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Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 04 Mar 2012 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

:)



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: xXElle-BelleXx Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

I knew it! I knew she couldn't read.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Okay, I'll admit it - I love him and he's not so bad - now if he can just stop with the other girls and move Bella and the kids into his house, than we will be on the right track! Okay, sorry, this is your story to tell, but you have got me all wrapped up in it.

Loved this chapter,

Love,

Michele (plu)



Author's Response:

Michele~  Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Your reviews mean a lot to us, you are such a wonderful writer and I gave out the link for Hope Springs to several people on Fanfic.net in reviews.  I hoep youget more readers because that story just flat out ROCKS!  Love your stuff girlie.  We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)XOXO

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Not to be mean, but I hope that you guys have a very painful demise planned for Gina!  She's like a Roach in the projects... she just won't die!  No offence to the projects! :) Okay, Edward's moodswings are giving me whiplash!  Could he have been anymore of a jerk!  God, I hate him sooooo much right now!  All that said, I trust you guys, and I will just wait patiently for you guys to let me know the outcome!  Good job ladies!

Krazi

xoxo



Author's Response:

Oh I think you will love the out come for our dear Gina...LOL  Thanks for all your praise and reviews.  It is an honor for us to have a wonderful writer like you reading and reviewing us.  xoxo, Kasi (&nikky)

 

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 12:24 AM Title: Chapter 4: Stalking

Loved it!  Dying to know more of Bella's back story!

Krazi

xoxo



Author's Response:

There is a lot of it to come, and you will learn it as Edward learns it, since the story is in his POV.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  XOXO, Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03 Mar 2012 12:22 AM Title: Chapter 3: First Sight

I officially hate Rosalie at this point! I'm hoping that will change soon!  How funny was Zafrina!  She cracked me up calling him Edna!  Will we wver learn the story behind that?  The Bella in your story just breaks my heart!  I can't wait to see their stories unfold and see them grow closer!  Anther great chapter ladies!

Krazi

xoxo



Author's Response:

Zafrina's character is kinda molded after the nasally annoying drunk friend on Will and Grace.  (Can't think of her name, but she is so annoying and always does rude and or crazy stuff.)  Things get better,a nd Zafrina is quirky, but her heart is all good.  XOXOXO, Kasi &(Nikky)

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 2: Warning Signs

I'm not a big fan of Rosalie and Alice... and the jury's still out on Esme!  I wonder will there be any redemption for the those two down the line.  Edward's not such a bad guy in the grander scheme of things. He was pretty nice to Riley and Bree.  I really hope he's not having a heartattack!  Was that my beloved Isabella helping?  Great job ladies!  Can't wait for more!

Krazi

xoxo



Author's Response:

If you think you hate Alice and Rose now wait until a few chapters down the road they will not be on your christmas list I promise you that...  We love ya too Krazi...

Kasi &(Nikky)

Reviewer: krazi4TwiSaga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 1: Through His Eyes

Okay girls, I am here to review!  Lol! Now you got me in the beginning, because I just knew that Bella was the student in the back of the classroom, but then again when the cleaning lady came in, I knew it was her.  Love the start and can't wait for more!  Oh... FYI... Edward is a prick... as sexy as hel prick, but a prick nonetheless!  Until next time!

Krazi

xoxo



Author's Response:

Krazi~
yes my dear the confusing part was figuring out what character was Bella.  Edward is a PRICK first class A$$hole too, but in his defense he has a lot of reasons for being so darkly tainted in his views especially of females.  Love ya hardcore, thanks for reading and reviewing our stuff.  xoxo, Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

You made me cry!  (Not an easy feat.). I loved Jasper in this chapter!  My cousins and I were all raised with that same sense of manners and care for others that Jasoer exhibits.  Heaven help one of my male cousins if they had acted as Edward did the day they all had lunch.  The Edward we see now is almost a new man.  He sees all that he has missed and is beginning to realize that not all women are untrustworthy.  Like Bella, some will sacrifice out of love.  Alice...I somehow keep hoping that Jasper finally puts her in her place and on the right track.  An amazing chapter, and all I could have hoped for.  Thank you!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: lindsaywin Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Love this story and how the characters are developing



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: edlovesme Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

I really love that you had Bella tell Edward she can't read. I think it builds the trust that he needs. And yes thank god Jasper smacks him around, cuz if he didn't I would.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: Tinkerbell Blake Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 2:08 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Hi well I think Edward responed well to Bella's news and I was imoressed that he stopped asking questions.

Jasper is funny and I think that he could help both of them a lot and could it be because of Bella that Edward now needs the softer approach at Aro's?

Alice really needs to learn to butt out. Edward has made it clear that he doesn't want fixing up but she still tries I do hope that there is some comeuppance.

Look forward to your next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

WOW, that was an ear full.  I love this Jazz and LOL when he smack Eddie's head.  I also worried about Eddie commanding her without thought that she was not one of his girls.  He has redeemed himself with the shoes, food, and now teaching her to read.  Good shot again Jazz he really needs you.   Alice need to stop being Alice.  I bet if they tell Alice about Bella she would help her a lot.  I think she needs a young female to mentor her.  I am so sad that she went through such a horrible childhood and don't seem to realize it.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Great chapter, am so glad for the update. Him telling Siohban, "no cHance." was perfect.  I so wanted Edward to put Bella on his lap & hold her, poor thing.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

alice is a bitch

love jasper he is a hoot. seems things went well at lunch. jasper staring at bella's ass was too funny.

i am impressed by how much bella does. but it seems that is what she was taught and knows and does an awesome job.

thrilled that bella came clean on the no reading. i have faith edward will be able to teach her how to read i think they will be good for each other and will learn alot

love it



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: cjrich Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 5:49 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

I just love this story and finally getting to hear a little bit about Bella's past.  Edward is trying and I am proud of how he handled her news, and didn't push her further than she could handle.  Thank you - Cheri



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

 

Reviewer: LeslieWhitlock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 5:09 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

What a great story! Just started it today and couldn't stop. I didn't even work on my own story!

I like that Edward is making such great progress in his quest of self improvement when it comes to Bella. And I like that Bella seems to be more open to him.

It seems that they have both been put through hell by their mother/step mother.

Love Jasper and his relationship with Edward. I am ready to punch both Alice and Rose in their face. Please let me. Just one time each. That's all I ask!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
LOL... Have to say that if you want to punch them, you might have a line to stand in, because i am half responsible for writing these b*tch*s, and I want to throw them off the nearest cliff!  Our next update is next Thursday, so get some writing done between now and then, I don't want no mad readers, for you or for me. 
We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: Twifan1228 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Kasi & Nikky -  How are you both... well I hope....I tell you I get so excited for Thursdays lately **big lopsided grin** this chapter was wonderful... Let me say, Edward can be clueless and I can so relate to Jazz wanting to hit him upside the head... **chuckles, and shakes head**  Now sadly I am really ready for him to give up Aro's girl's but I'm not sure that is what you have in mind, so I dealnwith it, I know he has needs (I know they are no where close to that) it just grips at my heart to know that he fills his need in this veiled manner...His anonimity is necessary, I certainly get that, and I don't have a issue with his need for Dominance, nope not at all.. I just wish he felt something other than pity for Bella... I'm sure I just to hold out and have patience....just greedy....I think he did show he is starting to "feel" and that is what the whole deal with Maria was about, it's just a foreign emotion he is not sure what to make of it...I guess I was wondering early on if Bella was one of his girls, but I learned really quickly that she Most Definitely was not!!  

So the dinner for 10  OMG Quick ...here Anthony take my Cane and order Alice to the bench for some much needed corrective lessons.... WTF is her problem... or Rose's for that matter...arrrgggghhh....Flog, Cane, Paddle... I down care which impact implement you choose I'm good with it... you can even take a Cat to them for all I care...  Loved how he handled Ms Sioban (misspelled) but you know she was just flat rude...woman get a grip...and not of Edward either...

when Edward got her open up about her reading abilities...tears were streaming..now he's going to teach her...when she told him she thought she misled him... Holy Crow I was high fiving her for being so honest with him...  

I love this story ladies it so totally owns me....Have a wonderful week till next Thursday... TTFN  Kathy



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Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
Kathy~ thanks for being one of bestest and biggest fan girls...WE FLOVE YOU! 
We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

 

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 3:37 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

I am so glad Edward and Bella talked and she told him what she did. What she has been through is so sad. I'm glad Edward kept his cool while she was telling him she can't read. I love that he is going to teach her. I bet she is going to surprise herself. The way she looked at the card broke my heart. I wonder if it is the first one she has ever received. I love this story! I can't wait to see what is next!!! Great job...thanks!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: shannen Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

i'm loving it...please keep it coming :)

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: noway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

I enjoyed how you handled Bella's meeting with Jasper.  It was very funny but kind of sad at the same time.  I'm glad some things about Bella's past is finally coming out.  I also liked how you have made Alice kinda bitchy.  Sometimes she is written so sweet it makes me want to throw up.  Can't wait for the next up date.

Maria 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

It is heart warming to see Edward begin to open up to trust and be kind. As Isabella's story come out my heart aches for her pain and fear. You ladies are doing an awesome job. I hope you can update more often.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: IGOTEAMEDWARD Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

That chapter explains so much. I love the story! :)



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

looking foward to the next chapter 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: flower123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Mar 2012 12:15 AM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

soooo she comes clean about that but not yet about her age...at least now he is going to teach her. update soon



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Hey he picked Maria cause its me... No seriously I am not a hooker,,ha!  Ed is being way to nice he is going to flip when he finds out her age.  Love jasper he is one of my faves!  Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: keola Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 11:25 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

i just wish he'd stop going to aro's



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: bluebelle11 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Best update yet!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Sublime, just the right amount of levity to offset the tension and sadness of a clearly abused childhood and the slow bringing out of feelings from Edward.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: tlwatkins36 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

First, I don't like Alice so far in this story, so I hope that she stops trying to hook Edward up with other g irls.. 2nd, I don't like Edward going to the club, just saying ... its so wrong to read him being with any other woman after meeting Bella... I am really for the healing, learning and loving part between them.. HEA all the way... can't wait for more..



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: jamesofjungle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

I am glad that Bella finally came clean to Edward.  I know that there is no reson to be upset that Edward still visits an upscale brothel, but it still is a whore house.  I just find it disturbing.  Does Maria look like Bella?  Is that the reason he has seen her three times instead of the one every six weeks?  Again, I know that it is just ridiculous for me to be upset that he is getting his needs fullfilled by many others because Bella is now where ready for anything of that nature.  I guess I just figured that he would have realized that he is starting to have feelings for Bella.  I look at as cheating.  As I said, it is ridiculous for me to think this way, and I know that it is not logical.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: janell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Maria is the one who resembles Isabella, right?

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: Elizabeth Hanns Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 8: Birthday Surprise

Can not wait for next thursday now!!! He knows!!!!!!!!!!!!! When will he find out every thing?? But AMAZING as normal you have made lesson plan bearable!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

We know that the more the story develops the more we all want Edward to just post haste stop going to Aro’s club.  I wanted to give a clear run down on the girls that he sees there, so that we can keep things straight.  Edwards’s girls at Aro’s:  Sally: sex addict 27 tall she about 5ft 8 red shoulder length hair thin and tall. Likes roll play.  Irina: 6ft tall slender and Blond Hair to her cheek bones like rough sex and anal sex. 29 years old.  Carmen: 5ft 6 long black hair enjoys being controlled by men, average weight and size. Likes BDSM and being restrained.  Maria:  5’5 180 pounds curvy and thicker than other girls.  Sandy blonde hair, cute features and very large breasts.  More relaxed and sensual.  Edward only sees her maybe once a month, sometimes longer than that between visits.  He controls her too, but it is all about sensual and erotic pleasure with her than it is about rough and controlling hard core sex.  Some question if he chose Maria the last time and more often, because she reminded him of Bella.  Truth be known Carmen would be the one who resembles Bella the most.  He is not with Maria to pretend she is Bella, but because from Maria he gets the softer more sensual erotic side of sex.  Edward had made the decision a long time ago to make himself this untouchable person, and when it came to the girls most of the time he went with the hard core domination side of the act.  I can’t say that Edward’s visits to the club will cease right away, but I do assure you that soon our professor with the extremely dark view of all women will soon realize that he just can’t do it anymore.  He may be smart and he may be a lot of things, but sometimes when you shut yourself off, it’s hard to wake up those pieces of yourself.  I hope that this helps a little in the explanation of Edward and his tainted views.  I will tell you this, I just got done with my part on a chapter where he comes clean with Bella about what he did when he spent time at the club, and telling the truth can be quite cleansing.

Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 9 Teaser… Subject to changes during BETA process.

“Mr. Masen, I don’t mean to be rude, but where are we going? Do you need me to work at your house today?”

I shake my head as we keep walking.  “No Isabella, as you know all my employees have to have a medical check.  I am accompanying you to yours.”  We stop walking when we arrive at the bus stop. I look at Isabella who is looking upset.

“Mr. Masen, I didn’t bring any money with me.  I can’t afford to have a medical check, I am sorry.” I look down at her and frown.  There is something in her expression that tells me that it’s not just money she is worried about. I look up seeing the bus coming to a stop beside us.

We both get on, but this time I lead her to the seats at the back.  I motion for her to sit and I sit next to her, leaving a little room between us. “Isabella, I set up a medical plan for each of my staff including you. Your medical is a part of that so you don’t have to worry about payment, it has already been covered.” I am not really lying, more like stretching the truth a little. “I know that you don’t like people too close to you, for that reason I am taking you to see a dear friend of mine.” I smile thinking about how to explain Carlisle. “His name is Carlisle, and he is much more than a friend to me.  I guess you could say that he is like a father figure. He is a very compassionate man, and he has an amazing ability to relax people. He will not hurt you. I would never allow him, or anyone to hurt you.” I didn’t really mean for what I said at the end to come out, but as I looked into her eyes it just came out.  She looked me right in the eye for much longer then she usually does.  I watch her reaction and notice her bite her lip, as she nods her head.

“Will you stay with me, the whole time?”  She asks, as her eyes fall to the floor. 

Without meaning to, my hand moves to the underside of her chin.  I feel small sparks on the tips of my fingers as I keep my fingers against her skin.  These are those same comforting sparks I felt the night of my panic attack, I dismiss it.  I slowly tilt her chin up, making her look at me again. “I will stay with you, if that is what you want.  This is your choice Isabella.  I know that I have been ordering you around a lot, but this time it is your complete choice and decision.  If you wish for me to stay in the room with you, then I will.  If you want me to leave, then I will.  This is all about you, and what you want.” 

She keeps looking at me and I could feel her shaking a little, but she never pulls her face away from my hand.  “I would like you to stay in the room please, Mr. Masen.” I nod my head letting her face go.

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Mar 2012 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Okay. Yes he's getting redeemed and now I've gotten hooked on this story.

Lim also so sadly caught up. It looks like you update frequently & I'm hoping you stick with this story, (I'm so excited to see you've completed 2 other stories & am now off to read something new!)

Thanks for writing & for the rec's



Author's Response:

I assure you that we will be posting come hell or high water.  As long as there is power and there is viable internet service you will get a chapter every Thursday until all is done and said.  Thank you for the wonderful story love and we both are grateful for your reviews.  Thank you, Kasi (&Nikky)  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Feb 2012 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I thought that this was another great chapter & like how this story is progressing along.

I have to repeat it seems like Edward is the one who needs the therapy more than Bella.



Author's Response:

Edward will get help, he will come to light soon enough that he is in need of that assistance.  Thanks you again for reading and reviewing.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Feb 2012 2:36 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Wow, he really needs to see Jasper's colleague.



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Yes you are very correct about this.  Thank you so very much for reading and reviewing.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: farsideomoon Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Feb 2012 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 4: Stalking

Great chapter. It would seem that miss Bella has some reading difficulties, dyslexic maybe.



Author's Response:

Bella is completely uneducated.  She has never attended any school, ever. with the exception of attending the college, to work.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  We look forward to more of your thoughts.  Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28 Feb 2012 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

WOW, amazing storyline.  I am still curious as to what the deal is with Bella.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: janell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26 Feb 2012 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

:)

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2012 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

well he is sorta getting his act together... not too bad.  i am waiting for him to put the pieces together.  Poor bella i feel so sorry for her.  life is not good for her. 

Ah the 80s!  i think we are dating ourselves when we mention the good old days!  i loved my walkman too and my mom always laughed at me because i would sing out loud!!

thanks for the update can't wait for more!  keep up the good work!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 Maria~  I was born in 69 so the 80's were my teenage/going into adult years.  You know Big Hair, rolling the jeans, layering the socks, layering the sweaters and popping the collars, and having a walkman was cool!  LOL...  It kills me that nowadays you see the same styles, just a tad differently.  The big hair bumped up is in the back now instead of the front, the rolled jeans are now skinny legged jeans, the walkman is now the ipod.  SIGH~  Anyway  on with the review reply.  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: cjrich Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2012 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Love this story, it is really quite different than a lot of the other stories out there. I like dickward and I am so looking forward to learning about Bella's story.  Have a lot of hope for this story and can't wait.  Thank you -Cheri

PS  PeopleLikeUs is my favorite story on all of TWCS and of course am thoroughly loving Hope Springs.  Michelle is amazing and I too am a fan for life.  You kind of remind me of her...just saying.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
Cheri~  I must tell you that I personally was in awe of your review, to have anyone compare me or us in the same catagory as Michele is an honor.  I have been a fan-girl of Michele's for a very long time, and she has always been very good to me.  She rec'ed the hell out of my story A Sub Search and I did the same for her on People Like Us.  We are many many many miles apart her and I, but from the few conversations via email we have had, I think very highly of her.  So thank you, it is a complete honor and your words have been taken to heart.  XOXO...  Now on with the review reply...  
We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: sassycook Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2012 4:55 AM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

love hope springs-great story

 

well i think edward is coming along in his redemption. he still fumbles but he is going to. just who he is. i am also curious it does seem as if bella is submissive. i know she had a rough childhood and is now raising her siblings. i am dying to hear her back story

loving the story



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
Sassycook~  Thank you for the story love, we feel the same about your reviews!  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: LBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 24 Feb 2012 1:22 AM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

I don't always review stories I read. This one is so special to me that I have to tell you how wonderful it os. Happy writing.

Author's Response:

LBD~ Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  We also want to send oyu a special thank you for reviewing since you often don't.  Your reviews and everyone we get mean the world to both Nikky and I, so Thank YOU.  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: Ladyros Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 9:52 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Well at least he is trying but i still think he is a ass hole to be so mean and can't get over what one girl did to him , please other people have been through alot worse in life and he still treats women so bad.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Its heartbreaking, so selfsacrificing, got to love her...I think he does.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

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Thanks for reading and reviewing I sent the chapter 8 teaser with the review reply for chapter 6.  Thank you, Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Aaaaw Kasi - you pimper-girl you! Thanks for the rec honey and I must say girls, your Edward is redeming himself nicely!!! I aprove whole-heartedly!! Now if we can just get him to realise that she can't read, maybe he could teach her... and then of course he could always offer her the lovely three bedrooms downstairs (yeah, don't think I didn't catch that!).

I loved this chapter and as always, I am hungry for more!

Love and hugs to you both,

Michele



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 Michele~
I told you I was rec'ng you this chapter, and I meant it.  Your story owns me, and I am making my way over there to read the update in a few minutes...If I can get these people who call me MOM to leave me alone for a few minutes.  You know I love ya hard core girlie, thanks for takign the tiem to read our stuff. 
We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

 

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

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Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: Pricklypearess Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 8:12 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

He's redeemed himself.  Now I'm just trying to figure out what happened to Bella.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

He is doing everything in his power to help her with out upsetting her I wonder how long it will take him to figure out why he is thinking of her when having sex she is perfect for him.  She needs someone to look after her she is just focused on the kids.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Edward has made a wonderful "humanization".  I think his watching Isabella so intently is partly from attraction but partly from sheer curiousity.  He needs to figure this woman out!  I'd be willing to guess that Jasper helps him put 2 + 2 together.  Wonderful update, thank you!  By the way, your recommendation - "Hope Springs" ?  I couldn't agree with you more.  The story is a virtual treasure chest!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

Michele has been one of my personal favorite authors since, heck the start of People Like Us... sigh.  I just <3 her she is the bomb, and she alwyas reads my stuff and reviews it and makes me feel good about it. 

Now onto me and Nikky's story.... We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: Twifan1228 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Hi Kasi (& Nikky) -  Yes the redemption is coming along.  I loved how she boldly told him that his life is his life and she was not there to make judgements on his belongings or how he came to aquire them either. 

I also hope this stuborn Professor will get a little better handle on that "verbal filter" around the sweetlings ... **giggles and chuckles** the name of the school teacher was pretty funny sorry, Isabella! but it was comical!!!  Right? 

As for Alice, O-M-G!  What a hoot she is!  Did she even take a breathe in her rambling to Edward. lol!

Hum, interesting how fast Isabella is with math; I think that he is going to quickly discover her reading abilities, or shall we say inabilities...  but she does seem pretty smart overall, but he is really sly with his stealth in watching them... notice I call him stealth, rather than Stalkerish, yeah I've been rather put out with him, but I still hold out hope for him in the long run.  

Till next week, you know this story totally owns me.. Till Next Thursday ladies!  Have a good one and take care.  Kathy



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Kathy, we love your reviews they are always so kind and wonderful!  THANK YOU SO MUCH!  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

I am feeling a lot better about Edward. He seems to be really trying to help Bella. He knows there is more to her story. I just wonder when he is going to figure it out. I hope Bella is not upset by Jasper coming by the house. I can see that the kids are everything to Bella. She always makes sure they are taken care of, but I worry about her. I love this story! Great job...thanks so much!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: paola2208 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 6:34 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

Another great chapter! But patient is not my middle name, so updating once a week is killing me! LOL. I need more,more,more.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

I promise to post as often as we can, we are writing away on the chapters fast and all crazy like to get them to you.  Have faith it is a great story and the fun has just begun.  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: Elizabeth Hanns Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

AMAZING!!! as normal... Can not wait till next thursday now!! when will edward find out....

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View. 

Edward has a while to wait on the whole story, but Bella has to trust him first.  We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

looking forward to more 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: sevanderslice Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Feb 2012 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 7: New Job

I'm confused about the social security number thing.  If she and her brother and sister don't have any, how did Seth and Leah get enrolled in school? 

Other than that, I'm interested and I want to find out what happens.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.

 

We are both extremely proud and excited at the response this story continues to garner.  Thank you for being one of those who leave us some love.  To heed off a bunch of extra questions, we want to be clear that all three of them (Bella, Seth, and Leah) have birth certificates, social security cards, and were born in hospitals. Bella lived with her birth mother for a while (more will come about this soon), then she went to live with her father and step mom (cough.. MONSTER).  Bella does not know anything about her actual information; she has been kept ignorant for MANY reasons.  Bella does however have all the needed info for the kids, a part of that is because of Zafrina and Aro assisting her in getting the needed paperwork found.  As for Edward, you will continue to see the changes she causes in him, and at least they are for the better.  Thanks for the story love and we look forward to hearing from you again!

Kasi (& Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 8… Subject to changes during BETA process… of course.

I shake my head.  “We are fine Isabella, you can return to what you were doing.” She gives me a nod, turns, and walks away.

“So that the famous Isabella then?” I can’t tell by his face what he is thinking.

“Yeah, that is her, so first thoughts?”

He lets out a sigh and rubs his head. “She’s what, twenty-four?”

I nod my head.  “Well, in three weeks she will be.”

He walks with me towards my kitchen. “Well, she sure is small and not just in height.  She looks like she has missed some essential nutrients over the years.  She’s very pale and the dark coloring under her eyes would lead me to believe that she doesn’t sleep much and she looks to be extremely tired.  Her pupils show that she needs more Calcium, and Iron. She also looks to you for permission to call me Jazz.  She seems to be unsure of what she is, and isn’t allowed to do.” He stops talking while pouring himself a drink. I pull at my hair having not learned anything new about her.

I make us lunch as we continue to chat some more, but not about the topic I want to discuss, Isabella.  I make some extra food for her on the off chance that she hasn’t eaten anything yet.  After what I saw at the mall and what Jazz just confirmed, I assume she more than likely has skipped lunch. I decide to make up some sandwiches to go with the soup I am making.  I can’t decide on what kind to make, so I make four different kinds.  Everything is done, and I carry the covered pot of soup to the table. 

“Isa. . . Ouch, what the fuck, Jazz?” I ask rubbing my head where Jasper just slapped me.

“She is not your pet, Edward.”

I glare at him.  “Jasper, I know that, I was just. . .”

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Feb 2012 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I died laughing at her comments about BJ and HJ, priceless!



Author's Response:

Canadaci~

Thanks you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Nikky and I are both very proud of this story nad yes the BJ/HJ part was very funny and fun to write too.  Writing about Isabella is hard in a way becasue she is an adult, but yet still just a child.  Thank you for reading and reviewing once again, the next chapter is posted already.  Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: pindrop Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Feb 2012 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I really like this story. that being said I would be pissed if someone treated me like that, and feel she forgave him way to easily. I can't wait or Edward to make amends.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: janell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 18 Feb 2012 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Im glad he finally got around to 'making amends.' I wouldn't worry to much about us hating Edward. After all it is EDWARD. We forgive him easier than we should.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: LTBD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 10:45 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Thank you. I still cried because I was so touched by Isabella's compassion and caring personality. Edward was a trip and is on positive track. Loved it.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: flower123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

but bella seems to not be able to read?at 13 she should be able to read but maybe not well....update soon



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: TillITryIllNeverKnow Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I think your co cept of Edward here is right on the mark.  He's been hurt...badly...make that burned, so he won't trust easily.  That he is beginning to be able to trust Bella here is a huge step.  His main rational for this is perfect too - she has a harder time with people and the world than he does but he is able to recognize a broken, yet pure soul.  Marvelous chapter.  His talk with Jasper was especially intriguing.  Thanks for a great update.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: Pricklypearess Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 4:31 AM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Good boy.  Can't wait to hear Bella's background story.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 4:24 AM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Well things seem to be turning around for them. I love that Bella got rid of the picutres. I was awesome. I hope things go better for these two. I think they both can use a friend. Great job...thanks!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: tlwatkins36 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I am glad to see Edward coming around to help Bella now.  Hope this meeting is good and he figures it all out soon.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: cjrich Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Love this story and can't wait to learn more about Bella.  Edward you did very well in this chapter for being an Assward!  Thank you - Cheri



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: Lud Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17 Feb 2012 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I also had doubts about the age of Bella.
Edward decided to apologize and help Bella.… great weight for a girl so young.
Ok, Edward said he did not want sex, but until when? Just wondering.
Thank you.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: Elizabeth Hanns Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 11:54 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I am hocked to this!!!! Can not wait for the next update! Xoxo

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  here is a little more info for you and a teaser to bid you over till next Thursday.  This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: Twifan1228 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Hidee Ho!!! Nikky & Kasi~

I hope this day finds you both doing well!!!  OMG this chapter was over the top wonderful... First off Bella is so adoreable I want to bring her Right through this computer and put her in her own little room with a closet full of clothes and nice bed to sleep in and plenty of food to eat.. Well of course Seth and Leah too! but after all we know that she doesn't do anything for herself...  Anyway, was that not just wonderful the way you wrote Edward's reaction to explaning Verbal Filter to her... Well done Miastro!!!  Well done!  Then I was gasping for air myself whilst hyperventaling over blow job and hand job... Dear Lord above... Bless her heart!!!! 

Lord have mercy when Jasper gets her into therapy what on earth will he discover?! Holy Moses! 

You know you have me on the edge of my seat waiting on updates for this... This was the first thing I HAD to read when I got off work today!!!!  

Ladies all the best and see you next update!!!  Till then mauwh!! Kathy



Author's Response:

Hello Ms. Kathy~
How are you?  We are both so pleased as punch to have you on this journey with us!  So giddy and excited that you were wantign to read us first...YAY!!!  We plan to update eacha dn every Thursday and that is a vast improvement from our starting choice of every other Thursday.  So glad you loved the humor of hand adn blow jobs...Bella is adoreable and has had a rough time.  The review reply I wrote for everyone will explain a little more and give you a tad more insight!  Thanks for being such a wonderful reader and fan of our work! 
Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Hey Kasi and Nikky - how is it possible to love this guy one minute and to want to slap him the next?  It's your amazing writing that's what!! I am so hooked on this story and I hope that he will learn to take it SLOW with Bella. I also can't wait to hear what Bella's story is and why she doesn't have 'papers'?

I know that she's looked after the twins from when she was 13 but did she never go to school?  I can't wait for the next update and hows about a sneak peak?????

Love you guys,

Michele



Author's Response:

Michele~ 
Thanks so much for all your kind words, you know I love you hard core girlie.  I am actuall kinda mad at myself becasue I was goign to REC Hope Springs out to everyone with this chapter, and then this morning FFN was a major fail and we couldn;t post our chapter til late and I got frustrated and forgot....But it is so a rec that will be posting with the next chapter.  FLOVE YOUR STORY SISTA~  Here is the review reply I wrote for everyone, it will give you some answers. 
Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

Okay I figured out she couldn't read but not write.  She should have got the basics down though unless she didn't go to school at all.  I mean my daughter is 11 and can read and write some.  Is Ed really starting to change or is he just feeling guilty?  I don't trust him yet.  Thanks for the update!  Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Maria, THANKS FOR BEING OUR 100TH REVIEW!!!  WOOT WOOT!!

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

That is a great start a becoming a good person and when will he relise that he is very attrated to Bella.  Jasper is in shock of how much feelings Edward is putting into Bella.  I cant wait for more.



Author's Response:

Troberts~  really glad your enjoyign this.  Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: artri Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

It just seems to get better and better.



Author's Response:

Artri~ 
Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: sweetiedolphin Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I'm glad Edward is turning things around. Good chapter. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: Alabastdelf Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

A great improvement on Edward`s behalf.I am impressed with your style of writing and the thought process that is clearly behind your work.Especially in the segment where Edward speaks his problems to Jasper.Brilliant.I wonder if you`ve read some psychology books.



Author's Response:

Nikky, nor I have read a lot of psychology books, but I personally have a daughter who has adhd, ODD, depression and anxeity disorder.  She is only 12 and she has already be pre-diagnosed as Bi-Polar since age 7.  I for certain have my hands full with her.  Nikky is amazing with her thought process and I give her a BUNCH of credit for it.  We do a lot of research and we have a wonderful team of girls helping us keep our I's dotted and out T's crossed.  Thanks for the compliments on our writing skills.  Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Feb 2012 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 6: Making Amends

looking forward to the enxt chatper 



Author's Response:

Ianigirl~

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: LTBD Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Feb 2012 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

I do hope it gets better for Isabella soon. I know how she feels to be struggling and someone making it worse by being so rude, unkind and judgemental. I also hope Edward sees the errors and makes changes soon or I'll try to wait a few chapters to catch up so I won't be so upset with the situation while waiting for an update. It is an awesome piece of work and well written. Just hurry up please.

Author's Response:

LTBD~
We will post each Thursday, unless we get behind, but right now things are sitting very pretty for the next at least 9 weeks.  Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

 

Reviewer: Canadaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13 Feb 2012 6:35 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

He's going to be bald soon, yeah you've got issues.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  I hope he don't lose his pretty hair, it is one of his best quailities right now.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: Lud Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12 Feb 2012 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Edward is an idiot but an idiot is hot!
I thought he was making an indecent proposal to Bella.
I wonder what the connection from Bell and Aro, looking forward to capitulo.Obrigado.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  You will learn a lot more about Bellas background including Aro's involvment in coming chapters.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: Alabastdelf Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2012 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

He really must make amends, very big amends.And for making something, he should find Bella a new job, for starters.



Author's Response:

Edward has a lot of sucking up to do!  Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: troberts Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Feb 2012 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

He needs to go kick his own ass what a prick she has been nothing but nice to him and just because that bitch Tanya fucked him over he thinks every women is like that so after he kicks his own ass he needs to pull his head out of it.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: cindbear3 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2012 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Great story. I want to cry for her.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: lanigirl96003 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2012 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

loved the chapter looking forward to mroe 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: Twifan1228 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2012 1:14 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Ahhh  Kasi (& Nikky) - Here we are again with another totally Emotionally Gripping story, that I personally find myself in near panic over thinking about the life that Bella is living, or shall I say merely existing in...And Professor, as much as I want to Clobber him HARD in the BALLS, I can't help but cry for him as well...because of his inability to see beyond the end of his damn nose apparently.. Come Now Edward what part of YOU personally seeing that you knocked the woman down the stairs didn't you get, in addition to that... has there been any point period in which Bella took anything from anyone?  No! Has she done anything for herself?  I would go as far as suggest that perhaps she is not able to even read... perhaps she can, but I do wonder sometimes...  I guess my point is that you pull me into the story and just envoke such emotion from you words...

BTW  already voted @ TLS for this story!!!! Best of Luck dear one's...  Love the story  Kathy



Author's Response:

Thank you Kathy for reading and reviewing our story.  We are both so excited to see you reading this story as well.  The writing has vastly improved hasn't it??  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

 

Reviewer: Laia_222 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10 Feb 2012 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

An belive that Edward has broken the Bella's recorder!!! he should to apologise to her!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

I was so mad at him the whole time I was reading this chapter. I know things have not been the greatest in his life, but he is not the only one that has had it rough. I really can't believe that he ran into Bella and knocked her down the stairs, not to mention her recorder getting broke in the process. It is a good thing she left her stuff in his office. I really hope he can make things right with her. I can't wait until the next chapter. Great job...thanks so much!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: kaybrans Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

I think Edward needs a new house keeper & he should be buying an Ipod for Bella too!! :)



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 4: Stalking

I love how he thought of her as my girl when he thought about all the stuff those guys had done. He took very good care of her. She seem to be fighting off a panic attace of her own. I am loving this story, but now I am worried about the next chapter. Great job...thanks!!!

Author's Response:

I feel good, because I know that you are going into the toughest chapter of the story thuis far alerted of what is ahead somewhat.  I hope beyond all that you continue to enjoy reading this story.  Thanks for all the wonderful reviews.  I am excited that on the next review I get to send you the teaser for chapter 6.  :) YAY!  Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 5:08 PM Title: Chapter 3: First Sight

I love Zafrina! Edward needs her in his life. Taylor was ready to do what needed to be done. Good for him standing up to Edward even though it was only because he was more afraid of Marcus. I am afraid Gina is going to be a real big problem. I can't wait to see how Edward deals with her.

I feel bad that Edward missed the dinner and that no one knew where he was. I understand why Rose was mad, but she could have listened. She is going to get a big surprise when Edward's car shows up at her shop. Great job...thanks so much!!!

Author's Response:

I love Zafrina too and she is so hilarious calling him Edna.  LOVED IT.  I am so excited to have a new reader joining us.  Please if you can take the time and go to the www.tehlemonadestand.blogspot.com and vote for this story it is in the poll and voting ends very soon.  Thanks Kasi and (Nikky)

Reviewer: amwine Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 2: Warning Signs

Edward hasn't always been treated the best by women. No one really listens to him. Those women were awful! Thanks!!!

Author's Response:

No Edward has never had a fully healthy relationship with any woman.  Not his mother and never a girlfriend.  Even his school friend Alice, used him to get her hands on his (adopted) brother and his adopted sister was only nice to him to sink her claws into his other buddy.  His biggest betrayal though came from Esme, who was supposed to look out for him.  Unfortunetly sometimes judgements cloud preception and choices and things go wrong.  Can't give away much more, but you get the idea.  Sadly an uneducated illiterate girl will be the one that will hopefully eventually get him to be a whole man.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Reviewer: NelumOnelius Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

:)



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: Tinkerbell Blake Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

I have loved this chapter and must say I have tears running down my face for Bella. Lets hope Edward opens his eyes and see's. Looking forward to the next one.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: CassieCullen06 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

I seriously have tears for Bella.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: janell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

I'm glad the dick feels guilty.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 9:19 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Well,  Edward needs a heart transplant.  His is dead.  I hate people like this. Actually hate them.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

Reviewer: MaryMary Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 8:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: Through His Eyes

why oh why can anyone write Bella as anything other than deficient. She is poor, stupid, slow, clumbsy, pregnant, whore, prostitue, cheated on by her husband. The listen goes on and on.  He can be a mental patient but could Bella be something of stature?

 

 



Author's Response:

Not in this story she can't, because I would not choose anyone else to be Edward's true partner.  In the end she needed to be uneducated, timid, and clearly used and abused.  Where she may be those things now, she has one thing that a lot of people seem to lack at times, compassion.  Bella will be much stronger than she appears now.  Thank you for reading and reviewing.  Kasi (&Nikky) 

Reviewer: flower123 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 6:53 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

oh poor bella. aro is right you can't judge someone or someone elses past misstakes. update soon



Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing our story. Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us. We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him. I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again. We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so. We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us. This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said. We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts. From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you. Kasi (& Nikky) Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process… The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it. I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him. “Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side. “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit. I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face. I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor. “I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time. Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her. I don’t know how to fix it. How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done? I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again. Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there? I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again. Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really. She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad. I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared. In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others. I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest. I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger. All she did was fucking help me, time after time. So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad. I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear. What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.” I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset. “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her. Tell me what I can do? Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?” I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up. Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start. “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

Reviewer: peoplelikeus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

My Darling Kasi and Nikky - I am sorry for what I am about to say but:

THAT LOW-LIFE, DOUBLE CROSSING, BACKSTABBING, ASSHOLE! THAT BASTARD! THAT FUCKING LITTLE  SELF ABSORBED, SELF GRATIFYING, SELF INDULGENT DICKHEAD!!!!

And as for you two! You should be ashamed of yourselves for making me cry at 8 am this morning!!!! He is horrible! he is probably one of the most HATEFUL characters that I have ever come acorss and I keep fucking trying to find SOME REDEEMING QUALITY about this man - BUT SO FAR THERE IS NOTHING!!! NOT ONE THING! 

Honest to God, I want to rip his fucking eyes out!!!  *shakes head sorrowfully*

Kas and Nikk, I don't know how you are going to dig this bastard out of the hole that he is in, but you had better do something and FAST!!!! Coz I'm ready to kill him myself.

Okay, no that that is out of the way, you had better update soon and can I please have a pre-view of the next chapter to sooth my nerves???

BTW, this chapter was riveting!

Love and hugs,

Michele

 



Author's Response:

Michele~ 

My lovely dear friend from way across the pond, loves and hugs to you too and I am so sorry we have made you cry.  I <3 you big time and I am so proud to have you reviewing me like this.  I am not sure if you took the tiem to vote, but please do right now we are loosing to a story who has not updated in over 4 months...  :-(    Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…


The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

 

Reviewer: Maria11 Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Feb 2012 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 5: Walls We Build

Oh Ed you are so hard to like.  Even aro is better than you! You are a prized prick if there ever was one...thanks for the update love it can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing our story.  Nikky and I are very proud of this story and it takes a lot to write things sometimes that even upset us.  We really needed to show just how darkly tainted Edward is, and unfortunately right now many of you hate him.  I know it will take a lot for you to relinquish those hatred feelings, but we hope that we are great enough writers and story tellers to achieve making you like him again.  We know it is always easier to burn a bridge than it is to rebuild it, but we promise to put forth the effort in doing so.  We want to thank you in advance for your votes, support, rec’s, and for just being on this twisted journey with us.  This story will be somewhere around 30 chapters when all is done and said.  We hope that you continue to read and review and share with us your thoughts.  From the bottom of our hearts, and to the moon and beyond... Thank you.

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 6 Teaser… All Subject to change during the beta process…
The shitting feeling is still there, and I have no idea what the fuck I can do to get rid of it.  I head over to Jasper’s office hoping to see him.

“Jasper says that you can go in now.” I look at the woman speaking, and I give her a curt nod as I head into his office. “Edward,” I look at him and he stops talking, and tilts his head to the side.  “Okay, what is going on, what happened?” He asks as he waves at me to sit.  I sit down on the seat across from him and rub my face.  I sigh unsure where to start, so I jump up and start to pace the floor.

“I screwed up, and I mean I really screwed up this time.  Jazz, I fucking hurt her, and I mean really fucking hurt her.  I don’t know how to fix it.  How I can get her to forgive me for what I have done?  I mean, fuck I’ll be lucky if she even speaks to me again.  Well really I know she will because she, fuck, I don’t want to say she is weak, but if I talk to her she will reply. How do I make right Jazz, without putting myself out there?  I don’t want to get hurt again, I could with her and I can’t go through that again.  Fuck, but I don’t think she do that, to anyone really.  She’s not made that way, but I have really gone and hurt her bad.  I never gave her a chance, I was still. . . no, I am to fucking scared.  In this case I think I made a new friend, but the dream. . . and I thought she stabbed me in the back like all the others.  I see her face in my dreams, the last two nights have been worse than all the rest.  I can see how much I hurt her, and the bad thing is she did nothing to warrant my anger.  All she did was fucking help me, time after time.  So many times, and she has been so hurt before and I know it’s been bad.  I can see it clearly in her eyes, the pain and the fear.  What if I push it what if she can never let anyone in ever again because what I did.”  I am still pacing and pulling my hair, I am so upset.  “Fuck Jazz I was a real fucking prick, and complete asshole to her.  Tell me what I can do?  Please I need to fix this, tell me how I can fix it please?”  I beg him as I feel my breathing speed up.  Jasper who was still sitting in his chair looks at me and suddenly comes out of his trance, as I feel the cold sweats start.  “Please Jazz you need to tell me how to fix this.”

 

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