Date: 23 Feb 2014 10:08 AM Title: Chapter 17 I'm a Vampire!
Bella's shopping spree sounds fabulous! I'm pretty sure the session with Rosalie helped a lot. Bella is getting so much closer to who she wants to be, with Rose's help. The description of Edward's new outfit was surely enough to give Alice apoplexy!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 9:42 AM Title: Chapter 16 Full Stride Institute
So now Bella has marked her mate, and taken down her first kill and drained it. She is more vampire than human I'm thinking. It must be nearly time for her to tell Charlie where to go and what to do to himself when he gets there! She has to be so ready to leave the pretence of living in his house, the Dump!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 9:21 AM Title: Chapter 15 Her Lion Finding His Kitten
I guess Bella's change is nearer than any of them thought, if that rousing session was any indication! Boy, Alice is being so unreasonable and I'm not sure why or what she will do if they continue to thwart her!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 8:44 AM Title: Chapter 14 The Original Takedown
Can't say I'm too sad to hear Tanya is destroyed by James and Victoria. It does worry me a lot now that Alice is feeling threatened by Bella and her connection to Edward. I hope Alice does nothing rash that might harm her family!
Author's Response:
Who said it was rash...
Date: 23 Feb 2014 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 13 Unwanted Visitor.
No wonder Eleazar is rubbing his hands together. I'll bet he's never seen powwers like Bella's and her still partially human! She evidently can borrow the powers of other gifted vampires, too! The only problem I can see is Tanya seeking revenge for her humiliation by tattling to the Volturi! Still, it was great to see what Bella did to that scuzzy Tanya!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 12 Being a Mutant
Obviously, Tanya the skank has shown up in sleepy little Forks, why no one knows yet. A showdown with Bella is bound to follow, so I'm really glad Bella has started to change. Your explanation of the key and lock effect of Edward's venom on Bella's blood cells causing the gradual changing is brilliant!
Author's Response:
Thank you.
Date: 23 Feb 2014 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 11 What the Fuck!
Wow! Bella's stories seem to be coming true, the enhanced hearing, eyesight, sense of smell, and now this sudden speed and grace! Maybe she gets a huge break and won't have to burn to be changed! As for all the justice happening at Forks High, it couldn't be more fitting! Now, if only they could nail Charlie and the Quileutes!
Author's Response:
Congratulations, you're one of a few who got it before it was explained!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 6:34 AM Title: Chapter 1 Bella
Really enjoying your story :)
Date: 23 Feb 2014 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 10 Mated!
Laughed at Alice trying to butt in on mating day! It was a fascinating way you wrote their lovemaking, first for the vampire and then for Edward's human side. Very nicely done, too!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 6:00 AM Title: Chapter 9 Revelations and Discoveries
Some kind of cop good ole Charlie is! Bigger felon than almost anyone else, from the sound of it. Not to mention just plain slimeball, having all that money stashed away and making his child go without food and clothes! Bella's enhanced faculties must have something to do with Edward I'm thinking. That magic vampire venom!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 8 Comparing Notes.
That was kind of cute, them braving their embarassment, to talk all this over , getting all the important details lined out. Now that Charlie is gone for a week, maybe Bella can just relax and enjoy her new circumstances!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 7 Transcribing Embarrassment
Totally worth the pain of seperation, they are both on the same page. Bella is simply an amazing person, is it any wonder Edward and all the Cullens love her so?
Date: 23 Feb 2014 3:36 AM Title: Chapter 6 Frustrations under the Microscope
I like the friendship between Edward and Kate, and the fact she's willing to hide his secrets from her family. The more I find out about all the family, friends and possible enemies, the more I am intrigued! Thanks again for the recommendations!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 5 New Beginnings
I would put money on Rosalie being correct about Bella being the smartest of them after her change! She is making strides to overcome her insecurities and planning her future, and doing a great job of it! Amazing how much better Bella's life is, with just a little help from her new family!
Date: 23 Feb 2014 1:41 AM Title: Chapter 4 Meeting the Family
How sweet for Edward to give Bella that pair of new shoes! She was so thrilled to get what she needed so badly! It just makes me want to smack Charlie so hard his teeth rattle, that he treats her the horrible way he does! I love that Rose is championing Bella, and Esme will help her keep Emmett from being a fool! It thrilled me that Bella made Alice stop and think about the way she manipulates people. It amazed the whole family that Bella had such cogent thoughts on their very existence, especially concerning mating and changing. Sure enough, this girl was born to be a vampire and a mate to same!
Date: 22 Feb 2014 11:18 PM Title: Chapter 3 Explanations
Edward got a lot of information out this first night and Bella took it all in without batting an eye! His mother and her grandmother had insight into the future, evidently, and foresaw this pairing. I didn't miss your reference to trials and tribulations before their happy ending, so will brace for some bad stuff to occur before that end! Thanks for the story rec's , I have read some of them, but not all.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 10:57 PM Title: Chapter 20 Negotiations
I don't understand Alice. Something is wrong with her. She seems to be able to control everyone, but Bella and now Edward.
Date: 22 Feb 2014 10:48 PM Title: Chapter 2 Edward
Bella is very aware and seems to have no problem with the signs of "otherness" observed in the Cullens. Her grandma told the truth about fairytales coming true, as Edward seems to be her white horseriding knight to the rescue! I really like your take on our beloved saga!
Date: 22 Feb 2014 10:19 PM Title: Chapter 1 Bella
Alice seems to be even more agressive than usual in your story, but not necessarily in a bad way. Poor Bella, good thing she isn't beaten down by the abuse she suffers every day, because she endures a lot of it , both from her nasty father and the little snots she goes to school with! Maybe her luck has changed now the Cullen children are in Forks High!
Author's Response:
We have to thank Bella's gran for building enough self esteem to withstand the eternal onslaught of nasty she's had since her gran died
Date: 22 Feb 2014 9:56 PM Title: Prelude
Promising start. The summary makes me think I may have to curse to myself now and again, if someone is abusing Bella! That's always a tough thing to read, but it also sounds like Edward may be riding to the rescue!
Author's Response:
I hate that too, that's why I write about it as little as possible. This story is about the mating bond and everything around will be collateral baggage.
[Report This]Date: 19 Feb 2014 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 22 Linked Forever
Love it!
Date: 19 Feb 2014 7:49 PM Title: Prelude
INTERESTING START I'M HOOKED.
[Report This]Date: 18 Feb 2014 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 22 Linked Forever
:)
[Report This]Date: 18 Feb 2014 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 21 The Beginning of the End
:)
[Report This]Date: 18 Feb 2014 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 22 Linked Forever
That wedding was fantastic and their power to hover or float is great I can,t wait to see what they can do together
Date: 18 Feb 2014 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 22 Linked Forever
Wow they are amazing together
Date: 18 Feb 2014 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 22 Linked Forever
hmm Alice is really getting annoying. Wonder if someone is controlling Em somehow. Now I wonder who it is.
Author's Response:
Link it Lady, Link it you're almost there!
Date: 18 Feb 2014 1:33 AM Title: Chapter 21 The Beginning of the End
Alice really needs to learn to reign things in. Buh Bye Charlie. Can't wait for Billy and the pack to join him in jail.
Date: 18 Feb 2014 1:32 AM Title: Chapter 22 Linked Forever
These two chapters were great! So glad Charlie is gone. He was nasty!
Date: 13 Feb 2014 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 20 Negotiations
Yes, charlie is an ass
Date: 12 Feb 2014 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 20 Negotiations
Wow! This was sooo good....... Thank you so much!
Date: 11 Feb 2014 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 20 Negotiations
good.. one
[Report This]Date: 11 Feb 2014 10:40 AM Title: Prelude
Very cute, I like.
[Report This]Date: 11 Feb 2014 10:26 AM Title: Chapter 20 Negotiations
loving this
Date: 10 Feb 2014 11:55 PM Title: Chapter 20 Negotiations
Can't wait till those sleezeballs get whats coming to them. Prison will be too good for them. Sigh
Yey Wedding though!!!
Date: 09 Feb 2014 8:03 AM Title: Chapter 19 Dialing In
Alice is responsible for what Emmett did on Edward's birthday. Alice is trying to get rid of Bella. Alice..had got to have Jasper spank her and take away her credit.
Date: 09 Feb 2014 7:42 AM Title: Chapter 18 Birthday Ball?
Looks like the Cullen Coven is about to be smaller.
Date: 09 Feb 2014 7:05 AM Title: Chapter 17 I'm a Vampire!
good one for all of them..Alice is going to have to stop the control.
Date: 09 Feb 2014 6:26 AM Title: Chapter 15 Her Lion Finding His Kitten
adios Alice..
Date: 09 Feb 2014 6:13 AM Title: Chapter 14 The Original Takedown
Pretty cool stuff here.. ty
Date: 09 Feb 2014 2:36 AM Title: Chapter 13 Unwanted Visitor.
she uses others powers for her own at will. Is what I saw. Tanya is going to run to the Volturi?
Date: 09 Feb 2014 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 12 Being a Mutant
tanya.. grr
Date: 08 Feb 2014 10:44 PM Title: Chapter 10 Mated!
Well Houston we have rockets all ignited and thrusting has begun and we have take off.. Go away ALice
Date: 08 Feb 2014 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 8 Comparing Notes.
love it.
Date: 08 Feb 2014 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 7 Transcribing Embarrassment
loved it. The business about the period Ihave wondered since time one. I still think SM made mistakes in her vampire makeup. How does a hard statue talk, have erections, run, etc?
Date: 08 Feb 2014 8:45 AM Title: Chapter 6 Frustrations under the Microscope
I like the Kate you have written. Now.. onward.
Date: 08 Feb 2014 7:38 AM Title: Chapter 4 Meeting the Family
Charlie. Can't we just infect him with some unknown virus while he is passed out. No one would care and then Bella is free to be taken in by the kindly Cullens.
Author's Response:
Nope, I've got a much better revenge planned for Charlie
Date: 08 Feb 2014 5:16 AM Title: Chapter 1 Bella
This story I am trying to remember if you had it out before. It seems like I was reading it and then it did not get updated. There were funny pictures on the front.
Author's Response:
Sorry to disappoint you, this is my first fanfic and I never had it up before. I have been posting weekly at three other platforms though. I just hadn't worked out how to post here before.
Date: 06 Feb 2014 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 19 Dialing In
I think Alice has another gift. It has to do with persuation and implanting her ideas and plans into other peoples brains. This would explain why Emmett said and did things he didn't really want to do.
[Report This]Date: 04 Feb 2014 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 19 Dialing In
Alice really is a snot and becoming more Malice as the story goes on. Who is messing with the family? Malice, Skankya, Irina???? Ya killing me with cliffy.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 18 Birthday Ball?
Wow Emmett and Alice really need to grow the hell up. Kate is so sweet. Hope you get someone for her soon. Hey what ever happend with James, Victoria and the V?
Date: 04 Feb 2014 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 17 I'm a Vampire!
Glad Rose is being such a great friend. Loving your version of her. Great presents too
Date: 04 Feb 2014 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 19 Dialing In
Hey Pien,
Thank you so much for this...it's been a gas so far, really like your take on some of the real twilight plot holes...some of them you can drive a truck through!...but we love it anyway...
Best wishes and keep on writing! T
Date: 04 Feb 2014 6:01 PM Title: Chapter 16 Full Stride Institute
oooh B marked him. Go B. Bad ass first hunt. Guessing Alice isn't happy not being in charge anymore. ROFL for dream
Date: 04 Feb 2014 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 15 Her Lion Finding His Kitten
hmmm Alice is really pushing her luck. Ugh Billy and Charlie are so disgusting.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 14 The Original Takedown
Ugh Stupid Skankya. Now James and Victoria. Hope Alice doesn't do anything stupid.
[Report This]Date: 04 Feb 2014 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 19 Dialing In
loving this
Date: 04 Feb 2014 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 13 Unwanted Visitor.
OOOh Soooo Loving bad ass Bella. Charlie needs to go down soon. Skankya is so pathetic. betting she goes to the V?
Author's Response:
I don't bet on my own story, it's not fair. Charlie will go down spectacularly
Date: 04 Feb 2014 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 12 Being a Mutant
oooh Bella is gonna be bad ass. Wow Skankya appears? Hope Elezar doesn't rat them to the V.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 10 Mated!
well atleast they did it right in the movie on their second incounter..Movie
Date: 04 Feb 2014 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 9 Revelations and Discoveries
I think you nailed on the head with this one, and all the other ones especially Kate....These are all the question that went through my mind when I read the books and seen the movies...why did they never ask one of the Denials about sex...they mix with humans....and also with Jasper why did a household full of exspecially smart people not figure out that Jasper is a empath and he feals everyone even blood lust.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 4:16 AM Title: Chapter 11 What the Fuck!
Love all the sleeze balls getting coming to them. So where is Charlie when all this is going on? Doesn't he have spies in school ratting on her? the makeover and all?
Author's Response:
Charlie is stupid and truly can't believe she ever will have friends. No need to have a spy on her. He only sees what he wants to see.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 10 Mated!
Woo Hoo for fully mated now. Alice is relentless huh> Silly girl.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 2:10 AM Title: Chapter 4 Meeting the Family
This is a great Story... Please keep updating. This chapter is missing.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 9 Revelations and Discoveries
Oh wow. They survived the Jasper test and found Charlie's hidden stuff. Ohhhh.
Date: 04 Feb 2014 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 19 Dialing In
Good chapter, love this story! Thank you...
Date: 04 Feb 2014 12:50 AM Title: Chapter 19 Dialing In
I cant wait to find out how they expose alice and find out who him doble crossing them
Date: 03 Feb 2014 11:55 PM Title: Chapter 8 Comparing Notes.
Wonderful talk between B & E. Glad they are able to have these reasonable talks.
Date: 03 Feb 2014 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 7 Transcribing Embarrassment
Great talk with B and Car. She def thought it out. Maybe use some of her used clothing for Jasper to get used to scent?
Date: 03 Feb 2014 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 6 Frustrations under the Microscope
Glad he has a friend in Kate and that B was smart in her planning and letters and such.
Date: 03 Feb 2014 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 5 New Beginnings
Excellent chapter. Love that B sees little things in the family like that. I'm beginning to be really afraid of something Charlie/Billy might do. Are they waiting till she is 18 to get her into some wierd sharing sex ring? Or sell her off as a brood mare to someone on the rez? ya scaring me.
Thanks for the TWCS rec's. Adding to my TBR list
Author's Response:
Hey, I'm all B&E and most off all HEA. Please don't be scared, look forward to the nasties demise
Date: 03 Feb 2014 9:24 PM Title: Chapter 4 Meeting the Family
Wow Great interaction between her and the family. I like this nice, protective Rose.
Date: 03 Feb 2014 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 3 Explanations
Great chapter. Like the explanations and that Jasper and Aliice had a different meeting. Ugh Charlie really is a pathetic arse. I hate fish too.
Date: 03 Feb 2014 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 2 Edward
Great chapter. Loved B and A insulting the skanks that way. She def is observatant. Can't wait for more. So happy you are on TWCS. I don't use FFn at all anymore.
Date: 03 Feb 2014 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 1 Bella
Oh wow. Charlie and everyone is so horrible. Ya killin me. Mike Lauren and Jess need to be run over with a logging truck and Charlie needs to just die of liver disease. Billy and Jake????
Date: 03 Feb 2014 7:05 PM Title: Prelude
interesting start. I didn't like how certain things were just brushed off either. Like Charlie overlooking Jacob's assault with kissing her.
Date: 03 Feb 2014 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 18 Birthday Ball?
So glad to see this here at TWCS. I'm not a big fan of Ficfion Pad. On a tablet the readinf area is too small. I will read your story here. Thank you!
[Report This]Date: 03 Feb 2014 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 18 Birthday Ball?
I really love this story and love where you have taken it!!!
Date: 02 Feb 2014 11:07 PM Title: Chapter 8 Comparing Notes.
Really enjoying this...thank you for sharing, T
[Report This]Date: 02 Feb 2014 7:30 PM Title: Chapter 9 Revelations and Discoveries
I really like this verson of twilight much better than SM keep up the good work please
Date: 02 Feb 2014 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 2 Edward
I think the idea of this story is great and it has lots of potential but there is too much awkwardness in the way you wrote this it does not flow very well