Date: 29 Dec 2010 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 7 Home and Heartstrings
i have a feeling that shes going to end up staying and keeping the baby! keep the chatpers comming
Author's Response:
:) we will see, ty for the review
[Report This]Date: 25 Dec 2010 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Your hard work paid off. Excellent chapter!
Author's Response:
ty for reading working on chapter 7 now.. hope to have it up soon
[Report This]Date: 24 Dec 2010 10:56 PM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
This story is different then what I have read. It deals with real life situations. Great job!
Date: 20 Dec 2010 4:34 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
It is good that she finally told Charlie what happened because James needs to be punnished for what he did to Bella. It is also good that she has all of this support around her and I wonder if Renee would think differently if she knew that this wasn't Bella's fault.
Date: 19 Dec 2010 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
oh shit! wow wonder what he's going to do about that?she's his patient and still 17 update soon
Date: 18 Dec 2010 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Well I am glad that Charlie knows the truth now. I hope Jacob doesn't end up in a lot of trouble over this. I wonder how Edward is going to take Bella kissing him. Obviously he has feeling for her.
Author's Response:
i hope to clear that up in chap 7... ty for the review
Date: 18 Dec 2010 3:26 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
I am glad that Edward is trying to get her to talk. I love the t shirts that Alice makes and I love that Jacob kicked James ass.
Author's Response:
im glad u like them... it seems so alice. i want to cut some of the seriousness to make u laugh also
Date: 18 Dec 2010 3:14 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Edward seems very nice and friendly. Rosalie is very observant but one that is raped usually is.
Author's Response:
you are so right.. they are always hyperaware of surrounding and the people they associate with
Date: 18 Dec 2010 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Well Mani I think you are doing a wonderful job so far on this story and I would like to suggest that you make the chapters longer. They seem very short for what I normally read. And I have read a lot of stories. I have at least 200 on my favorites both here on TWCS and also over on FanFiction.net so with that said, I wish you luch with the rest of this story and hopefully you can make the chapters a little longer.
Author's Response:
i am progressing into longer chapters and getting both bpov and epov's in.. ty for the review
Date: 17 Dec 2010 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
wow so much in this chapter. i cried i laughed, and i loved seeing Edward and Bella connect and then kiss. adding to my fav's
Author's Response:
ty ty ty.... means alot to me. i want the reader to feel what they feel , to escape RL a bit and see a story threw their eyes
Date: 17 Dec 2010 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Thank you for Rosalie being Bella's cofidant, I am relaly starting to enjoy your story !!!
Author's Response:
i wanted rose to be the friend and the one she could turn too.. to let her know she isnt alone..ty for the review
[Report This]Date: 17 Dec 2010 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
Could u tell me what IMS is?
Author's Response:
i did it as a line break in the begining.. IMS isabella marie swan
Date: 16 Dec 2010 11:28 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Woooo bastard got beat and kissyface wit Edward yum
Author's Response:
ty for ur review...
Date: 16 Dec 2010 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Bella's trying to run again.
Author's Response:
yes, she did... its a natural respose to do so when one precieves danger.. ty for your review...
Date: 16 Dec 2010 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
I'm happy that she finally told the right people what happened that night. James is an ass and I hope Jake doesn't have to pay for taking up for a friend. James is an asshole so I think that he's not going to sign his rights away just to be a dick. He'll fight for custody or something like that. Anything to get a rise out of Bella. I think it's just fine if she wants to keep the plan and give up the baby but I just want to know is that really what she wants or is she doing what her parents want?
Author's Response:
very good questions.. its shows that your a passionate reader. i will keep this review in mind for later chapters.. it helps to know what a reader is thinking and what they are curious about
Date: 16 Dec 2010 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
:)
Date: 16 Dec 2010 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
I like that fact that she's not tripping all over Edward and his looks. Thanks for making her real not a love sick teenager
Author's Response:
This bella has way to many problems to all of a sudden fall all overt the handome doc.. i dont think its realistic for my bellas to be like that. I want a strong woman who has goals and no matter what life gives her she will always seek success in the long run
Date: 16 Dec 2010 1:08 PM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
That was an an awesome chapter. You did very good! Can't wait for Edward's point of view!
Author's Response:
Thank you so very much.. i feel better about this chapter:)
[Report This]Date: 16 Dec 2010 7:55 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
awesome chapter - she is so brave!
Author's Response:
yes, she was. i am so proud of my bella:)
Date: 16 Dec 2010 7:22 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Absolutely Fantastic chapter!
I hope that James dies!!
Author's Response:
This means alot coming from you... i do wish James death also,, see you next chapter:)
Date: 16 Dec 2010 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Edward had to have an idea what happened to Bella because she almost slipped and told him. I hope james live just so Jake will not be charged with murder but he needs to burn in hell. What will Edward think about the kiss because she is not 18 yet????
Author's Response:
you always give me lots of points to consider since this will be his first Epov. I hope to answer all these questions next chapter
Date: 16 Dec 2010 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
well im glad that her visit with charlie went well cant wait to see what happens with bella and edward! keep the chapters comming
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review
Date: 16 Dec 2010 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Great Chapter.....
Author's Response:
ty ur review means alot
Date: 16 Dec 2010 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
Im glad that Bella told her story. how old is Edward in this story? Just wondering if the age thing is going to be a problem
Author's Response:
in the 2nd chapter esme mentions that edward was born in 1985 so that will make him. 24. The age thing wont be a secondary plot but will be mentioned
[Report This]Date: 16 Dec 2010 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
i'm so glad Charlie know the truth and he didn't chastise her for it. wonder how Edward will react to the kiss?
Author's Response:
next Chapter will be in EPov maybe as an outake type chapter. Bella needed one good parent in this story and Charlie is it
[Report This]Date: 16 Dec 2010 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
well that went alot better than i thought. my goodness what jacob did to james. man he truly cares for bella to stick up for her honor. i am sorry he is in jail but love that he defended her. james had no right in what he did. but i am not sure he knows that. i wonder if his parents will stick up for his ass or make him face the consequenses. i liked to think if i was in their shoes i would hold my son accountable. if you don't then they will keep doing things they shouldn't. they need to know their is consequences. i guess jacob had a feeling he would be held accountable so he became judge and jury but now poor jacob is the one that needs representation. rape is a hard thing to prosecute. i feel for all that are involved. last but not least bella kissed edward.
Author's Response:
I wanted Bella to have one decent parent and it was odvious that Renee wasnt going to be. his parents wil come later... of course i love jake in this story:) ty for ur review
Date: 16 Dec 2010 1:30 AM Title: Chapter 6 Flight or Fight
aww i would love to give a high five to jacob for beating the living days lights out of james :D
Author's Response:
i agree.. Jake is pretty awesome
Date: 15 Dec 2010 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
Well I guess that the cat is out of the bag and now Bella has to talk to Charlie about it this should be fun...
Author's Response:
im hoping it will be a good chap to read
[Report This]Date: 15 Dec 2010 7:09 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
wow now because the phone was off and she missed all the messages and off course didn't get jake's daddy is coming for a visit. it seems the truth is going to come out and may hurt alot of people. i am curious if james and his parents will want the baby. i wonder what mike wants. i wonder if it is to apoligize for his asshole brother. i am glad through all of this bella has rose to talk to. i love that rose confronted her. well i guess we will see off course if any of them decide to keep their babies or if they find great homes for them we all hope. looking forward to seeing where this story goes.
Author's Response:
lmao, love the way you think.. gosh i have some one the ball reviewers
Date: 15 Dec 2010 12:39 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
Jake is pretty awesome for putting James in the hospital.
Looking forward to see what happens when Charlie gets there.
Author's Response:
i agree
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:42 PM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
:)
Date: 14 Dec 2010 2:38 PM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
go jake. arsehole deserves the hospital
Date: 14 Dec 2010 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
well for her sake i hope that she tells her dad the truth! keep the chapters comming
Date: 14 Dec 2010 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
I am so happy Jake did what he did but to bad he is in jail. I am also glad this is going to get things in the open. The conection between Edward and Bella is there.
Date: 14 Dec 2010 5:30 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
Great Chapter....
Date: 14 Dec 2010 4:27 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
I am glad that the truth will finally come out. Way to go Jake!!!
[Report This]Date: 14 Dec 2010 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 5 Cause and Effect
uh oh, looks like the whole story is about to come out.....I hope Jake put him in the hospital for good
Date: 12 Dec 2010 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
It is good that Rose opened up to Bella! It shows that she isn't alone in all of this.
Date: 12 Dec 2010 6:39 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
I am glad that Bella shared as much as she did with them because I didn't think that she would share that much. It is really sad that Rosealie is so sad and upset.
Date: 12 Dec 2010 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
They seem to have a good thing there. I am kinna glad that her parents sent her there because I think that it is better for her there than at home because her mother isn't talking to her and wants nothing to do with her.
Date: 12 Dec 2010 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
That is terrible. And now she is going to lose everything that she worked for and that is the tragic thing here because not only is she suffering in silence but now her parents are mad at her and she won't tell them what happened.
Date: 10 Dec 2010 12:36 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
If Jake was really a friend and cared about what was best for her he would have told someone. James is still walking around and can do that to any other girl and it's not right. People like Bella need to be protected and as a friend he should have told her father. Also you said that her and Esme were driving to Port Angeles, I don't think they have that in AZ. I'm sure it was a typo, I just wanted to bring it to your attention just in case you want to go back and change it. Can't wait to see what happens next
Author's Response:
omg.. thanx for catching that whew... that will teach me to write at 3 am... i agree with you abt jacob we will get some head way with that next chapter
Date: 09 Dec 2010 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Glad Rose is talking to her.
Author's Response:
me to, im loving rose
Date: 09 Dec 2010 5:21 PM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
:)
Author's Response:
ty
Date: 09 Dec 2010 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Can't wait for the next chapter!!!! Keep them coming. I love this story!
Author's Response:
next chapter is 12/12.... ty so much
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2010 12:42 PM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Yippie! Edward´s home. I can´t wait until he gets to know Bella better. I´m glad that Rose decided to talk to Bella, at least now she has someone she can talk to if she needs it. Hmm... Charlie´s coming, Should I be nervous? Lol! Great chapter!
Krazi
xoxo
Author's Response:
next chpter will be alot more edward nervous abt charlie... hmm?
Date: 09 Dec 2010 7:26 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Great Chapter.....
Author's Response:
ty!!!!!!!
Date: 09 Dec 2010 6:33 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Good for Rose!!
Author's Response:
i agree, im loving rose
Date: 09 Dec 2010 6:18 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
well i hope when charlie comes to visit she tells him what happened! keep the chatpers comming
Author's Response:
see you 12/12... ty
Date: 09 Dec 2010 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
THROUGH not threw. Anyways.. i like where this story is going
Author's Response:
THANKYOU for catching that mistake... and the review
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2010 4:30 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
so rosalie knows - I wonder if she will tell
Author's Response:
eeek, i wanna spill so bad ... next chapter 12/12
Date: 09 Dec 2010 4:30 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Its nice that Bella doesn't feel alone, the talk with Rosalie was great.
Looking forward to Charlie's visit and more Edward.
Author's Response:
bella needed a connestion, someone eho can relate.. im glad it was rose
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2010 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
great chapter
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2010 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
hello mama!
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2010 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
wow - this is a great first chapter!
Date: 09 Dec 2010 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
aww poor bella and rose :(
Author's Response:
i agree. it was difficult to write. id never want to put them in such harms way, but for the story and thier connection they i had to
Date: 09 Dec 2010 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Welcome home Edward. Rose suprises people I am glad she was able to pick up on what had happened to Bella. I cant wait for next update.
Author's Response:
ty for ur review as always... next update is 12/12.. rose is unpredictable for sure
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2010 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 4 Mothers Embrace
Great story!, so glad i took the rec! can't wait for the next chapter
Author's Response:
ty for the review... next chapter should be up on 12/12
Date: 07 Dec 2010 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
hmmm Wonder when she'll admit to the rape..... Ah well
Rose is precious as always.....NOT
Author's Response:
rose is roughh around the edges.....it will come. in the next couple of chapters. i wont drag it out
Date: 07 Dec 2010 12:47 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
awesome chapter
I love your story alot. please contune
Author's Response:
i will.. next chapter 12/8
Date: 06 Dec 2010 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
:)
Author's Response:
ty, so much
Date: 06 Dec 2010 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Great Chapter....
Date: 06 Dec 2010 4:46 PM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
I really like this story so far. I understand how Bella feels. Though I didn't get pregnant my first time, it was not my choice. Keep going.
Author's Response:
i get alot of why wont bella tell.. as i survivior myself, its not always that easy, many of us choose to keep quiet. we have that if i dont say anything it didnt really happen. we block it out. thankyou for ur review it mean alot to me, that someone understands Her reasoning see you on 12/8
Date: 06 Dec 2010 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Great story, looking forward to more. :)
Author's Response:
thankyou for your review.. next chapter 12/8
Date: 06 Dec 2010 8:41 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
You shouldnt be to astonished you have a wonderful story going I am excited when I see you have updated and the story has just begun. Cant wait for more. When is she going to tell them she was raped??? I cant wait for Edward to show up How old is he???
Author's Response:
edward in this story will be 25 and you will see him next chapter... ty for the review.. they make me stay in the mood to write.. see u on 12/8
Date: 06 Dec 2010 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Can´t wait for the special dinner and to learn more about Edward.Great chapter!
Krazi
xoxo
Author's Response:
thankyou for the review... see you on 12 /8
Date: 06 Dec 2010 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Oh man....I hope you give 'every dog his day'..........cannot wait for that, and Edward, of course.
I'm not 'team jacob' but I'm glad you didn't villainize him.
Author's Response:
Jake's is the ultimate friend... since ur one of my fave authors, i will say Its jakes thinking about whats in bella's best intrest, that will start the chain reaction to truth and discovery... ty for the review.. im in fangirl mode
[Report This]Date: 06 Dec 2010 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
These stories drive me nuts. She's been through hell and back and now her parents are kicking her out and not speaking to her!! It drives me nuts when she won't tell them...............this is actually a compliment to you, if your writing wasn't great, i wouldn't be so passionate about it.
I hope she confides in them eventually, and they feel like the asses they are being. She can't let James get away with it either!!
I haven't read twcs or ff in forever........good job pulling me back in. GREAT start.
Author's Response:
this review is extra special to me cause i am a huge fan of explosive encounters... i read over at FF... i am so honored you like it... next chap 12/8
[Report This]Date: 06 Dec 2010 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Love it!! Can't wait for Edward to enter the picture/for Bella's secret to come out :) Update!! :) :)
Author's Response:
you wont have to wait for edward long... see u on 12/8 ty so much
[Report This]Date: 06 Dec 2010 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Keep it coming I'll love to keep reading
Author's Response:
next chapter is coming on wed... and we get to meet edward
Date: 06 Dec 2010 1:41 AM Title: Chapter 3 Common Thread
Thanks for the story. I am very glad that you are enjoying yourself here.. We are a pretty cool group of readers..ha ha ha..
Can't wait for next chapter.
Author's Response:
thankyou for the review... its means alot to me... see you on wed
Date: 03 Dec 2010 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
Good so far. Bella should have told her parents she was raped, but I understand her wanting it kept secret. I can't believe Renee was so mean!
Author's Response:
I agree Renee was awlful in her response to bella and the situation... in a perfect word all mothers would be supportive and loving.. ty for the review
Date: 03 Dec 2010 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
what can i say? i liked this chapter as much as i liked the first one! this is going to be a great story i can already tell!
Author's Response:
this makes me so so so happy to hear this... this review made my day
[Report This]Date: 03 Dec 2010 1:48 AM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
I like how it's modern but still old fashion cuz I'm not aware of these houses for hiding pregnant teens anymore
Author's Response:
Its set during 2009 to present. I dont recall them having them anymore, but for purposes of the story it is... Ty for the review
Date: 02 Dec 2010 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
Why on eath didn't tell her parents the truth?!
I would understand if she was just entering her teens but at her age that doesn't make sense. She is supposed to be smart enough to get into Dartmouth but doesn't have the sense to obtain the morning after pill?
Hopefully, Jake will tell Charlie the truth....
Author's Response:
shes blaming herself cause she went somewhere she shouldnt have... women who have been raped often blames themselves and believe they could have done things diffrent. Its false for her to believe that cause no woman deserves that. no matter the situation... she shut herself off so any logical thinking abt diseases and plan B hasnt crossed her mind.... the truth wont come from bella but she will touch on it... basically
[Report This]Date: 02 Dec 2010 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
Aww... that was sweet. Loved meeting Mama Esme and the little Pixie! Lol!
Great chapter!
Krazi
xoxo
Author's Response:
mama esme is def someone she needs to be around... shes need a older woman she can get direction from since her mom has threw her away
[Report This]Date: 02 Dec 2010 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
I´ve enjoyed it thus far! Great start!
Krazi
xoxo
Author's Response:
ty so much... new chapter soon
Date: 02 Dec 2010 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
This would be so much easier to read if it wasn't centered like this. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
ty.. i will stop centering it so.. that its easier.. ty for ur review
Date: 02 Dec 2010 8:23 PM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
Sounds like a wonderful place for unwed mothers. When is she going to tell what happened to her????
Author's Response:
Its a place i would love to see happen in RL... a place where young women can go when the parents turn thier back on them... a place to let them no that a baby isnt a death sentence for thier future. that all things can be achevied with love... she will touch on this in therapy. it will come from an unlikely person
Date: 02 Dec 2010 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
:)
Author's Response:
Thankyou for the review.. im happy with a :)...
Date: 02 Dec 2010 8:05 PM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
:)
Date: 02 Dec 2010 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 2 Discarded Soul
What year is this set in?
Author's Response:
while these were common in the 50's and 60's it set in the space of 2009 to current
Date: 02 Dec 2010 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
Well at least if he kept the panties as a trophy, maybe they can prosecute him later
[Report This]Date: 02 Dec 2010 3:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
seems ok story thanks
Date: 02 Dec 2010 7:46 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
wow....cant to read more looks really good
Author's Response:
ty 2nd chapter coming dec 2
Date: 02 Dec 2010 7:15 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
Hang that fucker by his balls. That is the thing most of the time the victum puts the blam on themselves not cool. I cant wait for more.
Author's Response:
I so agree... he needs to be forced fed them on a plate like hannibal lecter did in hannibal movie to that guys brains
Date: 02 Dec 2010 6:39 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
Bella was stupid not to press charges or go to the hospital for medical treatment....
Author's Response:
i can see how one would feel that way... bella blames herself cause she disobeyed her parents and went somewhere and did things they woudlnt approve of. while in clear mind hindsight is 20/20 but with someone whose been hurt this way... the only thing they are thinking of is safety... ty for ur review i so appreciate it
Date: 02 Dec 2010 6:01 AM Title: Chapter 1 Stolen Innocence
wow i can't wait for more
Author's Response:
ty another post.. will load on dec 2nd ty for the review.. so much