Date: 21 Jul 2016 2:08 PM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
I'm going to miss that romantic fucker. ;-)
Date: 21 Jul 2016 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 33 - The Proposal
While I appreciate all types of fic that keep Bella and Edward together sometimes the angst can get me down. Not because of triggers but because Iam often floored how many people want them stalked, raped, beaten, battered, kidnapped and tortured. It's quite lovely and very enjoyable to read a story where the characters we know and love have layers and depth and even with drama and angst there is flow to the story that pulls you deep within it. I simply want to say "thank you" for providing me this outlet of escape and enjoyment. Carry on...
Date: 21 Jul 2016 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 31 - The Past Part Two
Okay they are both awesome in his chapter but you mistress are the best. I love lemons. I mean come on its fanfic right? But I love lyrical sexy writing more *hand to heart*and in this chapter between you describing Edwards walk to Bella prior to the reception and Bella's walk to Edward declaring her love...fucking lyrically sexy! *fans face like southern bell* JS. Oh and that lemon was divine. Full stop!
Date: 21 Jul 2016 12:16 PM Title: Chapter 30 - The Past Part One
You are the shit! JS I love your Edward so much!!! Foot fear, Pringle eating, kindle loving, sexy man. The nick names he has are fantastic. I think Angela had like six and my favorite was Coffee Colored Hulk. I mean genius. That was fun. Thank you!!
Date: 21 Jul 2016 11:11 AM Title: Chapter 29 - The Prowling
This chapter ran all the emotions with very satisfying *que blush*results. Bravo on the storytelling!
Date: 21 Jul 2016 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 28 - The Parting
Who cares if the chapter was shorter it was bloody brilliant love! ;-D
Date: 21 Jul 2016 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 27 - The Proof
I loves me some baby and sugar!
Date: 20 Jul 2016 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 22 - The Progression Part Two
Is Carlise not his bio dad or something? I can't think of a worse lie cheating on Esme maybe? These two and this lust. Also, if Rose doesn't like carrot cake she could have stayed home. Not a fan. JS
Date: 20 Jul 2016 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Peepshow
Why does Renee care about Bella forgiving Jacob? It seems like she should see how this has hurt her child badly. Edwards right what he did ruined everything and he lost nothing as a result. He even has Renee as his agent in forgiveness. Sad.
Date: 20 Jul 2016 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 17 - The Play Date Part Two
That was a freaking HOT shower scene. When does he plan to humiliate Bella at the wedding? This is gonna be a Humpty Dumpty mess.
Date: 20 Jul 2016 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 12 - The Prick
Okay Renee that ritual is sweet when Bella was little but creeping into her bed with knowledge that her man is in there and maybe naked is creeptacular full stop!
Date: 20 Jul 2016 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 10 - The Player
Oh these two kiddos! *shakes head* this is gonna be good. I love the way you write Edward addressing us with his internal monologue. Genius!
Date: 20 Jul 2016 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 8 - The Parents Part One
Mistress, why would Renee bring that up? What purpose does it serve to open your only child's wounds at the dinner table? Also, Edward knows something or found out something he is pissed but showed up anyway? I guess messing with her life is payback for all she's done? And are we going to find out why she is so boring and tight and not in a good way. JS
Date: 20 Jul 2016 1:38 PM Title: Chapter 7 - The Prepared
Unclinch FFS Bella it's really hard to like you. How is she going to prevent Jessica from getting pissed off and spilling the beans or Aro for that matter? I love it in this story Bella and Alice are Lucy and Ethel with this scheme. That always worked...right? ;-D
Date: 20 Jul 2016 11:32 AM Title: Chapter 5 - The Ploy
Oh Mistress, Bella deserves to be screwed after what she shared this chapter. Unnecessary cruelty, manipulation, withholding someone's prosperity and dream for your own selfish reasons. When Edward finds out she better hope love will save the day because this information is mean. Shame on her and Alice but not surprised Alice is into manipulation. Also B put on your big girl panties and tell your parents 'if I have a mortgage, pay taxes and have success I can handle the rest please and thank you.'
Date: 20 Jul 2016 11:05 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Post Coital
Ugh I could have done without the Tanya bits but I understand fully. I like this Edward sweet, tortured and smart. Bella clearly has a lot of defrosting to do.
Date: 28 Mar 2016 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Awesome sotry awesome Edward, I like that Alice is not that annoying thanks for that and no baby in the story! Good job
Date: 28 Mar 2016 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 30 - The Past Part One
The Vin Disel apache twin make me laugh so hard tha my poor dog woke up scared hahahahaha I have to stop reading and write awesome Hahahaha
Date: 15 Jan 2015 2:35 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
i LOVED this story ;) thanks so much for sharing it with us on here ;D
Date: 22 Nov 2014 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Really good story!! Now I'm going to check out if you have more
Date: 21 Nov 2014 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Post Coital
So he's a manwhore
Date: 27 Jun 2014 12:17 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Awesome story!!!
Date: 10 Oct 2013 9:29 PM Title: Chapter 33 - The Proposal
loved the story thank you for sharing
Date: 09 Oct 2013 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 18 (or not)
u shouldnt put stock in what others have to put you down for, i speak english and read lots of stories the grammer was so bad i couldnt get past 3rd chapter and they were from english writers..... try your best and ty for sharing
Date: 03 Nov 2012 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 33 - The Proposal
I just read your story and it was wonderful! There were so many occasions where your writing was poetic. When Bella first told Edward she loved him it was the sexiest scene ever written! The dedication to Edward's book at the end of the epilogue was simply beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful story!!
Date: 18 Aug 2012 7:39 PM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Wow!!! I love your story! Awesome read!!
Date: 09 Jun 2012 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
I read this story very quickly cause honestly I couldn't put it down for a minute without missing it. Bella was very OOC in this fic. Far from what we are sorta used to but in the end she finally straightened out. Amazing what a little love or a little Edward will do for a gal. (Oh, and one of the best 'first times' I have read in quite a while. ;) Enjoyed your fic immensely. Great writing! I just have one thing to say about your comment about the reviews criticizing your english...all I can say on that is when are some readers going to realize that its not just americans who like to write fanfiction. Just look over those minor differences and enjoy the story itself. A Yip instead of a Yep isn't going to make or break the story in my opinion. I look at the quality of the story and minor mispells or different ways people say things isnt going to hurt the story itself. Enough said. (sorry. I just think bad reviews on things like that are a waste of time and space. just my opinion.)
Hugs Stephanie
Date: 17 May 2012 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 27 - The Proof
You are a really great writer and you have had me actually laughing out loud at some parts! And your lemon scenes, HOT! Please write more stories! :)
Date: 11 May 2012 9:53 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Your story was wonderful and it worthed every second I spent reading it...
Date: 21 Apr 2012 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Proposition
sounds familiar but a great start
Date: 10 Apr 2012 6:52 PM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
And so the circle closes. I can't believe, that now this story is finished. But it was a great journey to follow Edward and Bella fall in love.
Date: 10 Apr 2012 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 33 - The Proposal
So sweet that Edwards book was published and now he also wrote a book about their love story. That will probably be the next New York Times bestseller.
Great way to end the story.
Date: 10 Apr 2012 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 32 - The Perfection
Bella meets the family and they love her, just as Edward loves Bella.
These two are so great to watch, it is so sad, that this story is coming to an end.
Date: 10 Apr 2012 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
I LOVE this story it is amazing! SO much i have read it in a day! keep writing you have an awsome talent!!! :D
Date: 09 Apr 2012 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 13 - The Paranoid
Sure Bella, just keep telling yourself that he was asleep if that makes you feel better. =o) Kelly
Date: 09 Apr 2012 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 12 - The Prick
Those two absolutely kill me! =o) Kelly
Date: 09 Apr 2012 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 11 - The Paragon
Heeheehee! This is great! I can't wait to see what punishment Bella will have in store for Edward. I'm having so much fun reading your story. xo Kelly
Date: 09 Apr 2012 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
So good...love this story. Thank you for the outtake.
Date: 09 Apr 2012 8:49 AM Title: Chapter 10 - The Player
I can't wait to know what Edward's plan is. =o)
Date: 08 Apr 2012 11:01 PM Title: Chapter 33 - The Proposal
I simply love your fanfiction
xoxo merry
Date: 08 Apr 2012 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Proposition
i read this story on my phone and could not review each chapter...but i loved this story. this edward was probably in my top five. excellent story. thanks so much for sharing
Date: 07 Apr 2012 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Loved it. Loved it. Loved it.
I loved this story!
Date: 07 Apr 2012 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 18 (or not)
Reading your A/N about being corrected on your grammar. I am a grammar nazi... seriously. I never have problems pointing out problems to someone.
But, I have never, in reading the earlier chapters of your story, wanted to say anything. The reason is that I could tell that english is not your primary language. And, sometimes, it just doesn't matter.
Your story stands, even with mistakes. The plot and pacing are good, the story is interesting, the characters are developing at (a snails pace!) a normal, good rate.
I hope that any criticism you've received has not discouraged you... since this is marked completed, I can only assume it hasn't! You keep writing, do your best. You've got a great imagination, and a talent for expressing it!
(I could do without the chapters that have the weird arrows though!!)
Date: 06 Apr 2012 12:18 PM Title: Chapter 33 - The Proposal
Perfect!
Date: 06 Apr 2012 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Great job bringing it full circle with the toilet paper notes.
Very swoon worthy. I loved it!
Thanks for sharing.
Date: 05 Apr 2012 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 9 - The Parents Part Two
What a train wreck. Poor Bella. I know Renee didn't mean any harm, but what poor timing. You know, for a split second last chapter, I wondered if Lauren would tell Edward about what Bella did concerning his novel, but I dismissed the idea. No wonder he is pissed off. I can't wait to see what happens next. xo Kelly
Date: 05 Apr 2012 7:48 AM Title: Chapter 8 - The Parents Part One
Well this is going just great. *says sarcastically* And what is Edward upset at Bella for? I can't wait to find out. xo Kelly
Date: 05 Apr 2012 7:23 AM Title: Chapter 7 - The Prepared
I can't wait for Charlie and Renee to get here! I'm so curious as to what fun activities Edward will come up with to do while Bella's parents are in town. xo Kelly
Date: 05 Apr 2012 7:00 AM Title: Chapter 6 - The Practice
I think I smirked through this whole chapter, they just kill me! The sexual tension will no doubt be at an all time high by the end of the three weeks. heehee =) Can't wait to meet the parents. xo Kelly
Date: 05 Apr 2012 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 5 - The Ploy
Ah yes, the plot thickens. I guess I was right about a few things now that I've heard it from BPOV. I'm laughing at this situation, it's priceless! I can't wait to see how the 'practicing' goes, and if Bella's parents are fooled or not. I really am loving your story so much! xo Kelly
Date: 05 Apr 2012 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 4 - The Playbook
Well I loved the 'playbook' , it seemed to be working and then the ice queen reared her icey head again. Speaking of the ice queen, I don't get how she can go from one mood to the next so quickly. I wonder if she's had any prior practice on anyone else, or if she only bestows that on poor Edward. I think I already said that she's obviously attracted to Edward, maybe she got burned by an old boyfriend in the past and is just taking it out on Edward because she is afraid of her feelings for him. *shrugs* Well no matter what her deal is; I love your story. =) xo Kelly
Date: 05 Apr 2012 5:41 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Post Coital
I can't wait to see what Emmett comes up with. Should be entertaining. =) xo Kelly
Date: 05 Apr 2012 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 32 - The Perfection
There will always be lessons learned when loving someone.
So cute that Edward brought his girl home to meet his parents.
Date: 05 Apr 2012 3:54 AM Title: Chapter 31 - The Past Part Two
What a nobel act Edward performed by sending Bella to speak with Jacob.
I agree that there is no need to rebuild her friendship with Leah and Jacob.
That was quite the impromptu set up for the ILY'S. Enjoyable non the less.
Date: 04 Apr 2012 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 30 - The Past Part One
The foot banter on the bed with pringles was a hoot!
Hopefully Leah and Jacob's wedding will be the end of her woes and yet the beginnings of her forever with Edward.
Date: 04 Apr 2012 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 29 - The Prowling
Hiding a relationship is an additional emotional strain these two don't need.
Really starting to like your Jessica. She's a hot lovable mess!
The wedding should be a bit easier now.
Author's Response:
Hi bb!
Just wanted to pop in and say thank you for all your reviews and sharing your thoughts with me! I've loved reading them!
Hope you enjoy the rest and thank you so much for the support!
xoxo
Date: 04 Apr 2012 6:26 PM Title: Chapter 28 - The Parting
I think Bella needs to explain the logic behind the steps she was following in such a robotic fashion, for Edward to understand her delayed actions.
She asked, he stayed. Yea!
Date: 04 Apr 2012 5:07 PM Title: Chapter 27 - The Proof
Charlie and the boys are funny together.
I think Rosalie was right on the money when she asked if the last two years of complaining was just pent up sexual frustration.
I think your wonderful is a good step towards the ILY'S.
Date: 04 Apr 2012 3:54 PM Title: Chapter 26 - The Plumpkin
Reciting the ABC's while receiving a bj was funny. Yorkie hearing the results of Bella's efforts, hilarious!
Well it seems obvious to those around them that E&B are falling hard for each other.
How long before they get it?
Date: 04 Apr 2012 3:16 PM Title: Chapter 25 - The Pants
Interesting game of confession in the honor of Cinderella's shoe.
They have a very long way to go in the departments of communications and trust.
Date: 04 Apr 2012 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 24 - The Pleasure
Will their follow-up discussion ne as heated as their physical gratification?
So many new conditions to discuss. How will they continue to work together?
Will they now give into the need to know each other as intimatly as they know each others bodies?
Date: 04 Apr 2012 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 23 - The Present
Such a fine line between love and hate!
They are still learning how the heart has a way of leading them where the mind is afraid to go.
Forgiveness, another tool the heart uses to mend and build at the same time.
How will they move forward?
Date: 04 Apr 2012 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 22 - The Progression Part Two
Lies always surface!
Bella needs to rip the bandage off quickly exposing herself for the manipulator that she believes she is. I just hope the confession prompts Edward to follow suit in divulging his part in this mixed up affair. How much damage can either of their hearts take?
Date: 04 Apr 2012 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 21 - The Progression
Edward's closed off personality and arrogance will be his downfall. The collateral damage will be minimal but the two hearts involved will take a beating. Pun intended.
Date: 04 Apr 2012 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 20 - The Pick-up line
They say no more games, but every time further together it escalates into a larger version of the mixed up contractual agreement from the beginning.
Love is the underlying motivational factor, but lust is the driving force!
Date: 04 Apr 2012 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 19 - The Peepshow
Edward should not have listened in on her private conversation.
Can't believe Bella abandoned her parents for an entire day.
The pull they have on each other is a powerful force.
Emmett is right, Bella will not handle another deception/rejection well. Edward take care!
Date: 04 Apr 2012 3:18 AM Title: Chapter 17 - The Play Date Part Two
He told her before that she owed him one. I guess she paid up with that hit little bathroom scene.
Well, they made another modification to tge agreement. They are officially, mutually exclusive! This us only week one, two more to go.
Date: 04 Apr 2012 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 16 - The Play Date Part One
Bella's moodiness is causing her more grief than anyone else.
I'm sure Charlie has figured parts of the awkwardness out already.
Glad Rosalie is there to give Edward some bwck up.
Someone is going to get hurt when all is said and done. That's a given.
Date: 04 Apr 2012 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 15 - The Prevention
That's not the only truth left unspoken!
These two should be about ready to spontaneously combust!
There confrontations are becoming more and more heated. Not just verbally but also physically.
How will the Daffodil Festival go?
Poor Charlie is not so excited about this excursion. Lol
Date: 04 Apr 2012 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 14 - The Pretender
Ok, Alice and Renee are hilarious together.
Bella and Edward's texting is getting more playful.
I wish there would gave been more about Charlie and the guys. Can't wait for his little snippets of observation from his night out with Edward. Sound like they had a good time.
Of course Edward was awake.......
How does expect to get paid back? Hmmm, so many thoughts. Lol
Date: 04 Apr 2012 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 2 - The Preposterous
Bella is quite a piece of work isn't she? It's obvious that she is attracted to Edward, but it seems that she really goes out of her way to hide that. Maybe that is part of the reason she is such a bitch, that way it keeps Edward and any other men from approaching her. I guess she could have been deeply hurt by someone in her past, and has now closed her heart and become extremely guarded. It could be so many different things. I'm more curious than ever to find out what makes her tick. I'm looking forward to Edward going over to her place on Sunday; I can't wait to see what his terms and conditions are. =) Kelly
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Proposition
This is great! I'm laughing my butt off! I love a hardass Bella. I can't wait to see why she is so icy. =) Kelly
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 14 - The Pretender
thanks:)
xxx
Author's Response:
Hi hon!
Just wanted to thank you for the reviews and your support!
Hope you enjoy the rest!
xoxo
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 12 - The Prick
wow so good:)
thanks to share:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:39 PM Title: Chapter 11 - The Paragon
thanks:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 10 - The Player
thanks:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 9 - The Parents Part Two
thanks:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 8 - The Parents Part One
thanks:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 6 - The Practice
Thanks:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Ploy
wow:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 10:48 PM Title: Chapter 4 - The Playbook
thanks to share:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 10:48 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Post Coital
wow Thanks:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 13 - The Paranoid
Wow, Edward got a bit carried away with his enthusiasm during that last scrabble game. And thinfs were going so well prior to that.
What sweet torture they are to each other.
There is no way he slept through that.
Bella is totally screwed.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 12 - The Prick
The heat rolling off of these two is almost palpable. Not much sleep will be had by either party and not for pleasurable reasons either.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 11 - The Paragon
Renee has placed them on a path that neither one of them have a contingency plan to deal with it. Hilarious!
When will they finally to each other the hidden plans and act upon their growing attraction?
Date: 03 Apr 2012 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 2 - The Preposterous
thanks to share:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 7:08 PM Title: Chapter 10 - The Player
What pit falls has Edward neglected to take into consideration? I'm sure his plan will back fire just as Bella's has.
He seems a bit to sure of himself. I'll bet Aro will spill all the beans at some point.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 9 - The Parents Part Two
Charlie will be hot on Edward's tail to find out the reason so many details are lacking in their relationship. Thank goodness Renee is oblivious.
Bella's world will be crashing harder in the foreseeable future.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 8 - The Parents Part One
Why is it mothers just have a way of getting to our weakest points? In all their innocent attempts to communicate.
Hope Edward finds a way to come to het defence.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 7 - The Prepared
Will Jessica figure out how she was scooped?
That will cause a huge problem for Bella.
Aro must know Isabella is a better editor than Jessica to begin with eve with less experience.
Can't wait for Edward to meet the parents.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 6 - The Practice
Their defensive walls are beginning to crack.
Shouldn't Edward know his way around her kitchen better?
Charlie is going to spot several holes in their game plan, but will he disclose them right away?
Date: 03 Apr 2012 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 5 - The Ploy
Women are ridiculous creatures. Sex hair and panty dropping smiles and bedroom eyes – and they accuse men of only having sex on the brain. Pffft. I just love this line from last chapter and how perfectly it fits with Bella's assessment of Edward.
Her secret will get out......I hope sooner than later due to how used Edward is going to feel.
Bella and Edward both are soooooo screwed.
Maybe it will be an enjoyable twist for both of them.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 4 - The Playbook
Well, I guess the boys didn't see that set back coming! Good girl protect yourself, Bella.
The attraction is definitely getting to them.
Can't wait for them to practice touching! Hehe
Date: 03 Apr 2012 3:51 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Post Coital
Some I have a feeling that Tanya knows more about Edward than he knows about her. She will be back.
Can't wait to read the guys analysis of the proposition, and Edward's terms.
Date: 03 Apr 2012 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Proposition
Sympas:)
xxx
Date: 03 Apr 2012 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 2 - The Preposterous
Mistress,
I think your Miss Swan has a massive crush on her junior editor. Chuckling.
At some point they need to use first names when addressing each other. LOL
Must read more!
Date: 03 Apr 2012 3:15 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Proposition
I don't remember who rec'd this story, but I'm glad they did.
This is going to be a fun ride.
I'm giddy with anticipation.
I need to keep reading so I can catch up to the rest of your fangirls.
Kristi
Date: 02 Apr 2012 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 7 - The Prepared
I love the story!! It is a little hard to follow considering the lack of punctuation, still an amazing story :)
Date: 02 Apr 2012 11:47 AM Title: Chapter 34 - OUTTAKE
Amazing! Love what Edward did for her!