Reviews by radvan
Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella gets sent to a school by her boyfriend to help her become the wife he wants. It isn't what Bella expects, at all.

BDSM, Dark story.

 

 

 

 


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward, Bella/Alice, Bella/Carlisle, Bella/Emmett, Bella/James, Bella/Jasper, Bella/Jasper/Alice, Bella/Rose, Carlisle/Esme, Carlisle/Other or Original Character, Edward/Bella/OC, Edward/Carlisle (Slash), Edward/Jasper (slash)
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Finished, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, To Read
Chapters: 78 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 297603 Read Count: 1514753
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 21 May 2010
Reviewer: radvan Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21 May 2010 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78

thank you so much for this story i cant wait to start reading again now that its done
i dont even know what to say i will surely miss your updates in my mail this is most definatly one of my favorite stories
again thank you for your time and effort
Diane

Summary: Past Featured Story

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When everything goes wrong at the baseball field what happens to Edward and Bella? Can they survive what happens? What happens when you give your life for the one you love? Is there a heaven? What will Bella do when all her dreams come true and she really gets her Second Chance at her first love?  Cowritten with preciousfairymom80, go check out her stories too!

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, Love to drive's Stories to read, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 102807 Read Count: 55115
[Report This] Published: 14 Feb 2010 Updated: 15 Sep 2010
Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

ok so that was beautiful too bad bella didnt deserve it after being a bitch to edward and everyone else
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

holy batman did bella eat some bad grizzly shes lost it
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 The Baseball Clearing

i reserve the right to come back and throw you in the fire if you dont fix this ;)
ok so dont ease us into any thing jump right in there why dont you
this is pretty early in their time together right like a couple of weeks
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Moving

no fixy no likey
so really surprised the charlie just let bella leave like that i guess he just couldnt deal with a greiving bella
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Heaven and Earth

well it sure take a long time to come back from heaven 4 years
so is edward still 17 or has he aged
did the cullens change bella so she could stay with them forever or maybe she was to heartbroken to want that anymore
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Someone is Watching Me

i guess charlie told edward where to find them i think he was too shy to just walk up and knock on the door
now edward never asked to be turned so i dont think he will want that now but what about the volturi are they in your story will edward remember his family everything about them
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 But You're Human...

poor edward thats not going to confuse him at all "your human"
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

oh is edward changing back maybe bella kisss released to many hormones for his frail human body to handle
the question will vamprie edward be able to remember or will he be a savage newborn all over again
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

ok ok so yours makes more sence he was in pain from the rush of memories can you imagine (well i guess you can) 100 years of memories hitting at one time
so i dont think thw company is tayna that wouldnt scare alice the wolves maybe if charlie told billy they would wonder whats going on and might want to check things out
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

so 4 new vamps
they seem ok but you never know
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

somehow i dont think we have seen the last of ally
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

tayna of course
these 2 just cant get a break now will edward change to be with her
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

so her heart rate just because she was waking up well
a baby hey i wonder if edward is healing fast because of vamp stuff maybe he still has vamp sperm and the baby will be a hybrid lol
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

you sure have alot of fainting in this story
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 30 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

well rene took the news well
charlie doesnt make sence to me i mean he let her leave with the cullen he sent edward there shes 22 years old whats his problem anyway
i loved to messing with jaspers power thing
Diane

Daybreak by Missa Rated: T starstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 6]
Summary:

Bella Swan's been a vampire for around a century, and has been with the Cullens since the 1920s. When the Cullen family moves to the sleepy town of Forks, WA, she finds quite a few things she never expected, including a human boy that turns her world on its side.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 98528 Read Count: 3716
[Report This] Published: 26 Feb 2010 Updated: 27 Feb 2010
Reviewer: radvan Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 10 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

well done i havent read many edward human bella vamp stories but i enjoyed you story keeping in cannon while making your own i loved that bella acepted the need for his change
i look forward to reading a sequel if you deceide to write one
Thank you for your time and effort in writting this story
Diane

Breakaway by A Cullen Wannabe Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 810]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Raised by her single father, Isabella Swan grew up in the land of men.  Their favorite pastime when she was younger was to spend the night at the local dirt track, feeling the energy of the cars as they fought for position.  Was it any wonder that eventually she would end up on the track herself?  

Having paid her dues, Isabella (Izzy) Swan has made it to the big leagues, officially racing for a franchise in the NASCAR Sprint Cup Series.  Can she hold her ground against a track full of men who want to see her fail, especially her teammate Cocky Edward Cullen?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, I Whitlock's read , Love to drive's Stories to read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Completed Stories, Stories I've Already read, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, mamih's favorites, TBR
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 103816 Read Count: 114431
[Report This] Published: 29 Apr 2010 Updated: 02 Sep 2010
Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 2: New Connections

so jake turns out to be a douch surprise surprise
bella really souldnt have beleived the press crap about edward knowing what they where doing to her but alls better now she knows hes a nice guy under all that
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Attacking Walls

Ya charlie
now just bella how long will it take her to get a clue
Diane

Summary:

"I was born under unusual circumstances". Set in the cloudy town of Forks in 1986, this is the story of Isabella Swan a sixty year old woman in the body of a twenty year old and how her life began when the Cullens moved back into town.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Parody/Crackfic, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 49075 Read Count: 4035
[Report This] Published: 28 May 2010 Updated: 27 Oct 2010
Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

its not bad enough it seems edward cant read bella mind but now he finds out shes almost his age
i was wondering about bella and jake it seemed at some piont bella indicated that jake hasnt told her he is a shifter she just assumes because of the age thing but she knew about billys dad so why woulnt jake be open about it and then jake tells the cullens she knows so im a bit confused weather jake being a shifter is something they are open about of not
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

your edward kinda weird he seems more emo and angry than most and very resentful of carlise then maybe your carlise is more controling and ignorant than most maybe we will see
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

its funny to hear bella talk like an old lady
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

well i guess age give bella guts
i was thinking that edward would lose most of his normal argument against turning bell in this story she has lived 60 some year so not nieve she cant have children so no problem there she realy has no one to leave behind jakes not aging anyway rene has already left and is dying so other than the blood drinking monster thing hes kinda screwed if she asks oh and in 10 more years or so she will be senile and dying
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

well edward almost dodged a bullet on that one until mother nature deceide to out him
i thought bella hadnt gone to town in like 20 or 30 years had her father been bring jessica to the house that hole time although as a way to bring edward and bella closer it was a great scene it will just enfore the need for him to befriend her cause the rest of the town well are asses
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

im glad you explain jake reaction cause that was to be my next question i was thinking it was maybe partily to do with the fact that he wasnt a kid here but a 34 year old man and also he doesnt have the same feelings of jelousy driving him to be an idiot
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

its so sad that shes so close to the end
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

ah so sweet im surprised edward didnt slip and just ask her to be his mate he was so nervous
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

well i guess edward isnt the only one feeling new things
now i wonder will something happen for her to need to be chaned or will she ask him for it cause im pretty sure edward doesnt have it in him to ask her
Diane

Author's Response:

thanks for all your reviews :D I can't wait to hear what you think of the rest :)

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

so bella thinking about the change but how is she gonna convince jake that this is a good thing
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

well this is it can edward keep it together long enough to make bella understand his pov even if it is warped
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

well jake acually took that better than i expected
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

i saw the forshoding for this but wasnt sure if you you gonna follow throgh although victoria is in for a surprise messing with your bella is death the cullen may have issues killing but the wolves wont even have to think about it
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

well im not sure that was very nice of you leaving bella like that with out us know if the venom was going to be enough to fix her
but you did give it away telling that you are writing a second story so i guess i can forgive you
although that wasnt the only loose end you left so i guess ill have to keep reading see you in the new year
thanks for your time and effort in writing this story
Diane

Author's Response:

thanks for all your wonderful reviews :D I'm glad you enjoyed it and all those loose ends will be fixed come the sequel :)

Summary:

Bella became convinced that she's destined for single life after she broke up with her first boyfriend, Edward Cullen, back in high school. Determined to be the President of her parent's company, she's prepared to do anything to have the job. However, what would she do if her parents only want her to do a simple thing; to get married to the son of their friends whose name just happens to be Edward Cullen?  


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 61689 Read Count: 41118
[Report This] Published: 01 Jun 2010 Updated: 30 Aug 2010
Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Reason Nine

"Excuse me, penne fresco and pizza margarita?" The waitress had returned with our orders and I found Ethan and me leaning back on our seats.

You mean edward right
bella is very imature for a 23 year old vice ceo
if both families lived in forks (3000 people) and were old friends why wouldnt they know each other i know no one knew that bella and edward were together but surly the parents would have seen each other and they knew they each had children the same age why wouldnt rene reconize edwards name at least in the hospital
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 10 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Reason Nineteen

of course edward is her admirer he told em that he was going to court her and she needs to see him as he really is not the villian shes made him out to be but why is he letting tayna stay how long has he know celina is not his
Diane

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Takes place after Edward leaves in NM.

 Follow Bella as life takes her through twists and turns that eventually lead her back to a strangley different Edward. Can true love overcome all lifes jagged twists and sharp turns?

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 42 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 119541 Read Count: 24756
[Report This] Published: 05 Jul 2010 Updated: 19 Feb 2011
Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 26 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

i was just wondering why it took 2 years for her to go to college alice edward and bella where seniors in nm well maybe she just took an extra year with charlie
Diane

Author's Response:

Hia sweets, yeah- if you read back- way back- there is small mention of the fact that she needed time off, and had spent it living at the Cullen's house in Forks- she was pretty messed up, and it was a very bad time for her. Sorry if I didn't make that clear enough. I hope you enjoyed the story.

 

 

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Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4248]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1254882
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

ya so bella gonna flip when she finds out what everyone has to say about her aro and edward
im worried about aro is he sick is edward ready to take over the club
so i keep forgeting to mention this as well several chapter back edward didnt use a condom and just pulled out what was that
shes not on birth control hes a trained doctor he knows better and also im hoping you just didnt mention it that before signing the contract they would both get a cleanbill of health
i think edward has been kind of lacks on the punishments for sleep and food im surprised since those are pretty basic rules
Diane

Author's Response:

Oh my...Aro is not sick, he is just tired ... he did pull out, and Bella is not on Birth Control yet,,she will  be soon. Ummm... it was just assumed that the two were clean, Edward said he always used protection and Bella hasn't been with anyone in years...Edward is waiting until their next ...usual, to take care of those indisgressions...soon, it is coming soon,,,,I can't believe you are all caught up already...when you review on a thursday post I send a teaser, so here it is,,,,,

You know what I think?” He raised his eyebrows “No I don’t but I would love to hear it”

 

“I think you are wrong …“ Edward raised his eyebrows in disbelief, but I went on to explain before he could interrupt my train of thought. “ …about us needing to go to the club more often just to let people see us. I think we should go as you have already planned but not any extra times just to appease your adoring public.” Edward got that perplexed look on his face again.

 

“Think about it. All anyone really knows is that I showed up one night with Aro’s card. You yourself were kind of intrigued about how I knew him.” Edward nodded

 

“Your right I was, Aro doesn’t give them out.” I went on with my theory, while Edward’s hands moved down to rub my bottom.

 

“Then the next thing anyone knows is that sometime within the next week, you and I got together and then when they see us I’m sporting your collar around my neck. Now in order to justify why that happened they come up with all sorts of circumstances that would explain it. Which is alright but then like an arrogant child who is looking for attention from their daddy, they start spouting it to others, knowing it’s going to get back to you”

 

“Is that the psychologist talking? Because let me get this straight. They…” he pointed to my computer “… are the arrogant child and I am the daddy, and they are doing this to get a rise out of me?” I nodded.

 

“And it’s working”

 

 

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

ya edward finaly got to make love to her
im not sure i get the problem with her friendship with jane is he just worried she wont express her conserns tohim if she has another outlet for them
and i keep forgeting to ask why garett had that weird reaction about the tanners being the cullens neighbours was he worried about her not wanting people from the center so close
and i thought bellas dress from alice was going to be ready for their first night at the club was it not a special enough occation for her to wear it yet
Diane

Author's Response:

yes that is his concern, that she will use Jane as a sounding board for her hopes and fears and not tell him...She needs to tell him... Garette was sitting at a table with women he didn't know and had know idea if they were award of Bella's relationship with Edward. He was protecting Bella's privacy. The dress is still at Alice's bella needs shoes first and they were only going to the club for a short visit so Bella could see what it was like...The dress is coming later...

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

so felix isnt a bad guy edward was just being a prick
i cant wait to read bella side of thing that happend this morning i hope jane keep her from spiraling down from that little scene
i like how aro always reminds edward to be totaly honest with bella its no something we see from our dear edward very often so its a nice change of pace that he is sort a being not forced per say but strongly encouraged to disclose every thing
so are you going to do an out take of aros punishment for speaking out of turn
Diane

Author's Response:

My Edward unlike Stephanie Meyer's never breaks a promise and never lies...The OT is an idea although on my extra's page there is an Aro OT already, but maybe jane will explain in a later chapter what happened...

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

ok so you explained that the final scene is unrealisitic and i get that you are just trying to start problems but i dont get why they would act that way in edwards house bella isnt a 24/7 slave she wasnt in sub mode i this guy just nuts
i also had a question about aro is he a real uncle or some kind of so close they are like family thing if hes real on esme side right cause i think shes got a little kink (i dont consider that a negative term) in her
im still finding it a little odd that edward pulle the dom card anytime he doesnt get his own way and think at some point bellas going to have to call him on it or is that part of their agreement that i missed
so i wonder how long its going to take someone to notice james is hanging around and one other thing if james knows where she lives why is she getting her mail at a po box her last attack was at her own house right im surprised she stayed there since he can find her so easily
Diane

Author's Response:

Again it goes back to the rules, always show respect, never took another Dom in the eye....Yes she is not in sub-mode all the time and if Caius had a problem with her meeting his gaze then he should have brought it up with Edward not Bella, and left Edward explain. Aro is his real uncle, he is Esme's brother. I don't know that Esme has kink, but she likes to make love to her husband. :) I don't know that he pulls a Dom card, I just think that is his nature to control. He finds security in being in control, you will see that in later chapters...Bella's mail goes to the PO Box becasue of her work at the center, not becasue of James, becasue you are right he knows where she is. However she doesn't want any relatiation from an angry husband or boyfriend.

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

im so glad edward called for help because i think hes relly going to have ahard time just being the boyfriend sometimes so im happy that he is aware of this and is looking for support before this become a problem for them
as for edward insite i do think most men wouldnt have gotten it but i also think as a dom he is train to notice alot more about people their reactions body clues ect it is the difference between just a dom and a great one and well i think we can all assume he is going (because we havent seen your domward in action yet) to be a great one even if he has some trouble in the boyfriend department
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

sorry im very disapointed with edward it turned out great but he should have never did a scene with bella like that she has no real experance even though she is very well educated and he had no idea of her fears likes dislikes aro had already told him she had a fear of the dark yet he blindfolded her
im hoping as an author you wrote this so edward could learn from this mistake how out of control she makes him so as to better prepare himself in the future
ps i loved the writing just mad at the caracter
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

na she wont risk it he already knows shes a bad lier but she wont be happy thats for sure i think it going to take some time before she relises that some things will just be for his amusement or for her future pleasure not because she does something wrong
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

i didnt expect him to use isabella on their non usual times i feel like she is in partial sub mode all the time is this intentinal on edwards part or is it just the way their ppersonalities fit together
so i guess that explains why she married james she felt like she could expect this type of treatment any where and that she was to one doing something wrong for not enjoying his sick games is that about right
i cant wait for edward to get his hands on this guy
Diane

Author's Response:

Hi Diane

What do you mean by use? They are dating, being togther theya re going to have sex. It is his nature to control and her's to let him. So even their regular sex will take on a D/s theme. That's normal. many submissives find that they don't enjoy normal vanilla sex. They need the intensity that the D/s relationship brings in order to be fulfilled. With that said, Bella is a submissive woman it is her nature to allow her man to take over. However she married james because, she thought she loved him. She was young, he was the first boy who showed any intrest in her, her first sex (bad sex, but still her first) and she had no mother. Now I don't know about you, but my mothers opinion of my husband mattered to me. Bella had no role model of what a normal marriage was and although he was brutal, he didn't physially strike her until after they were married...Does that help?

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

was bella expecting to be collared tonight because her speach sounded a bit rehersed even though it was beautiful
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

ok so poor edward is getting a taste of how much it can suck being in love with your sub even he cant just do what he wants all the time
and did bella break another rule she spoke to em and i dont think she asked first or was em not part of the rule or maybe because she was at the table
Diane

Author's Response:

Aro told her that she can and should always talk to his family, that includes Aro....That was in chapter 7 Edward was explaining the rules  ...

Rule  #8

This mostly applies when we are at the club, or some kind of gathering, never with my family. Also Aro, you could and should always answer him.” I held up one finger “With Respect”

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

"spinning" whats this
ya for rose in warning bella so the first night at the club wasnt to bad some pretty mellow stuff to start bella off i mean besides the bitches but they will never go away bella will just have to get comfortable with the fact that she wares his collar not them
bella little bedroon scene was cute i guess she forgot he owns her everywhere else
i know alice and jas were at the club but are they dom/sub or not
Diane

Author's Response:

Spinning is an exercise you do on a sationary bike... But Bella bottom was tingly so sitting on a bake seat might have been uncomfortable,,,,

Adesse Olympus by Billiegirl Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 78]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Separated at twelve, childhood friends grow up in different worlds.  Bella waits for her soul-mate to return to his roots and to the mountain ranch she and her brother have built from scratch.  Somebody or bodies will go to any length to make sure they don't get their happy ever after.  AH, cannon pairs.  


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 140161 Read Count: 30119
[Report This] Published: 07 Sep 2010 Updated: 07 Sep 2010
Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

oh poor eddies going to be for a shock when he has to work under bella
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

oh my who has it in for bella
mike? he doesnt have to guts for it no it has to be someone new someone after the land maybe
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

so victoria back first she sets him up at the bar with james i think then she sends riley but what did cullen inc do to her and why edward not alice or carlisle edward hasnt even take a place at the company yet
Diane

Author's Response:

radvan, I like how you're thinking...but it's not quite right.  He he.  I hope you enjoy the rest. 

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 17

i forgot last chp im soo happy the rents are home
i just knew we hadnt seen the last of tayna she just doesnt know when to die but whats up with bree
edward better watch his back i guess its a good thing jakes gone he might of had to defend edward this time against unwanted advances instead of bella
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18

now was that scene planned or is jonathan just a douch like his brother and if james was with tayna who did edward beat up at the bar
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20

Tanya had busied herself sharpening a stick with
do you mean victoria taynas tied up right
if tayna and victoria were "lovers" where did the baby come from
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22

Tanya did a number on him, that's for sure ok i thought it was victoria that convinced him not tayna
now did you have to make me cry you killed jake your a bad bad girl
Diane

Reviewer: radvan Signed
Date: 09 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23

ok ok i guess your forgiven for killing jake by writing a great story
i honestly didn't jump into this story from the summary ranches westerns and the such don't have a big draw for me and i left it open on my cpu for a couple of days before i started reading it but once i did i didn't want to put it down
you told a good story and added all the right things without going over board you gave us sex without pages of details i will read twilight porn for that you told about the meals in short spurts i don't need to know every ingredient and place setting and even the history and culture of the area without it being a lecture
so congrats in giving without the over share
that's all
thanks for your time and effort in writing this story
Diane

Author's Response:

I'm so happy I won you over.  I know my summary could use some work.  Any suggestions?  Thank you for all of your awesome reviews.  You make me buzz like a bee.  

Billie