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Bio:
Edward left Carlisle and Esme behind in 1927, to go hunting for criminals, and never looked back since. When his path crosses with Bella's one fateful evening, there is no denying his desires: he wants her blood and body. Their night of passion ends with him accidentally changing her. What happens when she wakes up by his side, with no recollection of her last night of being human?
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 42 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 241050 Read Count: 7378
Date: 02 Dec 2021 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Bad Seed
Truly, I adore this story. You've captured Edward's POV so beautifully, and you're quite a talented writer. One teeny bit of criticism, though. "I couldn't reign in my amusement" is incorrect. It's REIN IN. You've misused "reign" throughout this story in this way. Think about using reins to control a horse. You "rein it in" to get it to stop. "Reign" means to rule over something, the way a monarch reigns over a country or love reigns over your heart.
I hope you don't mind my pointing this out. It's just that I hoped you might want to know since the story contains so few errors otherwise.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your feedback, I am happy you enjoyed Edward's point of view so much, he is my favourite character ❤!
As much as I try to keep the writing high quality in every aspect I can manage, mistakes can still slp every now and then, considering my first language is not English and I live in a non-English-speaking country. But I am always looking to get better, so when real life slows down and I get a chance to look over the story again, I will definitely make the proper corrections.
Take care!