Membership status: Member
Bio:
New teacher and aspiring writer, Bella Swan, moves to Seattle. She finds fan-fiction-creation-inspiration in the enigmatic and surly playboy who lives in the upscale condo across from hers. As her newest on-line story develops, so does a correspondence with a mysterious reader/reviewer of that story. Is it a co-worker? Is it the hothead playboy? It's a case of art imitating life and life imitating art. A fan-fic story within a fan-fic story with all the canon usuals. Lemons, laughs and love.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Bella's Must Reads!
Chapters: 71 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 501628 Read Count: 131145
Date: 09 Apr 2016 Title: Chapter 71: Chapter 71: Missing Pages and Photographic Evidence
So I don't usually review on this site, but the other one was incomplete and I guess you are reworking it to fit the TOS? Stupid site, there's nothing wrong with this story. I mean, the minimal sex there is is kind of required to make the story work. And I think it was the perfect amount.
So, I really enjoyed this story. I loved how it started and how she wrote about it. And all the funny things that happened to them, and that they were able to work it out every time one of them did something stupid or thought the other did something stupid. So cute. And then it became their story. Anyway, since I read this on my Kindle, I thought I'd better come review the last chapter at least. :)
A change in the past makes an early intervention necessary for the Cullens. This story is complete and I will upload one or two chapters each week.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Supernatural
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 59 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 253021 Read Count: 132213
Date: 25 May 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
LOL! I am enjoying your story, but the Britishisms are a bit funny to me. We have substitute teachers and principals (not headmasters) and people rarely eat scones, though they might have a biscuit (not to be confused with a cookie) And there is no "tea" though sometimes I wouldn't mind it myself.
Other than that sort of thing, it's a really enjoyable story. Reminds me a bit of Frances Hodgson Burnett's writing. ;)
Date: 25 May 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
Sorry, I'm really crappy at reviewing. But the next chapter button is much too tempting. ;)
Date: 26 May 2014 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18
Okay what is an RTA? Most of the Britishisms I've seen before. I'm assuming some kind of auto accident?
And the suit? Yeah, normally Alice would be right. But not a small town sports store.
Date: 26 May 2014 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27
I guess punching Mike in the nose would cause brain damage? :)
Bella is a divorced English teacher, who doesn't know she has a vampire in her class.
"Please don't push me away, Bella. Isn't it my choice if I want to be with you? I'm not a child in the way I feel."
"I'm not the older woman who's going to spend a season educating a teenage boy so he can go off and remember me fondly. I'm looking for forever."
"How do you know I couldn't..."
" Because you're a boy, Edward, a beautiful, sweet, confused, boy! You've got your whole life ahead of you. This kind of thing doesn't work out."
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've Already read
Chapters: 83 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 453800 Read Count: 81028
Date: 11 Aug 2016 Title: Chapter 83: Chapter 83 Tied with a Bow
Hi!
So I read this on my Kindle Or I never would have finished it. (closing the browser tends to cause memory failure - i.e. I forget what I am reading) But I thought I would come back and review it.
Mostly, I really enjoyed this. It started a little slow, but it was an understandable slow, since Bella thought Edward was her student. I kind of felt sorry for Edwards in that he really had to work to get Bella to believe in them. I did love all the courgars. Sometimes I totally understand that. Then I remember I'm married. LOL! But those young hotties.... :)
I liked that they tried for a baby and that it was close to canon. I'm guessing all the little bites added up to a change for Bella? I'm not sure that they really could have stayed around so long though, at least not near humans. Though helping the Quileutes made sense.
My only complaint, and this is just me becaue I know most readers like it, is that there were too many lemons. I get bored with them and started skimming. And I realize that there is a whole difference to reading an update every month or so and reading a full story in a few days. I'm sure there is a happy medium somewhere, and this is not limited to just your story. I find it consistently in fanfic, especially those not updated weekly. There are definitely arguements for both sides.
The epilogue was really good. Updated us on everyone from a different point of view. And Bella finally got her singer's blood. Everyone was happy. Anyway, thanks for sharing your story.
Author's Response:
Readers never finishing is a peril of writing such a long story. I should have broke it into two or three, but I struggle with editing.
Thank you so much for reviewing. It is different reading weekly updates as opposed to reading it when it's finished. I like a slower pace when I read, so I can sink into a story and feel it happening around me, but I understand that takes a lot of time--this was a marathon! In this story, it wasn't the little bites that changed Bella. The baby's venom developed suddenly, since he was premature at birth. When he reached his full term age, it came in since in canon all males are venomous. That last bite was the first one that was venomous.
As to the lemons, yeah, I get it. I'm not sure if that's fan fiction specific, but there are a lot of readers who ask for them. I tried to taper off the more things went along. This was one of my first fanfics, and I was learning. Still, there's something about a lemon that racks up the word count superfast. Since I'm writing my own original stories now, I appreciate hearing what readers do or don't like. In the case of lemon--a little goes a long way. I hear you on that, and it's my goal to make sure there's a reason for the citrus in my own writing.
As to staying in the area...that's a tricky one. Once they left high school, there wasn't a reason for anyone to really check up on them. I'm sure those who know Bella would think she's got a plastic surgeoun on her payroll. But I'm thinking that people would just pass off her quirks as weird, and not even consider there might be something supernatural about her. That's just not a duck that walks in the real world. Who knows.
Thanks again for the long and informative review--I greatly appreciate it!
When Bella Swan signed away her life to a man nineteen years her senior, she never once imagined that she would win his heart. Never once did she think that she would be the only woman that could truly say she won the heart of the billionaire, Edward Anthony Masen Cullen. She gave him everything she had, regardless of his lies, his callousness and his vindictiveness. She loved him for he was but more importantly she loved him for who he wasn't. Regardless of his imperfections and coldness, she broke down every wall. She showed him that even he could be loved.
Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 10091 Read Count: 15519
Date: 10 Dec 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Okay, I am officially confused. :)
Oh yeah. that's why I don't read WIPS much. Is Edward the good guy or bad guy. Sigh. Not that it matters. I will still love him anyway.
Edward Cullen is a famous movie star as is his girlfriend Tanya, the mother of his child. Their son is a week old and can't seem to keep any formula down. Annoyed by the crying and finding motherhood tedious, Tanya takes off for the spa and a commercial shoot leaving Edward alone with their newborn.
After trying nearly every formula on the market, Esme, Edward's sister suggests breast milk. It seems like a long shot, but when Bella Swan answers the unusual ad, Edward thinks all of his problems are solved. His son is doing well, but he has a new problem, an undeniable attraction for the woman who saved his son's life.
Categories: Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Happily Ever After
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 159 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 91905 Read Count: 1113975
Date: 15 Jul 2015 Title: Chapter 74: Chapter 13 part 2
So sorry about your sister-in-law. :(
Thanks for updating. The ffnet version isn't readable, so I was happy you updated here. I didn't realize this version had pictures. ;)
I can't wait until Edward dumps Tanya. She is so annoying. But then I guess we all love her that way.
Date: 31 Aug 2015 Title: Chapter 85: Chapter 85
Tanya has to go. Just saying. ;)
II'd say poor Edward, but really, most people have to work to support their kids. So this is normal. But at least he isn't leaving Charlie with Tanya.