[Report This]Date: 10 Aug 2011 4:49 PM Title: Chapter 60
Omg so sweet can't wait to read more.
Author's Response:
Thank you and more real soon.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 6:57 AM Title: Chapter 60
I love it there is no ? in her mind that is a good thing.
Author's Response:
When you go with the feelings in your heart their is never any questions.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 6:52 AM Title: Chapter 59
That was so sweet so happy nothing went wrong there.
Author's Response:
I tried to make it as sweet as possible I mean neither of my husbands did anything romatic it was why don't we get married, when just talking.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 58
Alice is wanting Bella to get her freak on lol
Author's Response:
Alice will be Alice what can I say.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 57
things are going to be suprising for Bella
Author's Response:
yup.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 59
She handled that well. I can't believe it. Yeah Bella
Author's Response:
She is going off of feelings and feelings alone.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 60
Wow, he proposed already, guess he is in a hurry :)
Author's Response:
yup he knows she is the one.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 2:28 AM Title: Chapter 58
That Alice.
Author's Response:
Alice will always be Alice.
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Date: 10 Aug 2011 2:19 AM Title: Chapter 57
No you are not going to fast for me but maybe for Bella
Author's Response:
We will find out if this is all two much for Bella soon enough.
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Date: 07 Aug 2011 8:03 AM Title: Chapter 56
Love is out there they both said it
Author's Response:
yup and the weekend will be awesome
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Date: 07 Aug 2011 7:57 AM Title: Chapter 55
he is acting like a teenager with hi first crush so very cute :)
Author's Response:
He has found the one why not go over board.
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Date: 07 Aug 2011 7:50 AM Title: Chapter 54
I think she gets it that he cares for as much as she cares for him.
Author's Response:
Slowly but surely.
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Date: 07 Aug 2011 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 53
I hope she believes him
Author's Response:
I think she does, but will still have some doubts.
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Date: 07 Aug 2011 7:17 AM Title: Chapter 56
sweet
Author's Response:
Thank you
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Date: 07 Aug 2011 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 56
They are moving by leaps and bounds. I hope the weekend goes well for both of them!
Author's Response:
You will love the weekend, or at least I hope you do.
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Date: 05 Aug 2011 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 52
That was so sweet she just cant wrap her head around the fact that he loves her that much.
Author's Response:
Sometimes its hard to wrap our heads around it when somone loves us.
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Date: 04 Aug 2011 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 51
things are looking good
Author's Response:
Yup
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Date: 04 Aug 2011 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 50
I hope that is the last of Tanya we see. Poor Bella I hate dreams like that I have woken up just pissed at my poor husband a couple of time because of a dream like that poor guy.
Author's Response:
nope it will be a while before Tanya is out of the picture.
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Date: 04 Aug 2011 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 49
very sweet
Author's Response:
Thank you so much.
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Date: 04 Aug 2011 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 52
Wow Bella is soooo insecure. How long before she starts to change?
Author's Response:
You will find out it will come and go depending on what's going on.
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Date: 04 Aug 2011 4:57 PM Title: Chapter 50
Somehow I am not sure Tanya is gone for good?
Author's Response:
We will see her a few more times.
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Date: 02 Aug 2011 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 48
Thank god the dinner went well and no unexpected person showed up.
Author's Response:
Rose never does the samething twice.
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Date: 02 Aug 2011 6:53 AM Title: Chapter 47
I am glad she went to dinner.
Author's Response:
The family really likes that is except for Rose. hehe
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Date: 02 Aug 2011 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 46
What is Rose up to I dont trust her???
Author's Response:
Good don't trust her and you will find out why much later.
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Date: 02 Aug 2011 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 45
Alice wants to know everything
Author's Response:
Alice will always be Alice hehe.
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Date: 30 Jul 2011 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 44
He is so wonderful caring and loving.
Author's Response:
Yup, she is changing him.
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Date: 30 Jul 2011 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 43
That was a good start
Author's Response:
Thank you.
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Date: 29 Jul 2011 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 42
Glad he is thinking ahead
Author's Response:
yup and things are going to get weird real fast hehe.
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Date: 29 Jul 2011 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 44
Oh this is getting good can't wait to read more.
Author's Response:
Thank you and you will have more soon as long as my net stays up. it's been up and down today, but more up then down.
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Date: 29 Jul 2011 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 41
When I said that things where not moving fast enough I was talking about them not the story it self. I just want you to know I was not bitching about it. :) Please tell me he showed up???
Author's Response:
I know you aren't bitching.... check out the reviews I got the other day. You will find out soon.
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Date: 29 Jul 2011 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 40
I love it they are being honest it least
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you. Check out the reviews I got yesterday.
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Date: 28 Jul 2011 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 30
in response to your review reply...yes I read that this was your first story as I kept calling you a first timer in several reviews. I also read that you took on the story after the first chapter.
As a reader, reviewer and writer I think it is most important to let others know about mistakes and errors. Even first timers can produce error free stories. But yes, I have read other stories on this website and the other website twilighted, where they strive to have perfect, error free chapters that have errors in them as well. So don't sweat the errors. I just think that a little bit of re-reading, checking again, and proof reading, makes all the difference.
I am not attacking you or the writing. Since you seem to be put out by reviews that are trying to help and critique, maybe you should post on each chapter that you know there are errors and you don't intend to fix them, but would rather show growth through your other stories. Then, people like me that are just trying to help wouldn't.
Author's Response:
I'm not put out by them, in fact they have helped me grow as a writter. It's just this is a completed story and I will not go back and fix the errors.
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Date: 28 Jul 2011 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 23
You need to go back and re-read this chapter. There are a lot of errors that makes it hard to read.
Date: 28 Jul 2011 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 22
so as soon as emmett met bella last night and the only time he was around her he started calling her little sis...that is a term of endearment that is usually placed on someone after having known the person for some time...more than just one evening.
Date: 28 Jul 2011 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 21
the climax of the story could have been built up a little bit better than what it was....but that's normal for a first time story teller....I remember my own! HA!
Date: 28 Jul 2011 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 19
ok....so they haven't even kissed yet....
I am not asking this question to come across as rude....but is English your native language? I am an EFL, ESL and Bilingual teacher and whenever my students make the transition to English through writing...well, your writing resembles that. THe way you word things, the verb usage, the pronoun usage, etc.
Author's Response:
I’m only answering on of your reviews…. As I say this was my very first try at writing a Fan Fic. No I did not have a beta on it as I didn’t know people were willing do check over other peoples writings at the time. I was very new to the world of fan fiction at the time. As it states this was my first and it was written back in 2009. The plot line was given to me by a twelve-year-old young lady, and so I kept it pretty simple as it was written for a teen site. I only posted it here so people could see how much I’ve grown with my writings. English is my first language. It’s funny I read stories all the time and see errors and I never mention them in my reviews.
Gee, even many published books have errors in them. If you read my other stories on this site, you will see my growth. I don’t plan on have this story beta’d because of what it stands for. I use multiple beta’s on my other stories. This is a completed story that I’m posting.
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Date: 28 Jul 2011 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 16
I like the idea of your story. But do you have a beta? I have picked up so many errors throughout your chapters. And it's Greenwich Village. You spelled it wrong. It is easily googled.
I can tell this is a first timer's story. There is nothing wrong with it, but it does lack a certain finesse. If you are interested in writing more, (if you haven't already) I suggest reading a few big time, well-known stories to see how their stories flow. If you need reccomendations to stories let me know!
Take care!
Date: 28 Jul 2011 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 4
why would she say she was fat???????
Date: 28 Jul 2011 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 3
what a horn dog.
Date: 28 Jul 2011 1:38 PM Title: Chapter 40
You have been wonderful about posting regularly so don't worry about a small lapse.
I hope Rose can get over her problem with Bella and Edward.
Author's Response:
Rose won't be getting over her problem with Bella and Edward any time soon.
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Date: 28 Jul 2011 7:49 AM Title: Chapter 40
I think things have been slow enough
Author's Response:
Thank you and stuff will be moving faster real soon.
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Date: 28 Jul 2011 7:38 AM Title: Chapter 39
Things are looking good. What about Jess being in love with him????
Author's Response:
Trust me it's nothing Bella is reading things wrong you will learn more in a bit.
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Date: 28 Jul 2011 7:30 AM Title: Chapter 38
He is trying so hard.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and yes he is trying hard.
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Date: 28 Jul 2011 7:21 AM Title: Chapter 37
Edward is a good boy. I am so glad she is just calling him Edward.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much.
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Date: 27 Jul 2011 2:27 AM Title: Chapter 36
It's nice to have a 'good Jessica'. Thanks for sharing your story.
Author's Response:
I just felt we needed to see Jessica in a new light. hehe.
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[Report This]Date: 25 Jul 2011 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 36
whew...something tells me Tanya won't give up that easy. Bella needs to get over this already, but Edward needs to get a grip on his hormones. Its kinda crazy how they feel about eachother and not even kissed.....talk about spontaneous combustion!!!! GREAT STORY, DIFFERENT FROM EVERYTHING ELSE WHICH TO ME IS EXCELLENT, I WILL SAY I CAN'T WAIT FOR SOME LEMONS, EVEN SMALL ONES!!!
Author's Response:
Lemon's are coming they will be small until the honeymoon hehe.
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Date: 25 Jul 2011 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 36
I was wondering what the bitch was doing I wish he would of told her to not come back but I think she got the idea :)
Author's Response:
ARe you sure hehe.
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Date: 25 Jul 2011 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 35
its time to forgive
Author's Response:
I agree
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Date: 25 Jul 2011 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 34
His heart is in the right place.
Author's Response:
yup
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Date: 25 Jul 2011 1:39 AM Title: Chapter 33
So happy they got the case reopened and Bella is going to take the job from Edward.
Author's Response:
Yup things will be moving fast hehe. When I first posted this story people said I had them move back together to fast and I don't think so. I've been married for 19 years to a man I had my first date with one a wednesday and monday I moved in with him. hmmmmmmmmmm
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Date: 25 Jul 2011 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 32
Still enjoyng this story... kinda of waiting until they make up :)
Author's Response:
It will happen real soon.
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Date: 24 Jul 2011 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 32
He is trying to be a good boy
Author's Response:
yup, but will it work.
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Date: 24 Jul 2011 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 31
she pissed him off????
Author's Response:
just a tad.
Date: 24 Jul 2011 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 30
he has hope
Author's Response:
yes he has hope.
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Date: 23 Jul 2011 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 29
i hope she starts to forgive him
Author's Response:
they will still have some ups and downs.
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Date: 23 Jul 2011 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 28
I wonder what we will find out about Bella's case. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response:
We will find out loads...
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Date: 23 Jul 2011 1:17 AM Title: Chapter 28
Awwww but guess he kinda deserves it........LOL hopefully Skankya will back the hell off & Rose too. Thanks :)
Author's Response:
We will see this is a drama story after all.
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Date: 23 Jul 2011 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 28
I hope she will not be upset if they reopen her case.
Author's Response:
We will find out soon?
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 27
I hope she dosent just cause herself more pain by not seeing him
Author's Response:
She won't trust me just a bit.
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 26
He better be kissing ass
Author's Response:
He's trying
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 25
glad Emmett stood up to Rose
Author's Response:
He know her pretty well and he is not happy with what she did.
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 24
He should go after her
Author's Response:
Trust me he will.
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 19
kinda sweet with the Ms. Bella & Mr.Edward, so formal
Author's Response:
Thank you most seem to dislike my Ms. Bella and Mr. Edward. I love the old classics and that is the way so many talked in those. Jane Austin used them alot.
Hugs.
Date: 22 Jul 2011 3:01 AM Title: Chapter 24
bravo
Author's Response:
Thank you.
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 24
the girl is in so much pain. when are we going to get more of the arangment???
Author's Response:
Yup the first guy to ever show interest and he has already torn her a part... As for The Arrangement They extended the dates to Aug 10 and it goes to public vote on the 11th. If I don't get picked up for publishing as soon as the winner is announced I will start posting chapters to finish out the story. Trust me I'm writing the chapters so I will have many sitting waiting until we find out whats going to happen with the contest.
Dr. Shane won't shut up.
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 23
he should always think with his head not his dick :(
Author's Response:
He is like most guys.
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 2:02 AM Title: Chapter 24
Damm Rose & Skankya ! Damm Edward for not being able to be faithful grrrrrr hopefully he will get his head out of his ass. Maybe Bella should meet someone else......hmmmm get Assward jealous. Thanks for the fast update :)
Author's Response:
The love hate of Rose and Skankya has just started trust me we have a long ways to go before the full truth of the ways all this is going down happens. This is a drama and is filled with ups and downs.
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Date: 22 Jul 2011 12:45 AM Title: Chapter 19
This is a good story but I have to say the Ms and Mr everytime they talk to each other is very annoying and also putting the same thing only from the others POV is kind of annoying too
Author's Response:
I have a deep love for the old classics and you know that is the way they used to address people. This was my first Fan Fic and I wrote the way that I had seen others write. If you have read any of my newer stuff Sorry they aren't E/B but you will see how much I've grown as a writer.
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Date: 21 Jul 2011 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 22
Great story please keep updating ! Ewwwwww Skankya what a bitch & Ropse too.
Author's Response:
Thank you and you will have more real soon.
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Date: 21 Jul 2011 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 22
I new it had to be a set up poor Edward and Bella. I would like to see you rewrite this story with the styal you write in now.??
Author's Response:
hmmmmmmm well saddly that won't be happening, but I will tell you that the sequel is more of what I write now as I am still working on it.
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Date: 21 Jul 2011 8:22 PM Title: Chapter 21
Rose and Tanya are evil bitches what is going on with Edward he cant be doing that with Tanya????
Author's Response:
And their evilness is just starting to show.
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Date: 21 Jul 2011 8:05 PM Title: Chapter 20
Is Tanya out of her mind???? Is Rose going to be a pain in the ass???
Author's Response:
Yes and so is Rose.
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Date: 21 Jul 2011 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 19
That went good I was afraid she would be very mad at him I am glad she wasnt
Author's Response:
But the troubles are just starting. lots of drama ahead.
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Date: 21 Jul 2011 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 18
Sweet story....enjoying readind it
Author's Response:
Thank you I call this my silly story.
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Date: 21 Jul 2011 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 18
He is just very worried about her but he comes across as a control freak.
Author's Response:
yup... I don't think he knows how to express himself correctly to her.
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 18
Oh Mr Edward did wrong he needs to get his act together or he will loose her before he ever gets her.Looking forward to more keep them comming please thanx.
Author's Response:
My internet is up and down right now, but I will do my best to get the 4 chapters a day posted.
Yup Edward did wrong.
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 9:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really like your story, we all need a little bit of Cinderella, but sometimes I feel as if the chapters are sightly out of order ??
Go on and best wishes - Tiina
Author's Response:
Chapter one was written by someone else and then I took over.
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 17
a little controling isnt he????
Author's Response:
Just a tad Just a tad.
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 15
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you,
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 6:44 AM Title: Chapter 14
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you,
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 6:38 AM Title: Chapter 13
:)
Author's Response:
Thankyou,
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 16
I could see how Bella would be embarassed for being so poor.
Author's Response:
I think we all can see and feel for her on this one.
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 6:24 AM Title: Chapter 15
How exciting. I have read the arangment and I can see that you have grown in your writing but this is a very good story also but your new one flows and does not feel choppy.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading both.
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 14
it begins cant wait for more.
Author's Response:
you will have more this soon.
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[Report This]Date: 20 Jul 2011 5:22 AM Title: Chapter 16
Yea!! The first date! It would be a little weird to have to clean your boss/boyfriends office. ;)
Author's Response:
not only that it weird to date someone of a higher position... When I was in the Army I was a Admin Clerk for a Battlion and dated a person that worked for our Group Headquarters... It was weird while I was in the Army, but I can't complain as we have now been married for 19years.
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Date: 20 Jul 2011 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 13
Alice is taking over????
Author's Response:
Alice is just being Alice you will see and understand more soon.
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Date: 19 Jul 2011 9:49 PM Title: Chapter 12
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you,
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Date: 19 Jul 2011 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 11
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you
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Date: 19 Jul 2011 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 10
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you
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Date: 19 Jul 2011 7:41 AM Title: Chapter 12
She dosent think she is good enough for him????
Author's Response:
nope
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Date: 19 Jul 2011 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 12
Boss and night janitor is interesting. :-) I thought Bella would play a little bit more clueless answering him since she had a low self-esteem so she wouldn't expect it to happen.
Author's Response:
That is why she answered things falsely she has no self-esteem and sees herself differently.
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Date: 19 Jul 2011 3:01 AM Title: Chapter 11
A good start getting to know each other
Author's Response:
Thank you.
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Date: 19 Jul 2011 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 11
Things are getting interesting! can't wait to see what comes next!
Author's Response:
you will see soon.
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Date: 18 Jul 2011 11:55 PM Title: Chapter 11
I t is looking good more please.
Author's Response:
Thank you
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Date: 18 Jul 2011 10:28 PM Title: Chapter 10
Things are looking up for Bella and Edward
Author's Response:
Just a tad.
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Date: 18 Jul 2011 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 10
Nice. Edward planned the whole thing.
Author's Response:
Thank you,
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Date: 18 Jul 2011 8:17 PM Title: Chapter 9
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you
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Date: 18 Jul 2011 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 8
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you
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Date: 18 Jul 2011 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 7
:)
Author's Response:
Thank you
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Date: 18 Jul 2011 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 8
I like how these two people communicate by passing notes. It's gradeschool and it's sweet.
Author's Response:
Yes it a little childish, but this is the way the story seemed to unfold in my twisted brain.
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