Thanks for the update!

Jada,
This story owns me, it is the most compelling and intriguing story out there and I read a lot
It ‘s not only that the story is fantastic, it’s your writing, you have the gift ,skill, art, whatever it is called, the ability to make words come alive on paper, to make readers be part of all the characters feel.
The emotions are raw, painful and devastating. I feel it all, I am transported as I read, my head and heart twisting along with them.
Long after the chapter is read it stays with me and leaves me dying for more.
You are slow to update, I get impatient, but I get it, there is real life out there, but I just wanted to tell you, this is truly a masterpiece

These two are both so screwed up.  they need to grab a hold of each other and he needs to make love to her and they both have to tell each other what the hell happened in their past.  Its killing me waiting so long for an update.

Wow - they are both two emotional messes.  This is just way too interesting to let go - I can't wait for your next update.

Wow! Well he finally got a reaction.  I guess I shouldn't be surprised that she was so cruel.  She has been bottling up her anger for so long that it was bound to come out in an inappropriate way.  I actually feel sorry for Edward, brutally reminded of his pain, and for Isabella who has never dealt with hers.  I suspect that her ways of coping aren't going to be working for much longer.  Great story! The depth of your characters is amazing. Thank you.

Wow, I didn't know what to expect from their encounter. Looks like the ball is in his court now. 

Ooh someone's mad!! Well hurt but mad too. Poor thing. I love the way you write. Very descriptive! I love that! I can't wait to read more. Thanks again bye for now

Seems to be slow going now although that's understandable.

Excellent chapter!!! I lvoed it!!! Thanks, thanks for update... I was missing roughie! This story is very intriguing ... Edward is an enigma! Thanks again ... hopefully updated soon .... xo

Wow, great chapter. I keep wanting them to reconnect, it feels like if they could then maybe they could heal each other instead of using /abusing each other with their touch. I can't wait to read what happens next this is such a riveting story;D)

So so good. So so intriguing.

I normally do leave reviews, but I have to say that I have been following this story--everyday hoping that you have updated.  This story for some reason has totally captivated me.  I love the layers to the characters, and the way that you slowly peer layer after layer away to reveal two very complex, injured, tortured people.  Cannot wait to see where you take this story.

wow but we still don't know anything.... you are going to spill on everything e eventually aren't you?  they  both have been through a great deal of crap... thanks for the update can't wait for more

UGH!  So much pain for both of them.....I hope you update sooner this time...though I understand it must be hard with RL and just coming up with another chapter with your beautiful workds.  UGH again...can't wait to see what happens next.  I just want to hug them both!

thanks awsome chapter can't wait for the next fix

Oh shit! *thanks for the motorboat...loved it!*

Cool story, please post soon.

Wow. Your story is emotionally draining ( in a good way). I can't wait to hear Edwards back story, I know we have bits and pieces, but to hear his word from his mouth... I can't wait. Thank you so much for sharing. Can't wait for an update.

I feel so sorry for Bella. What is the deal with Edward? When he yelled he thought he was by himself. Something is eating him up. Can't wait to read and see what it is. I am really enjoying this story. It seems like it could get dark.

I can not believe that she did not ask for more details. How often is she expected to "preform" with him during a week? When will she start getting paid? For 500.00, how many times does that cover? If I were her I would have wante more details.

What is Bella??? A call girl, a hooker, what????? Edward seems kind of hard and rough with her. Is he mad at her???

I just found this story. All I have to say is that your writing is phenomenal. I truly hope that you are writing professionally. 

Wow! j'adore!  

Je lirai la suite avec mon Ipad cette nuit, je ne peux pas laisser de review avec mon IPad avec TWCS, juste une note.  

Impressionnant!

Wow, what an intense story! I found it just today, started and couldn't stop reading. So now, here I am, waiting and thinking how they will move on. When will Bella have her breakdown, that is surely to come.

I want to know, what happened to Edward to turn him into that asshole and what happened to make him change his ways. I want to believe it was the look on her face, he just told her about. And of course, I want to know, what exactly happened to her and her father and mother. So please, don't keep us waiting too long for the next chapters.

Thanks for sharing your fantasy.

Sabs

wow! j'adore! Ça me fait penser à MOTU, j'adore, j'adore!!!

Montréal, Québec

15h30

I actually couldn't sleep last night after reading to chapter 10, thinking about how deep these characters are and their secret pasts. Brilliant job on that! I read the prologue when the story was a few chapters in and was revolted by Edward's behaviour. I had no idea what a wonderful, descriptive writer you were as my mind was too overcome with the violence of his words and actions. Plus, the promotional material for the fic seems to glorify this. However... the fic itself does not glorify him. It's BPOV, and she's damaged, so we can't rely on her sexual draw to someone so volitile. Very unexpected and refreshing! 

The way you'd phrase things sometimes, I'd have to re-read, it was so well done and beautiful. God... and Bella's past... I've experienced SOME of that, so I know how realistic her pain is. How little she values herslef, yet she can't see it. Boy, that hit home. Kelly Province recced this on Twitter, saying it was deep, so I gave it another shot. So glad I did. 

And to think we'd come to a place FIVE years later, when Edward realises his mistakes. Jeez, did not see that coming! So good that Bella has a wake up call on the way. I can't even begin to tell you how well you've depicted her. I think she's the best three dimentional Bella I've come across. All the characters feel unique in their own way, which is TOUGH to do. Bravo! 

Although I cringed at Bella letting herself be treated by Edward that way (even getting turned on by it), you wrote it so believably, so in tune with her personality, I bought her reasons. That's a big thing to portray as a writer, especially given the subject matter. IMO, if the promotional material for this story was more about Bella's hurt, and not "Roughie", etc, there may not be as much flack for it. But that's just my opinion, because I was so shocked to find a very well written story under what appeared on the surface to be cheap thrills for no valid reason. How wrong I was.  

IMO, your story isn't popular because of "rough," titilating lemons, it's because great writing is fused with interesting characters who have hurts and mysteries. I'm eating humble pie, and I can't rave enough (obviously). 

Belinda. 

PS. The scene of Bella in the car with her parents and Charlie's going off at her... then Renee--all bored--tells Bella to get out while he's getting his pay... OMG. I FELT Bella's pain. I felt like I was 10 again, being told by my father in MY family's car, after asking where we were going, "Why do you think you're so special to know? You're just along for the ride." Those words would repeat later in life, stopping me from defending myself over and over. The fact that you knew to give Bella this past... brilliant. 

*sigh* I'm torn. He so deserves every bit of her cold shoulder however as a greedy reader I sooo want them to hurry it up!

ahh finally!!! intense chapter.. i don't know what to say..it's still too soon for them to have an relationship..she should forgive him or not?!! anyway i can't wait for the next one

I just love this story-its so intense. Two really tortured souls! I wait very impatiently for the next chapter

I vote for slapping the shit out of Bella. LOL.  She knew what she was doing and she still did it. Its not all his fault.  She should at least hear him out.  I thought for sure he would kiss her since that was one ot the no no's in his rules.  Cant wait for another update.

Amazing chapter!

Brilliant! As much as I want them to "just talk already!", both of them are so damaged that there is no easy solution.  Something tells me that their next meeting will either have to come from Bella(unlikely), or happen by chance. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Wow , this was a vey tense emotional chapter. There is so much hurt and pain there...

Raises hand...I volunteer to slap the shit out of Bella!  Damn girl...get your head out of your ass!  Wake up...Roughie is right there for the taking!

Great chapter!  Can't wait for more!  :)

Ohhh I was so excited to see the update I have been dying to see what would happen next! :)

So I can't wait to see where you go from here, what brings them back together? Does Bella seek him out? Can he just not stay away? What brings them close again? Will Bella ever find out what really happened to him and who's kid that was? Oh and what happened at hte end of Alice's wedding :))))  So many questions so little time! :) hehe

And for some reason that one time they were having sex while Bella was doing downward dog I now think of it as Yoga sex....  kinda sounds like fun :)

Is that it? Is E really never going to bother B again?

So ever find out what happened?

Loved this chapter & your story by the way. He's def different from the Edward we met in the beginning. Wonder what's changed?

I think your story is too complicated to break it down to a slap. You've made apologizing into an agonizing process that is too personal to watch/read. I don't know what I want these to do. That's what makes you and this story so unique. I want to know how you are going to heal such a damaged Bella and I do not envy you the process of writing it all down.

Thank you.

aww, poor roughie, I was almost a bit sniffly. but then i thought of jogging edward.. and yea... *fans self* LOL 

Thanks for the update I was jonsin for it earlier. :D

Well hell I didn't learn anything more than I had from just reading the story.

It is pretty much a typical sitaution but then again it isn't ya know what I mean?

Isabella was mentally abused as a child and is used to being treated like crap by her parents.

Edward comes along and repeats the whole scenario because he knows he can.

My question is what the fuck could be so bad that happened to Edward that he could go from a loving father to a total DICK in a short span of time?

I am sure it is just as typical but I hope not.

A. They were killed in some horrible accident Edward blames his family or himself for.

B. He killed them accidentally somehow maybe falling asleep at the wheel.. and is taking  everything he has lost out on his family.

C. She left him for some obvious reason...but his parents know where she is and won't tell him because he has gone insane and isn't acting rationally around his wife and the fact that she left him taking his kid and now they are choosing to not tell him where she is and they think this is best for him.

D. They were killed when he left them in the care of his family...in some horrible accident and he blames them.

or are we going to get some really cool off the wall surprise and find out something new and original???

So out with it girl! We wanna know what makes Edward a monster??

Isabella is easy to figure out and it was pretty much a given that he had to of heard everything he said when he approached her anyone that didn't get that was just dense....so I wanna know!!!

You are not giving any clues to his story....and why the hell would he say that he wouldn't see her again if she doesn't know why he did what he did?

I mean everyone has an excuse for why we do what we do..did Edward think that saying sorry he was in a bad bad bad place...not even clueing her in as to why he was in that bad place is right or fair to her. Especially when she looks at him with compassion?

God I love your story. You make me use my brain for once in a long time! It has me reeling!

And I swear to God that fucking blinkie you have is EPIC in my book...with your permission I would love to add it to my website to send people to read your story.

(snickers...not to mention the fact that I like to just watch it cycle through! perve I know! lol I make no excuses!)

Everyone should be reading this seriously...I mean I get that some people can't handle certain things but I hate when someone reads a few chapters and doesn' t give the story the time of day based on their opinion of a half assed story! I know trust me! I have been accused of tryint to turn them against Edward which is the most ridiculous thing anyone has ever claimed because my love for that character is so deep that to imagine people out there thinking shit like that is just beyond intelligent! I love that the fanfiction world loves ALL OF THE EDWARD's we create!

Roughie is in with the rest along with Beautiful Bastard, MafiaWard, all the Darkwards, even Vampwards...he deserves just as much attenion as all the rest and I am so glad you brought this story here!

Thanks! You RAWK!

:)

thanks as always awsome chapter i love that he keeps coming back and won't leave again awsome

this is so intense!!!  you do an unbelievable job of conveying emotion.  I hope hope this continues....

K I still really don't get her but they are both strange as heck so I guess they just work somehow. I think he wants more then just to say sorry. I don't know if it forgiveness or her though

Well I hope she snaps out of it soon.  He has gone out of his way quite a bit now. Although he was a douchebag.  I get where she is coming from.  Cant wait for more

Great  chapter I would love to know whats going on in Edward head right now. I hope you do an Edward POV cant wait till next chapter

Poor broken Roughie. He seems to be trying to get himself back together. Trying to do the right thing. After all this time, he could have so easily never sought her out to apologize, but he did. He claims he won't come back. Please tell me that is not true. 

Thanks,thanks for update!!made my day! ;)
I love hearing the version of Roughie ...Now, to wait for Bella... to make a move! Thanks again!x