I have read your entire story and I really loved it.  Haveing grew up in Washington, I was familiar with all the places and activities you had mentioned. Reading your story made me homesick for the northwest. 

Your book had great character developement, good detail and excellent lemons.  Lemons that are too graphic can be gross.  You were just right to make them very sensual and errotic.

I have put you on my favorates and cannot wait to read you additional work.  You have a good understanding of writing.  I did notice some typos and grammer errors but I make those on a daily basis and I proof documents in my job.

Keep writing and good luck with it.

Lori