and Bella is too.
Author's Response:
Absolutely correct. I decided I couldn't let Edward have all the fun and be the only one that has flaws and learns from his mistakes. Bella's got some growing to do in this story as well.
[Report This]Date: 14 Jan 2011 4:00 AM Title: Chapter 17
Another incredible chapter! Bravo!
I almost felt sorry for Edward - after all, no one should have to endure the ladies of The View. But he had it coming to him. Charlie throwing him against the wall was good too.
I really like the way you write both Edward and Isabella. They are both definitely flawed, but I still really care about them and what happens to them in the story. I'm glad you showed a less than perfect Isabella in this chapter.
The last scene with them arguing and racing away from the paparazi, while Isabella loses control of her emotions and then wrecks the car . . . Wow. I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next.
Author's Response:
I have to say, the one good thing about reading reviews is seeing what parts of my story I may need to alter. After seeing how many people are now upset with Bella, I think I'm going to have to tweak my initial ideas for the next chapter. I think Bella's going to need to willingly own up to her actions.
[Report This]Date: 14 Jan 2011 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 17
Edward has fucked up royally this time.
I can't believe that he fucked Tanya while he was dating Bella. If that is the way he shows his love, I would not want to have anything to do with him.
He has ruined Bella publically and most importantly emotionally. I do not think that she can come back from what Edward said. The sad thing was that what he said about his relationship with Bella was partly true. He really did feel that he was her arm candy and not the big bad rock star "Edward Cullen".
How many times did Edward fuck Tanya? Was it just a one night thing or was it an ongoing affair? When Bella finds out about the two of them, she will really spiral out of control more than she already has.
Thank you for the update, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review :) It was just a one-time, drunken mistake. (Not that it makes it excusable or that it will matter to Bella any less)
Date: 14 Jan 2011 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 17
sorry i don't get to review each chapter, for some reason this site and my phone won't let me review
Date: 14 Jan 2011 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 17
OOOOOHHHH!!!! you leave it there? how mean. I know even though this is Bella's fault, I really hope she can forgive him and him her. I can't wait to see if they're okay. thanks again bye p.s. thanks for the speedy update. that's awesome!
Author's Response:
I leave it there. Sorry haha.
Date: 14 Jan 2011 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 17
Well, that's not good. How old are they again? Bella is coming across as very immature during this part. I get that Edward is trying to make his wrong a right, but he did say some pretty hurtful things about her. Keep em coming!
Author's Response:
Bella's 24yrs old - but you're absolutely right, she was very immature in this chapter. When all is said and done, she'll have to take responsibility for her actions as well.
Date: 14 Jan 2011 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 17
well thats not good!
Author's Response:
lol - I was tempted to put in the author's notes at the end of the chapter - The End!! just to freak people out. But I didn't think people would take too kindly to that joke.
[Report This]Date: 12 Jan 2011 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 16
All I can say is please dont make us wait too long for more!!!!!!PLEASE!!!
Author's Response:
I've been writing the next chapter all day! I'm hoping to be done by tonight.
Date: 12 Jan 2011 5:37 AM Title: Chapter 16
OUCH!!! Poor Bella. That guy was a douche and was only instigating Edward. Edward can’t win for losing. Poor thing. Yes hating you all over again sounds fantastic. Lol I really hope it doesn’t go down from there. You know that was rock bottom right? HOPEFULLY? If not, wow we have a way to go. L thanks again and keep up the great work. Thanks again bye p.s and then Charlie! wow how is Bella going to go on from there no matter how right he was, he should still understand Bella is an adult & she's going to have sex. It wasn't her fault Edward aired their dirty laundry. poor Edward and Poor Bella. thanks again bye
Author's Response:
We're teetering on the edge of that rock bottom. Trust me, you'll know when it comes because Edward will fall hard. :)
Date: 11 Jan 2011 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 16
AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OMG this is getting better and better every chapter Im loving it <3 I heard the song that you put at the begging of the chapter and I was like " No way, that song was made for E" XD
I can't wait for next chapter.
Madahi*
Author's Response:
lol yeah the first time I heard that song on the radio I thought, "That's Edward's theme song!"
Date: 11 Jan 2011 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 16
Really enjoying this :D Can't wait for more :D
And wow Edward is being such a twat :P
Author's Response:
Thank you :) I'm hoping for a snow day tomorrow so I can get the next chapter up fast.
Date: 11 Jan 2011 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 16
yeah i sorta hate eward right now
Author's Response:
I understand...hopefully that will change before the end :)
Date: 11 Jan 2011 10:14 AM Title: Chapter 16
Oh Edward....and now Bella is starting to suffer the consequences.
Thanks for updating!
Author's Response:
I'm praying for a snow day tomorrow so I have a chance to write the next chapter - I feel I have to get it up quick before people keep writing how much they hate Edward on FF haha.
Date: 11 Jan 2011 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 16
Edward has a big ego, as he would have to have to be at his level. Okay now saying that he has many dark areas of his persona. He needs a certain amount of alone time with her and he is not getting it and that is killing him. MEN
Bella has this Jake deal always! Jake is nice etc. She has to work on her relationship too. Make time for him once or twice a week. And that she is not doing.
Charlie is a dad, that would be hard to field those kinds of calls. I don't blame him.
Author's Response:
Maybe I can have you be there therapist in later chapters ;) You're the first person the comment about Bella needing to step up in the relationship too. I don't think its as obvious yet but I definitely don't want this to be a "poor-innocent Bella story." Bella has her own role to play in all of this and we'll see some of the poor choices she'll be making in the next chapter.
Date: 11 Jan 2011 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 16
well i hope she dumps edwards ass so quick fast! cant wait to see what happens next
Author's Response:
The repercussions to his actions will hit both of them very soon.
Date: 11 Jan 2011 1:48 AM Title: Chapter 16
Oh Edward! You are such a fool! I hope she breaks up with him over this, and then finds out the truth about him and Tanya. I really don't want her and Jacob together either. I hope she shows how independent and strong she really is and moves on. Then maybe down the road after his life has fallen apart they get to know e/o again.
Author's Response:
Well the good thing is you do eventually want them to get back together :)
Date: 11 Jan 2011 1:47 AM Title: Chapter 16
:)
how the mighty have fallen....
how much more will she put up with???
Author's Response:
You asked the dreaded question I knew people were going to ask after this chapter. It will all come together very soon - I promise.
Date: 11 Jan 2011 1:33 AM Title: Chapter 16
Edward you stupid little fucker! AAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH (that was me screaming in frustration) I know I know you said it gets worse before it gets better but this shit is seriously killing me.
Author's Response:
*hiding my head* Sorry! I promise it'll all come together for a purpose in the end.
[Report This]Date: 11 Jan 2011 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 16
Wow! What a chapter! The way everything is spiraling out of control for Edward is so devastating. Yet, he clearly loves Isabella and his conscience is still alive and kicking him in the gut! All hope is NOT lost!
The interaction between Charlie and Bella was so poignant at the end. I can't blame Charlie for feeling like he's in over his head and walking away from his role as manager. I hope we still get to see him in future chapters.
Author's Response:
Thank you for seeing everything that I intended for this story to be - and for just being so awesome :) It's not going so well over on FF...not too many people are happy with me haha.
Date: 11 Jan 2011 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 16
I know from the summary and your warnings that their love is about to go down in a blaze of glory, but it is still hard to not want to shout at Edward to make it stop before it's too late...which as you pointed out this chapter, it was already too late when he promised no more secrets...it's like a car wreck I can't look away from...
On a sidenote, I can't believe after the Tanya fiasco, he still makes such poor decisions on drinking and coke snorting. And don't even get me started with that video...I am strapping myself in because I have a feeling it is going to take awhile to get these kiddos to a HEA. Thanks
Author's Response:
**Please fasten your seatbelt we're about to hit some turbulence**
Edward's full of poor decision until he actually has to face the consequences to them. Right now he's just been skirting around them. It'll bite him in the butt very soon.
Date: 07 Jan 2011 10:20 PM Title: Chapter 15
Damn that stupid Edward! Does he really think she's not gonna find out about Tanya. Shame shame shame. Can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens.
Date: 03 Jan 2011 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 15
Wow, great chapter...and great setup at the end of the chapter for the ultimate fallout we know is coming, unfortunately. I know why he didn't want to say anything, but she asked him point blank about if he was hiding anything else...that was his last chance to come clean, so it looks like it is about to get messy from here...question is, how long before the truth comes out.
Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read what happens next.
Author's Response:
I have the next four chapters completely outlined and, all I'll say, is it happens sometime within there. A few things have to take place to set up the fallout.
Date: 01 Jan 2011 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 15
love it
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 01 Jan 2011 10:32 AM Title: Chapter 15
OMG! I just came from my New Years Eve Party & was too excited to go to sleep so here I am at 2:30 in the morning reading the chapter and Oh My God I think Im going to go crazy waiting for that bomb to explode. Great Chapter
xoxo
Madahi
Author's Response:
Thanks! I thought there'd be some more time until my next chapter because I had come to a bit of a writer's block...but after blabbing on all my story details to my husband (who just sat there and pretended to listen), I finally had a breakthrough! I'll hopefully start writing more today once I get some coffee in me :) Happy New Year!
[Report This]Date: 31 Dec 2010 1:16 PM Title: Chapter 15
Great chapter!
Edward is just digging his "grave" deeper and deeper...and now even making false promises to her....I don't see how Bella will be able to forgive him for everything when (and not IF) she will find out about his lies.
Thanks for updating and Happy New Year!
Author's Response:
Happy New Year to you too! I'm not sure how long it's going to take me to write the next chapter. I've come to my first writer's dilemna. Bella's character has taken a life of her own - she's one strong, independent, smart cookie (which I love!). But it's affecting how she'd, naturally, react to some upcoming parts in the plot that I originally had in mind. I think I have to rework some ideas.
[Report This]Date: 31 Dec 2010 3:58 AM Title: Chapter 15
Ooh Edward. When will you learn? I almost feel bad for him....almost. I'm hoping we learn that Tanya just undressed him and used that to pretend they had sex.
Loving ur music picks! Right now, besides "airplanes" I have "misery" by maroon 5 in my head (incase u can use that song anytime!)
Can't wait for next chapter!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the song rec! You've inspired me to start having people put their own song recommendations in reviews - or on my Twitter page :)
Date: 30 Dec 2010 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 15
Looking over the summary, and how Edward's life is ruined, it makes me wonder....does Tanya wind up pregnant? That would definitely ruin his life. Still not sure how her career is ruined, but I guess we'll see.
Oh Edward...what are we going to do with you? Thinking no one will ever find out. Such a fool
Author's Response:
Hmm..interesting theories. We shall find out soon ;)
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 15
As I said before, I love to hate Renee!
The conversation between Bella and Jacob was very good and whatever you're setting up between these two, you're doing a great job building some type of relationship between them.
The ending conversation between Edward and Bella was also excellent. I liked his admission to "not being as good a person" as Bella and her gracious forgiveness ("it will take more than that to break us up"). Edward is really digging a deep hole for himself!
Your story is really well written with excellent pacing and consistent, interesting characterizations. I'm looking forward to future chapters.
One last typo/spelling comment: In several chapters (including this one) you use the word, "woah" It is actually spelled "Whoa" I don't know why I see this mistake so often, but I do.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for all of the constructive feedback! I swear opening up all those emails was like opening up another present leftover from Christmas morning. It's like you completely knew my thought process for writing each chapter. You picked up on all the little subtle innuendos between the main and supporting characters and the relationships built between them. It was so great to read your comments and think, "Yes! That's exactly what I intended!"
Thanks for making me aware of some of the errors I need to fix too. I'll go back and edit that stuff. I know you're super busy being a beta for other stories; but damn I wish you could be my beta. I can already tell you'd make me a better writer. At least, continue to give me such thoughtful critiques as the story progresses (and don't hold back!) I definitely respect your opinion.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 14
Edward's plan looks like a temporary fix that will surely blow up in his face eventually. I hope he didn't leave fingerprints on that bag!
I'm glad she'll be on tour with him; this should make for some exciting chapters ahead.
Again, good use of flashbacks to flesh out details in the story.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 13
The emotions and remorse and guilt are really well-written in this chapter. Emmett's attempt at helping was well intentioned, but looks like poor advice to me! I can see it back firing already.
I like that Edward is beginning to worry that he may actually BE the asshole he only thought he was pretending to be.
Good cliffy at the end.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 12
You did a fantastic job building up to this moment in the story. It's a direction that the story had to take and even if readers hate to see it play out like this, it fits perfectly with the way you've written the characters.
The Edward you've written is spoiled and selfish and would definitely react to Bella missing his party with an adult version of a temper tantrum!
Great job!
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 11
This was such a pivotal chapter in some respects. I mean, Edward is really being selfish and poor Bella is wanting to please him so much. She still seems a bit insecure in the relationship.
Again, it takes the others, Rose and Alice in particular, to get things under control and back on track. I liked that in this chapter.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 10
I love your Edward with all his imperfections and insecurities. I'm glad that you're not afraid to write him as someone that is not always lovable or even likable. But, just as important, he isn't too unlikable; I still care about the character.
I think Edward DID have a good point when he told Bella they were now a team and had to consider each other in their actions. He probably didn't tell her in the best way, but he was right.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 9
The interviews and article were all really well-done. I like your Jacob and although I never mind when he's written as the bad guy, I'm interested to see where he will fit into this story.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 8
I imagine it must be difficult to write a business meeting and keep it interesting, but you did a great job. The pacing for the meeting was well-done.
I loved the girlfriend time with Bella, Alice, and Rose. Tanya's intrusion and the subsequent dialog was also great.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:32 PM Title: Chapter 7
I like your Rosalie and her interactions with Bella. It's a nice contrast to the relationship that is beginning between Bella and Alice.
Very nice lemon at the end. I'm not sure "dismembered" works for tearing off a bra, since it means to cut, tear, or pull off limbs or to divide into pieces, but that's just a minor note.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 6
Another great EPOV chapter. I liked the tension between Rose and Bella. I'm glad Bella didn't back down, but she didn't go too far either. It definitely feels like they can build a friendship in the future.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 5
I love to hate Renee as much as I love to love Charlie!
The conversation between Edward and Bella was really well done and felt 'right' for a couple that had been together for a year.
It will be interesting to see what part Jacob plays in your story.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 4
Great job with Edward's POV! You also did a great job introducing the other characters (Em, Rose, Jasper, Alice).
Another informative and well-done flashback. Edward's worries and insecurities are written in a way that makes him interesting but not annoying.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 3
I always enjoy a well-written Charlie!
An excellent use of flashback in order to set the stage (no pun intended) for your story without spending too much time describing previous events.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 2
I like that you're starting your story with them already in a relationship. This is different from so many stories, which focus on them meeting and falling in love. I think your use of flashbacks to tell their back story works well, but in this chapter I was initially confused by the flashback because it was them discussing something that happened even earlier (almost a flashback in a flashback). However, my confusion didn't last so I still think this is a "five-cup" chapter!
I think Bella is very realistic to be hesitant to come out about her relationship with Edward.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 6:04 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great start! I look forward to seeing where you take this.
One small typo: You mention "alluding" the paparazi, I believe you mean 'eluding' (to elude is to avoid or escape from)
Author's Response:
Damn you're good ;) My beta on Twilighted didn't even catch that - going back and changing it right now. Thanks!
Date: 30 Dec 2010 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 15
OUCH! and then he lied to her again! that is soo not good. Bella was a little harsh earlier with the rudeness to both Jake and edward but now that I think about it, I totally get why. Edward is lying and keeping secrets. I can't wait till all the drama is over and they are E/B again. poor Bella. :( keep up the great work though. thanks again :D
Author's Response:
Thank you! I can't wait til the drama is over either (wait- who am I kidding, then the story would be over and what would I do without my little characters in my life?? lol) But it's so much easier to write without their torment and angst eating at me haha
Date: 30 Dec 2010 4:26 PM Title: Chapter 15
well hes just digging him self into a bigger hole! cant wait to see what happens next
Author's Response:
I'll hopefully get the next chapter up sometime soon. That one's probably going to be a bit harder to write. It's always harder for me when I have to get into their angsty personas.
Date: 30 Dec 2010 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 15
here was his chance and i'm not sure he will get another
Author's Response:
My poor, stupid, Edward. I sometimes feel bad for writing him like that haha
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2010 3:38 PM Title: Chapter 15
Gah! I love him...I hate him...no, wait I love him - no I definitely hate him! Why are you doing this to me Edward???
Author's Response:
I love/hate him too :)
Date: 30 Dec 2010 2:55 PM Title: Chapter 15
This just keeps getting better and better E is just digging a bigger hole for himself everyday . Cannot waite to see hoe this plays out....Is this a HEA????? I hope so Im a sucker for HEAS
Author's Response:
Thanks! I was going to respond to you in a message about the HEA, so I didn't ruin it for anyone. But I'll just tell you that I'm a sucker for HEAs too ;)
Date: 30 Dec 2010 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 15
Well I keep waiting to hear he really did f..k Tanya in his drugged stupor. I am hoping not! Bella is not jaded like he is. She will be his voice of reason. He will be her strength when she needs that. She has to remember he is not perfect.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I think I may have to go back and rework the chapter where Bella came to visit him after his birthday party. I thought I had made it clear when he started getting memories from the previous night that he definitely cheated - but you're not the only one that's still holding out hope that it was a misunderstanding. He definitely cheated...and he's definitely getting caught :(
Date: 30 Dec 2010 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 15
And i'm beyond giddy when i see that you have updated! Love this fic and can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
Look at that - it's 7am and I'm reading this with a big-ass grin ;) Thanks! (Now I should probably try and go back to sleep haha)
[Report This]Date: 29 Dec 2010 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 14
Omg. I'm HOOKED. Of course I found your story while I was playing on my phone trying to fall asleep....when I finally went to sleep after reading it, I had "airplanes" stuck in my head. Lol.
Love your story, CAN'T wait for an update.... Talk about Edward and his D-R-A-M-A!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! Ironically, I just finished the next chapter and now I can't go to sleep b/c I have Airplanes stuck in my head. (That song is gonna be the death of me haha)
Date: 29 Dec 2010 3:27 AM Title: Chapter 14
Just found your story and I love it so far, even if I have a feeling we will be witnessing a train wreck soon with all the lies and cover up...good job for making a very flawed Edward that you somehow still root for...I like drama, but I am a sucker that they end up together so I will definitely keep reading, don't let us down :)
Author's Response:
Aw thank you! I actually wans't even going to write Edward's POV when I first started the story - and then I quickly realized that I needed to or else nobody would want him to have any sort of redemption. So there has to be a reason I want him to still be likable, right? ;)
Date: 28 Dec 2010 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 14
OMG I love this story !!! You are doing a awesome job love it!!! I am waiting to see how this is all going to back fire on Edward..... Is Tanya going to end up preganat? That would be kind of hard for him to say no was not me... but I hope that does not happen though. THAT WOULD SUCK POOR BELLA!!!! I cannot wait for more!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 13
WOW all I can say IS WOW I love it!!! very well written and great ideas!!! I love it but i also would love to slap cheatward hard!!! smiles
Author's Response:
Yay, thank you!! If it helps I can have Bella, eventually, slap him for you? ;)
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2010 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 14
I'm torn between wanting them to be happy on tour together and getting some more lemony-goodness or having Bella find out! She needs to find out soon...it's only going to tear her apart. But maybe you can throw in one more lemon?
Author's Response:
Haha I've actually just been debating that as I'm writing the new chapter! I want another happy, sexy ExB moment - but I'm not sure if anyone can look at it the same; knowing what Edward's done.
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2010 10:00 AM Title: Chapter 14
Awesome chapter..and I really mean it!
Edward is starting to ruin everything, like Emmet said: he's getting tangled in his web of lies. I just know that Bella will be devastated when everything comes out. Not just about him manipulating things to get her on the show but also about him lying and cheating with Tanya.
I actually think that she might have forgiven him for sexually cheating if he had explained all his insecurities, but now I just see the rollercoaster going straight down.
Thanks for updating and Happy New Year!
Author's Response:
Thank you - Happy New Year to you too! I'm adding Jacob into the mix in the next chapter; which is only going to ignite her suspicions more. Edward's not through with making mistakes and it's going to start to cause a rift between them even before she is completely torn apart. I hope to have the next chapter up in a few days :)
Date: 28 Dec 2010 6:44 AM Title: Chapter 14
and this is me BEGGING PLEASE don't hurt Bella! :( I have a huge feeling that when Bella does find out about Edward cheating or "cheating" its going to hurt her bad. I'll be glad when their drama is over and they're back to being the loveable adorable couple we know and love. but to get to the good we have to go to the bad so keep up the great work. thanks again bye :D
Author's Response:
Thank you! I actually just found a great song that has inspired me for when Bella does find out and gets hurt. It's called "Breathe Again" by Sara Bareilles. I think I'm going to keep it on repeat when I eventually write that chapter.
Date: 28 Dec 2010 5:37 AM Title: Chapter 14
great chapter! can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm gonna start writing the next chapter today - hope to have it up real soon!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 14
ohh man...this has "catastrophe" written all over it! the truth always comes out somehow and by trying to use more lies to cover up the truth, the damage is going to get even bigger than before!
poor Bella! she is going to get slammed in the fallout!
Author's Response:
It's not looking so good for these two...Bella's actually not going to find out for a few more chapters. But I can guarantee you that Edward's not done ruining things.
Date: 28 Dec 2010 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 14
In luv your story Im always looking 4 updates..Im clueless why u dont have mire reviews because this story def. deserves them so keep up the good work...ps is this a HEA????????
Date: 28 Dec 2010 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh Edward....you silly boy. Do you really think you got away with it? We have yet to hear from Jacob; and Bella's a pretty bright girl, already questioning the drugs. I can't wait to read how far Edward will go before the truth comes out. I can honestly say, I don't see a HEA in this. Maybe 5 yrs. down the road, but I couldn't forgive him for all he's done.
Author's Response:
I love your observations! Jacob was actually going to be my next chapter :) I won't tell you if you're right or not with the HEA b/c I don't think you were asking for the spoiler - but I will say you make a valid point about making it hard to forgive him. If you do want to know if its a HEA just let me know :)
Thanks for the review!
Date: 28 Dec 2010 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 14
AHHH!!
I wanna know what happens. The last sentence in this chapter is telling me that the bomb is about to explode. I read your A/N at the beginning of the story and I really want to know if the story has a HEA. I'll still keep reading cause I'm hooked but your A/N got me curious.
xoxo
M*
Date: 28 Dec 2010 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 14
:)
love your story and i hope you update soon...
this is going to tear her apart...
Date: 28 Dec 2010 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 13
:)
this is just going to make it worse when she finds out.....
Author's Response:
He's actually going to do a lot more stuff to make it worse when she finds out haha. That's the next part I'm trying to figure out right now. I definitely had a few key story points in the plot that I wanted to add before she finds out...but I don't want to irritate readers and make them feel like I'm dragging it out. But Edward hasn't hit the bottom of his downward spiral yet.
Thanks for the review :)
Date: 21 Dec 2010 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 13
Please keep updating awesome story thanks
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm hoping to get another update in before Christmas!
Date: 20 Dec 2010 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 13
uh oh Bitch Tanya is GOING DOWN!! lol I can't wait to find out if he did or didn't sleep with her. which from what we're seeing or being "teased" is tha the wasn't awake if she did sleep with him. I really hope that's the case. :D keep up the great work. thanks again bye
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I tried to be sporadic and splotchy with his memories of Tanya because of the affects from the drugs. But I don't want to tease you or give you false hope as the rest of the story continues. Edward cheated on Bella. Bad, bad, Edward.
Date: 20 Dec 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 13
Gah! Edward is breaking MY heart - I can't imagine what's going to happen with Bella finds out. Ugh - I don't want to hate him but it's so hard not to right now! Keep up the great work! I'll be waiting for that next chapter!
Date: 19 Dec 2010 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 13
Oh dear...this was a hard chapter to read. He is just getting himself into more trouble...
Thanks for updating!
Date: 19 Dec 2010 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 13
i hope he is smart about it ! keep the chapters comming! and i know hes just going ot break her heart!
Date: 16 Dec 2010 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 12
What's even worse, is that Jacob was there documenting him that night! What an ass, feeling sorry for himself, stroking his ego. All because his girlfriend was sick! Ass, he doesn't deserve her, and he just ruined everything. I feel sick thinking about how this will hurt Bella. Manwhore, drug addict, asshole
Author's Response:
Such strong feelings and words for my poor Edward ;) hahaha
[Report This]Date: 15 Dec 2010 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 12
I knew it was coming but it still hurt to read :( You better write more soon because that ending felt like a big punch to the gut! Love your story!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 15 Dec 2010 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 12
Edward was a complete ass/idiot, but I think Aro, Garrett, and Tanya set him up tp get him single and away from Bella. Make them both single and bankable seperately. I also bet that there will be utube videos and TMZ shots of his bad boy behavior to document his fall from grace. Why do boys think with the peens and egos? IDIOTS...that's why.
Author's Response:
Very interesting theory.... :)
Thanks for sharing your thoughts! Keep them coming - it helps me think of more upcoming details!
Date: 14 Dec 2010 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 12
love it
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2010 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 12
great story, can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 11
Being sick sucks...being sick when you were planning a sexy weekend with your boyfriend? Yeah that sucks even more.
I can still understand Edwards frustration, but he was still kind of an ass in this chapter....both of them are stressed and it's starting to show
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 10
Oh Edward, communication is the key, but I can understand his frustration
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 9
I'm glad that we are meeting Jacob again...
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 8
So this chapter starts the drama...well the real drama
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 7
I like that your Alice isn't as anoying as some other Alices are.
Nice and fun ending.
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 6
Lol, and like Renee, Tanya is perfect as the bad guy...well girl, ahm woman...you know what I mean ;-)
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 5
Gosh, I don't envy Bella having Renee as a mom
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 4
Interesting first look at Edwards hidden problems/insecurities
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 3
Lol, there are hardly any stories out there where Renee is a good mom.
I remember that "mouth of truth" moment from the movie, but I didn't know that it was an actual prank ;-)
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 2
Well written chapter. Edwards surprise visit was really sweet
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great first chapter! I liked "your" Jacob
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:43 PM Title: Chapter 12
bloody heck, what an ending!
I just read all 12 chapters, and now I'm gonna go back and review each and every one of them, because your story definitely deserves more than just 10 reviews.
Yes, some of the plot is from time to time a little predictable, but I still really enjoyed it. So thanks for sharing this story with us, and I'm looking foward to the drama (well bigger drama than before) to begin.
Author's Response:
Thank you for taking the time to review all my chapters - it really means a lot! I really want people to tell me what's working and isn't. This is my first story I've written. I'm trying to balance between correctly foreshadowing the drama, without making it too predictable.
I have to say, all of your comments for each chapter were spot-on with everything I was trying to convey. Edward is definitely an asshole...but he has a lot of layers and issues that are causing him to be that way. I'm walking a fine line of also trying to make him not be so deplorable that you don't want him to find redemption. That's gonna be hard since it's all about to get worse.
My goal isn't necessarily for the reader to sympathize with him (even though I feel bad for him haha)...but I hope as the story goes they'll see the self-destructive path that he's on and how it's a much bigger issue than his relationship with Bella.
Date: 14 Dec 2010 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 12
god hes such an idiot! keep the chapters comming
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just found story I LUV it. E is such a ass.. But cant say I didnt c it coming. Cannot waite 4 more . Oh and this is a HEA right????????
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! I would hate to give away the ending by saying if this was a HEA...but I can say it's going to get a lot worse before it gets better. I already know exactly how I'm going to end the final chapter - so there is a clear end in mind. Don't worry I think you'll be satisfied ;)
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 12
YES very much so but I do believe Hate is too light of a word. :( no I'm kidding but yeah him cheating was VERY wrong. This is going to have a HEA though right? I mean comeon! they're Edward and Bella. they can't be gone for good. I really think I'm more upset that he cheated and not that he did coke. I wish he would have left it there but then TANYA above anyone? I think I too might barf. lol I really hope it was a misunderstanding and she just staged it to LOOK like he cheated. that would be great. keep up the great work and please update again real soon. thanks again bye
Author's Response:
Yeah...I feel bad for making him such an asshole - but I still feel bad for him haha.
I'd hate to spoil the ending by saying if it's a HEA but I definitely know exactly how I'm going to end it and I'm very satisfied with how the story will play out. But you are right...it's Edward and Bella! I will just say this...it's going to get a lot worse before it gets better.
Thanks for the review!
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 12
for some reason i can't review when i read on my phone
:)
poor edward, but you knew this was going to happen....
update soon
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! Even though he's my character, I feel a little bad for Edward too haha.
Date: 14 Dec 2010 9:18 AM Title: Chapter 12
Wow, I knew it was coming and boy was it a doozie! Yikes! I actually got teary eyed thinking about how this is going to kill Bella. Edward Cullen fucked up royally.
I do want to see what's coming, but also want to pull the covers over my head and pretend nothing happened. Will be anxiously awaiting the next update!
peach
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! It means a lot since I'm not getting as much feedback as I had hoped for the story.
I would suggest continue reading the story with the covers pulled up to your neck - it's gonna get a hell of a lot worse before it gets better...and I'm not even at the halfway point of this story yet ;)
Date: 30 Nov 2010 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 11
well.....I just got caught up with this story and let me just say: I LOVE IT!!! really super amazing. no really. I was actually looking for stories where Edward is famous and this got me both of them. I love it. I can't wait to find out what Edward does to mess up Bella's career bc that has to be the drama of the story. :D but for now, I feel so bad for Bella for being sick and for Edward getting sick and not getting any. lol keep up the great work and I can't wait for more. thanks again bye
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I will hopefully have the next chapter up by the end of the week - and that will be when the shit hits the fan hehe
Date: 28 Nov 2010 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 3
aww how sweet was that?
Date: 28 Nov 2010 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 11
just found this story and had to read it all at once - love it! can't wait to see where you go with it
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Date: 28 Nov 2010 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 2
awww i love them! hmmm rose the bitch? thats a shocker...lol!
Date: 28 Nov 2010 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
wow i like cause its different! im all about an edward bella love story that has them both successful!
Author's Response:
Thank you!