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Lonesome Hearts by damsell Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2091]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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New banner by Julie C.

 

Eighteen year old Bella Swan has moved to the small Western town of Spoons Valley to meet up with her older brother, Emmet, after their parents' deaths.  She always figured that the Wild West that she read about would be like the descriptions in Harper's Weekly, but she didn't realize just how wild and dangerous things would get once she arrived.

 

AH.  Canon Couples.

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Historical, Humor, Mystery, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Ageise02 Current Reads, Finished, Kuu Faves, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 90 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 131753 Read Count: 282983
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 30 Nov 2010
Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

uhoh big brother is angry. :0) I'm having so much fun reading this.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

That was funny. Poor Em isn't going to deal well with Edward wanting his sister is he? ha ha  I'm going to read the next chapter now.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Well Alice had to meet the Sheriff somehow didn't she? Wonder what she did to get thrown in jail. Was she the one who gave the deputy a busted lip? Loving the story. Great job!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Poor Jasper, it's going to crush him when he finds out that Alice is coming to meet Emmett.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

It'll be interesting to see how everything in this story falls in to place. Drunk Edward and Emmett were funny. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Poor Bella, my feeling were hurt when she heard Edward making fun of her too. At least she gets to keep his shirt now. :0) Love how close Alice and Bella seem to be getting. I really like all these people in the story. Great job!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Just want to keep reading :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I love Carmen! she's going to keep them all on the right track. :0) Have to say Edward naked with just his boots and hat stading in the dorrway made me laugh. ha ha

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I know I've said it before but I'll say it again. I'm really loving this story. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Thank you for making Bella know how to ride the horse. Emmett still cracks me up. I'm also glad to see that Bella is talking to Edward again. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Sadly I've reached the end of the already posted chapters. I'll be looking forward to the updates when they are posted. Great story!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 02 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Have a feeling that the Volturi brothers really want the railroad to come. I think they are going to start causing some problems to help Emmett see things thier way.  As for Rose I'm interested in seeing how they end up together. Maybe something will happen and she'll leave the saloon and Emmett will take her in? That way she'd be able to become friends with Alice and Bella and Alice will be able to see where Emmetts heart truly lies. Just guessing but can't wait to see what you write. :0)



Author's Response:

Thank you for keeping up with the story!  There really is a method to my maddness.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 03 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

And the family expands now we meet Esme. I love getting these updates. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

I just love getting these updates!  :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

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Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Wonder what Edwards story is and why he didn't want to tell Bella. Just when things look up somethings gotta happen to knock em back down again. :0)  Thanks for all the updates! :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 06 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I really like Carlisle. :0) Alice standing up to Emmett was very entertaining. Great update!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

I'm so glad Edward and Bella had a little chance to talk and smooth things over just a bit. The church part had me laughing. lol

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Hate that Rose has to go through that but at least she'll be able to give Emmett a heads up on what Mallory said.

Edward and Bella are so cute. :0)

Wonder if what will finally cause Alice and Emmett to decide they don't want to marry each other. Emmett trying to get out of going to church made me chuckle. ha ha :0)

Great story!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 11 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

another great update :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 16 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

I hope Edward is able to make it back for the festival. I think Alice is starting to realize that maybe she and Emmett aren't a match for marriage. Really enjoying this story. Great job!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 16 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Awww poor Jasper does want more than Emmett's biscuts. :0) Wondering if Rose will find a way to give Emmett that warning somehow while he's in town for the festival. Looking forward to reading more. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 16 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Yay! Edward showed up for the dance. :0) I really wanted them to get to dance together. I'm glad Rose was able to get the warning to Emmett. As for the person in the bronze dress at the end of the alley.... I'm guessing it was Bella. She's going to be mad at Emmett isn't she because Alice is her friend or maybe somehow Bella will see that Alice has feelings for Jasper and help that work out. So many possibilities. I can't wait to read more. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Always left wanting more..... :0) I knew Bella had seen Emmett. Is she going to have it out with him??? Hope Edward won the fight. ha ha

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

I'm surprised she actually got to talk to Rose and now she knows the story between Emmett and Rose. Can't wait to see how things go. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

and here comes Jasper to Alice's rescue! When is Emmett going to realize that he could ask Jasper to marry Alice. :0)  Jasper saying he never touched his biscuts was funny :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

I'm glad the girls are ok. I guess Alice having to stay in town will make it easy for Jasper to visit and check up on her. :0) It could be fun trying to see Edward and Emmett trying to take care of an injured Bella. :0) Love the story1

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 23 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Edward being there for Bella the whole time while at the docs was so sweet. I like the rugged cowboy but I also like to see him being tender and loving toward Bella. :0) I'm glad Bella told Emmett about what she saw so he won't have to wonder what's she's mad at. Poor Emmett, I wonder what he'll do?  Loving the story! :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 24 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Poor Emmett. He's so sad right now. I hope Bella comes in and talks with him and lets him know she still loves her big brother. I think I think they both need a good cry together. I didn't realize till this chapter (or is slipped my mind)  that Emmett never did show much emotion when Bella told him their parents died.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 25 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

I hope Emmett comes to visit Bella and they have a nice talk. :0) Speaking of talking... wonder what Edward was going to  say? Thanks for all these speedy updates.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 26 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

yay, I'm so glad that Emmett stopped in to see Bella and that they are talking. I didn't like seeing him so upset. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 27 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

I love when I get to read about these two. I'm happy that they get this little bit of alone time on the way to town. :0) Gives them a chance to talk and be together. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 31 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

I love seeing the truth finally come out. :0) Jasper handing the flowers to Carlisle was funny. :0) Great chapter!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 01 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

Carlise sending Bella in to ask for lunch and the story Edward told about that was really funny. As for the little bit at the end .... I have know idea who it could be. I could guess Jacob only because he's not in the story yet and didn't I read somewhere that he'd be in the story? I read so many fics sometimes I get things like that confused. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 01 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

I loved their kiss. :0) It's so sweet seeing them fall for each other. 

For some reason I still can't get on the forum. I registered way back when you posted chapter 30 but It still won't let me on. I have no idea what I'm doing wrong. :0)



Author's Response:

I'm sorry you're having trouble with the forums.  You can click on the coffee cup under the banners for this story.  If you still can't access it and have registered for the forums, please send a message to jennmc75 and she'll fix it so you can gain access.  Hope that helps!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

Oh no! did someone shoot Emmett???

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 03 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44

I'm glad Emmett is alright. I know he's hurt but at least he's alive. Wonder who shot him??? Funny how he promised he'd be more supportive of Edward and Bella and then started to think of taking that back. ha ha She's his baby sister I think that one's going to be a little tough. :0) I'll be looking forward to the next chapter whenever you get to post it.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

ha ha loved Jasper's reaction :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

Wonder what's up with Alice??

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Edward kissing Bella behind the barn door was sweet. Sorry to hear that the down is having so much trouble. Poor Jasper. Looking forward to seeing how they all pull through this. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 30 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 80: Chapter 80

Go Rose! I hope it wasn't just a warning shot. :0) I don't think she'd kill him but she could hurt him enough that he couldn't get away so that Em could deal with him when he got back. :0) I'm so happy Jenks reached Alice, Edard and the others.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

hmmm wonder what Bella's present is???

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

ha ha I just read you A/N and the part where you said "No Jacob is obviously not Bella's present" made me laugh. Guess we'll find out what the gift is in the next chapter. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Awww ya gotta love big brother Emmett getting Bella her own horse. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

Oh wow wonder why the land no longer belongs to Edward???

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

Poor Edward. What a sad story.  But now he knows that Bella loves him :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

He loves her too :0) Great chapter!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

ha ha he had to go get Carmen to talk to Bella. I'm surprised he still wanted to be in the room. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55

Well that's pretty interesting. Never expected that she was wanted for murder. Wonder how that will work out???

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

Giving her the carved rose was soooo sweet! The beginning was funny when Emmet caught Edward in the shower. (although I did feel embarrased for Edward too) ha ha

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57

Poor Jasper

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

That was fun. :0) Wonder who this person in the shadows is.... and is it the same one that was watching Edward and Bella???

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59

ha ha smooth Jasper smooth :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60

I knew if she had killed someone that there had to be a reason and I had a feeling that Jasper wouldn't care. I'm so glad she came out and just told him the truth and said yes this time when he asked her to marry him. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61

Great chapter! I love that he asked Em for Bella's hand. I knew he would but I didn't know it would be this chapter. :0) Can't wait to see how he asks and of course she's gotta say yes.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62

Looks like James is up to no good.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 63: Chapter 63

Carlisle and Esme are so funny. :0) Is Edward going to ask Bella on their way back to the ranch???

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 64: Chapter 64

ha ha I think thats one of the best engagements I've ever read! Great chapter! Now something bad is going to happen isn't it??? :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 65: Chapter 65

I knew it. I knew something bad was going to happen. Can't wait till they catch James. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 66: Chapter 66

Oh wow when it rains it pours! Poor Emmett!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 67: Chapter 67

Oh wow I didn't see any of that happening at all! How's Bella going to get out of this? Hope Elezar gunshot wound isn't as bad as it sounds and that he'll live. I kind of felt something like that was going to happen though when he and Carmen were having their loving moment. So sad.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 06 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 68: Chapter 68

yes yes I'm anxious for more! :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 06 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 69: Chapter 69

That's gotta be torture to want to go after the men that took Bella but not be able to.

Is it at all possible that Rose found out what James is up to or that she'll hear he has Bella and that she'll be able to get to Emmett and let him know???  ha ha I'm just looking for a way they can get Bella back and also get Rose involved. or maybe Bella can escape somehow your Bella seems pretty tough. :0)  Looking forward to seeing how this all plays out.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 07 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 70: Chapter 70

Ha ha ya gotta love Alice. :0) I wondered if Rose would get more involved in this story and now it looks like she will. Great job. I hope they find Bella and get her away from James soon. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 71: Chapter 71

Poor Bella

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 72

Carmen's not happy. Doesn't she know about how Emmett feels for Rose?

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 73: Chapter 73

How frustrating it must be for them to have to stop for the night. I hope they get to Bella before anything bad happens. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 74: Chapter 74

Rose is really stepping in and helping out. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 75: Chapter 75

Gotta hurry and see wha the scream was for...

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 76: Chapter 76

Good for Bella. I'm glad she protected herself. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 02 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 85: Chapter 85

ha ha I wondered if he'd ever find out that Bella saw him in only his hat and boots that time. :0) This was funny with Emmett. It was so nice for Rose to cover for Bella like that. It shows they the girls have become pretty close.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 86: Chapter 86

It brought tears to my eyes when Em told Edward he gave them the land that had his parents tree. Bella was pretty smart to buy Bar none. I like that they'll all get to stay close.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 05 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 87: Chapter 87

Wonder what Alice thinks of "her vision" for the wedding now. ha ha The baby is coming! How exciting. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 19 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 88: Chapter 88

I can just imagine seeing the fear in all the men's faces when they heard Esme screaming in pain. :0) Happy news, They have a son.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 89: Chapter 89

definately worth the wait! I love these guys they are so cute together. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 90: Chapter 90: Epilogue

such a happy family. Love their son Charlie ha ha I just love a happy ending :0) I've really enjoyed reading this story.

An Angel in Hell by AgoodWITCH Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 71]
Summary:

Bella is the newest nurse working at the MASH 8076 during the Korean War.  While there she meets Cpt. Edward Masen, who sees in her an angel in the hell they are living through.  Will they find a way to be together in a place where life can change in an interest.  Entry for the 2010 Age of Edward Contest.

 

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Another amazing banner made for me by Rosalynn.

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Beautiful banner made as part of the AoE Banner Contest by Becksishere.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Historical, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 96660 Read Count: 16329
[Report This] Published: 11 Sep 2010 Updated: 17 Apr 2013
Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 1: An Angel in Hell

I really liked this. I like seeing Edward and Bella and the gang in this setting. It's different from anything I've read before. 

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Bug Out

The whole time they were relocating I just kept thinking ... that's so much stuff they have to pack up and move and then they have to just do it again to go back. Maybe that just shows that I'm feeling lazy. Well I wondered how long it would take before Edward and Bella stopped being "careful" As much as I'd like to see a baby Masen I don't like the thought of them having to seperate for what could be a long long time. Just look at how long Carlisle has had to be away from his wife. Don't think their really thinking clearly....

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 6: The Aid Station

Wow that was pretty lucky. They get sent tot he front but only for one day and now they get to take a trip together. Hope they get to see Peter again.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 4: A Miracle of Eastern Medicine

That was worriesome for a moment. Glad he's getting better

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Baby It's Cold Outside

Guess I never really thought of the cold and the tents. Really enjoyed this

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 09 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 2: A Christmas Angel

I wondered if she'd see any of the boys from home while over there. That was fun

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Twilight retold. Bella has always felt that she was different. After moving back to Folks to live with her dad. Bella learns not only how truly different she is, and also the world around her AU/OOC Bella/Jasper*Rated NC-17 for Sex&Lang* A/E,Em/R,C/Es,P/C

stories/34076/images/TrueHeartsBanner.jpg      Banner By: Rachel MS

 

 

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02 Bella/Jasper stories
Chapters: 47 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 279948 Read Count: 28910
[Report This] Published: 16 Sep 2010 Updated: 26 Feb 2011
Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I feel so bad for Charlie. Babies change so much in those first few years and he's going to miss out on so much. You described Renee perfectly - selfish.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your review of Chapter 15. Here’s your Sneak Peek of Chapter 16. Hugs~Izzy

Chapter 16 (BPOV)

Ten Long Days

He was standing behind me looking at my body from the reflection in the mirror. He pulled back a little and unclasped my bra from behind, and he watched as he brought both of its straps fell down my arms.

Hugs~Izzy

tHirTeEn by twolipps Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 216]
Summary: Past Featured Story

In the aftermath of war, the Volturi have given Bella a choice-live as a vampire among the Guard, or die. What will she choose and will Jasper be willing to train her as a newborn and then give her up at the end of 13 short months? Vamp/Human OOC / A darker Jasper

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Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 169540 Read Count: 16139
[Report This] Published: 21 Sep 2010 Updated: 01 Sep 2011
Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 02 May 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

I'm always so happy to get these updates. :0) Wonder what's up with Maria?



Author's Response:

Thanks for sticking with me hun.

Now go read the next update! lol

 

t

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very good chapter. It has me wanting to read more to find out what happens next. The Volturi won't let them go.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I've been wanting to read this story for a while now. I had thought of waiting till it was complete because sometimes I'm impatient and just want to keep reading to find out what happens. Well anyway. I'm glad I didn't wiat. I really like this so far. :0)



Author's Response:

Glad that you decided to take the plunge and start reading.

Glad that you like it so far!

 

T

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I'm wondering, Does Bella feel the pull toward Jasper also? Would she have been able to leave him behind even if her parents weren't being threatened? Maybe I'll find out as I read more of the story. Very good story. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Great chapter! I gotta say I've really gotten used to seeing Alice be the best friend I kind of like how Bella stands up to her. I laughed when she called her a hobbit. lol  I Jasper seems mean at times but I really like when he's "taking charge" I'm really having fun reading this fic. Great job!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 14 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Oh Jasper ha ha Ok when he told Bella their encounter in the woods was a mistake I felt a knot in my stomach. I really feel so bad for her but I just want to laugh because I just know Jasper is going to be hating himself. I really hope Bella makes him suffer a bit even if it's unintentional. ha ha Love the story! Great job!



Author's Response:

I've read all of your reviews. Thanks so much for reading and then coming back to tell me how much you liked it. I really appreciate the support, it makes writing that much easier!

 

T

 

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Esme saying she was slaving away looking over the take-out menu's cracked me up. lol Great chapter. As much as I like when the major takes over I also like when he's sweet. Like when he picked her out up out of the mud and let her cry and actually talked to her. Looking forward to reading more. Great job!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I knew he wouldn't be able to handle Bella dancing with another guy. I'm glad he and Bella got a chance to dance together even if they were interupted by that Brian guy. Emmett drinking all that beer is funny. He's not going to have much fun when the night is over is he? :0) Wonder what will happen with Jasper and Brian. Jasper can't bite the guy 1. they're in public 2. that would totally freak Bella out. Going to go read the next chapter to find out what happens.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Wow Bella got some super cool powers. I love this!

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

“But, I don’t want to hurt anybody,” she said.

 “You don’t have to worry about that, ‘cause ain’t nobody out here gonna even let you get close enough for you to touch them,” I said.

I was laughing out loud with this! Poor Jasper is just clueless. This was great!

 

“That was really low Jasper,” Emmett said. “You’re a fuckin’ empath. Aren’t you supposed to be all like, I-feel-your-pain, and not let-me-kick-you-when-you’re-down?”

Ya gotta love Emmett! ha ha

This was such a great chapter! I didn't want it to end. I hope you are having as much writing this story as I'm having reading it. Do you laugh while you write thes funny lines?

 

 

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

What is up with Edward??? He's a real jerk isn't he? Please tell me Jasper rips his head off. Yes I know it's super late but I can't quit reading. At least It's now Saturday morning. I can sleep in. That's if I ever go to bed..... :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I love that he has pictures on his phone. He likes her more than he even realizes :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

ok I cheated and just read the rest of the story that's posted. Now I'm coming back and posting rieviews because your story definitely deserves more reviews!  This was another great chapter. I really like how Bella cooled down and realized on her own what she had with the Cullen's. At this point when I read this last night I just wanted to hurry to the next chapter. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

So Jane's not totally evil. I actually feel a little sorry for her. I'm so glad Bella's back with the family and I'm so so glad that she and Jasper had their talk. I really wanted them all to find out just how rotten Edward really is. :0)

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Go Bella! She can take down a vamp as a human just imagine what she'll be able to do when she's a vamp herself. I love that she went after Alice. ha ha Oh and I loved the declorations of "your mine" at the end. That put a big happy smile on my face. Acutally I loved the whole thing but I can't put it all into words.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 15 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Bye Bye Alice! She's C . R . A . Z . Y! :0)

Enjoyed the girl talk and the mud fight and especially the fact that Carlisle couldn't stay mad at them when he was giving his lecture. ha ha 

I'm sad now. I've reached the end of the posted chapters. Now I have to wait for updates along with everyone else. :0) I can't wait to read more of this story. You've done a really great job.

Reviewer: culleniwish Signed
Date: 22 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

They were having such a great time till Edward showed up. I hope they are able to find Bella before anything bad happens. I hope she's able to finish doing her list before they have to change her. I know it wasn't important to her anymore but it was important to Rose, Em, Char and Peter. :0) Great chapter can't wait to read the next.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading hun!

 

The Major is coming to the rescue!

 

T