Reviews by DaleStateShorty
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella's first assignment as a journalist is to uncover the truth about Christian Polygamy. Dr. Edward Cullen is a small town doctor who lives his life by his own sets of rules. Edward and his wives live a lifestyle that many may not understand. After Edward treats Bella he invites her into his home, where Bella learns more than what she bargained for. How will her first assignment impact the rest of her life?

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Non-Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward, Edward/Alice, Edward/Rose
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 162668 Read Count: 153108
[Report This] Published: 09 Feb 2010 Updated: 01 May 2020
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning Of The Truth

Well this is certainly a good start. Edward and his wives .. sounds so sordid. Also found myself wondering what differences between mormon and christian polyamy are, so my interest has been piqued.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

The morman religion no longer supports polygamy. But the Morman's of the past had a more spirital basis to polygamy, they believe that it is the way to heaven. It started in the 1800's Christian polygamy is based on the old and new testiment reading that may hint at having multible wives. They feel that since it is in the bible then God much be okay with it.  the movement started in 1990's so it is modern and new. C.P. also legally divorce their wives in the eyes of the government, But they never have a chuch disolve the marriage. So in the eyes of God they have multible wives but in the eyes of the government they only have one wife at a time.  

Now that is a really basic and probley not completley politically correct. I have taken classes that have discussed both, but I am no expert.

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 2: What Happens Behind Closed Doors

Wow, I see Domward takes control easily. I don't blame Rose for acting the way she did, and Alice supporting any decision made is good I guess. I hope Bella gets her story.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

It is so complicated that I don't think that anyone is ever really in control. I'm sure Bella will get a story but who knows what kind..

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 3: The Most Basic Facts

Now that is something! Bella got the interview, phew! .. Shame on Edward needing to bang out his anxiety before Bella arrived. Not sure how the weekend will fair for Bella but it will be interesting thats for sure.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

I wouldn't mind sex whenever I was stressed. And who said it was Edward that needed it....

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Family Ties

Well um that was interesting, shucks Carlisle sure was busy eh? I was sort of wondering whether or not Bella was going to try and see if she could get somewhere with Carlisle and his harem. At least Tanya is not vying for affection from Edward romatically since they are siblings. I wonder what Alice spent to rack up that sort of debt, I feel sorry for her and her upcoming punishment.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

Yeah I don't think Carlisle is Bella's type, so I don't think you have to worry about that...

And Alice knows what she's doing... So don't feel too sorry for her.

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Money Problems

Okay now this was just severely disturbing to read. I was so right to be worried for Alice! And Bella wtf dude?! Did she really need to stand there and watch like a voyeur? And of course it was indirectly her fault, alas thank goodness that punishment is over.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

I know it was harsh, but that's how it goes sometimes.

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Explaining The Pain

I really wish that Bella had made a run for freedom. She so shouldn't get all mixed up in the mix of the Cullen harem. I'm not sure about anything else at this point but am glad that Alice is slowly getting her groove back.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

I am trying to keep with Bella's character in this twisted world. Bella didn't run when she found out that Edward is a vampire so why would a little spanking scare her.

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 7: A Woman's Perception

Now that was horrific and having to read what happened to Rose was probably just as bad if not worse having to write something like that. Rose was lucky to have Edward rescue her from the abuse she had endured. Chin up Bella you are doing good girl!

*jEsSaH*

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Getting Personal

I know its late but congratulations to your cousin and her baby boy, am looking forward to my brothers first born to arrive already lol. Bella needs to make a run for the door asap! She needs to think about Domward, Spankward, Sexward, all the damn wards lol. Don't join the harem Bella!!! lmao

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

Well I hope he has a little one soon. My brother is 9 years younger then me so I hope he wait a little while longer. SO I have to live thru my cousins thank God I have 26 of them... lol

But the harem seems like so much fun if you ignore the bad parts....lol  I myself wouldn't mind the sexward and a little domward could be sexy don't you think...

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Emotions Involved

Yes, I was wondering what exactly 'a session' with Edward consisted of .. Romanticward maybe? Or some other sort of ward lol. I really didn't want Bella to fall in love so quickly with Edward, this can only spell disaster for her considering she needs to keep a level head for her work assignment and get that sorted, mind you though, if she did happen to join the Cullen harem I am more than certain that she could own her own Newspaper company and do whatever she wanted. Ugh, Bella!

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

Sorry no Romanticward where the session is concerned..  What can I say Bella may like owning a newspaper...

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Out In The Open

That was very deep and heartfelt towards the end with Rose opening up a bit more to Bella on how her life was before Alice came along. And to read that Rose still can't get pregnant is sad but then it is also a blessing since she has so many issues to sort out. I was half expecting her to rush in and rip Bella away from Edward when she caught them embracing each other.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

I agree that Rosalie could not handle a baby the way that she is right now. So even though it is a horrible thing it is for the best. I'm sure a part of Rosalie wanted to but she held back....

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Suppression

Well that is something isn't it? I didn't think Rose would be like that .. I guess I shouldn't be shocked though her true colours were bound to come through at some point or another. Was a bit taken aback by her selfishness towards Alice and her needs.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

At times Rose can only see what Rose want and that is how everything would affect her. I don't think she really realized how things would affect Alice.

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Taking Charge

Yes well I do enjoy reading Alice POV but this was shockingly an eye opener! The way Edward broke down and how he needed to be nurtured by Alice was quite the scene. I can see problems arising on Rose's side with Bella coming into the harem.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

I love that you call it a harem, maybe my next story can have Edward as a shiek... What do you think...lol

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Flashback

Now this was definitely good background on Bella and how she came about so to speak. I didn't realise that Charlie died so horribly and how traumatic it must have been for Bella. She needed this to come out.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

It will and soon...... ;)

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Revelations Before The Fire

Edward, Edward, Edward, you naughty naughty man! Getting yourself off in the shower with the visions of Bella to help you reach your peak! So scandalous lol. And then the intimacy between Edward and Bella is very intense, add a few pecks and then a passionate duel of tongues .. Next stop the bedroom to make the bed rock!

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

But will they Bella is a virgin and Edward is Edward... Will they really do it?

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Fire's Blazing

This is a strange chapter. I can so clearly see the selfishness oozing off Rose while she talks to her sisters, and to think that she has every intention on making sure that Bella and Edward do not go anywhere in a possible relationship no matter how sordid it may seem is just despicable! Edward should have had more sense than to rock up into the kitchen clutching Bella's hand in his, he had to have some sort of semblance on how Rose could possibly take this simple gesture. Shit is on now and I don't know how Bella is going to fair, I pray she makes it out alive and with her senses in tact! If children are born into this harem it could only spell disaster since there is no resolve for the many issues swimming in this ocean of gunk.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

You have to admit though you love the drama. And yes shit is going to hit the fan....

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Risky Business

Nice chapter.  Can't wait to see how things will go for them all when Bella is officially inducted into their Cullen Triangle.  This cannot seriously work out right?  I mean, Rose has a point in saying that Edward's time will be even more stretched with Bella so how does he propose this shall work I wonder?  Was heartbreaking to read about the domestic violence that led to abuse on those 3 children and their mother, kudos to Edward for extending an olive branch to help support this lady and her family to keep them all safe.  Alice is awesome.

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

I know that his time is very little and that will cause some problems, but there are polygamist men that have a whole lot more wives and they make it work. This family will find a way to make it work too.

Sorry it took sssooooo long to respond to.

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 04 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Everything On The Table

Was very surprised on how Bella assertively took control of the situation and manned up to Rose, good on her.  She sure put Rose in her place, but I can still see Rose being very sneaky and making sure she gets her own way.  Rose was too adamant during her phone call with her sisters for one to believe that she is now on board the B/E love boat.  I guess only time will tell how this will be played out.  Was wondering, what would happen if Bella was the one to become pregnant, would that appease Rose at all?  Do Alice and Rose find no other men desirable?

*jEsSaH*



Author's Response:

Well in this story there are no Emmett or Jasper so I guess we will never know if Rosalie and Alice would find anyone else.

You may just be right about Rosalie she is very sneaky......

Cut by blondiefan Rated: M [Reviews - 3]
Summary:

I am having an affair


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 925 Read Count: 291
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 24 Feb 2010
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Cut

wow now this wasnt what i was expecting, awesome job!

The Office Temp by Lori 94 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 12]
Summary:

Bella just moved to NYC. She away from her friends and family. She takes a postition at a temp agency and they send her to the law offices of Cullen McCarty and Whitlock. Will she find what she's missing or is this just another job?


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4578 Read Count: 1585
[Report This] Published: 10 May 2010 Updated: 10 May 2010
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 1: The Office Temp

LMFAO this was awesome!

Summary:

A small group of people struggle with the drama that comes before two of the friends' wedding. Secrets and lies become known at the worst of times and everyone's lives are affected. There is cheating, lies, blackmail, and all different POVs



Categories: All Human
Characters: None
Genre: Drama
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 16328 Read Count: 626
[Report This] Published: 23 Oct 2010 Updated: 23 Oct 2010
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: I Do, I Don't

This was awesome for a ss!! Awesome job!

The Servile Gal by verucasin Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 11]
Summary:

OOC. All Human. A one-shot made for 'Squeeze my Lemon'. SMUT GALORE! ExB    


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, One-Shot
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4947 Read Count: 1863
[Report This] Published: 28 Dec 2010 Updated: 28 Dec 2010
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OH MY GAWD! This was absolutely freaking off the planet HAWT! The blowjob under the table at the restaurant was my second most fave scene to the bar stool being my most fave! Well shit Bella at least your getting some and getting paid a nice chunk of change for your time as well! Too bad Riley wasn't enough eh? LOL .. Loved this O/S!! Any plans on continuing this in the future?



Author's Response:

Wow, I love your reaction! Thank you. ;D

I'm not sure if I'll continue this...maybe in the future. Got some other stories I'm busy with right now.

But this review just made my day. =)

Summary:

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"Mom sleeping?" I asked.

He nodded. "All pilled up and passed out."

"You drugged her." I assessed, rising to my knees.

"Only suggested she take a sleeping pill." He too kneeled on the bed. "So what can I do for you this evening?"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

This is dark. Characters: Bella, Edward, and Carlisle


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Carlisle
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My All-Time Favorites, G8or Favor8s Read, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 11281 Read Count: 26670
[Report This] Published: 23 Mar 2011 Updated: 25 Mar 2011
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Cullen and Cullen

This made me laugh, Bella is one fucked up cookie on the reals. I'd have to say that she is definitely the sickest of the 3 of them. She needs her ass beat to gain some semblance of clarity on this situation she has created with father and son. Loved this chapter!

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 2: The Conclusion

LMAO this was awesome despite the weirdo fuck-triangle B/C/E found themselves in. Personally I think you did really good with this 2 shot, yes there's alot of plots that could be developed on, but IMO I feel that this is complete. Definitely loved reading this :)

Ménage Triste by LaurieLou Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 23]
Summary:

It is the eighteenth century and a young Isabella Swan is wedded to the older, harsher Edward Cullen, Duke of Washington. He needs a male heir. She just wants to be loved. A one-shot about loss, love, lust and hope.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Historical, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7299 Read Count: 4401
[Report This] Published: 06 Apr 2011 Updated: 06 Apr 2011
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh my! This was exceptional! Loved the angst, drama, all round awesome story! :)

Junior Days by LaurieLou Rated: M starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 47]
Summary:

An eighteen year old girl doing what she can to ensure the safety of her eight month son. A pity Bella loves Edward too.

This story includes swearing, sex and drugs. The swearing isn't terrible, the sex is in detail and the drugs is vague. If this offends you please do not read.

Thank you.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 10697 Read Count: 8212
[Report This] Published: 06 Apr 2011 Updated: 26 Apr 2011
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Absolutely loved this story and the hea! :)

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

FINALLY! They're together, I was beginning to wonder what was the holdup with Edward not coming to get them when he'd had his birthday, all is well again :)

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

LOL come on now Bella! You had to know that Edward would do his best to try and locate you and his son! Despite Edward signing his rights away as EJ's father didn't mean that he didn't love him at all. I must admit though why has Bella not informed anyone that it was EJ's birthday? Or did she?

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Met hubby in the most unconventional of ways ... In my pajamas whilst my bestfriend at the time was desprately trying to charm him with her womanly wiles, while I was sat inside his house with his sister who is bestfriends with my own sister gabbing away about anything and everything. Hubby didnt'e give my bestfriend the green light she really wanted from him and he proceeded to flirt with me lmao. I was disgusted by him, I wasn't attracted to him in any way and I had a boyfriend at the time and I don't do cheating, it took hubby a long time to finally win me over and I ended my relationship in the same day hubby and I started dating, and now 15 years later we're still together LOL - I feel sorry for Edward in a way, but I can understand how Bella's feeling and the way she sees things, and Alice wasn't that bad after all despite her addiction.

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Never experienced a goodbye as such LOL, if anything I've always ended relationships when dating and I don't think my hubby would appreciate me trying to say goodbye forever LOL - And this chapter was absolutely heart breaking!

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

OH MY GAWD .. Nothing of any relevance to say here just wanted to leave a quick review before I move on to the next chapter, my gawd the anticipation of what could possibly happen is causing me to have angsty twitches LOL

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

OH SHIT! Now this I certainly was not expecting to read : .. Their parents made Bella give up her child? Poor Bella, and OMFG they have goodtimes every Sunday? I hope Alice loves the crack : .. B/E have some communication problems, they obviously need to talk everything out and clarify what's up ... It's obvious Edward and Bella love each other *rolls eyes* .. Nice drama!

Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OMFG now this I was not expecting! Bella has goodtimes with Edward to get drugs for Alice? In the process Bella ended up pregnant with Edwards child who is 8 months old and Alice was taking care of the child for Bella whilst she did the deed to get the goods? I need to see what happens next LOL, so off to the next chapter!

Summary:

When the past collides with the present, Bella learns just how precious the future is. My entry in the Quickie Contest.    

 

IFAB


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, One-Shot, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 500 Read Count: 694
[Report This] Published: 12 Apr 2011 Updated: 12 Apr 2011
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 1: I Found A Boy

Nice o/s awesome job =)

Summary:

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Driven to Desire Entry: I had the perfect life in New York. Money, a nice house, loving husband. But still, I craved him. He was a man so close yet so forbidden. My own personal demon. My torture. My step-brother; Edward Cullen.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 22278 Read Count: 13854
[Report This] Published: 23 Jun 2012 Updated: 02 Oct 2012
Reviewer: DaleStateShorty Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 31 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

LMFAO - Absolutely loved this o/s.  So glad they finally get their HEA although if you ever decide to extend this to a story, I'm so there LOL.  Great job!  Story deserves more recognition.



Author's Response:

Thank you :)