Date: 04 May 2015 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 13
wonder how he'll tell her
Date: 04 May 2015 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 12
hmmm . . . interesting
Date: 29 Apr 2015 3:24 PM Title: Chapter 23
Well, she sure enjoyed her time w/Anthony, though, didn't she? And was very upset when he broke it off. They both love each other so who cares how it started. She needs to get over it because she's being such a hypocrite about it.
Date: 11 Apr 2015 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 9
Phillip is a hottie!!
Date: 11 Apr 2015 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 8
I don't think it's really coldness heshows her it's just he thinks she doesn't like him either, and the way she had been caring on with Stephen at the club said it all. Then he sees her aagin and she is aloof. I think if Bella hadn't ben making out with someon to begin with this would have went whole different way. So peeps don't be hating on Edward.
Date: 11 Apr 2015 6:31 AM Title: Chapter 7
I have to say I don't have so much of a problem with Anthony and Bella as the thought that she was making plans with another man while meeting Anthony too. I figure that was a lot of the others problem as that almost lost me. But I stayed to see if it went any farther with two men but it didn't so I got hooked :)
Date: 11 Apr 2015 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 5
Lvved the dress and the second pair of shoes. Though I don't see Stephen as a handsome man, he just is ok, but nothing I would drool over like Edward, Jasper or Emmett. Now if Stephan was someone wholooked like maybe Alex Pettyfer, Chaning Tatum or someone equaly as hot I could she the girls drooling :)
Date: 11 Apr 2015 5:26 AM Title: Chapter 4
Ugh, What is up with Bella? Planing to have sex with a stranger and planning a date with a different Man.. SMH
Date: 11 Apr 2015 4:56 AM Title: Chapter 3
Just wondering if Jasper has that sweet Texas drawl? And where is his parents apartment? Thanks for sharing!!
Date: 11 Apr 2015 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 2
I don't get this Bella, why would she let a manshe barely knows rub ll over her in a club, then kiss him like she did, thinking she has a connection with Edward. Then she lets someone who she doesn't know (or at least she doesn't realize) fondle her on the subway. That's just wrong on so many levels.
Date: 11 Apr 2015 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
She thought they had a connection? So she lets a guy act like he's fucking her on the dancefloor then rams her tongue down his throat? Yea, no wonder Edward left.
Date: 04 Feb 2015 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love this story, and i like where it is going, obviously things will hit the fan when all is revealed, but as always with HEA it will come right, I love your stories this is the third one I have read of yours, keep it going and dont listen to all the people with negative comments about the story it is great.
[Report This]Date: 30 Dec 2014 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 29
a great read
[Report This]Date: 29 Dec 2014 11:55 PM Title: Chapter 17
not as hot as her and Anthony
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2014 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 6
I think it is great and it is ironic that Edward is Anthony's competition or will be
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2014 9:36 PM Title: Chapter 2
very hot and sexy
[Report This]Date: 28 Dec 2014 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
great start
Date: 23 Nov 2014 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 29
You wrote a sexy, magical love story, just like you always do! I have enjoyed each one I've read, and know I will continue to do so! Thanks so much!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 7:17 AM Title: Chapter 28
That was so great! I'm thrilled they found their way back to each other!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 6:55 AM Title: Chapter 27
There really are nurses like Riley and God bless them all! I'm doing my little old lady happy dance now! Edward's waking up!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 6:35 AM Title: Chapter 26
Son-of-a-bitch! Now I'm going to kill Dwyer, that crazy bastard! Just when they are about to mend their broken hearts, he fucks it all up! Damn him! And don't you dare let anything bad happen to Edward!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 25
Dare I hope that this is a start to the way back to each other? Oh yay, if it is! Phil is a creep and I don 't want him anywhere around Bella!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 5:56 AM Title: Chapter 24
Number one, Seth needs his ass kicked, talking out of school the way he did! Number two, Edward needs a big boot also for the dramatics over leaving town! Good thing Alice screeched at him, and Jasper, to stay and man up with Bella! Last but not least, stroke of genious to send his mom with a basket of goodies, so they could meet!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 23
With Bella flying out to visit her parent's graves, Edward will panic she's with Dwyer. The only good thing is all the thinking she's been doing about what Rose told her of Edward's love for her. Maybe they just need to spend time apart, and then hash it all out together.
Date: 23 Nov 2014 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 22
I'm really hating this part, it hurts to see them in such misery! I have always been a big fan of talking things over and working stuff out, and I hope they can do that some time in the near future. If Phillip gets mixed up in this I will scream!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 2:03 AM Title: Chapter 21
Okay, I get how devestating this must have been for her, but it's not right to cut him off without hearing an explanation of some sort! They have both declared their love for each other and that deserves a little respect, I'm thinking!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 20
How ironic that Aria's woes bring Aro back into their lives again! I'm real glad that Bella told Edward exactly how she feels, too. There is still a bit of insecurity in their relationship I guess.
Date: 23 Nov 2014 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 19
I kind of admire Edward and Bella's bravery, spending all this time with the most powerful mafis boss in Italy. Hope nothing untoward happens while they are there!
Date: 23 Nov 2014 1:07 AM Title: Chapter 18
I hope Edward doesn't get too bummed out by seeing that picture of Bella being molested by Phillip! Wait until he buys Edward's condo , Edward moves into his parents place and Bella adds two and two!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 11:45 AM Title: Chapter 17
I kept thinking, it's about damn time!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 11:22 AM Title: Chapter 16
You better tell her the truth pretty soon, Edward! You do it now instead of a disastrous slip-up later on and really ruin things! An ex-fiancee, huh? This should be interesting!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 11:03 AM Title: Chapter 15
I knew this was going to be a significant weekend, and by golly, it is!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 10:37 AM Title: Chapter 14
Would I love to be on that bike, rolling down the road! It was so much fun to ride our Goldwing all over the Pacific Northwest! This promises to be quite a weekend for them, I hope! You could have knocked me over with a feather when Bella told Anthony goodbye!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 10:18 AM Title: Chapter 13
That was a bit of a surprise, I thought Bella knew Edward was Anthony just as he did! I hope the big reveal is coming soon!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 10:02 AM Title: Chapter 12
Poor Bella! But, what an opportunity for Edward to care for her! I hope they go to Italy together, too. I wonder what he thought when she thanked Anthony?
Date: 22 Nov 2014 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 11
Edward must think he's going to have to fight off all Bella's admirerers! Stephen kind of scared me when he started getting demanding, and chasing Bella around her desk. Good thing Edward showed up when he did!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 9:17 AM Title: Chapter 10
I have a lot of respect for Edward's decision to end the game he was playing with Bella. Now they can meet and date like normal folks. There is that spark between them that needs to be explored!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 8:56 AM Title: Chapter 9
I have a feeling that when they finally do have a conversation, there will be many revelations shared! Even now, they are sharing things about themselves, they just don't know it quite yet!I vote they go the party alone and meet up to learn more about each other. Stephen and Phillip may be gorgeous, but I hope Bella is only going to be with Edward/Anthony!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 8:26 AM Title: Chapter 8
I like that Edward has a conscience that bothers him over his treatment of Bella! Both of them are beginning to change the way they feel about their meetings. Progress is good!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 7:52 AM Title: Chapter 7
Okay, now I can't wait to see what naughty, hot things Edward has planned for Bella and that chair! Since they are both so invested in this, I don't think Bella should be angry when she finds out who Anthony really is!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 6
I really hope these two can quit making assumptions about each other and just own up to what's been going on! They will both be much happier if they are honest.
Date: 22 Nov 2014 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 5
Of course, this is great because it's something I would not do in reality, but it's all kinds of sexy to imagine! That's the greatest thing about reading! As for this, lucky Bella, and lucky Edward!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 4
This getting very interesting and I can't wait to see what happens with Bella's new attitude and Edward's sexy role-playing!
Date: 22 Nov 2014 1:07 AM Title: Chapter 3
Wow, Alice has hit the wall with all the long hours, etc.! I'm glad Gianna got her skanky self fired, she was just pushing it with that attitude. Edward is having too much fun with this sexy little game he's playing with Bella. I wonder what is the deal with switching apartments?
Date: 21 Nov 2014 11:42 PM Title: Chapter 2
Good for you! If someone hasn't the courage to identify themself, who needs to pay any attention to what they think? This play on the subway is very titilating and kind of a turn on!Can't wait to see how it progresses!
Date: 21 Nov 2014 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
Bella definitely had a good day, between Stephen's massage and a night out with the girls! Too bad she didn't get to meet the gorgeous guy at the club, since Alice and Rosalie seem to have hit the jackpot! Too bad again she didn't turn around on the subway! That might have been interesting!
Date: 15 Nov 2014 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 29
OMG, I actually just shed a tear! This was such an AMAZINGLY powerful and PERFECT ending! The guy watching should've stood up and applauded at what he'd just witnessed! I am really going to miss these two! Kudos to you and what you do with SMs characters! They are SO much better when you take hold of them!
Date: 04 Nov 2014 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 29
Love it! Love it! Love it! Edward was fucking hot with his dirty talk and dirty deeds on the train. I could not put the story down. I had updates on alert from about the 5th chapter when I came across it but only started reading 2 days ago. Awesome story. One that I will reread.
Date: 16 Oct 2014 6:15 PM Title: Chapter 29
Love love love it!!!!!!!! Can't wait for your next update. That was the perfect way to ask her.
Date: 15 Oct 2014 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 28
Finally they are able to move forward.
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2014 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 29
aww another extrodinary and beautiful story. I absolutely loved it. thank you for sharing all of your awesone story's with all of us. I wish the was an outtake of their future but endng it here is good also. I cant wait for the next story you write since I have read all of your stories and I have loved every single one of them!
Melissa
[Report This]Date: 10 Oct 2014 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 29
Wow!! What a journey. Loved every minute.
I do believe this is my favorite Edward that you've written, a bit more complex. He's simply sexy as hell!!! I also enjoyed the strength that you gave Bella. A "Oh woe is me!" Bella would definitely wilt on that chair!! :D
The story was fantastic. The visuals an extra experience that was unexpected. I hope this bit of fluff helps everyone realize they all have a "personality" that resembles this - even if deep down.
Thank you for writing for the fandom. I appreciate you and all of your hard work so very much.
Elaine - Sparkle Damnu Elaine Phillips on FB sparkledamnu on all reading sites
P.S. Edward/Anthony as I visualize him.
Date: 08 Oct 2014 11:09 AM Title: Chapter 29
OMG! i absolutely loved this one! so many emotions - and so freaking hot!! i wish you the best of luck with In Plain Sight and can't wait to see you here again! Jo
[Report This]Date: 08 Oct 2014 6:35 AM Title: Chapter 4
I had to jump over to TWCS to see the pics. Love the visualization. I inadvertently rated last chapter a 3 -- meant to be a 10 -- but entered the chapter number by mistake!!! Sorry.
Love the story!!!
Date: 08 Oct 2014 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 29
Yeah baby!! Sorry to see this end but it was a very fun ride. Thank ypu
Date: 06 Oct 2014 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 8
I'm not done reading this story but so far i don't think that i can forgive Edward if it was me in Bella shoes even if he felt guilt
[Report This]Date: 06 Oct 2014 4:50 PM Title: Chapter 29
I loved it. It was perfect.
Date: 06 Oct 2014 3:43 PM Title: Chapter 29
This is abso-freakin-lutely fan-friggen-tastic!!! :) I love this! LOL
[Report This]Date: 06 Oct 2014 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 29
I loved it hot damn he is a naughty man but she is his match so sexy and I am so happy everyone has a happy life thank you
Date: 06 Oct 2014 12:13 AM Title: Chapter 29
This was a great story, loved when Edward let Anthony out to play
Date: 05 Oct 2014 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 29
Wonderful proposal and so appropriate!
Date: 05 Oct 2014 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 29
Loved it!!
Thanks for sharing your talent!!
Date: 05 Oct 2014 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 29
Amazing story-- and fantastic ending!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you!
:)
Date: 05 Oct 2014 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 29
Sweet end. TY for writing and sharing on TWCS.
Date: 05 Oct 2014 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 29
Great story...I loved it :) thanks so much...
Date: 05 Oct 2014 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 29
Aww! I'm gonna miss this story. I loved it! Will there be a futuretake?
Date: 04 Oct 2014 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 29
Very fitting proposal. Not sure about Bella, but I love Anthony being back to play.
[Report This]Date: 04 Oct 2014 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 29
*happy tears*
*happy tears*
*happy tears*
Date: 04 Oct 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 29
Great Great job with the ending you stayed true to the story all the way through looking forward to reading your next project
Date: 04 Oct 2014 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 29
first, may I say that I thoroughly enjoyed this story, that the last chapter was so very good, and second......please remind your beta that "taut" means tight and "taught" refers to learning.
I wish you all the best publishing IPS and will pre order it as soon as it's available.
I had hoped for an epilogue to this story, but loved it all the same.
Date: 04 Oct 2014 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 29
I love all your stories! This one was exceptional!
Date: 04 Oct 2014 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 29
Excellent, absolutely excellent ! I love it ! Exactly the good balance of sweetness and dirtiness. Thank you so much for sharing. I bet your fiction is in the next pool or Award and I will vote for it.
Date: 04 Oct 2014 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 29
Love this story. Unique plotline. Very sorry it's finished.
You are the best fanfiction writer.
Best of luck with In Plain Sight - another amazing read!
[Report This]Date: 04 Oct 2014 2:35 PM Title: Chapter 29
loved this story. going to miss it
Date: 04 Oct 2014 1:59 PM Title: Chapter 29
That was perfectly them.
Date: 04 Oct 2014 1:36 PM Title: Chapter 29
Awe, I loved the proposal! I have tears in my eyes. Thanks for the great story! It's been one of my favorites.
[Report This]Date: 04 Oct 2014 1:18 PM Title: Chapter 29
Loved the ending!!! so sad to see it end but what a great ride! enjoy you well deserved break, can't wait for your next one!!! Amazing job!!!
[Report This]Date: 01 Oct 2014 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 28
I love it. They really are perfect for each other.
Date: 29 Sep 2014 8:53 PM Title: Chapter 28
You never said what the phone call was about Phil? Interested. Loved this story, just enough lemons, twists, couldn't put it down ubtil I finished.
Sequel? Outtakes?
JAZZPURR
Date: 28 Sep 2014 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 28
She bets the best of both worlds they they deserve it. What an amazing story and I am so sad that it is ending.
Date: 28 Sep 2014 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 28
I'm so glad they worked everything out! All I can think is too all the stupid people who didn't think this would be worth reading they completely missed out on a fantastic story!
Date: 28 Sep 2014 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 28
woo hoo Glad they talked and are going to be ok. Hope Phil has an unfortunate accident in his motel.
Date: 28 Sep 2014 12:49 AM Title: Chapter 28
Yay!! I'm so happy for them! Cannot wait for the epilogue!
Date: 27 Sep 2014 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 28
Glad to see Anthony back to play.
Date: 27 Sep 2014 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 28
I must say that after all the building up, the gunshot and all the angst over Anthony, that this was much too short a reunion....just my humble opinion. It was just lovely, their talk, their lovemaking, it was all great, just not enough of it for me.....sorry if that disappoints you but I have to be honest. I hope the epi is long...