Reviews by solidae
Hear Me by smmiskimen Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1926]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Twilight AU. After a horrific car accident leaves Bella in a catatonic state, she's transferred to Forks Hospital under the care of Carlisle. What happens when Edward is faced with the lifeless girl in the bed and an undeniable pull begins? Can he bring her back from the hold her mind has on her, or will she be forever lost to the abyss? E&B, AU, Canon pairings.

 

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiSup, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 131 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 65741 Read Count: 411877
[Report This] Published: 14 May 2012 Updated: 03 Nov 2012
Reviewer: solidae Signed
Date: 14 Jun 2012 Title: Hear Me

GAAAAHHH!! Just CHANGE HER! 

Reviewer: solidae Signed
Date: 12 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Don't go into the light, Bella!

 

Reviewer: solidae Signed
Date: 12 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Damn!  Carlisle isn't fooling around!

Reviewer: solidae Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

DAMNIT

I hate drabbles.  Too bad I don't have the willpower to wait until Friday to read the whole week at once.  MORE SOON PLEASE!!!

 

Reviewer: solidae Signed
Date: 20 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

I don't know...even trying to read this once a week - the entirety of the chapters is so little.  We never seem to get anywhere.  Maybe I'll come back, but this is too boring for me right now.

Good luck with the rest of your story!

Summary:

Can true love make the worst nightmare a beautiful dream? Bella is a troubled sixteen years old who is forced to marry her father's friend, thirty-five years old Edward Masen. Will he be her salvation? Will they find love in this odd situation? AH. Slightly OOC

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Themslovebug90's read stories, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, luv2write finished reads
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 75902 Read Count: 131983
[Report This] Published: 13 Jul 2012 Updated: 02 Nov 2012
Reviewer: solidae Signed
Date: 18 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I like the idea, but you could really, really need a beta if you don't have one.  If you DO have one, make sure you watch your words.  There are a few that aren't used in the correct context.  Many spots have incorrect conjugation and your sentence structure needs help. 

For example:   before stirring me up the stairs  (steering?) I don't think I ever heard them talk unless the decibels rise(what?!?!)   She blistered when she saw me(blustered?)                                                                                                     Carmen buttered in, taking our side. (butted?)    I accommodated with living there (aclimated?)    customary movie night every evening. (if it's every evening, it's not movie night - redundant)  making him disappeared from view again. (disappear)   I sized up the opportunity to smash my fistful of popcorn to his face (seized?)     

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